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FWAR One-Shot Contest group announces our new theme...


 


 



 


(Graphics by Eva)


 


Whispers . . . anonymous bits and pieces of life shared from cyberspace.  Uplifting. Angry. Pleading. Sexy. Pathetic. Sad. Disturbing. Encouraging. Scary. Truth. Lies. Secrets. Confessions.    Some from close by, others half a world away.



Your story should feature Whisper* in some way. Is one of your characters obsessed with the app?  Does a misunderstanding arise because someone is sure they know who's posting those cryptic nearby messages?  Confession of a crime or a declaration of intent?

A pool of whispers will be provided.  Feel free to use one for inspiration or find/create your own.  If you use a your own Whisper, please provide us with the image behind your story.

Whisper It.

*Whisper is an anonymous social network for posting short messages with an image in
the background.  Download the mobile app or access online here.


 


For ALL contest entry information/rules/how to submit entries and what all you need to include, please read here.


 


**Remember this is an anonymous entry contest**


 


ACCEPTING ENTRIES:  October 26, through December 4, 2015.


VOTING:  December 7 through December 11, 2015.


WINNER ANNOUNCEMENT:  December 13, 2015.


 



 


 





 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


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Reviews by KeyeCullen
Summary:

Bella is the local bad girl.  Edward is the new kid.  What happens when they meet while she is serving out her latest punishment at church?  Rated NC-17 for lemon and language.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5466 Read Count: 1452
[Report This] Published: 21 Jan 2010 Updated: 21 Jan 2010
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Sinner and the Saint One Shot

That was a delish little one shot!  What a way to serve your "punishment"!!!  LOL!!

Keye

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella gets sent to a school by her boyfriend to help her become the wife he wants. It isn't what Bella expects, at all.

BDSM, Dark story.

 

 

 

 


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward, Bella/Alice, Bella/Carlisle, Bella/Emmett, Bella/James, Bella/Jasper, Bella/Jasper/Alice, Bella/Rose, Carlisle/Esme, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC, Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, To Read
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 297603 Read Count: 1478327
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 21 May 2010
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 02 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23

Well this story has been one of the most interesting ones I have read.  I love the characters.  Rosalie is really something else.  This is a role just made for her!  LOL!! But the other characters have been developed equally as well.  Curious concept for a school.  But, why the heck not?

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 02 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 69: Edward DAY 23

I first heard about this story from a reader's review at FFFW.  Of course it still had this story as listed on FFN.  Well, with all that crap going on over there, naturally I saw the story was gone.  So, I looked it up and found the blog and read the first 65 chapters there.  From there I found a link to the TWCS forum, pm'd you guys and finally got here.  I am so happy that I tracked ya'll down!!!

Now if that doesn't show you that I am interested in your story, I don't know what will!  LOL!!



Author's Response:

That is so much fun.. Thanks so much for following us all over the WORLD... I hope you like the site, we have some wonderful stories on here.. So welcome..

 

Thanks again for reading

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 02 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 71: Chapter 70: Bella DAY 23 and 24

Holy Crap!!  How glad am I that I can cruise on over to the next chapter and not have to wait for an update??!!!  Excuse me....................I am going, no running to the next chapter................

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 02 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24

 "I never did worry about the little things"  Point of No Return

Summary: Past Featured Story

Lips of An Angel Banner

Edward and Bella were in love, but graduation from college and their new careers split them apart. It's been five years since their break up. They have each moved on with other people. Will a tragedy bring these soul mates back together? My entry for the Lyrical Melodrama Story Contest.  Inspired by Lips of an Angel by Hinder.

Rated M for mature themes and attempted sexual and physical abuse.

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Lips of an Angel Book Cover


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 16577 Read Count: 6463
[Report This] Published: 24 Jan 2010 Updated: 24 Jan 2010
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - EPOV

I just loved this story! 

 

Keye

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3983]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 981440
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 14 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 73

Go Bella...way to take care of your man:

Bella glared back at him undaunted, "What the fuck?  I will tell you ‘what the fuck', you are exhausted, your chest is hurting you, you have not eaten properly in days, and you need to rest.  That is ‘what the fuck'.  So finish eating, get upstairs, and get some sleep!  Is that clear?"  Her arms were folded over her chest as she silently dared him to defy her.

Bella "broke" her kitty?  *dies laughing* That whole situation is just so darn funny!!

Love Jasper:

"Listen!  You are both behaving like - well like children, and prudish children at that!  Your parents have been nothing but supportive of your lifestyle choices!  They have never interfered or intervened in either of your lives and I think that it is about time that you both show them the same fucking courtesy."  He looked over to where his daughter laid nursing at her mother's covered breast, "Sorry Sweetheart, Daddy didn't mean to curse in front of you."  

And Emmett knew all along...well, well, well!  *giggle*

Loved this chapter.  So much so that I couldn't fit it all in this review.  Suffice it to say that I cannot wait to read more!!!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 76

All this "forgetting" is totally cracking me up!!!

The one thing that I am curious about is their BDSM relationship in front of the children regardless how old they are.

Like these things here:

"Eat Isabella," Edward's smooth voice was quietly commanding.

"Eyes up!"  Edward hissed.  He could feel his blood pressure rising.

He cleared his throat and sat back as he gave Bella the signal to eat and to lower her eyes again.

Yes, I realize that these are all little things and this is just a story, it is just something that I was curious about.  Perhaps these things should not be done in front of the kiddos?  IDK....

Wow!  Edward was p-i-s-s-e-d about the whole exercising thing, wasn't he?  Whew!!  In his defense, he is right...especially if she is still underweight.  Plus, she did give her self over, completely, for the time period they both agreed upon and she did not hold up to her part of the bargin.

Oh but I think she had every right to be mad at Edward for making her talk to Carlisle about such an embarrassing situation.  But she had to talk to somebody, right?

Hmmm...what is up with Alice:

Alice mumbled something that sounded like, "As if you would know!"  But Bella wasn't sure.

Alice's conversation with Rose is really something!  She should have ben speaking directly to Bella about it instead of talking behind her back.

That was some showdown between Alice and Bella!  Whew!  Glad that they got that all worked out!!!

Ewwwww.....Belllaaaaaa cussed!!!:

What the hell little brother?"

She's in trouble!!!

*bubble bursts*  I guess Edward didn't catch that.  I thought he was there.

I completely LMAO when I read this:

I know that you are almost falling off your chairs because it is so damn short and you are looking under the laptops and desks, thinking, "Where the fuck is the rest of it??????"

 You seriously crack my ass up!! 

Can't wait to read what happens next!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Oh Keye, I can always count on you to lift my spirits and ask the hard questions.  Frankly, when it come to the kids, I'm not sure how they are going to proceed.  I don't think that I would want my husband to 'order' me around in front of my kids, because maybe that goes to the respect thing.  Perhaps in future, Edward would just give her instructions in private and then if she 'trangress' them, he would call her out about it when they are alone.  I will do some research and see what I can find out, okay?

And yeah, to steal a line from SM "I'm glad that I amuse you!"  :)

Hugs,

Michele

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

The story just keeps getting better and better!

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Panties combusted.  Off to take a hideously cold shower!  LOL!!!!

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

This is your first story????? Really???? I would not have thought so.  The story is really good and I am enjoying it immensley!  Personally, I think it is written well, has great character development and it had me hooked pretty much from the first chapter.  I read this into the wee morning hours yesterday, til I could not read anymore.  And I have been so engrossed in reading that I have just blazed through the chapters without reviewing.  I blame you totally for that.............you just write so well that I have to see what happens next!!! LOL!!!

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 17 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Yeah well this was a good read the second time around.  I read and reviewed at the other site but thought I would read again.  LOL!

Keye



Author's Response:

thank you :)

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Happy Belated Birthday to your Beta!  Thanks for editing on your special day!  And Michelle, I love, love, love this chapter!

It is nice to read that a man can apologize for making an error in judgement like Edward did after he had his talk with Garrett.  He put Bella in a situation without really telling her what to expect and then punished her when she reacted.  Sub or no sub her reaction was to be expected.  Anyway, I am glad that Garrett set Edward straight and that Edward apologized to Bella.

I laughed, out loud, when Bella mentioned her circus story.  Too funny.  And when Garrett told his story about dropping Kate, well that was funny too.

Edward feels uneasy, huh?  Hmmm.....I have learned that you need to trust your instincts when they are trying to tell you something.  My guess is that James and Jake are going to enter the picture some how because we have not heard from them.  And Jake seems to have a lot of rage and James pushing him is not helping that.  I think that the two of them make a very dangerous duo.

So, I cannot wait to see what you have up your little sleeve!!

Keye

 

 



Author's Response:

thank you for the kind words and comments.

I had to laugh at your last comment - it reminds me of that joke that we tell when we are about 5?

"What do you have up your sleeve-ie  ...  your arm-ie....(I know that I am lame, but come on, it made you laugh right??

xoxo

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Yeah girl, it made me laugh!!!!!!

 

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 12 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

I loved this chapter.  Knew that Rose was pregnant.  Telling the whole family together was a nice touch.

Have to say that I really enjoyed the whole conversation that Carlisle had with the boys about their lifestyles!  Shocked the crap out of them, didn't he?  Me too.  I had not expected that!  Loved it.

Naturally I cannot wait for the next chapter!!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

Yet another awesome chapter!  I am glad that Edward gets all over Bella's ass about her being so negative about herself!  It is just so counter-productive. 

I cannot wait to see what Edward has to say about his Christmas present from Bella.  Oh the hawt lemons that will inspire!  *giggle*


Rose cracked me up when she got onto the boys when they came into the house all muddy and wet from their romp outdoors!  She would probably make an excellent Dom herself, you know what I mean??

Bella trying to deceive Edward at breakfast?  Priceless!  Her trying to get the glop of slop that she put in the bowl?  Too funny!!!  Edward.........nothing gets by him, does it? 

Great chapter!  I cannot wait for the next update!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thanks Keye - read the outtake in the meantime - till Saturday

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: PEOPLE LIKE US

I am so sorry to hear about your sister's little one!  That is so sad!  Bless their hearts!

 

Loved when Edward recovered here with Charlie:  Edward cleared his throat, "What I meant to say was, Chief Swan, Bella means a lot to my family.  They love her.  I love her and yes, she is a part of our family and we knew that spending Christmas with you is really important to her, and so, it's important to us as well." Edward said quietly and firmly.

 

Yeah, he is just that good, isn't he?  LOL!!

Great chapter and I am looking forward to the next update.  BTW, I did check out Diamond in the Rough.  It is good.  Thanks for recommending.

 

Keye

 

 



Author's Response:

thanks for the review and I will pass your kind words onto Fiorella.  

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 02 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 45

Oh my goodnes what a fabulous chapter!  Hard to read but excellently written.  And you simply could not brush over Bella and Charlie's relationship.  Father/daughter relationships are hard at best.  You are right that parents do not know how much they shape the lives and choices by their actions.  Believe me, I am trying to remember that everyday as I raise my own son!!

The scene with Bella and Charlie was awful and wonderful all at the same time.  Awful all the pain that they had to go through but, in the end, it will only lead them to healing and onward to, hopefully, the relationship that they should have had all along. 

I want to be adopted by the Cullens!!!!  *giggle*.  What a wild ride that would be.  I loved it when Carlise threatened Edward with kicking his butt if he did not let Charlie and Bella have their time.  And, hmmmmmmmm, Charlie was so not fazed by Bella's BDSM admission and he knew of "places" in town................makes me wonder if he is into as well????  You know, since Bella and Charlie are soooo much alike and all???

Oh and that little bit between Charlie and Alice at the dinner table?  Where he made her admit her behavior?  That was simply priceless!!!

Lots of good stuff in this chapter!  LOTS!!!  I can hardly wait til you update again!

Keye

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your comments, now as for Charlie, omg, could you even imagine him in leather??? That is just too much! No, my little perv, he is not into the lifestyle, but he is a cop and he has to know about the clubs in the surrounding areas. (hmm, do you think him and Sue and a pair of handcuffs....???  NO, NO, that's just all sorts of wrong!!!).

I think you would fit right in with this crazy, kinky family...

:)

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

Oh happy day!!  Loved it when I turned on the computer and saw that there was an update!!!  Better than coffee in the morning!!! LOL!!

Great chapter.  What a perfect Christmas!  You described it all so perfectly and you really felt that you were right there in the middle of it.  I am so glad that Charlie and Bella are working through their issues.  Father and Daughter relationships are hard and if they do not go well, it affects the girls decisions with their own relationships with guys.  I just love how you write Charlie too.  It is so funny to see him stutter and get all uncomfortable when talking about serious things.  But that he keeps plugging along anyway.

Christmas traditions are really fun.  Love the ones that you gave the Cullens.  You are making me look forward to Christmas this year!

Can't wait for the next update.  You are doing such a great job with this story!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thanks so much

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

So, enjoyed reading Esme's and Charlie's conversation about the kids.  And then when Charlie left and spoke to Edward and Bella?  Priceless.  I am sure that Charlie and Bella did look like they were in pain.

Edward's way of getting Bella to relax prior to the interview?  Yummy!  What a stress reliever.  The whole interview was fun to read too.  The photograper cracked me up.  Enjoyed reading his and Rosalie's interaction too.  That they were gabbing like girlfriends.  So, I am hoping that the interview comes off as nice as you think it would after reading this chapter.  You know how surprises sometimes come up.  Things said taken out of context.  Remember when Rob said he hated vagina in the Details interview?  Yeah, well, things like that taken out of context.


Oh and Edward tutoring?  HAWT!!!!  Whew!  Can't wait for the next update!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thank you so much Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 23 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Okay so what is all the fuss about with this chapter?  People are mad because Alice and Bella got the punishment they deserved from Jasper and Edward????  As far as I can see, Alice and Bella messed up.  Badly!!  Their lifestyle dictates certain rules must be followed.  Hell, common sense dicatates certain rules must be followed.  But I digress.  Alice, especially knows the rules and not only did she break them but she got Bella, an unexperienced sub, involved as well.  I don't blame Edward and Jasper one bit for what they did.  Was it harsh?  Yes, but if the girl's got merely a slap on the hands what do you think the probability would be that they would do it again???


I have to say that I loved Esme's reaction to the situation.  I so enjoyed reading her telephone conversation with Bella.  I would have expected Esme to be a softie but was pleasantly surprised that she agreed with the boys and backed them.  I also have to say that I loved Carlisle's reaction as well.  Who knew that HE would be the softie??  Loved the switcharoo here!!!


I take offense to anyone giving you shit about this chapter!  It was brilliantly written and, yes it was somewhat tough to read at times because my heart went out to Bella, but all of this needed to be done.  And I applaud you for being brave enough to do.  I thought the chapter was awesome!  *removes collected firewood and restacks it in the bin* 

No frickin' firewood is necessary!  I loved the chapter!

Keye



Author's Response:

Keye, you have a bit of the Domme in you!  You are awesome! thank you so much for your comments.

xoxo

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 01 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

I have to give Bella props for calling out people and telling them like it is.  Edward, Esme, and Jasper all deserved the tongue lashing she got from her.  I think it was a good experience for her because, ultimately, everyone wants to see her get stronger. 

And Garrett, God bless him, for calling Edward on his shit too.  Like when he told Edward this: 

Garrett got up and stood almost toe-to-toe with Edward, returning his glare, "You don't scare me Edward!  You talk about crossing lines, well how do you think you girlfriend feels when you fucked off for almost two days without telling her?  This the same girl who has major abandonment issues because of her fucked up parents?  This is the same girl who was abused by her first boyfriend and made to feel as if she didn't matter, how do you think she feels?  Bella must love you very much, because you have been behaving like a first prize asshole!"

Clearly Edward was thinking emotionally and not with the heart of a Dom. Not that I have any experience in that area at all, but clearly from your story a good Dom would not have taken that action against his sub.  Clearly Jasper did the same thing and I am glad that Bella called him out on it.  Plus he needed to be called out for not knowing what his brother was doing to Alice.  Aren't Doms supposed to be all intutive?   I mean, talk about missing some huge clues in Alice's behavior changes when they went to visit Jasper's family.

I can only imagine the great make up sex that all parties involved will partake in!  LOL!!  Looking forward to seeing what happens next!

Keye



Author's Response:

Thank you so much sweetie. And yes, Doms are supposed to be tuned in to their subs, but they are human after all, and lets just face facts here, boys are not the most intuitive beings out there - and our Alice is good at being 'busy' and deflecting attention.

But Jasper really missed the mark so badly.

Oh the make up sex.....hmmm - so much sex, so little time....

:)

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Once again, you did not disappoint with this chapter!  I fully enjoyed it!!  I can only imagine how stunning both Edward and Bella looked in their costumes.    And Harry?  Oh I think I like him and would love for he and Bella to have coffee.  The three Witches of Eastwick?  That was such a great analogy.  Loved that  movie!!  But I do hope that those three get what is coming to them.  Adored the way that Edward stuck up for himself and Bella in that instance.  And YUM!!  When Edward gets all intense with Bella.  Like when she questioned whether or not he liked her costume and he bent her over the bannister?  Whew!  That was hot!   I enjoy him like that as well as all nice and sweet.  That man has it all!  *sigh*

Bella describing Alice as the person she would call to help her "bury the body" is very descriptive and I have friends like that myself and I would hate to be banned from them for any length of time.  I'm guessing that Edward and Jasper feel so badly about how they reacted to that situation that the ban is going to be lifted.

And Carlisle?  LOVE that man and I adore the tongue lashing he gave Edward.  He deserved every bit of that.  I also found it funny that Carlisle said that he reserved the right to have Emmett come beat the shit out of him!!  Love that man!!!!

Oh girl, I could go on and on about what I liked about his chapter.  Suffice it to say it was awesome and I really look forward to my coffee and your story on Saturday mornings!!!!  Great way to start the day!!!.  Going to check out that damn Squeeler too!! Had my eye on that thing!!!  TMI??  *giggle*

 

Keye

 

 

 

 



Author's Response:

hey there Keye - there is no such thing like TMI between us girls  - please honey, we share our most intimate, crazy, scandalous fantasies here - so GO FOR IT!!!  

I'm glad you liked it all - I enjoyed writing it.

:)

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

So many things going on in this chapter.  I love it!!  Edward was sweet to consider Bella's concerns about speaking to Paul and scheduling a meet and greet so Bella could see if she would be comfortable talking with him!!  *pouts*  I want my own Edward!!!!!!  LOL!!

I'm glad that Rosalie jumped Emmett's ass for his part in the whole Alice and Bella thing!!  And I'm guessing that Emmett really liked her jumping his ass after their conversation was through!!! LOL!!

Boy, Bella and her big mouth.  Drawing attention to them when they all just wanted some burgers.  That was a bummer.  And Edward having to punch that reporter?  Well, the reporter crossed the line so I don't blame him.  I just hope that the reporter cannot cause trouble for Edward.  You know, since our "justice" seemingly only protects criminals (well you know what I mean) and their rights???

Edward and Jasper have been too hard on Bella and Alice, keeping them seperated like that.  Jasper is just pissed because of what was happening right under his own nose and doesn't want to admit it.  Edward?  Well he just is Edward now isn't he?  And he played right along.  It will be nice to see the girls reunion!

What a cliffie!  Bella to be charged with murder?  There is no justice in this world!  LOL!!!

Can't wait to see what happens next!

Keye

 

 



Author's Response:

hey there Keye - I was thinking of you when I wrote my 'thank you' note for your wonderful reviews...

ENJOY

 

PEOPLE LIKE US – OUTTAKE # 6

OUTTAKE – CONVERSATION BETWEEN JASPER AND ALICE

“Guys, I’ve got to go – Jazz please give this some serious thought and Alice, you need to stop being so fucking stubborn. I love you, Squirt!”

Edward almost crushed her in a hug. He slapped Jasper on the shoulder as he ran out the door.

 

“So… you talk about the size of my schlong?”  Jasper said.

Alice looked up at him with mounting excitement, “Well, it’s quite impressive…” she said huskily.

Jasper smiled at her.  “Can we talk? I mean really talk; I’ve missed you Tink…”

Alice smiled through her tears. “I’ve missed you too Jazzy….”

Jasper looked uncomfortable for a moment and it bothered Alice.  She was used to Jasper Whitlock being decisive and in control.  Seeing him looking ill at ease was new.  There had been many disagreements in the Whitlock/Cullen home since Alice had moved in with Jasper two year before.

She had never lived alone, besides when she had gone to college and even then, she had attended Berkley, so that she was close to her family and Jasper.

Although over the years, they had learned to deal with Jasper’s travelling for work and Alice’s part time job as Edward’s PA which had taken her away from time to time, through everything, including Alice’s training as a submissive, their lines of communication had always been open and honest.

Alice had grown up in a house hold that was opinionated and not scared of voicing their points of view.  Esme and Carlisle had encouraged their children to have their own opinions and to share them.  They had also taught them to stick to their guns.

This was one of the many things that had attracted Jasper to Alice in the first place.  Although she was much younger than him when they met; he had always found Alice to be interesting to talk to and inevitably to argue with.  She was a spirited and enthusiastic young woman, with a warmth and energy that seemed to draw him in from the first moment.

Jasper on the other hand had grown up in a large family with two parents that had stuck together over the years because there was no other alternative for either one of them.  They were hardened by life, worn down by reality and for a reason that Jasper had never been able to fathom; they had decided to have three children of which Jasper was the youngest.  Eventually Jasper’s father had strayed and a few years later, when Jasper was about twelve, he had suddenly come back to the trailer park where they lived with three small children in tow!

He had told Jasper’s mother that they were his dead sister’s kids, but after awhile he had confessed that they were his.  Jasper felt sorry for the three youngest children and when he had begun to make money from modeling and small acting jobs, he had made a decision to see that they would have an opportunity to further their education, go to college and make a proper life for themselves.  Although none of the children were really close or affectionate with each other, Jasper had stuck to his word and the three younger children had gone on to college.

Jasper couldn’t believe that Ricky, the youngest of his stepsiblings had taken advantage of Jasper’s generosity the way that he had!  Jasper had never asked for any compensation or payment for the money that he had given to his siblings or parents over the years; the only stipulation he had for continuing to support his mother and father was that the house that he had purchased for them remain in his mother’s name.  Jasper was not close to his father and the distance had only grown when the man had abandoned his young family, leaving his wife to work three jobs to feed and clothe their three children.

Jasper had always thought that he would never find anyone to settle down with.  He didn’t ever want the life that his parents had; tired, sad, disillusioned and settling for something because there was no time or money for dreams of something or someone else.  Someone better.

So the first step that Jasper had taken at the age of sixteen was to have himself emancipated.  He had tried to live in Los Angeles and he had hated every moment of it but as he begun earning good money, he decided to take classes at the local community college.  The first one was on finances.  Jasper wanted to know how to look after his money and how to make it grow.

He trusted few people and although people liked his quiet charm and whit; Jasper had a way of standing to one side and observing people that he found made him a good judge of character.  Jasper had come to rely on that instinct over the years.

It was an instinct that he could no longer rely on.  He had never thought for a million years that his younger brother would ever turn out to be the low life, perverted bastard that he was!  Every time Jasper thought of what Ricky had done, how Richard had betrayed his own brother by lusting, perving, salivating over his Alice!  His Alice!  Jasper wanted to kill Rick with a cold fury that he had never felt before.

How he had touched her, fucking forced himself on her when Jasper had been careless enough to leave her alone with him… FUCK!

Alice gasped as Jasper jumped to his feet.  His face was a cold, furious mask.

“Jasper please!  If you want to talk to me, then you need to calm the fuck down!  I can’t reach you when you are like this!  If you are angry with me then just say so and let’s get it out there!  If you think that I did anything to encourage your brother…” Alice cringed away as Jasper was suddenly in front of her with his hand clasped over her lips.

Never – NEVER, EVER call that fucking piece of low down shit my brother!  I will kill him if I ever see him anywhere near you again!”  Jasper spat out as he held her.

Alice whimpered and she closed her eyes.  “Jazzy, you are scaring me…” 

This wild man wasn’t her Jasper…

Alice felt the tears running down her cheeks and over Jasper’s fingers.

Suddenly she was free.

Alice pushed a fist into her mouth to keep the sobs as quiet as she could.  Her whole body was trembling.

“Alice… sweet Jesus, I’m sorry… I didn’t mean to scare you… Ali…”  Jasper choked out as he sat crouched clear across the room from where Alice sat.

Alice could see the anguish clearly on Jasper’s face and she felt even worse than she had in the past few days.

This was all her fault!

“Come to me…”  Alice said, but Jasper just shook his head.

Alice slid off the sofa onto her knees and she crawled slowly across to where Jasper had slumped down against the wall.

Jasper could feel the intensity of Alice’s gaze as he watched her moving slowly towards him.

“Ali…” he said in a half pleading, half warning.

“No.  You’ve spoken and now it is my turn…” Alice said when she was inches away from his face.

Her eyes searched his intensely.  The remorse and sorrow that Alice saw gave her the courage to move closer until her lips met his.

Jasper’s head jerked backwards, but with nowhere to go, he hit the wall.

He cursed and rubbed his head.

Alice grinned at him, “Maybe that’ll knock some sense into your thick skull!”  She quipped as she arranged herself between his outstretched legs; her thighs straddled his open ones so that he could feel her heated core through her jeans.

Jasper shut his eyes tightly and moaned as he tried to adjust himself.  Alice giggled and winked at him.

“We can get to that later, but first let’s please resolve this ‘thing’ once and for all!”  She said with determination.

“Gladly, Darlin’.”

“Okay, I’m going first.  I need to tell you why I didn’t tell you about… what was happening in the first place, but you cannot freak out on me!  Do you promise?”

Jasper could see how anxious Alice was and once again he was filled with remorse at his earlier behavior.

“I promise.”

Alice took a deep breath, “I know that this might sound crazy to you, but when it happened the first time; I tried to just shrug it off.  I thought that perhaps I had imagined it or misread his signals in some way.  The next time it happened, your… well your father was in the room.  He, Rick grabbed my ass as I walked passed him.  I turned around as saw them looking at each other and Rick just winked at me and they burst out laughing… Jasper… you promised…” Alice broke off as she watched Jasper’s eyes become dark and wild again.

Jasper felt as if he was ready to explode!  That no good, low fucking, good for nothing… BASTARD!  I. will. Kill. Him.

Jasper felt Alice’s tiny hand stroking his cheek and he refocused on her anxious face.

He kissed her quickly, “I’m okay, Ali, I promise.  I won’t freak out on you again.”

Alice nodded slowly, “He apologized to me later – your father, I mean.  The next day he told me that he had too much to drink and that he had made Rick promise never to touch me again.  He begged me not to tell you and then he said that… some girls just have an ‘air’ about them…”

SON OF A BITCH!

Jasper opened his mouth to speak but Alice put her fingers over his lips.

She continued. “I know better than that, Jazz!  I know better!  I was raised to know better than that!  With all their bullshitting and nonsense, my brothers have never, ever treated any woman including me with anything than the utmost respect.  You have never treated me like a whore, but at that moment, I felt dirty.  And I felt like a two bit whore, who didn’t deserve anything better.  Rick kept touching me, stupid little insignificant ‘slip-ups’.  Every time he was around me, sometimes you were in the next room or you had your back to us… He would graze my breasts by pushing past me in a doorway, or he would rub himself against me if he were standing behind us…” Alice shuddered in revulsion and Jasper couldn’t take it any longer.

His arms wrapped Alice in a vice like grip. “Never, never, never…” He said over and over again against her neck as he pulled her closer.

“Jazz…”

“No – it’s my turn now… never, ever again, Mary Alice Cullen.  Promise me that you will never let anyone ever make you feel like that again.  Especially not me!  God, Ali, I love you so much!  Just the thought of another man touching you… Fuck!  It’s too much to even contemplate!  Do you know how I felt when I found out that Rick was… forcing himself on you?  When we forced Bella to tell us and we did force her – she didn’t have a choice really, I wanted to fucking kill someone there and then!  As you know, I sat up all night just thinking about what could have happened to you!  And about how I was going to take care of you this time!  I couldn’t help you last time, Darlin’.  I wasn’t able to stop that animal putting his hands on you… but I was going to make sure that Rick never ever touched you again.”

Alice brushed the tears of Jaspers cheeks.

“I love you so fucking much, Mary Alice Cullen-Whitlock.  You own me mind, body and soul.  If I lost you, my life would be so empty… please forgive me for hurting you and dragging this shit out.  Please, please don’t ever put me through this again, Tink, my heart can’t stand it.”  Jasper whispered as they held each other’s faces and gazed with longing into each other’s eyes.

“I love you, Cowboy; you are my everything… my lover, my best friend, my Dom, my love.  I am sorry too.  No more secrets.”

Their kiss was a relief.  For the first time in almost two weeks, their lips were soft and forgiving.  Lips touched, brushed, nibbled.  Tongues dueled and teased.  Eventually they couldn’t take it any longer and Jasper held Alice to him as he tipped her onto the floor and loomed over her, his knees pushing her thighs apart.

Alice panted into his mouth.  “Can I get my clothes back?”

Jasper smiled against her lips, “yeah, especially the underwear…”

Alice giggled, “can I get my car back?”

Jasper shook his head, “sorry, you will be driven around for a while…”

Alice groaned, “but I can see my Bestie?”

Jasper rocked back on his knees as he looked at the bright twinkle in Alice’s eyes. “Mary Alice…” He said with narrowed eyes.

Fuck! He is so sexy when he does that… now I need to change my panties! Damn Cowboy!

“Hmmm… take me upstairs Jazz… I’ve missed you…” Alice uttered the magic words.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

An hour later, Alice lay sprawled across Jasper’s bare chest.  Her eyes were closed but she was humming as Jasper played with her hair.

“Alice?”

“Yeah?”

“Supervised visits only…”  Jasper kissed her forehead.

“I know – but that’s only for now…” Alice smiled to herself.

She wondered what Kate, Bella and Rosalie were doing on Saturday after the therapy session?  She had heard that Gap was having a sale….

Everything was right with the world after all.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

I hope that you liked it!

Love

Michele

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 20 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

Sometimes no cliffie is a good thing!!  Liking having things a little "resolved" right now.  Um. yeah........I think you did the playroom scene justice!!!!  Bella just might want to consider having "bad" dreams more often if it gets her play like that!!! LOL!!! 

The whole conversation about Bella thinking that Edward wants her fat or thinks she is fat was priceless.  Guys are so dumb about that stuff.  Love the conversations that he had with the guys about that and their advice!  Too funny!  And Paul telling Edward to let Bella be in control?  That was good too.  Wait.  Need a moment............*thinking of Rob being my personal slave*  *sigh*  'Mkay, I am back!!!  *giggle*

I hope that you enjoy the concert!!!  You just go ahead and act like a 15 year old fangirl, 'mkay????!!!!!  I did the same thing when I went to see the Kings of Leon!!!! LOL!!!

Keye

 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

Getting to read this after coming back home from being out of town visiting family was like an unexpected present!  I was thrilled to see the update notification in my inbox when I turned on the computer!!

So much going on in this chapter that I don't even know where to begin.  I enjoyed reading every word.  And you really do an excellent job of capturing the character's emotions.  Like when Edward overheard Bella telling Carlisle about the vomiting/fainting instance and all that entailed.  You could really "feel" Edward's hurt and anger and "feel" Bella's guilt and anxiety.  Very well written.

What a shame that Bella did not get her entire "experience" with Dr. E. *snicker* Might have to revisit that.

Thank goodness for Kate to set everyone straight.  Seems like she has a good head on her shoulders.  I smell an out-take opportunity on what rule she broke twice!  *giggle*

Pivotal line in the chapter:  They were either in or out of the lifestyle, half way never worked for anyone.

I am looking forward to what all is going to be said/taught at the couples retreat.

Well for a chapter that kicked you ass, I am impressed because it turned out awesome.  I hope that your beta is feeling better.  And I am all for this story being as long as you want it to be.  I am enjoying the heck out of reading it!!!!

Looking foward to the next update.

Keye

 



Author's Response:

Hey there Keye,

Thanks for the comments, suggestions and review - I think a Kate/Garrett outtake could be arranged sometime. Have an awesome week.

Michele

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Once again, you did NOT disappoint!  So many things I loved about this chapter!!  Edward teasing Bella.  My goodness I don't know how the girl stands it.  I would have had my wicked way with him and damn the consequences!  *giggle*.

Loved the little UPS rants of Alice!  That was too funny.  And how Bella glared at Emmett, as a warning, when Edward told them of his new job?  Loved it!  It is a fine concept that you came up with, the whole writing a musical score for a movie!  Combines Edwards different talents. 

The way you write Edward's family is so sweet and loving.  Much like a Hallmark family.  One that anyone would love to be a part of and I like that Bella realizes that and relishes it thoroughly.

Nice ending to the chapter.  I cannot wait to see what happens next!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thank you Keye - I love writing this family - they are not perfect but they are awesome - thanks for the review and comments

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

Yes, yes and yes........you just HAVE to write an out-take about the whole Esme, Carlisle and Riley situation!!!!!  Oh and I would love to know how the "conversation"  went between Riley and Anderson.  Oh and what are the Cullen men going to do to Riley?  There is just so much yet to know about this interesting little situation here!!!  *squee*

This was a fabulous chapter.  Lots going on!  I do love that you write long chapters!  Just makes me happy!! 

I will also be curious to see what everyone's reactions are to the scene played out in front of Kate and Garrett too.

Needless to say, I cannot wait to find out what happens next!!!!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 18 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

Hello Ladies!

Totally understand about RL and all that.  I thought it was a feat of astronimical proportions that you were able to write such exceptionally wonderful chapter each week!  I mean, I was in awe!  So, though I will be sad that you are posting every two weeks instead of one.....*Sniff*....I completely understand and fully support your decision!!


Wow!  Edward said "Red"!!!  I did not expect that!  But, of course, he was completely right!!!

Loved how Bella diffused the potentially volatile situation with Edward about meeting Riley. Thank goodness she told Riley to meet her at home where Edward will be sure to be there.  Awwww............Edward and Bella are learning!!

Edward got the movie!!!  Yeah!!!

I loved how everyone embraced Riley and let bygones be bygones.  Totally thrilled that Bella is going to get the opportunity to work doing something that she loves and that she is so fully supported on that endeavor.  Not only supported but gleefully encouraged.  The scene where Edward was waiting for Bella to freak out in the pantry and he swooped in and saved the day?  Priceless.

Looking forward to the Esme and Carlisle outtake too!  I find that whole situation completely hysterical and you are completely teasing us with that little topic!  LOL!!!

I always try to have Notepad open so I can type my review as I read but to be honest, I got so engrossed in this chapter that I just sort of forgot about typing notes.  And you are probably thinking, "Shit, thank goodness for that....no wonder how long her review be if she had been able to complete THAT task"!  LOL!!

Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours!!!  We will all be waiting for you to post whenever you can!!!  You know we cannot wait to read what happens next.  Your fault really.............because the story is so good!  

Keye



Author's Response:

Oh Keye, you always warm my heart with your comments and reviews. Thanks honey for staying with me on this one. The C&E outtake will be up next week. Even Fee loves it so far...

thanks honey.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 01 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

Wow!  What a chapter!  Lots and lots going on!  Bella wrapping up her items for her show. And, naturally breaking all the rules.  *giggle*  The girls rushing in to "save" Bella for her Edward induced depression, or so they thought, was a scream! 

Loved looking into Charlie's life and I am so glad that he has found happiness with Sue, Seth and Bella.  And that little sad chapter with Jacob is over and everyone can move on from that.

Bella and Edward's reunion was quite something.  At least he did not withhold the "O's".  Now that would have been punishment enough right there.  Yes, Edward's punishment is extremely harsh but isn't it the way it is supposed to be?  I have to say that Bella is going to have a hard time sitting for awhile and is the Oscar shindig this same weekend/week??  If so, that is going to be trying with a monkey's red ass!!!  *giggle*  I am guessing that this will be a lesson that she will not soon forget.

I cannot wait to read what happens next!!

Happy New Year!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hey there Darling.

Thank you so much for all of your comments and reviews.  The Oscars are at the beginning of March - and will take place in the next chapter.  We are going to cover about 6 weeks and I promise I will tell you how the rest of the weekend pans out for red-butt-bella!  

 

See you in a couple of weeks.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 15 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61

The new "Seth" works for me!  Yowza!  Damn!  I was able to eat my entire bowl of popcorn and drink my entire soda while reading this chapter!  It was AWESOME!!!!!  Yes, I see what you mean..................you could not have ended it anywhere but where you actually did.


I want to know what is in that letter from Phil!!

As for the chapter, man, I don't even know where to begin.  So much going on in this chapter.  But one thing that sticks out is Renee.  Can you say psycho??  Good grief.  Thank goodness Bella did not have to live with her! 

Alice and that whole situation.  Wow!  Funny how Alice tried to play Jasper's hand and to provoke him like that???  Brave girl.


Jasper letting it all hang out after getting thrown in the pool?  Man, where was the picture of THAT???  LOL!!

Love Paul!

Glad that Bella stood up to herself with Renee.  She is getting stronger.  I think it was also good that Charlie flew out to make sure Bella was okay after the Renee fiasco as well to show her that she was important.  Bella needed that. 

Edward cracked me up that he was going to confront the paps outside his gate.  Thank goodness for Emmett.  I love Emmett. 

Oh and the Bambi and Thumper?  Too funny!!!!

Thoughts on what to see for their demo?  Hmmmmmmmm..........can't think........still reeling from what all went on in this chapter.  Haven't even gotten my mind around thinking of something pervy yet!  LOL!!!!  But, rest assured, I know that you will NOT disappoint!!!

Loved the chapter!!!  It was brilliant!!  And I cannot wait to read what happens next!!!

Keye

 

 

 

 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

F ~ I hope that you and yours are safe.

M ~ As far as your A/N, I simply cannot believe that you felt that you had to write all of that based on reviews received.  I mean, really readers.............this is a story...........get over yourselves.  Read it, don't read it but don't harrass the writers !  Give opinions, thoughts and suggestions but do it nicely.  There is not need for name calling or whatever.

I think that your story is fabulous.  You just keep doing what you are doing.  Write what you feel is best for the story, that is all I ask.

This chapter was awesome and jammed packed with information.  Never apologize for a chapter being long!  I mean, I love long chapters.  I cannot imagine anyone complaining about that.

*Squee*  I cannot believe that Edward proposed !!!!  It was a perfect end to a perfect day.  But boy I hope those lovebirds can get some sleep though I don't imagine them doing that right away!  *snicker*  Did the rest of the family know of Edward's plans?

The bit with Emmett and Rosalie was a scream.  Well, you know what I mean.  What is it with guys thinking their schlongs can hurt the baby???????  I mean, seriously !!!  That just cracks me up.

So, much that I loved about this chapter but I am going to stop now.  Just know that I enjoyed it and I cannot wait for the next update!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hi there Keye,

Thanks so much for your wonderful review and comments. I had such fun with Emmett - he is such a ray of sunshine. I'm glad you liked the proposal - it was perfect for them.

see you soon, honey.

xoxo

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

Love, love, love the photos!!  It is a nice addition to the chapter.  And, what a chapter!!!  So much going on in this one!!!

Outtake request:  Of Esme and Carlisle after Bella's showing!!!!!  You know that is the one that everyone wants, don't you???  LOL!!!

Glad to see that Riley "manned up" and called Carlisle.  Otherwise Carlisle would not have been so able to control himself at Bella's opening.  Oh yes, it was better that he was prepared.  And I am hoping that Esme's butt is prepared when she gets home!  LOL!!  Since she openly defied and challenged Carlisle...that is not going to bode well for her.  *snicker*

Hard to say what my favorite was about this chapter.  It was all my favorite!!!  It is really sweet how much Edward cares for Bella and wants her happy.  The impromptu engagment party was special.  And having Bella's family there was priceless.  So, is Seth going to be a movie star as well??  He certainly sounds like he has the makings for it all.  Having all the ladies, and men, drooling all over him!!  That was hysterical.

Edward being tired and slightly tipsy was funny too as he is normally in such control. 

My favorite flashback was the one where Edward and Carlisle were talking after Edward got into the vault to get the rings.  That was so sweet.  You just got to love Carlisle!!

Okay, another outtake request.  If Bella and Edward did the wild thing in the closet/office....whichever it was.....when he showed up at her opening, that would be a good one too.  Couldn't tell if they actually had time for a quicky or not.  I mean, you can get haystack hair from come serious making out.  And Edward does seem to always have his hands in her hair so who knows?   Yeah, you two know!!!  *giggle*

Role play?  Yum!!!  Damn lucky Bella!!!!  That sounded like a lot of fun!!

Man, you ladies definitely do NOT disappoint with these updates!!!!!  Whew!  Are they some kind of fabulous!!!  Just sayin' !!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thanks so much for the comments and review - let me see what I can do for an outtake, okay?

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 27 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 74: Chapter 74

Seriously....are men ever ready for birth?  LOL!!

His only concern was that Bella was about to give birth to his two children and he wasn't ready!

Where is Master Edward now?  *smirk*:

Everyone turned to where Edward was sitting on the floor staring at his one converse sneaker that he held in his hand.

Wow!  Maggie took charge of the command center, didn't she?  *sigh*  I need a Maggie!  *pouts*

You know thats right:

You are going to be pushing a watermelon through a tea cup

OMG....Pitocin is the devil....that really brings on the pain!

nurse Ratchet:

*dies laughing*

You gotta love Emmett:

"Wow, Bella Baby, you are looking quite fuckable, too bad Eddie's not allowed to dip his wick yet!"  He laughed gleefully as only a brother would.

Awwwww....man!  You ended it there???  LOL!!!

Reading all this brought back memories of my son's birth!  Seems like yesterday but he is turning 9!  I cannot believe it!!!

Can't wait to read what happens next!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 28 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60

Okay, sounds like it is waaaaaayyyyyy past time for the demons from Hell to go back home and leave you alone!  LOL!!!  I am hoping that most of that stuff got all worked out and you are somewhat back to normal.  Whatever the hell "normal" means anyways!!!

As always, I thought this update was superb but the simple fact that you churned out such a wonderful against all odds and extreme duress is breathtakingly awesome!  It just reflects your talent as a writer!

There are just so many "favorite" parts of this chapter that I would be the wordiest h00r ever in repeating them.  My heart broke when Bella heard that her dad had spent so much time with Seth all the while ignoring her.  I have experienced that and it hurts.  IDK if your plan is for Charlie to explain himself on that one but I sure would like to hear why he did it even though it is not going to change things. 

Edward's screaming like a girl and having the entire family barge in their room!!  That was too funny!

The "fruit" drinks!!!  That seems like someting my friends would do! Ha!

Edward and Bella's fifty millionth fight over money!  Those two completely crack me up when they have disagreements. *grin*

And I caught all the hints that Alice was pregnant but I love how you revealed it.  That was just perfect!!

The photos are always a nice touch.  I think that they add to the chapter as well. 

And I could go on and on but I think it was perfectly awesome.  I enjoyed reading every word and I cannot wait to see what happens next!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Keye, thanks so much, you really are too kind  - and Charlie will explain himself - they will have another conversations soon. It's a process, you know. Like I said to another reader, Charlie knows what he did, he is probably more aware than Bella as to what he did. Kids have a way of twisting things to suit themselves, to kind of justify why parents or other caretakers do things to hurt them. And that is one of the reasons why he finds it hard to forgive himself, because he knows more than anyone, the amount of damage that he  and Renee has done to Bella

Thank you babe - I'm glad that you like the photo's.

xoxox

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 12 Feb 2011 Title: PEOPLE LIKE US

Again this chapter was just chock full of information.  I have to say that I cracked up at Bella trying every drink in the bar and then thinking that she can sing.  Why is it that drunk people ALWAYS think they can sing?  Been there, done that!  And have the tape, somewhere, to prove.  No, wait, I think I burned that sucker!!! LOL!!

Nice that Edward and Bella talked all that out.  The motorcycle portion of the trip sounds heavenly.  Bella was quite demanding there at the end, wasn't she?  LOL!!!

Great update.  Enjoyed it immensely.  And no, I am thinking that YOU ROCK, you and your 2500 reviews!!!  Your fault really.............you are an excellent writer.  I have not been bored not one little single time with your story.  It always keeps me riveted!!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 09 May 2011 Title: Chapter 66: Chapter 66

Holy Crap there was a lot in this chapter!  I loved it.  Gosh, where to begin????

I can only imagine the looks on Bella and Edward’s faces when Garrett asked them if Edward’s surgeon explained about the no sex part!!!  ROTF!!!  Then to read how they were coping with the no sex!!  Too funny! 

The Middle Eastern theme night?  Wow!  I have to say I was jealous of the 8 flippin’ orgasms that Bella had that night!  Geez!

The firing of Felix and Heidi was perfect!!!  Love feisty Bella!

I wonder if Maggie about choked when she heard this?  Probably not but I like to think that she did anyway!:

Bella's breath caught in her throat and she swallowed nervously, "I think that Maggie would have something to say about that."  She tried to joke.

Okay, when they were at the surgeon’s office talking about sex, when they could have it, how they could have it and Bella’s reaction to it was simply priceless!!!!  ROTF!!!  But I have to admit that Edward had a point when he said that he had given her orgasms in front of many people before.  However, in Bella’s defense, that was a place where it was expected to happen and they had talked about it prior to going there.  Even though Bella knew that they would be discussing whether or not she and Edward could have sex, I don’t think she realized it would be that graphic.  Plus, it was three men and her.  I can see where she was mortified.  LOL!!

Jasper and Edward trying to keep up their Dom-ness with Bella and Alice really was funny at times.  The whole Alice and Bella fighting in the bedroom and how the boys reacted to it was pretty funny too.

The luxury road trip?  How fun was that?  I have been in RV’s like that and they are unbelievable!!!  And, it seems, like Edward and Bella grew even closer to Anderson and Brian.  How could they not?

And, finally, at long last…..dinner with Esme and Carlisle at the winery.  Their first night to have sex.  How sweet was that?  I had to laugh when Esme put a throw on her suede chair!!!  I am laughing because, girlfriend, I would have done that too.  Don’t need my suede chair all gooey!  Ewwwww……. LOL!!

Yes, so it seems just as they clear on hurdle then something else comes up.  Makes you just want to scream “F*&K*!!! doesn’t?  Ha!

So Renee is not Bella’s mother?  Hmmm…wonder why Charlie did not share this info with Bella??  Did I miss something here?

Needless to say, I cannot WAIT to read what happens next!!!!

Keye

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your epic review and comments! You sure know how to flatter a girl!  I HAD TO PUT THE THROW OVER THE CHAIR - double ewww!  And if you think about the mom thing long enough - you'll work it out (I think) - but all will be revealed

xoxo

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62

Wow-we!  This was another chapter just packed with information.  Rosalie cracked me up with being so tired of being pregnant.  I can relate.  I was so impressed how Bella handled her and made it all better.

Then when Bella had her discussion with Edward on how she needed her Dom back?  Boy I thought the stuff was going to hit the fan.  And it did in a manner of sorts, but in a good way.  I think Edward recovered nicely in getting back into the proper "mode".

Alice?  Whew!!!!  She is a lot to handle.  I can totally relate to her!! *cough*  May have been like that a time or two in my own life as well *cough cough*  Just sayin' !  Again, it was very impressive that way that Bella moved in and took over the situation and Tink.  However, it is usually easier for an "outsider" to do that.  Not that the Cullen Clan treats or thinks of Bella as an outsider but she has not been around as long as everyone else so Tink has not completely worn Bella down too!  LOL!!!  I cannot believe that Jasper ran and I am dying to know where he was. 

Loved when Bella read all of the the riot act in how they were partly responsible for Alice running amok!!  Good for Bella showing some assertiveness!  *Keye high fives Bella*  LOL!!

The wedding and all that went with it sounded beautiful.  I loved all the photos that you selected for the entire story.  They add so much and you do such a great job picking out just the right ones to accompany your excellent writing.  Never once have I been bored with this story.  You have always completely captured my attention with your chapters.  No easy feet because I tend to get bored easily!!!  LOL!!

Honey, you just don't ever worry about not being able to respond to reviews!  We know you love and appreciate it us.  Though we love hearing from you, we really appreciate having the updates.  So, if we had to chose between you responding to reviews or preparting an update.............the update is going to rule every time!!!  *grin*

Have I asked you if you would consider writing a o/s based on this story for DirtyCheekyMonkeys Squeeze My Lemon exercise on fanfiction?????  I think you would be completely AWESOME at that if you had the time. I will PM you with add'l info.

I cannot wait to read what happens next!!!!!

Keye

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Hi Keye,

 

thanks so much for the great review as always.  So, me... writing a smut outtake for this story??? YES PLEASE! I love writing smut, SQUEEZE MY LEMON - um, yeah, I admit, i check it out from time to time (smut hoor).  So let me know what to do and I'll do it!

xoxo

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 10 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 63: Chapter 63

Another wonderful chapter!  You never fail to entertain!  Their "party" seemed to go off without a hitch. *giggle*  Still loving all the photos that you put in your chapter.  Is the first photo one of the nipple cup things that held on Bella's flowers?

OMG!  The uncles are hysterical bringing in the 50 year old strippers.  "Youngsters" to them!  LOL!  Loved Edward's reaction to that as well.

Have an idea of what 'the letter' says but, wow, I cannot wait to know for sure. Carlisle made the right decision to not give Bella that info on her wedding day.  Smart man.  It was crazy for Bella to chose that time to want to know but I understand her reasoning behind it.

What was in the box from Edward that Charlie brought to Bella?  What did the charm look like?  Love Bella's grandmother's earrings!  So thoughtful and pretty.

There was so much more that I enjoyed about this chapter but I have to go play "mommy" now!!!!

Looking forward to reading more!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hi there Keye,Thanks so much for your review and comments!  The letter will be revealed soon, promise, but there is something else that has to happen first - sorry!

Update sooner than normal!

Love,

Michele xoxo

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 67

I can totally understand why Isabella was not enraged to find out that Renee was not her mother but, instead, felt relief!!!

Esme and Carlisle were cracking me up at the gym.  Good for them for keeping "fit" in more ways than one.  *snicker*

Awwww...you just have to love Brian and Andy for taking care of Edward and Isabella!!!!

Nice birthday.  And wow...they are going 24-7??

Can't wait to see what that conversation was all about with Alice and Isabella!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 68

Cracked up when I read this:

"Ithinkiwanttoaskyoutohaveababywithme!"

Who wouldn't want a baby with Edward?  *swoon*

ROTF when I read about Alice in the hospital and all of the family antics!!!  Good grief!  What a riot!

Great line:

Bella almost felt sorry for her father-in-law as she watched how he placed Esme's plate on the small table next to her seat before he backed away as if she was a wild beast.

Hah!  I knew it!!!!


Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 69: Chapter 69

So funny seeing that Edward has totally lost his shit over the news of TWINS!!!  Not that I blame him...but leaving Bella in the car while he downed Patron????  LOL!

ROTF:

A horrible thought struck Edward then, What if there were more than two babies inside her?  Could she be having like a litter?

Dayum!  The situation with Carlisle and Esme?  Okay, yes, perhaps, she should be upset with C hitting Jasper but really?  To this extent?  They should be laughing about it now because it is funny.  That Carlisle decked his son-in-law for having sex with his own wife which threw her into labor??  That's funny!!!

LMAO:

Bat shit crazy; one of them was going to be bat shit crazy within nine months and he did not think that it would be Bella!

Yeah, me too:

He wondered what Bella and Carlisle were talking about and why they had excluded him.

Dayum!  What happened with mild mannered Carlisle??  I cannot WAIT to read what happens next!!!!

Awesome chapter!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thanks so much for your review Keye, glad you liked it

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 11 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 75

Nice way to start a chapter!!!  *evil grin*

Yes, I can only imagine that Edward was ticked off that Bella was not only burning the candles at both ends but in the middle too! 

And I can only imagine that Bella was completely ticked off about Edward involving Riley and his fiance in their mess....regardless of the fact that Edward thought he was doing what was best for Bella.  Edward always says that Bella needs to talk to Edward about what is going on.  Well Edward didn't talk to her about involving Riley now did he?  You cannot expect something out of another person that you are not willing to give, right?  *ponders that for a moment*

Love how Edward and Bella are with the possums!!!

Loved all the descriptions and photos of the houses!

Bella is right....Edward needs to do Garrett's movie if it moves him so much.  Opportunities do not come along like that very often.

Play time sounded awesome right up until Bella completely pissed Edward off.  I understand where she was coming from but she might have wanted to bring up her concern a different manner.

Submitting completely for 2 24 hour periods?  Wow....is Bella going to be able to handle that?  I just don't know.  LOL!!!

Again....loved all the descriptions and photos of the house!

The conversation about them having more children was facinating....how they both reacted to it.  Bella's shock and wondering how they would accomplish what Edward wanted and at what cost it would be to her in so many ways.  Though I do think it is sweet that Edward wants a large family.

I cannot believe Alice's reaction to Bella and Edward's choice of Bella being collared when they visited Rose in the hospital.  And I wonder why she reacted that way.  Jasper's reaction to Alice was swift, wasn't?  I mean he must have torn Alice's butt up out in the parking lot!!!  LOL!   That would be an interesting out-take to read!! LOL!

Nooooooooooooo..........not the end!!!!  I love this story!!!  But I do realize that all good things have to come to an end.  These are just really great characters that you have come up with.  I have just enjoyed reading this so much.

Can't wait to check out your new story and I would love, love, LOVE to come back and check in on this couple from time to time.  Or even with Alice and Jasper et al.  LOL!

Great chapter.  Can't wait to see what happens next!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hey KC,  Thanks for the wonderful review and comments.  Edward and Bella are going through a lot of changes in their lives.  Alice reacted like that because they were all there for the baby and she was just saying that it was inconvenient that Bella was collared at that time.  Jazz is a stricter Dom than Edward, but then again he and Alice have been together for about 5 years so she should know how to behave and what he will and won't tolerate - and thanks for the idea, I think that I will do that outtake - it will be a fun break from the story - look in your in box at the end of the week...

;)

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77

I am glad that Edward had his little talk with Alice.  She was getting unbearable.  I have to agree with Edward in that I don't know how Jasper puts up with her either!

Actually Bella was lucky that the twins decided to stop breast-feeding.  I think that my son would have breast-fed through to college if I would have let him.  (kidding)  But, gosh, if I did not have a heck of a time getting him off his night time feeding!  LOL!

Mmmhmmmm....Edward saying that he wanted Bella and the kids with him on the shoot then finding out that is just not feasible.  Then him having to play this dark character.  Something tells me this is not going to go well.

Playing teacher/student with Edward?  *swoon*

What a strange thing to say:

"Don't let me go, okay?"  His voice was thick with sleep.

Something is just not right here...dun, dun, DUN!

Esme and Carlisle crack me up!

Maybe Alice and Bella going through pregnancy together this time will make them close like they once were.

I found Garrett and Edward's conversation about Irena interesting. 
And then this:

Kate gaped at her, "You don't know Irena?  Oh come on, Bella!  What rock have you been living under?  She is the hottest tart to hit Hollywood!  She has ‘dated' or ‘screwed' all of her leading men and most of the directors that she had worked with!  She has a rotten reputation for punctuality and she drinks like a fish and looks stoned or high half the time!"

All kinds of warnings are going off about this Megan chick.

And so Edward is aroused by Irena?  Men....pfft!

For Edward being a "Dom" and so "in control", why is he letting this slut get to him?:

Edward had not felt this out of control before.  He needed something, anything. 

I don't think that Garrett's advice was worth is breath.  Is is really wise for Edward, who states Irena is a "siren" and is doing everything she can to arouse him, do you really think he needs to befriend here?  I mean, she is going to take that "friendship" as encouragement that he "wants" here in my opinion.

Edward having lunch and dinner with her?  *rolls eyes*

Uh huh:

If she isn't a threat to you or Bella, then why have you decided not to tell Bella about Irena?  Edward suppressed the irksome thought before it could take hold in his conscious.

Megan Fox is an excellent choice for Irena btw.

Men are pigs....J/s.  LOL

Oh I think that you should have Bella break Edward's balls if need be.... I think that she is MORE than capable of doing that!  LOL!!

Okay, so this is the second time I have written this review.  This stupid site pisses me off when it decideds that you "are not authorized to do that function" when I have forgotten to check that damn box so that I can stay logged in.  Glad that I noticed that otherwise you would have never know that I put a review down.  :-(

Keye



Author's Response:

Oh my Sweet Keye,

I could feel your frustration in every word! You are priceless - and your comments are brilliant.  Now, have a little faith in me, okay?  and he wasn't turned on by her per se, it's just that she spent the better half of a day, prancing around with her tits sticking into his chest, or rubbing against his back, so little Eddie would have a bit of a time with it.

Love and hugs (no more coffee for you!)

Michele

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78

Yes, well Edward, the ever "in control" Dom, is completely BLOWING it, isn't he?  Good grief...Mr. "I am the KING of communication" isn't speaking?  So, how many spanks with a paddle does he get for being so dishonest with Bella?  I just hate it when one does not do what they preach!!!!

Yeah, yeah, yeah, he's under stress...whatever.....don't feel sorry for him.  I feel for Bella and the kids instead.

All that being said.......I'd still "do" him!  ROTFLMAO!!!!!!!

But I am glad that they made up.  *giggle*  And everyone needs a Maggie, Esme and Carlisle to rescue them when things are hitting the fan, don't they?

Jasper cracks me up too! "He said, and I quote, ‘she can't come to the phone right now, Darlin' because I have her trussed up like a thanksgiving turkey with stuffing in all the right places - like I said, she will call you back'!"

 OMG...that was so funny!!

Oh I cannot wait to see what Irena has to say or what she thinks about the set being bombared by Edward's family...and the others too.  Wonder if she is going to change her somewhat slutty ways?  Or are she and Bella going to be great friends?  You know Bella...she does make the most surprising friends at times.

Nice that have so much help with the kiddos.  Must be heaven!!!

Piano sex.....yum!

Okay so the play party...wonder if Edward is going to take her?  Surely he will, right? 

Love how you keep everything fresh and interesting.  Still love this story today as much as I did when I started it!  You have been doing an amazing job with the characters and the plot....well, everything really!!

As always, I cannot wait to read what happens next!!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Oh my word, Keye, you are so funny!  When I wrote Jasper's comment, I giggled for ages! (so sad!)  Edward isn't taking her to the play party, coz, let's face it, that's not what she really wanted. she really wanted to know that he was still going to find her sexy - I mean come on, this is Bella and Edward here!   I am having such fun writing thse last chapters before we say good bye ONLY FOR A WHILE -  we will be back for the next generation.... dum, dum...

What do you think?  Sound good, or should we just say good bye and ride off into the sunset??

Let me know what you think - I don't want to drag this on if the story gets old and boring, you know?

Love,

Michele

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 79: Chapter 79

Oh Em Gee....I cannot imagine that Bella doesn't want to hear all about her dad's sex life!  Ewwwwww.....

So glad that Edward is "there" for Bella and all her pregnancy hormones!!!

I cannot believe that they have been married for two years already.

OMG... I think I heart the uncles a little more now for them "protecting" Bella!  LOL!!!

There was just so much that I loved about this update.  You ladies just rock my world with your story!  Of course we want more!!!

Can't wait to read what happens next!!


Oh and congrats on the newest addition to your family Fiorella!!!!

Have you thought about approaching the SRP for a beta?  Link:  http://sparklyredpen.com/

I have lots of friends that work for them and they are awesome.  Just a thought. 

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 80: Chapter 80

Awwww....Jack sounds adorable, doesn't he?

Poor Bella:

They didn't like her because she was having another baby and they knew it.

Couldn't agree with Bella more on the fact that Jasper is the perfect southern gentleman cowboy!!

I need the number to "Eddie the massuses!! LOL!

OME!  That is funny that Rosalie took away Emmett's ESPN and made him pay the damages for the broken window!  LOL!

I love how this family jokes and teases with each other...especially when Edward is on the receiving end....like when Carlisle was telling him that he needs to feed Bella first!!!  ROTF!!!

Go Esme!!  Smacking Edward on the head for him yelling!  I laughed out loud at that one.

Got to love Carlisle:

To an onlooker, it would seem as though Carlisle was just holding her hand, but Bella knew that he was checking it over - he was in full ‘doctor' mode.

I love those guys!:

Anderson smiled, "I offered, well actually, Brian and I tossed a coin for this - I won!"

It takes an awful lot for a woman in labor to set her husband straight and boy did Bella ever!!  LOL!

Was this about the fact that MJ always wore white socks:

"Still going ‘Michael Jackson' I see."  Edward said with a small smirk.


That was the sweetest thing that Carlisle did for Edward.  IDK why men don't understand that they can be loving AND strong all at the same time.  Meaning...I don't understand why men have a hard time showing affection like that.

Love that they named the baby after the two uncles!

Good grief....poor Esme....and her parents did that?  I knew that they were awful but that is completely insane!!!

Laughed so hard at the "Edward Touch" sponsored pantry raid!!!  I don't blame Jasper for posting pics!!!

Two Academy Awards?  Awesome!!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 05 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 81: Chapter 81

Love the conversation between Saska and Bella.

Good grief...I don't even know what to say about Bella, the photographers, the car crashes and all of that!  Good grief!  Edward is going to be livid!

I find this so interesting:

She hadn't seen Edward, Jasper, Anderson or Carlisle since she had been admitted.

It is like they abandoned her or something.

Why was Alice so upset when she saw Bella???

Ohhhhh....Alexi's was bleeding too?  No wonder Edward was ticked off.

I am so glad that he redeemed himself with his speech to Bella in the bathroom!  That was simply perfect and swoon-worthy!

The Academy Awards part?  Awesome!!!

Love Carlisle:

The trip was eventful, noisy and Carlisle stated that they were lucky that he didn't have a problem with alcohol as travelling with seven toddlers was enough to send any man to the closest bar.

Amen to that!

I just do not know what to say....hard to believe that this story is over as I have enjoyed reading it so much!  And you wrapped up this part so well too. 


Looking forward to your upcoming stories!

Keye

Summary:

When Bella's cable goes out a sexy repairman comes to repair it and her other ailments as well.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3816 Read Count: 2174
[Report This] Published: 24 Mar 2010 Updated: 24 Mar 2010
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I have never had that much fun when getting my cable repaired and I am feeling ripped off to say the least!!!  *giggle*  Found you on Southern Fan Fiction...........nice one shot over there BTW.  And thought I would check you out over here.  I enjoyed this one shot too!!  Nice banner as well.  With the old t.v. and smexy picture!!!!!

Nice!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hehehe, I know I feel kind of cheated when my cable gets repaired too. Thank you for your review on this story and I am glad that you liked the one shot over at SFFR as well. I am very grateful to Sandy for giving me the opportunity to participate in her Tantalizing Tuesdays. I have to thank Cullenbabe1231 for all her beta help, with that OS. The banner for this story is given credit to Rparkerp. She was kind enough to make it for me. I am glad you liked it. I will let her know. I also hope you check out my multi-chapter story Just a Dream, it is a bit angst and spiritual.  Thank you again and have a wonderful day.  

Make-A-WIsh by rbsschess Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 9]
Summary:

Edward is the hot QB for the Pittsburgh Steelers.  Bella is the hot rising rock star.  In what seems like another lifetime he was everything to her.  When life throws them together again can they reclaim old feelings and build new ones?  Maybe!!


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9810 Read Count: 1748
[Report This] Published: 17 Apr 2010 Updated: 17 Apr 2010
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Make-A-Wish

Loved this one shot.  What a great story.  And I really liked how you incorporated the meanings of the songs and the flowers into it as well.  I enjoyed reading this one as well!

 

Keye



Author's Response:

Thank you and thanks for reading - Beth

Summary:

 

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“We found her Chief Swan, she’s ALIVE! We found Isabella!" Alive? She had really survived the last tens years?

They said I was going home but where was home now?

OOC AU Dark themed you've been warned. No rape! But there is talk about slaves and abuse   Bella x Edward

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77399 Read Count: 32727
[Report This] Published: 25 Apr 2010 Updated: 25 Feb 2011
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I am liking the story so far.  You never really read a story with Alistair in it so it is already different than what I have read before.  So, curious to see where you are going with this story.  How Bella and the other girls came to be with Alistair and the lack.  How the girl's are going to recover from being abused for so long.  I think this all has the makings of a very interesting story.

 

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I can only imagine how tough this would be for Edward to have to re-train Bella.  I mean, it goes completely against his nature to order her around as she is his mate and all he wants to do is everything for her to make her happy.  It is going to be interesting to see how Bella comes around.  Stella too if she is going to remain much in this story.

 

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I like the story and hope that you continue it to its completion. 

 

Keye



Author's Response:

Thank you for all your reviews. I am sorry it took so long to get back to you, but I do apprciate everyone of them! Happy reading!

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Great chapter and I cannot wait to read more. It was interesting to see the differences in the two transitions.  Thought you wrote them very well.

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Great chapter.  Congrats on your book!

Keye

Anonymous Meeting by rbsschess Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 35]
Summary:

 

For the Under Her Thumb Challenge on FF.

Edward needs a Domme but has trouble truly submitting and has been labeled as trouble.  At the club's anonymous play night he thinks he finds what he needs in a new Domme.

With no information on her how can he find her again?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Wonderful World of Dommella, Bdsm stories only
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7144 Read Count: 3106
[Report This] Published: 19 May 2010 Updated: 19 May 2010
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Anonymous Meeting

I have to say that all of your one shots leave me wanting to read more of them.  This one did as well.  Love the story and am curious to see what would happen next.

Keye



Author's Response:

Thank you and thanks for reading.  Punishment will be turned into the second chapter for this story after the contest it is a sample for is over - Beth

Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4234]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1225421
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 21 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Well, of course, EPOV is my absolute fav!  And this one was a really good one!  Hmmmm...........so Bella has to ask permission for bathroom breaks.  Is that because of her pretty new jewelry?  *snicker*

 

Keye



Author's Response:

The bathroom thing is only temp and he has his reasons...Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a teaser for you....lml

While the men went out to get started we worked in the kitchen making lunch. There wasn’t much room in the galley style kitchen, so I stood on the outside of the counter preparing the fruit salad, While Alice worked at the counter pressing burgers and Rose stood opposite me chopping vegetables for a salad.

 

“Alice thanks again for all the outfits, I’m sorry I should have called you yesterday” She looked up from her goo covered hands.

 

“I wasn’t sure if Edward was going to give them to you yesterday or not. Did everything fit?”

 

“Yes and I didn’t show…” I hesitated for a second catching myself before saying Edward’s name, I wasn’t sure if that was allowed. I cleared my throat to not sound stupid then added “…how the dress looked on me”

 

I was sort of proud of myself; Rose caught my eye and smirked, I guess I didn’t fool her.

 

“The only real problem with that dress is you can’t get on your knees.” Rose announced like she was telling me the time. Alice looked over her shoulder while she washed her hands.

 

“I don’t get on my knees Rose” I bite my lip trying to hide my amusement at their exchange. Rose spun around quickly putting her hand on her hip.

 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 16 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

As always, I do enjoy reading your detailed A/N's.  They are always interesting and this one was particulary interesting. I thought that you explained everything exceedingly well!

Hmmmm..........Heather is making me wonder.

So, man, Bella has a lot on her plate.  The Heather thing, her sister and a very mad Master!  But yes, I did get some more insight on Leah.

Loved the chapter!  I will be surprised if Bella makes it through dinner.  How distracting!!! LOL!!!  But interesting sounding!  *giggle*

The punishment is fitting and I say that just by how Bella responded to it.  I do like how Edward explained to her why she was being punished, that Bella had to take care of herself or that she could cause  damage that might not be able to be fixed.  And for what?  Because she was in a hurry?  And I'm guessing, that in a way, the clip is a delish punishment of sorts too?  LOL!

 

My guess is that Tanya heard every bit of the conversation and I am sure that she is pissed.  But what was she doing there anyway if she is not considered part of the family??

About the postings.  Heck yeah, we will be disappointed that we are not getting what we are used to in scheduling but we will get over it! LOL!!  Everybody has RL stuff that they need to take care of and you are no different.  So, I am sure that everyone will understand and will look forward to when you do resume the normal schedule.  I mean it is not like you are stopping any posting until after the first of the year, so I am pretty happy with that!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

I'm sure Edward has something up his sleeve to take her mind off of the clip....I hope Tanya heard that conversation, after all the crap she said to Bella at the Gym...(serves that B***H right !!!   Thanks for  reading and leaving a comment, I have a yeaser for you..lml

Leaving out a long sigh I focused really hard on opening the twist tie that held the bread wrapper closed. Edward moved with me and as he passed by to get the wine out of the cooler his hand ran down the length of my arm. The extra sensation from his touch made my muscles clench tighter and I think I let out a whimper because Rose glanced at me with a smirked. 

 

Bastard!

 

I needed something else to occupy my mind and it didn’t matter what it was “Jasper” I looked up from the two loaves of bread “could you turn on some music?”

 

“Sure…anything in particular?” he asked moving to a panel in the wall. Before I could answer Emmett made an observation.

 

“You alright little Bella, you seem a kind of jumpy tonight” Edward’s voice came from behind me.

 

“Isabella’s been jumpy all weekend”

 

“I have not!” the words left my mouth without any thought of the repercussions they might cause. Emmett chuckled and a small giggle came from Rose who was standing next to me, but my eyes went to Edward. His face became stone cold hardness while his eyes widened as they turned dark. 

 

Oh Shit

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 09 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 86: Chapter 86

Okay so the caning....that went well.  I'm guessing that B is all better about that now?

Tanya and Dougie's little outbursts were funny.  I am curious as to why Edward had Demetri babysit Bella though.  Very interesting.  Can't imagine Tanya being around too much longer if that is the way she is going to act.  How can people stand her?

Off to read the next chapter.

Keye



Author's Response:

Ummm... all better with the caning?? well not her favorite activity and i still think that Edward will have to take that activity at a slow pace ... but at least now she knows she can handle it ...

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

OME!  But Edward is evil!!!! *wink*  "Now we are even" !  Ugh!  He is lucky that she does not strangle him in his sleep!! LOL!!! And I am curious as to what is going to happen with that little situation now?  I mean, is that Edward's punishment for Bella's "O"?  (and really, couldn't he take some responsiblity in that as well?) Or has he proved his point and they can move on?  Or is he going to leave her hanging but yet have him blow him because he shouldn't have to suffer?  If so, then I would have to go back to my original statement that he is luckythat she does not strangle him in his sleep!!  LMAO!!!!!!!!!!

My thoughts are that Heather is the one that tried to break into the house and that she is somehow affilated with James.  Of course that is what your writing is aluding to so perhaps you are trying to trick us into thinking that for some reason?  *giggle*

I do think it is completely plausible that Officer Hawk may have been one of the original officers at Bella's home after she was raped and that he may even have enough on James to bring him down but only with Bella's admittance that it was indeed James that attacked her.  I think that he was being gruff with Bella, pointing out that she still wanted to have her protective order because she knew exactly who attacked her and was scared out of her mind.  What she was telling Hawk and her actions were not exactly meshing.  I think that Hawk realizes, just as much as Bella, that James will attack her again at some point, if he is not stopped.  Bella has the power to put him away but refuses to do so.  I cannot help but wonder if Edward realizes this as well and if he will go all "Dom" on her and "make" her take the action that she really needs to take.

Hmmmm...or here is a thought.  If Heather is not a bad guy(girl).....what if she is a plant by the cops to try to glean info from Bella that will help them catch James?  (Then, of course, that would mean it was not her breaking into the house.....so we would be back to square one of who was it)  What if James is on suspicion of other things that they just can't nab him on and really need Bella's help with that?    So, much to ponder and I am so curious to see where this is all going to go.  I am so looking forward to finding out.

Okay, so your A/N was good!  It amazes me that questions that you have to answer and why you have to answer them.  I am not a participant in the lifestyle but I have commonsense that God gave me to figure out why Edward is doing some of the stuff that he does to Bella.  Hopefully you likening the relationship as a sort of child/parent relationship will help those who still do not understand.  That was a really good analogy.

Glad that you had a good Christmas.  Tell us what you think of the Nook, like now that you have it, would you go out and purchase it for yourself still?  I mean, over something else similar?  Like or don't like? 

And I hope that you are on the mend.  Going to the ER is not fun.  Being sick is not fun.  Hope you are feeling stronger!

Happy New Year!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hi Keye ..ummm, Edwrad's POV is up next and maybe you can get a better undestanding of what happened and why he did what he did...You can' beat Edward in his sleep, he's too damn handsome for that ...lol...Would I try and tick you? (giggle) anyway all you theoies are valid, I suppose as moe pieces come together you will be able to see if your right or not...of course you might change your ideas in the coming weeks...anyway...(sighs) I answer alot of questions, anything that gets answered on my postings is due to the fact that several people have asked or requested the same info...(You should see what I get asked in private -through e-mails....lol ) but I don't mind, anything that is too personal or educational ((because this is not D/s 101..lol )) I just tell them that i am not at liberty to devulge that info ..lol...Thanks for reading, I have a teaser for you....lml

I should have expected that she would have a nightmare, the trauma of having our home invaded was enough to unnerve me, I can only guess what memories it stirred in her. Removing my shirt that was full of tears and dirty from her nose I laid back down with her head on my chest. “We’ll change the locks tomorrow and figure out who it was, that will make you feel safer. It was just a dream Bella, I swear I would die before I let anyone hurt you.”  

 

“Don’t say that!”

 

I wasn’t sure what she was talking about when she abruptly shot her head up to look at me. “I couldn’t stand it if something happened to you. I couldn’t take it”

 

Even in the darkness of the room I could see the fierceness in Bella’s eyes as the tears fell down her face. “Nothing is going to happen to me, and nothing is going to happen to you. Now stop with the tears and lets go back to sleep”

 

Cupping her face my thumb wiped away the tears as she nuzzled her cheek against my palm before turning her head to placing a soft kiss in the center of my hand. “Do you think I’m crazy?”

 

“No…” why the hell would I think that?  

 

“…I think it was a stressful night and I think you have a lot on your mind and have dealt with more in your life then any one person should have to deal with. I told you before baby, I think you are the strongest person I know; a lesser person would have called it quits a long time ago. Now let’s go back to sleep, I have a promise to keep to a dog”

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Hmmmm........did Seth find something interesting to look at or was he just hanging out looking out the window?  Totally cracked me up when Edward told Bella not to cum while she was getting her tattoo.  Don't know why but that just struck me.  I think Edward would have been soooo jealous if she had.  And when Alex just smiled, I wondered if it had happened before with some other customer or something.  I have no experience with tattoos so I did not know if that was really a possiblity or not.  Interesting.


Is it just me or does Felix seem to be showing up a lot?  Hmmmm.


Looking forward to the next one!

Keye



Author's Response:

I believe it has happened where a woman will orgasm or come very close to it during a tattoo. Which is why they keep going back for more :)

Felix does show up and he's nosey....Thanks for the comments, I have a teaser for you....lml

 

Edward was standing at the sink brushing his teeth, the muscles in his shoulder flexing as his arm moved. I reached out to run my fingers down the length of his spine before wrapping my hand around his waist and laying my head between his shoulder blades.

 

“I’m trying Edward, please don’t be mad at me” I could hear the air leave his lungs.

 

“Bella, I’m not mad at you. I am furious with a world that would allow so much hurt into your life. I want to take it all away, right now- today. I can’t and that makes me feel inadequate. But I know it’s going to take time and a lot of reassurance and baby…” He stopped abruptly.

 

“What?” I wanted him to finish his thought. But instead he turned around to face me.

 

“Nothing…” I knew there was something but I had no clue what it was. “…I told you last night I would give you all the time you needed, and I’m not going to push you, so…nothing. When you’re ready to let go of the shame you carry, you’ll tell me.”

 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Okay, I just have to say that I adore this story!  I just clicked over to read a couple of chapters to check it out and now I am hooked.  Was reading People Like Us and she recommended your story so here I am.  And am I correct in remembering that you said this was your first fanfic writing?  Well you are doing a great job in my humble opinion.  Now, seriously, enough with the babbling...............I have to get back to reading. Your fault you know!!! LOL!!

 

Keye



Author's Response:

I was very excited when my beta told me this morning about that rec on "People Like Us' as a new writer to have someone of her caliber recognize my work, I was humbled. But welcome to my story, I hope you keep enjoying it...lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Still loving the story.  I am so busy reading that I do forget to comment.  Sorry about that!  Love the way you have developed your characters.  I have noticed grammatical errors but it has not taken away from my enjoyment of the story.  I feel like such an ass for even bringing that up but you said you wanted comments and it was on my mind.  I do hope that you do not take offense in my bringing it up. 


Anyway, I am enjoying the story.  I cannot wait to find out more about  Bella's past as it makes her the person that she is currently.  Curious to see how Edward is going to use that information to help Bella.  Love how the family is already in love with Bella too.  I also like that you have Leah and Jake together.  That is a nice change.  Alice and Jasper with children?  Like that too.  You have added a lot of different things in your story and it makes it interesting.


Got to get back to reading!

Keye



Author's Response:

No, I know there were grammer errors. this is also my beta's first FF and she did not join me until chapter 14. Right now she is in the process of proofing the chapters that were posted before that. I was writing and proofing my own work and missed alot. When I was in college (2 years ago) my daughter who is a High School English teacher would proof all my work, however she refused to do it for what she refered to as 'Her mothers sex story' lololo... but MommyLovesEdward (my beta who I absolutly adore) is fixing it for me. So no offence taken, I said before these are the things that I want to hear so that I can bring a better story... So welcome to our story and thanks for reading and leaving a comment...lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Good you got a beta!!!  You need to be free to write creatively and let someone else work out the grammatical details. 

Yep, it appears that Bella is going to get what she has been asking for.  Lucky heifer!  Yes, your Edward is perfect!  I love how you write him. 

I assume the numbers to the security code correspond with letters to make up a word but I am too lazy to try and figure it out.  All I want to do is get on to the next chapter!!!  LOL!!!



Again............your fault!!!!  Just sayin'!!!!!!  LOL!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Yeah ...it spells -safety - go...read, read ...lol

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

I thought the chapter was hot!  Damn lucky Bella!  *giggle*  Okay, so still curious to hear more about Bella's past.  I mean, the shit locked her in a box????  Good grief.  I am so surprised that Jake did not absolutely  kick his butt to the point that he would be unreconizable!!!   Geez!!

 

On to read more!

keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Unbelievably hot.  Makes me wonder what all Edward is going to try on Bella.  Of course we have not seen what their hard limits are so I am curious about that.  Poor Bella, hopefully Edward can work on her self esteem.  I could not believe that she would not have thought of going with Edward to his parents house for Mother's Day. 

And Edward in Forks?  Well that ought to be something to read for sure!!!


Got to get back to the story!  I takes all I can do to stop and leave comments! LOL!!!  Just anxious to get to the next chapter. 

Keye



Author's Response:

Bella's limits are listed on my extra's page...you can that out if you want too...lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I thought the collaring scene was romantic.  Loved Bella's response to it.  It was, in short, perfectly written in my opinion.  Silly girl, we always want more lemons!!!!! LOL!!!!

 

Keye



Author's Response:

Thanks ...I'm glad you liked it and the lemons? Well I suppose I could write one or two more :)...lololololol 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I have to say that I enjoy reading your A/N's as well.  You crack me up!! Enough lemons you ask?  *Keye taps fingers on table*  Hmmm..........I mean, can you really every have enough lemons???  LMAO!!!!


The pj thing and Emmett learing at Bella?  Well, what do you expect?  She looked hot and he is a man.  I don't think that Emmett means anything by it.  I look at it as he is admiring a work of art.  But on the same token I don't blame Edward for covering Bella up.  Close family or no.

This story is yummy.  I got to get back to it!

Keye



Author's Response:

See I thought it was funny and innocent, but others were ticked off about that....and yes he should have covered her up becasue she was uncomfortable and they are a very close family....

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Okay so I have seen all the sutle hints.  Like the vehicle that Edward noticed outside of Bella's house when he was out jogging some chapters back and now Seth's collar is missing and has not been found.   We have not heard from James at all and wondering if all of this has to do with him?  I know that you cannot answer this question and give away your story but you know that I had to ask!  *smile*  Hopefully, someone will be there to give him an ass whiping should he ever be brave enough to bother Bella.

Still enjoying your story as evidenced by the fact that I am sitting here, reading it all in on setting.  Speaking of which, I got to go do some more reading!

keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Hmph!  Now I am all caught up and will have to wait for updates like everyone else!   Bummer!!!  *snicker*!   Still loving this story.  I will have to admit it is more fun blazing through the chapters at will!!


I am looking forward to your next update!

Keye



Author's Response:

Awe...I feel bad for you, and I have a teaser for you too...lml

“You know what I think?” He raised his eyebrows “No I don’t but I would love to know love to hear it”

 

“I think you are wrong …“ Edward raised his eyebrows in disbelief, but I went on to explain before he could interrupt my train of thought. “ …about us needing to go to the club more often just to let people see us. I think we should go as you have already planned but not any extra times just to appease your adoring public.” Edward got that perplexed look on his face again.

 

“Think about it. All anyone really knows is that I showed up one night with Aro’s card. You yourself were kind of intrigued about how I knew him.” Edward nodded

 

“Your right I was, Aro doesn’t give them out.” I went on with my theory, while Edward’s hands moved down to rub my bottom.

 

“Then the next thing anyone knows is that sometime within the next week, you and I got together and then when they see us I’m sporting your collar around my neck. Now in order to justify why that happened they come up with all sorts of circumstances that would explain it. Which is alright but then like an arrogant child who is looking for attention from their daddy, they start spouting it to others, knowing it’s going to get back to you”

 

“Is that the psychologist talking? Because let me get this straight. They…” he pointed to my computer “… are the arrogant child and I am the daddy, and they are doing this to get a rise out of me?” I nodded.

 

“And it’s working”

 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

OMG!  What James did to Bella?  He deserves no less than death!  I cannot believe that someone could do that to another person!  Ugh!  Not only can I not imagine what Bella went through, I cannot imagine being her friends that found her.  The fact that Bella is as sane and loving as she is with all that she went through is amazing.   She is an incredible character and you write her really well. 

I hope that James, at some point in this story, gets his just desserts if you get my meaning.


This was an incredibly disturbing chapter but one that probably had to be written so that one can fully grasp the horror that Bella went through. 

What a story.............you are doing a great job.


Keye



Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind words of praise...and you will find out very soon, what Bella went through to get where she is. as far as James goes, well I guess you will have to wait and see..lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 02 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Hmmmm.........just curious as to why they keep ignoring all the in-your-face-clues about the dog?  That his collar was missing then found in a place where he would not go and now Seth barking when Edward admitted that he had never heard him bark before??  I know, I know...........it is all part of the story!  *giggle*  Just had to say it though..

Also wonder if Bella will ever tell Edward the scope of abuse that she suffered at the hands of James and how he is going to process all of that.  Yes, Jake did kick the shit out of him, but if James is back around now, he didn't really learn from that, did he?  So....................he probably needs his crazy ass beat again.  Just sayin'..........

 

Oh my gosh, the bets?  Too funny!!!  And it sounds like the next chapter has the potential to be HAWT!!!!


Keye



Author's Response:

You know how when things are in front of you, you just don't see it? That's how......lI liked the bets too, and when my beta stopped reading and e-mailed me that she burst out laughing,, I knew it was good...lol Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. becasue it is a thursday post, I have a teaser for you....lml

“The phone Bella” I could see him trying to rein in his anger and I knew that had we been anywhere else but this room, I would have been Isabella at that moment.

 

“I turned it off”

 

“You…” Edward didn’t get to finish his statement because I continued to explain.

 

“On the way back, Sally was upset and we were talking and the phone kept ringing and interrupting us, so I turned it off.” He sat there with his head down running his hand through his hair for what seemed like forever before his eyes finally met mine again and he released a long sigh.

 

“Bella..” Edward sighed again “I’m going to give you one more chance to just stay in this room and relax tonight. I’ll bring your dinner up here; we’ll take a long bath and watch TV.”

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

That has got to be hard doling out the punishment when needed.  I would hate to have to do that.  I almost think that the mental punishment, for Bella, is worse.  The whole marker on the foot thing.  Probably is going to work much better than if he spanked her.  The spanker would be over but that marker on her foot is going to last awhile.  Making her think about her decision.  Ugh! 

The video idea was kind of neat too.  Hadn't thought about that. 

Keye



Author's Response:

Do you mean watching  the video he had made? You never watched yourself have sex? Ohhh...you soooo have to to do that....Make the video and then a few days later sit down with your partner, make some popcorn, drink some wine and watch... :) .It will be a good night...lol.. BTW...thanks for the comment, I have  teaser for you.....lml

“Bella it sounds to this one like you are depending upon your Master.”

 

“I am and that scares me.” I admitted in defeat. I could see the question raging in her eyes I didn’t give her a chance to pose it.

 

“Jane I never depended on anyone in my life. Anytime I did it was a complete disappointment. So I just learned to do everything on my own. I hate the fact that I am so weak to need Edward so much.”

 

“Bella there is no such things as needing your Master too much. Let’s make that clear right now.” Jane’s voice turned demanding “He wants to be needed, it brings him satisfaction to meet your needs and see that you are properly taken care of. There is also no such thing as a weak submissive. It takes a lot of strength, courage and confidence to give yourself over so completely to someone else. It is not an easy thing to do and those that try because they think it is an effortless life find out very soon that it is not. That usually happens with the first punishment.”

 

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 25 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Oh yeah, that song is purrrfect for your story!  Uh huh..........so Bella is going to 'red'?  Well I cannot wait to see what that is going to be all about.   Damn ink.........be gone!  *giggle*

 

Okay, so I cannot wait to hear how Bella explains the whole 'deep throating banana bit'!  That is going to be hysterical, I just know it!  LOL!!!


Hmmm...........I wonder how long it will be before poor Bella stops freaking out over everything.  LIke the deal with Casius?  Does she think that Edward would let him have her.........really???  And did she really think that Edward would have left the house without telling her??  Poor baby!!!

As always, I cannot waif to see what happens next!

Keye



Author's Response:

I didn't say she was going to...I said -if she does - it will be over something important. Not smoething that I deem to be a minor request. I mean really if something so simple bothers her that much, she is in the wrong lifestyle....She freaked out becasue all those thoughts ran through her mind and she went to find Edward to talk to him about it....and he wasn't there...and she couldn't find him...and his car was gone....and the fear over took her and then someone other trhen Edward touched her and she freaked......thanks for reading ...lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Lunch with Jane was interesting.  I would think it terribly hard to live as a slave 24-7.  I don't know how she does it.  I think the most valuable piece of info that Jane gave was that a Dominant has to have obedience too.  No scene in this chapter made me mad at all.  Though I supposed people might get angry that Edward came on her face and neck.  However, he told her that she could not finish him with her mouth until a future date so I don't see what the problem was.  So, do you think that is what will have people mad at Edward about?

 

Keye



Author's Response:

yes that is the scene that is making people mad, the cum on her face. But, he has to follow through with what he said or how can she trust him?  Thanks for the comments...lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

That was an awesome cliffie.  Loved that Bella's mom visited her.  To warn her?  Where is Edward or is that who was coming towards her??  So, basically what I am asking is, WTH is going on???  LOL!!!

Hadn't tried zip lining but if I ever get the chance to, I am on it!!!

Questions for Jane and Aro:

Why have Jane be a slave?  Why not just a sub?  Who, ultimately, wanted Jane to be a slave......she or Aro?  Or was it really a joint decision?  Well, you know what I mean.......who wanted it more?  Did Aro school Edward in this lifestyle?  Sorry, I couldn't remember.

Who was in the lifestyle first?  Jane or Aro?  Or how did Aro get into the lifestyle?  Did he have slaves prior to Jane? 

Can't wait to see what happens in the next update!!

Keye



Author's Response:

hi Keye .... Thanks for the questions for the OT ,,,,

glad you liked the last chapter... sorry this is so late in getting out, but here is this weeks teaser...louise.

“You did your father’s wash?” that sounded like something a kid shouldn’t do.

 

“Yeah…since I was ten or eleven.” there must have been some kind of bewilderment on my face because she justified herself. “I told you this. Charlie worked all kinds of weird hours; mostly he would sleep during the day and …”

 

Breaking in to her train of thought I made the assumption “You did all the chores”

 

She shrugged “Someone had too”

 

I truly couldn’t imagine any ten year old taking it upon themselves to be responsible for keeping a house. I suppose that would be another reason why at the tender age of eighteen Bella thought herself ready for marriage. It seems so clear to me that she had hopes and dreams for a regular life, college, career and all the other things that eighteen year olds dream about. However in her advanced maturity she pushed her own happiness aside and took on the responsibility of trying to please someone else. I had thought Bella to be a natural submissive and it would seem like she was.

 

The mistake she made was in her choice of partners. I have no doubt that had he not been abusive she would have been a perfect wife. Bella did everything within her power to see to his happiness even to the point of losing her own.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 18 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Hmmm.....the hand signals remind me of dog training.  Though I am sure that some form of communication will be needed when she is instructed to not talk.  On the swallowing, well she followed directions and she got what she wanted just like he said that she would. 

The outfits sounded pretty.  Can't wait for the description of the one that Edward is waiting to see. 


The wax event description sounded pretty neat. 

Curious to know what, if anything, Bella's dream meant in the beginning of the chapter.

Edward offering Bella either a shoulder to cry on or a hard fukking?  Well, it just doesn't get any better than that does it??  LOL!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

That's my kind of man ...lol

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

I keep forgetting that this is your first FF.  That is because you are doing a great job at it.  Like everything is old hat and you have written plenty of FF's!!  Had no idea about vitamin sperm!!!  LOL!!  I do try to learn something new everyday!!  And so I have!  LOL!!

No I did not think Edward would be mad about the banana.  I think he just wanted to know what the girls were talking about because he is just as nosy as any other man who would have scene the girls and wondered wth they were up too.

Poor Rose.  Yes, her story needed to be told.  And you did really well on that.  Am I to guess that it was maybe Rose that hit Royce over the head with the baseball bat in the bar?  I thought that since she worked in a bar maybe she did?  IDK.  Just a stray thought I had.  Anyway, he deserved it.  The creep!!!  Just sayin'!!!

Little Emmie...........good one.  I especially liked his reaction to the girls teaching his little sister how to deep throat!  Too funny!  Yeah guys like that but they don't want to know that their sisters or mothers do that, do they?  I find that amusing.

Yeah, the damn foot.  Hell I was trying to think if I have ever had a Sharpie mark last this long!!! LOL!!!!

I enjoyed the chapter and looking forward to your next update!!

Keye



Author's Response:

I feel the love...lol ..No Rose did not hit Royce, she didn't start working in the bar until after she left Chicago ... Emmett is the big brother who you are right doesn't want to think about his baby sister doing such things....Thanks for reading, I have a teaser for you...lml

 

 

 

The music was playing in the background and either Emmett or Alice complained about the selection. Personally it didn’t matter to me, I had an eclectic taste when it came to music, and it appeared Bella did too. Because it didn’t matter if it was country or rap she sang along to almost every song. It was great to see her so relaxed and as I thought about it, I was very relaxed myself.

 

“Oh, you guys must all like this song” Alice blurted out when Eminem’s, Love the way you lie came on. 

 

Bella played her double six then looked to my sister but Rose was the one who asked. “Why would we like this song?”

 

She looked up from the dominos in front of her “It’s all about S&M”

 

Bella laughed Rose just stared at her I had to admit I was dumbfounded. “Alice” Jasper interrupted “This song is not about S&M”

 

Alice started singing the refrain. ‘That’s alright, because I like the way it hurts…She likes it” she then turned to look at Bella “You like when it hurts, right?”

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 01 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

A cliffie of sorts, eh??  Sneaky!  LOL!!  Finally, the damn marker wore off!  Geez!  LOL!!!  Are you talking about the gel made by Durex?

Bring on the next chapter!!! *giggle*

Enjoyed it!

Keye



Author's Response:

Ummm ... no the gel is Orgasmic from Fantasia Home Parties... It's like a tupperware party with dildo's ...It might be made by Durex but I always get it from Fantasia ...here's the link if you want to check it out...lml

http://corporate.fantasiahomeparties.com/Products/ProductDetails.aspx?prodid=184&cid=110

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Emmett totally cracks me up.

 

I was going to answer him but Emmett’s voice echoed through the wall, “Find out another night, because I’m fucking tired!”

“You were both fucking loud, now go to sleep!” Emmet’s voice once again resonated through the wall.

Okay, the little toy that Edward bought Bella to tease her with?  Torture!  LOL!!  I don't know how she did it!  And her calling it her new BFF?  Funny.  I try to learn something new everyday and I'm thinking that I probably learn something new every time I read one of your updates!!!!  LOL!!  I love it!!

Curious to see why Edward was so abrupt in the bedroom and what Bella's reward will be!

Keye

 



Author's Response:

Emmett cracks me up too...Hey at least he waited until they were done...lol ....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a teaser for you...lml

 

When I got back to Bella she was half awake thanks to Seth’s persistence, I sat on the edge of the couch looking down at her.

 

“Hey” my fingers ran along the line of her jaw.

 

“Hi. Do I smell food” I smiled at her

 

“You do. Are you hungry?”

 

“Starving” she admitted while she sat up “It’s weird because I ate lunch”

 

“Yeah well that was four hours ago and your body worked really hard on the way home” her lip went between her teeth while her face flushed pink. I chuckled at her response “What are you thinking?”

 

“I’m thinking about my reward. I get a reward.” Bella’s whole face lit up and her eyes sparkled. 

 

“That you do, what would you like?” I asked tucking a lock of hair behind her ear

 

“You” I looked into her eyes “You have me love.”

 

“Nooo…I want you” Bella flung herself at me straddling my lap with a force so hard she knocked me backwards on the couch.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Hmmmm.....my first initial reaction to the word "slut" is a negative one.  But if Edward called me that followed by lots of playtime?  Well, I don't think that would bother me one little bitty bit!!!!! LOL!!!  Plus, it can be said that it is all part of the "dirty talk" during a sexually charged encounter so I guess what I am saying is that it is all good!!!

The dance floor orgasm?  Yummy!  Lucky heifer!!  Just sayin'!!!  Loved the song choices.  Convo between Jake and Edward had to happen and you did it well.  Maybe they understand each other a little more.  Had to laugh at Jake's comments about Bella's dress!!!  Cracked me up!

Bella getting Edward dressed?  Hmmm.........really..........how is that different from undressing him??  I mean, I know technically what that means but theorhetically?  What is the difference?  I mean, I would have no problem taking his clothes off at all.  The only problem I would have with putting them on him is that I would REALLY rather be taking them off if you catch my meaning...............*snicker*. 

Totally agree with Bella about calling the toy BFF.  I dont' like the other name either.  In fact, I probably would have marketed it that way if I was the company that made it.

Loved the guys "enlghtening" Edward about the girls goodbyes!!  It is all so true!!!!!  And I loved the way Edward stopped that from happening too!

 

Um........."brown cunt"????????????

On Leah's comment?  Yeah well, she probably shouldn't have said the "normal" comment thing but I could see how that happens.  You would not think you would have to police your comments that closely.  Personally? I think they all blew it all out of proportion.

Needless to say, I cannot wait to see what happens next!

Keye



Author's Response:

Brown cunt comes from chapter 33..on the ride home, Bella was re-naming C-grip and she said pinky C no that would be a pink cunt and that's gross but I guess it's better then a brown on, is there such a thing ...lol ..she was rambling in her mind and then when Edward picked her up she was still rambling....thanks for all the comments ..lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 12 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Um.........yes?!?!?!!    What a chapter!  All of it very interesting to say the least.  I guess I would sleep good too!! *giggle*

Congratulations on your 1000 reviews!!  That is just awesome!!


Keye



Author's Response:

Me Too...sleep, my poor body would be worn out ....lol ....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a teaser for you....lml

After taking a quick shower I started to dress in the little cubical but it’s hard to move in there and the floor was wet. Once my underwear was on, I moved out into the main part of the locker room to dry the ends of my hair and finish dressing. Sitting on the bench was the reason for my uneasiness. I had only seen her once before but there was no mistaking the tall strawberry blond, Tanya.

 

Fucking great…

 

She eyed me as I moved to plug in the hair dryer; her intent gaze on me making my anger flare.

 

“Do you want something?” I asked catching her gaze in the mirror.

 

“No. There is nothing you have that I want.” I didn’t miss the double meaning in her statement and frankly I didn’t believe her anyway. I knew damn well what I had that she wanted.

 

“I am surprised though, Edward doesn’t normally collar his flavor of the month.” I turned off the dryer yanking the plug out of the wall while she went on. “You do know that’s what you are right? Just something to pass his time with, I wouldn’t get too comfortable if I was you.”

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 17 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

So, I am wondering how Bella is going to deal with all these emotions that she has pushed under the rug as well as how Edward is going to handle it.  For some reason, I am thinking it is going to get a lot worse before it gets better, isn't?  But whatever she has to go through to heal.

Good for Bella sticking up for herself against Tanya.  Just shows, further, that she is a strong individual even during the times when she may really not think that.

Another great chapter!  Of course I cannot wait to see what happens next!!!

Keye

 

 



Author's Response:

I think you are right about it getting worse... and I don't think that Bella has heard the last from Tanya...lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 18 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

No I cannot believe that next Thursday is Thanksgiving!!!  It totally blows my mind.  The 10 minutes?  Yes, well I am sure that they used them well.  With Edward?  Hell anytime would be put to good us in that department!! LOL!!!


Glad that Edward is finally putting two and two together about all the strange things that have been happening so that he is going to check into it a little more.  Interesting that Aro thinks that a member of the club has been checking into Bella's background.  Wonder if it is Stefan and if he has any ties, whatsoever, with James or something like that.  I am really surprised that Edward would not know that information about Bella's finances himself.   Didn't he check into her background somewhat?  I cannot remember.  But don't Doms normally make it their mission in life to know every little thing about their subs?? 

IDK if Edward sitting back and waiting for Bella to come to him about what is bothering her is a good idea or not.  But I am more of a "let's get this shit out on the table and deal with it" kind of gal.  I get the feeling he does not want push her over the edge but I think her sitting around thinking about and letting it fester isn't necessarily the best option either.  It is almost, like Edward says, a damned if you do damned if you don't kind of situation isn't?

Well, needless to say, I cannot wait to see where you take us next!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Evenually he was going to put the pieces together and see that something was not kosher...and for the ten minutes I see some mutal oral pleasure happening ..have a great weekend...usual ...Here is a teaser for you...lml

We sat a little longer talking about some of the things she would like to do there. I had not been to Victoria in a long time and there were some new attractions that were possibilities for us to see. I thought it was a good time to bring up the extended stay at the beach. Bella seemed very opened to that possibility, made all the more attractive because both hotels allowed pets.

 

“When you talk to Alice would you get the name of the hotel so I can sort of figure out what the cost is going to be” The statement was harmless enough but my answer must not have been.

 

“I got it Bella you don’t have to worry about paying” her eyes narrowed

 

“Edward I’m not going to let you pay for the whole thing. We’re both going we’ll both pay”

 

“I’m the one that suggested the long trip, I got it” I watched as the resentfulness rolled across her face.

 

“This is not up for discussion, I’m paying my half”

 

What does she mean half are we going to split the cost of meals?  

 

“Isabella be…” I didn’t get to finish, Bella’s eyes turned to pure fury

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Interesting the Eleazer apologised for Tanya.  Of course I can only imagine what could have happened if Tanya had tried to apologise in person.  Somehow I don't think this little situation is over.

Whew!  Bella blew didn't she?  I am glad that Edward is understanding and did not just react to Bella's actions.  That he realized what she said had nothing to do with what she was going through and having to deal with. And I wonder if Edward will ever know the entire story of what Bella went through or is what he now knows enough.  IDK.....

Leah is being a tweensy bit of a beyotch you think? 

Hmmmm..........well.........I cannot wait to see what happens next. 

Enjoy the chapter!

Keye



Author's Response:

Glad you liked it and Eleazer took it upon himself becaseu he is responsibale for Tanya ,,,, leah has some issues that will be coming out soon....lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Well I had several glasses of wine but I wish I had known about the empty shot glass rule!  LOL!!!  Now I am doing that next year!  No, it was a great Thanksgiving.  Nobody died, cried or bled!  It was a Hallmark Thanksgiving!!!

Loved this chapter.  I don't understand why Edward would not know his actions would affect Bella in the manner in which they did.  You cannot go from always wanting to fukk her brains out then nothing!  Thankfully he understood and gave her what she needed as he always promised that he would.  And now they have both had make up sex! A win-win for everyone.

My dad called, after leaving my cousin's house after midnight, to say that people were already camping out in front of Best Buy waiting for them to open.  It was 34 degrees!!  Were you there?   LOL!!!!!  JK

Can't wait for the next update to hear what Edward thought about all this.  It ought to be interesting!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

I was one of those people we left the house at mid-night and I was home around 9am ...all in all it was a good night...now about Edward, He had his head in his ass, and the pressure was causing him to not be able to think clearly ....he is like any other man, however unlike most men he can admit it ....

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

This chapter certainly did not disappoint!  I adore EPOV and you did an excellent job here.  Can't help but wonder though, about the shadow.  Was it really just tree limbs?  And Bella cracked me up when she told him that her orgasams were so worth it even though she knows she is probably going to be punished later for them. 

Needless to say, I cannot wait to see what happens next.

Keye



Author's Response:

As far as Edward knows ..it was the tree...lol on the orgasm...I'm sure they were worth it, but will they be in the morning???

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 08 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

"The Tease" would have been a great name for this chapter!  The entire chapter was one l-o-n-g tease!  *giggle* 

Love Steel Magnolias!!!  Happened to see Shelby's house while in Natchitoches, Louisiana during their Christmas Festival of Lights.  Remember in the movie, the Christmas festival by the river?  Well that is real and it is fun to visit there too.  Anyway, probably more than you ever wanted to know about my liking Steel Magnolias!  LOL!!

And I am going to check out that book too.  Read about it on Amazon and it looks hysterical and I have got to read it.

I cannot wait to see what happens next!  *snicker*

Keye



Author's Response:

yeah... that festival of lights is real? i think I would like to see that,,, and yes the book is real and amusing and actually very dead on ...lol ...let me know if you get it what you think about it ....lml

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 08 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Yep, the Christmas Fesival is real.  Check out their website:

http://www.christmasfestival.com/

Shelby's house which is a B&B that you can stay at:

http://www.steelmagnoliahouse.com/

Keye



Author's Response:

I'm going to look that up...Thanks

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

Hmmmmmmmmmmmm.......Did Edward want Bella to tell him, exactly what she wanted him to to with the vibrator and was that why he put it lengthwise in her mouth?  Kind of like a punishment because she did not do what he wanted?  I was curious about that.

"Deeper into to the ectasy....."  Sounds wonderful, where do I sign up?  LOL!!  But, seriously, how nice would it be to have a guy so in tune with everything that you need emotionall and physically? 

Loved the chapter.  Edward was totally wicked and sweet all at the same time.

Keye



Author's Response:

Edward wants exact responds ....ahhh... yes can i get one of those??...lol ....thanks for reading, here is your teaser...

Picking up the first box I actually grunted because it was heavier than I thought it would be. After putting it on the table I turned around to see Bella carrying another one of the boxes.

 

“Isabella what are you doing?” I asked her while taking the box from her hand then realized the one she had was heavier then the first.

 

“I was carri…” I cut her off before she could finish

 

“I thought you had a fifteen pound weight limit”

 

“I do…” I stared at her in bewilderment

 

“This box has to be at least forty pounds” she looked at me like a deer caught in the head lights. I wasn’t mad –much- it was more concern for her wellbeing. Once the box was on the table I pulled Bella in for a hug. “I don’t want you to hurt yourself, so don’t do that anymore”

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44

uh oh!  Sounds like Bella is in trouble again!  LOL!!  Love the advice that Jacob gave Edward.............for him to stay out of the issues between the sisters.  Yeah, that is probably very good advice!

Best line:  “Mommy makes Aunt Bella red underwear.” 

I think I would choke too!!  Going to be hard to explain that one!  LOL!!  As far as questions, surprisingly enough I don't have any this time.

Okay, so I cannot wait to see what happens next!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

out of the mouths of babes...lol

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 24 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

Ewwwwww...........a pinky mouse!  I had never heard that before.  Ick!    Yes, Bella had a LOT to contend with tonight and she still is going to get punished, so to speak, when she gets home.  Bummer!  I died laughing when she asked for ketchup to choke down some $38.00 a pound pate!!!  That was funny.

Hmmmmm..............the alarm was triggered?  Good grief, what is going on now pray tell???

Hey and you do NOT have to apologize for posting late!  Heck I am glad that you posted at all with Christmas being right around the corner so I am completely estatic!!

Merry Christmas to you and yours!!!

 

Keye



Author's Response:

the pinky mouse is gross and to think my son-in-law actually ate one....(((gaggg)))....and ketchup makes anything bareable,,,,lol ....thanks for reading. I have your teaser ..lml.....

“Hey” my thoughts had taken over my attention so much that Edward’s voice startled me causing me to flinch.

 

“I’m sorry babe…” he chuckled “…I didn’t mean to scare you” My eyes moved towards his they were warm and bright making me smile.

 

“It’s ok. Where have you been?” Edward sighed

 

“Ahhh…well while some of us get to lay around in the tub others leave the dog out, hang up their clothes and talk to irate fathers from Forks” the auditable gasp left my throat and I couldn’t mask the horror in my voice.

 

“You talked to Charlie?”

 

“Hmm...Yes I did” Edward sat down on the floor with his back against the wall of the tub pulling the cork out of a bottle of wine that I didn’t see he had.

 

“What did he want?”

 

As I sat up straight turning with my arm lying on the wall by his head, Edward handed me a glass before he started talking. “He was just concerned about you Bella and he wanted to make sure that after what happened you were safe.”

 

“And?” I knew there had to be more

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 07 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Okay so Officer Hawk did not know Bella previously and was going by what dispatch told him?  So, he was just doing a background check on the people in the house at the time of the break in.  Well that explains a lot then. 

Yes, of couse, you knew that Bella was going to be embarrassed and really, it was all in good fun.  And Esme and Carlisle wouldn't have gone in with them if they did not love her.

And yes, Edward did make it all better.  Bella got a little bit of revenge back at him during their smexxy times though, didn't she?  *giggle*

So, "Heather" left the Center, huh?  Interesting............of course I am very curious about that.

If I was not so exhausted, I would be more verbose!  But I got to pack it in for the night as I am about to fall asleep in front of the computer!  LOL!!!

Looking forward to your next update when you are ready!!!


Keye



Author's Response:

hmmmm... yes Heather left the center and Esme and Carlisle do love her ,,, and Officer Hwak...well I guess we will see....

Thanks for reading, I have a teaser for you....lml

Walking into the house all the cares that had been forgotten came crashing back as he told me that the locksmith would be there in about a half-hour. I used that time to tell him what I had learned about Heather.

 

“Do you think that could have been her on the video?” He asked me as we sat outback playing fetch with Seth and a tennis ball.

 

“It could have been. But how would she know where you lived. I mean really Edward if she knew where I was why go to the center?” He thought about that for a few seconds as he once again threw the ball into the grass.

 

“I’m going to call Mr. Weiss and let him check on it, I’m also going to see if he can check on your Officer Hawk.”

 

“My Officer Hawk?”

 

He smirked “Well he’s not mine besides he didn’t really care until he found out who you were, and I’m not taking any chances. I don’t know how it will work with him being a cop and all but…” I cut him off because I had gotten an ingenious idea.

 

“I could have Charlie do it.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 11 May 2011 Title: Chapter 65: Chapter 65

Computer problems make me sad, mad and not glad!  LOL!!

Congrats on the new grandbaby!

Hmmm.....Edward's mind is working overtime isn't?

Geesh...Paul has no sense of self preservation at all, does he?

Lightbulb moment:

Dawning came to me as I thought about it, the boys weren’t blind to Bella’s charms, they were afraid of Jacob’s bronze.

But still, did Jacob have to listen to Bella when she asked him to lay off James?? 

Dying to know what this is all about.  Bet Edward is too:

“I can’t live it without you…besides we made a pact…remember?”  Jacob held his hand up with his forefinger sticking out.

“Yeah…I remember,” Bella’s forefinger grasped his curling around it with a resounding, “…always.”

“Always.”

Uh huh........now just what could Maggie want? 

Can't wait to read more!

Keye

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 13 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Hmmmmm.......Edward obviously thinks it was someone that he had over to the house.  I am going to have to think about that for awhile because I am too lazy to go back and check through the chapters.  Didn't he have some people over from the club to discuss the missing booze or whatever?  Trying to remember.  It will come to me.

Also pondering what Sally and Dana said about Heather.  Yes that is all very strange indeed.

I am glad to read that you are feeling better and your technical difficulties are over.  And really?  Too much smut?  What kind of sex lives are they having at home?  Little, none?  I mean, these two are consenting, highly attractive adults.  If Rob was mine, I would be jumping his bones every damn day, probably a lot more than once.  Just sayin' !!

Not interested in Bella's thoughts?  That is interesting.  I mean, this is a story about her jouney into something new as well.  Of course, if they just mean that they love EPOV, well............who doesn't??  LOL!!  Grateful to hear nothing is going to happen to Seth.  That would just send Bella over the edge!

My thoughts are on your story is that you need to write it as you see fit.  I have know some writers who bowed to their readers instead of keeping the story as they wanted to write it.  The result?  Well, I didn't think it lived up to its true potential.  What, I guess, readers do not understand is that they have a choice to read or not read a story.  If you don't like what is going on ..........like "too much smut" and forgive me when I say this but, WTF??????  Then stop reading it!!  How much more simple can that get????????

Kudos to the chick who requested that Edward not lose his Dom edge!!!  *stands up and claps*  Great advice!!!!  Not that you needed it, right? But still good to know that was a concern.  LOL!!

Hey I love the you update as often as you do so if you are delayed somewhat, it is still all good, you know what I mean????

I cannot wait to read what happens next in this story!

Keye



Author's Response:

I love EPOV too...but it really is Bella's journey that's at the heart of the story....Thanks for reading I have this weeks teaser for you ...lml...

“It’s just the food” I told him as he followed me to the door barking the whole time “Seth!” I admonished while shutting down the alarm and opening the door to a very stunned Irena.

 

“Since when do you have a dog Edward?”

 

I didn’t respond to her question instead sighing heavily “What can I do for you Irena?”

 

“You can invite me in” She said as if it should be obvious.

 

Hesitantly I moved to the side to allow her entrance locking the door but leaving the alarm off, I wasn’t taking any chances. She stood in my living room watching Seth as he sat by my feet.

 

“I never thought you to be a dog lover” The sweetness in her voice confused me because the last time we spoke it was anything but friendly. That was the day she and Caius attacked Bella for which I found their actions deplorable.

 

“Cut the crap Irena why are you here?” My tone was rude but she deserved it and I didn’t trust her.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Never, ever, ever apologize for putting in smut!!  Geez Louise!!  They are two consenting adults who have an active sex life.  For goodness sakes, let them enjoy it! LOL!!

About the whole peen kissing thing?  Rules are rules, right?  Got to abide by them or suffer the consequences.  Not just in a Dom/sub relationship but in all facets of life.  I still don't understand why people don't get that simple fact! *shakes head in wonderment*

Irena?  I don't trust her.  But I do think that she passed along some valuable intel, ur ah, I mean, info!  *grin*

 

Can't wait to read what happens next!

Keye



Author's Response:

I know I wish I could have as much sex as them ... I just don't get to see Him as often as they see each other... lol.....

Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave a comment...I have a teaser for you...lml

Edward was pulling into the parking lot that was across the street from the main entrance. He didn’t say anything else until he held my door open for me taking my hand and pulling me closer to him. “I am sorry about my behavior”

 

I smiled at him “You girl forgives you”

 

His face moved closer to mine as he spoke “My girl is more tolerant then I deserve”

 

“Never” as I said the word his lips brushed against mine, it was a sweet chaste kiss. When he pulled back his eyes held a tenderness in them as he palmed the side of my face. 

 

“Remember your task and speak to no one other then family members”

 

“Yes Sir”

 

“Come let’s get this over with so we can get home” I nodded in agreement following behind him with my eyes down. As we approached the entrance Edward spoke with the guy at the door.

 

“Tyler, how is the night going?”

 

“Edward, actually it’s been busy, it’s game night”

 

Edward groaned “damn I forget about that”

 

Tyler chuckled as we moved into the club telling us to have fun, I wasn’t sure what game night was but it appeared I was about to find out.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

Now you know that I went right to chapter 8 for review, right?  *snicker*  Anyway, lots and lots of drama in this chapter.  Good grief!  You would think that these people were adults and would act accordingly !!!! LOL!! But it would not make for an interesting story now would it?

Interesting about Mike and Jess and I am wondering if there is more to it than what Mike is admitting.  The game and the Isabella's "show" was quite something.  Edward jumped all over granting persmission on that one, didn't he?  *grin*

Love Rose in this chapter.  And Isabella is probably right in saying that she won the battle but the war will rage on.  Can't wait to see what happens next!

Keye



Author's Response:

You would think that they would act like adults ... however when people have their own agenda, they tend to go off in anyway they can to get what they want and they they justify their actions.....thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have your teaser for you....lml

“Are we going to talk about it?”

 

“About what?” she truly didn’t know what I meant, so I held up her arm. Bella’s face fell “Oh”

 

I kept staring at her while she sat back down in her seat, waiting for her to start talking. Whatever happened she didn’t want to tell me, but I wasn’t giving her a choice I wanted, no I needed to know. Finally she sighed and started talking.

 

“I don’t know what you want me to say Edward I handled it, ingeniously I thought, I let her know that I wasn’t going to take any of her shit while still obeying you. Did I do wrong? Were you mad at me?”

 

Was I mad at her?

 

I figured I would let her answer her own question “Did you get punished?”

 

Bella shook her head at my question so I asked another one “Were you rewarded?”

 

The sweetest smile and blush broke out over her face “Several times” she admitted, making me chuckle, but I needed her to know something.

 

My fingers laced with hers on top of the table while I explained “The fact of the matter is…” I looked in her eyes “…Bella you shouldn’t have to handle shit.”

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 06 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

What a chapter!  Wow!!  Your story is like a whole new and exciting world!  LOL!!  It is not lost on me, the irony that there is a dog in the room and yet, Bella is the one with the collar and the leash.  *grin*  My guess is that Bella will not ever forget to post on the calendar again.

Can't wait to see what Edward has planned for tomorrow.  And, yes, the visit to Forks will be interesting as well.

Questions for Aro and Jane:  This one is for both.  How did this portion of your relationship get started?  What were you previous relationships (to being with each other) like?  What is your favorite part of this lifestyle?  Most memorable moment?  Had there been times when you just wanted to give it all up and go back to being "vanilla", if that is even possible?  Have you involved others in your relationship?  How did the club get started?  Who did Aro learn the lifestyle from?  I am assuming that Jane learned from Aro?

I am sure that I have many more questions but that is all I can think of at this time.  Oh and BTW, no need to apologize for being late for posting an update!  I am happy that you post whenever you post.  Naturally I would always love to you to post more because I am a greedy reader but, really, isn't that your fault for writing so well?   *giggle*  And as far as not responded to reviews?  Please, we know that you appreciate us and we all have to experience the sucky side of RL too.  I have those weeks like you describe and all I can say is bless your heart and I hope that it is all better now!!!

Seriously, I know the time, energy and effort it takes for you do do this and your Beta as well.  And I appreciate the time that you take to do it!  I am so entertained by the story and love the updates.  So, you don't worry about a thing and no worries on ever needing to apologize.  It is all good!

Needless to say, I cannot wait to find out what happens next!!!

Keye



Author's Response:

Hi Keye..

I think if she does forget to post something,,,she will be very sad...thanks for understanding about last week and I must say, this week is better...BTW thanks for the questions for the OT....

Thanks for reading, I have this weeks teaser for you...

Edward took the lid off his coffee while I took a bite of the danish moaning as the sweet gooey goodness melted in my mouth. The mixture of berries was a perfect balance between sweet and tangy with a thin layer of warm yummy cheese and sweet drizzle.

 

“MMMmmmmnnnn” I think my eyes rolled to the back of my head. When I opened my eyes Edward was looking at me licking his bottom lip. “What?”

 

He kind of shook his head as if trying to come out of a daze before taking a drink of coffee. “Last night was good?”

 

“Uh huh…” I nodded as I swallowed “…last night was great. I was a little worried when I saw the leash”

 

Edward cleared his throat “Well you shouldn’t have been looking, your eyes are to remain down not searching the room.”

 

I sighed “I know but when you put it down on the table all I could think about was when you were going to put it on me.” He looked…stunned, so I figured it would be a good idea to explain. “ Not that I wanted to walk around in public and I will admit it panicked me a little but it kind of excited me too.” taking a drink of coffee I asked the question I really wanted to know.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 03 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

As always, I love EPOV!!  Just makes me happy.  And no, I was not made at Edward.  I thought he handled the situation okay.  I am amused at Aro being amused and I think that he is right.  Edward and Isabella have not handled the worst of Edward's past yet.  I can't wait.  *Keye rubs hands together*  I think it is going to be most interesting.


LOL!!  Bella was warned and now it is free whacks night!!   Well only for Edward but you know what I mean.

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

Keye



Author's Response:

thanks for reading and leaving me a comment, here is this weeks teaser...

Excusing myself I went into the kitchen to check in dinner, everything was done so after pulling the chicken out of the oven - to allow it to rest - I started putting the other stuff into serving bowls. The sound of the kitchen door swinging open made me turn to see who was there, and I smiled as Aro joined me.

 

“Isabella I don’t wish to disturb you, but may I speak with you for a minute?”

 

Not wanting to be rude I stopped what I was doing. “Yes Sir, do you need something?”

 

“No..no, please continue, I can talk while you work.”  I asked him to give me a second while I took the Corn Pie out of the oven because I didn’t want him talking to my back. Once it was out I gave him my attention. 

 

Eyeing the pie I had just removed he smiled at me warmly “It’s nice to see you so carefree around everyone. You seem much more confident and I must admit it does me good to see that. You are young and need to laugh more.”

 

I giggled “Emmett is easy to laugh with”

 

Aro agreed with me with a slight nod of his head “And Edward?”

 

“Edward is easy to laugh with too.”

 

“Good, it truly brings me joy to see you happy and carefree.”

 

“Well I don’t know about carefree…”

 

Aro spoke before I could finish “Yes well that is wanted to talk to you about.

Reviewer: KeyeCullen Signed
Date: 11 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

It never ceases to amaze me that people prefer to think negatively of a situation than positively.  I mean, even as open minded as say, Edward and Jane are, they still thought that something sinister was going on between Aro and Isabella. 

No I don't think that Jess is going to get away with her behavior either and nor should she.  She was completely out of line and she needs to be dealt with in a timely manner.

I cannot wait to see how you handle the trip to Victoria.  Either way, I am confident that you will not disappoint.


Keye



Author's Response:

Don't you think that is human nature? To suspect the worse of people....In the begining Jane did, and to be honest if my husband was meeting with a young girl on a regular basis, I don't think that I would be happy about that either...would you? Especially if this was someone I didn't know...And of couse at the time Edward would think that there was something going on because if it was him, there would have been....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. i have this weeks teaser for you...lml...

Taking another drink of coffee I didn’t say anything, but that was twice now that something was not put on the calendar. The lunch with Jane yesterday- which I found out about accidentally - that was ultimately cancelled and now the waxing, I guess my submissive will have some explaining to do. But at the moment I thought of something else.

 

“If you are waxing have them remove the remaining patch of hair” Bella’s hand stopped mid-way to her mouth as she just stared at me and I wondered what had caused the reaction I was getting. 

 

“W..Why? You said I could keep it”

 

Taking a drink of coffee I thought over my words to her on the subject “If I remember correctly I said you could keep it for the time-being but I would like it gone now”

 

“Can we talk about this?” her eyes stayed focused on the few pieces of bagel that were still on the paper towel. I didn’t understand what the problem was; we were talking about a tiny little patch of neatly trimmed hair.

 

“What’s the big deal?” I watched as she sat there quietly staring at the table chewing her bottom lip. “Bella?”

 

Devastation is the only word that came to my mind when she looked into my eyes “I know this is really stupid, but can I please keep it until next time?”

 

My eyes narrowed in confusion what did it matter if it was now or later? “Why?”

 

“Do you know why I kept a small patch?”