You know, I was jut thinking to stop reading a paragraph before ending , because  it woud be too much to know about them if you develop story any further.

 Then thank God and Kikiblue... the ending. A perfect end. THE perfect end. Fora perfect chapter.

 Somewere in the middle of the chapter I tought how you , again, never dissapoint me with developing characters ( by the way, they are realy beautifull young ones, and much more very realistick). Girl, you fucking epiphany. I was melting because they behave themselves justthe way I expected.

  After my first rewiev ( somewhere in the middle of the story) I prayed all the time: " Plese be completed, pleeeease be completed..." and you finished it and more, just in right way.

   I hope you will read my humble rewiev,this is the only way to express my admiration to your work.

  Keep with the exellant work.

  I`m probably sick but I loved your story, I loved it to the core, I loved your evil, sarcastic, snarky Edward ( he amuses me so much) I loved his sardonic comments, his lasciviousness ( I broke my tongue, is this even a word?), his inner turmoil , I loved Freudeward... hell I swallow even the rape scene ( probably because in the end he DID satisfied her... did he?)....

   I love it until it turn on in some BDSM shit. I dont have problem with floggers, riding crop, bondage and cuffs....( NOT on my skin of course). What piss me of in those BDSM scenes is forbidening of free talking your mind, for me this is the upmost level of slavery if someone can`t.... no MUST NOT say "Fuck you" is he/she is angry without some dammned punishment.

   I just hope that the rest will not continue in the same tone...

OK, I`ve red it , and it`s even worse. He IS an imbecille -  literaly speaking  ( the definition of person who don`t learn on their mistakes).  But cant help it. For now I`m stuck with you. I just need to see the end, whatever like it will be. Whatever you choose, I will accept it, just please finish it ( I mean complete the story).

   Strange , you turn all of us in Bella, and we will "just have to endure" (recognize the line?)

You ended it just beautifully.

Aaaand, here comes jealous Edward. I just love to read about pissing contest ( Eclipse - my favourite). Ith9;much more fun then "dark and dominating". And I just can`t understand  where is the joy in writting about "poor" and by definition stupid Bella who succumb to some chauvinistic asshole ( who, by the way, will never change). I mean is it something to express their own deprssion? Hell, I take antidepresssives for five years and don`t need another proof that we all had to much blacknees in our heads. Stories like yours just chill me up and helps to get throught another day with my mind sane. If you want to read of some darkness, take Dostojevski, I was lunatic as him for weeks after reading all his books for months.

 And for the better, if someone want patriarchalism, he/she just need to read your story - guys just substitute clubs from cave with pissing contest, for Gods sake. And it`s much, much more fun. And HEALTHIER ( for body and for mind).

 O, Cinderella, Cinderella. The prince... the abusive mother....

I cannot belive that I didnh9;t recognize the pattern. Yet. Anyway, very interesting plot. And your building yourrs caracters is quite  good. I love Bella, the silent fighter.

 Just keep up. There are people outhere who expect vou to do it.

And just one thing. I adore fairy-tales. Aren`t we all? We, who develop adiction on Twilight, our "brand of heroine".

I didn`t read your biography until now. And I`m delighted. Eclipse is my favourite part of Twilight series, too. Also like to peak to the end of stories (you`re right, why bother).

   Most of all... so you red Wide awake (I absolutly adore that story). I saw some similarities between your story and mentioned. I was literaly sick during reading Wide awake, because they are so damadged, too much young for that kind of expirience. What Edward did for Bella in the gym was absolute perfection. Anyway, this is not rewiev for Wide awake. I want to say that your sroty is similar but distinctive in its own way. Just what reader expect of fan fiction. I just love your main caracters. Also, the way you develope yore story. Please, don`t stop. Write it to the end.

Oh, and I also hate internet language.

You`re kidding us!! Righ?! END?! Like, THE END ?!

   I`m  just adusting myself to accept that the story was about anticipation, and as that it is just PERFECT, as it is . With no additional chapters.

  But You ( with capital Y) can`t just provoke such deep emotions in all  of us, and said :" No more story. And of the road."

 At least give as some good epilog, with some conversation and cuddling. PLEEEEASEEE.... You own us. You can`t take the favourite toy from child.

  Just look how much reviews you got in last few houres.

   OK, Calm down Eumenida. Hm.Hm. Thank you for your story , thank you for shearing with us , it has been beautifull.

( And pleeeeasee, just one chapter). Be good.

If it has not been that crap of BDSM, this woud be a fucking perfect story. And not the BDSM per se. You see in every fucking story with BDSM every dom Edward  ( i just refuse to write it  with capital "d") pull out that dom shit somewhere out of the schedule, mostly in heated debate when he don`t have other arguments to silent his women. And I mean WORD arguments. Hell , that is VERY low punch. Like you said sometime - If you can`t play , buddy , whith big boys ( read girls) don`t enter the big leage.The big leage is self assurance. If you had it, you don`t need some dom shit to silent somebody. One and the only Dom ( and with capital) I´ve red about, who didn`t pull that crap is from tara sue me stories ( and I think you all know whom am I talking about). I`ve abandoned many good stories at half ( like People like us, Heartbrake remedy or Edwards eternal kiss) and their authors, when shit like this : "he (ab)used his dom`s voice to silent her " appeared. More affection word don`t cause  dick to defect, boys.  So to summon a long tirade - A minus... because he is still one of the beautiful Edward i`ve red of.

I`m sooooo glad that I find this story. You make my day, my week, month.... Thank you, thynk you, than you....

You know, reading sentences which someone said, without quotes is killing the mood. They sound in my head like listening to a veeery bad narator, there are no modulations in voice, no thril in acting,... just.... plain straight line.

  Shame. Looks like a good story. Are you just lazy to put the quotes?

"Demon girl" . Ooooh, I just love it. You made my morning.

i love it when they start with angry and verbal fight. It`s my kind of story.

and it`s getting better and better.( parent stuff!?! hilarious)

I think you are doing just fine. Actions and lemons are fine, but these stories ARE about emotions. Emotions are need to be exposed. It` just like someone`s watching some erotyca film without plot. Is`s god in first 5 - 10 minutes. After that it`s just boring. You can get that action all over the internet. But action finely and subtletly incorporated with adequate plot - I think that`s what we all seek out onthese pages.

Well , James was certainly surprise, but   I`m looking forward thinking he`s gonna spice the story.

  And, you know that ballet dancers have beautifull bodies. I`ve never seen any sport that can so complitelly develop man`s body like dance (maybe athletic). They are just beautiful. Just look at that fine piece in the ending scene of the film Billy Eliot  performing main role in The Swan lake. I coud just hang him on the wall to look at him forever.

Team EDWARD , of course. Allways had, allways will. But I also think  Jacob is necessary in every Twilight story as counterbalance, as dear friend, you said it, as her sun. Glad you find it apropos to put him on the other plate of scales.

I suspected something like that, It would be the only thing that could hurt her deeply (it`s from that guy, Jonathan, right?).

  I just couldn`t put it it in the time frame you gave us in story , so I just  abandoned the idea. Glad I was right, and that there is nothing worse than that.

( Before reading chapter 13)

YOU`RE BACK JADA! YOU`RE BACK. I lost all my hopes that I will get my so much needed fix of your story. I can`t wait to start reading.

(After reading chapter 13)

 Aaaaaand.... it`s too short. As allways fix is. Aaaaand it`s perfect. As allways. I canh9;t even imagine what roules did you "violate", but I`ve red some very stupid or awfull (puke) or digugusted stories that are not "violating" whatever they insist. If writting about a strong, dedicated, hardworking women "violet" someone, they can stick in their medievan frame of mind. I will stay here , in 21st century, with all of my favourite writters, abovementioned included.

He waits for her for jogging..... I find that very, very, very, very.... sweet!

 After reading too much stories with BDSM theme I develop opinion that I dont like them - I just dont enjoy in the lack of free will, and find it crap. I like to much witt, intelligent Bela that to be supressed by some fictive rules, and someone longing for ages of slavery ( I seriously doubt that anyone could realy enjojed beeig real slave 24/7).

  But there are two stories which are one of my favourites - For the love of domination, and Submissive - Dominant - Training trilogy, that are beautifull, probably because of undying love of Edward for Bella.

   So. Your naration is very good, your story has a hint of being quality, and such love I mentioned . Looking forward to another chapters. Very good and logic begining. I hope that the rest would be in the same spirit and quality as the firs chapter. Aaaand... I reeeealy hope that you updating pattern wouldn`t leave us to long to wait ( I realy hate this  updating system).

I give you all my love for a beautifull, beautifull story.

"Landlords usually cornerd you..."

 Oh, don`t you just like this funny boy - fool blooded man combination. I never could resist such a charm.

 Isn`t he a full refreshment in this overflow od "dark Edwards". Just... normal ..and deleteriously attractive.

THAT!!! was was THE most erotic something I`ve red for months. I was realy, realy afraid at a half the you will take real Edward and put the robot in trash. And nothing would angry me more then that. I mean, let`s face it, who the hell wants substitute the PERFECT speciment with some moody real guy ( I mean Masen is perfect as YOU described him - a perfect cockyness whan situation request, a perfect gentleman, a perfect ( and strong and durable) lover, a perfect listener , a perfect man....just name the virtue.. he has it. You must be insane to want some human who has moods, different opinion, demands, and other shits that occcur in life.

   C`mon, if the perfect love ( read: man)  exist, we would not be meeting here.  The basic concept of fan fiction is finding some perfection in love in this shitty world ( at least in written words) to give us hope.

   And you saved the day ( as usual).  How? One perfect Edward is good enough. Two perfect Edwards ...synchonized... heaven help me.....

   I remember that last scene  as one of the hotest in fan fiction from The Heartbreak Remedy. But there it`s spiced with some BDSM bullshit, and leave me a bitter taste. So yours is better. Much, much better, because I don`t like  E& ...with anyone else then Bella. I`m 100% team E&B.

  Also, I don`t think that anything in this story is on Bella`s blame. I mean, Edward was the one who cheated. He cheated Rosaly AND Bella by not saying to her that he is in relationship. Very serious relationship. Old people say: Where you make your bed you will lie in it. He.Was.Weak.  Period.

   ( But he totaly redeemed himself with accepting Masen, and I adore you for that kind of ending, and I admire you, Soapy Mayhem, etc.etc.)

I real hate when some interesting idea is butchered by the lack of naration skills and composition of plot. You need to get youself beta. Promptly!

   Finaly some action. It has became bored to read constantly about his demanding. 

   What can I say? I just adore jealous Edward.

Allthough I am probably damning mysellf of not having to see the rest ( somehow my words of adoration allways cause writter to stop writing my favourite story, or at least veeery,veery slowind down) I must say. THIS. WAS. BEAUTIFULL. Pure bliss. Please keep up.

That was lovely.

And ou have very interesting ideas for your stories.