Date: 21 May 2010 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 13
hmmm Alice's visions. I have no idea what's wrong with her visions. Unless it has someething to do with Bella's shield??? I am glad that she was able to see that they were leaving and to where. :0)
Date: 21 May 2010 12:39 PM Title: Chapter 13
wow didnt see that one comming! cant wait till the next chapter
[Report This]Date: 21 May 2010 12:31 PM Title: Chapter 13
Love me some James and Bella...crazy I know!! Not too sure about Alice.
Date: 21 May 2010 11:47 AM Title: Chapter 13
Italy? Really? That's bad. Really really bad. Poor Bella.
Date: 21 May 2010 10:10 AM Title: Chapter 13
Cant guess what is going on, you have me intrigued
Date: 19 May 2010 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 3
The only thing that I would change is the dialogue break up. Every time a new character speaks it should start a new paragraph.
James- Dialogue
Bella- Dialogue
James- Dialogue
Etc.
Much easier to read.
Date: 17 May 2010 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 12
This is so intresting, im really looking forward to the next chapter
[Report This]Date: 17 May 2010 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 12
Absolutely love it!
Date: 16 May 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 12
AHH!! NO!! sigh...great job!
[Report This]Date: 15 May 2010 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 12
James is a total phsyco. How in the world will poor Bella survive his abuse? Having said that I cannot wait to find out. Good job with the story.
Date: 15 May 2010 10:33 PM Title: Chapter 12
So the Cullen's will never be able to sneak up on James if he's got that spidey scence thing going on. Poor Bella, she was so close to getting help. I'm on the edge of my seat just waiting to see what happens next. :0)
Date: 15 May 2010 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 12
I want them to rip him apart and slowly burn him
Date: 15 May 2010 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 12
Love it! Can't wait to see what's next!
Date: 13 May 2010 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 11
I hope Bella ends up with James. Edward and the Cullens are far to goody-goody.
Date: 13 May 2010 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 11
man, i dont want James to get away but, i guess it makes the story more appealing lol, keep up the great work
[Report This]Date: 12 May 2010 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 11
It was good to see this through Carlisle's eyes, esp., to see how much they cared about Bella.
Date: 12 May 2010 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 11
Yay, a Carlisle Pov, so cool. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: 12 May 2010 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 11
Well we know they didn't get there in time. Hope there's a trail they can follow.
Date: 12 May 2010 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 11
Poor Bella! I found myself wondering what the conversaations would be like if different family memebers answered the phone on Carlisle's end - excluding Edward, of course. Alice? Somewhat hyper but very firm and intense. Esme? Like a hug and a bowl of emotional chicken soup when you need it! Emmett? The tough but protective big brother with a gentle soul. He'd be ready to take James down with one hand and then carefully carry Bella's broken body home. Rosalie? Far more understanding than Bella would have believed. There for her in every way. And Jasper? The warrior, ready to find and protect her, and having done so, help heal her broken spirit. It makes my imaginagtion soar! Thanks for that!
Date: 12 May 2010 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 11
I cant beleive Edward didnt rip the phone away from Carlisle. I hope they get to her soon.
[Report This]Date: 12 May 2010 1:55 PM Title: Chapter 11
Very intense...I'm dying for the next chapter :-) Update asap!
Date: 11 May 2010 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 10
oh no! They were sooo close to reaching her!! I wonder how he managed to forget about that phone...? Anyway, I'm so glad she's standing up to him, and not just zoning out. She needs to remain strong until the Cullens reach her!!
Author's Response:
It wasn't that he forgot about it, he got complacent. He figured that Bella was being well-behaved and he banked on the fact that she didn't want anything to happen to the Cullen's.
Date: 10 May 2010 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 10
Really like your story! Bella is being so brave right now and I am proud of her. I hope that Edward can get there in time.. Thanks for the update!
[Report This]Date: 10 May 2010 11:14 AM Title: Chapter 10
You ended it THERE?? That's just cruel, ha ha :-) This story is awesome...I'm going to need an update before you cause me a minor anxiety attack. Loving this so far :-) Can't wait for the Cullens to finally get there.
Date: 09 May 2010 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 10
Yes, she has broken his whatever control over her. It's a shame that the Cullens didn't get to her but i'm sure they will eventually and hopefully Bella will have more opportunities to help them in their search, that is if James doesn't hurt her too badly. Hope you can update some more soon, really enjoying this story.
Date: 09 May 2010 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 10
Yay Bella! I'm so glad she called the Cullen's when she had the chance. I like her being stronger even if all it does is make James mad. I'm glad she's remembering all the things he's done to her. I didn't want her to all of the sudden love James. Wonder what tipped him off? Now how will the Cullen's find her??? Looking forward to reading more when it's updated again. :0)
Date: 09 May 2010 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 9
"I will never understand why some vampires become so enamored with their food. He stole her from that hospital in the middle of the night and turned her to protect her from me." James said this? Yet he himself claims to love Bella. Guess if he's being nice now she won't have to worry about being his "pet" anymore.
Date: 09 May 2010 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 8
What?!?! James loves Bella??? He obviously is delusional. haha
Date: 09 May 2010 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 7
I love that they have a plan. Hope they are able to find something out soon. :0)
Date: 09 May 2010 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 6
going straight to the next chapter to keep reading :0)
Date: 09 May 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 5
That's gotta be hard. Alice is seeing some of the things James is doing to Bella. Edward is going to kill James if he ever gets the chance. :0)
Date: 09 May 2010 12:51 AM Title: Chapter 4
How evil!..... poor Bella will always have that mark on her to remind her of him and what he did.
Date: 09 May 2010 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 3
He bit her??? Surely he's not going to change her cause then she'd be stronger than he is and she'd be able to get away. :0) Can't wait to see what happens next.
Date: 09 May 2010 12:44 AM Title: Chapter 2
Wonder how the Cullen's will find her
Date: 09 May 2010 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
oooh can't wait to see what happens
Date: 08 May 2010 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 10
Thank goodness she called the Cullens and stood up to James
[Report This]Date: 08 May 2010 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 10
Poor Bella, James is certainly bipolar at the very least. I wonder if the Cullen's will get to her in time? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: 05 May 2010 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 9
Wow, he really is one twisted guy. I hope the Cullens get to Bella soon
Date: 05 May 2010 5:04 AM Title: Chapter 9
God I hope it does not work I would have to bitch slap someone LOL
Date: 04 May 2010 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 9
WOW!!! This is getting really really interesting. Can't wait to read more.
Date: 02 May 2010 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 4
You have great writing style! Its an interesting twist you've just added. Thank you very much for your frequent and quick updates.
Date: 01 May 2010 7:18 AM Title: Chapter 8
"I hope Bella can hold on till the Cullens can get to her."
Oh, come on, there are hundreds EB stories :)
Date: 01 May 2010 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 8
hmmm...James developing feelings for her...hmmm...good (yet short) chapter. :)
[Report This]Date: 30 Apr 2010 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 8
wow, i am really liking this story.
Date: 30 Apr 2010 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 8
If Alice sees this, methinks Edward is not gonna be very happy...am I right, or am I right?
Date: 30 Apr 2010 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 8
I hope Bella can hold on till the Cullens can get to her.
Date: 30 Apr 2010 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 8
I hope Bella can hold on till the Cullens can get to her.
Date: 30 Apr 2010 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 7
I really feel sorry for Alice.
Date: 30 Apr 2010 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 6
This story is definately different.
Date: 30 Apr 2010 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 8
James is one sick individual, he really is. I hope the Cullens can rescue Bella soon becasue otherwise i have a feeling she's probably going to end up with Stockholme Syndrome or something of the like, especially with James playing with her feelings. Please update some more
Date: 30 Apr 2010 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 8
So James is in love with Bella this can not be good will this make her care for him???? Please say NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
[Report This]Date: 30 Apr 2010 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 8
make it B/J story :)
[Report This]Date: 30 Apr 2010 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 8
I can't imagine how difficult of a time Bella's going to have trying to convince James that she shares his feelings. That's going to be one hell of an internal battle. For any rape victim, the mere thought of waking up and having your rapist hold you...trapping you in his arms would just be mind-numbingly nauseating. I don't think I could handle it at all. That would've sent me into an emotional tailspin. I'm almost wondering if Bella's in shock. She's reacting purely on survival mode...but her thoughts are so unattached I'm scared she's going to break when everything she's trying to suppress comes to the surface. I just have a feeling the shit's about to hit the fan, and when it does Bella's plan might fly right out the window along with her "calm" demeanor. You just can't go through what she's experiencing and not break at some point.
Needless to say, you definitely have my attention :-) I'm interested to find out how long she'll be able to keep her so-called "composure" before she goes numb and comatose & hits rock bottom. I just hope Edward & the rest of the Cullens get to her before then. Ok...you've got me on the edge of my seat! You've gotta update...asap! Loving it :-)
[Report This]Date: 28 Apr 2010 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 7
I hope their plan fails.....I love this James and Bella coupling!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 9:11 PM Title: Chapter 7
this story is absolutely genius! I can't wait for more!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 7
Omg this is so sad, poor Bella and poor Edward. This story is actually making me cry lol. Well if they ever get her back and she's anything like herself, she will have more in common with Rosalie now. I am so looking forward to the next chapter, please update some more soon
Date: 27 Apr 2010 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 7
The plan has to work they have to get Bella back before James turns her.
[Report This]Date: 27 Apr 2010 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 7
well, i hope that Cullens will lost :)
[Report This]Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 7
Awesome chapter, although it broke my heart. I can't wait for the Cullen's to get Bella back! Can't wait for your next update :-)
Date: 27 Apr 2010 12:52 PM Title: Chapter 7
this story is so incredibly heart-wrenching, and I get excited when I see that you've updated, but the chapters feel a bit short... Loving the story, though! :)
Date: 25 Apr 2010 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 6
Poor Bella.... How sad for this to happen... I can't wait for the next chapter!!! Will the shapeshifter have a part in ur story!!! I hope so, I'm guessing they will be the only way to get Bella back
Date: 25 Apr 2010 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 6
What is James hunting to bring back to her??? He is one sick fuck. Poor Bella she needs to shut down go find her happy place in her mind and stay there.
[Report This]Date: 25 Apr 2010 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 6
hey just wanted you to knnow i love this story i hope bella does not go back to the cullens
Date: 25 Apr 2010 2:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
cant wait to see where this story goes and i can't wait till the next update!
Date: 25 Apr 2010 11:34 AM Title: Chapter 6
I'm enjoying your story...sorry I didn't review the last chapter :) I think you're doing a great job so far. The only thing that confused me a little bit was that in the last chapter, I felt Edward might have been more sad/hurt/emotional towards Bella getting raped. He seemed furious over James wanting to make Bella a "human pet", but kinda skipped over a reaction of the rape. Maybe that's just coming in a later chapter :) I hope it's ok I mentioned I felt that way. Other than that, I really think you're doing an awesome job expressing certain emotions each character might be feeling. I'm looking forward to the next chapter :) Update soon!
Date: 23 Apr 2010 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 5
Loving me some James and Bella.....call me crazy but I love this coupling!! LOL
Date: 23 Apr 2010 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 5
How are they going to function without her how are they going to find her???
Date: 23 Apr 2010 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 5
I am really enjoying this story. Can't wait to see where you are going with it!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 5
Can't wait to read more.
Date: 22 Apr 2010 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 5
omg what a devestating story...you write with such description that I can't wait to see what happens next...update soon!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 2:10 PM Title: Chapter 5
As before, love this story!!!!
Date: 19 Apr 2010 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 4
Will we see this from Bella's POV??
[Report This]Date: 19 Apr 2010 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 4
Oh, I am loving me some Bella and James!!! Edward who???!!!
[Report This]Date: 19 Apr 2010 9:14 AM Title: Chapter 4
This is great so far :) Instant fan over here :) :) Update soon si'l vous plait!!
Date: 18 Apr 2010 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 4
James it truly fuck in the head
Date: 18 Apr 2010 11:20 PM Title: Chapter 3
James is a sick fuck
Date: 18 Apr 2010 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 4
that was hot !!
Date: 16 Apr 2010 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 3
WOW!!! Can't wait for more. Need more details.
[Report This]Date: 16 Apr 2010 4:00 PM Title: Chapter 3
I must b sick for enjoying this chapter and can't wait to get inside James' head!
Date: 14 Apr 2010 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow James is a sick sick fuck and the poor Cullens but how is Bella handling this poor thing.
[Report This]Date: 14 Apr 2010 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 2
Oh shit.....can't wait to read what happens to Bella!!!
Date: 14 Apr 2010 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 2
I feel so sorry for Edward.
Sorry I am a perv but I can't wait to see what James has in store for Bella.
Author's Response:
Then you will really enjoy the next few chapters. ; )
Date: 13 Apr 2010 1:09 PM Title: Chapter 1
I cant wait for you to update. Can't wait to see what James has in store for Bella.
[Report This]Date: 12 Apr 2010 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved that you told the story in two points of view. The story premise is exciting. I'd never guess you were a first time writer.
Date: 12 Apr 2010 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 1
It sounds interesting and you are doing a good job.