Reviews by Vtiedemann
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella gets sent to a school by her boyfriend to help her become the wife he wants. It isn't what Bella expects, at all.

BDSM, Dark story.

 

 

 

 


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward, Bella/Alice, Bella/Carlisle, Bella/Emmett, Bella/James, Bella/Jasper, Bella/Jasper/Alice, Bella/Rose, Carlisle/Esme, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC, Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, To Read
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 297603 Read Count: 1516812
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 21 May 2010
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1

I wasn't expecting Carlisle and Esme to be in this type of role, it's strange to me.  I'm not sure how to take it.  It's totally against all the characteristics of these two that I'm used to.  I'm quite intrigued though.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Bella - DAY 2 PART A

I don't think I'd be longing for ole James.  He'd be the last person I asked for.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Bella - DAY 2 PART B

Uh, I think I need to go find my husband....lol

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A

omg

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Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Bella - DAY 11

I hope she realizes very soon that if you're not thinking of someone for a few days then you're not missing them.....geeze, she's clueless. 

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Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 57: James DAY 20 PART C

Yes, yes, yes!  I LOVED THIS CHAPTER!  I love how little it took for him to break.  I am literraly jumping in my chair!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 58: Edward DAY 21

NO, DON'T TAKE HER TO YOUR HOUSE, OMG, she's got a gps in her!  OMG......(biting my nails)

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 69: Edward DAY 23

They're all leaving them to the wolves!  They have Victoria there and as soon as he finds out she's gone he's going to track her right to them at the cabin!  OMG, I can't take it!

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Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 71: Chapter 70: Bella DAY 23 and 24

OMG!!!!!

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Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24

Oh God, oh God, oh God!  I knew this was going to happen......I can't breathe.

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Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 72: Carlisle Day 23 & 24

Nice and informative w/ the Aro convo....however, everything was fine until the last line from Edward....I'm in tears now.

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Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 74: Chapter 73: Edward Day 23 and 24

Yes, yes, yes!!!!  OMg!

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Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 74: James

Omg, this is too much on my sanity!  Whew!

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Date: 01 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 74: James

Upate?????

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Date: 18 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 75 - Bella

I would love to read about Bella's "before."  I am so glad that it was Bella that was the one who hit him.  I just wish it would have been a little more descriptive of what she did to him.  I hope that we find out what Aro does to him as well.  And I hope that Heidi gets what's coming to her as well.   Oh, sweet, sweet Edward.  I'm so glad he's getting his HEA.

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Date: 01 May 2010 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77: Chapter 76

It was so nice to see that James is getting his.  I would have loved to have read more, but I know all good things come to those who are patient.  Love this story and can't wait for the "original TTS" to come out. 

 

The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight

 

 

TPW Avi 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1626650
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Epilogue

What a worldwind of emotions with this story!  I'm so happy for the HEA.  That was a great story and deserved the award for Most Unique Plot.  There were times when I wanted to stop reading becasue of the difficulty of the situation, I just didn't know if I could get through it, but I couldn't stop reading.  You pulled me in and literally made me feel Bella and Edward and you had me guessing and holding my breath.  What a wonderful story tell her you are.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I hope you'll check out my other stories as well, if you haven't already.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Awe.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

Ding Dong the Bastard is dead!!!

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Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 48

OH. MY. GOD!  I am so glad he didn't go through with hitting her!  I knew he was pretending, but geeze, that was intense!  However, I just don't think it's going to fly!  I would not put it past Carlisle not to have cameras set up in the basement.  Plus, how is a lock on a bedroom door going to keep Carlisle or Marcus or Demetri out while Edward's at work if they really wanted in?  I think I'm traumatized!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 47

I am shaking w/ anxiety!  I can hardly breathe!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 46

Oh shit!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

I'm sorry I haven't reviewed until now.  I know the story is completed.  I'm not even sure if you'll get this review.  But, I just have to say, this is disturbing.  What kind of monsters would do this to their own daughter, flesh and blood!  I'm just horrified!   However, your writing is exceptional and regardless of the content you have captured my attention (and disgust...not at you) and just am sitting here reading this and cannot stop because I can't just stop reading and now know that she's going to be all right.  I hope to God that Edward is not a horrible person and her hope ends up coming true.



Author's Response:

I do still receive the reviews for TPW.  I don't know how far into or if you've read the whole story yet. Thank you for giving it a shot.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

Yeah, it bothers me to, I can't stand the fact that Carlisle is as much of a sleeze and Charlie.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: A Mother's Love

Just finishing chapter 14.  I'm getting a little less stressed, she's w/ Edward now and they are just leaving the bookstore.  I was so happy when he let her go into the bookstore.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

So sweet, I'm so glad she spoke up.  Now, I know she's not entirely out of the woods w/ James, but I hope she speaks up and gets the courage to tell him what he did to her.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28

Oh, Thank God!!!!!  Now, just to save her from your own father.  I honestly don't know if I can read about Carlisle attacking her.  It was hard enough reading about Charlie, which just disgustged me, but I expected it from James.   But just having the love for candid Carlisle, it's very hard to read about him being a monster.  I'm just praying this story has some mercy for Bella and it doesn't happen.



Author's Response:

I promise I know what Bella (and readers) can and can't handle at this point in the story. That's all I can really say without giving anything away.  Trust me.  :)

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30

God, I hope he does not say a word to Carlisle about her dreams!!!!!

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Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 32

You know, it is nice to have an Esme POV, no one ever writes her POV in stories and she is truly one of my favorite characters



Author's Response:

You get this chapter and I'm working on an outtake for Esme.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 33

Yay!!! 

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 36

Sqealing and doing a happy dance!   Hmm, her dream, I always thought that monster may be watching them during their intimate time. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

 

One Bet. One Week. No Rules.

Bella bets Edward that after a week of some raw sexcapades he won’t want to stop. He bets her otherwise.

A slightly tongue in cheek smutathon and my first fan-fic.

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Twilight - Read, G8or Favor8s Read, To Read
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 137672 Read Count: 315923
[Report This] Published: 09 Feb 2010 Updated: 13 Sep 2010
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - You're the Storm

tsk, tsk, tsk....I have a feeling (hope) that when E goes out that he runs into B/J and B ends up dumping J and goes home with E.   We will see.   I'm probably wrong, as I always am.  It's nice to see Jasper the voice of reason.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 05 May 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20- Jigsaw

I'm glad there's more chapters left, I like this story and I just couldn't see how things would be over in two chapters.  I mean, they just got together, that would've sucked.  I bet school is going to be interesting.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 30 May 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21- Perfect Hands

I agree with Jasper!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 am Edward Cullen and I have a deadly secret: I am a hit man. My new target: Isabella Newton. With the help of my friends, we plan the crime of the century. What the hell am I going to do when she becomes more than my target and becomes my life?


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, To Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125711 Read Count: 41897
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 22 Dec 2010
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Shaken to the Core

Oh, thank God, I didn't miss an update.  LOL

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 01 May 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Torture

OMG, she killed him!!!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 12 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Killer Sentiments

Wow, that was so sad.  I take it that he's going to have to kill Jacob now.  Of course, I don't see the why Jacob is even there.  He gave him the money, even more money he would have made by the hit on Bella.  Mike took it into his own hands when he got into the car with a gun and was going to do who knows what.  Unless he's just pissed that Bella now knows, that's the only thing I can think about.  Ugh, it's times like this that I wish I wouldn't start a damn story until it's complete.  It's like being w/o your drug for weeks!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Deadly Silent

Now why would Charlie not want Bella to be with Edward?  I thought Edward was "supposed" to be an upstanding guy in the community?   I have a feeling that Jacob isn't done with Bella.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Faith

Lateness not a problem, I understand.  I just really feel like Edward's at a crossroad here.  He's got to make a decision and make it now, he can't just keep going on like this.  His emotions are involved and he's pissing people off and he's just going to get himself in a place he doesn't want to be.  I have a feeling that the shit's about to hit the fan and soon.

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Date: 17 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Consumed

NO FUCKING WAY did they go through all this that you would allow Jake to kill Bella?  NOOOOO!~  Okay, I'm calm...deep breaths....OMG!!!!

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Date: 01 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Wicked Angel

Yes, to all the above.  I am crying and i don't think it's very nice of you to make me do that!  I cannot believe you killed them!  I am in such shock right now!  Of course I'm in even bigger shock that jake was in love with Edward, that's crazy and I never guessed that! Oh, and Alice, are you kidding me, that took me for a loop!  But, given her character it doesn't surprise me.  I can't wait for the epi!  This has been one hell of a story!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Vampire, Edward Masen, craves someone's body more than her blood.  Can he ever see Bella as more than a pleasure giver?  Can Bella ever see Edward as anything other than a monster?

This story is intended for mature readers only (18 and over).   Subject matter could be disturbing to some readers.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, Fics to Read, My all time favorites, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49527 Read Count: 88106
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Sep 2011
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

You must be behind on posting to this website because I read these chapters on FF already.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 01 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

No, you don't need to hibernate ;)  It was great, he's slowly but surely coming around.  I think the journal helped. 

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 07 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

He changes her!!!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Taking place in 17th century Europe, Princess Isabella, only daughter of King Charles I of Spain, faces her fate as her arranged marriage to Prince Edward, future King of England, approaches.  The Prince is known for his indiscriminate cavorting with the ladies of his land, leading the Princess to fear that she will suffer the same fate as her mother and many other queens before and since, to be trapped in a loveless marriage to an unfaithful husband.  Will Princess Isabella ever find happiness while bound to the fate of her birth? AH/OC/Eventual Lemons

 

 

Warning: This will be an NC17 story for later chapters.



Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Finished, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, mamih's favorites, TBR
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 92977 Read Count: 374351
[Report This] Published: 20 Feb 2010 Updated: 20 Jun 2010
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 2: A Brief Escape from the Royal Mask

i don't mind the slips and haven't really noticed at all.  I have noticed that Tony may be and I think he is, Prince Edward.  What a surprise these two will have.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Silk and Brocade Shackles

I'm glad Angela didn't tell her what he said.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Princely Reformation

Whew, I'm so happy he's second guessing his prior ways.

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Date: 27 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Epilogue

I have to say, this has been the best story.  I absolutely loved it.  The epilogue has me in such sobbing tears, it's hard to type this review.  The love and devotion of these characters you brought forth in tenfolds.  I felt like I was at court throughout the story.  Thank you for such a wonderful escape!

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 996302
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Okay, this chapter answered my question, I think.  I was curious as to who was the Domm and who was the "pet"

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 04 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

I don't mind long chapters.  Pretty good for some one's first attempt at BDSM fic - I love these two characters.



Author's Response:

thank you so much - I try!! :)

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Geeze, if that's the way he's going to react every time she tells him something, hell I wouldn't say anything either.  Seems like Edward has some major anger issues.  He's needs a little  punishment and lesson in temper himself.  I can understand why he's angry, but geeze, get a grip, dude. 



Author's Response:

thanks for the comments and the review

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 09 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

I'm glad she's not going back to the apartment.  Of course that doesn't take away the feelng that I have that she's going to do something stupid and just decide to go by there for something w/o telling anyone and BAM, Jake's got her!  OMG, I'm having anxiety!  And btw, I have not been able to stop reading this story!  It's really good!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

James and Tanya are the same as Jim, hence him saying he has a score to seettle with the Cullens.  I knew it.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Okay, I know that there are rules and etiquette and all that rubish when it comes to D/S and play parties, etc.  But isn't it in the rules that Edward, as her Dom, is to respect her and be respectful of her at all times?  Because honestly, him allowing that sub to kneel at his feet (Bella's place) is, is of the utmost disrespect to her and I just hope that he realizes that and if not she gets a chance or has the balls to speak up and tell him.  He's bound by the rules as well and if he breaks them what happens to him?  HMMM?



Author's Response:

Yes he is, but did he break the rules...hmmm?  I mean, he may have broken our rules, us girls that are more Vanilla than alternative, but did he break her rules? Did he do anything to make her feel less than loved and special? Did he force her to do something that she was not willing to do?  He said he was going to push her, he asked her if she was okay, he asked her what her word was...did she freak out?  did she say no?  hmmm - it's not so clear now, is it?

I had to re write this chapter a couple of times,because I kept freaking out, but I HAD TO ASK MYSELF the question, what would Bella do in THIS story? In THIS relationship....

Thank you so much for your comments and your review - I think that you will enjoy Saturday's update :)

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You're right, now that I look at it that way.   She does need to realize the entire scope of the D/S world, which I don't think she does completely.  I'm sure he'll make sure she understands from this point forward.   But the girlfriend in me says, I hope she takes that collar off and lets him have it and the only thing I think he needs to realize that it's not okay to allow another submissive to sit at his feet.  I think that was tacky and disrespectful.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 15 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

You were right, I did love this chapter!   I feel so much better!  I knew that E was a gentleman on top of everything else!   This chapter had me almost forgetting about the two lingering douches around the corner! 



Author's Response:

almost forgetting about them - I wouldn't just yet xoxo

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 22 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Because he knows something's not right!  Intuition people!!  Pay attention to it!  There are two douchebags waiting in the woods or wherever the hell they are!  OMG, I have anxiety!  Anderson better be left on guard!

 

This chapter was awsome!  I LOVED the rope demonstration/play!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Oh wow!  That was brutal!  I was in tears from the minute Laurent called Carlisle!  I am so glad that's over! 

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 04 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 45

I can only imagine how hard it was to write this chapter.  Reading it was extremely emotional for me.  I can relate so much to it, the father/daughter realtionship or lack of during the years growing up.



Author's Response:

You know, I think there are a lot of us girls out there who relate to this relationship. It's really hard as a parent to see your child as an adult and one that makes adult choices and as the child, there is such an ache inside that it seems only a father can fill.

Thank your for your insight and comments.

xoxo

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Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

This chapter made me wish it was Christmas and I was a Cullen!  Great chapter!  I would have never known you struggled! 



Author's Response:

you and me both, sweetheart! thank you so much for the review

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

Wow, that was hot.  Was someone watching them?  I loved Jeff!  And I believe Rosalie's depiction of the Cullen men was spot on!  I would love to see the pics.



Author's Response:

thank you - not this time - I liked him too - yes it was! and they will be up in a couple of days!!

Whew - I think that I covered everything.

xoxo

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

I'm glad Edward owned up to his mistake and let her know that what she did by keeping Alice's secret was a good thing and not so bad as he made it out to be.  I was just floored at the reaction to her giving Alice time to tell Jasper what was Alice's story to tell not Bella's.  I thought the reaction was harsh and unnecessary.  So I'm happy with how Edward handled the apologies.  I feel better. 



Author's Response:

thank you so much for your honest comments and review.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Well, of course he does!  Heaven forbid he actually acknowledge what his son did to her and the reason he's dead in the first place....Bastard.   Poor Edward, I just wanted to reach through the computer and just stroke him....I mean hug him. ;)



Author's Response:

AND LADIES AND GENTLEMEN, THAT'S what she said!!!  OMG thank you for your review - I'll let you get back to stroking, um, hugging Edward now....this is for you with love from me xo

 

PEOPLE LIKE US – OUTTAKE # 6

OUTTAKE – CONVERSATION BETWEEN JASPER AND ALICE

“Guys, I’ve got to go – Jazz please give this some serious thought and Alice, you need to stop being so fucking stubborn. I love you, Squirt!”

Edward almost crushed her in a hug. He slapped Jasper on the shoulder as he ran out the door.

 

“So… you talk about the size of my schlong?”  Jasper said.

Alice looked up at him with mounting excitement, “Well, it’s quite impressive…” she said huskily.

Jasper smiled at her.  “Can we talk? I mean really talk; I’ve missed you Tink…”

Alice smiled through her tears. “I’ve missed you too Jazzy….”

Jasper looked uncomfortable for a moment and it bothered Alice.  She was used to Jasper Whitlock being decisive and in control.  Seeing him looking ill at ease was new.  There had been many disagreements in the Whitlock/Cullen home since Alice had moved in with Jasper two year before.

She had never lived alone, besides when she had gone to college and even then, she had attended Berkley, so that she was close to her family and Jasper.

Although over the years, they had learned to deal with Jasper’s travelling for work and Alice’s part time job as Edward’s PA which had taken her away from time to time, through everything, including Alice’s training as a submissive, their lines of communication had always been open and honest.

Alice had grown up in a house hold that was opinionated and not scared of voicing their points of view.  Esme and Carlisle had encouraged their children to have their own opinions and to share them.  They had also taught them to stick to their guns.

This was one of the many things that had attracted Jasper to Alice in the first place.  Although she was much younger than him when they met; he had always found Alice to be interesting to talk to and inevitably to argue with.  She was a spirited and enthusiastic young woman, with a warmth and energy that seemed to draw him in from the first moment.

Jasper on the other hand had grown up in a large family with two parents that had stuck together over the years because there was no other alternative for either one of them.  They were hardened by life, worn down by reality and for a reason that Jasper had never been able to fathom; they had decided to have three children of which Jasper was the youngest.  Eventually Jasper’s father had strayed and a few years later, when Jasper was about twelve, he had suddenly come back to the trailer park where they lived with three small children in tow!

He had told Jasper’s mother that they were his dead sister’s kids, but after awhile he had confessed that they were his.  Jasper felt sorry for the three youngest children and when he had begun to make money from modeling and small acting jobs, he had made a decision to see that they would have an opportunity to further their education, go to college and make a proper life for themselves.  Although none of the children were really close or affectionate with each other, Jasper had stuck to his word and the three younger children had gone on to college.

Jasper couldn’t believe that Ricky, the youngest of his stepsiblings had taken advantage of Jasper’s generosity the way that he had!  Jasper had never asked for any compensation or payment for the money that he had given to his siblings or parents over the years; the only stipulation he had for continuing to support his mother and father was that the house that he had purchased for them remain in his mother’s name.  Jasper was not close to his father and the distance had only grown when the man had abandoned his young family, leaving his wife to work three jobs to feed and clothe their three children.

Jasper had always thought that he would never find anyone to settle down with.  He didn’t ever want the life that his parents had; tired, sad, disillusioned and settling for something because there was no time or money for dreams of something or someone else.  Someone better.

So the first step that Jasper had taken at the age of sixteen was to have himself emancipated.  He had tried to live in Los Angeles and he had hated every moment of it but as he begun earning good money, he decided to take classes at the local community college.  The first one was on finances.  Jasper wanted to know how to look after his money and how to make it grow.

He trusted few people and although people liked his quiet charm and whit; Jasper had a way of standing to one side and observing people that he found made him a good judge of character.  Jasper had come to rely on that instinct over the years.

It was an instinct that he could no longer rely on.  He had never thought for a million years that his younger brother would ever turn out to be the low life, perverted bastard that he was!  Every time Jasper thought of what Ricky had done, how Richard had betrayed his own brother by lusting, perving, salivating over his Alice!  His Alice!  Jasper wanted to kill Rick with a cold fury that he had never felt before.

How he had touched her, fucking forced himself on her when Jasper had been careless enough to leave her alone with him… FUCK!

Alice gasped as Jasper jumped to his feet.  His face was a cold, furious mask.

“Jasper please!  If you want to talk to me, then you need to calm the fuck down!  I can’t reach you when you are like this!  If you are angry with me then just say so and let’s get it out there!  If you think that I did anything to encourage your brother…” Alice cringed away as Jasper was suddenly in front of her with his hand clasped over her lips.

Never – NEVER, EVER call that fucking piece of low down shit my brother!  I will kill him if I ever see him anywhere near you again!”  Jasper spat out as he held her.

Alice whimpered and she closed her eyes.  “Jazzy, you are scaring me…” 

This wild man wasn’t her Jasper…

Alice felt the tears running down her cheeks and over Jasper’s fingers.

Suddenly she was free.

Alice pushed a fist into her mouth to keep the sobs as quiet as she could.  Her whole body was trembling.

“Alice… sweet Jesus, I’m sorry… I didn’t mean to scare you… Ali…”  Jasper choked out as he sat crouched clear across the room from where Alice sat.

Alice could see the anguish clearly on Jasper’s face and she felt even worse than she had in the past few days.

This was all her fault!

“Come to me…”  Alice said, but Jasper just shook his head.

Alice slid off the sofa onto her knees and she crawled slowly across to where Jasper had slumped down against the wall.

Jasper could feel the intensity of Alice’s gaze as he watched her moving slowly towards him.

“Ali…” he said in a half pleading, half warning.

“No.  You’ve spoken and now it is my turn…” Alice said when she was inches away from his face.

Her eyes searched his intensely.  The remorse and sorrow that Alice saw gave her the courage to move closer until her lips met his.

Jasper’s head jerked backwards, but with nowhere to go, he hit the wall.

He cursed and rubbed his head.

Alice grinned at him, “Maybe that’ll knock some sense into your thick skull!”  She quipped as she arranged herself between his outstretched legs; her thighs straddled his open ones so that he could feel her heated core through her jeans.

Jasper shut his eyes tightly and moaned as he tried to adjust himself.  Alice giggled and winked at him.

“We can get to that later, but first let’s please resolve this ‘thing’ once and for all!”  She said with determination.

“Gladly, Darlin’.”

“Okay, I’m going first.  I need to tell you why I didn’t tell you about… what was happening in the first place, but you cannot freak out on me!  Do you promise?”

Jasper could see how anxious Alice was and once again he was filled with remorse at his earlier behavior.

“I promise.”

Alice took a deep breath, “I know that this might sound crazy to you, but when it happened the first time; I tried to just shrug it off.  I thought that perhaps I had imagined it or misread his signals in some way.  The next time it happened, your… well your father was in the room.  He, Rick grabbed my ass as I walked passed him.  I turned around as saw them looking at each other and Rick just winked at me and they burst out laughing… Jasper… you promised…” Alice broke off as she watched Jasper’s eyes become dark and wild again.

Jasper felt as if he was ready to explode!  That no good, low fucking, good for nothing… BASTARD!  I. will. Kill. Him.

Jasper felt Alice’s tiny hand stroking his cheek and he refocused on her anxious face.

He kissed her quickly, “I’m okay, Ali, I promise.  I won’t freak out on you again.”

Alice nodded slowly, “He apologized to me later – your father, I mean.  The next day he told me that he had too much to drink and that he had made Rick promise never to touch me again.  He begged me not to tell you and then he said that… some girls just have an ‘air’ about them…”

SON OF A BITCH!

Jasper opened his mouth to speak but Alice put her fingers over his lips.

She continued. “I know better than that, Jazz!  I know better!  I was raised to know better than that!  With all their bullshitting and nonsense, my brothers have never, ever treated any woman including me with anything than the utmost respect.  You have never treated me like a whore, but at that moment, I felt dirty.  And I felt like a two bit whore, who didn’t deserve anything better.  Rick kept touching me, stupid little insignificant ‘slip-ups’.  Every time he was around me, sometimes you were in the next room or you had your back to us… He would graze my breasts by pushing past me in a doorway, or he would rub himself against me if he were standing behind us…” Alice shuddered in revulsion and Jasper couldn’t take it any longer.

His arms wrapped Alice in a vice like grip. “Never, never, never…” He said over and over again against her neck as he pulled her closer.

“Jazz…”

“No – it’s my turn now… never, ever again, Mary Alice Cullen.  Promise me that you will never let anyone ever make you feel like that again.  Especially not me!  God, Ali, I love you so much!  Just the thought of another man touching you… Fuck!  It’s too much to even contemplate!  Do you know how I felt when I found out that Rick was… forcing himself on you?  When we forced Bella to tell us and we did force her – she didn’t have a choice really, I wanted to fucking kill someone there and then!  As you know, I sat up all night just thinking about what could have happened to you!  And about how I was going to take care of you this time!  I couldn’t help you last time, Darlin’.  I wasn’t able to stop that animal putting his hands on you… but I was going to make sure that Rick never ever touched you again.”

Alice brushed the tears of Jaspers cheeks.

“I love you so fucking much, Mary Alice Cullen-Whitlock.  You own me mind, body and soul.  If I lost you, my life would be so empty… please forgive me for hurting you and dragging this shit out.  Please, please don’t ever put me through this again, Tink, my heart can’t stand it.”  Jasper whispered as they held each other’s faces and gazed with longing into each other’s eyes.

“I love you, Cowboy; you are my everything… my lover, my best friend, my Dom, my love.  I am sorry too.  No more secrets.”

Their kiss was a relief.  For the first time in almost two weeks, their lips were soft and forgiving.  Lips touched, brushed, nibbled.  Tongues dueled and teased.  Eventually they couldn’t take it any longer and Jasper held Alice to him as he tipped her onto the floor and loomed over her, his knees pushing her thighs apart.

Alice panted into his mouth.  “Can I get my clothes back?”

Jasper smiled against her lips, “yeah, especially the underwear…”

Alice giggled, “can I get my car back?”

Jasper shook his head, “sorry, you will be driven around for a while…”

Alice groaned, “but I can see my Bestie?”

Jasper rocked back on his knees as he looked at the bright twinkle in Alice’s eyes. “Mary Alice…” He said with narrowed eyes.

Fuck! He is so sexy when he does that… now I need to change my panties! Damn Cowboy!

“Hmmm… take me upstairs Jazz… I’ve missed you…” Alice uttered the magic words.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

An hour later, Alice lay sprawled across Jasper’s bare chest.  Her eyes were closed but she was humming as Jasper played with her hair.

“Alice?”

“Yeah?”

“Supervised visits only…”  Jasper kissed her forehead.

“I know – but that’s only for now…” Alice smiled to herself.

She wondered what Kate, Bella and Rosalie were doing on Saturday after the therapy session?  She had heard that Gap was having a sale….

Everything was right with the world after all.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

I hope that you liked it!

Love

Michele

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

You know, I agree with Kate, get serious or stop.  To me Bella has seemed to just be playing.  She just wants to play..  I'm glad that she's seen the light and is getting serious because she's just hurtin gEdward by not taking it seriouis.  I can't wait to see how she does.  I can only imagine how hard it is to be a "newbie" and start off only d/s for a short while and then have to switch back and forth.   It has to be confusing, so I will give her that.  But Kat's right, she's  no newbie, she knows her rules and she knows she has to follow them or suffer the consequences.



Author's Response:

thank you so much for your valuable comments and your review - Kate is right and Bella is getting serious. At last.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

Awsome chapter!  Love,love, loved it!  I have to say I can totally relate to Esme, I would have reacted the saqme way with Riley!  But, hey, I am desparate to see what Dr. C has in his chest of treasures and what he did with them!

Summary: Past Featured Story

Teacher's Pet Banner

 

Bella eventually moved on with her life after Edward left and never returned. Seven years have passed and she is now a teacher. When she starts her newest teaching assignment destiny intervenes to reunite them. Now she is faced with new challenges and decisions. Canon pairings. (Warnings: Violence/Mild strong language/Adult situations)

 

NB: I will be posting the EPOV (Student Liaison) alongside this as much as possible. The full version of Teachers Pet is on fanfiction.net but that will be the watered down version - this one will be complete with outtakes in place.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Fantasy, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 116512 Read Count: 48850
[Report This] Published: 28 Feb 2010 Updated: 22 Nov 2011
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Late for Class

What are the rumors of Dr. Cullen?

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Leave me alone

Now where is all the other students while she's having these conversations in the parking lot with her "students"  and they're getting into her car.  I guess she covered that base when she let them know she knew them.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Difficult Conversations

Man, that's got to suck!  To be without him for so long and then have the chance to have him again and then it be forbidden.  It just rips my heart out.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Broken

NO!!!  Charlie can't die!  Oh no, how sad!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Trouble

Oh no!  I knew as soon as she threw them in the backseat that it wasn't going to be good.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Consequences

OMG.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Audi

It just got interesting!  Nah, not really....it's been interesting.  I'm really enjoying this story.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Investigations

Oh, wow....I'm speechless.  How sad.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Matrimony isn't a dirty word

Nice chapter.  The consumation was sweet.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 11 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Timeslides

Very cool talent, indeed.  I love the say you changed it. 

Summary:

This is the story of young Domme Isabella who is looking for a new sub. Her old master Carlisle was the one to introduce her to the BDSM-community of Chicago and he is also helping her find a new sub to train.

On her way to meeting her new sub, she thinks back on her last ten years in the BDSM community and relieves some very hot moments from her life both as a sub and Domme.

At the same time we meet Edward, strong and confident boss of his own firm until the day he discovers a hidden submissive side of himself. We follow him on his journey and maybe one day Domme Isabella and submissive Edward will meet?

Strong content and lots of lemons, be warned!

This is not a BDSM-how-to, so please just read it as the smutty fanfic it is ment to be, thanks! Always wear a condom and take good care of yourself, Edward would!

 

Beta'ed by the lovely MarchHare5


Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Dominance and submission
Series: Wonderful World of Dommella, Bdsm stories only, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 59156 Read Count: 40849
[Report This] Published: 01 Apr 2010 Updated: 01 Sep 2010
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 May 2010 Title: Chapter 14: On the floor

I don't think the "BJ-thing" was too much.  It showed that Edward wasn't bi but knew he had to do something to take his winnings.  Of course, Tanya stopping  him and making him cum on dude's face is typical of her bitchyness.  I'm just completely surprised she didn't humiliate Edward instead.  I'm glad she didn't.

I can see Tanya's use of lower case ltrs in the names being her way of showing her thougth of them being lower than her, it make sense.

As I told you before, I'm an Edward fan, so the thought of what Tanya has in store for him at the club has realy got me sick to my stomach.  I'm having a hard time thinking about it and so I won't....lol  I just don't know why she can't have some class and just end it; oh, wait, because she has no class, that's why!  Sorry, I forgot who I was talking about.

And last, but not least, I love this story.  I love how you've created and developed your characters and it's not all about Edward and Bella.  I love hearing about Carlisle's POV, even though I hate her, Tanya's POV was useful as well.  I love this story and am going to make sure and review so that you will keep on writing.  If not just for me, but for yourself as well, you're very talented and I thank you for taking the time to bring this story to life for me.

 

 

 

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 18 May 2010 Title: Chapter 15: The job and harsh introductions at the club

OMG, I'm about in tears!  I was literally yelling at Bella to stop it.  I was  holding my breath the entire time.  What a chapter.  As I feel that you are probably right in saying "maybe it was too much" but you are right, Edward would not have used his safeword, she had to go to extremes.  Of course, I still don't know why she didn't just tell Edward she was done with the relationship and let him go, I know there wouldn't be much of story if she did, and it would rob her of a chance of humiliating him.  I hate her.  I can't wait to hear the next part of the scene. Please continue.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 May 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Crush

I'm so glad that's over for him.  It broke my heart to have him go through that.  I loved reading how it was Bella who gave him the aftercare.  It was so sweet and a nice beginning to their relationship, I think.  I'd love to hear what transpired between Carlisle and Satin's wife!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Reasons

Welcome back!  I was very pleased to get a Carlisle POV.  I hope we can move on from Tanya's crazy ass.  I hate her and cannot wait to see how Edward reacts to Bella.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 14 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Awakening

I'm glad you'r eback, I've truly missed this story.   You have been in my prayers.

 

I was so happy that she woke up and stopped him!  If he would have gotten out that door there's no telling when she would see him again.  And for him to trust her to take care of him after what happend to him, that speaks volumes.  I'm excited to see what becomes of these two.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Under the canopy

I like that she's making him comfortable and just building a slow burn, she knows what she's doing.  Great chapter!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Initiation

great chapter!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Like a virgin

So good to receive an update on this story.  I love it.  I'm glad it's getting past the hurt and anxiety for Edward and hope all goes well for him.  I have a feeling that Bella will make damn sure it does.  Looking forward to the next chapter. :-)

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella is a student at UW who lives a routine, struggled life, but that changes when she meets Edward Cullen,CEO of his Company. How exactly do they meet? What happens when their lifes collide? Does Bella uncover Edwards darkest secrets or does Edward learn Bellas hidden truths first. D/S Material

 Thanks to bjelaja for taking the time to make this awesome banner! (:

 


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My All-Time Favorites
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 38146 Read Count: 76165
[Report This] Published: 25 Apr 2010 Updated: 11 May 2014
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

LOL, I did forget.  I forgot it's Friday.  How awkward!

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I was just wondering if I had missed something.  We went from eating a burger to Edward waking up and her gone.  It said a little about her finding "that" room, but when did that happen?  Will that be explained?  How did she come across his playroom?  I feel like I missed something.  I'm also at a loss as to why in the world she would be so hateful and disrespectful to Charlie. 

 

And I must be coming in late, why would you not deserve our comments?  

 

Denali Clan????  What am I missing?  I didn't read anything about a Denali Clan.

I guess you can tell by now I'm a little lost :)



Author's Response:

When I insert an -X- throughou the chapter, it means that I skipped ahead. For example, after Bella and Edward left the diner there is an -x-, it just means that I don't want to write how they went back to Edwards, said goodnight, and went their seperate ways. Nothing interesting happens, so its best off if I just don't write it, therefore -X-. Confusing I know, but I hope that helps? How and why she stumbled across his PR will be explained throughout the next couple of chapters. A lot of people are wondering about that! Don't fear(:

The next chapter will explain things about Charlie and Bella's strain relationship! I am excited to be writing that!

And I don't derserve your comments because it has been more than a while since I last updated! But thank you for leaving one! (:

The Denali Clan, hmm. What I meant by that was how do you guys feel about the actors Summit casted for the Denali Clan?

And don't worry about being lost! I am here to answer any questions you might have! I hope I helped! (:

 

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thanks, that helps a lot.  I'm looking forward for all to be revealed.

I saw that they cast Irina's part, but did not see who they cast for Kate or Tanya.  I'm okay with who they cast for Irina, although I can't remember her name.....lol

I love, love, love who they cast for Renesmee, I think she is a perfect mix between E&B, such a beautiful little girl.

 

 



Author's Response:

Glad I could help!

MyAnna Buring is playing Tanya. Who I can not picture as.

Casey LaBow is playing kate  and Mia Maestro portrays Carmen.

I think they did an awesome job at casting Mackenzie Foy as Renesmee as well. It freaks me just how much she looks like Kristen and Rob! :)

 

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Oh, wow, was it Edward?  Why doesn't she just stell him to leave her alone taht she's not into all that kinky shit?  Why act like a child?  I don't get it.  Of course,  stalker Edward would be a little creepy as well.

Summary:

 

Edroar the Angry Lion frightens all the girls and boys at Cullen Publishing with his loud roar. Will his new massage therapist Bella Swan run away like all the rest, or can she tame this savage beast?  AH/AU   OOC


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 134649 Read Count: 25383
[Report This] Published: 09 Jun 2010 Updated: 06 May 2016
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 13 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Plan A

I think you should continue on with it.  I like it.  You have my attention and am curious as to where you will go with it.  I think it has potential.  And he is rude!  I hope Emmett is a little nicer to her.



Author's Response:

Your review really made my day. I wasn't kidding when I said Edroar is a tyrant. I revised the 1st chapter 32 times!  I'm so glad you liked it. I can't wait to write this story. I'm about halfway through chapter 2 now. Thanks for the support. It really means so much. :-)

Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4250]
Summary: Past Featured Story

ditr                   

Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1256586
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

Merry Christmas!  I had to skip past the pinky mouse party, the descriptive part anyway....eeeewwweee!



Author's Response:

I agree... eeeewwwweeee....lol ..it was worse when I had to listen to the story from my son-in-law.... thanks for reading. I have your teaser ..lml.....

“Hey” my thoughts had taken over my attention so much that Edward’s voice startled me causing me to flinch.

 

“I’m sorry babe…” he chuckled “…I didn’t mean to scare you” My eyes moved towards his they were warm and bright making me smile.

 

“It’s ok. Where have you been?” Edward sighed

 

“Ahhh…well while some of us get to lay around in the tub others leave the dog out, hang up their clothes and talk to irate fathers from Forks” the auditable gasp left my throat and I couldn’t mask the horror in my voice.

 

“You talked to Charlie?”

 

“Hmm...Yes I did” Edward sat down on the floor with his back against the wall of the tub pulling the cork out of a bottle of wine that I didn’t see he had.

 

“What did he want?”

 

As I sat up straight turning with my arm lying on the wall by his head, Edward handed me a glass before he started talking. “He was just concerned about you Bella and he wanted to make sure that after what happened you were safe.”

 

“And?” I knew there had to be more

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 26 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

What a delima, I would say tell him if it weren't his sister, but you got to keep her dignity....take one for the team Bella.  Alice would be humiliated if her brother found out.



Author's Response:

Well I can tell you this, she is not going to lie to him...but...well you will see on thursday...i think ,,,lol

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Wow, I felt my body just clinching with her!  LOL



Author's Response:

you should try writing it ,,,OMG ,, I was sweating ..lol ....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, i have a teaser for you...lml

When I got back to Bella she was half awake thanks to Seth’s persistence, I sat on the edge of the couch looking down at her.

 

“Hey” my fingers ran along the line of her jaw.

 

“Hi. Do I smell food” I smiled at her

 

“You do. Are you hungry?”

 

“Starving” she admitted while she sat up “It’s weird because I ate lunch”

 

“Yeah well that was four hours ago and your body worked really hard on the way home” her lip went between her teeth while her face flushed pink. I chuckled at her response “What are you thinking?”

 

“I’m thinking about my reward. I get a reward.” Bella’s whole face lit up and her eyes sparkled. 

 

“That you do, what would you like?” I asked tucking a lock of hair behind her ear

 

“You” I looked into her eyes “You have me love.”

 

“Nooo…I want you” Bella flung herself at me straddling my lap with a force so hard she knocked me backwards on the couch.

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

First, I agree, I wish I had an Edward to sing to me and do all those naughty things to me as well....Hell, he could really do anything he wanted..lol

I think the conversation between Jake and Edward was appropriate.  He's her friend and for so long has been her safeguard.  I think his concerns are valid and I like the way Edward handled it.

The dance/orgasm scene was hot and I commend Edward fro allowing her release, that was quite nice of him.

As for the caning scene, well, I'm with Bella....hard limit!  I was waiting for her to say RED!!!!!  I can't even believe that Edward would even think of subjecting her to that after what was done to her by James.

And I cannot believe that the thought of James coming back and being the danger hasn't even crossed any of their minds at all.  I don't know why he would think it would be Caius.

 

 



Author's Response:

Have you seen Bella's limits on my extra's ... look them over and then maybe you can see why Edward didn't see a problem with having her watch ...Well things are going to heat up a little soon... thanks for the comments ..lml

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah, you're right.  After re-reading her limits, it makes sense.  



Author's Response:

Ahhh...(((smiles smuggly singing )))  I told you so...I told you so....lol ...you really have to have more faith if not in me, then in Edward ...thanks for letting me know,,,lml

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Hence the reason Rose is triggered by cigarrette smell.

 

Damn skippy!  Need new ones and to go find my hubby!



Author's Response:

I hope you found him ..lol

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

So many little things coming into play.  I'm very proud of Bella the way she handled the situation with Tanya. 

It must be very hard for her to sit there and have all these feelings and not know what to do about them and try to be helpful t the other women at the same time.  I can'teven imagine.  I can imagine, however, the abuse and the affects and scars it leaves onyour children as my father abused my mother and the scars run so deep 30 years later.  Your children do as they see.  We were very lucky that my brother didn't end up abusing the women in his life, but just doesn't deal with things at all, he avoids and runs and just is emotionally not there.  It's sad.  The best thing women can do is get out for their children's sake.

 

 



Author's Response:

Domestic Violence is far reaching ...and sadly the damage it does to the children is sometimes worse then what it does to the wife ..it;s sad and makes me angry ...lml

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

I thought that she had already told him the story of what happened to her that night.  I got the impression from this chapter that this was the first time telling him.



Author's Response:

No .. she never tpld him ,,,Chapter 22 is where she remembers that day ,,,but she was alone in the shower and keeps it all to herself ...

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Yeah, until the big one hits.



Author's Response:

ohhhh... i hope that they are strong enough for that  one....

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 02 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

I am truly lost.  I thought surely it was James, unless James has a woman ("Victoria") if this were cannon...I don't know.  It is truly a mystory.  As for Heather and Officer Hawk, I have no clue!  You're too good!



Author's Response:

lol...I'm sorry you are so confussed ...lol....Thanks for reading, I have a teaser for you....lml

I should have expected that she would have a nightmare, the trauma of having our home invaded was enough to unnerve me, I can only guess what memories it stirred in her. Removing my shirt that was full of tears and dirty from her nose I laid back down with her head on my chest. “We’ll change the locks tomorrow and figure out who it was, that will make you feel safer. It was just a dream Bella, I swear I would die before I let anyone hurt you.”  

 

“Don’t say that!”

 

I wasn’t sure what she was talking about when she abruptly shot her head up to look at me. “I couldn’t stand it if something happened to you. I couldn’t take it”

 

Even in the darkness of the room I could see the fierceness in Bella’s eyes as the tears fell down her face. “Nothing is going to happen to me, and nothing is going to happen to you. Now stop with the tears and lets go back to sleep”

 

Cupping her face my thumb wiped away the tears as she nuzzled her cheek against my palm before turning her head to placing a soft kiss in the center of my hand. “Do you think I’m crazy?”

 

“No…” why the hell would I think that?  

 

“…I think it was a stressful night and I think you have a lot on your mind and have dealt with more in your life then any one person should have to deal with. I told you before baby, I think you are the strongest person I know; a lesser person would have called it quits a long time ago. Now let’s go back to sleep, I have a promise to keep to a dog”

Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 22 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

 I dont' think Irena was insinsere.  I believe she meant what she said.  I am curious as to the whole Michael situation and whether or not he would be working for Cias, but it just makes no sense.  I think it was Heather and I think that she is with James and that EJ is Evan James, Jr. and that somehow James has Michael in his pocket.  Just a guess. 



Author's Response:

OHHHHH....part of your theories are right...a small part but an important part ....

Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave a comment...I have a teaser for you...lml

Edward was pulling into the parking lot that was across the street from the main entrance. He didn’t say anything else until he held my door open for me taking my hand and pulling me closer to him. “I am sorry about my behavior”

 

I smiled at him “You girl forgives you”

 

His face moved closer to mine as he spoke “My girl is more tolerant then I deserve”

 

“Never” as I said the word his lips brushed against mine, it was a sweet chaste kiss. When he pulled back his eyes held a tenderness in them as he palmed the side of my face. 

 

“Remember your task and speak to no one other then family members”

 

“Yes Sir”

 

“Come let’s get this over with so we can get home” I nodded in agreement following behind him with my eyes down. As we approached the entrance Edward spoke with the guy at the door.

 

“Tyler, how is the night going?”

 

“Edward, actually it’s been busy, it’s game night”

 

Edward groaned “damn I forget about that”

 

Tyler chuckled as we moved into the club telling us to have fun, I wasn’t sure what game night was but it appeared I was about to find out.

Diamond Extra's by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 265]
Summary:

These are extra's from my story. It just provides more information and will also provide a place for other POV's


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 99277 Read Count: 40422
[Report This] Published: 05 Aug 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2012
Reviewer: Vtiedemann Signed
Date: 23 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 6: photos

Do you have a picture of Seth or an idea of what Seth would look like?