Date: 22 Apr 2014 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 22
wasn't sure if chaos was an actual person or her security system :) . . . maybe both
Date: 22 Apr 2014 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 22
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!! I first found this on fanfiction and fell in love! I can't wait for another update. I know Iam greedy with all the ones you just posted but ya can't blame me. Love it!!!!
Date: 22 Apr 2014 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 22
chaos is her own computer home friend
and with that in mind, she hasnt turned it off and if they get frisky in the am i think he is in for a shock
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 22
Why should I be angry at Edward? That was just plain mean from Sasha. I'd be more worried, that someone could get into Edwards house, without anyone's notice. And Bella, well she is still young...she should have stayed and stood up for Edward.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 22
Like Jarvis off of IronMan? I think she has the right to be mad maybe not all at him but more of the situation then anything.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 22
Wow... I am surprise Bella didnt rip Sasha head off!
Chaos is her voice activated computer program. Has to be, there is one else she would trust but herself!
Looking forward to more!! :)
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 22
I think he got jumped by a crazy person and he told her off and then went after Bella so I am not mad at him. I think Sasha is a skank. I love all the nick names.
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 22
I loved it wow oh wow it seems it goes deeper and deeper with Bella now was it always about getting her and wow Edward has a crazy obvious woman that just doesn't get it is she really that stupid but will she become more of a problem update soon
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 22
Yeah that entire thing with sasha you should redo it was very very very confusing to understand what was going on and not really logical which makes me sad because the beging and ending were great and i love this story
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 22
ewwwww for reacting to Sasha (skankya??)
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 22
For some reason I think that Chaos is an automated program that Bella has developed. She has never interacted with Chaos prior to the scene of an intruder as if it were a roommate of person within her protective ring. She also mentioned that Miss Honey, Guido and Hawk are the only individuals that she knows as close family/friends.
The Sasha incident should have someone's job in jeopardy! No one should be allowed into Edward's home without his direct consent. Especially while they are in a Code One lock down. Family or not!
Edward explained his premature ejaculation to the best of his ability. Using Emmett as a potential assistant in these circumstances was a bit hilarious. If not simply in bad taste.
No nickname for Sasha though, sad. I was looking forward to it.
The conversation for the morning just elevated itself to the next level of intense.
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 22
My first thought, while reading it, is that's the name of her computer system.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:53 PM Title: Chapter 22
I think he's an ass but I think a lot of men would have reacted the same way being that worked up. Poor Bella having her night ruined for her. I think Chaos is part of her security for the house and is a computer program she has. I think tomorrow should be a double post day since it's my 16th anniversary lol
Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 22
Poor Edward... I'm sure he's pretty upset with himself for loosing control over his body with Sasha! But seeing Bella make a run for it, that's bad...
chaos... I wasn't sure if it's a person or her computer programm - like Siri on the iPhone. After all with her computer knowledge that was a possibility, right? But as you discovered now that it's indeed a person, I don't have a clue who you have in mind:(
Bella's dream, if it's always like that for her I'm really sorry
Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 22
Chaos.....a fancy computer programme like 'kit' from night rider!!!!!!! Or maybe a pet????
Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 22
YOU ENJOY TORTURING US DON'T YOU????? READ YOU SOON.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:34 PM Title: Chapter 22
Crazy chapter loved it
Date: 22 Apr 2014 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 22
Love it, as always, thank you! T
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 22
I think chaos is actually a computer program or AI? More please?!?!?! Pretty please with a naked stark on top?!
xoxoxoxoxox
Ashmerlin
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ps. I mean This stories Stark.
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Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:48 PM Title: Chapter 22
I thought Chaos was her interactive computer/defensive system. If so, then the girl is a genius! I still can't figure out who wants her or why. Even at a young age, they always wanted her. Love that I just can't figure it out yet I better the clues are all around.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 22
I keep thinking chaos is like an ai system she has. That is why she feels so much safer in her condo. I swear I have been checking my email since yesterday for an update!
Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 22
Chaos must be an artificial intelligence program that Bella created to protect herself from the bad guys (government?) who want her because she is some kind of savant with electronics. Hmmm?
Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 22
Angry at Stark? That reaction wasn't even on my radar! At first I thought he was being attacked for real, but then quickly realized it was that Sasha person. Geez, wasn't it obvious that he was already aroused to the point of no return on his date with Bella? It was to me! Sasha's unexpected presence just triggered a physical reaction that had nothing to do with her. Mind you, if that REALLY happened to me I might have had a reaction more like Bella had, but I am at readers distance now....Poor Bella, that episode triggered a dream about her dad....Yes, I caught the reference to Chaos. Is it her home defense system of sorts? Kind of like a super version of "the clapper"? That was a joke....seriously, i thought it might be an alarm system on steroids, to make a specious comparison. I am really loving reading this story and was mildly disappointed that there was no E/B sex here. I will be patient!
Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:11 PM Title: Chapter 22
I think it has to be a very advanced machine or system Bella has created to keep her house safe and under her command.
I honestly thought Bella would have been able to land some punches on Edward. It isn't because he might deserve them, but the perfect chance to show him what she's capable of. Which I'm sure is more than he thinks, as usual.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 22
Edward's a typical guy, thinking and reacting with his dick-go figure. I assumed chaos was a sophisticated computer/security system that protects her. When Jake meets his demise, can you please make sure it's slow and extremely painful, including tortuous? Thank you.
Date: 22 Apr 2014 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 21
Wonderful chapter! This story really is a winner! So many layers and contexts... I have a feeling Bella is a truly leathal fighter when she wants to be. She has lost too much not to go for broke when in danger. Sasha is a different thing, I believe. Personal relationships are Bella's weakspot. She has little experience with them. (That we know of.). Sasha might just be able to twist. Her emotions like a pretzel. But then she'd have to deal with Esme! Thank you for another truly engaging piece of work!
Date: 22 Apr 2014 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 20
IM - Ironman - damn you are brilliant and I'm seeing shadows! The connection with Esme came as a big surprise! The puzzle is coming together. Kudos on this one!
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 3:01 AM Title: Chapter 21
Not sure if I've run into a character as delusional as Jabba the Marmaduke. He truly is 1 sick dude::))
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 20
"Jacob Black has just walked in with three others. He's demanding to see you." Oh, goodie! He's such a crazy dork, it's very entertaining::))
"They thought they could control you by controlling your parents" Yep, the mystery is going to be huge when disclosed!
Date: 22 Apr 2014 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 19
"I look out my rearview mirror and sigh when I see Felix following in his car, who's being followed by Frank, and lastly Jasper is just behind him" lol lol priceless:)
[Report This]Date: 22 Apr 2014 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 18
"I don't think it's a good idea for Bella to be around the kids." Even tho I kind/sorta know more than Jasper about Bella since I'm reading her side, with what they currently know about her...I agree with Jasper. They know so little about her & have so much to lose.
Edward's grandfather knows something.
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 17
As usual, Newton makes me throw up in my mouth!
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 16
I just had a mind popping moment! Guido, Miss Honey & Hawk have kept her protected thruout her life & completely hidden after her father was killed. Bella's has to be so much more than she seems. This is going to be good when she tells all her secrets!
"But I'm not pretending to be anything I'm not. The only thing fake about me is my hair color, eye color and past, including my name," lol lol lol only thing left is her personality:)
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 15
"....I move my hand, traveling down my body to grip my thick hardness" Yep, I know what's coming. He must have short term memory loss if he forgot about the broken lock::))
I'm now convinced that, even tho Bella dug up info on Edward & family/crew, she isn't out to harm him in any way:) Plus it's not like she went out looking for him unless this is a, yet undisclosed, supernatural story::))
"douche-nozzle" lol lol lol love it!
Author's Response:
Not really a supernatural story, but there are some elements of it that may come across that way ... HOWEVER I would liekt he chance to revisit this statement after the truth comes out if it is not explained enough in the storyline, which I think it is. LOL
Yeah Douche-Nozzle is one of my (Kasi) Favorite names to call someone who makes me upset.
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 21
Who will school Whom in the art of fighting? My money is on Bella. Her street smarts and natural intelligence will give her the advantage in some areas. Maybe she can give them lessons?
Sasha has a lesson coming her way as well.......can't wait for all the nicknames to start flying out of Bella's mouth.
Why do I have this feeling that Miss Honey and Guido will be making an unexpected appearance. At least in Edward and Bella's eyes......
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 7:24 PM Title: Chapter 20
This chapter has a very large WOW factor. Esme, aka Molly,is Remy's, aka Bella, Godmother!
So much has been revealed yet not enough to assist my mind in guessing who is behind Bella's attempted capture/hit. She must be a potential threat to someone. It makes a difference whether it is the federal government or the Black's. Edward would have an easier time of silencing the Blacks.
When will He learn what his mother has been hiding all these years?
Date: 21 Apr 2014 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 21
omg I'm dying for some lemons!!! ;)
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 21
It gets better and better if that's possible and we learn a little more about Bella, I'm loving it.
Date: 21 Apr 2014 11:18 AM Title: Chapter 21
ohhhh cant wait for more :)
Date: 21 Apr 2014 7:28 AM Title: Chapter 21
I'm sure Bella is going to kick Emmet & Jasper's butts! I hope she gets Jasper to settle down. He is so uptight about Bella that he might miss something critical granted then Bella can step in & show him the ropes.
Date: 21 Apr 2014 7:08 AM Title: Chapter 20
That definately puts a spin on things. It's good that she has someone else to confide in now too & it just so happens to be Edward's mom.
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 21
I loved it wow Jasper really doesn't like Bella around at all will he push Edward to far and what is Jacob really trying to do hmm and how will Bella handle his family update soon
Date: 21 Apr 2014 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 21
Please tell me the fighting will be soon. Oh and does Bella carry a gun and if not why not since she seems to know as much as they do. Can't wait for the next chapter. This is one of the very best mobward stories out right now.
Date: 21 Apr 2014 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 21
Fantastic!! I can't wait for more!! :)=)
Date: 21 Apr 2014 2:53 AM Title: Chapter 21
Jacob really thinks he's all that doesn't he? Snort! He needs a lot more than what Edward did to him. Sounds like he got away with too much growing up. So, Edward believes he's falling in love, hmm, I have to agree. As for Sasha, I think she'd better watch herself around Bella. I'm thinking Bella knows exactly how to do some bodily harm already. thanx ;o)
Date: 21 Apr 2014 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 21
please update soon.
Date: 21 Apr 2014 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 21
I am glad she is opening up about with Edward. I hope during the training she put Jasper so hard on his ass!! So fast he may never recover!! LOL
Looking forward to the upcoming stories :D
Date: 21 Apr 2014 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 20
Wow, so they know/knew each other. Interesting. thanx ;o)
[Report This]Date: 21 Apr 2014 2:07 AM Title: Chapter 21
Love this chaper, can't wait for next chapter . Can not wait for Bella training (lol) .
Date: 21 Apr 2014 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 21
esme knowing who she really is shocked the hell out of me! lol nice twist
Date: 21 Apr 2014 12:47 AM Title: Chapter 21
Love the two updates. So Jasper is not trusting Bella any more. I am glad that Edward grabbed Jacob and told him like it was. lol. I have a feeling that things are fixing to get really interesting. I have a feeling that Bella is going to have some fun with Sasha. Lol. Can't wait to hear her nickname for her. Hope you update soon. Thanks for sharing this wonderful story.
Date: 21 Apr 2014 12:39 AM Title: Chapter 21
What a nice surprise! Yay! I have been sick so this was nice to have to read in bed. Thank you. Can't wait to see Bella show her skills ;)
Date: 21 Apr 2014 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 21
Wow this chapter was awesome!! Jacob is an ASS!!! I know Bella is going to show Emmett and Jasper a thing or two and i can't wait!!! lollol As for Sasha, Well I bet Bella will teach her a thing or two also!!! lol
Date: 21 Apr 2014 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 21
About to get interesting? Been there done that. (yeah i said it) This fic just twist and turns so much I can't predict the next move coming. I NEED TO PREDICT!! LOL
I crave more.
til next time
E/k
Date: 21 Apr 2014 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 20
My suspicions weren't too far from the mark. And we found a lot in this chapter. We'll have to wait to find out if the sitters noticed anything.
Date: 21 Apr 2014 12:17 AM Title: Chapter 20
OMGOSH! !!!!! Esme knows who Bella really is! !! Awesome! !!! Things are coming out now.
[Report This]Date: 20 Apr 2014 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 21
Loved it thank you for the extra chapter, today! Happy Easter to you both as well!
Date: 20 Apr 2014 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 21
hmmm Jasper is going to push E so far here soon.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 20
oh wow.. the plot thickins.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 21
Jacob is an idiot. Cleary, he doesn't know who he's dealing with here. You've also hinted that Bella has more secrets and looks like probably more than a few tricks up her sleeve! I long for the time when both she and Edward can be their real selves with each other. I know, you're getting us there....
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 20
Thank goodness for Esme. And, Bella needs the support.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 21
It will be interesting to see Stark watch her fight. Lol I'm sure.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 21
Love it, can't wait for more xx
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 21
I guess Jake has a death wish he's not aware about;)
Well, Bella needing training in fighting... With Emmett - I'm sure that's going to be interesting for more persons than just the ones fighting...
Everytging you have on your to-do list sounds great! I was so hooked up by the first version of YOH, I'm curious what changes you have in mind
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 21
Yay for extra chapters
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 21
He is underestimating Bella
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow.....interesting xx
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 21
This keeps getting better and better!!! Although I still have not figured who is hawk! Thank you for all the updates and bonuses!!!!
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 21
Well, I think Edward should meet Miss Honey sooner rather than later. It might explain a lot to him. Jacob is a scum bag.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 21
I think Bella will be teaching Jasper and Emmett more, So far Jasper does not seem to trust her and its clouding his judgement and I hope he doesn't hurt in front of Esme there will be hell to pay then. Happy Easter and with this chapter mine is great.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 21
I WAS WAITING FOR THIS UPDATE. THANK YOU! NOW...... I CAN GO HUNT FOR EASTER EGGS. READ YOU SOON.
[Report This]Date: 20 Apr 2014 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 21
I can't wait for Bella to kick Jasper's ass!
Date: 20 Apr 2014 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 20
Poor Bella, and I really want to punch Carlisle in the face now, he's such a bum
Date: 20 Apr 2014 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 20
Oh wow so she is Esme's goddaughter. This just keeps getting better can't wait to read more!! Jasper is starting to get annoying with the whole Bella thing.
[Report This]Date: 20 Apr 2014 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow so Esme knows all about her and most of her past but how will Edward feel wh3n he finds out his mom knows and didn't tell him and when will she tell him update soon
Date: 20 Apr 2014 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 20
awww even more clues... cant wait for more :)
Date: 20 Apr 2014 6:42 PM Title: Chapter 20
Oh man this is great.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow this chapter blew me away...Esme is Remy(bella) godmother...can not wait for Edward to find out or will it be Jasper first
Date: 20 Apr 2014 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 20
I'm glad that Edward takes the "public" eye mostly off of Bella. Especially after what Esme shared with her over lunch...
Happy Easter to you too:)
Date: 20 Apr 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 20
I'm gonna have to watch some of these movies so I can understand the characters better.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow.....
sooo much information....I'm just glad Bella has another person that trust her :)
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow, didn't see that connection. Why did they want to kill her so badly, and obviously still do. Can't wait for the next update so we can learn more.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow. Through their conversation at lunch, you have told us a big chunk more of the puzzle. The one thing missing is who had Renee and Charlie killed. OK maybe that's not the only thing missing here, but a big one! I'm very happy you are posting another chapter later today as I am dying to find out what the Blacks want with Edward.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow, didn't see that coming. Bella is obviously very, um, special!
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow lovw the surprise!
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 20
Weary-to be tired
wary-to be cautious
I'm sure Bella is weary but I think the word you really want is wary. Lots of info in this chapter thanks
Author's Response:
Thank you, I have fixed this. Appreciate the help. Have a great day.
Date: 20 Apr 2014 5:10 PM Title: Chapter 20
That was a surprise Wow