Date: 14 Jul 2015 9:54 PM Title: Chapter 5
Woman on the side?
Date: 14 Jul 2015 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 4
Seems like Jake's sons are as obnoxious as he is.
Date: 14 Jul 2015 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 3
What a fitting end for such an asshole.
Date: 14 Jul 2015 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 2
What an insufferable bore this Jake is. Emotional abuse much!
Date: 14 Jul 2015 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
This was recommended by TwiFanFiction Recommendations. Loved the first chapter. So glad I get to read chapters without having to wait for updates.
[Report This]Date: 22 Nov 2014 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 8
Oh my. I am guessing you have no beta and that English is not your native language. I like the premise of this story, but the grammar, punctuation, and dialogue are all very awkward and make this story difficult to read.
A good beta will be an immense help in all these areas and would be able to take an ok story and make it great.
Date: 15 Nov 2014 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 36
I am afraid that Alex is ging to be a dick for life
Date: 15 Nov 2014 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 35
Kate sure is evil
Date: 15 Nov 2014 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 30
Tanya is such a horrible person!
Date: 15 Nov 2014 4:49 AM Title: Chapter 28
Little Angela never really got a mother's love
Date: 15 Nov 2014 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 27
Little Angela is such a cutie
Date: 03 Nov 2014 11:20 PM Title: Chapter 53
Not happy with the ending..you left too many loose ends
Date: 27 Oct 2014 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 53
Working it out before you post is much better. Then you can fine tune as you go.
good story.
Date: 26 Oct 2014 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 53
Ok glad the Kate plot line ended. I must say that it gets difficult to read through the Britspeak but I get that you don't have a beta. Good luck with your next story.
[Report This]Date: 26 Oct 2014 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 53
I agree you need a epi to take care of loose ends. Like what happens with anthony . alex. edward n angela. Then what finally happens with kate and the case. I hope you do somthing. Good luck with next story.
Date: 26 Oct 2014 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 53
Thanks for the entertaining story. Maybe an epi sometime??
Date: 25 Oct 2014 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 51
kate seems to win and that is bad since she broke into Bella's house.
Date: 25 Oct 2014 1:51 AM Title: Chapter 51
All the cops have to do is search Kate's car and find the evidence of her stalking and drug abuse. Since she's hospitalized I'm sure she had bloodwork done that would show drug levels in her blood. Hair analysis would reveal that too.
Date: 23 Oct 2014 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 50
They need to get Bella a lawyer to represent her to the cops. Kate is going to lie. We all know that will happen. Bella has a right to protect herself in her own house. The lawyer will help cut through the legal crap. The cops didn't even pay attention to Bella's complaints of harrasment.
Date: 23 Oct 2014 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 43
I thought he took Jane to the party at Alice's.
Date: 16 Oct 2014 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 50
at this point, Why has the detective not understood this woman broke into her home. This woman Kate has a B&E and attempted murder. Bella just got the better hand because of her training and her writer.
Date: 16 Oct 2014 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 50
Does the detective really expect Kate to admit to anything? I hope they took some blood so they can see the drugs in her system
Date: 11 Oct 2014 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 49
WTF KIND OF COPS ARE THESE???????????????????????????????????////
Date: 10 Oct 2014 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 49
Holy crap! All that and it gets turned around on Bella? Um, isn't it Bella's house after all?
Date: 10 Oct 2014 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 49
you need to review your writing.. You said Tanya.. on this chapter. she is dead.
Date: 09 Oct 2014 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 49
I'm hoping that the parcel the neighbor was bringing was nother thing Kate ordered in Bella's name. I also hope the doctors realize that Kate was high.
I wonder, is Alex going to show up? If so how will he behave?
Date: 09 Oct 2014 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 49
naughty cop
Date: 09 Oct 2014 11:41 AM Title: Chapter 48
she can not show fear to Kate she will use it against her.
Date: 08 Oct 2014 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 48
I never know what direction this story will take.
Date: 08 Oct 2014 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 48
oh snap. please update soon. ps can not say the word I really want too.
Date: 08 Oct 2014 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 48
I wouldn't go down with out a fight, pick something up and hit her with it..
Date: 05 Oct 2014 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 47
Hate Kate- make her go away soon PLEASE! Happy they had family time!!
Date: 04 Oct 2014 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 47
I get where you are going with this. Don't hurt that child even just in words... I just don't read that.
Date: 04 Oct 2014 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 47
I'm hoping if Kate smells as badly as she thinks that Bella will smell her when she walks in. I also hope Bella will catch Kate still sleeping
Date: 03 Oct 2014 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 46
I HATE PSYCHO PEOPLE, HOW MUCH LONGER UNTIL SHE GETS CAUGHT????
Date: 02 Oct 2014 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 46
Kate is sick in the head.
Date: 02 Oct 2014 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 45
she gives him a chance for his daughter.
Date: 29 Sep 2014 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 44
See I agree she needs help with security. He is just another form of Jacob. She needs to go down to the police station take evidence of what is happening along with times. The bank has cameras and if someone is ordering things via the phone, the police can summon phone records. .This is all tracable. Like I said earlier let her back away from him. He has wronged her and knowing her insecurities he is just as bad as Jacob.
Date: 28 Sep 2014 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 44
Glad edward was honest, hopefully bella does not take too long to forgive-edward has gone through alot himself
Date: 28 Sep 2014 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 44
So Kate is trying to make Bella look unstable..
Date: 28 Sep 2014 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 43
Yep, I did enjoy it. Good chapter!
Date: 28 Sep 2014 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 43
Yes.. well it was Jane he was dating not Lauren. Doesn't matter though. He just did to her like Jake.. I really wish he stayed away a while longer and let her date around some. She needs to be happy and feel desired.
Author's Response:
Sorry. You are right . Jane not Lauren, when I was writing it I thought something was wrong. That's the problem not haveing a beta. All my own mistakes, not only you that spotted it too. Sorry everyone.
Date: 28 Sep 2014 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 43
Wasn't Lauren Jane last chapter?
So glad Edward went to see her. She needs to tell someone about the recent weirdness
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 42
Please let Bella start dating Peter.. Come one don't make her into that frail woman that Jake Black hurt now Edward makes his mark too. Please.. Come one let her say to hell with this and don't look back.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 41
Well between Kate and Alex Bella may not be alive to care.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 39
that last few sentences make me want to hug her..
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 38
Kate was hurt, that is sad. So we need to excuse her for doing that same thing? No. you don't have to repeat abuse..
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 37
Perhaps Bella needs to get security and also a restraining order out against Alex. I would also collect all the paper work supporting what Jake did and send copies to both guys and Leah. Now everyone knows there is no money.
Someone need to put that dog (kate ) down, she is rabid.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 36
That would kill me if my child did that to me. After I finished crying I would call the police and file charges. Tough love.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 34
Get in line woman.. Her mother made her pay, her dead husband made her pay and she has one child that is trying to do the same..
Date: 27 Sep 2014 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 33
kate caused so many problems. I am glad in the end she gets it all back.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 30
lol.. well cell phone teacher.. got reall busy.. Only thing is Teachers that are gay run the risk of being fired. Schools don't like that when they are in elementary.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 29
You left out the ugly duo.. I am so glad.. almost dread next chapter.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 28
thanks for the warning.. maybe we need to skip that chapter.. I really don't like them and am tire of Edward bending over so Kate can be I say a bitch but I was thinking something else.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 24
Even at that Kate looses. She gets nothing monetarily. Kate is still married to Edward, he gets say over the money and the child. She gets a lover for two more months. I would make her move out and Kate would not be allowed around Angela at all. Time to break up with Aunt Angela right now. Next let Tanya make time for her daughter only no Kate in the picture.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 21
God what an awful woman.. Perhaps she is related to Renee or Jake.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 19
so Tanya is going to die.. brain tumor. Well that is a mess as well.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 17
why stay? I mean in the end everyone will get hurt.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 3:15 PM Title: Chapter 15
so Jasper and Alice to buy the house. Bella needs to get an apartment for the time being until she can decide what to do. Maybe get a job with a landscaper and enjoy what makes Her happy.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 14
he has problems at home too. Easier to work on someone else's than his own?
Date: 27 Sep 2014 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 13
hard all the way around. She was right to stand up for herself. Next change the locks. Change all the phones. Give Anthony the number and no one else and proceed on to changing your life.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 12
he is married and she is alive.. so..
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:50 PM Title: Chapter 9
Like it or not there is a point you have to talk to your grown children about not being around that woman. That is plain sick.. Sick to have sex with your son in law.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 7
good he is dead.. she might have shot him.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 42
The scratches around the lock & pizza sound like Kate. Ordering things on mom's card sounds like Alex. Have they teamed up?
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 5
maybe old Jakey had a sweet young thing on the side that took a lot of money to keep up..
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 3
Well it seems the ass had a heart attack.. Nope he does not have a heart..
Date: 27 Sep 2014 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
never really thankful just belittle what she does.. except for the food.. shovel it in.
Date: 26 Sep 2014 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 42
Well, they say pregnant women lose their brain to mouth filter. Edward just found out the hard way.
Date: 26 Sep 2014 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 42
I am glad someone finally told him to stop being a dick
Date: 25 Sep 2014 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 41
Edward you need counseling buddy, can you not read between the lines, So he has to sleep with someone to be sure that he is just friends with Bella just terrific and then what after he sleeps with Jane he will want Bella....I would so No to him when he came calling.....because you stack a claim on Bella in front of another man, then you flaunt another women in front of Bella's face...just say NO bella
Date: 25 Sep 2014 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 41
Physician, heal thyself!
Date: 25 Sep 2014 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 41
:-( Hope these 2 get it together soon!!
Date: 24 Sep 2014 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 40
She needs to get the restraining order. She also needs to tell Anthony
Date: 24 Sep 2014 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 39
Now Kate is still outside and this will be a perfect time to sneak in..
[Report This]Date: 23 Sep 2014 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 38
she is crazy! Great chapter
Date: 23 Sep 2014 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 38
Dont like her at all!!!
I really hope her part in story ends soon. Do her favor and let her be with Tanya
Date: 23 Sep 2014 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 38
Wow. Kate is worse that I thought!
Date: 23 Sep 2014 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 38
I think she seriously needs to speak with a shrink...
Date: 14 Sep 2014 6:22 PM Title: Chapter 37
I knew Alex knew! I am glad that Leah realizes that she was wrong. That Angela is one little matchmaker! Kate, Kate, Kate.
Date: 14 Sep 2014 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 37
Glad Leah is believing the truth. I really don't think Bella shoukd hesitate to get that restrainig order. She should also tell Anthony everything asap.
I ssuppose it's too much to ask that they spot Kate tailing them.
Date: 14 Sep 2014 4:31 AM Title: Chapter 36
He needs a good ASS whooping, never hit your momma boy.
Date: 13 Sep 2014 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 36
Alex has been warped by his father. I wouldn't be shocked to learn he was on some of those tapes with Jake and the hookers. Bella need a restraining order.
Date: 13 Sep 2014 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 36
I'm assuming Kate was around to see 2 allies in her campaign against Bella
Date: 12 Sep 2014 4:24 AM Title: Chapter 35
Wow she is one psycho bitch, please Tanya has been cheating on Edward all this time with you Kate while he sat back and watched.
Date: 12 Sep 2014 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 35
I imagine Kate will meet up with Leah soon.
Date: 10 Sep 2014 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 33
"You see we used to be close, I thought of her as a daughter and Alice the sister she never had. Then she just changed and distanced herself from us all, Edward included."
^
^
^ that statement right there could not be more spot on if it tried. This is a classic symtom of Brain Tumors, a compete change in personallity. If this was real life, I would bet that when Tanya was pregnant with the baby, the growth hormones caused the tumor to grow. That was right around the time that she started cheating with Kate.
Well Done
Author's Response:
You hit the nail on the head. I think Tanya and Edward would have been a loving family with Angela. But fate had other ideas and everyone suffered. But sadly she got mixed up with a jealous woman who was obsessed with her. Now she is gone Kate needs to blame someone.
Date: 09 Sep 2014 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 34
Now crazy Kate is after Bella, poor Bella can not catch a break anywhere...first her cheating husband and her awful Son and sister in law
Author's Response:
Your right. Kate was obsessed with Tanya and is looking to blame anyone. It doesn't matter to Kate if Tanya attacked Bella first. All that matters to Kate, is that she was cheated out of being with Tanya at the end. Also she thinks Tanya may have had longer had she not hit her head when Bella pushed her. She won't listen to reason, she has all ready made her mind up it's Bella's fault. Bella gets over one hurdle and then something else happens. Thanks for review.
Date: 09 Sep 2014 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 34
Uh oh. Now Kate has it out for Bella. The girl can't catch a break.
Author's Response:
Yeh, Bella seems to have no luck. The crazy, horrible people seem to seek her out. Thanks for review.
Date: 08 Sep 2014 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 34
Great. Now Bella has to deal with a vindictive Kate, who doesn't seem to realize Tanya struck first
Author's Response:
Kate doesn't care, she needs to blame someone. Tanya hit her head because Bella pushed her, that's all Kate is interested in. Thanks for reviews.
Date: 07 Sep 2014 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 33
Glad Bella didn't kill her. I hope Kate doesn't go to Bella
Date: 07 Sep 2014 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 33
Well, that's twist I didn't expect. It's a great one! Very good plot twist. It will tie Tanya up nicely and just leave Edward to deal with Kate. Ugh.
Date: 07 Sep 2014 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 33
Thats just great...now Tanya thinks she loves Edward and he will have to stay by her side and pretend to be in Love for how much time she has left and Bella just has to sit back and watch them plus also watch their daughter...Kate is going to be a problem for Bella, while Edward is watching over Tanya and Bella has no one to watch out for her....Loving this story
Date: 05 Sep 2014 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 32
I really hope Bella didn't just kill Tanya
Date: 05 Sep 2014 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 32
Wow, that was dramatic!
Date: 05 Sep 2014 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 32
Tanya got off to easy, I hope this doesn't come back to bite Bella in the ASS...Tanya attacked her first
Date: 04 Sep 2014 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 31
Maybe Kate can get hit by a train or a plane can fall from the air on her.... something very tragic!!!! Let's take her out! That will solve most of the problems..
Loving this story. Can't wait for your updates.
Thank you for sharing with us.