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Bio:
Closeted Twilight fanfic reader/writer!
A collection of all my assignments for the Summer Semester at Project Team BETA's Smut University 2012.
Stories will not be pre-BETA'd. This is a learning project, people. :P
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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Project Team Beta's Smut University 2012
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4680 Read Count: 1952
Date: 30 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 2: The Submarine
The position you chose was very adventurous. I would love to check that one out! LOL.
There was a little bit of mechanical description as Paul told her what to do - perhaps instead of telling her, he could have eased her body into place? That might have made it flow just a little smoother.
I also felt like they went from friendship, to tentative affection, to insane adventurous sex in like no time. It didn't feel justified to me.
I can totally see these two togther, but I think they needed to be in a different place in their friendship/dating status at the start for me to believe where they ended. Does that make sense?
Otherwise, really nice job. Go hot tub sex!
Author's Response:
Thanks hun. I was a little rushed to get this one out only because I had had a super busy week in RL. I had completely missed a lot of valid points you make in this review. Nonetheless, I think the next one will be a little better. Hopefully.
Date: 07 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Consequence
It's tremendously brave of you to write about something so personal. I'm sure we all put pieces of ourselves into our work, but this obviously hit very close to home for you.
It's hard for me to critique because of that, so I'll just say thank you for sharing. I think you fulfilled the assignment beautifully.
Author's Response:
Thank you, hunnie. It was in a way...difficult to touch on because it was personal to me. But I really truly believe the best kinds of fanfictions and even real original works comes from our pasts. :)