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Reviewer: Lapse In Judgement Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Apr 2022 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 81

Wow, that story was intense to say the least! What a rollercoaster!

If you are still active, I have a couple of questions. I hope that's okay :)

1) Who is this "Bree" that killed James? Is it her sister impersonating her?

2) What happened to Aro after all?

Thanks in advance!

Reviewer: Lapse In Judgement Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Apr 2022 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 81

Wow, that story was intense to say the least! What a rollercoaster!

If you are still active, I have a couple of questions. I hope that's okay :)

1) Who is this "Bree" that killed James? Is it her sister impersonating her?

2) What happened to Aro after all?

Thanks in advance!

Reviewer: peachtreegirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2021 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

Just re-read this from the beginning. It's definitely one that you can't stop reading, even though because of the graphic nature, you may want too. I do absolutely love this fic.

Now that James is dead (by Piper I fiction. pretty sure : sidenote- can't wait to see what she did to Peter and his wife from her POV! And what she has done to Aro) and the babies are here, I can't wait to see what happens next. To see how the disgusting house of cards of all those involved in that heinous way of life falls down. I hope that you will update this soon. I will be patiently awaiting. 

peach

 

Reviewer: kinnik Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Sep 2020 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 77

Ah, so it must have been Bree's sister, though how she would know any of what had happened on the island is unclear. I suppose we'll find out.

Reviewer: kinnik Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2020 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 14

I'm really loving this!!!

 

Reviewer: LolaYaKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2020 11:37 AM Title: Chapter 74

Of course they are Edward.. The had like several fucks sessions before also doing it on the fake wedding night. ALL where he creampied her

So really, his cum has 2 days to settle in a ovulating woman so really it shouldn't be a suprise. 

Reviewer: LolaYaKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2020 8:48 AM Title: Chapter 3

I feel like this plot of Edward not being with Bella cause of flimsy reasons is asisine, why they aren't together is so flimsy I'm surprised you can make a story out of it...

Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2019 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 81

So good

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Date: 12 Jul 2018 7:32 AM Title: Chapter 34

James got off waaaaaayyyyyyy too easy! 🤬

Reviewer: elenalena Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2017 5:59 AM Title: Chapter 9

Oh boy....the old man is creepier and more insane than I'd thought! Lol

Reviewer: elenalena Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2017 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 5

I wonder why he's not worried about Bella at this point...

Reviewer: elenalena Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2017 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 5

I wonder why he's not worried about Bella at this point...

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Date: 19 Sep 2017 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 4

I hope it wasn't Edward who had broken ribs.. He needs to save Bella!

Reviewer: elenalena Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2017 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 4

I hope it wasn't Edward who had broken ribs.. He needs to save Bella!

Reviewer: elenalena Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2017 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 3

Wow. exciting!

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2016 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 4

Why leave rose & em?

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2016 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 3

Drugged? I was suspicious over pilot. Mary Alice somehow gonna pop up too?

Reviewer: RainbowCupcakes Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2016 9:01 AM Title: Chapter 81

So I read this story a few years ago (I think) as it was being updated, but then things happened in RL and I never got to finish it, there were certain parts I remembered though but other things like Jasper and Alice.... (I don't want to give anything away for ppl who just started reading the story and are reading reviews) well it was about the middle of the story. Anyways, I was so into the story that I didn't realize I had read the entire thing and that it's now 5:30am..oops

Needless to say, this story was by far one of my top stories to read! I was following you on ff.net until it got removed then started reading it on here, eventually posting my own stories on here! 

I'm actually reading another one of your stories which was how I remembered to finish reading this one :) 

I know there was a HEA but is the story really completed? I kinda hope not, I love this story too much to let it go! 

Waiting patiently for you to update, 

Your faithful reader,  

Mady xx

Reviewer: rosesblack Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Nov 2015 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 81

I absolutely loved the story you are a wonderful writer never felt such emotions from one extreme to another over a book hate love descust dispaire hope. Sara x

Reviewer: JayNahNah Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Nov 2015 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 81

Took me a week but I finished & I loved it! This isn't the end is it??

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 1:21 PM Title: Chapter 81

This was so very sweet!!!!

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 1:01 PM Title: Chapter 88

Congratulations to Rose and Emmett - I think this was the first proposal I read due to a bet, but it fits these two:)

The twins are coming, lets see how Edward will cope with Bella in labor *sniggers*

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 12:44 PM Title: Chapter 77

Bree.... she did die on the island, but Piper didn't! I think I mentioned my thoughts about her finding Bree's diary as the suicide of Peter came about. Maybe she did ask the right questions before killing her guardians and got the information about James and the island as well. Wasnt it a woman with the description of Bree as well that took Aro to a new hospital?!

And not that I disagree if she got her revenge on all of these men, wouldn't the organization gotten their hands on her by now?

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 12:31 PM Title: Chapter 76

I love how each of them planned to kill James, I know its not the "right thing to feel happy about", but that piece of shit deserved to die!

I know already, Edward chickened out, due to the cameras, and I doubt it was one of the girls at the station, so im more than curious who did rid the earth from that evil; )

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 75

See, the bad ones always come back in this story...

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 74

I see why this could've been the end, but it still isn't the whole story told. At least it feels like that to me....

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Oct 2015 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 73

So far everything seems to go in the right direction:)

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2015 11:23 PM Title: Chapter 72

How you put flashes of the original plot in here was amazing! But by now it shouldn't be a surprise that I absolutely adore your writing and talent; )

Was Edward able to inform their families of what went down at the house? Because I'm pretty sure Charlie would only be able to relax some, knowing they are protected in the room...

Not to forget that the "should be dead" ones always come back here...

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2015 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 71

I cant believe you really made another escape from this circle of crazy that easy... I mean, yes James got a bit of his own treatment first, but I'm sure every woman that knows him agrees with me, that it wasn't enugh. On the other hand, no amount of time and pain would ever be enough, he's one character even death is too good a solution for:(

Hm... Peter died killing himself and his wife? His suicide I understand to a certain degree, but not why he killed her. Could it be it wasn't suicide? !

My mind goes this way, because earlier in a chapter you wrote a woman looking like Bree claimed to be Aro's grandchild and took him to a new hospital. Could it be, that Piper (I think that was the name of Bree's little sister) found the diary and is "out for blood" now? I wouldn't blame her one bit, but wonder how she could find out so much on her own...

I really hope Edward isnt too far behind Bella as it seems Emmett did believe that Bella changed her mind about going early to forks:(

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2015 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 70

Oh no.... why didn't he go to her first:(

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Date: 16 Oct 2015 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 69

I was so proud of Alice for just calling it like it was with Jessica, even if Rosalie reasioning with a mosquito wasn't too bad, either;) That woman asked for these hits, because who is saying shit like that to another, pregnant, woman?!

Of course, bella feels like running after all this, even if she's calling it something different in her mind... I think it's okay wanting to get away, needing to start a new. Im not happy Edward still didnt talk to her for real, but have a feeling he has his reasons. 

Emmett and Rose are going to move in with Bella? I hope that's not going to get too difficult as they're not really shy about ther PDA these days...

And I have a bad feeling about this rushed move into the old house:(

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2015 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 68

I'm glad Tanya is doing so well! Having found her purpose in a job is such good news. And the budding friendship with Garrett sounds wonderful:)

Yay, Edward is coming home

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Oct 2015 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 67

This was such a sweet chapter!

The moment realization hitabout Alice' bleeding as only her period was hilarious. But im glad no one made fun of Jasper too much or dared giving him a ard time, because I'm sure Carlisle can be pretty intimidating if needed;)

What id surprise me a bit was, that the Cullens didn't have a family heirloom to share for them, nor does he have something from his family

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Oct 2015 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 66

I'm not sure whom had the bigger scare in the morning, Carlisle or Jasper; )

The girls bonding with Rose was cute

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Oct 2015 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 65

Hm... I'm sure it would have been difficult finding pics for this, but your writing was as great as always and more than made up for no pics;)

Seems like the Cullen men thiught of everything the girls and Jasper might need in the near future... Rose getting some clothes for everyone was super sweet too!

I'm not happy with Edward still not having manned up and talking to Bella, but get why he's doing things in his order of importance. 

The mystery POV is really scary, but I think it was the detective that was send on a break who started the explosion. Will his identity be discovered?

You said it was almost over, but it feels like theres still so much left unsaid

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Oct 2015 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 64

I guess it's safe to say, neither Emmett nor Rose expected that talk from Bella; )

Could someone just get Edward into Bella's room,  ASAP,  please

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Oct 2015 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 63 (back to IR)

Will this silly man ever lean to talk to her instead of runing to the wrong conclusion time and again?! I know hes doing it out if misguided guilt, but hhasn't he learned anything on the island?

I'm glad Tanya is going to make a full recovery, at least thats what I understood woukd be th case, it just might take quite some time...

And Alice remembering Esme rght away was so sweet!

Renee and especially Charlie took all of these news so well, I'm so relieved no one is thinking Edward did something wrong. Now he has to understand that too

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Oct 2015 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 62

I knew it couldn't end well for the girls, after they got back. But reading this for a third time now, im pretty sure, it could've been much worse for all of them! 

Don't get me wrong, Tanya really took the brunt of it, that's for sure, and my heart goes out to her. BUT all of them are alive, even the boys did make it, being in the water for god knows how long... 

I tried to imagine what the house must have looked like to Emmett, as he was the only one not knowing what hell Bella and Edward were held into. Even Charlie must have been pretty overwhelmed seeing it for his own... 

I'm glad they got away from the island but doubt all is gong to be hearts and flowers now

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2015 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 61

I knew it... hopefully Emmett will tell Carlisle about the call, and everything from before too:(

I do believe it was a big mistake to offer Victoria a way out, she's been in this mess much too long. But I wouldn't mind to be wrong there; )

Good luck to the escapees! I'm sure they'll need it....

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2015 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 60

I hate that Bree had to die. But she wasn't alone, that's a good thing, and she knows her daughter will have a better life...

Holy hell, a little warning about the boys activities would have been nice;)

OMG! The call Emmett got, that was Jasper, right? They did get to th phone and he called for help but wasn't taken seriously? 

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2015 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 59

Oh Jasper, if it wasn't so sad, I'd say it's funny that he now repeated Edwards mistakes abut communication... But Bree woud probably still have trouble believing him anyways, I know I would

I had thought of this earlier in the story too, because why would Aro stop with only male members of the family? What I still don't get, is why he's so different with her though, not that I wish this fate on her or anything like that, I'm just curious

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2015 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 58

I'm not surprised the pregnancy is hard on both Bella and Edwardunder these circumstances, especially with them still having trouble with communication...

Poor Bree, this is an awful situation... I wonder why her grandparents didn't claim custody for her thiugh, seeing it shouldn't have been too much trouble with her in college already and her sister in bordng school:(

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2015 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 57

One would think now there should only positive things come their way, but I doubt it'll be like that

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Date: 13 Oct 2015 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 56

Even with James seemingly having th upper hand still, I'm very glad he was proven wrong about his accusations!  And it seemed to me help Edward gain more points in Aro's eyes if I wasn completely mistaken;)

I just wish that old pervert would know how James really was, because I doubt he'd get much chances to be close to anyone in the Masen house than...

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2015 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 55

So very sweet

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 54

This began over hurt pride ( damn guys are stupid..l.

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 53

It was so nice of you to dedicate this chapter to Katalina, I'm sure she would've loved that :)

Of course it was just a silly misunderstanding, both of them need to learn to communicate better if this is supposed to end with them as a united front... I'd hate for Aro or James to win and them being miserable more than needed on the island:(

How much longer do Edward and Jasper think they can hide the tattoo from Bella? !

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Oct 2015 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 52

You know, its truly fucked up that you found these vows on a church page in the Internet,  I'm sure you tweaked them a bit, but some sund to be too real to still be spoken these days...

Somehow I have the feeling neither Jasper nor Tanya would've really needed to help Bella here, just Edward not realizing the most obvious need from Bella - being held by her love:(

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 51

I felt so sorry for both, Tanya and Breanne... 

Usually im excited to read a wedding scene, I diubt this will hold the same magical appearance others do

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Oct 2015 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 50

I surely knew after this chapter what I expected right from the start, blood play isn't really my cup of tea;)

I did get through this, but not without having to stop reading to take some deep breaths to stop the nauseating feelings.... How Tanya coud stay conscious this long, I can never understand, but for her sake im glad she did, to think about what that monster would've done to her otherwise is just to horrible.

It broke my heart that she told Alice her death wish, even if it's something im sure everyone would feel after this experience :(

You said in this A/N, you wished for a review, eve if ony to get told how sick you are... that doest sit right with me, because yes, this surely isnt everyones first choice in a plot or genre, but each "weak" minded person has the chance to leave, because you were kind in building up to this kind of torture, not just started like this extreme! AND you still give a warning with each possible "evil" chapter, you even give pointers which parts to skip if it's nothing we would like to read. No sick person could/would be that kind. And aren't we readers the real sick ones, getting turned on by some of this;) 

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Oct 2015 5:59 PM Title: Chapter 49

As twisted as it is, I like Anna... she's not the most warm person, but shes in this lifestyle for a very long time, so I didn't expect her to be "loving". But she cares and tried to make Bella feel better, which is more than I dared to hope for at his event took place!

I was a bit surprised that you changed Stefano to be the father of Vladimir, as im pretty sure, you first said Vladimir was Stefano's grandfather. But its not that important, because eiher way I like neither man, and im pretty sure our tight group would agree whole heartedly;)

Why is Aro so determined to keep Alice as been acknowledged as a little girl, but Bellas possible daughters wouldn't be anything more than future trained fuck sluts? Because in his perverted mind I have no dout he does love Bella, or better what he believes is Elizabeth...

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 48

It was very entertaining reliving this through Edwards eyes, because he was so much more nervous than Bella...

Him first forgetting the condom was already a bit funny, because I expected something like this after his "attack" of Tanya for only knowing about Bella's bigger breasts... but his inner monologue about where he shoukd come now, was too cute

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 12:42 PM Title: Chapter 47

Oh this poor man... and its not that Jasper hasnt given him a warning about the blood thing;)

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 46

They finally got their feelings out, but I have a feeling it wont be enough for either of them to believe it, just yet... There was so much heartache and pain in their past, I'm not sure that it could really be this "easy" now

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 7:08 AM Title: Chapter 45

Im not sure whom was worse off here, the boys listening in and imagining it all or the girls getting it all of their chests to Tanya. 

Not to forget her, that poor women must be very lonely between these cute couples

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Date: 12 Oct 2015 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 44

I'd like to say poor Edward, but honestly it would be a lie, because Tanya did the right thing in showing him what Bella went through since they got there....

The "fake" wedding was very, very sweet. It was awesome that Tanya took the time to bake them a special pie, and the spontaneous vows were sweet as candy under these circumstances

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 43

Glad this was mostly a cute one;)

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 42

It's almost funny to see how clueless these two are about the feelings the other shares...

The toe nail painting was very cute, and the massage I loved

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Oct 2015 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 41

Christ almighty, you are able to come up with some really crazy shit for sure... Aro thinking he could be able to fuck Bella slipped my memory, so this was just as bad as reading in the first time. 

Have I told you lately how grateful I am for Alice and Jasper; )

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 9:11 PM Title: Chapter 40

See, I knew you wouldn't be that evil;)

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 39

I doubt this is getting bad now, because only jasper knew she ws in his bathroom, and I doubt it even more the other guys would just walk in his bathroom;)

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 38

This could've gotten a much worse outcome, so im more than glad both Jasper and Tanya could save our belovd ones...

Smart thinking Bella, and really fast too;)

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 37

I knew James wouldn't let it go without some sort of revenge against Edward too, and even if I feel a little bit sorry for Victoria here (because she's the only other female we know about) I'm much more happy that Bella, Tanya and Alice were safe from this;)

And boy was that hot between Edward and Bella on their alone time. ..

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 36

Another big thank you to Alice, that girl is magical - just saying;)

All that James told her probably wasn't that scary, but the way James said it, made my stomach churn 

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 35

This was so sweet, but I learned from you, it never staysthat way for too long, so ill better buckle my seat belt and prepare for the next chapter

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 34

Alice never ceases to amaze me... she's probably the most strong minded person on this island. I mean, just like Jasper she always seems to know what the person around her might need, not to forget her ability to switch from her little girl to grown up persona in the blink of an eye;)

I'd never thought I would ever say or thnk this, but after this punishment I have no other option than to say it... You rocked it, Aro

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Date: 11 Oct 2015 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 33

As great as this was to get a revenge for both Edwad and Bella for once, I fear what James willcome up with to retaliate...

And Aro not being angry about what James does and even has Dimitri doing as well, is another scary thing....

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Date: 10 Oct 2015 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 32

Even if Tanya got very humiliated, this was a good chapter, there wasn't bad punishments - except te blow job instead of warm dinner for Victoria. But c'mon, that devil woman asked for it and deserved a punishment for her spiteful ways;)

And for Jasper stepping up again, you rock!

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Date: 10 Oct 2015 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 31

The first time I read this chapter I cried so hard over the torture James put Bella through... it was so mean to get her to the wolves and worse to offer Sam her name for the female. But what happened in the barn and after has had me fight down the ultra strong urge to vomit... I think that was the worst he did to her until this point, maybe even on the whole time on the island!

But oh, how I loved the time between Edward and Bella... 

You told us in the A/N this started in reaction to your dreams, and I can honestly say, I dont wat to switch places with you:( I've had some very interesting and disturbing dreams of my own, but im so relieved it was nothing ever s evil as evil as this!

I sure hope not all of your dreams are that twisted, because it cant be very helpful to get a full nights sleep; )

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 30

It's not a healthy relationship yet, but I hope Emmett can get her to accept this news without running from him again...

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 29

Victoria is a riddle to me, shouldn't she know best how evil it was to be on the island and therefore had been the first to try to console Bella? Instead she was hateful right from the first meeting. Yet she seems to have no problem with Alice or Tanya... Doesn't she know Bella didn't volunteer for this?!

One of the people in the worst situation here, apart from the women in general and of course Edward, its Jasper I'm feeling sorry for. He's been seeing so much and having an eye on Bella and her injuries from the beginning. Add that to his "friendship" with Edward ist must be hard on him to keep so many things a secret, when all he wants to do is help them all

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 28

I agree with Edward, the demands were a great idea to get a point across; )

I thought i needed to throw up as James put Bella into the swing and his reaction afterwards. Surely Jaspers theory was hitting it right on top, and I wont imagine what sick shit he would have come up with...

5 more daus of extreme sessions, my gut is knotted too tight, because its an eternity for this monsters to torture both Bella and Edward

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 27

I wish James would have to switch places with Bella, just once, one day for her to do to him what she's been through at his hands....

Tanya getting the chance to help Bella feeling better was so nice. I loved that she did tell her so mich s they were alone, but more that she finally could tell both oh themthe truth about Emmett and Rosalie, too!

Getting that worked up from onky kissing must be so new to Edward,  but I think deep down, he knows it would've been like this with Bella right from their first kiss in the pool

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 26

While youre at it to carve someone to pieces dont forget the beginning of the evil things for this island = Aro;)

And instead of feeding those pieces to Dimitri, include all the gues who work there for"fun" and feed them to the sharks

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 11:22 AM Title: Chapter 25

The punishment Bella has had to survive today, was so evil, I imagine a smooth rope in that position would be hard to endure, but a rough one? Poor girl

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 10:34 AM Title: Chapter 24

This was so freaking hot, its amazing what tricks your mind can play on you... For Edward it hashad a good out come, for bella and her nightmares is pur horror....

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Date: 09 Oct 2015 12:39 AM Title: Chapter 23

Having Jasper on their side is a godsend - thank you so much for him being there for Bella and helping Edward keep it together

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 22

Her period huh? Damn it doesn't sound very good for her under normal circumstances how will it be there? !

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 21

He finally learned the most important rule their, make Aro believe he's in control;)

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 20

This was so, so bad.... but hot in a way as well

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 19

Their talk didnt go too well in the beginning but I'm very glad Edward did promise to be with her. I'm curious if he'll ever get to really understand what she's telling him, hes a bit slow in reading between the lines with the important things:(

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 6:53 PM Title: Chapter 18

As sick as it makes me feel, I think todays" lesson" was the nicest Bella has had to partake in so far:( And as disgusting as all this must feel for her, I wouldn't feel bad if Aro or whomever he wanted to, suck off James cum from my breadsts. Because thats the best fuck you she can say to them;)

Edward does learn, thats such a relief, even if Tanya hasnt redeemed herself in my eyes

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 17

I can so relate to the comment from Texasbella;)

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 16

Its fascinating to see how sweet you can be in your writing with Bella and Alice but how evil it's getting as soon as the "little"one is out of earshot. 

I cant wait to see what Texasbella came up with for James;)

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 15

This was the first time I really felt sorty for both, Vitoria and Tanya, because no matter what you did before, this was no treatment any woman should have to live through...

Again Edward doesn't do the "right thing for her" fast enugh, but that was probably because he was only thinking about Bella

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 14

There were moments while reading this, I was fighting tears so damn much...

Rose' story and the reaction her mother gave, or better lack of one, being the worst one. But Esme begging Emmett to live his life for Edward was a close second...

I feel bad for Emmett, getting to know you just were someone's first like that - as if the circumstances weren't already difficult enough:(

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 13

Yeah, Tanya seems not enough prepared for what she signed up to.... but at this moment I'd say, its her bad, because after seeing those pictures of her with Edward it should've been clear even to her this couldn't end well:(

Edward starts to change... I doubt thats really what's happening, he starts to understand whats needed to survive is the better explanation

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 9:43 AM Title: Chapter 12

Jasper is a great surprise,  not only does he behave like a true southern gentleman, but he has some great information. 

God, Alice is just too cute for her own good

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 9:21 AM Title: Chapter 11

Edward really isn't the fastest learner yet, that has to change....

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 10

I remember reading this chapter, for the first time, and how grateful I was for the warning you gave with it. Not sure, if I could get through it, I decided to try and see how I woukd react. Boy was I surprised about my feeling that turned on, I was scared as hell about it.... I havent read much about forced sexuality before that, and I surely didnt react to it like I did here;)

What was another part of my surprise, was this wasn't a lemon between E&B, and still I was leaking likeca faucet - that was another first;)

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Date: 08 Oct 2015 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 9

Im having a bad, bad feeling in my stomach

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Date: 07 Oct 2015 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 8

Some would think he would be more careful now:(

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Date: 07 Oct 2015 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 7

Well, Bella seems to have more control about her temoer, but she needs to keep up a bt faster to stay "in control" id say...

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Date: 07 Oct 2015 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 6

Edward needs to learn to conrol his temper, this behavior wont do him any good:(

Why is Bella asleep if the rest of the house is having dinner? !

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Date: 07 Oct 2015 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh poor Edward... this is going to be such a rude awakening when reality really hits home:(

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Date: 07 Oct 2015 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

I'm not sure if Alec is really aware of it, but thinking Demetri is thely sick one thre is like the pot calling the kettle black;)

If it wasnt such a bad situation she was in, Bella's thiughts would be fucking hilarious...

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Date: 07 Oct 2015 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 3

Oh hell, I'm astounded Edward didnt hit Emmett for his almost slip in front of the girls.... I'm sure I would have;)

Very interesting that the people who drank that champagne were pretty fast and deep asleep and even Bella fell under some kind of spell.... but her thoughts were hilarious

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Date: 05 Oct 2015 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 2

I get that Bella would have felt a little jealous in the beginning, but doubt it would've stayed that way had she been on of Edwards "easier pray"....

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Date: 04 Oct 2015 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 1

I remember reading this the first time and how bad I felt for Bella. Not only did she has to hear something she didn't fully understand or even worse misunderstood completely... I know I wondered what would have happened if she just knocked on the door anyway. Would all the evil you pointed out in the summary have still happened to them? Or if she had left...

Emmett is someone I pretty much love in any story, it's so hard not to love him with his big teddy bear behavior... But with him wondering so much about why Edward and Bella didn't follow their attraction it was hard not to get mad at him. Because if he would've manned up and asked him what was going on between them, it would've probably been never coming to this scenes...

But I was intrigued what you had planned for them and stayed. I never regretted that decision, because as difficult as some scenes were to read, as hot I found them ;)

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Date: 04 Oct 2015 7:03 PM Title: The Second Elizabeth Interview

That was the sweetest part of their whole story;)

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