Date: 18 Jan 2013 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
This was such a sweet chapter. It was a modern check yes or no on a note from juniior high. I can't wait until Bella sees Alice in lunch. Alice is going to freak out.
[Report This]Date: 18 Jan 2013 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 49: An Open Book
I loved this chapter. Edward is too cute.
Date: 14 Jan 2013 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
Aww!! That's soo sweet! Loved the chapter and happy belated anniversary!
Date: 13 Jan 2013 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
LOVE this story.......please update again soon. :-)
Date: 13 Jan 2013 7:56 AM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
Aww happy anniversary. So edward sorta asked bella to be his girlfriend...icant wait for their pizza date
Date: 13 Jan 2013 6:11 AM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
The chapter was great. I loved their text exchange during her free period.
As to your personal experience, SQEEEE! Congrats on 27 years.
Date: 13 Jan 2013 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
That was the cutes chapter
[Report This]Date: 12 Jan 2013 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 50: Shades of Pink
So sweet
Date: 09 Jan 2013 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 49: An Open Book
Just began this story yesterday and couldn't stop. I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm looking forward to Edwards confession about knowing about her story. Hopefully it's not a huge blow out.
Date: 09 Jan 2013 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 49: An Open Book
He is so much like a school boy that just found out the girl likes him he is so cute
Date: 08 Jan 2013 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 49: An Open Book
Copy of my review from FFn:
Haha Hypieward was fun... and quite like me when the fanfiction sites are being stupid and annoying;P
Edwards thoughts to Bellas 'fact-fiction'... I loved it... but wondered why she didn't mention the reason for 'the predator'-namecalling... the aftershave and cologne.
And I completely understand his frustration with the end of the chapter;P I want mooooooore;P
As always I FLOVE this story and I can't wait to read what happens next:D
Date: 08 Jan 2013 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
Copy of my review from FFn:
Lauren really is a bitch... a classic high school I'm-all-important-and-better-than-you bitch
And some introductions... Emmett by mail, and Bella and Angela's first meeting:D
And Edward and Bella have actually meet before:D I wonder when they'll realise that... maybe he'll see the sweatshirt?
The guys 'mindreading'... so much fun
I FLOVED it... like always:D
Date: 08 Jan 2013 8:56 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
That was cool it is funny how life intertwines
Date: 06 Jan 2013 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 49: An Open Book
Edward better tell her hes reading the story and that he too wants to write their story together romanticly before angela tells bella and bella feels violated
Date: 06 Jan 2013 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 49: An Open Book
Loved it!
[Report This]Date: 04 Jan 2013 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 17: True Confessions of Stealth Transgressions
I tend to review at the end of a story, but I couldn't stop myself! I almost choked on my sweet laughing my bloody head off at this chapter. I absolutely love it. x
Date: 03 Jan 2013 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
This was a very sweet chapter. Do they ever figure it out?
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2012 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
-squealling-like-Alice-
AAAAAHH!!! THEY HAD MET BEFORE!!! AND SHE STILL HAD THE SWEATSHIRT! (that's soooo sweet!) I always wondered where she had gotten it and why they hadn't met before, if they lived so close to one another. They must have changed a lot to not recognized each other....
Regarding Lauren and her stun: What a bitch! She deserve the worst, please tell me something happened to her after the BS she pulled with Edward, you know karma being a bitch and everything... ;D
James: Poor guy!! No wonder he's scared of Alice to this day XD
Sorry I hadn't posted comment until now, it just that I'm in a break now and since is not a long one, I wanted to devored the whole thing before leaving one. So here I go
the barbecue: Was funny as hell! And so much drama! I love it. I could totally see poor Edward choking with all the info overload that he got in that chapter. And the several "WHAT?'s" from different people? Those were hilarious! lol
the playlists: AMAZING, love the songs! Clever idea you had there. Buttons one of my favorites. And the way that the girl show them up, PRICELESS!
The dream: I cannot help but wonder if it would become real. He got the plaid blanket, the girl and the picnic basket (side note: My God! Seriously? $200 for a basket? Almost had stroke when I read that! I could totally relate with Bella on that. Crazy lol)
Moving on
the breakfast: See what I'm talking about karma? Edward got bitten in the ass... and hard. Who would had thought that he was going to find Irina and Tanya in that place...in a date with Bella no less. Thank God Bella knew about his past and had seen his change. That made me think in a saying that we have here where I live, "Lo que no fue en tu año, no fue tu daño" It translate to something close to:'what was not in your year, was not your damage' and that's what Bella demonstrated in that chapter. Even though it mustn't have been a easy task.
All in all, I'm really glad that I found your stories. Specially this one. It had made me laugh so hard. You're a fantastic writer, keep it up.
My God! I've never written a comment this long! I'll end my rant with one last thing...
HAPPY NEW YEAR!! :)
Date: 30 Dec 2012 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
I liked the flash back and tieing them together like that was cute. Good job :)
Date: 29 Dec 2012 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
Fun chapter....ready for more sweatshirt info..... Lol
Date: 29 Dec 2012 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
... the sweatshirt?!... nice tie in there.. i see what you did, and i must say i approve! good on you!!
Date: 29 Dec 2012 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
So they met in the past...wonder if they realize it now?
[Report This]Date: 29 Dec 2012 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 48: Blockbusters, High School Grads and Sophomore Girls
ooooohhhhhhhhh will bella ever wear the sweater that edward gave her and if she does will edward recognize it??????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 18 Dec 2012 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
I cant wait
Date: 15 Dec 2012 10:56 AM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
Copy of my review from fanfiction.net:
Oh Alice is one insightfull (spelled?) girl... She gives some good advise. I loved her and Edwards bonding time together.
And you've given her the perfect Jasper... clouthe and accessories as souveniers... absolutely perfect
I want an Edward... he is so cute, bringing Bella lunch and inviting her to dinner... I wonder if he wants to reveal his fic-knowledge during the dinner... Can she put herself in his head to understand his motivation, as she wrote in her PM? hmmm I hope so
As I've written sooo many times before, but it don't make it any less true... I FLOVE this story
Date: 15 Dec 2012 10:21 AM Title: Chapter 46: Interested Parties
Copy of my review from fanfiction.net:
Oh I soooooo FLOVE this story...
Seriously... these guys are so cute... I love a good fluffy story with minimal angst. I hope the whole reveling of fic-knowledge to Bella will go smoothly.
Angela catching Edward and Bella... absolutely classic... I laughed... a lot... my dog left the room... again;P
Ohhh and they're telling their story to Angela and Alice. Alice's reaction to what was real in the fic hahaha so funny:D
Good thing I'm behind on my ficreading, because i really wouldn't be able to wait for another chapter;P
Date: 15 Dec 2012 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
Copy of my review from fanfiction.net:
Seriously... How do you do it... Get all these little things into the story that just seem to fit perfectly... the songs (all of them), the name of the shop, the picnic... I don't know how you do it (or how you remember it all)
They really are cute together... all the little gestures... the small ones... the handholding, the innuendos ect... so cute
I loved all of Edwards nicknames for Dark-haired Dude... So jealous, So Edwardish haha
And they're getting to know each other... FLOVED it:D
Oh nooo the story can't end... what will I do without it
I love this story... I think you know that by now, but I wanted to say it anyway;D
So my first review without using google translate even once... I'm quite proud of myself:D weeeee
Date: 15 Dec 2012 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
Copy of my review from fanfiction.net:
Awwwww they are so cute together:D
I know... I've been absent... apparently FF failed to sent an E-mail about this chapter... or my Email account just sucks. But on the plus side now I have 2 chapters to read :D Weeeeeeee
I LOL'ed so much during their internal dialogs, so much fun being inside their heads.
And Tanya and Irina's petnames for each other... I couldn't ever pronounce those haha
I wonder when Angela will end up living with Ben... soon I hope
And from the playlist I have a feeling that the date is fare from over. Weeeee me likes
Another great chapter. Thank you for brightening my day. I absolutely adore this story
Date: 15 Dec 2012 10:10 AM Title: Chapter 43: A Date With Fate
Copy of my review from fanfiction.net:
Well... I loved it... like always;P
The dream sequence... really cute, turning hot, but alas... no wonder Edward is having these fantasies, dreams etc. He must be getting blue balls right about now, at least if my idea of BB-Edward (Before Bella) is correct (I'm thinking a straight version, maybe not quite as active but close, Brian Kinney(Queer as Folk)Yes I've just watched the show for the first time this week, but my mind may be a little clouded right now because I just finished watching the last episode;P)
I haven't heard the songs mentioned in this chapter, but I liked the innuendo of the titles vs. Edwards dreams (I hope that makes sense). I'll have to check out the songs later;P
So they got a little background story on each other... I wonder if Edward is comparing Bellas story with the background story in 'From Hate to Heat'.
Bellas conversation with her mom was hilarious. I laughed so hard my dog left the sofa... she doesn't like it when I laugh to loud LOL
And I'm a little embarrassed to say that I can't remember if Bella has meet either of the russian sisters... but from the last line in this chapter I would say, yes... but when, and which chapter... I really don't remember... maybe I need to reread the rest of the story... hmmmm
I can't wait to read the next chapter to what happens now... Is Edward or Bella going to freak out, if anyone is, I think it will be Edward, because he don't want Bella to meet something from his 'past'. But I'll just have to try to wait patiently like everyone else;P
Date: 15 Dec 2012 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 42: A Wingman, A Wingwoman, and Little Wing
Copy of my review from Fanfiction.net:
Well surprise 10 points the reviewpoint now... I must be a fan;P
I hope Ange gets a job at Stellar Publishing House... her and Bella are so cute together.
And I totally get Bellas need to text instead of calling... I have a drawer full of old phones that I can't get rid of because there are text-conversations that I don't want to lose:S LOL I know... I'm wierd.
I love how eager Edward is to see Bella again... he's so cute
I can't wait to see Edwards reply to bellybeans message... maybe he will end up revealing himself by showing her a reply that he didn't send to her through the fictionnetwork? Or will he just tell her without revealing to her that he is STARDUSTED.
I absolutely FLOVE this story, and I can't wait to read the next chapter... weeee breakfast-date;P
[Report This]Date: 13 Dec 2012 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 28: A Review Reply from Starlighted.net
EC re-read this a million times didn't he?!
[Report This]Date: 13 Dec 2012 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 27: Illuminating Events
Jaw on the floor. His momma, his momma knows! out of all the people in world. His momma! ahh!
[Report This]Date: 13 Dec 2012 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 26: Discussion and Dissection
EC Reader would have given him away to easily I think. This is such a fun stroy to read. I'm so excited my bestie told me to ready you fan-fiction! You're way better than the other I previewed. They were just knock-off of 50 Shades splattered with Twilight. But yor wriiting makes a whole new read. I love it!
RCCR
[Report This]Date: 11 Dec 2012 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
Edward and Bella are so cute. From your discription, Edward was just dashing in his work clothes. He may be hot for teacher, but the teacher is equally hot for the business man.
Date: 11 Dec 2012 6:03 AM Title: Chapter 46: Interested Parties
Speaking of telling or confessing, that probably won't go over very well w/Bella. EVERYONE knows her secret, that's not fair.
Date: 11 Dec 2012 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
And..... you end it there. Not fair.
Thanks for the update.
Date: 10 Dec 2012 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
I hope bella takes edward being stardusted as a good thing
[Report This]Date: 10 Dec 2012 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
Aaaawww... So sweet but the suspense is killing me....what else are we going to need for the big discussion??? You gotta let me know in advance so I can put it in my emergency tote!!!! Lol
Date: 09 Dec 2012 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
What an amazing chapter. They are so real. The dialogue is heart-felt and hilarious. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2012 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
Way to leave me on tenterhooks waiting for Chapter 2 of FH2H. I am soooo loving your story and find it impossible to wait for each new update. I love the way you are portaying all of my favourite characters. Your humour is addictive.
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2012 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 47: Ed and the Real Girl
Hi Bannerday!
Firstly; I'm "popping my review-cherry" for you! lol. ;>
For some reason i have never left a review (and i have been reading fanfiction for, like, 4 years...) but i just had to write one for you.
Secondly: I FREAKING LOVE THIS STORY!!!!! :D It's amazing! I have laughed so hard that i have cried, lost my breath, had a coughing fit, spit food across my diningroom table and sprayed juice from my nose... i need to invest in my very own FF-SG-SG-Emergency-Protection-Kit ;)
I drop everything when this story is updated and I can't wait too read the rest!
Lots Of Love!
XOXO
MatildaElizabeth
Date: 08 Dec 2012 3:21 PM Title: Chapter 46: Interested Parties
I love the hell oohing her kitty line... Cutest reference ever! Then we have the newest version of Bonnie and Clyde.. Dick and kitty!.. Where do u come up with this. Wait! Don't tell me.. Since it will only go down.. From here haha! I'll be waiting for the next update.. Ciao!!
[Report This]Date: 30 Nov 2012 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 15: In the Dark About So Much
She's on the floor!!!
[Report This]Date: 30 Nov 2012 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 14: Puzzling Pieces
I Knew Alice was his sister! I love all the new characters! the story is developing well.
I'll keep reading!
[Report This]Date: 29 Nov 2012 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 9: Perceptiions and Misperceptions
Bella is good. i would have been all over that condo in a plastic cap, rubber gloves and homemade booties on my shoes. OOOO wweeee I would have snooped and snooped good!
I'll keep reading.
[Report This]Date: 29 Nov 2012 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 8: Departures
Why is she so angry? She needs a hug and a pocket full of skittles. That girl is wow! She is starting to annoy me. Did she really just get jealous of a phone call? She doens't even know who Kate is. grrrr I'll keep reading.
[Report This]Date: 29 Nov 2012 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 4: Mr. Silk Pants a.k.a. Mr. Big Stuff
Hiya,
I liked all the charachter development in this chapter. My only *pause question face* momnet was Bella refrencing "Icky-Vicky". I thought that conversation was inside of Edwin-Edgar-Edmund-Edwards head. Or did he say it out loud? hmmm I'll keep reading.
Date: 28 Nov 2012 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life
OK so that made me laugh out loud at work and I couldn't as well explain to my boss "She put her hat on his dick!".... no matter how cool my boss it. thansk for that!
[Report This]Date: 27 Nov 2012 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
Edward did a great job with the picnic basket. I love mine. It makes a simple date very romantic. It was a good move to charm a simple girl like Bella. I am glad it is heating up a little between these two. They are both about to combust with frustration.
Date: 26 Nov 2012 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
Ok - I have only just found this story (yesterday) And I have not been able to stop long enough to reveiw --- LOVE LOVE LOVE!!! I am laughing out loud - on the edge of my seat - wondering how much more trouble these characters will find themselves in. I saw early on which reviews were Emmets and Esmes' - And I suspected Jessica but Alice threw me for a loop --- I also TOTALY LOVE the playlist idea - I am a music teacher so for that alone I love the idea of it - but this is the first time I have actually pulled up each song as it appeared in a story and read to the song - so much more fun
Now I am axious to see how it all plays out them finding out each others little secrets. I also keep bracing myself for James to be a bad guy - is he a good guy in your stories? Seems to be ok they way you have written him so far
OK enough writting - I only have a few more hours vacation and I have to finish reading what you have written (I must say that you writing this way - fanfic writer within a fan fic - it has encouraged me to reply to more of the stories I read - I am usually following so many on the run (on my phone) that I dont have time but I see how it is encoruaging the writer so I am trying harder) :)
TTFN
Zamar22
Date: 25 Nov 2012 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
LOVE IT!!
Date: 25 Nov 2012 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
Love Love Love it!! Can't wait for more!!
[Report This]Date: 24 Nov 2012 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
wow!
[Report This]Date: 24 Nov 2012 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
wow!
Date: 24 Nov 2012 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 20: Coincidences...and Plan B
I have to say. I just found your story and started to read it. I LOVE the banter back and forth. I love the sarcastic comments. (maybe because I am a very sarcastic person myself) I love the play on the book characters and the 50 shades book characters, and the Domward parts. I am hoping to finish tonight. I might be up late reading as my real life is about to factor in with my 2 year old and 10 month old twins waking up from nap time. I just wanted to go ahead and review. I will let you know what I think when I catch up to where you have gotten so far. (I can't wait) :D
Date: 24 Nov 2012 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 33: Conversation Pieces
Oh no! I want more!!! I thought there were more chappies. I am soooo stuck on your fic. Laughing my ass off! Thanks for the warnings. I havent ruined any electronics yet, LOL! THANKS FOR WRITING.
Date: 24 Nov 2012 7:48 AM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
He is possesive over her and she likes it. It was fun for them having fun and the mauling is a good thing :)
Date: 24 Nov 2012 5:04 AM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
I loved it!
Date: 23 Nov 2012 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
Dang.....it stopped there! Oh well.....went eager picnics to get through I'msure.
Date: 23 Nov 2012 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
I loved it. They are so cute together
Date: 23 Nov 2012 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
Love it, i cant wait for the lemon
Date: 23 Nov 2012 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 45: A Feeling of Lightness
I am sure this reveiw will sound contradicting but......in your author note I must say, I was extremely dissapointed. I mean we have followed you so long and we wait, here it is 45 chapters and still no lemon and they haven't even kissed and you are telling ut is going to be over soon?????? Yeah not what I was expecting at all.
As for the story, I have really enjoyed it and it has been very funny and entertaining.
However there is one thing that just really infuriates me about authors is that they drag the story out til the end and when we finally get what we were hoping for, the author just up and ends it.
Author's Response:
Hi LuvRPatz4ever
I'm sorry you are feeling let down. I can only write the story that I imagine would be logical. Edward started out as a rather unfeeling Manwhore with something in his backstory that has made the way he is. We'll find out what that was. And Bella, meanwhile, is a somewhat shy and bookish virgin without much self-confidence when it comes to men. I felt like I had to get them closer together first through a series of trials. Edward is falling in love for the first time in his life, as is Bella. They started out quite badly with a lot to overcome to get on the same page. And they are overcoming it, but it doesn't feel right to me to have Bella just give it all away after a week of getting to know someone who she saw as a dick and a predator of women. That doesn't seem logical to be throwing in lemons.
And they have kissed already. They started a kiss at the end of chapter 40, and all of chapter 41 was the rest of that first amazing kiss between the two Chapter 44 featured a heated kiss in the doorway of a shop after Edward revealed his past to Bella and told her he wanted more with her. I also left them kissing, stretched out on the couch at the end of this most recent chapter and there's more coming of that event.
So believe it or not, they are getting there. I just like writing about the chase. I love the falling-in-love part of a romance, so that is what I write. And I said possibly 10 chapters, there could be more. You know I'm wordy. There will be sex. If I devoted a chapter to a kiss there's a good chance I'll devote quite a few words to their lovemaking.
Hang in there, I'll try my best, but I just have a very logical mind and I have to keep my characters' personalities and where they're coming from in my mind.
Thank you for the review.
-bannerday
Date: 20 Nov 2012 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
While Edward was being so honest and Bella was being so forgiving, he should have told her about the fanfiction knowledge. He should have aired out all of the dirty laundry. Then the air would have been cleared for a building relationship.
[Report This]Date: 16 Nov 2012 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
I love love this story!! U did a phenomenal job as usual!!!
cant wait for the next chapter
Date: 15 Nov 2012 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
Hahaha....loved those two! They work their crap out we'll together and separately...glad they don't assume and keep crap to themselves.....that just ruins everything!!!
Date: 14 Nov 2012 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
That was very cute and I think you did a great job with the bimbo sisters they are just girls that want to have fun ;) I am so loving this story Thanks
Date: 14 Nov 2012 7:48 AM Title: Chapter 42: A Wingman, A Wingwoman, and Little Wing
LOL to funny love it glad you straitened it out Thanks.
Date: 12 Nov 2012 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
Oh I just loved this chapter... so sweet on Edwards part and I loved how Bella handled the scene with the bimbo twins... and Edwards airing of dirty laundry...
Date: 12 Nov 2012 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 44: Dirty Laundry
Love it
[Report This]Date: 02 Nov 2012 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 14: Puzzling Pieces
lol
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 13: Not What One Would Espect
;)
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 12: Post Time
J'ai adoré MOTU, je l'ai lu 3 fois avec Google Translate. J'ai espéré, lorsque le livre a été publié qu'il y aurait une traduction française.
Bingo! J'ai lu le tome 1 en français, il y a 2 semaines. Je suis si contente que le livre de cette auteure réussisse si bien. Je prévois l'offrir en cadeau à mes filles. 27 et 23 ans.
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 11: Days of Reckoning
wow!
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 10: Into the Lair
Un vrai fantasme!
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 9: Perceptiions and Misperceptions
wow!
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black
Magnifique!
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along
Fuck... j'ai finalement fait pipi dans mes culottes, il faut que j'aille me changer!
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 5: From Bad to Unimaginably Worse
wow!
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 4: Mr. Silk Pants a.k.a. Mr. Big Stuff
lol
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 3: If the Hat Fits, Wear It
lol
[Report This]Date: 01 Nov 2012 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life
lol lol lol
J'ai failli faire pipi dans mes culottes!
Date: 28 Oct 2012 8:15 AM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
Copy of my review from FFn:
Awwwwww he is so cute. Loved Bella's internal rant hard... pun intented;P I wonder what Angela is going to say when Bella gets inside. I think I would be pretty lost to the world after a kiss like that... mmmmmm dreamland
Read the outtake, and as with everything else you write, I Floved it. And yes, I do have questions, but I'll play nice and keep my mouth (keyboard?) shut. But I can't wait to see if any of the things I noticed will be mentioned in FFSGSG
Date: 28 Oct 2012 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
Copy of my review from FFn:
Awwwww They are so cute... and finally we're making some progress:D
Ohhh I would so want to be at that dance-off;P watching all those guys shake their ass... yum
I actually did that dance infront of a window thing once with my BFF's... we had a blast, all giggling and yeah... the boys loved it;P
And did I detect a little hint to the outtake in the hot tube scene? Can't wait weeeeee:D
I thought he gave her flowers for the beginning of school like he did with Alice, but now he said he had never given a girl flowers (yet)? maybe the difference between a bouquet and what?
Might there be a date coming up some time soon for these two? hmmm
Haha I love trying to play detective to try to figure out what's going to happen (even if I'm wrong most of the time;P)
Again... another great chapter... Floved it!
Date: 25 Oct 2012 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
Awe sweet, but short for you. Still a good chappie. Kinda meltie.
Date: 23 Oct 2012 4:46 PM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
Bella can't be that clueless.
Date: 23 Oct 2012 5:16 AM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
My absolute fav story!! I am iiiiin love with your Edward and Bella and I always laugh out loud at some point u r so very talented
Date: 22 Oct 2012 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
Im so proud of him for holding back and keep it perfect a perfect ending to a wonderful day cant wait for more
Date: 22 Oct 2012 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 41: The Second part of a First Kiss
Awesome!
Date: 21 Oct 2012 11:49 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Story Has to Start Somewhere
So this is the first time I've ever left a review on one of these fan fic websites... after reading all there is to your story so far, I thought that it's about time I stoped lurking around and instead speak up. Just wanted to say how much i've been enjoying your story so far, i think the concept is super refreshing and its unlike any other fanfic i've read before. Im loving the interaction between B and E and will be anxiously waiting for the next chapter to see how the story continues. All the best, keep being an amazing writer :) lfsleigh
Date: 15 Oct 2012 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
Your story makes me laugh and im glad he got a peck in before she swooned
[Report This]Date: 15 Oct 2012 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
That had to be one of the funniest chapter endings. Bella swooned. I didn't know girls did that anymore or ever did in reality. I love this story.
Date: 15 Oct 2012 7:07 AM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
Love the swooning lol
[Report This]Date: 15 Oct 2012 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
I was wondering where you were! Totally worth the wait! I thought she passed out at first. I was like dayum girl how will you ever get past first base?! Lol.
Date: 15 Oct 2012 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
I really like this story but sometimes this slow burn kind of burns me out. I mean I would really like some action with them to happen.
I loved the bar b q with all the friends, family and co workers but I thought for sure he would have kissed her or more by now.
[Report This]Date: 15 Oct 2012 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
That chapter was the best yet. It made me so happy. I absolutely am in love with your e@b in this chapter
Date: 15 Oct 2012 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life
OMG this made me laugh out loud. Hubby was like "wtf is so funny?"
Date: 14 Oct 2012 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
That was a great ending to the party. It stands to reason that the couples would pair off and (with the exception of Ben & Angela) leave together. But now Edward has a promise to fulfill to Angela. Unfortunately for him he only has a week. I think Bella will get a little ticked off at him at first but I think the making up part will be spectacular. Can't wait...
Date: 14 Oct 2012 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life
mfg. I died. DIED! "Is your dick done with my hat yet?"
Date: 14 Oct 2012 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 40: The Last Lap of the Night
Awww...so freakin worth the wait.. And the pussycats? Too funny!