Date: 26 Mar 2011 4:17 AM Title: Thor, Loki, and the gang
You are doing great as usual, Lexi. Please do not stop. I would love to know what is going on in Michael’s head. He is my favorite.
Love
Nora Yar
Date: 25 Mar 2011 6:23 PM Title: Testing Testing
I am happy for them. They need a new baby. They were getting all sad at Michael's party. They love kids. I hope it is another boy. Alex is too spoiled to share the spotlight. They need to keep Alex away from Nathalie. Does that girl not have a home? She is going to cause problems. Alex is too young to be causing all of this drama.
Date: 25 Mar 2011 9:14 AM Title: Testing Testing
That was freakin hillarious!!! All around laughs innthis chapter. Can't wait for next update... N glad you update twcs too!!! Great stories!!!
Date: 24 Mar 2011 5:23 AM Title: Testing Testing
Whoa!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I've been supicious that this little development would occur with them and I admit to being the alittle excited by this, I just hope its a sure deal and not a false alarm, I love the idea of Bella with another baby......so I hope its all good.I anticipate some drama considering her age and all, but this will be a good plot twist, can't wait to see the whole outcome. Not sure what the plans are for the sex of this little one.......but I think they need a girl tp balance out all those boys. Should be interesting to see how Michael handles this too...since he won't be the baby anymore. Exciting times in the Cullen house, I'll be curious to see all this play out.Good chapter. Have a neice just Alex's age and so that drama here sounds all to famililar. And I love the Sex in the City reference hilarious and also the Dawsons Creek line equally funny. Those are 2 of my all time favorite shows. Love the pop culture tribute there.Again Great CHapter.
Date: 24 Mar 2011 3:35 AM Title: Mr. LoverMan
Your Back!!!!! When I saw all the updates on my email I did a happy dance!!! I am obssessed with this fic and couldn't wait for all the new developments. I love all of Bella and Edward's little , not so descreet rendevous and how casual their kids are about the whole thing.And the boys good gracious.............you gotta love em even when they are being down right scandelous and naughty..........its just the kind of guilty pleasure fun I can't resist. This is so well done and crafted, I love all the distinct characterizations and layers to all the relationships, family dynamics and the way the kids are , as I said all these little mini-versions of their parents. They are fatelly flawed in a good way and though they have all these imperfections and insecurites their Cullens and when I think of the canon Cullens I know these boys are beautiful , how can they not be they are Bella and Edward's kids. Those older boys especially-mini Edward and minn-Carlilse.HELLO..............YUM. LOVE ALL THE RECENT CHAPTERS. And the twist with the Emily-Al -Gabe triangle.....genius. I love too how you've worked the whole Jake situation back in there too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Fabulous!!!
Date: 24 Mar 2011 3:27 AM Title: Road to redemption
Its ashame it has taken me so long to review this story, because I totally love it!!!! I read " The Story of Us " straight through over a weekend when I was sick and was totally obsessively hooked. It aws fantastic and I love how you have characterizeed your version of Bella and Edward. So at the end I just had to peek at the epilogue and sequel and I am hooked on this too. i have never seen such a unique fic, with Bella and Edward older and parent of this little brood , but it is great. Love the balance of humor, romance and angst and I love how Edward's boys are all like little mini-Edwards to an extent. Absolutely love this fic, this is the stuff that makes me love AH fics. I favor traditional vampire/human pairings and canon, but you gotta love this!!!! Love it!!!
Date: 24 Mar 2011 1:49 AM Title: Testing Testing
so funny! This story always has me cracking up! LOVE IT!
Date: 23 Mar 2011 4:44 PM Title: Testing Testing
I think it's great!!! Just don't let anything happen to them!!
Date: 21 Mar 2011 4:36 AM Title: Spring is in the air part two
For the past 4 days, taking breaks just for necessities, I have read The Story Of Us nd Instructions Not Included. LOVED THEM BOTH!!! I laughed, cried, it has drama, tragedy, comedy AND lemons!!! This is a story about real life stuff. Everyone can actually relate. Love happy Edward/Bella stories and them with kids, even better!!! Continue on PLEASE!!! What about Edward and CC's tattoo???Look forward to MORE And MORE!!!
Date: 17 Mar 2011 1:17 PM Title: Spring is in the air part two
Edward and Bella better watch out for Alex and AJ. If they are having phone sex, which by the way is a federal offense, they will be doing more soon. They should not be left alone in his or her bedroom.
Bella went crazy over this party. I think she is having a hard time dealing with Michael growing up. He is her last baby. He is growing up fast with teenagers as siblings. Look at him already kissing girls.
I think they misnamed the older boys. CC is Edward's payback kid. He looks and acts just like him. He should be Edward Junior. He is in most ways.
Date: 16 Mar 2011 5:30 PM Title: Spring is in the air pt one
Bella can get herself into a tizzy. You would think with the craziness of this family that she would learn to go with the flow. Does anyone have there first pregnancy after they are married in this family? I agree with Edward. Emily and Al were stupid. They are too old to not know any better. You might not plan every pregnancy when you are married but it doesn't matter because you are married. When you are dating a married man, it matters. When you are single, it matters. I love this family and I am so glad that they are back.
Date: 22 Jan 2011 9:08 AM Title: Road to redemption
First... gotta say I love the print story feature twcs offers. Ive been catching up on this sequeal for awhile and it definately makes it easier to read in a word document at work than worrying about the internet useage ;) Love these stories and cant wait for the next update. I also love how long they the chapters are. Feeling kinda sorry for EJ but I dont know how i wouldve handled finding out about Jacob. Love em all!!! Go Red Raiders!!!
Date: 10 Dec 2010 3:02 PM Title: A day in the life of Bella Cullen
I love this story. I stumbled upon it by accident and I'm so happy I did. You do an amazing job describing the characters I feel like I know them. You dialoge is fantastic; so realistic. The story is funny and sincere. Thanks for writing!
Date: 13 Nov 2010 3:38 PM Title: Road to redemption
I love this story! I read the prequel last week, and I just finished reading this one around 1am. I felt like an addict, and I couldn't get enough. Your characters have such a prescence, and I find myself wanting to know more about thier everyday lives. I hope you continue this story, your Bella and Edward are so well written.
Date: 08 Nov 2010 5:12 PM Title: Road to redemption
I must say that I'm very pleased with the improvement I've seen in your writing skills over the course of these two stories. It's always such a joy to see a writer mature in their skills. I do have one criticism, and this is truly meant to be constructive: please learn the difference between there, their and they're. I apologize, it's just a really huge pet peeve of mine.
Date: 04 Nov 2010 7:38 PM Title: Road to redemption
I am so glad to have you back. I have missed my doses of the Cullen boys. I have fallen in love with all of these characters. Can't wait for the next update. I was sorry that Roni and EJ broke, but having Jake be her father was brilliant. I hope we get to see in him what Bella fell in love with at first. The fight in the hall at the high school was awesome!!! I love what these kids stumble into.
Date: 04 Nov 2010 2:21 PM Title: Road to redemption
I knew that Roni was Jakes daughter. I also knew that we were going to see the end of EJ and Roni real soon. I like EJ, but he needs a happy medium between the male whore and too serious for high school. It wouldn't hurt him to give his dick a little rest and just learn a little more about EJ.
Date: 04 Nov 2010 10:46 AM Title: Rescue Me
I love this family and all of their craziness.
Date: 04 Nov 2010 2:24 AM Title: Long Day
These two are so sexually frustrated it is funny. I can't believe Natialie would go on a date without being fully shaved. That is just nasty. I go shopping without my legs shaved, so you know that everything is shaved for a date.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 10:27 PM Title: Baby Got Back
I love all of those songs. CC is great. I am so glad that Sheila is gone. She was as crazy as her mom. This Natalie has spunk. She will keep him on his toes.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 1:00 PM Title: Thump, thump, thump
Go Carlisle. I guess the gun turned on Esme. It must have been a power rush.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 12:38 AM Title: Thump, thump, thump
OMG, that is classic!
Date: 06 Oct 2010 1:16 AM Title: So cold
I really see both sides. My heart breaks for CC. Things just multiply and seem to just get worse. Edward is being a brat, but you get tired sometimes and he is under a lot of stress. Sometimes you just want to give up. I admire that Bella wants to stick by CC. I hope she doesn't give up on him. Michael cracks me up. The lotion is classic.
Date: 04 Oct 2010 9:24 PM Title: Unchained Melody
Yes, you are absolutely right. Any sign of that temper in any man would bring Bella right back to that time with Jake. It doesn't matter how much time has passed. I think that Alice was right to get all fired up about it. I love the way these characters are playing out and the long chapters.
Date: 04 Oct 2010 6:50 PM Title: That's Amore
I loved the first story and I am really lovin the sequel. I really like looking into the lives of Bella and Edward's kids. You are doing a great job by the way. I love the characters and families that you created. Especially your Edward. His devotion to Bella is awesome. I love to see that they still have it for each other after 4 kids and all this time. Excited to continue reading.
Date: 29 Sep 2010 12:58 AM Title: At a loss
I seriously love your writing. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed more - I read your updates at work and our internet blocks the review function on fanfiction.net for some reason... I just found you on here and had to send you a message. I think your writing is brilliant, funny and engaging. I love seeing update alerts in my inbox - you brighten up my lunchbreak.
Love this fic. Can't wait to see where you take it. I never want it to end!
Love CC, and Michael (little perve, haha).
Date: 27 Sep 2010 8:55 AM Title: At a loss
That was a pretty huge rollercoaster of emotions. Well written. Keep up the great work.
Date: 25 Sep 2010 7:22 PM Title: At a loss
I was worried that CC would try to kill himself. He is such a drama king. I was urging Edward in my mind to get off the bed and go check on him in the shower. I am so glad they got to him in time. Edward and Bella would not have made it if they were too late.
Date: 31 Aug 2010 6:50 PM Title: So cold
I feel bad for CC, but he made this relationship with Edward. He wanted to be a loner and not talk. He wanted not to be trusted by lying. I hope they work this out and they both need to change their ways. They are alike in many ways and could be close.
Date: 26 Aug 2010 8:33 PM Title: Half moon
Carlisle has to be ok. CC better fix the mess he created. Robin is sick. They need to get her ou of their lives. I hope Sheila forgives CC.
Date: 25 Aug 2010 8:23 PM Title: Smells like Teen Spirit Part Two
I wonder why Debbie was so anxious to loose her virginity. EJ seem to be a great lover yet she almost wanted it to be clinical until he took over. She could have had a better experience if she would have let him use his experience to start with. She seems ok with the outcome, but it sure started out weird. Luckily EJ made it a little better before they ran out of time.
Author's Response:
I forsee more EJ lemons in the future. He's just so hot. I can't help myself. LOL. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: 20 Aug 2010 7:30 PM Title: Peanut
It is much harder finding privacy with teenagers. Thank the Lord for dance and football pracise that last at least 2 hours.
Date: 19 Aug 2010 4:09 PM Title: Choices
I think Bella blew it out of proportion at the very beginning of the conversation. Then the fight just went crazy and they both said things they didn't mean. Bella is over sensitive right now. She should just stop working and spend time with her kids. It is what she really wants to do. Work will always be there when the kids are gone. Edward should not have gotten so angry, but Bella should not have attacked him.
Date: 17 Aug 2010 9:04 PM Title: Asshole
This comment is for chapter nine which is already posted on fanfic.net(I couldn't post there). You asked who people thought would be having sex after the dance. I would definitely say EJ and CC, but Maddy as well. It seems she doesn't think too highly of herself. If I remember correctly didn't she have to dish out sexual favors just to get the guy to ask her to the dance? I think she would do anything to keep the guy who is obviousl;y not worth it. Plus she is too young...isn't she like 15? So, my guess would be those three. I can't wait to see how it turns out! :)
Author's Response:
In the epilogue she was 15, by now she's sixteen, and she didn't do any sexual favors, she just mentioned to Alex about how they kiss. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I can't wait for you to see how it turns out either. But except for her age, you've summed Maddy up pretty well. It wasn't my intention to write her ditzy and boy crazy, but that's what happened. Blah. Thanks Again!!!!!!
Date: 16 Aug 2010 4:43 PM Title: Asshole
Okay, so I kinda peed my pants a little when I read the beginning of this chapter! Edward's calm demeanor had me stumped, but when I figured out he was giving his son a driving lesson, I laughed out loud like an ass! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: 16 Aug 2010 3:57 PM Title: Big Poppa
Hey...I love me some Biggie too...Big Poppa is one of my faves. I laughed my ass off by the way. Thanks!
Date: 15 Aug 2010 8:03 PM Title: Unchained Melody
I agree about the corrolation between Edward and Jake. Poor EJ is soooo screwed! Lovin' it.
Date: 13 Aug 2010 8:51 PM Title: Party like a Rock star
At least Bella and Edward got revenge on their son!!
Date: 13 Aug 2010 7:48 PM Title: A day in the life of Bella Cullen
you have the cockblocking teenagers down to a tee! I took my daughter's door to her room once for mouthing off...it backfired on me because all the shit on the floor of her room spilled out into my hallway! Love this and loved the other one. Hysterical!
Date: 08 Aug 2010 9:49 PM Title: A day in the life of Bella Cullen
Please keep updating.... EJ just cracks me up! I can't wait to hear what comes next..
Date: 02 Aug 2010 7:11 PM Title: A day in the life of Bella Cullen
It just keeps getting better and better...your doing a grat job writing this story. Please keep writing about these guys....
Date: 02 Aug 2010 6:57 PM Title: Big Poppa
got to love E.J
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Date: 02 Aug 2010 5:05 PM Title: Unchained Melody
love this sequal.just gets better and better.xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Date: 01 Aug 2010 3:26 PM Title: Peanut
I am totally team Debbie but I think EJ needs a little competition
Date: 31 Jul 2010 4:03 PM Title: A day in the life of Bella Cullen
I just want to say that you are AWESOME!!! Bon Secours and the sequel are like crack for me. You are a great writer and have created some amazing characters. PLEASE don't stop writing about these guys