Date: 09 Jan 2011 1:38 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
wtf didn't you already make this and take it down or is my mind playing tricks on me.
if you had written it already why the hell did u take it down it was SOOOO good.
and if my mind is just playin tricks on me than i need to go to a phsyciatrist.
great story by the way
and please dont take it down this time
Author's Response:
Because ppl were complaining about spelling errors and shit like that, when it was one or words. I don't understand why ppl chose my story to complain about the simplest mistakes, but they do and it got annoying , so i pulled this bitch down and went through it. "ask me if i found a spelling error." only one in this chapter, and people were flaming me hard " can you believe it?" So when i took it down, i realized that nobody complaining, said anything about the plot holes that i had. bellas age, the were wolve situation. The charlie situation. so this time i'm changing the ages, and more. But every chapter may or may not have something different in them though. Bella's story will be different, she'll be a sophmore in college. that way, i won't have to find a way to deal with charlie, when or if rene comes up missing "winks" i won't take it down again. I'm so happy you like my story, but I LOVE yours! update the ruins soon two chapters PWEASSSSSSSSEEE oh and another chapter of forever helpless lmao i know i'm asking too much but i'm spoiled lmao
Date: 09 Jan 2011 12:23 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
I must say this is a very different story then what I've ever read. Seems to be interesting.
Date: 07 Jan 2011 10:21 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
I see that you rewrite this story. Thank god I was checking the recent stories or I would have missed it!!
As a greek fan let me make a few suggestions or advice. You may listen and then you can throw them away.
Most of the names of the girls that you had used, are used actually for boys.
Names that you could use from greek mythology coulb be some of these:
Lethe (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lethe) for forgetting
Eris {http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eris_(mythology) } for provoking disputes
Hedone { http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hedone } (daughter of Eros & Psyche) for pleasure
Medusa { http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Medousa } for freezing them with only one sight
On the other hand Erevos is ehem for boys { http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/z4;ρεβος }
That is if you are using the greek mythology.
In the matters of roman mythology and I understand that Edward's origin was Italy the names of some gods or creatures may differ.
For example: Eros (greek), Cupid (roman)
I know... Don't shoot the messenger!!
That doesn't mean that I don't like the story. I love it actually. So, keep the good work.
Author's Response:
lol no it's ok you TRIED to give me advice, but this is the reason i tell ppl to trust me lol. I did my research lol trust me, when i picked out each name, I was looking for either goddesses, Uni-sex names, or powers that i could more or less "Fuck around" with. You're suggestions is another reason why i didn't ask for them for the girls lmao. I know every power, tick, trick, and reason behind the names that were picked,so you the reader don't, which is why "corny or obvious names usually make a reader's suggestion cut." The names I've chosen are for a reason and it's so obvious. what is the one thing edward wants again? is it a boy? So maybe he "UNI" named two or three of them, for a reason.<---- lol i'll let you sit on that lmao.
Another thing, I never wrote Edward's origin. I just mentioned the volturi. Italian Mythology was never a factor. Once again another "misread suggestion" I said the volturi attacked his coven, I didn't say where lol, which is going to come up in future chapters. As for a greek lesson, i really hate doing this shit here, and i'm not one for school lessons, but it irritates me when someone assumes what i do or don't know about my own story without asking first lmao. You immediately went to wiki links ( try a book next time sweets), so i'll guess i'll enlighten you "greekfan"
the names chosen were Personified concepts, <==look that up, usually a uni-sex spirit or creature or (gods) in the greeks case, used to explain various reasons of life or human health, or personal mythology, weather, witch craft and so forth. such as
Mania-,lymos, and lyssa (which i don't need to elaborate on because i'm sure a greek fan as your self know that). These deities if you want to get technical didn't have a sex, it was usually up to whom ever told the tale, to add a sex to it, basically "old wives tales". In one of the books i used to pick the girl's nameExample: The question of if the christian God Is Man or Woman. I can rec you the book if you want! Most of the names chosen, are chosen for a reason, When i started my reasearch I wanted personifications by power, not the most obvious names i could find. I picked the best, researched the Gods and Goddesses and spirits and was happy with what i chose. Every choice has it's individual reason, which you'll find out later if you keep reading *winks* Hopefully other people will read this and abide by it
Just let a author do their thing, "They Know What They Are Doing, even if you don't" If you feel there's a mistake, ASK first. <-that's a smarter thing to do. Did you really think so little of me? I bet you had a big smile while you wrote this, not knowing you ended up wasting your time because i ALREADY KNEW WHAT I WAS DOING lmao! Sometimes I don't understand why ppl assume instead of just asking. It would've save you quite a bit of time from make OBVIOUS suggestions. ( not trying to offend you, but it's just really unoriginal. sorry) .....
I know, don't shoot the med student <-----
That doesn't mean I don't like your suggestions, it just means i won't use it lmao! That's for reviewing, I appreciated it!
Date: 06 Jan 2011 5:12 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
It doesnt really make sense but directly translated its this:
"Even as I would have you to be asleep wound in a net. I would have you in the torment of your mind. I hear the sound of me that I should, I is, I am afraid Your are below my wings. The meantime, in your mind. In the mean time on your spiritual and worldly, Your a vessel for me. My one. What do you do I fear? What do you do I fear? Show to me. Show to me. Open up your mind is like a punishment, 'as I was brought up upon your mind. I feel it for it will be your last with a panting, to me you below the ford of the die, "
It was Latin right ?
Date: 06 Jan 2011 2:56 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
I can't imagine why you are doing a rewrite. The original was so well done and I usually hate evil gore (as opposed to goody-two shoes gore?). Look forward to next chapter.
Date: 06 Jan 2011 12:40 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
I love the gore and intensity, I'm very impressed with the writing as well. Please update ASAP! I can't wait till bella shows Up!
Date: 06 Jan 2011 12:00 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
hey. im kinda confused as well. i love ur story. i really wanted to know if edward had found bella. did you rewrite the story? it seems that way. anywayz. love ur story. plz continue soon
Author's Response:
yeah i'm redoing you know. grew as a writing and all that good shit lmao. every chapter will be different
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:13 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
LOVED cant wait for more!!! :D
Date: 05 Jan 2011 6:37 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
Ummm wasn't this story already on here but farther along? I was looking forward to reading more ;)
Author's Response:
It was, but the story had too many problems so i did a second and last draft
Date: 05 Jan 2011 5:05 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
Loved it of course. Been waiting for your stories.
Date: 05 Jan 2011 5:04 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
When i saw the new story alert, i was goin to die of joy, yei Cambion, Yei!!! :D, me want to pre-read next chap!!
When you sleep, I would have you wound in a net. I would have you in the torment of your mind. I hear the sound of me that I should, I is, I am afraid Your are below my wings. The meantime, in your mind. In the mean time on your spiritual and worldly, Your a vessel for me. My one. What do you do I fear? What do you do I fear? Show to me. Show to me. Open up your mind is like a punishment, 'as I was brought up upon your mind. I feel it for it will be your last with a panting, to me you below the ford of the die.
Google translater rocks!!
Date: 05 Jan 2011 1:35 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
Your Back baby!!!! He is soo evil but damn he's fine. I thought my father had it bad with nothing but daughters, his girls are we say lil demons. could you imagine be stepmother to them crazy bitches?! good start bb.
Date: 05 Jan 2011 12:34 PM Title: Of Blood And Ice
Thank you for the re-write I love it!!!!! Can't wait for more!!!
Date: 05 Jan 2011 8:38 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
Thanks for the upadate. Can see some of the changes already. Fantastic insight into his mind-how he feels and regards authority of his kind and the fraility and usefulness for humans.
Thanks for the update Sweets!
Rough Latin translation:
When you sleep I want you caught in a net. I want to torture your mind. I am heard me when I to cry out , Your are below me. To perish upon your mind. To perish upon your ghost , Your vessel is mine. My one. Anyone to work you to respect? Anyone to work you to respect? Show me. Show me. To disclose upwards your mind when pain , when I toraise over, upon your mind. Feel this for this will be your to stay to the end to desire , below me you to perish , To perish too little one to perish. You are as yet caught in a net , your to respect will to cut the throat you. I will cut your throat. I will cut your throat.
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:32 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
well that makes me feel bad for bella for what is to come for her....evil is sometimes scary lol update soon
Author's Response:
I know right, edward is such a douche, but he's dead serious. He means business when it comes to what he wants. thank you for reading sweets
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:31 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
Tygs! This was brilliant!!!! The rewrite is bad ass!
I love how Keres has a back story. I thought it was awesome how Edward named her too, very clever. Edward himself is extremely dark- he's the darkest Edward I have read (even from your previous chapters).
The siren song scene was fuckawesome. And I know what language that is and what he says *wink* lol
Loved the tone of the chapter and the flow. All the details were amazing. It was like a movie in my head.
His daughters are frightening, just as he his. I can tell that they will wreak havoc, not only among his vessels and humankind, but amongst vampires as well. So watch out! Edward's on a prowl, looking for...Bella. =)
I can't wait to read more. This story has always been one of my favorites, and will continue to be. I'm s'cited for more! Truly amazing!
Keep rockin'
~Jells
Author's Response:
i won't even entertain how biased you are lmao!!!!!!!!!!! and how you're teasing ppl about you knowing the language. you big meanie! what youshould be doing is finishing up that chapter to Living amongst vampires. i'm still waiting on that....for 3 weeks lmao
Date: 05 Jan 2011 7:30 AM Title: Of Blood And Ice
hi love the story..are you re-writing it as there is only 1 chapter..
Author's Response:
um something like that, a couple of things have changed, bella's age, how edward seduces the women, he has fangs now, um vamps turn the good old fashion way, lots of tidbits, so every chapter will have something new. i'll try to have the next chapter up by ugh, tommorow night.