Hey,

I love this twist.  I wonder if Eward will be able to keep to his plan.  Something tells me - NO.

This could all backfire terribly.  For Charlie, Edward...  Edward wants Bella to lose her virginity (and not take it himself).  Charlie is pushing Jacob on Bella, and Jacob wants Bella pretty bad and if Bella knows that Edward won't do anything with her, until she loses her virginity to someone else -- oh no!!!!  I see trouble cumming (he he he - play on words). 

Okay, this is agony.  Poor Edward, although I'm so glad that you didn't have him go crazy thinking she way leaving him, or that she decided he wasn't what she wanted. 

Looking forward to the next chapter.  I need some good news, R.L. sucks for me.

I've so enjoyed reading this story.  Please update soon. 

Thank you for not going the "misunderstanding route" with Jane that most authors go to.  Bella knew Edward had been a "bad boy" type of guy before she met him.  She was bound to run into his past and thank god he was honest with her.  I hope.  The fact that they talked it out shows their maturity about the whole ordeal.

What a great concept for a Jacob/Bella story.  HOT!!  But, it definately left me wanting more -- please, at least finish the birthday, fantasy night. 

I'm really enjoying this story.  i love the idea of Edward, and his family, going along with a plan for Edward to choose and win over "human" Bella to be his mate.

I'm dying to know if Carlisle put something in Bella's food or drink to make her fall asleep so she'd miss her date with Mike (since the family's all actively helping him with his plan)?

That was such a cute chapter.  I loved Edward's inner dialoge, "Human Bella Swan is holding Vampire Edward Cullen's hand".  Poor Edward, he really has it bad.  I really like the insight to how a vampire male claims his mate in your story.  As Esme would say, "So cute".  I can't wait to see how Edward adapts to having to claim her the old fashioned "human" way.   

Oh my God, you are sooooo bad.  We've waited forever (like a hundred years - haha) for this update and it was way too short.  You left us screaming for more and a huge cliffy to boot.

Please, please continue to update this story, especially now that it's getting so exciting with the drama of the wolves (although I thought they only reacted/attacked vampires who were killing humans).  The Cullens have a treaty with them - what gives? 

Well that had to be extremely eye opening for someone who's never been spanked, although Bella seemed to enjoy it quite a bit.

Heavy stuff!  I just don't see Bella being able to live that kind of lifestyle of sharing her husband, although I think she desperately craves people in her life that wont leave.  She's been lonely her whole life with all the moving around her mother made her go through.  I think she really wants the permanent friendships and that appeal may be enough, but it wont be easy for her (hence any of them).

Then there's that chemistry she shares with Edward that the others don't.  IDK.

I think Rosalie purposely wants Bella to see the worst.  She wants to scare Bella off so that she doesn't want to be any part of the family, securing Rosalie's place.  She knows that the spankings and the unknown polygamist ways scare Bella, because she didn't grow up in that lifestyle.  I think Rosalie is going to go out of her way to make Bella see the worst and want to run as far away from them as possible.

I think Rosalie will always put herself first.  She really doesn't care about Edward or Alice's feelings.  Maybe I just feel that way because that is how I perceive her in the books, as being too narcissitic to put anyones feelings or happiness above her own.  It definately is an unhealthy relationship, with everyone sacraficing their happiness for Rosalie's, especially Edward.  In a way, his whole adult life has been a compromise to keep her happy and not living the way he wanted to live all along.  

I'm really enjoying your story.   I was wondering if Edward has discussed birth control with Bella.  The first time they went at it, they defininately didn't have time or think to discuss it, since Bella basically attacked Edward (I would have too - just saying).  But, I find it strange that during their discussions on limits and rules, birth control did not come up, or safe sex in general, since Edward has been with lots of women.

I absolutely love this concept.  I've forgotten the exact date of Edward's turning, but since Carlisle changed Edward 1st, Bella would be able to shed so much light into his future as well.

Can't wait to continue this terrific story.

D.

Poor Edward.  Girls can be jerks too.  This chapter made me so sad for him.

This is a really different James (in a way), he seems to really love Bella, but has future abuser written all over him.  I'm curious about what happened to him in his past.  I hope Bella puts a stop to this abusive, obsessive/posessive behavior quickly.

I have a feeling things are going to escalate when the Tequila comes into play.  It sure isn't going to make it better.

I'm completely shocked that James didn't go off about Bella going with both him and Edward to Prom.  Could he have been sincere about not being angry and jealous with Bella anymore?  Highly doubtful, but then he was fine with Edward rubbing Bella's feet while they lay by the fire.

I sure hope James doesn't know about the $450,000 of insurance money that Bella was left

Greatg ending to the chapter -- very cleaver.  I'm so happy that they told Bella right away about not naming James as the father in any way, so he wouldn't have any rights.

I hope Bella gets payback for everything James did to her.   

Oh no!  This should never have happened, with Phil being ex-CIA, they still have the resources and knowledge on tracking and rescuing. Where were their guns and weapons.  They never even had a chance to fight James and his thugs off.

Please have Bella and Emma make a speedy return to their family safely.

I'd like to see Aro punish James/Marcus severely for his degenerate and violent behavior with Bella.

I enjoyed that chapter.  Better insight into Bella's relationship, or lack thereof, with Charlie.  She should have told him she had a job interview that day.

My heart is breaking for the two of them.  I hope she goes into labor early, so Eric will know it is his children she carries and so he can be there with her.

I'm so enjoying your storytelling/writing. 

I hope this review goes through.  I've tried to review other chapters and when I hit "submit", I get a message saying I can't review multiple times on the same chapter.

I've never had a problem reviewing on TWCS before (only on the Fan Fictioin site).

Anyway, again I love the story and am looking forward to reading more. 

I'm glad Seth's collar was found.  I was beginning to worry that James had taken it for some reason or attempted to take Seth.

I was wondering why Edward goes from "happy, content boyfriend" to "angry Dom" without any explanation.  I would feel like I did something wrong and would be worrying the whole way home if and when I was to be punished. 

I kept trying to figure out what she did.  Did she eat too many calories?  Or have a sweet she wasn't suppose to have?

That was a great chapter.  I was also extremely impressed with the A/N you left with the description of the emotional baggage Bella is still holding on to. You were "dead on" in your explaination.  

The memory of the abuse is always there.  It's like she shut a door to her past and once the physical scares healed, she moved on and built herself up "from there" and became strong again.  But, the door has been cracked open "a hair" and the bad memories start creeping back in and remind her that once, a long time ago, she was not the strong woman she preaches to others about being. The self doubt start to creep back in and eat away and if she doesn't deal with it, she will eventually be right back there again (mentally). 

Doubtful of  her emotional strength, feelings of degradation and worthlessness will start eating at her and the more she will question if she's good enough etc. (That crack in her inner door will keep opening further and further til some trigger (reminder) will have her right back there mentally).  

Like you said, "she is not going to be able to conceal them anymore and that scares the shit out of her for so many reasons…." and it's a huge threat to her "here and now" relationship with Edward.  She needs to deal with those emotional traumas quickly.

I am really enjoying your story.  It is quite unique and I love the fact that it is so different and that the wolves/elves are friends with the Cullens.  I don't miss that type of angst with the Jacob/Bella drama one bit.  I also really enjoy that you made Bella a half human/half faen.  I would like to know how this effects her lifespan in years and also how old do the Twilghters live to be in age?

Thanks again for a great new story.

D.

I've had some difficulty with reviewing. After I submit, I get disconnected from the document and it says I can't get back on with approval by an administrator; or something like that. Anyway, it's been a pain in the ass.

I love the justice that Bella got, slicing James from dick on up.  Something he threatened to do to her (cut her from clit to ), so I loved hearing about his dick getting shredded.  Gross, but justice.

I also love the fact the everyone wanted to off James.  Although, Jasper or Carlisle mentioned the air bubble entering his bloodstream to kill him and someone else wanted to strangle him to death, the fact that a candy striper did it who has a famililar match makes me wonder if Bree had a sister she was unaware of, they already said her parents were dead.

Can't wait to read the next chapter.

D.

I'm really love your story. It is so unique and twisted, and I am a little embarassed to say how much I am enjoying the pervertedness of Aro and James.

I really would love to see Edward and Emmett get to spend time with James and Aro in the dungeons, showing them exactly what they think of his twisted, wicked ways with women though.

Thanks for such a genuinely unique piece of writing.  Please keep the story going and don't get concerned with the small minds that choose to ruin things by getting you booted from fan fiction.  I myself started reading this in the TWCS.  I have gotten away from reading stories on the fan fiction site because of these kinds of issues.

Keep up the great writing.

D.

As much as I hate the idea of Edward being with the nasty whore Victoria, she has been such a bitch to Bella that the chapter had me LMAO.  Great payback to both of them.  I love the way Edward handled that situation from start to finish.

I bow to your writing genius!!!!!  It was the best chapter yet.  I would just like to have seen Aro become enraged with James because he fucked Bella/Elizabeth in the ass.  I really didn't think Aro would have approved of what James & Dimitri did to her.  But, he is a crazy old man.

D.

That was too close a call.  It had me biting my nails and praying everyone would make it back to their proper room without getting caught.

D.