Date: 08 Jul 2010 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 12
so is james in school? seems like he is always watching her... fucking creepy shit. i had a staulker from grade 6 to 10, not nearly this fucked up, but he would show up at my house with flowers, come over and have coffee with my mom and wait for me to get home, thank god he was harmless. but i did find out years later while talking to his brother that he would tell everybody that i was his girlfriend and he was gonna marry me one day! lol i made his brother promise never to tell him where i live.
Date: 07 Jul 2010 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 11
Wow stalker much? This is not gonna end well for miss b.
Date: 07 Jul 2010 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 10
he was so sweet! and he even delt with the other boys really well at prom.
Date: 07 Jul 2010 12:24 PM Title: Chapter 9
i knew eddie had a crush goin on! but he above all of the others won't say anything because of em.
i wonder what james did? romantic evening anyone?
Date: 07 Jul 2010 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 10
wow, James was a sweetheart... possessive but sweet.. i know things are about to change though???? aren't they?
Date: 07 Jul 2010 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 8
it seems like eddie has a bit of a crush on miss bella. he just has not acted on it. and bella has 2 hot guys to take her to prom?!?! wow
Date: 07 Jul 2010 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 7
well miss bella like her some tequilla! and it makes her clothes fall off! heehee. i wonder how much of james's story is true or is it just a little trueth to help as a cover?
Date: 07 Jul 2010 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 6
well i am glad to see that b stood up for herself a little here.
Date: 06 Jul 2010 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 5
Fishing rod was funny. Poor little bella and emmy bear! You just wanna hug em!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 4
Like she said he is showing a lot of signs that this shit is not gonna end well...
Date: 06 Jul 2010 12:52 PM Title: Chapter 3
this is shaping up to be a sweet love story, to bad for bella we know it really isn't.
Date: 06 Jul 2010 7:11 AM Title: Chapter 2
this is a slippery slope for miss bella...
Date: 05 Jul 2010 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
This one looks interesting, can't wait toio see were you are gonna take it. :)
Date: 03 Jul 2010 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 28
wow...just wow...this is so intense! I love every word of it!! Sorry RL has been sucky, just update when you can!
Date: 03 Jul 2010 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 27
Ok...1) I can't believe people were upset with where you're story was going...I'm in love with it and 2) even if people were upset they need to understand that it is your story and not their's. If they wanted to they could go write their own and then maybe they will understand how hard it is to keep everyone happy...sigh...sorry. It just bugs me sometimes. Just keep your head up and be true to your story because there are those people out there that love it! And I am most definately one of them!!
Date: 02 Jul 2010 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 13
Ok a few things...1) I LOVE your story. 2) I have to stop reading now and go to sleep, but I will continue tomorrow. 3) If I could, I would reach through the computer and slap Bella into next week! sigh...great job!!
Author's Response:
LMAO!! Thanks for that!!!
Date: 02 Jul 2010 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 28
I have to admit I don't really feel sorry for Bella, she put herself into that position and doesn't listen to anyone else.
Author's Response:
yeah I dont' really think you have ever really liked Bella.
Date: 02 Jul 2010 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 28
i want to cut off james's balls and feed themto him
Author's Response:
me too, but it won't be much longer before he gets his.
Date: 02 Jul 2010 4:44 PM Title: Chapter 28
Yayyyy I'm so glad youre back! I thought you abandoned the story! Sorry to hear about your computer. I loved this chapter! I wanted to cry when she was talking to Edward on the phone lol I can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it!! And i'm sorry about the wait.
Date: 02 Jul 2010 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 28
I'm so glad that you finally updated. I just love this story!!!!
Author's Response:
Glad you love my story. Working on my update.
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2010 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 28
So good! James is psycho! Just hope Bella can hold James off until Edward can rescue her!
Date: 02 Jul 2010 6:21 AM Title: Chapter 28
Sounds like there may be a little inside job going on?
Author's Response:
I"m debating how I want this to play out;.
Date: 02 Jul 2010 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 28
well im happy she was able to contact them cant wait to see if they get her out !
Date: 28 Jun 2010 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 27
WOW is all i can say!! Your story is amazing!! I haven't been able to stop myself.. Cant wait to read more.. Your an awesome writer. Very gripping story.. cant wait to read more!!
[Report This]Date: 27 Jun 2010 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 27
This story is amazing. One of the best stories I have read in a really long time. Don't let the bad reviews get to you. They are upset with the the drama in the story, but I bet they would also be upset if the story was going another way. I love they way the plot is going and I hope that you update again really soon!!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 27
It was a good chapter but I don't think Bella fought hard enough. Getting on that plane was a huge mistake; especially after seein Aro dead. I'd rather die than leave with James. She could have made a run for it to gain more time. The cops should have been at the cabin before they left & with an even fight, someone should have been watching James so he couldn't get close to Bella. I like the story very much but find some of the aspects a bit too farfetched to make it believable. I know it's fiction but it still needs to be a bit more true, if you know what I mean. Hope you can update soon. I'm glad you believe in a HEA but not sure how that will be accomplished with Bella in Italy. Looking forward to see how you do this. I'm sure it will be fascinating. Thanks for writing this.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 8:10 PM Title: Chapter 26
I don't like the way this story is going. I understand stories need & should have twists, turns & surprises to keep it interesting but for Aro
& company to show up is a bit over the top. Too many mistakes & holes to make it believable. Hope you will ba able to stop them from leaving. Once they are in Italy it will be too difficult. The feds as well as Interpol should have been involved once the mafia was known to be connected. Looking forward to more.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 25
You sure know how to weave a tale. Feel better that Bella & Edward are together but James is dangerous. Looking forward to seeing what happens next. Good job.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 23
It was perfect!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 22
I think the only way for all of them to be safe from James is for James to die. I know I still have more chaps to read but I'm hoping you don't let Bella sacrifice herself to James to keep everyone else safe. They'll never be safe with James alive! Maybe they can find Victoria and she will testify against James..
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 3:34 PM Title: Chapter 21
Much much better! All is right in the world when Edward & Bella are together!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 16
She should have aborted if there was still enough time. She should have told them about James and his obsession so they can be prepared and I hurt for Edward since his feelings for Bella are true and deep.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 15
Thank god Bella is growing some balls. Hope the bastard gets what he deserves. I know she's scared and worried about Emmett & Edward but if she tells the authorities, they all can be safe!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 14
Gee big surprise that James is an ass and won't accept it being over.
Date: 19 Jun 2010 1:55 AM Title: Chapter 10
Sorry but I feel nothing for James.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2010 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 9
Bella is so naive and stupid. How could she think James was better looking than Edward?
[Report This]Date: 18 Jun 2010 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 6
One tequila , two tequila , three to kill ya, floor.
[Report This]Date: 18 Jun 2010 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 4
Sorry. - James & Bella together make me want to vomit. She's innocent and he's a first class dick. Scary that schools will let anyone off the street enroll.
[Report This]Date: 18 Jun 2010 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 3
Yuck!! Sorry - James is just too creepy...taking advantage of her. 4 years is HUGE in high school!
Date: 18 Jun 2010 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 2
I know it all has to do with the story but I abhor James so there's not much for me to like about this chapter.
[Report This]Date: 18 Jun 2010 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just git a rec for this & started reading. You've captured James mannerisms & "voice" perfectly. He is evil incarnate.
Date: 17 Jun 2010 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 3
I am thinking run for your life Bella ~ I can't believe Emmett let James drive Bella home.
Date: 17 Jun 2010 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 2
Okay, we can all see that James is definitely someone to watch out for. I hope Emmett catches on soon.
Date: 17 Jun 2010 9:56 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow ~ where is Emma now? This appears to be an interesting read.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 26
you should do a pov of james...does he really love bella or is it some sick twisted obession that he has over her? is his love misguided, and he only knows how to express any emotion through violence.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 27
wow i have just finished reading this story so far. and i gotta say its amazing!!!
its has romance, drama, hurt and comfort.
now that james has bella i think it should be five years or so before she comes back
to her family in the states, due to him keeping her in hiding or something and
possible have bella fall in love with james again becuase shes been brainwashed or
some twisted version of the the stockholm syndrome. well i hope you update soon
Date: 08 Jun 2010 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 27
I absolutely love this story hun I cant believe youve been sent hateful reviews and msgs. Its beautifully written and a brilliant story line! Im not usually one to slag off peoples work, i know how hard it is to share your work with others. With that being said I recently found a story which isnt written particularly well and Edward is abusive emontional, physically and an all round arsehole and yet her reviews are nothing but praise. I dont get it. Dont get me wrong I love quite a few stories where Edwards an arse and a couple where he is abusive so its not like I have a problem with those story lines.
Anyway hun, I know they hurt you by the things said but remember you have a lot of readers who love your story dont let the small minded ones ruin it for yourself or us readers who admire you x
Date: 08 Jun 2010 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 27
Shit - this has more twists and turns than a roller coaster! LOL I'm LOVING IT!
Date: 07 Jun 2010 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 27
i love this story just got finished reading it to this point and i read your comment at the begining of this chapter, i hate when people review and are nasty just because they don't like the way the story is going. i love this story and i think you are doing a great job..... keep up the good work
[Report This]Date: 06 Jun 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 27
I have to tell you how much I am enjoying your wonderful story. I'm so caught up in it, my three teenagers think I've lost a few marbles! It's really awful that nasty people feel the need to spread their venom. Clearly they were never told, "If you can't say something nice, DON'T SAY ANYTHING AT ALL. Don't listen to them. This story is great and sooo much fun. Thanks for writing and sharing!!!
Date: 31 May 2010 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 27
Hi. I read your story over the weekend and I absolutely love it. I like it, that I never know what will come next and I really like your style of writing.
Can´t wait to know how it´s going on. What will Emma say when her mommy is away? What will James do with Bella? How will Bella get away? When will she get away? Sooo many questions and I reaaaaally hope you won´t wait too long with the next chapters.
So, don´t let any hate-reviews get you down. ;-) Your story really is awsome.
Date: 26 May 2010 9:57 AM Title: Chapter 27
OMG you recieved hate mail? Oh you poor thing.. that is terrible.. if you get any negetive things happen on this site please let me know... that is not on...
But back onto the story.. THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU FOR NOT LETTING EMMA GO WITH THEM!!! LOL yes I am a little emotionally invested in this story..
Great story, keep up the good work..
Date: 26 May 2010 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 26
OH hell..... shit shit shit.. poor bella and more importantly POOR EMMA!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 25
OMG.... he is a sicko
Date: 26 May 2010 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 24
OH HELL!!!!!!! Nice Nice story line!! Well Done!
Date: 26 May 2010 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 23
LOL I love your a/n.. people are really funny about everything people write.. IT IS A STORY PEOPLE!!! LOL
Date: 26 May 2010 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 21
omg that is amazing..... how fast was that? dont blame them though
Date: 26 May 2010 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 20
awwwww...... that was so well done!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 7:04 AM Title: Chapter 19
omg... cant stop have to keep reading
Date: 26 May 2010 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 18
sounds like mine.... both of mine actually.... lucky us? :)
Date: 26 May 2010 6:33 AM Title: Chapter 17
god I love edward... super cute..
Date: 26 May 2010 6:14 AM Title: Chapter 16
oh god... scared.. LOL
Date: 26 May 2010 5:55 AM Title: Chapter 15
GOOD ON HER!!!!!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 14
oh shit!!!!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 13
awww..... oh god.. I can't watch...
Date: 26 May 2010 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 12
oh god he is creepy he paid those kids huh?
Date: 26 May 2010 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 11
OMG.... that is terrible.. you know what is going to happen it is like a train wreck..
Date: 26 May 2010 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 9
great prom... 2 hot guys?? so not fair.. but yeah we all know she is with the wrong one..
Date: 26 May 2010 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 8
Hi there I was wondering if you would mind if I put your story up on featured stories this week on the library.. if you do.. let me know! :)
loving it..
Date: 26 May 2010 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 7
oh dear... this is not good!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 6
oh he is bad arse... stay away bella... RUN!!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 5
okay, crying now!!! NOT ON!!!!
Date: 26 May 2010 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 4
oh god.. manipulation plus..... great great story.. well done..
Date: 26 May 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 3
OMG older guy.. younger girl... oh hell....
Date: 26 May 2010 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 27
poor Bella, glad Emma isn't there though. Can't wait for Edward to come save Bella and beat James' butt. Great chapter
Date: 26 May 2010 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 2
hmmmmm really interesting.. i am really enjoying this story.. great writing..
Date: 26 May 2010 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 1
OMG.. this is freaking brilliant.. great start..
Date: 24 May 2010 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 27
I have just finished reading this story from chapter one. Although, this is the first review I've left. I have enjoyed it thoroughly. As for the negative reviews, I don't understand what would compel one to be so critical. I applaud all fan fiction writers because I do not have the talent to write and it takes guts to put yourself out there. Basically, if I am reading a story and don't like it, I simply discontinue reading it.
Date: 23 May 2010 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 27
Don't let those negative comments get to you like that love, people should understand that some stories like this especially need this kind of story line and plot... I'll admit I was upset, but I have that TRUST in you that this will all turn around at some point and be a happy ending full of love. If you want to make this story as believable as possible then you need heartache.... Stephanie did it in New Moon, so we can do it here. So keep your head up and keep up the awesome work.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for that!!!
Date: 20 May 2010 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 27
poor bella, i do hope edward gets to her soon- James is a cruel bastard and will do anything to hurt her
Date: 20 May 2010 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 27
love it please update sson
Author's Response:
glad you like it. Working on the next chapter right now.
Date: 20 May 2010 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 27
great chapter - i love ur whole story. im sorry about the hateful reviews, their just jealous cause they cant think of such an awesome plotline :P dont let the haters get u down, ur doing a great job!
Author's Response:
Thank you for that.
Date: 20 May 2010 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 27
As an author you have to stay true to your creativity. I know you want to keep your readers happy, but don't let it effect what you want to happen with this story. Am I glad that James got Bella and shot Aro (her only protector), hell no; but that just gives more plot, action and drama to your story. All I can hope is that James kidnapping doesn't drag on forever and that really soon Edward and Emmett find her so she can be with her family.
Author's Response:
I didnt want to kill Aro but it needed to be done for Ch. 28 to work out.
Date: 20 May 2010 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 27
Good story.
Author's Response:
I'm really glad you like it.
Date: 20 May 2010 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 27
This is one of my favorite stories! Screw the people who leave nasty remarks, if they dont like it they dont have to read it! I cant imagine the rest of the mafia family will be of with james killing aro and im curious about their reactions. Im even more curious about what you changed because of those poeples remarks! You are a good writer dont doubt yourself! Is James just going to forget about Emma? Ahh I cant wait for your next update! Good job!
Author's Response:
Thank you for that. The changes I don't think I'll say since you liked it so much...lol... As for what James is feeling I think next chapter will shine some light on that.
Date: 20 May 2010 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 27
Not the way I thought things would go. I was so hoping that Bella would kick some ass.
Author's Response:
I know... but i will tell you that next chapter you might just be seeing some ass kicking,
[Report This]Date: 19 May 2010 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 27
I can't believe anyone had anything bad to say about this. It's a great story!! Please update soon and don't let people get to you. You're a very good writer, and I for one can't wait to where you take this..
Author's Response:
Thanks alot for that!! Glad you like my story.
Date: 19 May 2010 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 27
I like how realistic this story has been!
Thanks for the update :)
Author's Response:
A few of the things in here are from past experiences.. not all of them but some.
Date: 19 May 2010 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 27
wow at least emma got out cant wait tiill the next chapter !
Author's Response:
I know... i couldn't let them take Emma.
Date: 13 May 2010 8:38 AM Title: Chapter 26
She should have retrieved a gun and shot James, all that defense training and she does absolutely nothing? sad, now she's by herself with a little child.
Date: 13 May 2010 7:38 AM Title: Chapter 25
Wow absolutely pointless useless. Bella doesn't have a fight or flight instinct, those 4 weeks were wasted, especially gun practice if you don't carry a gun on you.
Date: 12 May 2010 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 24
Wow, thats fucked up. Edward really shouldn't withhold important information either. Poor Bella.
Date: 12 May 2010 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 21
Huh, makes you wonder if James actually buys that Edward is her father -- It seems so and yet Emma has his hair colouring... Edward & Bella are both dark haired.
Date: 12 May 2010 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 18
Ok, I don't get why in the "present" her and Edward are not together if Emma is almost 2yrs old if they realized it when she was born...
Date: 11 May 2010 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, I gotta admit I would walk up to Edward and kick him in the junk and then break his nose. He is not very perceptive and he knows Bella went through something bad and here is sprouting off information about her kid. He needs to learn to keep his mouth shut to outsiders, same with Emmett.
Date: 11 May 2010 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 26
I just started this story yesterday and I have read the whole things!!! Hooked :) Looking forward to the next update!!
Thanks so much
Nik
[Report This]Date: 08 May 2010 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 24
I never saw this twist coming! Can't wait to see what you bring on them now. ;)