Date: 15 Dec 2012 12:00 PM Title: Daddy's boy
Loved it loved it LOVED IT!!!!
I love age play, not a fan of slash though so I wouldn't mind seeing Edward and Bella have a roleplay night. That would be hot as hell and you write it very well.
"Riley found the most astonishing piece of information to come from Edward's own sister. She seemed to be of the mind that Isabella was not everything she portrayed herself to be."
Edward really, REALLY needs to know about this. It's one thing for his sister to have and express her stupid beliefs to him but quite another for her to be talking to others about it. He really needs to know this information. Especially with all of the people out to hurt Bella his sister opening her mouth to the wrong person could potentially bring harm to her. I also would really love to see Riley and his next encounter with Alice where he can tell her that she seems to be totally off the mark.
It was also a bit frustrating for Riley to seem to brush off Dougies desire to not play with Tanya anymore. He wasn't just throwing a temper tantrum, he really don't want to play with the woman and Riley should not only listen but respect that.
Is there any particular reason you don't always write in 3rd person? You do very well at it. I've never totally understood why authors don't write in 3rd person as a default. It's much easier to follow and get everyones point of view and voice in whereas you often times have to back track when switching POV's and/or missing stuff because you don't want to rehash to much. It can be frustrating when a story is making good progress in the plot but you have to wait because the next chapter has to go over someone elses pov instead of getting on with the story. Not that you've done that to any great degree, but lots of authors do. There was one story I plain stopped reading because as good as the plot was, we had to go through 4 or 5 chapters of everyones different point of views before any forward movement was made. 3rd person gets it all done at once and it makes more sense when everyone is reacting as it's happening.
Date: 10 Dec 2012 6:32 AM Title: Daddy's boy
I really enjoyed that. It was nice to be inside Riley's head. He has such a strong masculine presence to Dougie's playful boyishness. I enjoyed seeing him grow under Bella's spell as Alice would call it. I didn't realize she had spoken her theory to anyone and I'm glad that Riley didn't take her at face value and decided for himself what kind of person Bella is.
Date: 06 Dec 2012 4:30 PM Title: Daddy's boy
I loved this installment. I was having trouble seeing how a Marine turned into daddy's little boy. How he functioned in the real world and then in their world. Was he an adult to the rest of the world? Does he drive? Is he a "child" 24/7? My husband is a retired Marine, so I understand their training and what it takes to make it through combat. I understand Douglas's need to have a purpose in life. He wanted to have a Daddy because he never had one, but he still couldn't just be taken care of like a pet. He needed to be needed and he has a work ethic. Marines are proud people. They want to feel like they are contributing. I understand his need to still work even if he is suppose to be a child for his Daddy. He can be an adult when it is called for and can adjust roles as needed.
Yes...and that was a problem for Douglas...for one he was young and had never had a real childhood or even really security (be it physical or emotional) while growing up so perpetual childhood was intriguing besides that he loved Riley...so he wanted to be with him and the age play was just part of the deal....and as much as it sounded fun and carefree, Douglas needed -for his own self respect and pride to not just be arm candy. Yet Riley couldn't stand the thought of him being away from him (after all Riley has a profession that requires travel, extended stays in other cities and spare of the moment change of plans...if something goes wrong with a his garment production in NY ...he has to drop what he is doing and go there ...right away. If Douglas had a conventional job he wouldn't have the convenience of dropping everything to accompany daddy...so having Douglas be his PA was perfect...and it truly is the most important posistion in their daily life....it gave Douglas the respect he needed for himself along with knowing he was doing his very best to make Riley's life better and it kept him lose to daddy...win-win....and your absolutely right about "Once a Marine always a Marine" ....that mentality that is e stilled in them to be the "the best" "the toughest" "the first in a battle" is always there ...and I think or T least I hope I did it justice to show that Douglas has that instilled in him ...anyway, thanks for reading...and until next time..be well
Date: 27 Oct 2012 9:00 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
"From the very beginning of DitR it was set up for this to happen...and in my opinion fits the personality of Stephanie Meyer's Alice. I know there are some of you who just gasped and fell off your chair but if you'd like email me and I’ll give you my examples of how I come to that conclusion...."
For the record, I totally agree with you. I am curious what lead you to those conclusions. I've always found it odd how everyone says they want a friend like Alice as all I could ever think was that I'd want nothing to do with her. She'd annoy me to the point I couldn't fake being nice anymore.
Date: 01 Oct 2012 12:56 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Thanks for the “shout out” and okay so I was a little abrupt in my thinking…I feel vindicated that I’m not alone.
Still Alice wants her brother to commune with one of “their own”, and she has definitely got a case of the green-eyed-monster when it comes to Bella and her perceptions of how she is infiltrating the family circle. She understands Edwards and Bella’s relationship about as well as I do, and I’m privy to the other side of the story.
I don’t hate Alice and I believe I understand her hormonal, concerned point of view. She won’t walk away – and I definitely don’t think she wants to have to say, “I told you so” when the relationship goes to hell in a hand basket, as she assumes it will.
Date: 30 Sep 2012 11:34 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
L - I think you did a fine job. You just took Alice a little further into her snobbery than Stephanie did. I am amazied that this is her attitude at this point in the story, but in some ways it totally makes sense especially after her growing up with Esme and Jane. I wonder what she will think when Esme tries to make nice to Jane. Plus/But her whole Bella is a devious money hungry victim. Wow, I would expect that maybe - maybe from a bitchy stranger but for her to now conclude that is what Bella is, is kind of shocking. Great insight. Great addition to the story.
Date: 22 Sep 2012 8:03 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Well, Alice seems concerned for her brother's long-term welfare, but it is ultimately his business how he looks out for his finances. And, although she has previously seemed to care about Bella, she seems quite snobby and somewhat jealous of Bella now. Maybe she'll come-around when her hormones level-off, or at least after her latest baby is born.
Thanks so much for this story and the Extras-----this is one of the best stories. I love how Edward and Bella care for each other----in the ways that work for them.
Date: 20 Sep 2012 2:15 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I think Jasper can tell he is not getting the whole story. Alice sure painted him a one sided portrait. Alice still sounds so petty and I think Jasper sees it. He knows Bella and she is not driven by money and status. Alice is and that is why she can see the evil possiblities.
Date: 15 Sep 2012 2:58 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
This better explains her reasoning but I see this causing a slew of other problems down the road. I agree that this is a more intense version of SM's Alice and see a blow up/out occurring with Alice and Bella.
Looking forward to the next regular chapter update. Thanks for everything you are doing while writing this story.
Date: 14 Sep 2012 1:27 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I think Alice is acting like a spoiled little snob. And her blaming Bella for getting pregnant is just crazy. I would say it is pregnancy hormones but I think it is more about Alice want to be in center of attention and control everyone. Poor Jazz. I know he wants to protect his wife but I think even he sees how bad she is behaving. I hope he can find a way to deal with her and help her without being mean to Bella or Edward because they have done nothing wrong.
Date: 13 Sep 2012 2:12 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I think Alice is totally out of line with her way of thinking. She has taken a problem that had maybe a timy grain of truth to it and has blown it up to make Bella look like something she is not at all. I am disappointed that Jasper didn't do a little more to show here she is being unreasonable.
Date: 13 Sep 2012 12:56 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Great chapter but I more and more dislike Alice and... to a lesser degree Esme.
I hope somehow you work in a lesson for Alice so she learns there is more to life than what she thinks but I won't be upset if that is not your plan.
Date: 12 Sep 2012 11:53 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I swear I just dont get Alice, and I do think Edward is right she will keep on pushing, and then she will push too far. I see that she means well, but she needs to back off. As for Jasper putting his two cents in and going to talk to Edward, he needs to leave it alone, his wife has put her self in this position and she will get her self out plain and simple.
Date: 12 Sep 2012 3:31 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
In a way I feel sorry for Alice but that feeling eventually goes away. She talks about Bella being phoney but what about her? Isn't she being fake by trying to change Bella into something she's not? Bella is only being true to herself and who she is. I've been thinking a lot about how Edward was feeling at the end of the last chapter of DiTR and was almost convinced that maybe Bella wasn't being truthful with him but then I couldn't help remembering how he found Bella at her house in a huddled mess with the evidence of what really happened to her all over the house. While some people are really good actors, the trauma she suffered I think would be hard to make up.
If Alice feels this strongly about Bella, I don't think seeing the evidence of what had happened to Bella will change her mind, although I would like to see what happens and it would be nice to see that change happen. And I noticed how Alice completely glossed over the part of her conversation with Edward where he compared her to their mother in that Esme treats Jane like an outcast. But of course Alice isn't going to say anything to Jasper about that because then the comparison would make her behavior real, and in Alice's world she would never act that way.
Great chapter and I hope you're planning on having Jasper confront Edward and the truth of the entire conversation coming to light. Speaking of truths coming to light, is Bella planning to ever talk to the police about what really happened to her? I feel like Jake would understand if she turns James in; I would think in spite of what happens to him, Leah and Jake would forgive Bella. I don't think Bella is going to be able to completely submit to Edward until this one nagging piece of her past finally gets resolved.
Luvin this story, Louise. Keep it coming.
Date: 12 Sep 2012 3:17 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I have rarely liked Alice in any stories I read, but I really don't like this one. I also wish Jasper would grow a set and stand up to Alice. She was so condescending even to him. Her attitude makes me cringe.
Date: 12 Sep 2012 2:27 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Yup, I'm still hating on Alice. She clearly has no idea what BDSM is really about and she's utterly insulting to the practitioners of it, off whom she profits. Ridiculous.
I do agree with your opinion about the link between your Alice and Stephenie Meyer's character. Personally, I think it may take Jasper stepping in to mediate between brother and sister to fix this. He can see both sides now, I think, since he's come around. I think Alice may just be so used to getting everything she wants that she can't understand someone else taking a higher priority in her "friends'" lives than she does.
Just my opinion.
Date: 12 Sep 2012 2:10 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I thought the face to face argument between Alice and Edward was self explanatory. Alice is a spoilt girl who thinks her opinion is of higher value than it actually is. Putting on airs demanding respect that has not been earned. The fact that she is not privy to Bella's complete history has entitled Alice to make up these over exaggerated ideas of Bella's intent to harm Edward. This is more than pregnancy hormones. And the audacity to accuse Bella of changing her menstrual cycle causing an unexpected pregnancy has me floored.
She has fallen victim to the position of elitist snob!
Date: 12 Sep 2012 12:34 AM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Congratulations, it is the first time that I read an Alice more real to her social status, a person of high society can be respectful but she does not stop seeing downwards to others status (I know many I grow around them).
Alice dont understan the need to have some one to be in charge of someone and respectfull of her at the same time like she is with her children, she dont see that at the end of her relationship with Jazz, she ask permision to do other things.
What I dont understand how Bella can go to the center to help, when to be able to help other women the first thing that one have to do is love , respect and to be honest with youself, something that Bella do not. She allows the person who rape her walk freely. She is not capable of telling her own history to her self or to others.
Date: 11 Sep 2012 10:17 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
oh my, well I still think she "Alice" is being snobbish......Jasper is going and to be the calming influence here and take the middle ground I feel. I guess I need to re-read me some chapters but I don't recall him taking the Cane to her backside, if anything she's been fearful of it. I do need to go back to the night of the Club Anniversary, I think that might be the chapter it's in....
I still think that Edward was being sterner than usual over his discussion with Alice earlier in the day. Yes, agreeded hands down he is a formidible Strong Strict Dom... and she was being a little bratty, sometimes I think we all fail to remeber how new she is to all this... she had a very stressful day back at work AND menus mess with your hormones... so I'm just asking "Are Edward's expectations too high for Bella, at times?" Would love opinions from anyone on that comment too! Louise, as alway you amd "M" are the best and I love this story as well as how you request honest feedback, as well as explain EPOV and Masters POV.... Kathy
Date: 11 Sep 2012 9:11 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I can not believe that Alice is blaming this preganancey on Bella, REALLY!!!!!!! I am sorry, but I think that Alice is a little snob. Alice is never wrong, it is always someone else's fault. I wish someone would open her eyes to the way she is acting. I was hoping that when Edward and she talked that she would see what she was doing. I hope someone gets through to her.
Date: 11 Sep 2012 8:39 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
i seriously despise her snobby and pathetic ass, she finally shows her real colors!!!
she's among the elite and Bella hasn't earned that privilege as if she in turn did being born in a wealthy family and hadn't worked for anything in her life!!!
she obviously contradicts her own words talking about earning a privilege while having never earned anything herself except maybe the title of self-righteous, selfish,delusional lying bitch!!!
i like the idea of her being the monster here, too often have her interfering ways been considered cute rather than controlling and self-absorbed!!!
Date: 11 Sep 2012 8:18 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
This insight into Alice only reaffirms that she really is a self-righteous, self-centered snobby little bitch. It amazes me how she plays victim and blames both Bella and Edward for her crappy attitude. I really hope that "Jazzy" can see the forest for the trees with her and not haul off and attack Edward for supposedly being unkind to his wife. Jazz strikes me as a great guy and husband who will rightly defend his wife's honor but even he has to be able to see that his wife is a snobbish condescending witch who lacks any accountability or even the class she claims she has because of her Cullen name. While I hate to see any Alice written like this but I think I can see your point about who she was in the series.
I really hope that Bella shows Alice what kind of woman she really is and puts Alice in her place. This "turn the other cheek and I am only trying to be understanding attitude" of Bella's will get old fast. And unfortunately, people like Alice can see never see what they do to others and only what is done to them. I think this will be the only way to get her to shut the hell up and see what she is doing to the family.
Ok I am stepping off the old soapbox now ... Thanks for the insight. It is really is coo-coo in Alice in Wonderland's self absorbed head - kinda sticky and gross in there too. :))
Date: 11 Sep 2012 8:12 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Ok even more so now.... I wanna punch her in her self serving, delusional, snooty, upturned nose. I hope Jazz says something so he can hear what his wife is really saying and doing. What a bitch!!!!
Date: 11 Sep 2012 8:03 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
I think it is a great and interesting twist. I can see how Alice would go there. It bugs me that Jasper is going to talk to Edward but I hope Edward gives him the rest of the story. I'm one of those people that thinks you don't step into the middle of other people's relationships. Not just Alice staying out of Edward and Bella's but Jasper staying out of Alice and Edwards. From what I've seen the person stepping ing screws up their own relationship with those people.
Date: 11 Sep 2012 7:53 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
Its hard to imagine Alice like this but I guess I can see where it came from but its just hard to picture Alice like this when she usually rises above all the "I am better than thou" attitude. I hope that everything will be ok and she will come to realize that she is being self centered and do something to rectify the situation.
Date: 11 Sep 2012 7:12 PM Title: Alice in her own Wonderland
You're right when you said some people would think she's a "Self-centered, Self-serving, Self-righteous, Bitch." That's exactly what she is. She wants everything said and done to her approval and in life, that's just not feesible.
I also think it's laughable that Alice said that Edward didn't care that he was upsetting her when he spoke to her that way, but little does she realize (all because she's an OCD, control freak) that what she was saying was in turn hurting Edward. hypocritical much? Do as I say, not as I do, Alice?
She reminds me of my cousin. She blames everything on her sister, (in this case, Alice blames everything on Bella), even when they didn't do anything. She needs to start taking responsibility for her own actions! Like getting pregnant. If she didn't want to have another kid, she should have been using birth control, condoms or gone in to get her tubes tied, or even had Jasper get a vasectomy. No! It's all Bella's fault.
My cousin it a self centered, self righteous, raging bitch who thinks she can manipulate everyone around her into getting her way and having them do, say and dress how she wants them to. It gets real annoying, real fast. I can't stand people like this!
On the flip side, I understand that Alice just wants to protect her brother. Though, it's not really her brother she's trying to protect here, is it? It's his money, his reputation and in turn, the reputation of her family and herself. It's deplorable.
If she just stops to take a second to actually talk to Bella and see where she's coming from, she might be able to understand Bella's position. I doubt it, but it can't hurt to try.
I hope Edward tells Jasper what is going on. The truth. Alice is bending things and ommiting things to make herself sound better to her husband. If she's not careful, he's going to divorce her sorry ass. I almost hope he does just to put her in her place. She doesn't deserve someone as good as Jasper.
I'm all for Alice, but a nicer one who knows when to stop and when she's wrong. This is clearly not that character I've known and grown to love. I commend you on actually tweeking a few things about the characters, like Rose and Bella getting along immediately. Bella and Alice like oil and water. it's intriguing! Keep up the good work!
Okay, I think I've ranted enough. Sorry about the long message/review. I didn't mean to be that long winded. Great writing, I can't wait to see where this goes and turns. I'm awaiting the next chapter eagerly!
Date: 27 Jul 2012 9:45 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
Glad that Esme and Bella are getting along. I think Esme is nice but she just has a hard time accepting what Edward/Bella and Aro/Jane have. She just does not understand it. But I think she is trying to.
Date: 16 Jul 2012 5:13 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
Esme is the typical doting mother.
Chuckling at her determination in showing Bella the ball room.
Bella seems to have found herself surrounded by several women that have suffered at the hands of an abusive man.
I hope Bella's insights into Jane has spurred Esme on to mending their relationship.
Date: 06 Jul 2012 11:16 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
Good for Esme. She's trying not to interfere, but she knows a good girl when she sees one. She wants her son to be happy and she's willing to push, him just a little.
'Hope she keeps her gracefulness, when she finds out that there may not be any little Edward's born later.
'Loved this chapter! Thanks.
Date: 06 Jul 2012 1:15 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
I think Esme is like most moms. We want the best for our kids. Sometimes it is hard to find out that the kids know better what the best is than we do, so we have to check it out further. Esme realized that Edward did pick the best for him. She loves Bella and is more than happy with his choice. She just wanted more information because we all know that Bella has lots of secrets. She has at times double talked or back tracked during a conversation that was getting to close to her danger zone. She has never told her story to Esme as much as she did today and Esme needed this to feel bonded. They needed the one on one time.
Date: 06 Jul 2012 12:57 AM Title: Ladies Luncheon
I wish Bella had told Esme that her and Janes lifestyle wasn't belittling. She seems to pass up a lot of opportunities to give insight to people with incorrect assumptions. I mean, it's not her job to educate the world but I think it's important with those that are close to you or close to the person you love and are going to be in your life.
Date: 04 Jul 2012 10:45 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
What do I think of Esme? Well I think she is being very presumptuous in picking a location for their wedding before he even asks her. If I know Bella she is going to want a very small, much more intimate gathering... not a uber expensive side show; especially as it's not her first wedding.
Very interesting insight into her personality... not sure I'm her biggest fan.
Date: 04 Jul 2012 8:04 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
I personally loved this outtake, if you will. We have garnered a greater insight into Esme here, yep, she was definitely sneaky in her agenda....showing Bella where a wedding reception could be held...yep sneaky alright.... I also seriously hope Esme takes ner own words and thoughts to heart and puts a plan into action and make things right with Jane, she is a wonderful woman, and Aro adores his wife....that alone should make Esme want to give her respect...however Late to that particular Cause, Esme may be, nevertheless the fact remains Esme does have corrections and misconceptions to repent of, where Jane and Aro are concerned.
till next time... Happy 4th!!! Kathy
Date: 04 Jul 2012 7:47 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
Wow, you covered do much here! I hope everyone checks it out... At first I thought I might not like Esme as much as I usually do. She seemed a bit more conniving than I like. However, she grew on me during the chapter and I realized she just wants the best for her family and she didn't.t know Bella like your readers do. I absolutely love that they connected and that she called Edward at the end of the chapter!
Date: 04 Jul 2012 5:43 PM Title: Ladies Luncheon
Lunch between Bella & Esme was perfect! I wish my mother-in-law had been willing to get to know me in the beginning instead of assuming and judging my actions wrongly for marrying her son. We've been married 29 years on Sunday and it's only been in the last 4-5 years she's believed I'm here to stay. Keep in mind her son has been fully disabled for the last 16 years and I've stood by his side and fought doctors and caseworkers through all his surgeries and that didn't even convince her.
I've made a vow to love all my son-in-laws and accept their love for my daughters until they give me a reason not to.
Date: 20 Apr 2012 3:06 PM Title: Early Morning Chat
Next time you talk to his Domliness I'm just curious how he would react if Bella did call RED? Not just on the scene but if she wanted out of the contract temporarily?
hmmm... i'm wondering "why" she would do that...although i will tell you that if Bella wanted out of the contract it would disappoint him but he would have no choice but to let her go. He can't force her, nor would he want to--- there's no fun in controlling someone who doesn't enjoy it. I'm sure if either of them wanted to break off their D/s relationship or take a break from it, there would be some deep discussion as to the reasons, but in the end the other would have to abide the request...it's all part of the "consentual" aspect of the contract.
Date: 19 Apr 2012 7:59 PM Title: Bella's Journal Entry - Sun June 14, 2010
I will never look at a cock the same again. I see many in my job. I perform ultrasound and do many testicular exams. As I said, I see and touch many and they are not mine to worship, but I will think of this when I see them.
I'm sure your male patients will just ...love that...lol... you know how men feel about their penis...holy hell, the sun rises and sets on the thing ...lol...
Date: 05 Feb 2012 7:24 AM Title: Early Morning Chat
Interesting. I had no issues with what happened in 83. I mean it was hard but I get it and sort of thought it was a cool specific hard core way to go about it. Cool isnt the right word but is the closest I can come to what I mean. But this I dont agree with, a sub can be raped. If a sub is incapable of saying their safe word, it can happen. It wouldnt with a resposible dom but life and people arent perfect. Any way lots in this poked me and I almost wish I hadnt read it, the ot I mean. Wry smile. All that aside, I love love love your story and am very glad you share it. Thank you. Actually, I was thinking of sending a link, along with other stuff, to a friend who has interest in bdsm and you present it in a really awesome fashion, that gets across a lot of my perspectives on it. And you helped me figure out some things of my own. Basically this fic has hit close to home and meant a lot to me. Ok, done rambling. Please keep writing and try not to be discouraged. :)
Date: 30 Jan 2012 9:13 PM Title: Bella's Journal Tuesday June 10, 2010
Some people will never understand the Dom/sub relationship. You will never be able to explain the deep seated dedication and love they share. Most people are to independent to love their spouse this way. A D/s relationship, especially one that is also a couple situation as well, takes a lot of energy and work.
Date: 23 Jan 2012 3:46 AM Title: Early Morning Chat
Interesting conversation. Must say at no point did I consider his behavior would be looked at that way. No, she didn't safe word. No, she didn't enjoy it. Yet even then, she knew (I believe) that he was within his right, that he would not intentional cause her harm.
Date: 20 Jan 2012 9:31 AM Title: Early Morning Chat
That was great to hear Edward.. But I confused.. is this not a BDSM love story.. mmm.
You know what gets me, Is if Bella was the Domix. and did that to Edward. none of the readers would say a thing.. I have seen it a dozen times in the Domix stories..
But god for bid for Edward to a true dom.. most stories start of with D/s But it ends more like playing and bella is in charge and if she wants he can be dom..
I love your story because Edward is a compassinate Dom, Care for her, Plus they have a wonderful and geniuen romance..
So I actuall was hurt and sad for you that some of your reader said that he raped her.. but I can guarnitee that if was the other way around they would have not said a peep..........
Okay I think I am getting carried away.. and really it a fantiction, not really life.. Enjoy the story and stop cristizing the charcters.. How can anyone say anythink neg. about your fantastic story..
Great big hugs... your reader friend Leona
Date: 19 Jan 2012 12:41 PM Title: Early Morning Chat
Louise & His Domliness **chuckles at the name** thank you both for this honest Outtake...Louise you as the writer really took some heavy hits on reviews and Mr Domliness really were berated about your abuse...**hey reviewers words, not mine** I think I said your a strict Dom and exact lessons and punishments swiftly, and with purpose... I think I also pointed out that Isabella has to show and exhibit Trust in her Dom, she did not Safeword.... Why? that's Isabella's to answer...myself, as the reader can presume and I do presume her reasons....But..I look forward to hearing and seeing in the next chapter more of her thoughts and logic... No' No totally agree Bella is spunky and Isabella has shown it too, as a matter of fact what about when he did apologize to her for tne time he Unintentionally gave Jessica the Dom look in Isabella's presence. No she is not stupid or weak at all, but she is a pleaser which taps into her submissive personality... I do stand by my thoughts and feelings that she seeks to not disappoint and sometimes it does cause her to pause.......I'm going to go back and read but when they were at the hotel did 't she finally safeword then? But it took true emotional blocking on his part to get her to see but she did safeword because she had reached her limit....He's right she is tough and she is a thinker, she will get there... and he has always said he did not want a slave...I never felt he raped her... First he would Never ever do that, and secondly ... no hell no ..no second he just flatly would never do that.... Okay...enough now... TY for this Outtake, and look forward to Chapter 84 and more..... Kathy Love ya "L" and Mr Sexy Domliness!!!!
Date: 18 Jan 2012 6:23 PM Title: Early Morning Chat
Thank you so much for this late nite/early morn chat. It helped me a lot. I did not think rape but did struggle with his method for the " lesson". I worry not that Isabella is afraid to safe word but that she either sees it as failure or forgets she can because she thinks she needs to go through it since Master knows best. It helps to hear Edward say he loves her and has faith in herm. Understanding why ther "has" to be so much physical pain inflicted and mnot caring a flying fuck how it makes her feel is always going to be hard for me to swallow.
Date: 18 Jan 2012 6:22 PM Title: Early Morning Chat
REALLY!!!!!! Some of your readers thought that Edward raped Bella!!!! WOW!!!! That did not even cross my mind. I am just blown away with that. I think you did an excellent job with that chapter. As you said, it gives a realistic look into a Dom/sub interacting. Loved the interview.
Date: 18 Jan 2012 4:15 PM Title: Early Morning Chat
Rapenever even crossed my mind. But regarding the sighing, eyerolling, etc. He said he it was to not be directed athim. But it seems to me he doesn't want her to do it period. She stopped a sigh or something directed at him, I think it was. Sorry but em and Alice both deserve sighs and eyerolls. Alice especially. I still would like to see B's thoughts on why she didn't yellow at least. Great chapter though.
Date: 18 Jan 2012 4:15 PM Title: Early Morning Chat
I'm sorry that so many people overreacted and don't seem to really get what the D/s relationship is about. Or safewords. I hope it helps to know that there are some of us out there who get it, and understand Edward's motivation and actions last chapter. I hope others will get it now too.
Date: 13 Dec 2011 5:47 AM Title: Jessica's Dilemma - read after chapter 79
It does make me feel bad for Jess. She's been a pawn in all this, in a nasty way. I feel part of it ofte comes down to the difference between the sexes and how we feel about sex. Edward was clearly just looking for a playmate when he was with Jess, and though he may have told her that quite clearly, women often hear what they want to and think things will change. I'm sure this will help other people understand her a bit better.
Cheers, Balti K
Date: 08 Dec 2011 7:51 AM Title: Jessica's Dilemma - read after chapter 79
NO she is not dumb. just not to bright.. petty.. oh she just made this worse on her self. oops.
love this outtake. god mike not to bright either. hahaha
Most Criminals are too smart for their own good...and your right Jess just made a bad decision worse...thanks for reading..louise
Date: 07 Dec 2011 11:17 PM Title: Jessica's Dilemma - read after chapter 79
So the coniving little wench is running away. Well at least she will no longer be a tool Mike and Karen can use against Bella and Edward.
Yes, she is running away as fast as she could...running to grandma's ((maybe Jess will feel better after she has her milk and cookies...lol..))
Date: 07 Dec 2011 7:26 AM Title: Jessica's Dilemma - read after chapter 79
Glad I'm not inside her head all the time - I'd constantly be dizzy, the way it goes round at a mile a minute.
LOL... I have to say that I wrote the OT in about three hours, and that was exactly how I felt. Jess was talking so fast in my head that my fingers couldn't keep up...lol...yes I've past the point of no return and listen to the voices in my head...LOL....Thanks for reading...louise
Date: 07 Dec 2011 6:07 AM Title: Jessica's Dilemma - read after chapter 79
looking forward to the next outtake
There wasn't suppose to be any more OT's ...lol.. not untul the end of the story and in between the epilogs...so i suppose they will olny come as the spirit moves me...thanks for reading...louise
Date: 07 Dec 2011 4:22 AM Title: Jessica's Dilemma - read after chapter 79
Pick away! The girl is dumber than a bag of rocks. I hope her grandmother (I assume that's who Grand is) can talk some sense into her. The girl lives in Lala Land.
**Glad you didn't stick to your last a/n when you said that was it for outtakes!**
lol...well you know how it is -- Sometimes the characters get inside your head and won't let you alone until you tell what they want to say...lol..i suppose this is like my own person form of multi personality disorder...no wonder my husband thinks I'm nuts...lol....Oh and BTW, you'll find out later the rest of Jessica Stanley's story...thanks for reading...louise
Date: 28 Nov 2011 9:29 PM Title: Charlie's Surprise Visit
I loved this chapter. I hope Bella is smart enough to listen. Charlie is smart and knows part of what Bella went through. He will be able to handle it. Bella needs to stop this monster or is she going to let him hurt some one else.
Date: 26 Nov 2011 7:45 AM Title: Charlie's Surprise Visit
Yay! The last three chapters have been amazing and thats saying a lot. I have read the original story as fast as possible after only recently discoving it and have enjoyed it immensley. Thank you for writing and sharing it. I look forward to more of your writing!
Date: 24 Nov 2011 11:26 AM Title: Charlie's Surprise Visit
You want to cry with charlie, and he right about Bellaa putting the Jerk in Jail. But not until she is ready. which maybe never...
it is easier sad then done.. Bella is not strong enough to handle the pressure that goes with it. But maybe in time with Edward TLC she will get their. I only hope. Or james gets his in the ended. you know what they say, "what goes around comes around" I believe it. even if it took over 30 yrs..
I can't wait for the next update of both outtakkes and story..
Date: 24 Nov 2011 12:33 AM Title: Charlie's Surprise Visit
Happy Thanksgiving tommorrow Ms Louise!!! Thank you very much for the outtake of Charlie and his view on all he learned.... wow as a parent I am telling you..Loved how you show the complexity of emotions Charlie goes through in the realization of what the relationship of Bella and Edward is or might be..then his discussion with Officer Hawkes, mercy.. loved how Charlie let him know in a very impressive Charlie-esk way just how he took what the officer was trying to imply about his daughter, and the implication of obtaining the SRO under less than legal means... just Wow! that was something!!!
You just have to chuckle at Charlie in the end especially when he says "Edward tells her to do something and she jumps to fulfill it." If that's what Charlie thinks of Bella well hell he's got a hell'va lot to learn about our girl here....Charlie did have his eyes and mind opened quite a bit here and made great strides in his view of "Alternative L/S" but its only because he can see how good Edward is to his daughter.... Love Love Love DomWard he is just beyond words!!!! your writing has it's own unique style and feel of our dearly loved characters but you constantly pull the readers in with each chapter.... Please enjoy all your family for the Holidays and will be patiently awaiting the next chapter!!!!! toodles!!! Kathy
Date: 23 Nov 2011 11:09 PM Title: Charlie's Surprise Visit
It was interesting watching Charlie wade through, learn, absorb and accept his little girl's lifestyle choice. Good man. Good dad.
Hmmmm. Too bad Edward was cut short on his private talk with Edward by his mom and aunt's arrival. And then the time just wasn't right as Charlie was leaving. Maybe next weekend they will have another chance...?
Date: 03 Nov 2011 3:24 PM Title: Esme's OT
I can see how Esme was hurt by Edward living with Aro and Jane. She saw it as he was rejecting her and choosing them. He wanted them to be his parents. We know this is not true, but she felt this way. We don't know how Edward explained it to her, but we know she felt rejected and hurt. She knew Edward was in a dark place having just quit medical school also. She was worried. Moms do that no matter what age their kids are. I think Edward needs to talk to his mom and esplain the lifestyle. She has crazy notions. Aro and Jane's relationship is the extreme.