Reviews by TillITryIllNeverKnow
Summary:

ONE SHOT Bella Swan is forced to return to Forks where her father abuses her. The Cullens have been waiting for her to complete their family. She is mate to Carlisle and bond mother to Edward. How will they save Bella? Read to find out.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2281 Read Count: 793
[Report This] Published: 14 Oct 2010 Updated: 14 Oct 2010
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You have an interesting idea- tell me more!

Summary:

When Bella, Edward, and their friends go on a guided tour of a supposedly haunted Mental Hospital, they all find that they have much more in common than they ever expected.

Inspired by the closed mental hospital used in this banner near where I live.  
Tripping the Veil Banner


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Horror, One-Shot, Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4473 Read Count: 1771
[Report This] Published: 16 Oct 2010 Updated: 16 Oct 2010
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Tripping the Veil

Excellent!  This could stand on its own or begin a longer story.  No matter how you look at it, the originality and just plain smnarts, stands out a mile!  Go you!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Bella is divorced and heartbroken. Lonely and broken four years later she is in a tragic accident. Can her Greek god heal ALL of her wounds? OOC/Cannon pairings. Rated M for lemons! Lots of lemons...

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 111950 Read Count: 47924
[Report This] Published: 17 Oct 2010 Updated: 08 Apr 2011
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 19 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I lo0vde the work you put in on this!  The emotions and feeligns all show through and pull your readers in.  Great work!  I'm looking forward to more!

Summary:

We all have something that slightly irks us about the events in the Twilight Saga. For me, it was the fact that Edward's family seemed okay with him abandoning Bella in New Moon. I just couldn't swallow that. Surely, Esme and Carlisle had something to say about Edward's ridiculous decision to leave! So here is my version of what happened at the Cullen household leading up to the day they leave from Esme's POV…

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Winner of the Judge's Pick - Summer  2010's Most Tragic Hour Writing Challenge and a 2011 winner of the Vampie's Awards One Trick Vampie (best one shot)

Part of the Carlisle and Esme:  Through Their Eyes Series

SM owns all of Twilight.

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Carlisle/Esme
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Carlisle and Esme: Through Their Eyes
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4021 Read Count: 267
[Report This] Published: 17 Oct 2010 Updated: 17 Oct 2010
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 19 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Finally!  An explanation and timeline that makes perfect sense!  Leave it to Esme to be a guardian angel!  Kudos!

Shake by LFC Hotstuff Rated: M starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 11]
Summary:

 

 

Shake is Edward's story, a high school student who has to deal with the daily embarrassment and pain brought about a disorder. All-Human.

 

 



Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8115 Read Count: 492
[Report This] Published: 20 Oct 2010 Updated: 20 Oct 2010
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 20 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

I think you did a great job with this.  Sensitive materials need to be handled "just-so", and you did that perfectly.  You give us a voice for those who have to deal with Tourette's daily and can't be heard uninterrupted.  What I tghink is even better, are those that interact with Edward.  Of course there are the totally childish morons that try to make Edward feel smaller daily.  But doesn't everyone have those fools in there lives?  Overlooking them is difficult, but a practiced art well worth the effort.  But in this piece you give us champions!  Emmett and Jasper are Edward's life long friends and their relationships do not  see Tourette's Edward but simply Edward.  They are also not afraid to tell him off just as they would a "normal" friend when he acts like an ass and hurts Bella.  You allow your readers to see that true friendship lies in the truth we are able to share with those we are closest to.  And Bella....  Bella here is not perfect, but none of us are.  She is however the personification of millions of people who do not judge and look for the person inside.  They do not see the affliction or disorder.  In short, that sound you vaguely hear is my applause and almost certainly the applause of many othyer readers!  Bravo on a job well done!



Author's Response:

Many thanks for the applause. 

I had this story in my "shelf" for many months and just picked it up last week. I knew I wanted to write this but I needed to research first before I tackle something like this. I wanted to have facts behind me in order to write a sensitive story like Shake.

Knowing someone who is living with this disorder opened my eyes to a lot of things that they have to go through each day. And how other people's reaction affects them. It made me realized that I'm lucky to not have any problem like he does. 

Anyways, thanks for your nice long comment. I truly appreciate it.

 

 

Carnival by pdd912 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

Bella meets Vampire Edward at an amusement park in New Orleans.  Mind control and Smut ensues.  Dark Edward.  Defiled Bella.  Consent is questionable.  Might be nonexistent.  AU, very OOC.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1336 Read Count: 670
[Report This] Published: 31 Oct 2010 Updated: 31 Oct 2010
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wonderfully naughty and erotic!  Ah, the power of the mind - in the right hands - like yours!  Marvelous!

Life In The Balance by mizzdee Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 51]
Summary:

Bella’s hopes, dreams, life and future were violently ripped away. She finally finds the strength to do what it takes to save her sanity but at what price? Can the man hired to help her remain professional long enough to save her life?

Warning:  This story contains violence, abuse and death. If you are sensitive to those issues, this isn’t the story for you.

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Awesome banner made by Rosalynn (Rosalynn7885)

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 266053 Read Count: 14118
[Report This] Published: 17 Nov 2010 Updated: 31 Aug 2014
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Buying Time

Marvelous chapter.  I'm looking forward to Bella's  "vision quest".



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you like it. Some of the best parts are still to come. Thanks for the review, darlin. Love you tons - D

Here's a quick peek at the next chapter which will be posted later today:

"You son of a bitch!" I screamed and ran, pushing his sleeping body, jolting him awake.

"Alice?"

"You're fucking drinking! Again!"

"No, I..."

"She could be dead and you'd never know ‘cause you can't stop drinking this shit!" I threw the half empty vodka bottle, shattering it against the wall. "That's it! I've had enough. I can't do this with you anymore!" I turned and ran from his office.

Carlisle was on me before I could pull the door open, fingers around my arm, jerking me to a stop.

"Alice, what wrong? Who's--"

My slap silenced him. "You said you care about her. You're supposed to be there for her! How can you let her down like this?"

"What are you talking about?"

"Bella!" I yanked my arm away from him. "She's lying in some hospital somewhere all alone because you can't stop drinking long enough to pick up the fucking phone!"    

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 12 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Actions And Consequences

This whole story is one great big lusciously complex masterpiece.  You have given EACH character depth and genuine personality while moving the story along perfectly.  As I said, it is a masterpiece.  Thank you for sharing it with us all!  I look forward to your updates.



Author's Response:

Wow!!! That has to be the biggest compliment I've ever received. You put such a huge smile on my face and I thank you for your words. This story has been an interesting one to put together. I know I've taken several liberties when it comes to some details but they make the story easier to tell. I hope you stick with me because there are worse times ahead for these characters. Thanks so much for you review, darlin. I really, really appreciate it. Much love - D

Until next time, here's a quick peek at chapter 20:

"I went through my whole story with him and he seriously flipped out. He was yelling; sometimes at me and sometimes at no one in particular. He kicked at the chairs, sending one flying a couple of feet backward. Then," I paused, a little afraid to tell Paul about this.

Just get it over with, Bella. He's going to hear it on the tape anyway.

"Then he started throwing punches." Paul's lip twitched and his eyes narrowed. I rushed to reassure him. "Not at me, I swear. He started punching the wall, mumbling things that made no sense. He just completely lost it and it scared the hell out of me. I didn't know what to do. Talking didn't work and yelling at him had no effect, so I did the only think I could think of."

I hesitated. I didn't want to tell him.

"And that was?" he asked.

"Ikissedhim." I rushed the words out.

"You what?"

I could feel my face turn bright red as I watched Paul try to hold in his laugh.

"You heard me." I didn't want to say it again.

"No really." He smirked. "You did what?"

The veins in his neck tensed with the effort he was using to keep from laughing. Glaring at him, I crossed my arms over my chest. The strain was evidently too much to take and his hands shot to his mouth as he burst into hysterics.

I swung at him through the bars. "God, I hate you."

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - A Look At The Past

This chapter simply oozes emotion and raw viseral pain.  Alice is an amazing release valve for te story and she really earns her brownie points here!  Kudos on another stunning chapter!



Author's Response:

Sorry it's taken so long for me to reply to your review. I usually do my replies the day before I post or, like today, early in the morning before I post in the afternoon or evening.

I'm really glad you like the chapter. Carmen saw a side of Bella that she didn't usually show people, but she felt safe in Forks and probably would have stayed there if it weren't for James. Now, Alice is moving on to her conversation with Ben, and if she thought Carmen shared a lot, it's nothing compared to what he's going to give her.

Now, I do have to apologize. This story is a killer for me to write. Updates don't always come as often as I want them to. Just know that I will never abandon it. So, I hope you stick with me. And thanks for the review. I really, really appreciate it. Much love - D

Until next time, here's a quick peek at Alice's conversation with Ben:

Ben Cheney had been in my room for less than thirty minutes and he'd given me a whole new perspective on Bella's life, one I'd never considered before.

"I've followed the steps that brought Bella here," I began. "I have this picture in my head of her being scared, maybe a little paranoid but I always believed it was because she knew she had to stay hidden, hoping with everything she had in her that she'd finally gotten away. That had to be hard enough to live through."

I rubbed my temples, trying to get rid of the headache I could feel coming.

"I never thought about how unnerving it would be to know that no matter how hard she tried, nothing was ever going to work. That it was never a question of if he would find her but when. I can only imagine how hard it was for her to keep running after she realized it was useless."

"Bella was already at that point when we met. She told me once that if she ran, he would find her and if she stayed, he would kill her. She was desperate, but running was all she knew." Ben took a deep breath, closing his eyes for a brief second before adding, "I offered to change that."

"So Carmen was right about you and Bella?" I blurted out.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 20 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - The Aftermath

Outstanding!  The volatility, emotional angst and drama here all work so-o well.  The subject matter is tough, but what you do with it is heart wrenchingly superb.  You make us all FEEL!  And feel big time; just as you make the characters feel big time.  From Jasper and Paul who's misplaced quilt is weighing them down, to Alice's defiant demand for what is right and just, to Carlisle's ever deepening love and devotion and terror.  Just now Bella is trying not to feel quite as much as she normally does, but that is understandable.  The hope here lies (for me) in her knowing, hearing, and trying to listen to Jasper.  These people have become a part of her new world and she is hanging on by her fingertips to it even if she doesn't realize it.  Thank you for all your hard work!  Brava!



Author's Response:

Holy cow! I can't thank you enough for the compliments on this story. It is one of the hardest things in the world for me to write and to know that you like it so much means a lot to me. You know, these characters are so vivid in my mind and there are times when I don't believe I portray them properly but, with your words, you've told me in one shot that I've done exactly what I thought I wasn't because you seem to see what I see in them. So thanks for that.  As for the story itself, Bella's got some amazing people who care about her and the course of her future will depend on how far she allows them into her life. She still hasn't made up her mind about that but maybe the outcome of this one incident will help her decide. Thanks so so much for your review. I truly appreciate your words and hope to hear more from you in the future. Much love - D

Here's a quick peek at the next chapter (from a very unexpected pov), which will be posted later today:

In seconds, I was in the kitchen searching the phonebook for the closest hospital. Another second, the phone was ringing. A woman answered but I cut her off before she finished her greeting.

"Isabella Swan," I roared. "Please."

"Excuse me?"

I took a breath to calm down. "I'm looking for Isabella Swan. Is she there? I mean, has she been admitted?"

"One moment please."

I paced the kitchen while she checked.

"Come on." She was taking too long. "Come on."

I froze when I heard her voice. "I'm sorry, Sir, there has been no one by that name admitted in the last twenty-four hours. Do you..."

Ending the call, I ran my finger down the page in the phone book, looking for the next closest hospital. As I found the number, I punched it in and began pacing again as I waited for someone to answer. When a woman picked up, I quickly asked for Bella and waited, again, while the operator searched for her.

"Yes, Sir, Ms. Swan was brought in this morning but I'm sorry, that's all the information I'm allowed to share."

I was in my room before she finished her sentence, pulling clothes from their hangers.

"Thank you. That's all I need."

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

 

In a world dominated by vampires, humans are forced to abide by the strict rules of the vampire government. Bella has never experienced life in an all-human world and one day the only life she knows shatters to pieces when she is kidnapped and sold to a vampire. She is unfortunately the object of the most ruthless, out of control, vampire‘s affection. Her life turns upside down as she moves to an all-vampire town. Will she have the strength to go on after all that she has endured her personal hell? Will the one special vampire heal her wounds as she struggles to live a life amongst vampires or will she become the victim of their most sinister instincts? Edward and Bella pairing, AU, OOC

Warning: This story contains explicit adult content, language, violence, vampire marking and blood play, Extreme Dark-ward, and murder.

Alternate version of the original story, Living Amongst Vampires. By IBELONGTOAVAMPIRE.

L.A.H, is co-written by Thaigher Lillie

Tkegl...Thank you!

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Horror, Sci-Fi
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89094 Read Count: 129742
[Report This] Published: 22 Nov 2010 Updated: 10 Oct 2014
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: The set-up

I love the tweaking you've doen here!  It gives the story a whole new feel and an air of "anything's possible".  Caius is going to regret his actions, I'm sure...all of them.



Author's Response:

Thank you! Glad you like  Yes, that's very true, anything is possible. =)

~Thank you for reading and commenting.

Jells

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Taken

 Nice, very, very nice!  You're heading into fascinating territory now and I, for one plan to be there for the trip!



Author's Response:

Thank you =) We're happy that you like.

Thank you for giving this story a chance!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Pull

Gotta love that sibling rivalry!!  Your Edward is fascinating, but something tells me Jasper is on the rise!



Author's Response:

Thank you =)

And thank you for reading and commenting. We appreciate it.

~Jells

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 21 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Unbelievable Right?

I reported the theft.  Plagiarism is nothing less than that, but a stealing of ideas and thoughts.  I must say however, that story comes nowhere close in merit to yours.  Yours is in a league of its own.  Good heavens!  You even invented a language!!  Logical,  but a detail a plagiarist would not bother with.  Your work always shows depth, thought, and a supreme amount of detail.  Rock on!!!

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! We appreciate your support. Thankfully the story was removed by the admins. Although she isn't even a bit remorseful and I heard she has done this before. Beware of : Tear you to pieces 

Thanks again! Without you and others, the story still may have been up.

 

~Jells and Tyggy

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 25: New Chapter up next.

So glad to hear from you!  Our prayers will be with your Grandma...we've lost several family members to cancer.  Think good thoughts and try to stay positive.  Your new mantra?  One day at a time, some days will be easier than others.   Keep repeating that.  Take care.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Banner by the lovely Madam Akyria

 

 

Five years following the events in New Moon, the Cullens are living in New Hampshire and Edward is finally getting married.  During a wild night out on the town, some of the Cullens run into a happy, more confident Bella.

Jasper/Bella Pairing.  Humor/Romance.  AU/OOC.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 63 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 532667 Read Count: 145045
[Report This] Published: 26 Nov 2010 Updated: 10 Sep 2011
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

The "boy wonder" line cracked me up!  I love your "innerJasper".  He's right in character and I'm looking forward to more!



Author's Response:

Welcome to the story!  It's a pretty crazy ride.  Hope you stick with it.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I love it!  Although I swear I thought that Bella was going to be the stripper that Emmett had his eyes on.  Imagine  his expression when he saw she was his little sister?!  God help the club!



Author's Response:

Nah, Bella likes watching strippers.  She does take a Stripping for Fitness class though.  XOXO

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Brother?!  Nice cliffhanger!  Original too!



Author's Response:

Who in heck is this brother?  Hmm...

Summary: Past Featured Story

What if Edward did not take the dramatic route and wait till noon to step into the sun in Volterra?  What if Alice and Bella were incapable of getting to him in time?  What if he was not the only casualty of bad timing and misread visions?

 

This story takes us down an alternate path than what we followed in New Moon.  The Cullen’s are no longer whole and Bella is so badly damaged that she may be unreachable as she closes herself off to the pain of the outside world.

 

Can a new love save her?  Can his voice pull her from the darkness?

 

This story is rated NC-17 for major angst, suicide and the possibility of far off lemons (who am I kidding?  If you have read any of my stories, you know there will be lemons…but not for a while).

The top banner and this lovely blinkie is brought to you by my banner goddess, MissKingAtYourService.  Check out her blog at misskingatyourservice.blogspot.com/.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 140978 Read Count: 74057
[Report This] Published: 24 Dec 2010 Updated: 10 Apr 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28-The Start of Forever

Thank you for an amazing journey.  You made the inconceivable, more than believable, and what began as sorrow and loss became joy and belonging.  This story was a a sheer joy and I wish you only happiness on your new endevour.  Take care and be sure to let us know when we can attend a siigning!!  Take care!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the beautiful review. I will most definately keep you up to date on my FB page.

All my best,

Nickey

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Create your own banner at mybannermaker.com!

 

Jasper has waited centuries for her. He watched and protected her as she matured. He waited patiently for her to have her human experiences before he staked his claim to her. That was before jacob Black and his Valentine's Day card. No, he wouldn't wait any longer.

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Horror, One-Shot, Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3784 Read Count: 1449
[Report This] Published: 14 Feb 2011 Updated: 14 Feb 2011
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I do love this fanfiction!  I keep hoping you will continue it here on TWCS.  Lots of us DO appreciate the more mature writing, and yours are some of the best.

Summary:

Banner by: the amazing and talented  ivoryhairbela... you rock!

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Isabella Swan has never had an easy life; she's haunted day-in and day-out by the demons of her past.  Believing that she can never trust a man with her heart and definitely not her body after Charlie, her father, and only living relative is killed in the line of duty.  She decides to become a mother by In Vitro Fertilization... Dr. Edward Cullen is a pediatric specialist.  After suffering a tragic loss of his own, Dr. Cullen closed himself off to everyone in the world, including his 7 year old daughter.  Can an extraordinary twist of fate and a rambunctious 7 year old help bring two broken people, who've given up on love, together?

 

Will Isabella finally have a real family of her own?

Beta'd by: Jdonovan09, famaggiolo, and ivoryhairbela... you ladies are amazing and I couldn´t do it without you... even when you bust my chops, Iza!  A million and one thank you´s!!

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DISCLAIMER: I DO NOT OWN TWILIGHT OR ANY OF ITS PHENOMENAL CHARACTERS.  NO COPYRIGHT INFRINGEMENT INTENDED...

 

 

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 58003 Read Count: 32318
[Report This] Published: 22 Apr 2011 Updated: 01 Jan 2013
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 30 May 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: The Aftermath of a Nightmare...

Wonderful!  I think Bella's reactions are quite realistic - if not reasonable.  She went through several major traumas all at once and it's going to take some doing to gt her on an even keel again.  I understand her not wanting to medicate, but sometimes, like in my case, it is the best and only choice.  My seizure disorder required my medication during pregnancy, but after was another thing; so for me bottle feelings and formula worked the best.  I'm so glad to see your update!!  Watching Bella healfrom all Edward's abuses -  her writing counts too -  and it should be very interesting watching how they work things out!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 31 May 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9: The First Step to Getting Help...Is Admitting That There´s a Problem…

Marvelous!  Sorry for the delay in reviewing, but My family and I were away.  Then RL rears its head.  Now that I'm caught up, I think Edward is absolutely doing the right thing for Mac by letting her stay with Bella!  They have a bond - one Mac needed desperatley, and the healthiest thing for her now is to let her be with her "mom" and baby brother.  Also, having Mac around and the baby will give Bella the impetus to thrive again.  Loved it!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: Somethings... You Can´t Take Back...

Absolutely stunning!  The drama and angst areitched perfectly and you have a real nail biter going here.  I can't wait for your next update.  It will be interesting to see Edward fight his way back to humanity and life at the same time Bella is.  Kudos!



Author's Response:

Sorry my response is so late, but I just wanted to personally take time out to thank you for reading and reviewing my story! Hope you will continue to read!

Krazi xoxo

Summary:

In the midst of tragedy, Bella is forced to make a heart-breaking decision. WARNING: Character Death

This was my entry in the The Never Ever Happily Ever After contest.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, One-Shot
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3354 Read Count: 1254
[Report This] Published: 01 May 2011 Updated: 27 Feb 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 04 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Futuretake

Heartbreakingly lovely!  Also, unfortunately, all too true in life.  Sometimes making the most of what or who we have been given is the most we can ask for.  When that happens, like in your story, we look for the blessings deep inside.  Marvelous piece of work.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward Cullen is gifted Isabella Swan as a reward for a job well done.  The more time he spends with her, the more he becomes enamored of her.  Will he be able to make amends for his behavior and win the girl’s heart?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 50513 Read Count: 112169
[Report This] Published: 15 May 2011 Updated: 16 Oct 2013
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Lovin' Emmett!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

My word, Edward has grown as a person!  Good for him!  Possibly Emmett's dialogue penetrated and he is now seeing Bella as an honest to God human being - a special one at that.  Loved every little syllable!  Thank you!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Don't you just love family get-togethers?!  Loved this chapter and all the drama!  I'd still love to know what Edward Sr has against Bella?  Curious...  Loved the. Dress description as well!

A Kingdom Reborn by ammNI Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 539]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Many thanks to FrozenSoldier for creating this fabulous banner: 

A Kingdom Reborn #2

 

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Summary: The newly appointed King Edward has failed to produce an heir with his wife of fifteen years. At thirty years old Queen Tanya's chances of ever giving Edward a live son have greatly lessened. Edward's Privy Council have decided on a course of action: Queen Tanya will be asked to revoke the crown and her title as wife of Edward. Edward will then marry another. Many young ladies have been brought to court with the task of catching their king. Duty, Loyalty and Threats will bring England a queen who will change their king. But will it be for the better?

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, I Whitlock's read , Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 44040 Read Count: 102041
[Report This] Published: 07 Aug 2011 Updated: 14 Nov 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 17: Ruling

Splendid!  Te progression of time and generations does them justice.  Also, the use of. Pembroke...  Brilliant!  Thank you so very much for all your hard work and care!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I was concerned about skipping the time, but felt it worked better with telling their story at the end. Thank you for the appreciation, once I became ill it became very hard to continue giving this fic the attention to detail I had previously done (research is long and difficult work) but I hope I managed it. Thank you for reading and your review.

~Anna-Margaret
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Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 May 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Declaring

No matter how long, your updates are always worth the wait!  The weaving of personal and political here is marvelous.  That, of course, was the truth of the matter in this time.  Again, thank you for the update.  You have been in my prayers and on my mind.  Wishing you only health and happiness,

Joanie

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 12 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Visiting

Nice update.  Bella is finally allowing her walls to drop and Edward is finally aware of her true worth.  I also love Zara, by the way!

Summary:

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People can't eat people alive, and frozen men don't exist. Bella's secret knowledge of vampires is inadvertently brought to surface when she & her friends are all thrown in the path of fate.

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 90817 Read Count: 20309
[Report This] Published: 10 Sep 2011 Updated: 17 Oct 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I just finished reading this story from the first chapter.  Amazing!  I adore your Jasper and Bella.  For all that she has gone through, now she understands that Jasper is there for her - 100%.  Charlie!  As Jasper said he is frighteningly powerful.  Luckily he 's a good, decent man and never abuses it.  Kudos on a story well told!

I'm so sorry that someone found the need to steal your work.  They are our children,in a way, so the hurt is real and justified!  We'll be on the look,out!  Thanks for a great piece of ORIGINAL fanfiction!



Author's Response:

Hello, glad you're enjoying the story.  Jasper and Bella are definitely there for each other.  As you're beginning to see, they're feeding into their shared gift too.  Charlie is powerful and the Volturi will definitely want his gift for themselves.  They're a power hungry bunch.  Fortunately, Charlie is on the right side of justice.  

Regarding the theft of my story, thank you.  Believe it or not, one of my other stories was copied and pasted onto another site just the other week.  Unbelievable--it take so much time and energy to get the plagiarized story removed and it is extremely frustrating.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO

 

Summary: Past Featured Story

When Bella Swan's typical teenage life is forever changed, she's forced to rely on a brother she barely knows and the makeshift family that surrounds him.  AH, OOC, ExB

"Darlin’, I have some bad news,” Wes began, and what he said next ripped my world apart.

I knew he was talking, trying to explain what happened, trying to lessen the blow. His lips were moving, but the pain was so loud I couldn’t hear him. My father was dead. Dad, the only family I really had, was gone, and I was…what?

 

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Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 17212 Read Count: 7816
[Report This] Published: 25 Sep 2011 Updated: 26 Dec 2011
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 12 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 7: House or Home

Your characters are wonderful here- natural and original.  I hope you continue one with it and are just taking a breather.  It would be especially fascinating to finally see Bella and Jasper reconnect again.  Thanks for a wonderful read.

Pet by LizzieHopscotch Rated: M starstarstarstar [Reviews - 9]
Summary:

Voldemort has won the war, and now it is time to collect his spoils


Categories: Harry Potter, Alternate Universe
Characters: Hermione/Tom Riddle
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7252 Read Count: 4677
[Report This] Published: 15 Oct 2011 Updated: 17 Feb 2013
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Marvelous!  This story proves that controlling the mind is the key to taking over someone completely.  I loved it!

Say Goodbye by Chloe Masen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 151]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella Swan loved, until that love was thrown away. She hoped, until it died inside of her. She cried, until the tears dried up, and in their place, darkness fell. She wasn't afraid of it, she embraced it, clung to it. It made her feel alive. Then she got even.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69505 Read Count: 27183
[Report This] Published: 23 Oct 2011 Updated: 03 Nov 2013
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Colors

I feel so bad for Alice!  Jasper's feelings are stopping her from realizing Bella loves her and would celebrate for them both.  I also love Aly here!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 11 Mar 2013 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Sweet

Enough tension to cut it with a knife and make me want to start biting my fingernails again!  Marvelous!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 05 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Getting Warmer

Wonderful.  Aly may just be the "eye" that Bella needs to see how to set her life back in order.  Instead of simply needing, she will be needed - and giving.  Together, she, Aly and Edward can be a real family.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 08 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Glory

A brilliant piece of pscho-drama!  I love the other touches as well.  Alice, Edward and Bella's ack and forth reparte, and Jasper's southern gentleman paired with his irritation.  Kudos!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 14 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Uncovered

Dear Lord!  What's cliffhanger!  This is a stunning piee of psychological drama.  More, please!!!?

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: In the Light of Day

Now wouldn't it be interesting if Edward had found what she's hiding but chose to protect her instead?  Over everything else!     Love the story with its brilliant ins and outs and what's going on in Bella's mind.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 May 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Progress

Wonderful.  She is finally able to begin opening the door for Edward - no matter how much that terrifies her.  Bella has come a long way!  With luck, Edward may find he doesn't need the whole truth.  Loved it!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 11 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Movements

This chapter was sheer poetry.  Bella's inner fight and demons are coming face to face with sheer and pure giving and love.  Marvelous!  Having read the author's note in this chapter, I totally agree with you.  Bella's revelation to Edward in the last chapter was understandable and safe.  Also, perhaps, a bit of a relief valve.  Thank you for a wonderful story.  Your updates are always a high point of the week!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 06 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Instincts

Now that is a great twist in the plot!  Great chapter!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Consumed

Amazingly deep and profound as well as well written!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: You, Me, and We

Another edge-crawling winner.  I kept trying to work out how Bella's psyche wold get her past hurting Edward, when in fact the honest, simple truth was that she has been built up by him a bit by now.  She's able to fight her  more horrific natures better.  Nice touch with the forgotten pizza topping!  So simple yet so-o effective.  Bravo!!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: My Mother's Child

Outrageously marvelous!  I swear, I didn't see that curve ball coming!  I keep wondering if Bella's mother knows that Alexandra is reading Bella's books.  Hmmmmm......

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Blinded

Happy birthday!  For what it is worth, it is far from unloved!  Especially by me.  My theory is that they are reading and not reviewing.  Nevertheless, I do love getting into Bella's head, and it would be fascinating to get into Edward's.  What does he suspect?  How much?  Is he trying NOT to put the puzzle pieces together?  No matter what, you always bring your "A" game.  Thank you!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Incriminating Evidence

Personally, I loved the last chapter!  And this one.  They are different and therefore require a different mindset when both reading and writing.  Anyway - touché!  Bella's ather showing up now is brilliant and now he has her questioning Edward. I happen to think that Edward came in a different door for safety sake.  He has no way of judging Bella's dad except for his past actions regarding Bella.  No wonder he came to check!  Kudos on another winner!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Confessions

You're an absolute genius and poet!!  The ending you gave us was, in my mind, perfection.  Bella has been in the lonely, solitary "cell" that was her life many years and times.  She has fought to stay human AND humane.  Her love for Aly is proof of that.  It is undying and pure.  Edward's choice was gallant and to be fair, I had a feeling he must have known something long ago.  The difference is Edward can see the horribly misused and  "real" Bella that the world can not.  I don't think even Jasper sees HER.  I believe he is loyal and sees her as a wounded soul but can't find a way to "cure" her.  Edward's power is in his knowledge, his intelligence, but above all his unwavering love for her - the very thing he knows she needs above all else.  He knows that this will set Bella free.

This story was a damn masterpiece that would make Hitchcock nod in approval.  Thank you so very much for giving us this world and allowing us in.  I have loved every single syllable of it!  If you do revisit it and them, please be sure I know!  I can't wait to see where you bring us next.  Kudos and a big BRAVO from a huge fan.

P.S.  I love the idea of the jar of good things!  I just may start one here!

 

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: Goodbye

I am so glad to see this new addition to the story!  I told you I'd be here waiting.  I thought. This wrap up was perfection.  You even symbolized the new fullness in Bella's life by using longer sentences in places she would have said less before.  Now, I think, her trust in Edward is complete but she is still working on trusting life's situations and what they give her.  Thanks to Edward and Ali, she is making a start.

I look forward to "Hello Again" more than I can say!  I'd favorite it now if possible, but like Bella, I must learn to wait patiently.  Thank you so much for your amazingly in depth writing.  I love every bit of it!

Summary: Past Featured Story


In August of 1931, almost two years after the disastrous stock market crash on Wall Street, Bella's wealthy family suddenly find themselves broke and homeless in New York City. She is sent to live on her birth father's struggling farm in Oklahoma and soon the pampered, well-to-do city girl is forced to face life as a poor country bumpkin. The transition will not be easy for the overindulged sixteen year old. To make matters worse, choking dust storms, a dangerous drought and the hiring of a handsome but hardheaded homeless man will complicate Bella's life even further.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 105878 Read Count: 23903
[Report This] Published: 24 Oct 2011 Updated: 30 Jul 2013
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 18

This story is stunning - on so very many levels!  The story itself and time period and place you set it in, the culture shock Bella is experiencing, the sense of history you bring to it by expressions and details, (such amazingly rich details!) and the very way you write your characters.  They are rich and deep, flawed and exceptional.  I finished the story in one day front to back and adored every chapter.  Thank you for producing an exceptional read.  I can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

TillITryIllNeverKnow,

You have no idea how much your review meant to me! Thank you so much! This is my very first story and I wasn't sure how well it would be received.  I have always been fascinated by this time period and my Grandmother was the person who inspired me to write this.  She is 93 years old and still going strong.  She grew up in the deep South during the Great Depression and she told me the most amazing stories of how families survived this horribly difficult time.

I did a lot of research for this story.  I wanted to throw in as much information/detail as I possibly could from the 1930's into each and every chapter I created.  I am so glad that you have found my story and I will continue to do my best to make it as entertaining as possible.

Thank you so much for your lovely review :o)

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 May 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 19

Thank you for the Mother's Day wishes...  And don't you dare apologize for being late to post!  Pneumonia is nothing to take lightly.  My daughter had it when she was in kindergarten and again in 1st grade.  That first bout was about a month long and frankly more than scary.  She lost about 15 lbs. and was on so any medications it was more than hard on her!  My best advice to you is to take things slow coming back, and don't overdo things.  There's only one you and your readers will understand!

Now, you just knew James was going to show up!   Can Phil be far behind?!  You're definatley back on track and the cliffhangers is excellent.  By the way, I adore the vintage photos you add to your work!!  They help enrich the story a lot - especially for the readers who have no connection to this time and how things worked then.   Both my parents lived through the Depression and I have a strong knowledge  of most of these details yet I find the photos marvelous in this context.  Thank you for doing everything you can to make your readers experience the absolute best it can be!

Again, take care!  We love your work, but we cherish the writer more!  We'll be waiting whenever you manage to update!



Author's Response:

I wouldn't wish pneumonia on my worst enemy!! It really has sapped all the energy from my body.  My kitchen counter looks like a damn pharmacy right now and even though I lost ten pounds, I'm sure I'll gain it all back very soon -- Memorial Day BBQ's are coming up!!!

Phil and Winston are probably packing their bags right now for the next train to Oklahoma.....yikes.

I'm glad you like the photos.  I enjoy finding them :o)  I was thrilled when I found the photo of downtown Nowata taken in 1930.

I'm working hard on the next chapter right now (in EPOV) and I think everyone will enjoy it.

Thank you so much for your well wishes and for your lovely review :o)







Aww, sniff.......thank you so much :o) 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella, the Crowned Princess and soon to be Queen of Dwyer is advised to find a husband so that she can secure her line with an heir.  Viscount Edward Masen comes to the capitol among her suitors with less than noble intentions. As he grows to love his wife, he's forced to deal with those who helped plot to get him on the throne.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 46 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 128079 Read Count: 86586
[Report This] Published: 04 Dec 2011 Updated: 03 Nov 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 07 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I do love the intrigue!  Kudos!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Hmmmm!  Maria's there? Curiouser and curiouser.  Bravo, Edward!  If they are to survive his actions now will lay the groundwork.  Wonderful work.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 15 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

A marvelous bridge and interlude between mistrust and faith again.  His chapter filled a spot that, if rushed over, could have made the story seem far too contrived.  This breathing space that Bella and Edward are working through is vital to their coming relationship.  Kudos to you for doing it so well and realizing the value!

MALEVOLENT by LegendaryDiamond Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 191]
Summary:

He manipulated and tainted everything he touched and I wouldn't allow him to touch me so I ran. "You can run Isabella but you can't hide, do you hear me? You're mine Isabella, you're mine!" He's found me... Warning: extreme Darkward. Read at your own risk.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Horror, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 42123 Read Count: 61612
[Report This] Published: 10 Dec 2011 Updated: 16 Jun 2015
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Countdown

Uh oh!  Something tells me Bella has a new nightmare.  Interestingly, Edward here thinks he's being every girl's dream.  He has no inner moral balance.  Yet that very thing is what makes him so fascinating in this story!  The civil war that's brewing ought to be a real doozy!



Author's Response:

Wait til the sequel, the tables will definitely turn ;)

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Changed Edward & The wrong Bella

I'd say that she chose New Zealand simply nausea it is probably the last place Edward would look.  There are a decent amount of remote areas there that could work in her favor as well.  One thing is for sure, if Edward found me and dragged me back at this point I'd wait for my chance, ask to read in the yard, and when I thought I had a chance, I'd use the electric fencing he installed to put an end to the pain.  Amazing work, by the way.  You bring us in Bella's head and bring home the message that the grass is NOT always greener!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much, you made me blush. :D

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 Sep 2012 Title: MALEVOLENT

Rule #1 of escape: Do Not leave your diary or journal behind!  Seriously, I love getting into Bella's head here.  She has very logical reasons to run and not trust Edward...more than a few in fact!  The question now is what will Edward do when he catches up to her?  How much did he change?  Wonderful.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 15 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chance Encounter?

Happy Birthday!  Don't let the bumps in the road get you down - trust me, they're usually not worth it!  Now, let's see, Shawn....  Hmmm....   Count me among undecided.  The hard cheats part makes me want to scream,  "Sent by Edward!!!!!". But I'm the glass full sort, so I want to give him the benefit of the doubt..  So yeah, undecided.  I loved watching Edward get into Bella's head though by reading her diary.  Clever move on your part.  Not only will he assumably find out how she feels, but also he just might discover her fears.  God help her then!  Loved the chapter!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Jun 2015 Title: Chapter 30: Benevolent vs Malevolent: Final Showdown

Absolutely marvelous!  You've managed to keep the readers guessing this long on what Edward had planned next, now  you just pulled it off again!  Loved the shark business!  What happens to Bella next should be interesting.  Pregnant or not, Edward feels their destinies parting.  That could mean 2 or 3 different things.  Kudos on a high tension, emotion packed piece of work!  I look forward to what comes next!  Thank you!!

Taken by loopylou992 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 70]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward makes one mistake, and soon learns he must pay for it. Forced to lie to his family and Bella, will be manage to survive being Taken?

Rated M for lang & Lemons.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 153918 Read Count: 28170
[Report This] Published: 13 Dec 2011 Updated: 08 Jun 2014
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Fight To Freedom

Astounding piece!   I have to tell you that upon discovering it, I read it straight through to this point!  I could not put it down, skipped lunch, and it is now 2:54pm and I stopped only now because I ran out of chapters.  I love that you are telling the story in 1st person and Edward is recounting what happened to him for his family.  Brilliant! Those two things draw the reader in as if they are on that beach, at that fire with his family.  I look forward to more!



Author's Response:

Why thank you! I still get such a thrill when people find this and seem to be loving it. I am grinning like a fool so much right now, hope missing lunch was worth it. I love telling Edward's story he certainly has been through alot. There is more to come, I have the next two chapters heading towards three done. Look forward to hearing what you think to what's to come Lou x x x

 

Hope Springs by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1133]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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"Where would you go if you are trying to start a new life but you had nowhere to go and no one to care?  Bella Swan has been alone for most of her life, she is young and she is scared, but now she has another life to protect.  She is heading for a new country - a new life and then she ends up in HOPE SPRINGS.  Her life intertwines with all the eccentric characters in this little piece of heaven in Vermont and just like that - she will never be the same.  She meets the Sherriff, the truck driver, the semi-retired doctor, the lawyer, the farmer, and the new best friends, but it is the new young doctor in town that turns her life upside down.  Is he as stuck up as he seems or does he have a wild side?  Is Bella as tough and as jaded as she seems?  Will she run, or will she allow the people in this town to teach her to hope, to dream, and to love?"

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HOPE SPRINGS

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, To Read, To Read (Geddy), Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 432038 Read Count: 218359
[Report This] Published: 17 Dec 2011 Updated: 24 Dec 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Mistletoe and Bar fights

Stunningly great!  You managed to encompass so very many elements in here - jealousy, love, sincerity, fear, and a sincere willingness to compromise.  I want to visit Alisair's Fairy Garden!  Your description makes it seem not only real but completely attainable.  Magic!  Kudos on your using your story to sound a firm warning about being taken advantage of sexually.  To many people DO think it is a city problem when in reality there are sleazy characters everywhere.  Places like Hope Springs though, keep them at a minimum due to plain old fashioned caring about your neighbors.  Everywhere COULD be a Hope Springs if people put their minds to it.  The lessons you taught in this chapter may go a long way to keeping a reader or their friend safe someday.

Also, nice pickup on the Joan Jett theme!  Loved it.  And by the way, is someone a DAYS of Our Lives fan?  The Christmas ornament is big give- away there - and clever.  Now Bella has tangible proof of her belonging.  I' m gushing I know; but I loved it that much!!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Lessons and Lessons

Another winner!  Warm and wonderful, rich and involving.  I said it before, I'll say it again, this reads like a book.  Every chapter is joy to curl up with.

Something tells me Bella's professor is about to "lose" her Shakespeare paper.  This of course would cause all kinds of problems for her and her college career.  Just a feeling.  Thank you once again for an amazing read.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 26 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Sorry not to have reviewed till now but RL ...  I adore this story and it is fast becoming one of my all time favorites!  It reads like a novel; the characters are being developed well and you always allow the reader an inside look into each of their souls.  In this chapter it was Jasper.  Interestingly enough, Bella understands his motives and while they may make her uncomfortable, as she told Carlisle and Brady, she understands his motives and even applauds them quietly.  BRADY!  How cute is he!  I want to physically go hug him he's so perfect. 

I look forward to all our updates, but today was a particularly off kind of day- it's even raining again - and this update just made my whole day.  Thank you many times over for that and I'm looking forward to the further goings-on in Hope Springs.  By the way, the pictures mixed in are like extra special surprises!  Take care.

Tillitryillneverknow.   Aka: Joanie

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - 'On the first day of Christmas...'

Saying it is never going to work is possibly the worst thing he could say to Bella.  She could shut down emotionally again.  He means well, but he really needs to think first and then talk.  This was another stunningly rich chapter.  Even apart from the main storyline, you have taught me more about living on a farm and how things work then anything I've ever read.  Thank you for that as well as the amazing journey you take your evaders on each and every chapter!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Revelations and Goodbyes

Amazingly intense chapter - but so-o  so-o great!  I cried, I commiserated, I got angry at  Edward, I understood him... You name it!  Thank you for the richness you add to this story.  In many ways, Edward is doing Bella the ultimate favor.  While he's gone she can find herself and her place in his family as someone other than Edward's girlfriend.  She has always been strong, now she can begin to show others just how much.  Again, thank you for this treasure chest I adore opening and lounging with whenever I open it!  You started my weekend with a great big smile!!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 01 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Marvelous chapter... And what a cliffhanger!   Seeing your update notice always makes me smile!  Again, wonderful character work and as I said this story reads like a book - yummy and involving.  I'm looking forward to everyone's reaction to Bella's secret - especially Edward.  Thanks for more wonderful reading.  

P.S. oh!  I love the device Bella gave Bree.  It was right on the mark without being too high handed.  Just right!

 



Author's Response:

thank you so much for reading and reviewing - update over the weekend.

xoxo

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - "All I want for Christmas is you..."

No need to apologize for being late... Christmas with the Cullens was astounding!  You packed everything in and then some, and made it such a pleasure!  Even the cliffhanger was wonderful.  Once more I must restate: Brady is a true treasure!  Also, it was marvelous reading the appreciation all the adults got experiencing and sharing in Bella's first true Christmas.  Carlisle is right here too : With little experience, Bella and Bree need he and Esme more than ever.   By the way, bravo Emmett!  Only SOS,done completely confident would lay himself bare in an effort to assist his brother and Bella.  From beginning to end this chapter was pure pleasure.  Thank you!  Oh!  and thanks for Roscoe and his little asides too.  I adore them!

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - First dates and Ice skates

Bella and ice skates?  Now there's a scary thought!  I love Carlisle's assessment of her skating!  So funny! 

This was a lovely chapter.  I almost have the feeling that Bella and Edward are at opposite ends of a long darkened hallway.  Edward has a lit room behind him but Bella is advancing almost on faith alone.  Bumping into a table here, tripping on something there but always reaching toward that glimmer of brightness and the surety that is Edward.  On Edward's end there is the light he's been in, but just as it is leaving a well lit room and entering a darkened hallway - it seems just that much more dark.  The landmarks are unecognizable.  Bella's childhood experiences are just that to Edward.  Slowly but surely these two are reaching closer and your readers are loving every minute!  Thank you!

P.S.  I also loved Bella's comment to Alice on Jasper seeing her naked.  "Where's Jasper?  Washing his eyes out with bleach?".  Priceless!!  Perfectly priceless!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

You handled an emotional subject with lots do feeling, but also tact and discretion.  Edward's exactions were especially profound here. Now that she has revealed her past to Edward, Bella should begin to slowly blossom.  I'm looking forward to her becoming friends with Roscoe.  He could be very helpful in her journey towards a new life!   Thanks for the quick update!  You made my Saturday!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - New Beginnings and First Dates

Not smooth or smooth...this chapter gave me a case of the happys, that's all I'm saying'!  Thank you!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - TO SIR WITH LOVE?

Awesome cliffhanger!  Maddening, but awesome.  You've done a really good job with Bella and Edward's relationship.  The reader can almost feel them sensing their way along their relationship at this point.  It's realism at its best.  It's also nice to see Bella's relationship with Jasper shift.  He could be a strong ally.  Thank you also for promising a quick follow-up chapter.  My curiousity is running amuck.  Once more, this remains my favorite story out there now.  Not only can I see a "book", but I can practically see scenes from a movie!  Kidos!!!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 27 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Time waits for no man (or woman)

Thank you, thank you, thank you for your latest chapter!  The letter sequence was a brilliant idea and worked amazingly well.  The best writing, I believe, gets you inside the characters' heads and that is just what this accomplished.  In the beginning Bella's pain and anger show through clearly - and Edward's reactions to them shine back.  As the letters progress the evader can see and feel bElla's shift and also her sense of accomplishment.  It is here that Edward knows he acted for the good.  Bella is finally able to thank him and all him friend once more.  Damn!  It was bloody brilliant!  Let me put it this way, I put the Oscars on DVR so I could read this instead.  And I loved every minute! 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - One step forward...

Anyone who tells you this story is "a load of shit", knows nothing about good writing...and this story is writing at its very best.  Your characters are both rich AND flawed, the situations they find themselves in are more than believable and when you roll it all together it makes for pure perfection!  I could see this as a movie...and I'd love every minute.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - What's all the fuss about?

Sorry to take so long to review!!  RL was fascinating century. Nothing huge, but lots of small, twisted things.  This chapter was outrageously romantic, realistic, and a breath of fresh air.  Every story has low scenes where things go perfectly, but as we all know, that does NOT always happen!  Due to her past, Bella is overwhelmed and MY GOD why did no one think of this before!!!!  It's obvious, it's totally in character, and so perfect I cold scream.  (Feeling for Edward there though!). Seeing what the other couples have is one thing - even on a close basis.  But the realization of what this being truly means to you is nothing short of life altering.  You gave us that, and you gave us two characters that are willing to work through all the kinks and bends to shape a future together.  Simply  marvelous!  Thank you for all the hard and well thought out work!!!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 31 May 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Summer Time

Amazing chapters!  So very ricin emotion and detail!  Sorry not to have reviewed sooner to them, but our family was away on vacation.  RL and settling in are taken care of and I finally had a chance to sit and catch up on the last few chapters - I like to take my time with these and savor.  Bella is growing and you do her real credit as a character.  She is never perfect, nor is she fallible. She is human and a human in growth at that.  Her fear and eating with church is a perfect example.  I do so love Brady!  Wouldn't it be lovely if he always called her, "My Belle"?!  Again, thank you for giving your readers such quality work.  I adore it!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 04 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - Honour thy father

So many emotional moments and directions!  First of all, this chapter was wonderful.  You conveyed the uncertainty, sadness, anger, angst, and unsuredness perfectly.  The brass should get a balling out.  You can not honor someone by destroying their loved ones.  I kept expecting Carlisle to look them up and threaten to pop 1 or 2 of them.  Politics!  They do need to play it!  Thanks for a marvelous read.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 15 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Moving on

I just knew Bella's professor would be trouble.  Unfortunately, with Esme and Carlisle away, Bella may feel the need to "go it alone" when he gets more aggressive.  She needs to introduce him to Emmett and Jasper!  Loved this update as it brings in new situations and doesn't forget the basis - Bella, Edward, their relationship and their family.  Roscoe included!  I do adore Roscoe's asides.  Thank you for the update.  :)

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - Mama said there'll be days like this...

I do adore this story!  I know these people and they are so multi-dimensional the way you write them!  Bella's angst, Bree and Esme, Carlisle's confusion and terror of them, even little Brady's escapades.  They make this story come alive - and thank you for that work!  I wish they could turn this into a movie.  It would work beautifully.  Your readers thank you!!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

I hope the horny professor gets visits from Emmett, Jasper, and Charlie's friends.  I also think that at some point Carlisle will be more than upset to find out what kind of stress she has been put under by him!  As always, stunningly well done!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 - Here comes trouble....

Amazing chapter!  So-o great!  This covers the whole gammut - Bella's difficulties at school affecting her familial relationships and the strength derived from them, Bella's empowerment, and her attack and the subtle problems that seems to be causing.  Brilliant!  By the way, I said it before; I'll say it again, " how amazing is Roscoe!?". I do love to "hear" from him such as his thoughts on the taste of humans and his devotion to his girl and humans. 

Maybe it's just me, but I keep hoping that this will bring Esme and Carlisle home.  This attack, Bella's after affects, and the encompassing events almost beg, in my mind for them to return.  They Skype with Bella, so I must assume they chat with others.  I know my mom saw my face bruised from getting hit, she would be on a plane straight away.  They are the center of the whole family and help create the gravity needed at times like these.  Your characters are just that amazing!

Thank you for all your hard work.  I'm sorry RL caused such a delay in this review!  I always look forward to your updates with a passion!

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Time flies and then it's Christmas again

Perfection!  I'm so happy to see Carlisle and Esme back and more than amused by their kids waiting in their cars like little kids ready to get dressed down by Mom and Dad.  Bella seems to know her parents better!  Again, Roscoe is a joy and Apples is precious!!!!  They should be a real twosome.  

The details here all help make this story such a treasure.  The self defense classes and how the women dress are a perfect example.  Is has become a REAL town and home - one I'm sure most of us would love to visit or reside in.  Thank you for taking such care to give us such a quality story!   The updates are always worth any wait!!!



Author's Response:

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 19 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - Moving on - Enough is enough!!

Marvelous chapter!  I love the drama, but I also love the familial work that went into  mending Bella and Edward's relationship.  Carlisle was brilliant in this chapter and his character shone as he helped not just his son, but Bella.  His stories of Cullen Men being too hard headed and learning lessons from the strong women they married was perfection.  I also love the new characters you infuse every so often.  They always fit and the reader always leaves wanting to meet them.  Godfrey and Winnie are no exception.  Thank you for all the hard work you put in making this story such a treasure!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 - Birthday wishes

Do I love it?  See you crazy?!  How could I not?!  Here's the way I see it :  between chapters seems like FOREVER!  But then, there's an update, (pick one, any one) and he time between slips away and I'm right back in Hope Springs again.  Happy, content, and ready to read the whole story over front to back again.  You have created a rich tapestry with colorful characters and settings.  How could we do less than adore every single syllable?!  You do NYC justice in this chapter, as well.  I'm from Long Island and go there frequently.  There's so etching for everyone and no matter where you turn you discover something new - each time you go.  Thank you for all your hard and loving work!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 01 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 - Absence makes the heart grow fonder?

I always get excited when I see your update for this story - and you never disappoint!  Adding SAY YES...   Was a brilliant addition here and Bella's photo check and beginning to go through the locker is so very touching.  Especially the rocker!  I loved this one!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Banner by the talented: SoapyMayhem FanFiction

Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263191
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 10 May 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Confessions

Amazing in oh so many ways!  The emotion, the volatility, the drama, and the sheer fact that these two are finally ailing they belong together.  Bella's youth is heartbreaking, though I'm sure there's more puzzle pieces to come.  Interestingly, in some ways, she is moe emotionally in touch with her feelings than Edward is.  Jasper is perfection.  He pushes just enough and then prods just the right amount to get the locks undone and the windows open.  He will be valuable to both of them down the line!  Thanks for another amazing update.  You help make my week!



Author's Response:

WOW...the responses are so awesome that Nikky and I are both giddy.  There haven’t been many questions asked in the first 60 reviews, so I am going to answer a few non questions I noticed.  Bella was never kidnapped by Sue and Charlie.  Charlie Swan is Bella’s biological father, and Bella was sent to live with him after her mother died of cancer.  Aro honestly never knew of Bella’s real age, he had suspicions that she was not raised correctly and was acting younger than the 18 he thought her to be, because of the inept social skills.  Zafrina did not know either, but again had those same social skill thoughts that her son had.  We in no way were bashing DCFS or DHS or any other social workers, by saying that the kids would be taken by the state.  If anyone had turned Sue in for abandoning the kids the almost 6 years ago now she has been gone, the kids would have become wards of the state, because at 13 no state official or judge would have deemed Bella capable of fully caring for 2 yr old twins alone.  Just want to say that we both believe that it takes a special kind of person to be a social worker, and we both give those of you who are in the field of social work a round of applause because the things you have to see and or deal with can’t always be fun.  I have to say that the wonderful response to this story is more than either Nikky or myself could have hoped for, and we owe that all to you the readers.  THANK YOU!  If there is any questions or discussions you would like to have or read about past discussions, feel free to join us at TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction on Facebook.  Kasi (& Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things.  Subjected to changes during beta process.

I dropped Bella of at Seth and Leah’s school. Before leaving her, I told her I would pick her up from the college when she got off.  It was so fucking hard to leave her; I just wanted to stay with her forever.  I knew the minute she was away from me, my old doubts would come back.  I knew that I had to talk with Jasper about her upbringing.  It’s that thought that makes me leave, even though I want to wait with her, take them home and stay with them. I am really at a loss for what I should do.  What can I do?  What do I do?  How do I help her?  How can someone so pure and good, come from people so evil?  The questions are killing me, but I know one thing for certain: if that bitch doesn’t stay the fuck away on her own, I will make her.  That sorry excuse of a parent will never get her hands on my Bella, Seth, or Leah again.  I will protect them with my very last breath, and deplete every cent I have, if need be.

I sit at my piano and just start playing.  I let the music guide me, keeping Bella in my thoughts as a play.  I let out all the feelings I have been denying myself. I haven’t been at it long before I find myself playing ‘Angel Eyes’ by The Jeff Healey Band, and I begin to sing along with my playing.

Girl, you're looking, fine tonight,

and every guy has got you in his sights.

What you're doing, with a clown like me,

is surely one of life's little, mysteries

 

So tonight I'll ask the stars above,

"How did I ever win your love?"

What did I do?

What did I say,

to turn your angel eyes my way?

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Balls and Bitches

Another winner!  Now, with Edward tucking everyone - including Jake - in, he is moving into the family.  He fears for them, checks on them, and cares for them all.  I somehow have the feeling that he is just on the cusp of realizing it for himself.

Shiobhan is a real piece of work and I found Bella's assessment of Aro's girls to be a lovely tribute.  They are caring and fond of her because she never judges them.  Alice, Rose, and Shioban could take lessons from her!

the witch?  My guess - and it is just that, a guess - would be Esme.  Only as a costume, not as assign of personality.  Thank you again for another piece of magic!



Author's Response:

Well we knew that you all would have some sharp feelings about the behavior of Alice, Rose, and Siobhan.  We were excited to see that a few of you mentioned the seemingly difference in Esme and her attitude.   Have faith in Jasper and Emmett, they will be having words with their wives.  As for Siobhan, I think she has worn out her welcome around the table completely.  So what did you all think of Charlotte?  She will be important in the coming story.  A lot of you are guessing that the witch in the next chapter will be Sue Swan, but I assure you that it is not her.  There is a lot of super exciting chapters coming soon.  We want to tell you all just how much you reading and reviewing our story means to us.  This is the first story for either of us, that is getting this kind of attention.  It is completely amazing to us that we are averaging over 100 reviews per chapter.  We want to be very clear in saying that each and every review you have left for us mean so very much to us.  Thank you for taking time to not only read our story, but to also leave us your thoughts.   Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 14: Subject to changes, during Beta Process.

She looks perplexed. “Edward, aren’t you expected to be at the college; I mean, I thought you have classes today?”

I chuckle.  “Yes I do, but I got this morning off.  I am using some of my vacation time.  I would like to take you to see Charlotte today.  She is the one that sells the girl stuff; remember I told you I would take you to see her?  She was sitting on my right at the ball.”  Bella nods her head at my explanation, but I see she is biting her lip again.  I know she is worried, so I do my best to reassure her.  “I will be there with you. I am not going to leave you, I promise.”  Bella nods again as we begin walking to the bus stop.  We take the bus and arrive at Charlotte’s store a little after half past nine.  Charlotte had texted me earlier and asked that we enter through the back entrance.  She was going to leave it open for us, as she had the front locked up so that no unexpected customers arrived.  I hold onto Bella’s hand as we walk thought the door. 

Charlotte sees us as soon as we enter; she smiles and makes her way toward us.  “Edward, Isabella; come on in.  I already have a bunch of stuff laid out for you.  I have done this for a few years, so I am pretty good at guessing sizes.”  I rub Bella’s hand and smile at Charlotte’s obvious excitement.  “Isabella, I am so sorry, sometimes my mouth runs away with me.  It’s very nice to meet you.  My name is Charlotte, but you can call me Chas; all my friends do.”  Charlotte gives Bella a big smile, but keeps her distance from Bella for now.

“It is nice to meet you. I am Isabella, but you can call me Bella.”  I squeeze Bella’s hand, trying hard not to jump for joy.  This is the first time that she has openly asked someone, apart from me, to call her Bella. 

Charlotte smiles at her.  “Well, I was thinking that this stuff would be perfect for you.”  I look at the collection of bras and panties that Charlotte has picked out.  They are mostly plain white ones.  There are some with lace, but none them are overly sexy like the stuff that was in Alice’s bag.  I am both relieved and somewhat disappointed about that.  “Come with me, Bella, so I can take your measurements to ensure that we will have the correct size.” 

Bella looks at me and I nod my head at her.  “Bella…” I clasp her face between my hands.  “Baby, I’ll be right here. I will not leave you.” Bella whispers a low thank you, and strokes my hand before giving it a squeeze at the end.  I watch as she walks away with Charlotte.  

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Do We Go From Here?

Wonderful!  Simply wonderful!  The depth of detail you give each area of the story shows true craftmanship in writing.  I love that the children accept so easily - that usually is the case.  I also loved the family that they are all building together.  Alice Ida revelation as is Esme.  Bella's breakdown in the beginning makes total sense and her remark about staying in the walls has me curious.  (A reference to her old bedroom/ closet?  Thank you for all your hard work.  It is more appreciated than you will ever know!



Author's Response:

Thanks again and again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As the story comes closer to an end, it seems we have a lot of questions or comments that are geared toward answers already given in the story.  So we decided to give a little background to clear up the misconceptions and questions. 

Edward Masen: Father is dead, mother is bi-polar and left him in the care of Esme and Carlisle.  Mother is alive, but whereabouts are unknown.  Edward met ‘Tanya’ in college, they had a short affair and she left, after being caught in trying to get money from him.  Edward then shut down and treated all women as if they were not worth his time.  He refused to date or trust any women and he instead only was with a select few at Aro’s club, where he paid for sex.  Edward owns the restaurant where his parents used to take him to eat at, before his father died and his mother went off the deep end.  Edward is also one of the youngest English professors at UW. 

Bella Swan: Bella was born the child of single mother Renee Higbottom.  Renee met Charlie during one of his planned scams to get money.  Renee was very rich, as were her single father.  Charlie ended up impregnating Renee, but he was already married to Sue Clearwater.  Renee paid off Charlie and Sue to leave her and her child alone, but then subsequently died of breast cancer when Bella was three.  Renee’s father fought for custody, but grand-parents rights are not acknowledged in the state of Washington, therefore after Renee’s death the state went in search of Charlie Swan.  Once he was found Bella was placed in his and Sue’s care.  After Bella went to live with Charlie and Sue, she was treated iek a slave and was never allowed even normal things such as schooling, food, new clothes, and every other basic thing as parents we give our children without second thought.  Bella grew up starved for affection, so once she got to take care of the twins she gave all that affection she has been starving for to them.  Her love of the twins is unconditional as is their love for her.

I hope this helps answer a few questions and clears up a few things.  I’m not sure why, but we have several who think Sue is Bella’s real mother, and that is not the case at all. 

Thank you again so much for all the wonderful heartfelt reviews you all leave for us.  It is amazing to us that we have managed to instill such a deep devotion in our readers to our characters, and we are blown away by just how much emotion our readers feel for our characters.  I know that the character names belong to Stephenie Meyer, but these characters and the way they are in this story are in fact ours, she owns the names and appearance descriptions, but the attitude and demeanor and words are all ours.  Thanks, Kasi (& Nikky)

TEASER Chapter 28: Subject to changes during beta process.
I am so proud of Seth and Leah this past month has not been easy on them, but they have held their heads up high and got on with it.  There has been some name calling at school.  Now I know kids can be cruel but the things that they are saying, is coming from older mouths first.  Things no parent should be saying in front of their children.  Bella and I have addressed the school regarding the problems, but we’ve been brushed off like nothing is going on.  Mrs. Crown the principle said that people will talk.  She went on to point out that I was after all, Seth and Leah’s father, and I was shaking up with their big sister.  The way she said it, implied that Bella and I were doing something wrong.  After her rather rude little speech I called Caius and explained the whole thing to him.  To say that he was angry is putting it mildly.  He went as far as taking the principle in front of the school board, and she was put on a written warning.  Not only is her job and tenure in jeopardy, but her career as a whole is.  Since we have proof that she knowing let kids and adults harass the kids, she was warned that a lawsuit would be filed if the behavior continued.  Her biggest mistake was she was aware what the twin have been though these past five months, yet did nothing to help stop the harassment.

Caius informed me of another school that had room for more students.  It was little school that only had a little over one hundred students.  It went from kinder-garden to fifth grade and each class had mix of around fifteen children per classroom.  It was a private school, and ranked in the top ten of all schools in the state of Washington’s education program.  There was a sister school that managed the grades sixth through twelfth, also ranked in the top ten.   Both schools are quite prestigious and expensive, but cost is of no matter.  There are a few nice things the school is located close to where Esme and Carlisle live, but that also causes us transportation issues for to and from school.  Both Bella and I have talked about this and we all talked about it in family therapy.  Seth and Leah asked to just finish out this year of school where they are before deciding.  We agreed that this was the right choice for right now.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

You made me cry!  (Not an easy feat.). I loved Jasper in this chapter!  My cousins and I were all raised with that same sense of manners and care for others that Jasoer exhibits.  Heaven help one of my male cousins if they had acted as Edward did the day they all had lunch.  The Edward we see now is almost a new man.  He sees all that he has missed and is beginning to realize that not all women are untrustworthy.  Like Bella, some will sacrifice out of love.  Alice...I somehow keep hoping that Jasper finally puts her in her place and on the right track.  An amazing chapter, and all I could have hoped for.  Thank you!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 17 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I think your co cept of Edward here is right on the mark.  He's been hurt...badly...make that burned, so he won't trust easily.  That he is beginning to be able to trust Bella here is a huge step.  His main rational for this is perfect too - she has a harder time with people and the world than he does but he is able to recognize a broken, yet pure soul.  Marvelous chapter.  His talk with Jasper was especially intriguing.  Thanks for a great update.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Nicknames

I don't know how I missed this update for so long!!  (hangs head shamefully!). This is one of the stories I always check first for updates.  The dynamic here between Edward, Bella, and the children is slowly becoming a family.  Edward cares not only about Bella but the children's welfare as well.  He is also learning to loosen up as Jasper suggested.  Let's see as for what info I think Edward will use to get Bella to do something she wouldn't : I think it is double daring her.  I have a feeling he may try a double dare to get her to use the closed up bedroom for herself.  Leah said Bella will never let go of a double dare.  Whether she is able to go through with it or not....well that one has me stumped.  Thanks for yor amazingly rich work.  I can truly see Bella's apartment.  She's athr like Harry Potter wearing second hand clothes and living under the stairs.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Edward’s view is improving, and he is learning quickly that he is not able to function to his fullest at Aro’s club.  Aro’s club and Aro and some of his girls will remain a vital part of this story.  Having Edward putting on one of Bella’s newly gifted bras was such a fun thing to write about, we hope you all found it just as amusing as we did.  This story has a long way to go.  We have been asked when things will pick up between Bella and Edward.  Well we promise they will be together, but Edward is just learning to change and before he could give himself to her fully, he has to let go of a few things from the past.  There are a few more bricks that need to come down off that wall he has built.  As for Bella, her pure innocence alone is a good reason for things between them to simmer slowly into a boil.  I will tell you this, there first kiss is written already...and Lordy I needed some ice water after that one.  WOOOWHOO!  I know the weekly updates, seem like forever, but if we get things wrapped up and have the story done on our side then we will post faster.  Right now Nikky is working on 25 and I am working on 24 and we know that there will be at least 30-35 chapters.  Thanks again for the story love.  This story is dedicated to those of you who care enough to review!  With our love, and until next week.   Kasi and (Nikky)

Chapter 13 teaser...subject to changes during beta process.

I hear the beep of a horn, and know that the car is here. I grab my overcoat, and I head out for my painful evening.

“Good evening, everyone,” I say as I close the limo door.

“Hello Edward, I see you still haven’t tied your bowtie, Siobhan can tie it for you if you’d like; she’s really good at them.”

I turn to face Alice, trying not to scream at her. “No Alice, I can manage myself, thank you very much. I will tie it right before we arrive at the Autumn Ball.” I feel eyes on me, and my head turn’s to see who else is in the limo. There sits Siobhan, in a…dress? Fuck, it leaves nothing to the imagination, the dress… if that is what you call it. It’s more like a sheer piece in the front, glued to her skin. There doesn’t appear to be any cloth on the sides of her entire body at all. She cannot be possibly wearing anything under the dress. I can see from her armpit to the sole of her foot in the clear stiletto shoes she is wearing, there is nothing but skin. She looks like she should be working for Aro, what a trashy high class whore!  I am sure she thinks it’s attractive, and I am sure everyone will know she is going commando. I mean I like women to go commando, but I also like to be the only one that knows. If I wanted my date to not wear panties, I wouldn’t want every other person in the general vicinity to know too. I don’t want to share! Thank God she isn’t my date! There is another reason on the list of why I won’t date her, or any other women.

“Wow, Edward, you look really good,” Siobhan smirks at me before crossing her legs. She lets her dress fall to the side, I am sure if I was looking I would have seen her pussy. The way she was right now I, or anyone for that matter, could finger fuck her here and now for all to see. I turn my head in disgust at her behavior.

“Edward, are you going to tell us how we all look?” I look back at Alice, with a broad smile on my face. “Sorry, forgive my rudeness. Alice, Rose, Esme, you all look very beautiful.” I give them my best smile that almost says, see I can do nice.

“Siobhan, your dress is very…nice?” I make my statement sound like a question because I real don’t know what she has on. Siobhan laughs and goes to touch my arm, and I shrug away from her.  I see she’s about to speak, so I jumped in first. “And of course Charlotte, you look beautiful as always. Peter is an extremely lucky guy, and if he does not mind me stealing you for a few minutes tonight, I would like to ask you something?”

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 02 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Snow Storms

Marvelous!  I love the idea that Bella's innocence allows her to believe in Santa!  I kept thinking about her discovering " the truth", and remembered what my Mom said when I asked her if there was no Santa.  She looked me straight in the eye, smiled, and said, "Of course there is.  He just isn't who you thought he was; but there is a Santa.".  Smart lady, my Mom...and very wise.  If Bella discovers that Aro and Zarina and later Edward are her Santa, then the answer is the same.  Edward certainly Has his act together here.  His relationship are steadying up and he's comfortable with the love of not only Bella but the children and members of his own family.  (Rose and Alice excepted).   Sorry to take so long to review, but our family was away on vacation.  Thank you for an exceptional piece of work.  



Author's Response:

Many of you are wondering what he deal is with Edward and the talk of his lost son.  In chapter 5 there was a dream sequence that told a lot of what happened that fateful day when Edward found out Tanya was using him, to get his money.  She was not pregnant like she had told him, the problem is the night before they had unprotected sex, and she actually did give birth to his child.  Esme found out about it, but hid it from Edward trying to protect him.  Tanya and Edward junior later died in a fire.  There will be more to come on that, but it seems to be getting a lot of questions.  Now for Alice...She is clearly a not nice person in this fic, and to some she will partially redeem herself, but for some there is no redemption, her words and actions are far worse than any you have seen from Edward.  Siobhan is for the majority out of the picture, so she is of no major worry.  Uncle Harry is a very mean man, and there will be more to come about him.  We love our Aro he is one of the kindest and most loving men and we are proud to have written an Aro who is not only out of character, but also so very loveable.   Bella has come to trust Edward, and it shows.  A lot of you keep asking if she will sleep in the step-moms room, or if Edward will talk her into it...the answer to that is no.  The next few chapters have so much going on in them, I am sure that you will all have favorite parts.  We love hearing what your thoughts are so keep asking questions and we will answer what we can without ruining the plot. 

Thanks for Reading and Reviewing
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 15 teaser...Subject to changes during BETA process...

It’s Saturday, and we are into the countdown to Thanksgiving.   Alice has called me numerous times, and left well over a hundred text messages and voice mails.  I have dealt with each and every one of them the same way. Without reading or listen to them, I just hit delete.

Esme found out during one of my talks with Carlisle about the stunt Alice pulled.  At first, I thought she would take Alice’s side, but was stunned when I found her on the phone giving Alice a piece of her mind.  Jasper has also said that he and Alice are talking, but not back to normal yet.  Jasper is really pissed at her.

Yesterday, Esme called me, and to my surprise, she asked me if I would still come over for Thanksgiving dinner.  She told me that she would understand if I did not want to come.  She said it was my choice, and she would still make my dinner if I wanted and bring it over to my home or Midnight Sun.  Not once did she try and force my hand.  After much thought, I said that I will be there.  I do enjoy spending time with the guys, even more so in the last few weeks.  I know they all were hoping for me to come, and I know I owe them a lot. I told them that I will join them and stay, as long as Alice and Rose keep their mouths shut. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett, and Jasper, have promised to keep them under control.

Things with Bella are still going really well. Too well, in fact.  She…fuck! Every time I see her, I want to hold her close.  It’s no longer just me having dirty thoughts about her, a lot of dirty thoughts about her, which I still am, but I also want to hug her, lie with her, make love to her, and that is really fucking scary for me, for lots of reasons.  I am worried, because I wonder if she could even cope in that type of a relationship. I have been a pussy about it, because I haven’t had the guts to ask Peter or Jasper what they think.  I know it’s because I am afraid they may say she couldn’t handle it, or I am not good enough for her.  I already know that I am not, but one can always hope for his own redemption.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Learning Some Background

Wonderful.  Delving into Aro and Zafrina's efforts on Bella's behalf is a marvelous way of framing much of What Bella's been through.  Not only is Bella physically pure, her heart and soul are pure as well and that I believe is what shines through to Edward.  Thanks for the joy.



Author's Response:

Thank you once again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As you can see Edward’s view is changing and for the most part it is better.  His time at Aro’s will take a drastic downward spiral soon, once he realizes that without thinking of Bella he is rendered unable to perform.  He will struggle with this mentally, and as you will see from the below teaser he will finally seek some assistance.  A lot of you are worried over his reaction to her age, and how soon that will all unfold.  I don’t want to spoil it for anyone, but I will say that you will all want to be sure to read chapters 17 and 18 rather closely.  Jess2002 who has been on board for discussions since the beginning ideas of this story said to tell you that in her opinion chapter 11, will be over-shadowed by chapters 12, 13, and 14.  There are some really great chapters coming up here and according to what I am hearing from the pre-readers they will make the story even better.  There are also a lot of questions coming in about Charlie and Sue Swan.  First Charlie Swan will most certainly not be making a show in this story, he is dead.  His death is what sent Sue into premature labor.   Second, eventually even if just for court, Sue Swan will make an appearance.  There are a lot of people in this story that will bring drama to the surface, and there is a lot of story yet to come.  Thank you for your continued support in us and our story.  We hope to hear more from you again soon.  We will be right around 30 to 35 chapters when complete.  See you next Thursday. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 12 teaser…subject to changes during Beta Process.

Jasper sets the bag he carried down, and lets out another sigh. “Edward, as your friend I am here if you need to talk. As a psychologist, I strongly recommend that you talk to someone soon. Edward, I do mean soon, because you’re not helping anyone by getting so worked up. What just happened is a form of an anxiety attack. Your fear almost caused you to have another panic attack. They are not just going to go away. You need to talk to someone to help deal with it.”

I look at him, then close my eyes and pinch the bridge of my nose. “You can’t help her if you stay on this path, Edward.  She needs to talk to someone too. Just think of how you would feel if she doesn’t talk to someone. What if it was her who keeps putting it off, and you have to watch her slowly lose it and get closer and closer to the edge.”

I nod my head at him, fuck I would drag her to see someone if I have too. “Make me an appointment, for at night not during the day. Just let me know when it is, I will be there.”

Jasper nods his head at me. “Have a good night, Edward.”  My head rests against the door after Jasper leaves. I feel the restriction in my chest, the sharp pain, shortness of my breaths and my heart is pounding. What is fucking wrong with me, I can’t believe I get myself so worked up about Bella, but fuck I am so fucking glad that was not why he was here. It doesn’t mean that she is okay. She could be lying hurt in the fucking park all beaten and broken. Well, more broken than what she is. Fuck, don’t think like that.  Zafrina would have called me by now. Bella is fine. She is at home in bed. I’ll get to see her tomorrow; when I drop off the bags of clothes. If she is all right, that is. She didn’t go to the police the last time. Maybe they went after her again, knowing she is an easy target. God only knows if it has happened before. Just because she went home, doesn’t mean that she’s okay. Anything could have happened. Fuck, it is after midnight, it’s not like I can go over there and knock on the door. I just want to check on her, but if I go over there she will think I am nuts. 

I pace my floor pulling at my hair. I should call her. I would know by the sound of her voice if she okay or not. Fuck, I can’t call her at this time of night. Why in the fuck can’t she just take the fucking bus, instead of walk? You know what, just fucking call her. Fuck!

I pick up my phone and dial her number. Just after four rings someone picks up.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 23 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: New Job

Edward has made a wonderful "humanization".  I think his watching Isabella so intently is partly from attraction but partly from sheer curiousity.  He needs to figure this woman out!  I'd be willing to guess that Jasper helps him put 2 + 2 together.  Wonderful update, thank you!  By the way, your recommendation - "Hope Springs" ?  I couldn't agree with you more.  The story is a virtual treasure chest!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

Michele has been one of my personal favorite authors since, heck the start of People Like Us... sigh.  I just <3 her she is the bomb, and she alwyas reads my stuff and reviews it and makes me feel good about it. 

Now onto me and Nikky's story.... We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 15 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: ABC Easy as 123

So very much about Edward makes sense now.  He's sensitive to Bella's pain because of his own.  Marvelous chapter and so very touching!  Thank you!



Author's Response:

Teaser for chapter 11.

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Well in this chapter you were given the chance to know Edward a little better, in the next chapter you will get to know a tad bit more about the kids and the background story on them, but you will also learn more about Bella.  Alice and Jasper are still together, but Jasper does have issues with Alice and her behavior and he will continue to call her to the carpet on it.  Rose wants the world to revolve around her, and when she rages there will be all kinds of fun things going on.  More to come on their bad behaviors, lots more...  Don’t everyone lynch Carlisle, he is just worried for the welfare of the children, and he will be a saving grace in Bella’s life because he is now the children’s doctor.  Edward and Bella are both going to be learning form the other.  Edward doesn’t realize what Bella is teaching him yet, but he will figure it out.  Thanks again for having some faith in us, I know we can’t redeem him in everyone eyes and there are a few of you who are still very upset about his time at the club.  If you are still upset, I hope by the end of the story, you’re not dwelling on that, because the basis of the story is so much more than that.

Thanks so much.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

 

Chapter 11 teaser… Subject to changes during beta process.

“I am Seth Charles Swan.”

“Do you know your date of birth?”

He nods his head. “December, 31st, 2003.” So that makes Seth seven years and almost nine months.

Carlisle looks to Bella. “Was he born in a hospital, or at home?”

She looks at Seth. “Hospital, mom had a few weeks left before they were supposed to be born. The police had come to tell her dad had died, and her water broke when she was shouting at them. Then the EMT people came, one of them was a lady and they took mom away to the hospital.”

Carlisle looks at Bella and nods. “Do you know how early?” Bella bites her lip and shakes her head. “After he came home, has he seen a doctor?”

Bella nods her head.  “I had to take them to see Aro’s doctor and he gave them all the immunization shots they needed.  Zafrina took them for me if I was at work at the hotel.  Zafrina is Aro’s mom and she promised that they would be okay and said that they needed those shots. She told me that they were very important for them to have so they stayed healthy.”

Carlisle looks at her. “Can you tell me who Aro is, or the doctor’s name?”

Bella frowns at him and then looks at me. It is clear she is confused as to why he doesn’t know who Aro is. “Zafrina lives next door to me, she very kind and looks after Seth and Leah when I am at work because you’re not supposed to leave them by themselves, that is very bad.  Aro is her son; he helped me get my jobs. They help me, but I know that I should have been there, but… I… have I done something bad?” She looks like she is getting upset, and at no point has she told him that I know Aro. I grip her hand and rub the top of it and give her a smile to thank her for keeping my secret.  I turn to look at Carlisle and tell him who she is speaking about.

“I know Aro and the doctor she is talking about. His name is Jason Jenks, I am sure you are familiar with him. I will give him a call to fax all the paperwork he has on them.” Carlisle looks at me nods his head, and gives me a clear look to say that he wants to know more about this. I stand up heading to the door.

“Okay, Leah can you tell me your full name?”  She smiles and nods her head.

“Leah Sue Swan,” she smiles at him.

“Do you know your date of birth?”

“Yes, it is January 1st, 2004.”

“Ah, the twins have different birthdates, so that tells me that you Seth were born very late at night, and you Leah were born very early in the morning.  Am I correct?”

They nod their heads all together, and I smile.  

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I find it interesting that Aro is able to see Bella so much clearer than Edward.  Again, a marvelous chapter that leaves me wanting much, much, more!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 08 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Doctor, Mall, and Names

Wonderful!  Interestingly, when Carlisle checks Seth and Leah he'll probably find that they are healthier than most children.  Bella has not had care taken of her,but she certainly doesn't miss a trick as far as they are concerned.  Edward here is mellowing and beginning to see just how innocent Bella is.  For a moment I was sure they pick up on the age discrepancy when told that Bella began her period 5 years ago.  If she is indeed 24 that would be a tremendously late beginning.  Your updates are always one of my weeks high points and more than looked forward too!!  Thanks!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  There have been a few questions regarding Edward and why he is so tainted by women.  More of his back story is coming out, but between having a mother who was mentally ill, who subsequently abandoned him.  The one girl he gave his heart to was only using him for money.  One girl pretends to be his friend to gain access to his friend and for all accounts adoptive brother.  And don’t forget the person he looked to as a mother figure who lied to him and hid the truth of things from him.  When you put all of those things together, it is hard to trust and believe that there is honesty and truth in caring from a female.  I know lots of women who think men are worms because of this or that, which happened, so it should not be so hard to understand how Edward may have this view of women.  Next we have had an overabundance of questions regarding when Edward will find out Bella’s true age.  That will happen, but first we need to build a little more of their friendship together.   I know that many of you are not happy of his time going to Aro’s, but I assure that those times are coming to a close.  It is important we felt in the story and as the story goes to show how he is dealing with his own reactions to Bella.  There will not be any more explicit scenes from the club, however your knowledge of him going will not stop until he stops… AND WE PROMISE he stops going.  This is a rather slow burn, but for this to be realistic, in any way, shape, or form it needs to be.  With that said we will not drag it out either.  You will continue to learn more about Edward and Bella, as well as a few of the other characters, but it is all going with the storyline.  There are some great chapters coming up, and for all of you who still have some hate or anger for Edward, I am sure that you soon will find that hate or anger directed in another place.  I think with her size Carlisle may have been over looking the start if her period, but he is suspisions.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 10 Teaser…  Subject to changes during Beta Process.

Carlisle, Jasper, Emmett, and I, all meet up on Saturday for a workout and lunch. The topic moved to Bella, and Emmett was not happy that he was the only one that had not met her yet.  I, well we, explained that she did not like close contact with people and might say things out of the norm.  Of course, this all fell on deaf ears, because his only response was him promising to be on his best behavior. Now, we all love Emmett - most people do - but he is a large hulk of a man.  Emmett is six foot six and must be tipping the scales at close to three hundred pounds.  His biceps are the size of my thighs. He also has a quick mouth, and often says things without thinking. We tried to tell him this, but he didn’t get it.  We all knew that he would end up trying to hug her, or that she would end up saying something and then he would joke about it, but either way, she would end up hurt.  I just couldn’t allow that to happen, not even by one of my best friends.  He pouted the rest of the time we were together, even after Jasper and Carlisle both said she could not meet him yet.  I was a bit worried at the end of lunch when Emmett looked as if he was hatching an evil plan.

I look at my watch, seeing that it’s almost nine-thirty, and I know that Bella is about to walk in.  I have set up the table with some of the supplies I need to help teach her, including alphabet cards.  Since she can already recognize some letters, I know teaching her the alphabet should be pretty simple.  I know the best thing for me to do, is to start at the beginning.  This means that the alphabet song we all loved as a kid, is first. I look to the door as it opens, and see Bella walking in.  She glances at me, and I can see in her eyes that she looks both excited and apprehensive.  I am sure she is a bit nervous about today, so I smile at her. We already decided that we would do an hour and a half on Tuesday mornings, and an hour and a half on Thursday afternoons.

“Bella, hang up your jacket and come over to the table.”  She nods her head and does what I ask. “We will begin with the alphabet.  There are twenty-six letters in the English alphabet; twenty-one are consonants, and five are vowels. I will show both the capital and lower case letters.  Are you ready?” She nods her head before putting her glasses on. She has them sitting at the edge of her nose, which will make her look over the top of them rather than through them. I push them back to sit on her nose correctly. “No looking over them, Bella,” I say, giving her a smile.  

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Break In

I'm so sorry to take this long to review, but life RL hit big time.  Nothing major, just a LOT of small, weird things. (i.e. a wild bird trapped in the house and such). Is chapter was outstanding in its basic rocking of not only Bella and the children's lives but Edward's as well.  The reactions were spot on and it is only in the taking of inventory does the reader realize just how little (and in other ways how much) Bella and the children have.  Her reaching out to Edward here is a monumental step for her, trust wise, and he certainly doesn't disappoint!  Thanksgiving should be fascinating and I found myself holding my breath when she accepted his invitation.  Kudos here, because you have reached that highest pinnacle - the one where your readers have invested their hearts to these characters.  Thank you for all those feelings.  It makes lives just that much more richer.



Author's Response:

Wow what else can Nikky or I say...once again the overwhelming response and the amount of story love we are receiving from so many people just makes us both feel so loved.  I know that this story may have a few minor flaws, but we have tried all along to keep them to a minimum.  So essentially thank you as always for reading and reviewing our story it makes us all giggly and excited to see all the reviews we are getting. 
We asked you who you thought it might be that broke into Bella and the twins apartment, and I must say we were a little surprised that a lot of you have it figured out.  With a wide range of evil or rude nasty characters, many of you said it was Uncle Harry...and you are right.  There will not be resolution for a bit when it comes to Uncle Harry, so if you want to figure out what he was looking for all I can suggest is watch for clues.  There are some very important and much asked for things coming soon. 
We have been asked many times for Edward to stop using Aro’s girls for his pleasure.  And where we understand why, we also knew it was very unrealistic for a man with so much anxiety, pressure, cynicism and tainted view to jump into a healthy relationship and give up the release and hidden pleasure he has surrounded himself in to get by for the past five plus years.  He has slowly been weaning himself from the place, and very soon he will open up and tell Bella why he went there.  We have been asked when you all get to know a lot more about Edward...well very soon actually, and by that I mean the next few chapters are chuck full of things from the past. 
We have been asked if Renee will come back...(A LOT ACTUALLY)...Renee was Bella’s biological mother, who died when Bella was only three years old.  At the age of three after her mother died, custody of Bella was given to Charlie Swan who was her biological father.  Charlie was married to Sue Swan, who is the mom she talks about leaving all the time.  Sue Swan is the person who left Bella to care for the twins.  Since this story is not alternate universe, neither, Charlie or Renee will be making any grand entrance, unless via a dream.  But don’t get too happy, because Sue Swan is still out there somewhere, and she has a few things to say.
We have been asked a lot if Alice, Rose, Siobhan, and Esme will make any redemption...Esme already has begun her turn around, and we think she is doing well.  Siobhan, well she wore out her welcome quite completely at the ball, at this point there is not a real plan to drag her back into the storyline.  Alice...well this is a hard one for me.  I actually normally always LOVE Alice, but this Alice is a tough nut to crack.  She is not going to bring in the roses and become a fan favorite anytime soon, but you will notice some changes.  As for Rose, well...I just can’t wait to hear your opinions of her...and I am sure you’ll have plenty next week.
Updating...we had planned all along to only update every other week on Thursdays.  However since posting the first chapter we have been on an every week posting schedule...and we have NO INTENTION of changing that at this time.  Nikky and I have a comfortable cushion, and the next chapter to post is with the beta now.  I got this weeks chapter back from the beta on Tuesday afternoon, so realistically we are posting around when they are ready.  Nikky is working on her part of chapter 26 right now, and I am working on 24 so we are not looking at any lapses in time.  We are both so excited you are choosing to come down this road with us. 
Where the next chapter has some major info and angst, we promise that chapter seventeen will make up for it.  Thanks again for always being so supportive and showing the story love HCV deserves.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 16 Teaser...subjected to changes during the BETA process...

Its Thanksgiving today, and I am on my way to pick up Bella and the kids.  Bella and I decided that, after dinner with my family, they would all stay the night at my house tonight.  I will run them home to get their things for the camping trip in the morning, and see them off to camp.  Bella will make sure that Jake has enough food, and then she is coming to spend the weekend with me.  I’m looking forward to this weekend, but I am worried about my growing feelings for her. I knock on the door before using my key to get in.  Bella gave me a spare key so I could let myself in. The new door has a double lock on it, and is reinforced with steel; no one is breaking this one down.

I walk in, seeing Leah in a black, knee-length dress with a cream ribbon around the waist, and black shoes.  Seth is wearing a pair of black pants and a cream colored button down shirt, with a black tie and shoes.

“Wow, look at you Leah! You’re very beautiful, and Seth, you look so handsome.” They both smile at me and look up as Bella walks in. She is in a cream colored dress, with a black ribbon around the waist. The dress goes to just above her knees; she looks fucking beautiful in it - so fucking beautiful.

“Wow, Bella! You look sensational...really beautiful.  Are we all ready to go?” I look her up and down, I am so glad she allowed me to buy us all new outfits for today. 

I got around her apprehension by telling her that I wanted to go to church with them this Sunday night.  We are attending the evening service after Seth and Leah return from camp.  Since I was buying something for myself, I wanted to get them something, as well.  As usual, getting Bella to let me buy Seth and Leah something, was easy, but her...not so much.  I was so fucking glad Seth and Leah helped me. I have on black pants and black shirt with a cream colored tie.  I push my fucking guilty feelings down and smile at the three of them.

“Yes, we’re all ready.” Bella picks up their bags, and I quickly take them from her.

“Let’s go,” I say as I usher us all out the door together.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Trash Talking Turkey Day

Amazing!  You certainly packed paunch in this chapter - several in fact!  Edward pushing Bella away in the garden makes complete sense.  He tries to keep her away from everything harsh and rough.  Even himself in this case.  Bella standing up to Tose didn't surise me either.  She always stands up to and for those she cares about - just not for herself. Luckily, Edward and a new outlook have Mae a big difference there.  Rose, here, makes me think that something is lying beneath the surface causing her to act the way she does.  Some past hurt or pain.    Poor Emmett!  He has to be hurting, he's going to be a dad and now Rose has forced his hand into moving out.  

Just like Thanksgiving at Ozzie and Harriet's, the Cleavers, and the Huxtables!  Kudos on a great piece of work.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Nikky and I are both just so blown away by the response our story is garnering.  Thanks to the many recommends and pimping we have been getting.  Thanks for the response of our fans that make and send us banners and poems and mostly the kind words of love that give us the drive to keep HCV going strong. 
There have been a lot of you all asking for the Bella point of view, and you are going to get it.  The next chapter will have a lot of things going on and we hope you love it.  The age reveal will be in chapter 17, along with a first kiss, the kids going off to camp, Edward and Bella together and meeting up with Sally...those are a few things you have to look forward to.  We started a group on Facebook, you’re all invited to join.  TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction. 
Now to the nitty gritty... 
We both wondered how many of you would ask if Edward’s son was really dead or not, and if Tanya was dead or not.  We want to be clear that Tanya Denali and the child she gave birth to are in fact deceased; they died in the fire.  
We want to point out that Edward is not a Dom.  He role-played and dabbled with the girls at the club, because it was his way of maintaining full control.   He has no desire to tie Bella up and spank her, he is not looking at her as his next submissive or slave.  Just want to be perfectly clear, he is not into the BDSM lifestyle, he is just a man who was seating his needs at a club the only way he saw fit to do so and protect his heart and soul. 

Thank you again for all of the story love and wonderful things you say.  You really have no idea what your words and kindness mean to us.  Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)


Chapter 17 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
Right now, we’re back at Bella’s apartment getting Seth and Leah’s stuff ready for their trip.

“Okay, Seth, you have everything from your list in your bag, right?”  I watch as he nods his head, and chuckle to myself since Bella had just checked over the list and the bag with him herself.  “Leah, do you have everything from your list in your bag, too?”

“Yes, Bella. Edward and I just went through the list twice.”  I turn my head to hide my chuckle. 

“Okay. Well, we have to be at the church in forty minutes, and since Edward is taking us, we have time to double check.”

“Baby, Leah and Seth have everything they need. How about you go pack your bag now, and feed Jake?  I will help Leah and Seth take their backpacks down to the car.”

“Okay, I will hurry,” she says, leaving to go to her box.

I can tell that Bella is trying to put on a strong front for them, but I know this is killing her to let them go on this trip. It will be good for them, though, and good for her, too.  I have planned out this weekend so that she gets a chance to be a twenty-four year old for a change.  After we have everything packed and ready, we head out.

I drive them to the church, seeing a bus and a bunch of children.  I also see Sally there, and I frown as I pull into a parking space.  “Sally works in the Sunday school. She’s the main reason they are going.  She is taking her cell with her, and said that I could call her anytime.  She is also going to have them call me before bed, and when they get up in the morning.  You can stay here if you want. You don’t need to come with me. I won’t tell her who you are.” I turn to look at her, and smirk because she answered my internal question.

I shake my head.  “No, I am fine, Baby. Thank you.” 

The night of the break in, I explained to Bella that I went by a different name at Aro’s, and the girls I was with, had never seen my face because they were blindfolded.  I was very glad that she just nodded her head, and didn’t ask any other questions.  I hate the fact that I’ve been with them.  I don’t want my sins to show in her eyes when I look at her each time I remember that she saw me there.  When the time comes, and she finds out what I did and what happens there with me and the girls, I hope and pray to God that I don’t lose her friendship.

We get out of the car and start walking over. As we do, Sally waves, making her way over to us.  Her eyes hit me for only a few seconds before she looks back at Bella.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 04 May 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Weekend Revelations!

This was absolutely magnificent!  You touched on so many vital aspects and yet never made it seem as though you rushed one of them.  Bella not putting Edward is sheer Bella - she may it have a lot of things and money but she makes up for that in class!  Her separation from the twins was another biggie.  She has been everything to them and they to her.  In some ways, the twins have always been her link with the world and for all she lacks in education, she instinctively knows what is right for them and what they do and DO NOT need.  They are polite, they are educated and they are helpful.  As for Bella's kiss and relationship with Edward, in many ways, as innocent as Bella is, she is innately mature due to her life situations.  Edward needs to realize that it took a lot for Bella to open up to him and trust him with her life and the truth and he needs to realize that she needs him more now than ever before.  Stunning!  Kudos!  You pushed the envelope and struck gold!



Author's Response:

Hello our faithful readers and reviewers!  We were expecting a bit of a lashing from some of you, and we have gotten a few but nothing like I expected.  Please let me remind you all now first and foremost that we are both happy ever after kind of gals.  Little refresher is needed about ages, and a few other things, since there were a few questions.  Edward is 28 and will soon be turning 29.  Bella just turned 11 when the twins were born, Sue left when Bella was 13, and Bella has been working for the university for over 5 years.  Bella just turned 19 in chapter 8.  Edward is 9 and 1/2 years older than Bella.  Before Sue left, she obtained a fake ID for Bella that said Bella was 18.  Therefore everyone surrounding the apartment building assumed she was of legal age.  Sue needed everyone to think Bella was 18, and she was sure to scare tactic that into Bella.  All these years, Bella has continued to maintain the age Sue said she had to say she was, in fear of not being able to stay with the twins.  Now for Bree Tanner and James...Bree Tanner was the female student from Edward’s Summer school course he taught.  In the summer for the past several years, Edward has been helping his good friend Marcus by teaching the kids who struggle to pass, or are so far behind they may not graduate high school.  Bree Tanner was the hoodie wearing shy and quiet girl from chapters 1 and 2.  Bree lives in Forks and attends high school at Forks High.  James Hunter is a Math teacher and the truancy officer for the Forks school district.  We don’t want to give too much away, but if you think back to the earlier chapters, when Edward had to take a break from his panic attacks, he was clear to tell Marcus his concerns about Bree being abused.  Bella is naive about many things, but she has grown a lot in the past few chapters.  We want to be clear that Bella feels as if she lied to Edward, she started trusting him a long time ago and when she started trusting him she feels she should have told him then.  Edward doesn’t feel betrayed by the lie, but he is more of in shock by the lie.  When he thought he was almost 5 years older than Bella he was concerned with the age difference, mainly because of how innocent she is.  Now that that almost five is almost ten, he is confused.  The next chapter will have you cheering Edward on, and hating his guts too.  We don’t want to give too much away, but I will say this, we are both excited at the prospect of the reviews after the next chapter posts.  Thanks as always for reading and reviewing this story, you all have no idea how much your words mean to us.  Thank you, Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Teaser for Chapter 18: Confessions  (As always subject to changes in the Beta process.)

Leaving Bella’s place, I get in my car and drive.  I don’t even slow down when the speedometer hits one-hundred-thirty miles per hour; I just keep driving.  I am racing to get away from the fear and the rage that is inside of me. I still feel so angry; how the fuck did I not see that she was only nineteen?!  I mean, she looks so young; I am so fucking pissed at myself.  She is still a baby, and the fact that she is only nineteen, doesn’t keep me from wanting her.  I want her, and I need to be with her.  I want her in every way, which is so fucked up. I shouldn’t want to be with a nineteen year old girl.

 

She was thirteen when Sue left her to look after Seth and Leah.  She was so fucking young, and she ended up in Aro’s club at thirteen!  Fuck, if he would have said yes to her…if she was in the pictures I had to choose from…I would have picked her…I know I would have… fuck! I could have really hurt her.  I am really fucking sick! Thank God he said no! Fuck, the dip shit pimp that said yes...shit! I’m sure she would…fuck I don’t even want to finish that thought.

 

“FUCK!” I scream out and I do an illegal U-turn at eighty miles per hour.  I decide I need to see Aro. If I find out that fucker knew her real age, I am going to add that motherfucker to my shit list.  I am going to hurt him so fucking much, and anyone who tries to stop me, too.

 

 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Gifts and Snowball Fights

I loved their very first Christmas!  All the gifts were well thought out and meaningful and Bella is  far more at ease now.  My heart bleeds for Emmett though!  He, more than most, must be feeling such loss of hope and joy just now.  You've given us another winner!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing chapter 22 of His Cimmerian View.  There aren’t a lot of questions about things going on, other than the arrival of Uncle Harry and of course Sue’s return.  The story only has roughly 10 to 12 chapters left and through 26 are written and 27 is more than half way completed.  BPOV out-take is coming along nicely but man alive is it HUGE over 22K word count right now and it is for sure a tissue warning.  As for the few questions we have gotten, we have answers... We want to be clear that Emmett filed a paper that is giving Bella custody until the court hearing so right now no one can take the twins away from her, without first going to court.  We also had someone ask about the title of the story over at TWCS, it is the same as it is at FFN... however at TWCS I have found it is easier to look up the author and then find the story, the story search is not super simple like it is at FFN.  We are the same names both author name and story name at all sites we post at.  On a side and personal note, I am very sorry for the delay of this... after I posted the last chapters on Thursday morning, my mother passed away.  Unless something gets in the way the only thing that will be delayed is this review reply.  The next chapter is ready to go... minus mine and Nikky’s final read through anyway.  I want to thank you all for the kind words shared on Facebook already and thank you for the prayers and well wishes.  If you haven’t joined us on Facebook, please do so there are lots of fun discussions and of course sometimes extra teasers and info too.  Just search for TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and you will find us.  Thanks everyone have a great week.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 23: teaser subject to changes during beta process…

It’s New Year Eve and the twin’s eighth birthday.  Seth and Leah shared a party yesterday at Chuck E. Cheese and they loved it.  Esme, Chas, and Angela all took the day off and came to help out at the party.  Aro brought Sulpicia and their son, Sammy, who is ten.  Sammy seemed to have taken a liking to Leah, as he stayed mainly with her the entire time. Esme and Zafrina both said it was cute and sweet, but all I wanted to do was kill the kid.  Bella even laughed at me and gave me a look when I let out a growl at little Sammy when he pulled Leah away while she was talking to us. I looked back at Bella and shrugged my shoulders, because I wasn’t really sure where the over-protectiveness came from.

Then there were the moms or whores as I call them.  I got hit on a lot.  Almost every mother of a child that had been invited was dressed like they were having a night out on the town, not taking their child to a classmate’s birthday party.  Some even said that I was really nice to help Bella and her kids out like I have been.  I felt like I was going to lose it as they made her sound so beneath them and that she was simply a charity case.  Thankfully, Bella kept me calm and stopped me from screaming at them.  As soon as school is back in session, I’ll be making it very clear to everyone what Bella and I are to each other. The fact that this was a place for children, and that it was Seth and Leah’s first real birthday party, stopped me from performing a very hot, public display of affection with Bella.  I know for a fact I would have enjoyed it, and I’m sure I would have made Bella enjoy it, too.