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PTB SmutU 2012 by CeeCee Star Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstar [Reviews - 16]
Summary:

A collection of all my assignments for the Summer Semester at Project Team BETA's Smut University 2012.

 

Stories will not be pre-BETA'd.  This is a learning project, people.  :P

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Project Team Beta's Smut University 2012
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4680 Read Count: 1941
[Report This] Published: 03 Jun 2012 Updated: 05 Jul 2012
Reviewer: EdwardsMate4ever Signed
Date: 27 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 2: The Submarine

Yay for hot tub sex, and yay for the pairing! I love seeing the wolves get some love :) And Paul always is portrayed as a bad guy, so it's nice to see him in a different light here. I do wish you had done Paul/Rachel, because there are so few Rachel stories out there, but Bella was good too.

I must say that Paul's sudden entry was surprising. I seemed like Bella was still unsure, and with little foreplay, my mind went "ouch!"

As for the position, not sure I would try it myself (I'm a little sensitive about drowning), but you described it well and not too mechanically :)

I really like the ending - it was sweet. Would you go on a date with me? After we had this phenomenal sex? She's be a fool to say no!



Author's Response:

A Rachel/Paul...oh hell no!  That pairing, to me, was all wrong.  I think Bella is much more suited for Paul than Jake's sister ever will be  But I'm so happy you liked the pairing!

 

And I've jumped into sex with no foreplay before...it didn't hurt.  Sometimes when I think of these things I think of some of my *cough* own experiences - especially the feeling parts.  But yeah...I can see what you're saying but for me...unless I'm completely turned off, jumping into it doesn't get me all ouchy.  Plus I figured the water helps add to the wetness.  :P

I'm scared of drowning myself too and when I told my husband of this position his eyes nearly bugged out of his head in I think...interest.  Freaky little bastard.  LOL.  And I'm happy you liked the ending.  I needed a nice cherry!  :)

Reviewer: EdwardsMate4ever Signed
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Consequence

First, I'd like the address the use of your own experience in this story. I think that a lot of us probably can relate to your experience in school/communicating with people. I think that's why we write - it is our best way to express ourselves. Just wanted you to know that you aren't alone in that feeling.

The angst/guilt was perfect. I think this line really summed it up for me: "After all the chances Jacob had and he picks now when I’ve begun to move on and start a life that he gave me no choice but to make.  This was dirty and I was absolutely dirty for allowing this to happen."

When you said she saw "victory" in his eyes instead of love, my heart broke for her. What an asshole.

Great job on this lesson. I really felt it. I can see why you hated the lemon...it wasn't sexy/romantic, but it wasn't meant to be, I think.



Author's Response:

Thank you.  And yes...I have a very difficult time communicating in real life.  My brain makes sense, but to get it out in the open...people are like "what the heck?"  While I read the TwiSaga, I imagined this to be Bella's thoughts too.  She's a quiet and to-her-self kind of girl, so I think using my experiences were almost mirroring hers so it worked.

Thank you on the line choice.  Do you know how helpful writing this out was for me?  I've held this inside me for god knows how long and releasing it was just...freeing.  The situation really angered me when my ex choose that moment to finally give in.  I mean HELLO!  *shakes head*  Men.

And thank you very much.  I'm glad you liked it.  :)

Summary:

Various pairings, each one-shot written is an assignment for Smut University 2012.

 


Categories: Erotica
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica, Slash, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Risqué
Series: Project Team Beta's Smut University 2012
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1312 Read Count: 884
[Report This] Published: 04 Jul 2012 Updated: 25 Jul 2012
Reviewer: EdwardsMate4ever Signed
Date: 05 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1-Lesson 2

I love when an author can convey their message with only a few words. It's an impressive and difficult feat, and I think you did a great job here.

I think this line really encompassed the whole crux of the story: "She withers inside aware that he cannot or will not be who she asked him to be."

Great job with the lesson, and with the extra credit!



Author's Response:

I am overwhelmed with the positive comments I am getting on this little piece. Thanks so much for reviewing.