Reviews by manolomel9
Summary: Past Featured Story

15 yr old Bella has a fairly normal life. That was until her mum's new boyfriend came on the scene. Will Bella survive her new life? Dark Themes, Cannon Pairings. GRAPHIC

Thanks mkystich for the amazing new banner... AGAIN!!! :)


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89516 Read Count: 311074
[Report This] Published: 21 Jan 2010 Updated: 04 May 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Life

oh no, 2 chapters later and still no sign of Elizabeth/Bella...I hope we find out what happens next [sorry, I am just an impatient reader here, don't mind me].

I am really enjoying your story and think this brainwashing stuff is scary as hell, that people can be mentally reprogrammed like that...yikes!

So what will Edward do now that he has the flyer, I can't wait for the next update, so keep up the good work with this addicting plot!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 - Redemption

Another good chapter, but such a slow setup...I feel like I have been waiting forever to see how Bella and Edward will get themselves out of this mess, so I hope Felix has a plan with Charlie to get in and get out of there.  Can't wait to read what happens next.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward has given up ever finding a vampire mate. He's decided on a new strategy-he'll find a human to become his mate. Easier said than done when others are in the way of who he wants.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read (Geddy), Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 36 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 109413 Read Count: 123486
[Report This] Published: 25 Jan 2010 Updated: 27 May 2014
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

What is Carlisle hiding?  I can't wait to find out what he is thinking.  All I can come up with is that Eskimos made him think of Alaska, which made him think of Eleazer and how he can tell powers, but that is just a guess.



Author's Response:

Half right, but there's more...

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Wow, the truth finally is revealed...I wasn't expecting the Renee imprinting thing, especially with one of Charlie's friends, so that was a new twist.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

NO, what is she doing!!!  Sometimes Bella's selfless and sacrifical nature really pisses me off.

And why is it Paul that wants her, I figured it would be Jacob. Or is Jacob her half brother?  I may have to go and re-read the earlier chapters again.

Can't wait to see what happens next :)



Author's Response:

Jacob has been in the room all evening with them. Why would he wait so long to claim her? Don't worry, Bella's decision isn't going to just be accepted at face value. We haven't heard from Charlie or the rest of the Cullen's yet.

Summary: Past Featured Story

AH/AU, OOC Bella is a famous actress and Edward is a host of a late night talk show. What do they whisper to each other when they greet each other on stage?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read, Love to drive's Stories to read, Stories Read by CNYBella
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 126443 Read Count: 90989
[Report This] Published: 27 Jan 2010 Updated: 20 Feb 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 23 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

How exciting that Edward is hosting the Emmys and she gets to surprise him. Also glad she is back home and starting to look at the production side of the business. Thanks for another great chapter!

Author's Response:

thanks so much for reading and reviewing

oh yes, she has so much to do, excitment all around!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Just found your story this week and read it all in one sitting.  I love it so far and can't wait to see what happens next.  Love it

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella's first assignment as a journalist is to uncover the truth about Christian Polygamy. Dr. Edward Cullen is a small town doctor who lives his life by his own sets of rules. Edward and his wives live a lifestyle that many may not understand. After Edward treats Bella he invites her into his home, where Bella learns more than what she bargained for. How will her first assignment impact the rest of her life?

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward, Edward/Alice, Edward/Rose
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 162668 Read Count: 153105
[Report This] Published: 09 Feb 2010 Updated: 01 May 2020
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 28 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Girl Talk

I am so glad to see you back and updating this story...I only recently found your story and have found it to be very intriguing thus far.  I think it is really neat having Bella be the voice of the reader, because her thoughts are pretty much exactly what would be going thru my mind in this scenario.

There is so much to cover now that Bella seems committed to this. I can't wait for the next chapter and hope you will get to update more regularly now... [Iknow, I know, I am one of those impatient readers you probably hate]...Keep up the good work.

 



Author's Response:

I am so glad to see that it's working. I knew that everyone would have questions and I thought that having them be Bella's questions would be a great way to get everything out there.  Thanks

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Hospital Admissions

So it's the teenagers that get all the great scoops on the family.  Glad that Bella got to meet more Cullens and they all seem to like her.  That would be just as weird for them to welcome an outsider in to judge them as it is for Bella to walk into thier world...I really like seeing the dynamics from both sides, and how Siob doesn't necessarily want to follow in the family footsteps.

I think it would be so hard to share, even if you like and respect the other wives like Rose and Alice, won't Bella have some trouble knowing certain nights he is not with her is is likely fucking them...one thing to observe, another total thing to live it with feeling involved.

Can't wait to read the next chapter, and see how Bella handles the rest of the family.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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A silent war came that changed everything. Humans are chosen at birth to be a vampires mate. What happens when Bella is given to the God of War on her 16th Birthday? Will she survive the darkness and her mate? Or will she beg for her own death.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69505 Read Count: 108585
[Report This] Published: 10 Feb 2010 Updated: 28 Oct 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

oh, I hate creepy Carlisle, I am glad they found her so quickly and you did not drag that out - Can't wait to see what happens next

Episode by BoydBlog Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 384]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella Swan is a writer that is on a trip of a lifetime. Edward Cullen is a famous actor and musician, whose life is a blur of film-sets, hotels and screaming fans. A destined encounter and a battle of mind over matter erupt amongst sensual music and a shared longing.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Lilyellacullens want to read list!, Dumbi's Most Wanted, Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 304253 Read Count: 77002
[Report This] Published: 13 Feb 2010 Updated: 09 Aug 2021
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 44: Rondo

Oh, what an evil cliffie you left us on!  Great chapter, I can't wait for Bella to meet the parents.  And I totally agree telling Jessica would NOT be a good idea, she wouldn't believe it until it is splashed on magazines anyways.  I assume Riley is in the hotel waiting on Bella.  I hope she doesn't fall for his story...even if he didn't mean to hurt her, he still did and she has her soul-mate in Edward so hopefully any feelings for Riley have faded.  I hope, they don't need anymore drama in their lives!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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What if Edward finally found his mate, but she had a troubled past and wanted to kill herself? Could he help her? This story has DARK Themes and Rape discussion.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 248279 Read Count: 76225
[Report This] Published: 15 Feb 2010 Updated: 14 Jun 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41 - A Time of Healing

Bella has made so much progress thanks to the Cullens...I am glad she moved in with them and faced her fears at the frat party...I hope things are starting to look up for her. Thanks

Summary: Past Featured Story

Summary - Bella is kidnapped by a beautiful stranger that cannot kill her, but hates that a human can have power over him. Which road will he choose? When Jacob wants her, will that make his decision? Both men want to own Bella, however her heart only belongs to one. Which will have her in the end? Can Edward protect her from Jacob and his past, or will she eventually be consumed? 

 

 

 

Banner Created by the wonderful MsAmbrosia 

 

Vampires and Werewolves. OOC. Darkward. And every so often there shall be a sprinkle of the fluffy stuff. But mostly dark.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 122877 Read Count: 76213
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 29 May 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Mute

Nice, really enjoyed the Monster's POV - sounds like poor Edward really does have a split personality, but they both appear to love Bella, so it works out okay.

Aro and his stupid power trips, I hope Bella can harness this power she has and kick some serious ass!!



Author's Response:

:) thank you very much, and Bella shall harness her power :) but will it be in time? xx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 17 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Gratitude

Man, those Cullens really make you prove your worth to them, but it is nice to see them finally come around.  I hope Edward/Monster and Bella reunite soon.



Author's Response:

that they do hehe, they just kinda dont trust/like humans, they're wierd lol but she seems to be winning them over :] they will be seeing eachother shortly xx thanks for your review and support xx

Love at 1st Bite by AgoodWITCH Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 64]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward is instantly drawn to the new girl, Bella Swan. From their first meeting he is overtaken by a desire for her body as well as her blood. After a week in Denali he returns to Forks and visits the object of his obsession. What happens in her room that night will change both of their lives forever. First chapter was written for the "In the Dark" Contest.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Wanna read
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 50865 Read Count: 17343
[Report This] Published: 18 Feb 2010 Updated: 03 Jan 2017
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 13 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Out of Sight

Men, I swear it is the 2000s, not 1900 when the men had to take care of the defenseless women.  I am glad to see the power that Bella has over the others - it should help make up for her feelings regarding her special dietary restrictions.

Ah, at least they have learned the best part of fighting is the making up later :)



Author's Response:

HAHA!  I love it! And yes, some men will never learn, but Bella's power will be very crucial in the later chapters and Edward is finally better about her exerting that power without fear of what will happen...and make-up sex is always a plus!  Thanks for the review~

Edward's Clan by Greenaway Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1470]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

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**WARNING - THIS STORY CONTAINS VIOLENCE, SEXUAL MATERIAL, OFFENSIVE LANGUAGE AND OTHER CONTENT THAT MAY DISTURB SOME PEOPLE. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.**

Edward Cullen is the leader of The Clan, a fierce and deadly group of assassins for hire and he knows nothing besides violence and blood. When he meets Bella, he begins to imagine that there might be more for him out there.

A dark journey of love, power and death.


All Human, Cannon Pairings and TEAM EDWARD

Please be warned, this story gets pretty graphic later on.

 

A special thank you to evilangel813 for the awesome banner.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read (Geddy)
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 234131 Read Count: 195557
[Report This] Published: 23 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Jun 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 31: – the Rescue: Part Three – Home is Where the Broken Hearts Lay

Sad chapter...I hope Edward comes to grips with everything...Bella made a mistake leaving instead of getting Edward to help with her dad, but I understand her choice. Seems like he is going against himself regarding the baby, so I can't wait to see what happens next. Go Edward, Demetri and Tanya must die!!!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. Edward is indeed struggling. An awful lot has happened in a short space of time for him. Poor baby. LOL

 

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995723
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 75

I bow to your writing skills that you can churn out 25K+ chapters in such a short amount of time.  And I love the detail you provide.  So they are offically moved, and I can't wait to see what happens with this 3 month contract :)

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 26 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 76

Thanks for another great chapter, trust me, you don't always have to write 30K chapters to keep us readers happy, I thought this length was fine.  Alice is being a bit of spoiled brat.  It is inevitable when you get married and have kids they take priority and you have to find time for friendships to continue to evolve.  If I was Bella I don't know if I would be so quick to accept her apology. 

After everything that she has been thru growing up with an alcoholic father and terrible mother, having your closest friend pull this kind of stunt would be devistating.  I guess I am happy they got it resolved, but I don't think I would have let her off the hook quite so easy.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your great review xoxo

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Okay, yup probably hear this all the time, but I love your story and your characters (except Renee of course). Your updates are part of my top 5 of looking forward to read, and your chapters are so long and rewarding, even when Bella or Edward are misbehaving. I can't wait to read what happens next!

Author's Response:

wow - thank you for your kind words - here is my thanks to you for reading plu

 

 

PEOPLE LIKE US – OUTTAKE # 6

OUTTAKE – CONVERSATION BETWEEN JASPER AND ALICE

“Guys, I’ve got to go – Jazz please give this some serious thought and Alice, you need to stop being so fucking stubborn. I love you, Squirt!”

Edward almost crushed her in a hug. He slapped Jasper on the shoulder as he ran out the door.

 

“So… you talk about the size of my schlong?”  Jasper said.

Alice looked up at him with mounting excitement, “Well, it’s quite impressive…” she said huskily.

Jasper smiled at her.  “Can we talk? I mean really talk; I’ve missed you Tink…”

Alice smiled through her tears. “I’ve missed you too Jazzy….”

Jasper looked uncomfortable for a moment and it bothered Alice.  She was used to Jasper Whitlock being decisive and in control.  Seeing him looking ill at ease was new.  There had been many disagreements in the Whitlock/Cullen home since Alice had moved in with Jasper two year before.

She had never lived alone, besides when she had gone to college and even then, she had attended Berkley, so that she was close to her family and Jasper.

Although over the years, they had learned to deal with Jasper’s travelling for work and Alice’s part time job as Edward’s PA which had taken her away from time to time, through everything, including Alice’s training as a submissive, their lines of communication had always been open and honest.

Alice had grown up in a house hold that was opinionated and not scared of voicing their points of view.  Esme and Carlisle had encouraged their children to have their own opinions and to share them.  They had also taught them to stick to their guns.

This was one of the many things that had attracted Jasper to Alice in the first place.  Although she was much younger than him when they met; he had always found Alice to be interesting to talk to and inevitably to argue with.  She was a spirited and enthusiastic young woman, with a warmth and energy that seemed to draw him in from the first moment.

Jasper on the other hand had grown up in a large family with two parents that had stuck together over the years because there was no other alternative for either one of them.  They were hardened by life, worn down by reality and for a reason that Jasper had never been able to fathom; they had decided to have three children of which Jasper was the youngest.  Eventually Jasper’s father had strayed and a few years later, when Jasper was about twelve, he had suddenly come back to the trailer park where they lived with three small children in tow!

He had told Jasper’s mother that they were his dead sister’s kids, but after awhile he had confessed that they were his.  Jasper felt sorry for the three youngest children and when he had begun to make money from modeling and small acting jobs, he had made a decision to see that they would have an opportunity to further their education, go to college and make a proper life for themselves.  Although none of the children were really close or affectionate with each other, Jasper had stuck to his word and the three younger children had gone on to college.

Jasper couldn’t believe that Ricky, the youngest of his stepsiblings had taken advantage of Jasper’s generosity the way that he had!  Jasper had never asked for any compensation or payment for the money that he had given to his siblings or parents over the years; the only stipulation he had for continuing to support his mother and father was that the house that he had purchased for them remain in his mother’s name.  Jasper was not close to his father and the distance had only grown when the man had abandoned his young family, leaving his wife to work three jobs to feed and clothe their three children.

Jasper had always thought that he would never find anyone to settle down with.  He didn’t ever want the life that his parents had; tired, sad, disillusioned and settling for something because there was no time or money for dreams of something or someone else.  Someone better.

So the first step that Jasper had taken at the age of sixteen was to have himself emancipated.  He had tried to live in Los Angeles and he had hated every moment of it but as he begun earning good money, he decided to take classes at the local community college.  The first one was on finances.  Jasper wanted to know how to look after his money and how to make it grow.

He trusted few people and although people liked his quiet charm and whit; Jasper had a way of standing to one side and observing people that he found made him a good judge of character.  Jasper had come to rely on that instinct over the years.

It was an instinct that he could no longer rely on.  He had never thought for a million years that his younger brother would ever turn out to be the low life, perverted bastard that he was!  Every time Jasper thought of what Ricky had done, how Richard had betrayed his own brother by lusting, perving, salivating over his Alice!  His Alice!  Jasper wanted to kill Rick with a cold fury that he had never felt before.

How he had touched her, fucking forced himself on her when Jasper had been careless enough to leave her alone with him… FUCK!

Alice gasped as Jasper jumped to his feet.  His face was a cold, furious mask.

“Jasper please!  If you want to talk to me, then you need to calm the fuck down!  I can’t reach you when you are like this!  If you are angry with me then just say so and let’s get it out there!  If you think that I did anything to encourage your brother…” Alice cringed away as Jasper was suddenly in front of her with his hand clasped over her lips.

Never – NEVER, EVER call that fucking piece of low down shit my brother!  I will kill him if I ever see him anywhere near you again!”  Jasper spat out as he held her.

Alice whimpered and she closed her eyes.  “Jazzy, you are scaring me…” 

This wild man wasn’t her Jasper…

Alice felt the tears running down her cheeks and over Jasper’s fingers.

Suddenly she was free.

Alice pushed a fist into her mouth to keep the sobs as quiet as she could.  Her whole body was trembling.

“Alice… sweet Jesus, I’m sorry… I didn’t mean to scare you… Ali…”  Jasper choked out as he sat crouched clear across the room from where Alice sat.

Alice could see the anguish clearly on Jasper’s face and she felt even worse than she had in the past few days.

This was all her fault!

“Come to me…”  Alice said, but Jasper just shook his head.

Alice slid off the sofa onto her knees and she crawled slowly across to where Jasper had slumped down against the wall.

Jasper could feel the intensity of Alice’s gaze as he watched her moving slowly towards him.

“Ali…” he said in a half pleading, half warning.

“No.  You’ve spoken and now it is my turn…” Alice said when she was inches away from his face.

Her eyes searched his intensely.  The remorse and sorrow that Alice saw gave her the courage to move closer until her lips met his.

Jasper’s head jerked backwards, but with nowhere to go, he hit the wall.

He cursed and rubbed his head.

Alice grinned at him, “Maybe that’ll knock some sense into your thick skull!”  She quipped as she arranged herself between his outstretched legs; her thighs straddled his open ones so that he could feel her heated core through her jeans.

Jasper shut his eyes tightly and moaned as he tried to adjust himself.  Alice giggled and winked at him.

“We can get to that later, but first let’s please resolve this ‘thing’ once and for all!”  She said with determination.

“Gladly, Darlin’.”

“Okay, I’m going first.  I need to tell you why I didn’t tell you about… what was happening in the first place, but you cannot freak out on me!  Do you promise?”

Jasper could see how anxious Alice was and once again he was filled with remorse at his earlier behavior.

“I promise.”

Alice took a deep breath, “I know that this might sound crazy to you, but when it happened the first time; I tried to just shrug it off.  I thought that perhaps I had imagined it or misread his signals in some way.  The next time it happened, your… well your father was in the room.  He, Rick grabbed my ass as I walked passed him.  I turned around as saw them looking at each other and Rick just winked at me and they burst out laughing… Jasper… you promised…” Alice broke off as she watched Jasper’s eyes become dark and wild again.

Jasper felt as if he was ready to explode!  That no good, low fucking, good for nothing… BASTARD!  I. will. Kill. Him.

Jasper felt Alice’s tiny hand stroking his cheek and he refocused on her anxious face.

He kissed her quickly, “I’m okay, Ali, I promise.  I won’t freak out on you again.”

Alice nodded slowly, “He apologized to me later – your father, I mean.  The next day he told me that he had too much to drink and that he had made Rick promise never to touch me again.  He begged me not to tell you and then he said that… some girls just have an ‘air’ about them…”

SON OF A BITCH!

Jasper opened his mouth to speak but Alice put her fingers over his lips.

She continued. “I know better than that, Jazz!  I know better!  I was raised to know better than that!  With all their bullshitting and nonsense, my brothers have never, ever treated any woman including me with anything than the utmost respect.  You have never treated me like a whore, but at that moment, I felt dirty.  And I felt like a two bit whore, who didn’t deserve anything better.  Rick kept touching me, stupid little insignificant ‘slip-ups’.  Every time he was around me, sometimes you were in the next room or you had your back to us… He would graze my breasts by pushing past me in a doorway, or he would rub himself against me if he were standing behind us…” Alice shuddered in revulsion and Jasper couldn’t take it any longer.

His arms wrapped Alice in a vice like grip. “Never, never, never…” He said over and over again against her neck as he pulled her closer.

“Jazz…”

“No – it’s my turn now… never, ever again, Mary Alice Cullen.  Promise me that you will never let anyone ever make you feel like that again.  Especially not me!  God, Ali, I love you so much!  Just the thought of another man touching you… Fuck!  It’s too much to even contemplate!  Do you know how I felt when I found out that Rick was… forcing himself on you?  When we forced Bella to tell us and we did force her – she didn’t have a choice really, I wanted to fucking kill someone there and then!  As you know, I sat up all night just thinking about what could have happened to you!  And about how I was going to take care of you this time!  I couldn’t help you last time, Darlin’.  I wasn’t able to stop that animal putting his hands on you… but I was going to make sure that Rick never ever touched you again.”

Alice brushed the tears of Jaspers cheeks.

“I love you so fucking much, Mary Alice Cullen-Whitlock.  You own me mind, body and soul.  If I lost you, my life would be so empty… please forgive me for hurting you and dragging this shit out.  Please, please don’t ever put me through this again, Tink, my heart can’t stand it.”  Jasper whispered as they held each other’s faces and gazed with longing into each other’s eyes.

“I love you, Cowboy; you are my everything… my lover, my best friend, my Dom, my love.  I am sorry too.  No more secrets.”

Their kiss was a relief.  For the first time in almost two weeks, their lips were soft and forgiving.  Lips touched, brushed, nibbled.  Tongues dueled and teased.  Eventually they couldn’t take it any longer and Jasper held Alice to him as he tipped her onto the floor and loomed over her, his knees pushing her thighs apart.

Alice panted into his mouth.  “Can I get my clothes back?”

Jasper smiled against her lips, “yeah, especially the underwear…”

Alice giggled, “can I get my car back?”

Jasper shook his head, “sorry, you will be driven around for a while…”

Alice groaned, “but I can see my Bestie?”

Jasper rocked back on his knees as he looked at the bright twinkle in Alice’s eyes. “Mary Alice…” He said with narrowed eyes.

Fuck! He is so sexy when he does that… now I need to change my panties! Damn Cowboy!

“Hmmm… take me upstairs Jazz… I’ve missed you…” Alice uttered the magic words.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

An hour later, Alice lay sprawled across Jasper’s bare chest.  Her eyes were closed but she was humming as Jasper played with her hair.

“Alice?”

“Yeah?”

“Supervised visits only…”  Jasper kissed her forehead.

“I know – but that’s only for now…” Alice smiled to herself.

She wondered what Kate, Bella and Rosalie were doing on Saturday after the therapy session?  She had heard that Gap was having a sale….

Everything was right with the world after all.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

I hope that you liked it!

Love

Michele

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

Glad to see the Jake case is not going to be dragged out, this poor girl has enough on her plate to deal with.  And very glad to see her stand up to her mother...Edward and his family have been a very good influence on her.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Another excellent chapter.  I am glad to see Bella survived her punishments thus far, and that she is finally opening up and letting Edward in more.  What I have enjoyed most about this story is how they have really grown as a couple [although not always easy at times]...keep up the good work



Author's Response:

thank you so much - they are getting better

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

Wow, there is always so much going on in your chapters.  I can't believe Esme went all goo goo for Bella's boss - sounds like Carlisle may soon be trying on the Dom hat for size.  Good job for Bella not keeping secrets anymore and standing up to Riley by quitting.

I know she is still considered to be a sub-in-trraining, but she seems to spend most of her sub-time in the doghouse.  She definitely needs to learn to turn her brain off in sub-mode, so I liked Alice's suggestion about a time-out to write it all down. I was glad you got the punishment out of the way early and it didn't mess up the night with Kate and Garrett.  And it sounds like the night ended on a good note :)

Can't wait to read what happens next!  Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

There was so much greatness in this chapter!!!

First off, I can't believe Bella keeps making the same mistakes.  After all the eating drama from before, I can't believe she would forego eating and sleeping again knowing the consequences.  How hard is it to set an alarm to remind you to take breaks.  I don't blame Edward one bit - bring on Mr. Bristles.  It seems like everytime they have playtime, they have to forego the fun for punishment.

I did enjoy the visit with Charlie and how that relationship is developing, it feels very real, and it was good to get the closure with Billy.

Can't wait to see what you have in store for us next.

 



Author's Response:

thanks honey - loved your review and your comments - very divided opinions over this chapter xoxo

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60

Oh my god, you really spoil us with these super-long chapters - love it!  I can't blame Bella for being upset with Sue's revelation.  All her feelings of insecurity and abandonment with both her parents, and to find he was being a parent to someone's else's kid must be devistating.  I know she has forgiven him and made her peace with it, but that doesn't make it easy to forget something like that.

Also glad to see a mature discussion involving the financial situation, and good that Bella was able to get a similar perspective from another outsider like Jasper.  I think that went a long way to helping her deal with the money.

Can't wait to see what happens next with wedding plan and a pregnant Alice looming ahead.



Author's Response:

thank you so much for your review and wonderful comments! I'm glad you like the long chapters - the longest one to date is up next!

xoxo

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59

Wow, you always manage to pack so much punch into each chapter, and you are a truly amazing writer.  Did I mention that I love how you keep spoiling us with these long chapters.

This chapter just underlines the continued importance of communication betweent these 2.  They had a great time up until getting to LA, then all hell breaks loose when Bella makes a stupid comment about not wanting to meet Edward's friends.  Edward is irritated by her attitude and punishes her by neglect, which is a recipe for disaster given Bella's history.

Sure enough, Bella mind goes to money and her not being an equal partner, so she decides to pay for their trip - that is crazy...then she gets wasted and caught on video...at least they finally talked and kissed and made up, and she did get around to meeting his friends. Can't wait to see what you have in store for us next.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78

I liked this chapter.  See how they handled the conflict and communication now compared to earlier in this story and you can really see both of their character's growth.  Just like they said being new parents sometimes makes you forget to do things for your marriage, and this chapter really highlighted the importance for taking time for yourself, your spouse, your kids, your family and friend, and always keep communicating to build and maintain all these relationships.  Great job!

PS - and I am so glad that Bella and the possums are traveling on location with them, they don't need any more separations.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward Cullen has survived for years drinking the blood of the dregs of society.  He longs for something different, the blood of an innocent.  Enter Bella Swan.  Will desire for her overrule desire for her blood or will he take both?  All EPOV.  Starts darker, quickly turns humorous.  Language, lemons and some violence.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 204849 Read Count: 50129
[Report This] Published: 26 Feb 2010 Updated: 02 Jun 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Great job with this story...it has been such an entertaining read and I will miss this couple...still I have the epilogues to look forward to, so many thanks

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I've had the best time with it and I don't want to let them go but they've made it to where they needed to be to go forward alone :)  Two epis, we'll have some more fun! ;)

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Epilogue #1

What a great chapter.  I have really enjoyed your story and the growth of these 2 characters from beginning to end...and I love the irony that they have a pet cow named Willow...can't wait to see how you wrap it up!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I've had a good time bringing them together.  Willow is such a hit!  I love it!  New chapter soon.  Thank you :)

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Epilogue 2

another great chapter, I love this couple, and they have come a long way.  Man, he really does suck at proposing, but you can't deny it was sincere.  I hope the last chapter/outtake includes the trip to Forks



Author's Response:

Haha it does indeed, I promise!  It goes darker than I expected but it felt right.  Hopefully you'll like that!

He does suck at proposing but he sure tries hard and he did get her to say yes. 

I'm so happy you liked it!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 07 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 Cowtake

Yea!  More Willow!

 I love how attached Bella is to her cows, and I love reading Edwards inner voice thinking how ridiculous it all is yet he is so whooped over Bella he does anything for her...I really have enjoyed thier banter and them as a couple, it is hard to say goodbye to these 2, but you did a great job writing this story - Loved it!



Author's Response:

Hehe yes, she was by far the most suggested outtake, so that's what I went with first!

Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it.  That's Bella and Edward, in a nutshell.  She'll ask him to do all sorts of crazy stuff and he'll complain about it but he'll always do it because he loves her that much.  They're a blast.  I promise some more outtakes down the road.

Thank you for the review :)

Summary:

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Bella Swan gets a job as a personal assistant to the "The Sexiest Man Alive" Edward Masen while attending USC.  Sparks fly between her much older boss and her, but they soon find that temptation is too hard to fight.

 

It's a coming of age story with Bella, who learns to embrace herself as well as the life she's found herself thrown into, and a little Britward on the side.

 

*WARNING:  Rated NC-17 for language, lemons, and adult sit.*


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, My All-Time Favorites, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read, My favs past present and future , TBR
Chapters: 46 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 298638 Read Count: 143766
[Report This] Published: 15 Mar 2010 Updated: 15 Dec 2010
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 22 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Hello, I just found and starting reading your story this week and I am hooked.  I just love an older Edward, and really enjoy how they interact together as a couple.  I am all caught up now and can't wait for the next chapter, so keep up the good work!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

I had a bad feeling about the pelvis injury = no kids in Bella's future...this was a hard chapter to read as I miss happier times with this couple.  I hope it gets better for them now that she is released from the hospital.  Keep up the good work and I can't wait for the next chapter.

PS - Jane is repulsive and I hope she gets what she deserves

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

What a nice ending, can't wait to see where the epi takes us with this couple...this has been one of my favorite stories to read update.  Although it took me places I didn't anticipate, such as the horrific car crash and its aftermath up to the adoption, I truly love this Edward and Bella and how you have written their love story - great job!

Summary:

 

 

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 I wish I could tell you that the world is a wonderful to live in…but I’d be lying. Unless you think living in a world where the Vampires are at war with the Werewolves. Not many humans are living free, never mind living a wonderful life. Those who don’t live locked up under vampire rule are either hiding or are in the resistance. My name is Isabella Swan and I am a human.


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 64005 Read Count: 29033
[Report This] Published: 22 Mar 2010 Updated: 27 Jan 2016
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I was happy and relieved to see Tanya find her mate, but stil don't care much for Jessica. Bella and Edward don't need anymore girl drama in thier lives.   I am glad Edward is back home with Bella and the babies.  Can't wait to see what happens next.

First & Ten by Nolebucgrl Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 828]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella Swan is an aspiring sports writer and her first big assignment is to interview the league's biggest, not to mention hottest, quarterback.  Will Edward Cullen school her in the rules of the game or will she teach him a thing or two?  Rated NC-17 for language, lemons.  An entry in The Sport of Love contest.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 351776 Read Count: 189000
[Report This] Published: 06 Apr 2010 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Taking The Field

I love it when Bella starts rambling, you never know what she is going to say.  Can't wait for her to meet the Cullens

For the record, I totally agree with the pink jersey thing...that drives me crazy to see pink jerseys instead of the team colors - I mean, what's the point



Author's Response:

Hee!  I love how many people agree with me on the team colors thing.  There is no point to pink.  You're not a fan if you can't wear your team's colors!

I love her rambles too.  One of my favorite things to write. hehe The parental meeting is coming fairly soon!  Promise!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Game Plan

Edward's parents are pretty sharp, he didn't get anything past him.  Can't wait for Bella to meet the parents, and I assume we are almost back to the point the story prologue began.  Good Job!



Author's Response:

hahah Yeah they're the all-knowing kind!  We are one chapter away from EPOV, want to do a bridge chapter with Bella setting it up and then it's on!  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 The Rumor Mill

Shucks, I was looking forward to dinner with the parents, but I guess I can wait until next time...

I really enjoyed this chapter and loved Buddy, what an awesome boss to report to that you know has your back.  Also, love any dialogue featuring Emmett and his nicknames. Thanks



Author's Response:

Sorry to disappoint, other stuff just ended up taking precedence.  I'm glad you liked it anyway :)  Buddy's a great boss/friend/mentor and EM is always a treat ;)  Thank you!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 11 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 The Offensive Line

OMG, this chapter was hysterical!  I literally made myself cry laughing at this chapter - Great Job!  I can't believe her first words to the parents were about Carlisle's fingers, so classic.  And all the Sexual references were great, I love Esme and Carlisle!



Author's Response:

I love making you laugh, and laughing to tears is so much fun :)  I had to bring back the fingers, like from when she met Edward.  It's tradition now!

So glad you love them.  I love writing them :)  Sexual references are always fun!

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 Roughing the Passer

Suck it, Dan!  Man, that was Epic and the perfect level of revenge...at first I was hoping for a beatdown involving Edward, Emmett, or both on Dan, but reading through the rationale of Bella and Jasper it makes sense that any extreme physical retaliation would look bad for her.  This was much better, and he got exactly what he deserved, the creep...



Author's Response:

Haha I'm glad you liked my solution.  A beat down would have been fun but it would have faded too quickly, whereas psychological terror has much more long lasting effects.  At least Bella got to hit him!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 Scrum

I love, love, love when they all get together - they are so much fun and their comments are hilarious.  You do such a great job making these characters so likeable.  Well, not the skanks, but we aren't supposed to like them anyways :)



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I love getting them all together too!  They have the best time.  I'm so glad you like all of them, minus the skanks! hehe THat is the point!  Thanks so much for the review!

Faithfully by LailaB Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 774]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward is the lead singer of Eclipse, the most popular band in the world for the last decade. He has always considered himself fulfilled and successful despite his solitary existence. He has never felt the desire for an emotional connection outside of the band and family until meets a much younger Bella during Eclipse’s European summer tour and begins to realize just how much has been missing from his life. Can their newfound relationship bliss survive the expectations and responsibilities of loving a rockstar? Can Bella survive the repercussions of her newfound and unsolicited fame? How do you protect the one you love when you are thousands of miles away? AH/OOC

Banner by: Evilangel813

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 34 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 185489 Read Count: 100551
[Report This] Published: 08 Apr 2010 Updated: 17 Mar 2016
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: Hit Me With Your Best Shot

ugh, Gianna is ruining what should be a happy time in their lives.  They should be focused on their growing baby, not all these wannabe baby-mama's looking to cash in on Edward's fame.  Question, could any of those other women be far enough along for Edward to be the father, or has he been with Bella long enough that they are full of it...sorry, I am not sure how much time has lapsed betweent now and their first meeting.

Unfortunately, I do have to take Edward's side.  I have never been pregnant so I can't validate the hormones, but she did say some really hateful things and now they have to rebuild that part of their relationship.  I am glad she pulled her head out of her ass before it was too late.  Now more than ever it will be important to present a united front to the world.  Great chapter!

PS - I think you write some of the hottest lemons out there, I love your tattooed Edward and Bella :)

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Deep Inside Your Heart

Good Stuff, can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Black Hole Sun

I recently found and started reading this awesome story.  Your Edward and Bella are totally hot together.  I really enjoyed this last chapter and who would have thought that Edward beating the crap out of someone could be both sexy and would get Charlie on his side

PS - Collin is such a douche and I can't wait to see what happens next

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Miss You

That would suck to deal with getting out of jail then immediately hitting the road on tour...poor Bella is at home alone and doesn't know what will happen next.

Wonder what happened at the end, it must be bad if so many missed calls from everyone, and then Bella's voicemail about Rose...obviously I can't wait to read what happens next.

PS - can I mention that I love your writing - even when they are apart you still find a way to work a lemon in there!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Home Sweet Home

I hope this will get rid of Collin for good.  He is such a douche.  Glad that Edward is back home and Rose is trying to make things right.  Can't wait for the next chapter.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella finds herself in dire financial need and takes drastic action -- she offers her virginity up for auction.  Will this desperate plan to save her college education actually turn out to be a second chance at love? 

 

This story was  made possible by the generous contribution of CandraJade to the Support Stacie Auction and is based on her fabulous prompt.

 

**If you are not old enough to purchase Adult Material, you are not old enough to read this story.  Rated for content and sex in later chapters.**

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 39762 Read Count: 45132
[Report This] Published: 11 Apr 2010 Updated: 23 Sep 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Best Laid Plans

Sometimes Edward is too self-sacrificing, so I am very glad Alice knows what is going on and has a plan along with Emmett to reunite these 2.  Good Chapter!

Summary:

 

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“We found her Chief Swan, she’s ALIVE! We found Isabella!" Alive? She had really survived the last tens years?

They said I was going home but where was home now?

OOC AU Dark themed you've been warned. No rape! But there is talk about slaves and abuse   Bella x Edward

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77399 Read Count: 32991
[Report This] Published: 25 Apr 2010 Updated: 25 Feb 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Hi, Just recently found this story and have really enjoyed it...I thought it would be a simple human kidnapping story, never considering it would be vampires behind it, so that was a great twist.  Glad Edward and Bella finally got together, and that she made it thru her transition okay... can't wait to see what happens next!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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After a terrible shipwreck in the Mediterranean Sea, Isabella Swan, marquise de Courville, her two best friends and her loyal servants are rescued, but only to become slaves and serve the Volturi brothers, three men with very dark desires. All human. Domward.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Historical
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Finished, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 45 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 201090 Read Count: 183997
[Report This] Published: 05 May 2010 Updated: 14 Jul 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Interlude in the good doctor's apartment

Bad move Jacob, he should work with Edward and Co. to overthrow Aro's rule and free himself, but like a typical guy he has to get jealous instead.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Caring for Bella

Good Chapter, I was happy that Bella stood up to the evil brothers, even if it cost her a painful whipping, and that Edward wasn't too mad at her for trying to get him in trouble.  In fact, based on this chapter, he didn't seem too mad at her at all (wink, wink)...Can't wait to see what happens when she is awake and aware!



Author's Response:

I'm glad that such a short chapter generated so many reviews (by my standards), and hopefully the next one will get even more, lol.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Between heaven and hell

So close, that Emmett is quite a cock-blocker.  Glad that Bella and Edward are finally giving in to their desire for each other, and I think Aro must die soon, cause he won't likely leave them alone otherwise.

I can't wait to see what is wrong with Jasper...maybe he woke up with a sweet personality :)



Author's Response:

Coincidentaly, I first wrote the chapter about Jasper in French (the next chapter that I will post) when Eclipse hit the theaters back at the end of June, and the only thing I liked about the movie was Japser, for that matter. So without revealing too much, one would certainly think that Alice couldn't possibly fall in love with the "old" Jasper, and that he needs indeed to have been "sweetened" somehow, lol.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Jasper Whitlock

Good Backstory on Jasper and why he is the way he is, but I am ready to get back to the present and see what happens now that he is awake!  Don't keep us waiting long :)

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Alice Brandon, comtesse de Marillac

huh, I would have never guessed that Jasper and Alice knew each other as kids, he must have repressed those memories until he got knocked in the head.

Good chapter, but I am starting to miss E/B, so will we hopefully see more of them soon since they were interrupted by Em...Good work!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 27: There's something about Rosalie

I am an Edward and Bella fan, but I don't mind learning more background with the others, especially if E and B are still indirectly involved in the plot and character conversations.

Thanks for RPOV, maybe she will help Bella see that Edward and Emmett are not the enemies to fear.

Fuggiasco by kdc2239 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 848]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward, homeless since age twelve is used to the gritty, hard life. Now twenty, his main goal is to make it in the world, and off the streets. What happens when a girl who seems to be broken beyond repair becomes his new shadow, and needs help more than he can possibly know? 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu
Chapters: 36 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 153298 Read Count: 73242
[Report This] Published: 11 May 2010 Updated: 23 Jan 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 Are We Really Through

I love how protective he is over Bella and how sweet and romantic he is trying to be for her.  The picnic was a fabulous touch, and this chapter was a nice break from all the previous drama and more drama to come, I am sure :)



Author's Response:

So glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :) 

Katie 

Summary: Past Featured Story

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When the disarmingly handsome Edward Masen turns up as a new patient, the life Dr. Isabella Swan has carefully put together will be shattered forever. What will it take to put the pieces back together again? What does it take to heal?

Many thanks to fuzzyltlwingedthing for the new banner!

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read, Ageise02 To Read 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List, J's Read and Loved Stories, mamih's favorites
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 334239 Read Count: 64022
[Report This] Published: 27 May 2010 Updated: 07 Feb 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 18

Another great chapter...I am really enjoying them as a couple now that they have declared their love for each other...Can't wait to see what happens next.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 22

Jeez, can this week get any worse for them - Edward gets fired, Bella gets that letter regarding her medical license, Jake is dead, no longer MIA, and now he has to meet Charlie...needless to say, I can't wait to read what happens next!  Keep up the good work, love your story!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 23

Although I don't hate Bella, I do hate that she pushed Edward away after all they have been thru, but I get it in a weird way...she has to take care of this unfinished business with Jake and her baby before she can go forward with Edward.

PS - I loved that he is still fighting for her by using her own prescription against her...I just hope the separation isn't drawn out too long, cause I love this couple.

Thanks - can't wait to read the next chapter

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 24

Good chapter to get us caught up to present day...the care package idea was perfect and I hope it helps these two make it back to each other. And nice cliffy at the end, can't wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 25

I love your story...good to send Jake off with a proper burial, and boy do those Quilette ladies hate Bella. I agree, it does nothing to let Billy know except to absolve her own guilt. Can't wait for her to get back to Philly and Edwoord

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 26

I hate to see all the Cullens fighting, but I am so happy to see that Edward and Bella are speaking to each other again...I love this story and can't wait to see what happens next

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 27

Bella is definitely getting her priorities straight when it comes to her life.  With regards to her medical license, I am interested to see the fallout.  I was thinking Edward is technically Carlisle's patient, not Bella's, she just treated him while Dr. C was on vacation, and I don't believe their relationship started until Dr. C was back, so would her license still be in jeopardy because he is a patient of that practice, regardless of the treating doc? 

I think it must have been Victoria that reported them if it wasn't Angela...I love this story and can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30

Such an awesome chapter...we are finally unraveling some of the secrets of the story, like who was driving the blue car, and what happened to Jake.  I hope he can get her to talk to police and save Little Bell from joint visitation with that animal.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 30

Lots of good progress in this chapter, from James being in jail to finding out exactly what happened to Jake, I am glad that everything is out in the open now.  Hopefully the ethics board will also be smooth sailing

I am also so happy that they are both excited about the peanut and maybe their future together...they are so cute together and with all the drama and angst of previous chapters, it is nice to see them together and smiling, and I for one hope they can't take it slow much longer.

Thanks, can't wait to see what happens next

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 31

Awww, what a nice reunion for Ewoord and Nessie.  This was a great chapter, it was nice to see Bella rally the troops at the office with Carlisle out, and work out something with Angela. And thank god Bella finally said out loud that she wants a future with Edward in it, can't wait to read what happens next!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 35, Epilogue 2

You rocked this story, I loved it!!!  What a nice and satisfying ending to a great story.  I am so glad they got their HEA.  Look forward to future stories from you!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review! M

Summary:

 

Edroar the Angry Lion frightens all the girls and boys at Cullen Publishing with his loud roar. Will his new massage therapist Bella Swan run away like all the rest, or can she tame this savage beast?  AH/AU   OOC


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 134649 Read Count: 25372
[Report This] Published: 09 Jun 2010 Updated: 06 May 2016
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Face Off

Angry Edward is hot!  I wonder what is going on between father and son to create the relationship they have now.  I hope Bella can solve the puzzle, and I can't wait for their roadtrip to NY.

PS - loved how Edward can related better with the kids rather than any of the adults.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 01 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 How Hard Could it Be?

I love it when your story updates...I also love the way Bella and Edroar flirt with each other using catty insults - how can you not love both of them!  Can't wait to see what happens at dinner, I doubt it will be as calm and quiet as Edroar thinks it will be...

Parachute by KitsuShel Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1971]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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After finding a child abandoned on the streets of Seattle, Bella Swan raises him as her own. What happens to their lives when his biological family is finally found?

 

 

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 145849 Read Count: 211498
[Report This] Published: 21 Jun 2010 Updated: 04 Feb 2011
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 35

aww, I knew he would find a way to be there for her birthday.  There was no way they could stay away from each other that long, and since money is no object, they should be able to fly and see each other on weekends or something so that was nice.  Can't wait to see how you wrap this story up, it has been a wild ride!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! Over 1000 for this chapter alone between here and FFnet! You guys amaze me! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)

Parachute is up for three Walk of Fame Awards: Angst Goddess, Queen of Hearts and Story of the Year. It's up against some major big ones like University of Edward Masen, Master of the Universe and Emancipation Proclamation, so I don't hold any expectation other than getting squashed like a bug. I am also up for three writing awards as well: Rising Starlet, Hopelessly Devoted and Musical Maestro.

I would adore winning the Hopelessly Devoted award. It's for the one writer that you know you can always count on. I think I've proven to you guys over and over that I'm "hopelessly devoted" to you, with the weekly updates and review replies to each and every reviewer. If you head over there and end up feeling that another author up for the award deserves it more, please follow your heart and vote for them. I just ask you to please keep me in consideration. ^_^

That being said, here are your promised teasers! The first from the next chapter of Parachute and the second from Victoria POV that I've written for the Fandom Against Domestic Violence fundraiser. =)

♥ Shel ♥

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Parachute ~ Chapter 36 Teaser:

Bella stood, drenched head to toe, in the middle of her front lawn. Hot tears streamed down her face as the chilly rain pelted her skin. Her mouth was open slightly in shock, as she gazed down with wide eyes at the man she loved more than life itself. Edward's hopeful, joyous face grinned up at her from his stance on one knee. The ring held in his hand was a single brilliant diamond that was simple, yet elegant.

"Isabella Swan, I have been captivated by you since the moment I first laid eyes on you. That love only grew and expanded as I got to know you and saw first hand what a wonderful mother you are to our son. Forever could never be long enough for me, to feel like I've had long enough with you. Marry me?"

She covered her mouth and let out a sob, before throwing her arms around him and shouting, "Yes!"

They fell together, a mass a limbs and lips, their hearts beating both beating wildly. He pulled away slightly and pushed a lock of rain-saturated hair from her face.

"Let's go inside, please. I don't want you to catch a cold."

When they stood, his eyes were drawn to her white shirt, now completely plastered against her bare breasts, her nipples hard and straining against the fabric. His hand reached out to brush against her breast, causing her to become self conscious and cross her arms across her chest. She laughed lightly and nodded her head towards the house.

"Come on, let's get dry."

Edward let out a loud guffaw. "I'd rather keep you wet, love."

His hands wrapped around her waist and he pulled her back to his chest as they tumbled into the house. Sopping wet clothes soon littered the foyer floor and hands roamed greedily.

"Where is our bedroom?" he asked huskily, sweeping her into his arms.

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Victoria POV Outtake ~ "In the End" teaser:

I won't ever be remembered for my common sense. I know most of you hate me and I'm fine with that. I deserve it. I was a bad, bad girl. For those of you who don't know my story, I'll start at the beginning.

My mother married my father for his money and power. When she'd finally had enough, she left and took half of his net worth, including me. He never seemed to mind. He sent an obscenely large support check once a month, but it always felt like a buy-off. Once he re-married and began a family with his new wife, our interactions were even fewer. Who knows how I would have turned out if he had made more of an effort? He's just as much to blame for my upbringing as my mother is. He knew how she was, yet he still didn't lift a finger to keep me.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26

Come on Edward,don't trust James...I hope all will be revealed soon. Love it!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! There are teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com) Don't shoot me, okay?

I've been working on an Emmett Outtake for Parachute to be used in the 30 Days of Emmett, a series of One Shots, Outtakes and Drabbles featuring Emmett, which is hosted by AccioBourbon, Hmonster4 and Theheartoflife. It's already started off with a bang! Our Outtake will appear there on 12/3 and post to Parachute's Outtakes a few days later. Enormous kudos to these ladies for showing Em some love! =)

♥ Shel ♥

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Charlie squeezed Bella and she melted against her father's side in comfort. When his flight to Seattle was called, Charlie leaned down and kissed her on the cheek.

"I'll see you in a few weeks, baby girl. Everything will work out fine, you'll see," he told her quietly.

"Thanks, Daddy," she whispered in his ear. Charlie grinned and reached out to shake Edward's hand.

"Edward, it was good to meet you, son. Take care of my family, you hear?"

Edward smiled sincerely. "With my life, Chief."

The two men exchanged a look and Charlie nodded, before looking at Jack and holding open his arms. The boy hugged his grandfather tightly.

"I'll see you soon, Pops! Tell Seth and Nana and Leah that I miss them!"

"I will, kiddo. I promise," Charlie responded, blinking away tears.

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 29

Edward is so romantic about everything, but like Bella I was shocked he mentioned the M-word alredy...can't wait to read the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog now. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)  

Emmett's Outtake has also posted, so check it out if you'd like!

Voting for the Original Character Awards! is open until 12/14! We're up for Most Original Plot as well as Jack for Best Offspring and Best Male! It's going to be super tough against A Rough Start's Anthony, who is one of my fave kids! But, alas, I do love my Jack more!

♥ Shel ♥

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The music surrounded her, swirling like a tornado. Bella moved her hips and danced along side of Tanya's lithe body as she got lost in the sound.

"Excuse me," a deep voice spoke into her ear. She turned and saw a tall, handsome man smiling down at her.

"Would you care for a dance partner?" he asked.

"No thanks," Bella responded. "I'm fine with my friend."

He looked over her shoulder and nodded in that direction. "Looks like she found someone else."

Sure enough, when she looked, Tanya was dancing with a blond young man. She shook her head and laughed before turning back to the man.

"The answer is still no, but thanks for asking."

"Ah, come on. I'm alone and you're all by your self. What's the harm?"

"I think the lady declined your offer, pal," Edward spoke, sliding up against Bella from behind.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 11 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30

Pretty sure the bad feeling is a premonition of drama to come...glad that Edward is no longer completely discounting Bella's bad vibe she gets from James, and hope that Jack doesn't get hurt.  Can't wait to see what happens next!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com) It ties in with this one nicely.

Voting for the Original Character Awards ends today! We're up for Most Original Plot as well as Jack for Best Offspring and Best Male! It's going to be super tough!

Make sure you leave your pitchforks at the door before reading the teaser! This chapter's drama skyrockets, but I think it's necessary to complete our journey and it's the way that I've always pictured it heading.

♥ Shel ♥

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"Call Tanya and give her this info. She'll know what to do."

"Yes, ma'am. I'll keep my ear to the ground. If I find anything else out, I'll let you know."

Bella pocketed her iPhone and her hands curled into fists. The anger that she had experienced minutes earlier paled in comparison to the rage that coursed through her. The proof that James was a part of Jack's abandonment was black and white in front of her face. She fully planned on marching back into that office and tearing a new asshole into anyone who dared to get in her way. When the elevator reached the final floor, she was alone.

The doors opened and before she could step out, she found herself once again face to face with James Brooks. His eye widened in shock and her fist flew without thought. He swiftly caught her hand and pushed her back into the elevator with his body weight. "

What the hell are you doing?" he hissed angrily.

"You- you-" she stuttered. "You piece of shit! I'm not leaving here until I talk to Edward. I know who you are and what you did to Jack. You're a miserable excuse for a human being!" she shouted in her fury.

Quicker than she could blink, one of his forearms was pressed against her throat menacingly while the other hand gripped her by the hair.

"You couldn't just leave, could you?" he ground out. "No, you had to be Miss High-And-Mighty. From the first moment I laid eyes on you, I knew you'd be a challenge."

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 33

Wow, so much happened last chapter that is was nice for them to regroup this chapter.  So James is in jail, Victoria is dead, and Edward is moving to Seattle...sounds like everything is coming full circle, and I can't wait to read what happens next.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)

In other news, Bella and Jack both won the Avant Garde Awards that they were up for! I simply can not thank everyone enough! You guys are the single biggest reason that this story has been as successful as it has! I adore each and every one of you! And not just for voting or reviewing, but for continuing on this journey with me and loving Jack as much as I do!

I'm shooting to have the EPOV up soon, but he's been difficult. I'm also in the process of writing a Victoria POV for the Fandom Against Domestic Violence compilation. It should be interesting to see how well I can channel bat-shit crazy!

♥ Shel ♥

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"Edward, can I ask you something?" she asked in a quiet voice.

He shifted slightly and brushed a piece of hair from her face. "Anything, baby."

She swallowed nervously, worried about what his response would be to her question. "The documents that James showed me, were they real?"

He took a deep breath and nodded hesitantly. Betrayal pierced her heart and she felt tears spring to her eyes.

"Ssh, don't cry," he whispered, brushing thumbed across her cheeks. "It's not like it sounds."

"Then how is it? Why were you petitioning for custody if you're moving across the country? Or was that a lie?" she replied with a small sob, her body beginning to shake.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 34

Saying goodbye, even if it is temporary, is hard to do.  Especially for Edward I am sure with just getting Jack back in his life. Great chapter and I can't wait to see how you wrap this one up. Thanks



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)

I'm saddened each week that brings us closer to the end, but I'm happy for E, B and Jack to get their HEA.

The promised EPOV from Chapters 31/32 is up now! Go check it out!

♥ Shel ♥

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"Garrett was just telling us about the Flag Football team sign ups. I really want to play this year. Please?"

She placed her hands on her hips, eyeing her son carefully. "Let me talk to your dad and we'll see."

Garrett's eyes widened and he looked at Jack, grinning. "Is that weird?"

Jack's brow scrunched in confusion. "Is what weird?"

"That you have a dad now."

"I always did have a dad," Jack responded. "I just couldn't remember where he was."

"But still," Garrett continued, "after all of this time apart, is it weird now?"

Jack thought for a moment before shaking his head. "No, not really. It feels right."

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Banner created by xrxdanixrx

 

Edward Cullen is a 21 year old man who has the world at his finger tips. He has a great education, money, and plenty of women. The things he feels he's entitled to...but what happens when an innocent meeting with a beautiful, but older Isabella Swan at a coffee shop turns into something he never expected.

Will a hot and assertive woman like Bella, who likes to take control, finally be able to teach a young cocky Edward about life, sex, and women?

Thrust into a world filled with pain, pleasure, and all too consuming desire...Edward soon realizes it's a life he can't live without.

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 Chocolate Brown & Leather Whips teaser trailer by Emily Bowden

 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HBsINM0Nu3Q

 

 Teaser Trailer #2

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=20q3OG5zRwQ


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Wonderful World of Dommella, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 318670 Read Count: 86080
[Report This] Published: 08 Jul 2010 Updated: 30 Jun 2012
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter Twenty Eight - Tread Lightly

Oops, is Edward going to have to explain to his mom that Bella broke his dick?  Ouch!  Like that Carlisle and Esme seem to approve of Bella, even if Carlisle cautions about moving too fast.  I just hope Bella learns to deal with Edward and doesn't run away from her feelings.  I love mushy Edward!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 26 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter Twenty Nine- When it rains, it pours

My friend has a mean grandma like that and it amazes me.  I thought all grandma's are sweet and back cookies - I know, I know, a bit of a stereotype there but it is hard to see someone be that rude.  Speaking of Nana Cullen, I LOVED Bella's comment about taking a flogger to her.

I was nervous when Edward and Esme were talking because like Edward thought I figured she was leaning towerds judgement not understanding.  I don't think he needs to be ashamed of the lifestyle or his mistress, but I think it may be best to adopt a don't ask, don't tell policy around family.

Can't wait to see what happens next, will Jasper get with Alice, will Rose spill the beans, and what will Edward's friends think about his Mistress Bella.  Better yet, what will she think about them, maybe she can get Rose in Domme training :)

 



Author's Response:

Hey, Hon!! Thanks for reading. You know, I have never had this sort of Nana and I don't know where she came from. Sometimes characters write themselves. I agree with you, Edward shouldn't be afarid of what people think, but he's ashamed of it for some reason and he shouldn't be. I think he's slowly realizing this fact. He had his self-awareness in this chapter, but we'll see if that carries on. 

Alice has not seen Jasper yet, but when she does, well, you know how it goes ;) Rose needs to get her ass in Domme training. I think that is why she's so intrigued by Bella's lifestyle. It'll be interestin to see what Bella thinks of Edward's friends...dun dun dun!

Anyways, have a great week, and I'll see ya next update!

*mwah*

 

~K

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 06 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter Seven- The Eyes Have It

HI, I really am enjoying your story so far.  I definitely don't mind a slow burn on the plot but I am ready to get more Edward/Bella interactions, hopefully starting in the next chapter.  Looking forward to it, and keep up the good work!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter Eight- Masquerade

what a cliffie!  Finally they are in the playroom, and I can't wait to see if he gets busted for his lies...Can't wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter Thirteen- A Long Grocery List

I am so happy to see this story back up and running!  Mistress Bella is quite the evil bitch with her subs, and I can't wait to see what else she has planned.  And I love how he can't lie or hide anything from Jasper, too funny.  Also nice to see you introduce Jacob, and I am excited to see how the waxing session goes for Edward next time.  Thanks

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter Fifteen- Blurred Perceptions

Very interesting chapter getting to know more about Bella thru her sister, and I hope she does feel something for Edward than just a sub, especially since he seems obsessed with her.

Mr Harrison is creepy, so I have no idea what Bella has planned for Edward, and truthfully I am almost afraid to find out :)

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter Sixteen- Russian Roulette

Wow, another great chapter, I was just as scared as Edward was about what Mistress Marie wanted with him in the purple room.  I really enjoy how he balks at the tasks before giving in an relishing his submission to his Mistress. I really hope Bella does have feelings for him and it is not all one-sided, but she is such a closed book right now, so I can't wait to find out more about her.

Bring on the playroom!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 20 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter Thirty - Feliz Navidad

Oh snap, the secret is out.  I think it is pretty funny that Bella wants to train Rose to be a Domme, Emmett could be in big trouble.  I love how open Bella is about everything, and I can feel that even though Edward is a bit prone to overreaction, he is correct that his friends are not being very respectful in meeting Bella or inviting themselves to dinner.

"Mind over Cock" too funny, I hope his stiches are okay and he recovers so we can get some more action between these two.  Love it.

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter Forty - The Reckoning

This chapter broke my heart.  Poor Edward.  He was only taking a misguided attempt to give her what she lost only to find out it was all a lie.  And she was going up and move with no explanation.  Nope, not very happy with Bella right now.

I can only imagine the fallout that Edward will have from this betrayal.  Kudos to your excellent writing and surprise twist.  I thought everything was coming together for these two and then you blew it up.  Now I can't wait to see what happens next!



Author's Response:

Hey, Hun! Thanks for the review. I bet you're wishing like Edward that Bella would've just gave him the horse. At least there some soothing aftercare in the deal. I sent this chapter to my prereaders with the heading 'Do you trust me?' LOL

Have a great weekend and I'll update soon!

~K

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter Forty-Three - Shell-shocked

I say they both think way too much!  I am going to be optimistic since you say there are only a few chapters left, that one of them will pull their heads out of their asses and fix this mess.



Author's Response:

Amen!!! LOL! Thanks for reading.

 

~K

Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4248]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1254874
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 75

Wow, the size of this chapter more than makes up for the wait, lots happened and I find it so amazing how you come up with Bella's punishments/  Most of these type of stories would involve beating their asses red, but I really like the mental approach that Edward uses, so much more effective and obviously works with Bella's past physical limitations.  You always make me think in your story by showing the thought processes from both POV.  Love it, keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

The chapter did get rather long, but as a reader I like long chapters...thanks for reading...louise

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I recently found your story and have to admit you have me completely hooked.  It's a highly entertaining plot and some good teasers of things to come.  I can't wait to read more from you!  And you can never have enough lemons when it comes to Mr. Sex-on-a-stick :)



Author's Response:

Yes I agree, he is quite yummy ... thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a new teaser for you...lml

Edward grew serious looking at my eyes through the reflection of the mirror over the dresser.

 

            “Do you feel more confident? By the time you laid down, you certainly acted more confident.”

 

            “Yes, I do. At least I have a general idea how you want me to act and what you expect from me.” He stood up straight placing his hands on my shoulders before kissing the top of my head.

 

             “Good, get ready. Can you try to be in the kitchen by seven-thirty? I want to talk to you.”

 

             I pursed my lips “You can’t talk now?” He sighed drawing his pointer finger in a circle in front of him.

 

            “Edward and Bella here, Master and submissive in the kitchen” he said pointing towards the door.

 

            “Am I in trouble again?” I asked with interest my voice coming out in a whine.

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Glad to see that all her training paid off and she did well at the club, especially after worrying so much about messing up the night before...oh, and I am glad that Edward stood up to Tanya at the club, she is such a skank.

The bedroom scene at the end was just a bonus, so thanks and I can't wait for the next chapter, I want to find out if that white van he saw by her house is just a herring or something more, perhaps?

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 02 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

I seriously love your story! It has the perfect blend of suspense, romance, and kinky :). I can't wait for the next update and what happens when Edward finds out what happened to Bella...keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

thanks for reading and leaving a comment. Becasue this is a Thursday post I have a teaser for you....lml

“The phone Bella” I could see him trying to rein in his anger and I knew that had we been anywhere else but this room, I would have been Isabella at that moment.

 

“I turned it off”

 

“You…” Edward didn’t get to finish his statement because I continued to explain.

 

“On the way back, Sally was upset and we were talking and the phone kept ringing and interrupting us, so I turned it off.” He sat there with his head down running his hand through his hair for what seemed like forever before his eyes finally met mine again and he released a long sigh.

 

“Bella..” Edward sighed again “I’m going to give you one more chance to just stay in this room and relax tonight. I’ll bring your dinner up here; we’ll take a long bath and watch TV.”

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Great chapter...I don't think Edward was too mean at all. She has a psycho ex still lurking around and works in a potentially dangerous occupation yet she turns her phone off all day and doesn't let anyone know what is going on...she is lucky she doesn't have a red ass after all her mistakes. I enjoyed his punishments - they are very creative and I can't wait to see what others he has planned. Keep up the good job!

Author's Response:

Thank you. Poor Edward is taking a beating in the reviews. Half are man as hell at him, and the others think Bella deserved it. I'm with you, I think she deserved it, and since he can't spank her (or wont for punishment) then he has to get creative and do something that she will remember.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Bravo - great, albeit shorter than normal chapter. Good info but I am really really hoping that Bella will learn to communicate with Edward soon. All relationships rely on good communication skills, and from what I have read even more so in BDSM ones...so here's hoping the full story comes out soon! Please! Love this story and can't wait for the next chapter

Author's Response:

All relationships thrive on communication ...Bella is going to not have a choice ..soon ...lml

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

I am so happy that Bella finally opened up to Edward about what happened to her that night and got it all out, since it has been slowly eating away at her...not sure what Leah's deal is, but I can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

It is a big step for her,,,,

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

Edward always has the most interesting punishments, I really do enjoy reading about them and their growing trust in each other...However, I do get the feeling that this is the calm before the storm with the visit to Forks on the horizon - maybe I am reading too much into it but your slight hints of things to come are making me crazy with anticipation on what will happen next.  Great job and look forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

These two need so ...happy time before heading off to Forks....Thank you for reading, here is your teaser.

A piece of tomato fell to the floor but instead of squatting down Bella bent from the waist, causing the back of her nighty to rise up over her thighs showing me the ruffled yellow thong she had on. The groan left my mouth without consent while my dick pressed painfully against my pants.

 

The giggle that came from Bella gave away her intentions, my girl was fucking teasing me – again.

 

A hand landed on her ass before it registered in my mind what I was doing, Bella gasped standing to give me a shy smile. “What did you do that for?”

 

I raised my eyebrows in disbelief “If you stick that in my face you know damn well what’s going to happen.”

 

“Oh yeah? “ Bella looked up at me through her lashes taking a few steps back out of my reach dropping the tomato she had just picked up “Oops”

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

It's hard to find good help these days even without a playroom, so the creepy alarm guys don't surprise me at all.  Sounds like some shady racket going on at the club, so can't wait to see what happens there, and I loved playful Edward and Bella time - they needed it after the recent drama they have experienced



Author's Response:

ok .. now think like a man .. (I knows it hard, because theya re so simple minded...lol ) and you don;t have a dick (do you?) ..lol ... Anyway theses men go into a seemingly regular house to do a job and get taken downstairs tand see a playroom that's only use is for deviant kinky sex. I mean this is not a room that most people have in their house. So then when they see Bella you know damn well what they are thinking and imagining ....but your right it's still creepy, and rude,, and she shouldn't have to put up with that and Edward was right to call them on it. And you are also right B&E need some usual and some happy fun times.... Thanks for the comments ,,,lml

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 11 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

wow, an entire chapter focused on nothing but the "usual" - I approve :)

Sounds like Bella had her first experience with "subspace"...love this story and can't wait to read what happens next!!!

 



Author's Response:

yes ... she did and things are getting better and better for these two ...Thanks for reading here is your Thursday teaser...lml

 

 

 

Picking up the first box I actually grunted because it was heavier than I thought it would be. After putting it on the table I turned around to see Bella carrying another one of the boxes.

 

“Isabella what are you doing?” I asked her while taking the box from her hand then realized the one she had was heavier then the first.

 

“I was carri…” I cut her off before she could finish

 

“I thought you had a fifteen pound weight limit”

 

“I do…” I stared at her in bewilderment

 

“This box has to be at least forty pounds” she looked at me like a deer caught in the head lights. I wasn’t mad –much- it was more concern for her wellbeing. Once the box was on the table I pulled Bella in for a hug. “I don’t want you to hurt yourself, so don’t do that anymore”

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44

Wow, great chapter.  Poor Bella, she is so self-sufficient that she can't handle following simple instructions, can she?

I thought the command that she could only take what he gives her [food, drinks, etc...] was a nice touch.  I don't think he is doing it to be in control so much as he is trying to keep her in the correct frame of mind even in a public setting.  Brilliant

Like Bella mentioned, when I read about sub-space in these stories, it does seem to take on a mythical vibe...I have heard of both sub-space and sub-drop, but I am not sure of the difference.  I thought sub-space was like being in the zone, but a sub-drop was when the shaking and crying occurs.  Can you explain the difference between the 2 to help understand.

Still think Leah is acting weird, but I can't decide if she is jealous Bella has a life outside of her and Jacob now, or if it is something else.  Can't wait to find out more.



Author's Response:

Yes that is right it was to keep her in the right frame of mind,,,,

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

I too am interested in finding out what Officer Hawk's problem is...well, I still think James is behind it, but he obviously has an accomplice working for him so he has an alib, maybe it is Victoria since they mentioned a smaller staturei...now I am not sure what they are looking for in her house unless they are hoping to scare her...but I can't wait to read and find out what happens next...

ohhh, Edward is so evil with his payback for missing her orgasm...at least she was smart enough to yellow so she didn't get punished more.  Ready for more so update soon!



Author's Response:

Updates are coming, Thursday...If the person wanted to scare her, don't you think they would have tried to break -in while she was home alone? ((Just throwing it out there )) ... and it's possible that Victoria was the one, I assume that she is smaller then a man, but you never know, maybe she beefed up since Bella last show her ...lol...lol..lol...sorry I couldn't resist....anyway...Edward's POV is up next and I'm sure he will explain his reasoning for the payback ... Thanks for reading, here is tis weeks teaser...lml

I should have expected that she would have a nightmare, the trauma of having our home invaded was enough to unnerve me, I can only guess what memories it stirred in her. Removing my shirt that was full of tears and dirty from her nose I laid back down with her head on my chest. “We’ll change the locks tomorrow and figure out who it was, that will make you feel safer. It was just a dream Bella, I swear I would die before I let anyone hurt you.” 

 

“Don’t say that!”

 

I wasn’t sure what she was talking about when she abruptly shot her head up to look at me. “I couldn’t stand it if something happened to you. I couldn’t take it”

 

Even in the darkness of the room I could see the fierceness in Bella’s eyes as the tears fell down her face. “Nothing is going to happen to me, and nothing is going to happen to you. Now stop with the tears and lets go back to sleep”

 

Cupping her face my thumb wiped away the tears as she nuzzled her cheek against my palm before turning her head to placing a soft kiss in the center of my hand. “Do you think I’m crazy?”

 

“No…” why the hell would I think that?  

 

“…I think it was a stressful night and I think you have a lot on your mind and have dealt with more in your life then any one person should have to deal with. I told you before baby, I think you are the strongest person I know; a lesser person would have called it quits a long time ago. Now let’s go back to sleep, I have a promise to keep to a dog”

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Another great chapter - Officer Hawk is definitely a bit creepy and it sounds like he was hoping to tie James to this case.  I was thinking Victoria when they said someone smaller, but I forgot about crazy Tanya, so I suppose it could be her as well.

Fun times with the center volunteers and victims...poor Edward has no idea what they are talking about all the dancing. But Carlisle does :)

Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

As one of my other readers said... there are so many possiblities....maybe once you have all the information you will be able to put all the theories together...in the mean time, Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a teaser for you....lml

Walking into the house all the cares that had been forgotten came crashing back as he told me that the locksmith would be there in about a half-hour. I used that time to tell him what I had learned about Heather.

 

“Do you think that could have been her on the video?” He asked me as we sat outback playing fetch with Seth and a tennis ball.

 

“It could have been. But how would she know where you lived. I mean really Edward if she knew where I was why go to the center?” He thought about that for a few seconds as he once again threw the ball into the grass.

 

“I’m going to call Mr. Weiss and let him check on it, I’m also going to see if he can check on your Officer Hawk.”

 

“My Officer Hawk?”

 

He smirked “Well he’s not mine besides he didn’t really care until he found out who you were, and I’m not taking any chances. I don’t know how it will work with him being a cop and all but…” I cut him off because I had gotten an ingenious idea.

 

“I could have Charlie do it.

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 13 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Good Chapter.  I don't know what to make of Heather or what her agenda would be with Bella.  I think I am reading too much into everything, but when the girls mentioned Heather's son being named EJ and Bella said is that short for Evan Jr., I stopped and immediately thought the J could also stand for James. 

Is seems there is so much mentally that goes into these D/s relationships, so I can't blame Bella for having difficulties slipping into that mindset, but Master Edward is worth it, lucky girl



Author's Response:

You're right it could for James...you are the only one who thought of that....and you are also right about the mental work that goes into a D/s relationship...also once you are in that frame of mind you become very needy and dependant on your Dom,,,,which was why Bella became so distraught when Edward didn't return,...Thanks for reading I have this weeks teaser for you ...lml...

“It’s just the food” I told him as he followed me to the door barking the whole time “Seth!” I admonished while shutting down the alarm and opening the door to a very stunned Irena.

 

“Since when do you have a dog Edward?”

 

I didn’t respond to her question instead sighing heavily “What can I do for you Irena?”

 

“You can invite me in” She said as if it should be obvious.

 

Hesitantly I moved to the side to allow her entrance locking the door but leaving the alarm off, I wasn’t taking any chances. She stood in my living room watching Seth as he sat by my feet.

 

“I never thought you to be a dog lover” The sweetness in her voice confused me because the last time we spoke it was anything but friendly. That was the day she and Caius attacked Bella for which I found their actions deplorable.

 

“Cut the crap Irena why are you here?” My tone was rude but she deserved it and I didn’t trust her.

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Well, looks like they had a nice friendly dinner, and quite a few revelations were shared, especially shedding some light on Aro.  I was surprised that Edward got so jealous...but it was nice to see that he can't always remain so calm and collected all the time.  It worked out in the end though, and sounds like a naughty Bella is a happy one.  Can't wait to see what happens next when they hit up Forks.  Please let them run into James, I would love to see Edward's reaction to him.

On a sidenote, I am a bit interested in this corn-pie you write about, instructions are appreciated!



Author's Response:

Hmmm...all O can say about James is that he lives in Forks...and it's a small town. I live in a small town of 3200 people, there are times when I go to the store and think I see everyone I know and then there are times when I don't see anyone...((I know that doesn't answer you question..I guess you will have to wait and see))...thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have this weeks teaser for you...lml...

Taking another drink of coffee I didn’t say anything, but that was twice now that something was not put on the calendar. The lunch with Jane yesterday- which I found out about accidentally - that was ultimately cancelled and now the waxing, I guess my submissive will have some explaining to do. But at the moment I thought of something else.

 

“If you are waxing have them remove the remaining patch of hair” Bella’s hand stopped mid-way to her mouth as she just stared at me and I wondered what had caused the reaction I was getting. 

 

“W..Why? You said I could keep it”

 

Taking a drink of coffee I thought over my words to her on the subject “If I remember correctly I said you could keep it for the time-being but I would like it gone now”

 

“Can we talk about this?” her eyes stayed focused on the few pieces of bagel that were still on the paper towel. I didn’t understand what the problem was; we were talking about a tiny little patch of neatly trimmed hair.

 

“What’s the big deal?” I watched as she sat there quietly staring at the table chewing her bottom lip. “Bella?”

 

Devastation is the only word that came to my mind when she looked into my eyes “I know this is really stupid, but can I please keep it until next time?”

 

My eyes narrowed in confusion what did it matter if it was now or later? “Why?”

 

“Do you know why I kept a small patch?”

 

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 17 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

Great chapter, nice to see Edward already thinking of rings and not freaking out about it....bring on the vacation!



Author's Response:

thanks for leaving a comment I sent you a seperate e-mail I hope you like it .....

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed
Date: 21 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77

Great chapter - man, I feel like they have been gone from home forever!  Enjoyed all their adventures but I am ready to see what happens when they return back to the real world.