Date: 19 Mar 2016 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 20
OMGosh! That is perfect. Did not see that ending coming. Awesome job with t g email whole story. Sorry it has taken me so long to finish reading it.
Date: 19 Mar 2016 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 19
OMGosh! Poor Bella.
Date: 18 Mar 2016 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 18
I just realized that I never finishedreading this story.
Date: 23 Jan 2014 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 20
he must have turned her since she was dying
Date: 23 Jan 2014 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 19
serves edward right
Date: 23 Jan 2014 3:53 AM Title: Chapter 18
about time he called a doctor for bella
Date: 23 Jan 2014 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 17
ofcourse she would get sick
Date: 22 Jan 2014 8:49 AM Title: Chapter 16
edward doesnt pay attention
Date: 22 Jan 2014 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 14
stockholmes syndrome setting in?
Date: 22 Jan 2014 7:09 AM Title: Chapter 13
she deserves a bath
Date: 22 Jan 2014 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 12
she has left her body due to repeated rape
Date: 22 Jan 2014 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 11
emmet had good timing
Date: 22 Jan 2014 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 10
her back must hurt
Date: 22 Jan 2014 6:42 AM Title: Chapter 9
you cant abuse your toys without fixing them
Date: 22 Jan 2014 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 7
doubting his badness
Date: 22 Jan 2014 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 6
he is falling for his captive
Date: 22 Jan 2014 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 5
bella the prisoner
Date: 22 Jan 2014 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 4
dont disobey edward
Date: 22 Jan 2014 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 2
nursing his food back to health
Date: 22 Jan 2014 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
knight in shining armor with alterior motives
Date: 21 May 2013 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 20
Wait, what???? Soooo sneaky. I love it! Bella and Edward are restored. The universe is exactly as it should be. Whew!
Date: 05 Feb 2013 3:05 AM Title: Chapter 20
Did not see that coming at all! LOL. Very nice twist to a very enjoyable read. Glad I found it. Thanks
Date: 21 Oct 2012 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 20
The last chapter did make me cry! :'( anyway..you wrote it well..thank you !!!
..xx Ashley
Date: 21 Oct 2012 9:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
The very first chapter is extremely awesome. It makes me want to read more. =') thanks
...xx Ashley
Date: 28 Aug 2012 6:16 AM Title: Chapter 20
You have restored my faith in Edward and Bella! I'm just really glad it turned out to be a story she was writing and was all made up! I really hated the way the vampire treated his poor abused captive! Guess I'm just a wuss!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 19
Maybe Edward didn't cause a tumor to grow in Bella's brain, but I'll bet the stress of being his captive sex slave did her no good!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 18
Thank God, she finally got sick enough he was forced to call in Carlisle!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 5:45 AM Title: Chapter 17
I think he's still a self-centered, selfish asshole, that's what I think! If he really had a care for Bella, he would listen to what she's saying, instead of making it up in his head!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 16
Hey, Edward! Pay attention to what you just read! This is a wonderful girl you are slowly prssing the life out of!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 15
I'm starting to think Emmett ought to just rip his head off and make him wait to put it back on. Maybe that would get him to evaluate this awful thing he's doing to Bella, taking away her every freedom.
Date: 28 Aug 2012 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 14
Edward definitely needs to watch that dvd again and again. He also needs to listen to Alice before he kills the one thing he wants. He really needs to change his ways of thinking about his treatment of this poor subjugated, trapped creature he claims is his.
Date: 28 Aug 2012 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 13
I'm wondering how Edward would like to be treated exactly the same way he treats Bella? Somehow don't think he would care to be in her position!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 12
Poor Bella, she's found a way to escape into her mind, just to get away from him. She better be careful not to lose the way back!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 11
I'm kind of glad Emmett came by and raised hell with Edward. At least he tried to make him do the right thing. I'm really glad he got rid of that damn whip!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 4:09 AM Title: Chapter 10
Dare one hope Edward is beginning to feel just a little shame for the way he has treated Bella? And, who's at the front door?
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 9
May I just say it's about damn time? I hope Freudward keeps bugging hell out of him!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 8
This is not going well for Bella and I'm starting to really dislike Edward. He's what Bella has called him, and I don't blame her one damn bit for telling him so!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 7
And so it begins, Bella is doing the unexpected and it confuses Edward. He has just forgotten what it's like to be human I imagine. Maybe having Bella aound will remind him, who knows?
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 6
Watch out, Edward, I see a bit of feeling creeping into your cold, dead heart! This little girl may be changing your way of thinking!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 5
Do I detect a tiny change in the way Edward is thinking about Bella? Maybe, maybe not. We'll see, I guess.
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 4
Still not liking Edward very much, but at least he's keeping Bella alive, for now.
Date: 28 Aug 2012 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 3
Thanks for the note about not liking to write a rape scene. It's not much fun enduring one, either. I do see why you did this, so far Edward is a selfish bastard, and being a vampire, could so easily have killed Bella. I'll hang in here and see where this goes.
Date: 28 Aug 2012 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 2
Edward finds himself reluctantly drawn to this human girl and can't quite figure out why. It will be very interesting to see if he can figure it out!
Date: 28 Aug 2012 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great, out of the frying pan and into the fire! Rescued from one nightmare and on to who knows what?
Date: 26 Jul 2012 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 20
The rougher the story got, the harder it was to read. I was hoping for a different ending, but I see where you were going.
The twist didn't add or change anything for me. I still felt bad for the situation and how it ended up.
Good writing though.
Date: 26 Jul 2012 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 5
Great citrus. You are a great writer.
Date: 26 Jul 2012 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 2
I finally found out how to post on this site. I needed to turn off the "use tunyMCE" button.
This is a great opening. It really brings me in. I can't wait to read more.
Date: 05 Jan 2012 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 20
Lovely story ... didn't expect that plot twist at the end though!
Date: 30 Oct 2011 6:58 AM Title: Chapter 20
That was friggin AWESOME... :))
Date: 22 Sep 2011 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 3
oh boy,... not sure i am staying with you
Date: 22 Sep 2011 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 2
intresting.. lets see what happens
Date: 14 Sep 2011 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 20
I loved the way to you made this Horror story into just that, a horror story. I think that it was ingenious for it to be a novel that Bella was writing insead of it being true. It was a twist that I never expected, and I was not disappionted in the eng.
Thank you for finishing the story.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad you liked my story. :)
Date: 13 Sep 2011 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 20
Whoa. I never saw that endig coming. I really thought he would change her in the hopes that the venom would wipe out all her memories.
This has been a very angsty but great story. ;)
Author's Response:
I'm really happy that you enjoyed my story. I toyed with many endings, including the one you described before I decided on the one I used. I had it planned for awhile. Thanks for reading & reviewing.
Date: 13 Sep 2011 4:12 AM Title: Chapter 20
I thought it was an interesting ending. I figured he would turn her and he would spend years making it up to her and then they'd fall in love. I do like what you did with it, though. It makes all the Edward lovers out there feel better to know that it wasn't actually him. I don't think you should hide because I really enjoyed it. THank you for sharing this story with us. And I'm so glad you finished it. I thought for a while that you weren't going to. Thanks again, ti was a beautiful story.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind review. I'm really glad that you enjoyed my story.
Date: 13 Sep 2011 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 20
LOL...great ending
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 20
I LOVED IT!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you. Your comment makes me feel better.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 20
You ended it just beautifully.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your kind review. I'm glad you liked the ending.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 20
The fact that this entire story was fiction written by Bella was friggen brilliant. You pulled what Stephanie Meyers wanted to do with the original version of New Moon, making it all a dream instead of reality. It's good to know that the real Edward wasn't anything like the monster in that story who would spend the rest of his days alone with the memories of how he tortured the only person he had ever loved. It's sad, but I'm also glad that they weren't real individuals.
Great job! Thank you for finishing this story and truly enjoyed it.
Author's Response:
Your review has made my day. Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 5:56 PM Title: Chapter 20
...Sigh.... I really enjoyed reading this however although I found the ending to be abrupt.. the last chapter moved at warp speed, and then i find at the end of the chapter that it is over. ***weeps a little*** well it was a good read!
~Iv
Author's Response:
I'm really happy that you enjoyed my story. I didn't intend for the last chapter to seem rushed; I just felt that it was the right time to end it. Thank you for your review!
Date: 12 Sep 2011 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 20
I liked the ending! It was a curveball, but because you went from OOC Edward and Bella to canon Edward and Bella, it wasn't a jarring change; after all, these are the versions we are most familiar with! Thanks for sharing. I like that she's gonna change the names to Victoria and James: Karma's a bitch to those who are bitchy!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review! I'm really glad you liked my story.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 3:11 PM Title: Chapter 20
Thats an intersting way to end this story. I for sure thought this was a crazed edward. Good job....
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 9
Oh, yeah! Edward is so going down! His schizophrenic snark is impossible for me to resist! Shoot, all he needs now is a box of crayons! ;-D
Date: 12 Sep 2011 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 7
Okay, okay. I get he's really evil -- but not irredeemable. But still, I can't help but LOVE his inner dialogue! *snicker*
Thanks for writing!
Date: 12 Sep 2011 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 20
Aww... HEA, am glad, did not like that Edward...nasty piece of work.
Author's Response:
I'm so happy that you liked the ending. Edward was definitely an S.O.B. in this story .... at least the vampire was. Thanks for reviewing.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 20
I loved it. That Vampward got his humanity back at the end and let her go. Bella's delusions of a happier life with Edward were heartbreakingly beautiful.
I found the end bit about Edward reading the book a bit confusing though.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked the ending, and I'm sorry if it seemed a bit confusing. Thanks for your review.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 20
This was just weird and confusing
I liked the story you had going - it was a strange loop for her to suddenly have cancer and then have a story in a story - a complete flip
I dont think I hate it but --- Im not sure I really like it either --- I will have to marinate on that thougth I think.
Not trying to hate on your story AT ALL!!! Just trying to give you the feedback you asked for.
I was actually kinda hoping that Bella could have changed and sofened him up so that the could have a HEA --- but I also know that not all authors like to write those ALL the time.
TTFN
Author's Response:
I appreciate your review, and I take no offense to your critique. Thank you.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 7:37 AM Title: Chapter 20
ahaaaaa!!!! okay!*sigh*
soooo i've read all these chapters and now to see that was a book?!! wow!!!
anyway i love it was great to read;)
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked reading the story. I appreciate your review.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 20
You know I like your story. I like at the end you have our E&B together. It was her story to tell.
good job
Author's Response:
I'm so glad that you liked my story and the ending. I really appreciate your comment. Thank you.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 4:50 AM Title: Chapter 20
Very very sneaky...also very very cool !
Author's Response:
Thanks!! I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 20
I really liked the ending of this story.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked the ending. It makes me feel better to know that some people liked it. Thank you for reviewing.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 20
The ending was very unexpected. It was really good and well thought out. It must be difficult to get the ending of a story just right. The story was worth the wait. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Your kind words mean a lot to me. I'm really happy that you liked the ending. Thanks for reading & reviewing and of course, being patient with my slow updates. I've been ill, and I'm glad that some people understand that. Thanks again!
Date: 12 Sep 2011 3:02 AM Title: Chapter 20
Wow! I was completely surprised by the ending! Great job. Thanks for the story!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading my story. I'm glad you liked the ending.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 20
awesome ending..thank god it wasnt real and i like the ending you gave bella
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I'm glad you liked the ending and the story.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 20
Surprise!I loved finish.Great story.Sorry,i am brazilian,my english is really bad.Thanks.
Author's Response:
Your English was perfect. I'm so happy that you liked the ending. Thanks for taking the time to review.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 20
Please don't hide. Jump out into the sun and sparkle for us. Lord knows, this story shone brighter than most of the tripe that passes itself off as Darkward. I'm very happy with the ending. It was HEA for both Bellas.
Finding humanity in every day events is a task that 9/11 challenges us with. Believe it or not, IE has kind of inspired me to look harder in the eyes of our enemies and find their souls.
Thank you.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Your review has made my day ... week ... month!! I've had mixed reviews for that last chapter, although most have been positive. I felt that it was right for Edward to show at least one final act of humanity to Bella. I also had planned the ending for awhile ... both the vampire part and the human part. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 20
i like that it was a story that she was writing, because it was hard to read Edward being like that to Bella.
Author's Response:
I agree, and that's why I planned the ending the way I did. Thanks for reading & reviewing.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 20
awe, you don't need a hidey hole from me. It was a fun twist that was very original with a HEA to boot;D)
I would like an outtake where Edward takes over writing the end & keeps her alive/changes her & what that outcome might be like, from your point of view.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked the ending! Thanks for reading & reviewing my story. I may do an outtake or an alternate ending, but I haven't decided on that yet. Thanks again!
Date: 12 Sep 2011 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 20
I thought the ending was very rushed. You disappear for so long and then you come back. Suddenly, Bella has cancer, and then we find out it was fiction the whole time. Reminds me quite a bit of my grade 2 writing experience. I've come to a dead end...'Oh, it was just a dream.' TBH, I was not impressed. I was expecting your characters to develop more. All I got was Edward was an arrogant twit and Bella was the damsel in distress. There was no definite ending, too. I would have been happy with you letting Bella die. Big mushy ending and all. Seems complete, you know? But you didn't even get there. Just taking the easy way out, eh?
Author's Response:
I'm sorry that you feel that way. This is the way my story was planned, and I never expected everyone to be happy. I know I can please some people but not everyone. I appreciate all reviews, yours included.
Date: 12 Sep 2011 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 20
..... You.... you... what...... you... @_@ I... omg... Honestly it just sounds like you wanted it done and over with.. I mean you don't update for so long and then when you do.. BOOM it's over.. I feel like you're messing with us? Like.. rofl you just cut off the whole story and that's that.. I hope my opinion doesn't like idk upset you or anything.. I was trying to be.. cool -_- lol This chapter seriously just f***ed with your entire audience haha I bet some people are all "WTF D:" and others are probably all chill like "Oh haha, you got us" .. This chapter just sounds like you giving up.. I don't think you planned this from the start, I think you found yourself in a situation where you couldn't go on with the story for whatever reason and you just gave up with it...
Author's Response:
I actually had the ending planned for awhile. I wasn't giving up, I just thought it was the right time to end. I appreciate your comments though, and I'm not upset. I'm always happy to hear what my readers think ... good or bad.
Date: 11 Sep 2011 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 20
OMG Was SOOOOOOOO not expecting that ending. You are a genius. Guessing till the end.
Author's Response:
I can't tell you how happy I am that you liked the ending. Thank you so much for reading & reviewing.
Date: 11 Sep 2011 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 20
feel sad that e let her die, maybe you could do an alternate ending where he does change her.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am thinking about doing an alternate ending or an outtake.
Date: 11 Sep 2011 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 20
thanks good story
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad you liked the story. I appreciate you reading and reviewing.
Date: 11 Sep 2011 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 20
Loved the story!!! Thanks for writing it :)
Author's Response:
I'm thrilled that you were happy with my story. Thanks for reading & reviewing.
Date: 11 Sep 2011 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 20
Although I admit your ending was a huge surprise, it was the ONLY way this story could have any hope for a HEA. No other possible scenarios had any credibility. Bravo! Good writing.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked the ending, and whole story as well. Your review means a lot to me. Thank you!
Date: 11 Sep 2011 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 20
honestly i feel a bit disappointed. i loved your writing but i kinda wanted selfishward to change b and then she remember and kick his vamp but before all the lovey dovey...you know kinda bella turn him into her whipping boy. turn about is fair play and all
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review. I went over many different scenarios before I decided on the ending that I did. I understand how you feel. I may do an alternate ending at a later date. Thanks again!
Date: 10 Sep 2011 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 19
I can't wait, thanks for writing;D)
Date: 09 Sep 2011 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 3
I started reading this story once before and so glad I found it again. I love it from EBOV. Its dark and humourous.
Date: 09 Sep 2011 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 2
Interesting start...
Date: 09 Sep 2011 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 19
I'm guessing he changes her.
Date: 09 Sep 2011 9:47 AM Title: Chapter 19
I hope you will update again soon. Will she die or be a vampire and kick his butt? I am not sure which would be better.
Date: 09 Sep 2011 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 6
oh so he's not gonna be darkward the whole story?!?!?!
Date: 09 Sep 2011 3:57 AM Title: Chapter 5
lol he's such a sociopath
Date: 09 Sep 2011 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 4
Um i am lovin Dardward!
Date: 09 Sep 2011 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 1
very nice start
Date: 08 Sep 2011 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 19
Well he will have to change her or bury her. I bet he wants to change her. Well no he might drain her and cut his losses.
He would be lucky if she lost her memory and forgot this abuse after the change. LUCKY