Reviews by avidreader69
The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight

 

 

TPW Avi 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1625190
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 46

I just found TPW again by chance yesterday.  I am caught up now and even more disgusted with Carlisle.  I am certain it is not healthy to harbor a deep hatred for a fictinal character, but what really gives me the heebie jeebies is to know there are actually sick minds like this out there.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 48

The ultimate use for Esme's garden would be to hide Carlisle's body, use it for fertilizer.  Thank you for not breaking our hearts totally!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 50

Dun-dun-duh, and the devil aka Caralisle arrives.  Stay locked in there Bella!  Find a freaking weapon, the calvary is on its way!!!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

I think i just felt Edward's panic attack from her request.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Epilogue

Beautiful ending.  I love her seeing "Her" Edward standing and waiting for her.

Summary:

Bella's a good girl, goes to a private girls school doesn't put a foot wrong. Goes out for one night with the girls and meets bad boy Edward who is from a public school and leads Bella off onto a different path..


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 33439 Read Count: 36897
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 17 Mar 2010
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 17 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Okay here's my guess as to where the plot could go.  Edward is the guy who looks like the "bad" guy, Daddy wants Bella to stay away from him, bad news, yada, yada.  On the other hand there is Jacob who the Chief is puching Bella to.  Good kid, not a "troublemaker".  Jacob turns out to be tha bad seed, Edward will look good compared to whatever Jacob is into, but it will take a life endangering event happening to Bella for the Chief to get a clear picture?

Mama lion protecting her cub, nothing fiercer!  Although a peaved off Daddy is an awesome sight to behold as well.

Summary:

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Bella Swan is kidnapped from her monotonous life by the rich and reclusive Edward Cullen who has fallen in love wirh her from afar. Can she overcome her anger and fall in love & can they both learn from their mistakes? 

Rated: M (18 and over)

AH, AU, Contains: Violence, Foul Language, Lemons


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02 WIP Reads
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 95443 Read Count: 83458
[Report This] Published: 28 Jan 2010 Updated: 03 Apr 2013
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 21 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Bella's going to be old hat at being kidnapped soon enough!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Edward should not have let JAmes and LAurent leave alive.  Too many bad feelings from some deranged creepers. Because James knew how Edward and BElla "met", he is able to torture her psychologically and raise doubts.  Not smart for someone running an empire.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 01 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

My leg is jumping and I am biting my nails hoping she gets away!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 12 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

AHHH!  Does she know ANY slef-defense or anything to impair James?!  It might be hard with the ankle but the adrenaline might help her forget that pain briefly. 

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 13 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Thank you for making Bella somewhat smart in this situation, she did not accept being a victim but was a fighter.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Taking place in 17th century Europe, Princess Isabella, only daughter of King Charles I of Spain, faces her fate as her arranged marriage to Prince Edward, future King of England, approaches.  The Prince is known for his indiscriminate cavorting with the ladies of his land, leading the Princess to fear that she will suffer the same fate as her mother and many other queens before and since, to be trapped in a loveless marriage to an unfaithful husband.  Will Princess Isabella ever find happiness while bound to the fate of her birth? AH/OC/Eventual Lemons

 

 

Warning: This will be an NC17 story for later chapters.



Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Finished, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, mamih's favorites, TBR
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 92977 Read Count: 373213
[Report This] Published: 20 Feb 2010 Updated: 20 Jun 2010
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Bliss

I must be in a doom and gloom mood with the nasty rainy weather here, but as wonderful as their first time together is, I end up wondeting what is going to seperate them!?  How embarassing that must have been to live through that.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Altering Plans

Would Esme be concerned of a potential attack on Italy?  That jealousy that others have for Bella and Edward makes me so nervous!  PEople get ugly when they are jealous.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Bon Voyage

Was childbirth a frightening prospect at this time regarding the mortality rate of the mothers?  With all the sexing they are doing I would think Bella would be pg soon.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Deceptively Beautiful

Is she fearful that she is or isn't pregnant, now THAT is the question!  If Edward strays, knowinng his true love is with him, well, she should kick that beast to the curb and shave the head of any of woman who looks his way.  But the greatest revenge would be to not respond to him and just make sex about procreation and marital duty.  That would be painful and difficult, but  all she really had the power to do.  But I think Tanya will attempt to make it look like Edward strayed, when he truly did not.  Since it seems she does not have much faith in him remaining faithful when presented with temptation, it seems like that plan would work!  Poor Isabella, at least she may have an ally in Rosalie. 

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 22 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 17: The Dog and The Cobra

Thank God for Alice!  She was able to do all the things Bella wished she could.  What a wretched, ugly person Tanya is.  To speak that way in front of his wife but his mother as well?  How shameful.  I hope those ladies with allegiance to TAnya are taught a lesson as well as to who is actually worthy of their loyalty.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 10 May 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Banished

I hope we've seen the last of Tanya and her ugliness!  I would hope they would now see that htere is no hope of Tanya being Princess, even if she offs Isabella..  But that's the thing with angry, delusional people, they don't think logically!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 17 May 2010 Title: Chapter 22: A Snake Hiding in the Garden

I love it, love it, love it!  Having the women come up with a plan to get rid of Tanya, well what better way to catch a female dog than to utilize the female minds around you?!  Of course the men will get the glory, but I REALLY hope Tanya will know who was behind her capture  :)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 31 May 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Clandestine Meetings

hmmmm, I get the feeling we will have an "Oh, how did I miss that?" moment when we find out who the villain is behind the murder.  I love that the mystery is more complex than originally thought.  And what a show of power by Bella that Tanya was caught in Spain.  Did she really think that was a smart country to flee to?!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Can you fall in love in 10 days? Can you push someone to the edge of insanity in 10 days? Edward is a bachelor risking fifty grand on the line and Bella is a writer for a prominent woman’s magazine. Loosely based on How To Lose A Guy In Ten Days. AU, AH, & OOC. Canon pairings.

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. Twilight belongs to Stephenie Meyer. I own nothing.

Banner by: moonlit-wishes

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human, Crossover
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 86564 Read Count: 10558
[Report This] Published: 08 Mar 2010 Updated: 24 Jul 2010
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I was thrilled to find this story today as I have seriously thought about what a B/E fic would look like based on that movie!  You did a great job and I like the ending to this.  They have known each other less than 3 months at this point right?  So anything more would have been too rushed.  This shows that they are approaching their relationship maturely now.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Thanks to Jadiona for the awesome banner!

 

Charolette died 60 years ago and left Peter.  Edward left Bella in the forest nearly two hundred years ago.  Peter has been alone and Bella has been through hell; how will they find common ground?  What will happen when these two cross paths?

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 78843 Read Count: 18426
[Report This] Published: 17 Apr 2010 Updated: 15 Jul 2012
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 2: COLLISION

I usually so not like anything not Bella/Edward.  But I am really liking this.  I love all the similarities he sees in her and Jasper!

Make-A-WIsh by rbsschess Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 9]
Summary:

Edward is the hot QB for the Pittsburgh Steelers.  Bella is the hot rising rock star.  In what seems like another lifetime he was everything to her.  When life throws them together again can they reclaim old feelings and build new ones?  Maybe!!


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9810 Read Count: 1793
[Report This] Published: 17 Apr 2010 Updated: 17 Apr 2010
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Make-A-Wish

I am glad she made him work for his redemption!

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella is graduating high school and looking for a Dom.  Edward is the Head Master at her school and he is who she wants.  Problem - he is married, has kids, a friend of Bella's fathers, 35 and oh! he isn't a Dom.  Can she get him? - Maybe!

  My entry for FF's Forbidden Lemon contest.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, I Whitlock's read , Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, My Favorite Stories, To Read , Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 210865 Read Count: 123454
[Report This] Published: 25 Apr 2010 Updated: 17 Mar 2011
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Fifteen Years Later

I'm not sure if I feel sad with grief or happy they are together for eternity. 



Author's Response:

Understandable - thanks for reading - Beth

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Takes place after Edward leaves in NM.

 Follow Bella as life takes her through twists and turns that eventually lead her back to a strangley different Edward. Can true love overcome all lifes jagged twists and sharp turns?

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 42 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 119541 Read Count: 24756
[Report This] Published: 05 Jul 2010 Updated: 19 Feb 2011
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Jagged Turns & Twisted Fates

WEll I am thinking Tristan smells to Alice!  Something other than a wolf I am guessing?



Author's Response:

You're right on the - other than wolf- bit- he does smell- but somethign is a bit off :-)

Good guess, bb.

Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4248]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1254898
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I think a good retort for Bella to Jake as to why she would want this lifestyle after an abusive relationship is that an abusiverelationship is based on fear and intimidation whereas the D/s relationship is built on trust and respecting limits.



Author's Response:

yes you are right... and welcome to my story, I hope you like it ,,,,lml

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 23 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

I hope the dog is okay!  Maybe it's just psycho Tanya doing some breaking and entering/stalking?



Author's Response:

i thought I pinky promised to not harm the dog in anyway,,,,lol ...I wonder if it's Tanya too....thanks for reading. I have your teaser ..lml.....

“Hey” my thoughts had taken over my attention so much that Edward’s voice startled me causing me to flinch.

 

“I’m sorry babe…” he chuckled “…I didn’t mean to scare you” My eyes moved towards his they were warm and bright making me smile.

 

“It’s ok. Where have you been?” Edward sighed

 

“Ahhh…well while some of us get to lay around in the tub others leave the dog out, hang up their clothes and talk to irate fathers from Forks” the auditable gasp left my throat and I couldn’t mask the horror in my voice.

 

“You talked to Charlie?”

 

“Hmm...Yes I did” Edward sat down on the floor with his back against the wall of the tub pulling the cork out of a bottle of wine that I didn’t see he had.

 

“What did he want?”

 

As I sat up straight turning with my arm lying on the wall by his head, Edward handed me a glass before he started talking. “He was just concerned about you Bella and he wanted to make sure that after what happened you were safe.”

 

“And?” I knew there had to be more

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 06 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Does Edward get the joke yet?!  ;)

I like that they seperate their everyday relationship to their play relationship. 



Author's Response:

Noooo... it will have to be explained to him .....

Thanks for reading, I have a teaser for you....lml

Walking into the house all the cares that had been forgotten came crashing back as he told me that the locksmith would be there in about a half-hour. I used that time to tell him what I had learned about Heather.

 

“Do you think that could have been her on the video?” He asked me as we sat outback playing fetch with Seth and a tennis ball.

 

“It could have been. But how would she know where you lived. I mean really Edward if she knew where I was why go to the center?” He thought about that for a few seconds as he once again threw the ball into the grass.

 

“I’m going to call Mr. Weiss and let him check on it, I’m also going to see if he can check on your Officer Hawk.”

 

“My Officer Hawk?”

 

He smirked “Well he’s not mine besides he didn’t really care until he found out who you were, and I’m not taking any chances. I don’t know how it will work with him being a cop and all but…” I cut him off because I had gotten an ingenious idea.

 

“I could have Charlie do it.

Summary:

 

Bella, Rose and Alice are all off at Northwestern going to med school.  They are venturing out of the dorm life into a newly build buidling of condos.  Bella is stalked by someone. Who is doing it and how much will they get away with before they are caught? Can a new friend help her overcome the violent things happening to her? Can she ever trust a man?  Can she survive this or will it break her? Story contains violent actions, stalking, abuse, rape, agnst, and is not geared for everyone.  If these things bother you please pass over those items. *warning will be given* AH/

 

Banner made by Moonlit-Wishes

 

This Banner is for the out-take that is now posted here as the final chapter. 

Thank you so much for reading my story, I look forward to your reviews.

 

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance, Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 113884 Read Count: 55095
[Report This] Published: 26 Aug 2010 Updated: 04 Jun 2011
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 : 45 Days and Counting

Ah, I must have hit the submit button twice on my review and I didn't think it went thru, so glad it made it. 



Author's Response:

It is all good I LOVE ALL reviews even the multiple ones!  :)

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43: A Damned Obituary

I know Alec is a sicko and just wrong in the head, but the obituary is brilliant.  He not only gets them frantic but also sends a message about his intentions. 



Author's Response:

Thank you!

YOU totally got it!  You got what I was going for!  It is his wishful thinking of sorts!

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Kasi~

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46: Life and Death

I absolutely love that Bella let that you-know-what have it right between the eys as she killed his delusions and him.  After being his victim repeatedly, it was empowerment to the nth degree.



Author's Response:

That is EXACTLY what I was going for!  Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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28 year old English teacher, Bella Swan is dreading being dragged to her 10 year reunion with Alice; until a certain social networking site offers her a very welcome blast from the past... BxE, AH. NC-17 for lemons in later chapters.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories Read by CNYBella, Bella's Must Reads!
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 126861 Read Count: 61925
[Report This] Published: 06 Sep 2010 Updated: 13 Aug 2011
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Isn’t it obvious that I’m a cat person?


Best line!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

:)

I think a wonderful outtake would be some of the letters that Edward wrote to Bella in highschool, or perhaps what Emmett thought when he found them! 

Things Least Expected by lmw Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 477]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella thought her life was going to be different by the time she was close to thirty.  She thought she'd be living the American dream with a husband the two kids and a dog.  Instead at twenty eight she breaks up with her long term boyfriend and is the only single person among her friends and family.  With a reconnection of an old crush thanks to Facebook and an unexpected meeting with a new man, Bella does the only thing she can, follow her heart.

 

I have a banner!!  I want to give a shout out to Mehek18 for creating it.  I think it's pretty nice.  You should really check out her site at http://mehek18.tumblr.com and take a look around. She is amazing and I want to thank her for taking the time to create my banner!  Thank you!!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella
Chapters: 62 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 296726 Read Count: 118582
[Report This] Published: 19 Oct 2010 Updated: 26 Sep 2012
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

:)   Of course I will keep reading!  I am kind of loving not liking him.  I will not say hate because I think he can change...



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Enjoy!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 15 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

I like to think that Bella will put Jane in her place, perhaps have a natural shield called maturity against Jane's barbs!



Author's Response:

thank you for reading.  We'll meet Jane in the next chapter (which is going to be posted in a few!)

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 22 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I think Renee and Charlie should be mortified by Jane's behavior!  I would be if my child acted that way towards someone.  Perhaps their excuse making is what made her such a wench!



Author's Response:

Jane will get hers...honestly it'll come up later in the story.  Thanks for reading and I hop eyou will continue to enjoy the rest of the story!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Shocked.  Which would she rather live without?  I think she will  choose her dreams over him.    Bella does need to dump Jessica.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and takign the time to comment.  Bella isn't a stupid girl, she will choose soon.  The dumping of Jessica is to come.  She is actually based on someone i was once friends with, sometimes it's hard to just dump them.  Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I suspect Jane will have invited Tanya along for the visit Edward is heading to.  On another note, if a family has been a dream of hers her entire life, she should probably move on.  At the same time, if she moves on without feeling firm and confident in her decision, she may never be happy.  Edward could not decide to give in on these things just to keep her either because thye just wouldn't be happy most likely. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading.  There is more in store for Edward and Bella coming up.  Things will get interesting to say the least.  We will meet Tanya, but not until farther down the road.  I hope you continue to read and enjoy the story.  The next update should be this weekend or early next week.

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

He's saying "no,never" but his actions are screaming "just give me time"! 



Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for reading and leaving a comment.


Edward is stuck.  He was burnt pretty badly by Tanya (we'll get the whole scoop later on in the story) and he has his guard up.  Wil he change?  Will he let Bella come farther into his life?  You'll just have to wait and see.

The next update should be soon.  I was have an issue starting the chapter but I think I'm over that hurdle now (that I have rewritten it twice!).  thanks again for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 29 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

I think Edward is extremely immature.  He handles pretty much all of it badly.  Leaving her at the wedding like that was a him holding up a sign saying "Immature Asshole".  He's only focused on himself and his feelings.  He doesn't know where this leaves them?  Huh, it leaves him across the country from the woman he supposedly loves while he sulks.  I get the idea that Jake may step up and be there for her.  It would be a hard lesson if she moved on with someone who was there for her when she needed support the most.  I think I would have had a bonfire with New Moon had that happened in there but here, I would like to see him learn not to be a spoiled brat by losing what he wants!



Author's Response:

Hello and thanks for reading and reviewing.

i agree that Edward is immature and he is handling things wicked badly.  He is acting concieded adn spoiled.  Hopefully he'll grow up but who knows. You'll just have to keep reading to find out.

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Well, Esme certainly surpassed my expectations on being awful.  I'd be wondering at this point if any of my cousins were my half siblings on my mother's side!  Yikes, she brings insensitive to a whole new level and I personally think Jake should get on aplane and rip Edward a new one.  Bella is so much like Carlisle. We dislike when people remind us of poor qualities in ourselves and I truly believe this would be why Esme hates Edward so much; they are just alike.  Carlisle still loves Esme for some well-hidden reason so I suppose this bodes well for Bella still loving Edward even though he may be more selfish than her mother!



Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for reading and reviewing! 

I kind of want to Jacob to beat up Edward, but he doesn't want to upset Bella any more than she all ready is.  Jacob and Edward will be chatting at some point in the story, soon actually (within the next few chapters).  When I orginally wrote the outline of the story Carlilse was mena like Esme, however, I couldn't make him mean, I just couldn't do it!

 

I'm hoping to update within the next few days.

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Yeah, Edward needs some therapy.  It's almost some type of PTSD in losing a child like that.  He isn't connecting Bella and the baby, total disassociation.  And I just want to yell  "THIS is NOT love.  You do not treat someone you LOVE like this!!"  But good chapter  ;)  It's good to understand him a  bit.



Author's Response:

Hello and thanks for reading and the reviews.

Edward is confused and he is kind of a coward.  Really though when it come ot love and taking chances sometimes peopel are reserved.  Having been burnt, his obviously more reserved.  We're going to hear more from him.  I was going to take a break from writing, but I'm writing the next chapter as we speak.  I can't stop!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Bella has a continuing relationship with Renee and Charlie that did not include Edward so it seems appropriate for her to go to pay her respects.  I am glad that Bella sees that house buying thing as a sign of where he sees the future.



Author's Response:

Thansk for reading and reviewing.

Renee and Charlie chose to be part of their grandchild's life, even when their son chose not to take responsiblity with his own child.  Their relationship was begining to form because of that and they three of them just got a long well.  Also, Charlie was very kind to her and they got along well and began to bond over the fishing trip when she first went to Washington.  She felt he was a good man and she wanted to say goodbye to him.  Plus she absolutly loves Renee adn wanted to help her.  If that meant she travels three thousand miles to make frozen meals for her, then that was what she was going to.

Bella and Edward will see each other soon (as in the next chapter that I am currently working on).

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 05 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

No, did not dee it coming, I thought Bella would be stronger than giving into the physical connection.  I am thinking it means absolutely nothing at this point!  He will freak out, she'll be pissed and disconnected.



Author's Response:

Keep reading....things are going to get a little more complicated (emotion wide).

Thanks for reading/reviewing!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Terribly sad, she seems a bit short with Marcus.  Maybe Jane is rubbing off on her!



Author's Response:

She's just short on general.  She has given so much to Edward that she is exhusted.  Hope you like th enext chapter!

-Lisa

PS-Thanks for R/R.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 08 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

They are at a different place now.  Before, Edward's reaction could have been written off as an emotional, knee-jerk reaction.  Now, he outright rejected her and the baby, with a concious decision.  You would think his grief over Charlie would make him want to cling to a new life.  I would think her feelings for Edward would be different at this point.  Trust has been broken, is it possible to get it back?



Author's Response:

Edward is in a place he can't even explain.  he's filled with so much that he doens't really know what he is doing or saying (none the less, he is a jerk at the moment).  All that i am promising is a resolution with their relationship.

I'm working on the next chapter now.  I kind of want to do an Edward POV, but I'm not sure.  I'll think about it.

Thanks for r/r.

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I am thinking he was at the airport.  too sad, he is just really screwed up and had no right going to the airport if he would give up that easily.



Author's Response:

Hello and thanks for reading and reviewing!

The next chapter posted will be the out take of Edward's POV.  I hoep you will enjoy it and it might answer some questions.

On a side note, I don't know when the next update will be.  My computer is broken and I won't get it back for 2-3 weeks!!  I am however, still writing and will type all the chapters once I have my computer in hand again!  Hope you are still intersted!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Out take- Edward' POV

I hate to say it but I think his immaturity has played a the largest role in the demise of the relationship, so his fear that one day she'll realize he's too "young" for her?  That's probably not too far off the mark right now. He was going to screw Tanya again.  Really, even if he gave her forgiveness for his own sake, that doesn't mean he should jump into that cesspool again!  He just may not be able to fix things before Bella moves on.

Merry Christmas!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading. Edward is one confused boy right now.  The story is a little more than half away done so there is still time for a lot to happen.  The next chapter will be posted soon.

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26

The fact that she even acknowledges him should give him hope.  He doesn't deserve another chance!  He had a second chance already and screwed it up royally.  I can not believe Esme with not letting go of Bella giving Emmett and Rose the baby.  Were her children so disposable to her?



Author's Response:

Hello and thanks for reading.  THe story will get intersting soon...I promise.  Th enext update will be in a day or so.  Also, I'm working on an out take from Edward's point of view, but I don't know if I'll post it.

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 05 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter Twenty Seven

Well it looks like Jake just sabotaged that!  But he wouldn't be able to if Edward would grow a backbone and go for what he wants instead of pussy-footing around it.  He is the one who needs to step out on a limb here even if he thinks it will be chopped off, he needs to at least try.  Bella did.



Author's Response:

Jacob did what he thoguth was right.  he wanted to stick up for Bella and protect her and the baby.  there is so much Jacob hate right now!  What will Edward do?  We'll find out in the next chapter becaus eit's from  his point of view!  The update should be tonight or tomorrow!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter Twenty Eight

I think Bella handled it wonderfully.  She's drained and hormonal and certainly does not need that extra stress.  So glad that Edward showed up, I get where Jake is coming from but he's being a bit controlling about it all.



Author's Response:

Jake is being a little overboard, but he doesn't want Bella to get upset any more than she all ready has.  She thinks with edward just being there that the possibly of him hurting her is there.

I hope you like the next chapter, which will be posted in a bit!

Thank you for reading/commenting!

-Lisa

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter Thirty

Well, considering how calmly Emmett just handled Bella's revelation, I'd say Edward probably said something similar to him!



Author's Response:

Emmett and Edward's conversation will be in the next chapter!

Thanks for reading/commenting!

-Lisa

Summary: Past Featured Story

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New Moon AU. Edward Cullen is more than shocked when, five years after he left Forks, Bella Swan calls - warning of Victoria's intended attack on the Cullen coven – and insisting that the vampires need her help.

A tale of love, revenge, forgiveness and forever.  

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11407 Read Count: 3637
[Report This] Published: 30 Oct 2010 Updated: 28 Dec 2010
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Scars

I am a bit saddened that Renesmee is a 9 yr old vampire.  Kind of limits her relationship with Jacob!  I am glad Edward realizes that she is not the same girl who he left.  In over a hundred years, did he not learn that you can not anticipate what life is going to throw at you?  I guess he was too relaint on Alice's and his gifts.  I always have wondered why in the world he wouldn't want Alice to check on her future after he made his decision to leave?  I am so curious as to what road you will have these two take!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing chapter two of Bright Star, avidreader69!

Yes, unfortunately Renesmee's age does limit her relationship with Jacob - but I wanted her in my fic in some way.

Haha, yes, Edward seems to be going through a period of "Enlightenment" ;)

I hope you continue to read it and enjoy Bright Star.

All the best,

Little Miss Mionie

Summary:

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Dr. Edward Anthony Masen Cullen is a world renowned pediatric neurologist, he´s also a very sought after Dominant living in the Seattle area. What happens when the thrill of the playroom is no longer enough? What happens when he wants more than just a Friday through Sunday arrangement... Bella Swan a very young and very successful Corporate Attorney, who happens to be secretly crushing on her best friends older brother. It all starts with a dream, but after a very short, but failed marriage, Bella decides it´s time to give in to her submissive nature. With the help of her best friend and a blind date, can Bella finally find all the things her live is missing. ExB Rated for BDSM themes and lemony goodness. 

 

A very big thank you to the wonderful Kris Mkystich for my new banner!  Isn´t it sexy!!! Check her out in the December Drabble Wars!!  http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8769101/3/School-Of-Mischief

 

 

Winner of a Tomato Soup Award!

 

 

Nomimated for two Wordsmith Awards!

 

 

 

Voted Must Read Monday by Twi Girls Next Door

 

 

Winner of two Wordsmith Awards!

 

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Bdsm stories only, Twilight - Read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 312058 Read Count: 389610
[Report This] Published: 07 Nov 2010 Updated: 19 Aug 2016
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: REVENGE IS A DISH... BEST SERVED COLD...

I am thinking Edward safeworded.  He was so upset about Bella getting married that he wasn't actually just punishing Tanya for her indiscretion but also ready to take his anger out on her for something she had nothing to do with...OR she sensed his extreme anger and it scared her?  I can't wait for their first face to face!



Author's Response:

 

Wow I´m blown away by the response this story is getting. I really want to thank each and everyone of you for reading and reviewing. Each review is specail and you guys keep me going and make want to keep you happy. Thanks for the patience as I move these two along, even those of you with ´forced patience´... you know who you are! lol! i love the threats of taking me into the playroom for a punishment scene.. What can I say DomWard owns me. Hang in there with me and let´s enjoy this crazy ride!!  *Happy Thanksgiving*


Laterzzz:P

 

Krazi

xoxoxo

 

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 22 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter: 4 BREAKING UP IS HARD TO DO...

Tanya is all kinds of crazy and scary.  I hope Bella can stand up to that much loony.  That sort of broke my part that he cried over Bella getting married, that only thing that kept me from crying was that they still have a chance!



Author's Response:

 

Wow I´m blown away by the response this story is getting. I really want to thank each and everyone of you for reading and reviewing. Each review is specail and you guys keep me going and make want to keep you happy. Thanks for the patience as I move these two along, even those of you with ´forced patience´... you know who you are! lol! i love the threats of taking me into the playroom for a punishment scene.. What can I say DomWard owns me. Hang in there with me and let´s enjoy this crazy ride!!  *Happy Thanksgiving*


Laterzzz:P

 

Krazi

xoxoxo

 

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 01 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: How the Douche Stole Christmas...

Great twist, I was hoping she'd pull out her business card and tell Leah to give her a call when she was ready to get her head out of her ass and see that prig for what he is.  I think Leah could get a decent palimony settlement from this situation for her baby!



Author's Response:

Glad that you liked it!  You guys are so great! I thank you enough for reading and reviewing!  The response to this chapter is absolutely overwhelming!  For being so great check out the blog for a teaser of the upcoming chapter!  Enjoy and as always, let me know what you guys think!

www.fortheloveofdomination.blogspot.com

Laterzzz:)

~Krazi & Mojo~

xoxo

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: Twas A Night With Sir... And All Through the House...

I am hoping that is Rose on the phone!  He did say he had to talk to her so I am going with that.  They do share some incredible intensity.  I keep thinking ahead to when they put it all together and realize who they are with, when everything clicks together and all the stars are aligned and the universe makes sense for them!  I have a feeling you will keep building that suspense for a bit though.



Author's Response:

Sorry for the late response to reviews, but I figured everyone would rather have a new chapter instead. Lol! Well how about both, along with a teaser from chapter 10! Squeee!  So here´s to TGIF!  Don´t forget to checkout the blog for updates, pictease, and chapter teasers!  Thanks for reading, reviewing and being the best readers an author could ask for!


Laterzzzz:)

Krazi and Mojo

xoxo

www.fortheloveofdomination.blogspot.com

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter: 9 And So It Begins...

I keep wondering if Tanya will be at the club when they do their scene?!  I hope Bella puts that psycho in her place.  I love that Rose had a device on Emmett.  Bella should've have avenged Mojo by leading Emmett into trouble! 



Author's Response:

Happy Super Bowl Sunday! I hope your favorite team wins!

Thanks for reading and reviewing! Check out the blog for chapter 9 & 10 PicTease!

www.fortheloveofdomination.blogspot.com


Laterzzz:)


~Krazi & Mojo~

xoxo

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10: It´s Playtime...

Very intense and I am so glad that waas from Edward's POV.  I am curious as to what Bella thought of it and how she is doing after the experience.  That was thrilling when he thought of Bella when "pet" bit her lip but it was also sort of a bittersweet feeling every time he thought how pet was replacing her in his thoughts!  Since he doesn't know yet they are one and the same, it was sort of him letting go of Isabella, his first love.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11: Guess Who´s Coming to Dinner... the Morning After...

It's like Lois Lane finding out that Clark Kent is Superman, all of her feelings can be combined as soon as she grasps that they are one person!

Summary: Past Featured Story

Single mom, Bella, and single dad, Edward, meet as their boys start school. Their boys become fast friends but will Edward and Bella? Or will they become more than friends? AH&NC-17 for language and possible lemons.

tc

Banner by busymommy

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: butterflybetty stories to read , Finished, Single parents , I Whitlock's read , Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Chances Saga, My favs past present and future , to read
Chapters: 47 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 145690 Read Count: 204605
[Report This] Published: 11 Nov 2010 Updated: 04 Jul 2011
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 17 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I feel strained and awkward now after that meal scene!  Emmett is certainly quite the character.



Author's Response:

lol, it was awkward:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 18 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Esme cracks me up, she needs to get stealth with her attempts to have him take Bella out, I see where Emmett gets his subtlety.



Author's Response:

I know, right?

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I love the dream of Brody telling her it's okay to move on.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Does Bella not drink at all because of the circumstances of Brody's death or just when she is driving?  Just curious!  I think I need a ladie's night out...



Author's Response:

At all because of Brody.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 20 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I was reallllyy hoping for Edward to have a Sarah moment like Bella had with Brody.  Thank you!



Author's Response:

Thanks:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 21 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

I'm trying to figure out if the boys have decided that they should be a family!  They seem to miss having 2 parents.  It would be interesting to see them fight off potential suitors for either Edward or Bella...



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Edward being Edwaard, he's WAY overthinking this!  They have sort of been dating without the actual intent of dating, if that makes sense!  Thank you for properly representing the inflated cost of zoo food.



Author's Response:

lol, no problem;)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I like that Bella tells people what's on her mind, like with Esme and Emmett.



Author's Response:

Thank you:) I get tired of weak Bella who let's everyone push her around, you know?

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I keep imagining Sarah and Brody watching them and smiling. 



Author's Response:

I think they are too!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 26 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Well, how sweet is that??!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I like Bella.  It takes a brave person to chance enduring another awkward evening and meal!  I'm gald Edward at least recognizes that she is special.  Charlie has some personality too which is nice to see!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 29 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

It looks like Bella does have a hurdle to jump before she can truly move on.  I am loving Charlie!



Author's Response:

Charlie's a riot!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I think she handled the situation well considering what a shock that must have been.  And I give Lauren credit too for leaving when she did.



Author's Response:


Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

I am just sitting her smiling because you painted such a pretty picture



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

He surre is familiar with "Vic"!  Even if she is a relation of Sarah's or something, she was trying to mark him with a hand to his chest and she wasn't very nice.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 03 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

:)  Glad that wasn't terribly drama-filled!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I wish I had such a good attitude making cookies with my kids and the mess they make!



Author's Response:

Ugh, I don't either!!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 05 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

She extended an olive branch even though she was not totally comfortable.  Very grown-up of her!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

The Sarah dream was touching, but when Bella reached over and grabbed Lauren's hand, I teared-up.



Author's Response:

Thank you:) I did, too!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 11 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

i hope that's just not something about Alex and his allergy.  I am not sure they could ever get over the guilt of that hanging over their first time together!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I think I hear Esme,  Carlisle and Charlie gloating in the waiting room about the "I love yous".    



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 21 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

They've established themselves as a family, shouldn't they be thinking of making it legal?  If for no other reason than emergencies like this one!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

She really did cut herself off after Brody's death.  She is truly living again by letting people back in.



Author's Response:

Yes, she really did:)

Summary: Past Featured Story

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banner by lvtwight09

 

When Bella was three, she was found abandonned outside of a hospital in LA. She was placed with Carlisle, Esme, and their twin boys, Emmett and Jasper. What happens when they move to Forks? NC-17&AH Cannon pairing.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, I Whitlock's read , Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future , to read
Chapters: 60 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 186533 Read Count: 268908
[Report This] Published: 11 Nov 2010 Updated: 03 Sep 2014
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

This is going to be hard on all members of both families.  The Swans were robbed of 14 years with their daughter, but the Cullens are not at fault yet their family will be torn apart too.  And don't think we hav forgotten those words Esme told Bella that first night!  She'd hold her until they found her Mom and Dad.  Seventeen is hard enough trying to figure out who you are without the added difficulty of belonging to 2 families but not knowing one of them at all. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review. Yes, it's hard enough being a teenager and it's going to be....difficult for everyone.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I have tears in my eyes because their lives just changed permanently without any input from them.



Author's Response:

Yep, regardless of what the tests say the moment they were treated like that, they were changed:(

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 18 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

They should Google the Swans to get their story on Isabella Swan.  SOMEONE should be curious as to the other side of the story!



Author's Response:

They will find out more in the next chapter.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

It seems that Bella is acting out of fear right now.  Everything as she knows it has changed and she is afraid the family she has known for 14 yrs will disappear just like the Swans did when she was 3.  I am really hoping some compassion will be found in her heart soon for the Swans.  Angela seems to need as much help as Bella with the whole situation.  She's self-destructive to begin with, this could send her over the edge.



Author's Response:

She is acting out of fear.You are right there:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 20 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I am sure Renee and Charlie would hit re-do on how they handled this if they had foresight into what would happen.  They acted rashly and now they will have that resentment to overcome as well as 14 yrs of bitterness.  Regret weighs you down like a boulder, they just keep heaping more on themselves and I feel terribly sorry for them.  At the same time, the Cullens have NOTHING to be treated this way so it is worse because they had no control over this situation.  I wonder if the school would let them hold an assembly to clear it up!  IT's better than letting these people speculate and ruin reputations needlessly.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 20 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I'M tired just reading about it.  I would want to pull a Rip Van Winkle and fall asleep for a few decades until it all blew over.  Exhausting.  But I loved Bella telling Angela off.  Angela has such a chip on her shoulder, though I am thinking she probably spoke the exact opposite of what she actually was feeling deep down.  That just seems like her at this point!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 21 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

This would be a nightmare trying to juggle everyone's feelings along with your own. 



Author's Response:

Wouldn't it?

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

It felt like it was building to something big.  Was Edward really the only one who felt that?  Didn't any of the others see what they were pushing her to?  I hope Edward has fast reflexes and can get her!



Author's Response:

I don't think they wanted to see it.

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

OH, that is so sad.  At least she has him.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 26 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Wow, Carlisle got pretty harsh there, glad they resolved it peacefully.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 29 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I swear if every girl had an Edward Masen of her very own we would have a well-adjusted society!



Author's Response:

Wouldn't we? Thanks:)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

What a mess and the final line tore at my heart.



Author's Response:

Mine too!!

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 22 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Family therapy with both families!  Ben is quite the dark soul there, I see why he sticks with Angela now.



Author's Response:

Yeah, he's your typical Ben ;)

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 06 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

I am glad that Edward is not going with, they are headed to a co-dependant relationship.  I am thinking Emmett's fear is manifesting as anger and he has misplaced it onto Edward.  That's the only way I can make sense of it!



Author's Response:

You are understanding  very well, then:) Yes, Bella and Edward are co-dependant on each other and that is why he didn't go with her.



Author's Response:

You are understanding  very well, then:) Yes, Bella and Edward are co-dependant on each other and that is why he didn't go with her.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Banner by the lovely Madam Akyria

 

 

Five years following the events in New Moon, the Cullens are living in New Hampshire and Edward is finally getting married.  During a wild night out on the town, some of the Cullens run into a happy, more confident Bella.

Jasper/Bella Pairing.  Humor/Romance.  AU/OOC.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 63 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 532667 Read Count: 144958
[Report This] Published: 26 Nov 2010 Updated: 10 Sep 2011
Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 17 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

I am not trusting where Esem could take her resentment of Bella nad Rose.  If Maria got hold of Esme she would have a lot more info on this huge clan.



Author's Response:

Esme is not in her right mind right now.  Her delusions will come to a crescendo in a couple of chapters.  XOXO

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 07 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I can not breathe I am laughing so hard at :

"I've had a spermal expulsion in my pants and I have to go clean up." I announced to the horrified faces of the wedding guests.

 

"I'll help." Emmett said brightly as we both high-tailed it out of the ballroom.

I can only imagine the faces!



Author's Response:

Emmett couldn't come up with a good excuse to leave the wedding so he just latched onto Peter's awful one.  Gotta love them, though.  XOXO

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 13 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

I think Peter's survival must depend on a choice Char will make.  They seem to hav quite the army themselves!



Author's Response:

They do have quite the army.  Let's see what Maria comes up with.  XOXO

Reviewer: avidreader69 Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I feel like I can smell the mothballs and Lysol!  YUCK.  I love the line about Edward living in a stinky home!



Author's Response:

Ah, well, a vampire is always attracted to his mate's scent.  That's true even for Edward and Amanda.  Thanks for your review. XOXO