Reviews by sonogal
Summary: Past Featured Story

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 ***NOW COMPLETE***

Bella Swan had led a very ordinary life.  She'd married her college boyfriend only to be betrayed when he left her for another girl.  After the death of her father, she pulled out a map and threw a dart.  The implications of that one simple act would surprise her beyond her belief.  She found a home...she found a job...could she find love again after surviving a cheating husband?  Only time will tell.  What secrets will the beautiful stranger she meets have and how will she deal with them? 

AH/OOC.  Canon pairings, with twists.  NC-17 for dirty language, a smattering of BDSM, and the usual lemony goodness.  If you wouldn't read it with your mother standing over your shoulder, you shouldn't be reading it at all!

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, My All-Time Favorites, Ageise02 Current Reads, Single parents , I Whitlock's read , My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 258357 Read Count: 183776
[Report This] Published: 21 Jul 2010 Updated: 09 Mar 2011
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 13 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase

Bella should not be angry. He was having fun and she was there and could have stopped him. She knows how to distracted him. She can't play victim anymore.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On

I actually think Bella has a lot more issues than Edward. He likes to be in  control. I don't see that as a problem. Someone needs to makes sure things gets done. He has had to be both parents for so long, plus work fulltime. He accomplished this because he maintained control. He is not overpowering. He is not cruel or mean. Bella just needs to let her wishs be known and he will work with them. He can't really tell her no. He problem is she doesn't say anything until she gets angry at him because he did things his way. He didn't know she wanted it differently. She needs to change more thatn him.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 - A Real Family

The wedding was beautiful. They are now an official family. Bella needs to understand that you can play and only be D/s in the bedroom. Many couples do this once they have children. The strict way does not really work in a normal family setting. They just need to talk. Edward enjoyed their playtime and did not freak out when she took over playtime. It really is all about enjoying each other fully.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 24 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Party In The USA! (Come on, I had to!)

Bella still has a problem with wanting to run. She needs to stop that and learn to talk. I can't believe she was such a shrew on the wedding night. She caused all the problem. She would have reacted like a normal person they could have had a nice wedding night. Once again I am glad that  Edward took care of the situation. If he didn't Bella would have run away and the marriage would have been over before it started.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 31 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - The Kind of Horse You Can Only Find in Bora Bora

Carlie was spoiled by the whole family. She was everyones little darling. Now she is going to have to share the spotlight with all the babies that will be coming in the next years. The good news is that she will not mind because as she nears the teenage years she will want more freedom to go off with her friends. It works out. She will be fine. She gets to spoil the little ones when she wants to and gets to hand them back to go out with her friends.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 - The Great Car Caper

In reality, Bella would have transfered to the hospital with the NICU. The babies always come first. That baby is too small to be out of the NICU even if it is strong. Besides that the chapter is great. Emmett and Rosalie owe Edward big. Emmett should not have punched him. Edward's being there would not have changed the outcome. Bella just had a weak walled uterus.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36 - Viscosity

I am so glad that Carlie was not really envolved with that creep. Edward would never forgive himself if she was. She could deal with her parents being a little kinky better than him dealling with her being a sub to Cauis. I loved the talk Edward had with his son. As a mother of a 13 year old boy I am right there with him. But my son asks me all the questions. He saids he would rather ask me because I am a woman and know what a woman likes plus I work in the medical field. He thinks I'm smarter than his dad and I won't lie or make fun of him.It is hard not to laugh and accept them growing up. It was easier with my daughter.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 - The Brain(less) Trust

What was Emmett thinking? Did he want to turn Jack into a theif? No one is going to have any privacy now. I worry about Carlisle. I hope he gets over his depression.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 - Too Young To Die

Bella could help Edward do a lot of good with that money. She could help a lot of kids go to college that never would get the opportunity. Bella is smart. She will see why he took the money. He just has to present is correctly.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 18 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 - Life Changes

Can't say I'm glad that you killed Esme, but I understand. Carlie turned into a bit of a spoiled brat. Just because you are 18 does not mean you are old enough to run aroung Europe by yourself or with a boy. She is just asking for trouble. Few parents would say yes run around Europe with your boyfriend. It is ok. You have by blessing. She is living in an altered universe. I am with Edward keep your babies close. They have plenty of time to be adults, which is after they are 21.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 08 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37 - A Promise Broken isn't Easily Fixed

Bella was stupid to be upset with Edward in the first place. Nothing happened with the TA. He stopped it from happening. Bella was ignoring her husband. If she  was paying attention, she would have known his TA was female. She would have been at his school events. She would have gotten the dry cleaning etc. A kiss should not break up a marriage. It was like Bella was looking for an excuse. Bella has always been a runner and she took it again. I am glad that Edwards family got them back together. It is too bad it messed up their daughter's wedding.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38 - Epilogue: Blessings

That was a good ending. I am glad that Bella realized she was part of the problem in the separation. Edward was not ready for the empty nest, but at least he gets a grandchild to spoil. He was such a great father and he will be an amazing grampa.

Mafia Princess by verucasin Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 527]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Banner by MsRason

 

All Humans. OOC. He is the mob boss that wants to rekindle what they had. She is the daughter of the rival mob, who just recently accepted her fate. Will uniting together solve all their problems? ExB


Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: I Whitlock's read , To Read (Geddy)
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 116080 Read Count: 87537
[Report This] Published: 27 Jul 2010 Updated: 07 Feb 2012
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 17 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

I can't wait for Bella to find out the truth about her so called friend Jacob Black.



Author's Response:

Yes, Bella will be pissed when she knows. Emmett too.

Jake should go hide now, because they will have his head.

Anyway, thanks. ;)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 15 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I am glad that Emmett and Edward are on better terms. It will make it easier on Bella. I can't wait until they get Jacob.



Author's Response:

Thank you. ;D

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 30 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I think it is more that it was another weakness he had. It was another way someone could hurt him. This is the reason he didn't want a baby at this time. His world was not stable.

Author's Response:

You got that right...down to a T. 

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 01 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Bella needs to use her brain instead of her emotions. The way her emotions change so fast I think she may have some mental issues. She wants Edward to tell her everything yet she doesn't tell him everything. Edward doesn't mean to hurt Bella. He just wants to be with her when he tells her because she reacts like a crazy person. Bella doesn't tell Edward things to be sneaky.



Author's Response:

E just makes her act that way. She's trying to be cordial with him, but he goads her until she finally gives into her anger.

 

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Edward needs to get all the facts and tell Bella. He does not want her mad at him again. Bella needs to take care of Emmett and Rosalie right now. They need her.



Author's Response:

E knows he needs to start telling her important things, and not lie anymore. Thanks. ;)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Yeah, Jacob is dead. He is always jealous of everyone else. He would never be satisfied with his own life.

Author's Response:

Yeah, he was. Glad yu liked it. Thanks. ;)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 16 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Bella is going to want to go to France, so is Alice. She will want to go shopping. The boys better try and sneak off in the middle of the night.



Author's Response:

Lol. You know them very well. 

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 06 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

I am glad Bella finally realized why Edward was worried about her. She needs to be smarter about her actions.

Author's Response:

Thanks! =)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 01 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Bella needs to realize a lot of men freak out about having the first baby. Maybe not as much as Edward did in this story, but it is common. It is the ultimate sign that you have to grow up and be an adult. They also had not been talking about children, so he wasn't prepared at all. It is in most women's nature to be a parent. We can turn on the mom gene very easy. It takes a little longer in men. They have to see a heartbeat or feel the baby move. Some sign that the baby is real is what it takes to turn on the parent gene. I see it often  in my ultrasound career.



Author's Response:

What you just said was totally what I was feeling when I wrote the last two chaps. ;D 

Summary: Past Featured Story

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'The story of us', was 'Bon Secours'. And 'Instructions Not Included', was 'Bon Secours the sequel'. Sorry to throw you off, but a name change was a must. 

Sequel to 'The Story of Us', if you didn't read that, please do so before you read this. The title says it all, since children do not come with an instruction manual. This picks up right where the original leaves off, 'The Story of us' epilogue. If you liked that, you will LOVE this. How will Edward and Bella deal with a house full of teenagers? There's flashbacks, more drama, more lemons, much more humor, and a whole lot of story. 

Doctorward is there too, just like the first story. 

It's incredibly long because we have the (A) story, which is Edward and Bella. Then we have the (B) story, which is EJ and CC, their two oldest children. 

Points of view will fluctuate. Chapters will be split, since there's essentially two stories in one. 

Rated NC-17 just in case for Lemons and Language galore

Edward, Bella, the whole gang, their kids, plus a few original characters.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Completed Stories, Stories I've Already read, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, To Read , The Story of Us Series, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 706984 Read Count: 467276
[Report This] Published: 31 Jul 2010 Updated: 02 Jun 2012
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 45: Testing Testing

I am happy for them. They need a new baby. They were getting all sad at Michael's party. They love kids. I hope it is another boy. Alex is too spoiled to share the spotlight. They need to keep Alex away from Nathalie. Does that girl not have a home? She is going to cause problems. Alex is too young to be causing all of this drama.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Choices

I think Bella blew it out of proportion at the very beginning of the conversation. Then the fight just went crazy and they both said things they didn't mean. Bella is over sensitive right now. She should just stop working and spend time with her kids. It is what she really wants to do. Work will always be there when the kids are gone. Edward should not have gotten so angry, but Bella should not have attacked him.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Peanut

It is much harder finding privacy with teenagers. Thank the Lord for dance and football pracise that last at least 2 hours.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 25 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Smells like Teen Spirit Part Two

I wonder why Debbie was so anxious to loose her virginity. EJ seem to be a great lover yet she almost wanted it to be clinical until he took over. She could have had a better experience if she would have let him use his experience to start with. She seems ok with the outcome, but it sure started out weird. Luckily EJ made it a little better before they ran out of time.



Author's Response:

I forsee more EJ lemons in the future. He's just so hot. I can't help myself. LOL. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 26 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Half moon

Carlisle has to be ok. CC better fix the mess he created. Robin is sick. They need to get her ou of their lives. I hope Sheila forgives CC.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 31 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 14: So cold

I feel bad for CC, but he made this relationship with Edward. He wanted to be a loner and not talk. He wanted not to be trusted by lying. I hope they work this out and they both need to change their ways. They are alike in many ways and could be close.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: At a loss

I was worried that CC would try to kill himself. He is such a drama king. I was urging Edward in my mind to get off the bed and go check  on him in the shower. I am so glad they got to him in time. Edward and Bella would not have made it if they were too late.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Thump, thump, thump

Go Carlisle. I guess the gun turned on Esme. It must have been a power rush.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Baby Got Back

I love all of those songs. CC is great. I am so glad that Sheila is gone. She was as crazy as her mom. This Natalie has spunk. She will keep him on his toes.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Long Day

These two are so sexually frustrated it is funny. I can't believe Natialie would go on a date without being fully shaved. That is just nasty. I go shopping without my legs shaved, so you know that everything is shaved for a date.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Rescue Me

I love this family and all of their craziness.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Road to redemption

I knew that Roni was Jakes daughter. I also knew that we were going to see the end of EJ and Roni real soon. I like EJ, but he needs a happy medium between the male whore and too serious for high school. It wouldn't hurt him to give his dick a little rest and just learn a little more about EJ.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 43: Spring is in the air pt one

Bella can get herself into a tizzy. You would think with the craziness of this family that she would learn to go with the flow. Does anyone have there first pregnancy after they are married in this family?  I agree with Edward. Emily and Al were stupid. They are too old to not know any better. You might not plan every pregnancy when you are married but it doesn't matter because you are married. When you are dating a married man, it matters. When you are single, it matters. I love this family and I am so glad that they are back.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 17 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 44: Spring is in the air part two

Edward and Bella better watch out for Alex and AJ. If they are having phone sex, which by the way is a  federal offense, they will be doing more soon. They should not be left alone in his or her bedroom.

Bella went crazy over this party. I think she is having a hard time dealing with Michael growing up. He is her last baby. He is growing up fast with teenagers as siblings. Look at him already kissing girls.

I think they misnamed the older boys. CC is Edward's payback kid. He looks and acts just like him. He should be Edward Junior. He is in most ways.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 46: Thor, Loki, and the gang

I love this story. I worry about the boys sexual activities. It is going to catch up with them and I would hate for it to ruin their futures. They are basically good kids, but they need to slow down. There is more to life than meaning less sex. I can't stand Nathalie. Does she not have a home? Do her parents hate her? Bella needs to stop being so easy on EJ just because he is 18 doesn't mean you stop being a parent.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 47: The Best Years

I never liked Natalie. She should have been on the shot if she could not be responsible enough to take the pill. I am with Edward in that CC has to get his education. CC is my favorite of the kids.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Epilogue

I love this family. Of the kids, CC is my favorie. I knew Natalie would be no good for him. She was too clingy and showed no ambition as a teen. She was not Cullen material. I hope he finds happiness this time. He deserves it. You can write as many outtakes as you want and I will always read them.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 49: Alex Outtake

You can continue to write about this family and I will always read them.  I love them. I was so excited to see another chapter. I don't understand how Alex got the short end of the selfesteem in the family. She is the only girls and was doted on by just about everyone. The boys sure did not lack in any confidence or self image issues. Alex looks like Bella, who everyone thinks is gorgeous. Alex is complaning about being a size ten. Bella and Edward need to get her into therapy if her self image is that bad. I hope this Dan works out to be the one, but Alex has to love herself first.

Summary:

Bella, Edward, Alice, Jasper, Rose, and Emmett are back for the sequel to My Boys. What will the future hold for our favorite three couples? AH & NC-17 for language and lemons. E/B, J/A, Em/R, C/Es, Ch/R.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read, My Boys Saga, to read
Chapters: 39 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 97755 Read Count: 58288
[Report This] Published: 31 Jul 2010 Updated: 19 Mar 2011
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 30 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

I don't think he has a stick up his ass. I think he has been the most patient husband around. Bella has been through a lot and  has taken it out on Edward and the rest of her family. Bella needs to stop having pity parties. Edward was attacked as well. Edward lost his baby as well. Bella forgets about this.



Author's Response:

I don't think she forgets this or is having pity parties but when he ignored her, like he did, she starts to wonder what she did. Would't you?

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I guess they will always be the babies and get treated that way. I can imagine how enbaressed Edward was with the balloons on the subway and walking down the streets on New York. Poor Bella has her turn in a couple of days.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 04 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Oh! I would kill my Mom if she pulled that stunt at work. I would not have run away but I would have torn them off every wall. There would have been comments to every giggle and snicker. Carlisle and Esme better watch out. They work at the hospital and they might not like what happens when there birthday comes around.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 05 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I gree with them they are 29. They should start a family soon. It is not like they need to get use to being together. They have been together most of their lives. It is time to enjoy living it now.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 06 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Bella's anger issues are getting worse. She needs to talk to some one. The working out helping, but I think she  needs more therapy as well.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I hope that since the court part is over with that Edward and Bella can do the final healing. Bella did a big step by talking to his wife. It was a good thing that they did not have children. Maybe she can start a new life. That would be his ultimate punishment to loose his wife since he almost caused Edward to loose his love.

I hope Bella and Edward find peace soon.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 09 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I always thought this was the stupidist tradition. If you are use to being together why change the night before. All it does is make you get less sleep because you are in an unfamiliar situation.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

That was a short and sweet wedding.

Author's Response:

Thank you :)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Why does it matter if they are outtkes or part of the story? I just want to read them.



Author's Response:

Thank you:) I just don't want to dwell too much on the honeymoons:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

That girl is pregnant. The tender boobs is the first clue.



Author's Response:

Thanks ;)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

They all know. They are not stupid. They might think they have a secret, but they don't.



Author's Response:

Thanks:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I hope they will be able to stay living together for awhile. They will miss each other. But  I think it was funny how the moms reacted.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 31 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Bella doesn't need anymore drama in her life. I hope Charlie is ok. At least he has a slew of family to take care of him.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 02 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

I can't believe Charlie died. I hope Bella is strong enough to survive this. She was just getting back to normal. I don't know if her boys and sisters will be enough this time.



Author's Response:

Thank you

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 06 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

As a girl whose dad died when she was 19, these chapters are the hardest. I cry like a baby. You did a good job getting into Bella's head of what she would be feeling.



Author's Response:

Thank you. My father passed away when I was 20, just a couple months after he walked me down the aisle. I understand.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

I have been there twice. It is the worse feeling. I kept trying. The month after my 2nd misscarriage I got pregnant with my daughter who in now 15. It all happens in God's time. not ours. Bella will make it through. She just needs to heal mentally and have faith in herself and Edward.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 15 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I feel so bad for these two. Edward has it harder in a way because he is trying to be strong for Bella. I am so glad that he finally got to cry in his Dad's arms. He needed that time to be human.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

I am so glad that Renee finally remembered that she had a daughter. I know she was grieving, but Bella had 2 losses and Renee is suppose to be the parent.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 28 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I hope Bella will find some peace and happiness. It is hard loosing a parent. I lost my dad when I was 19, but if you talk to my kids you would swear that they met him. They talk about him because he has been apart of their lives through stories and pictures.



Author's Response:

Same for mine. I've always tried to include him in what we were doing.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 07 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I think they did amazingly well on their first holiday without Charlie. Bella is getting stronger. She will be fine.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 20 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

I loved the prank. I think the real Bella is back. She even talked about Christmas and Charlie without breaking down. She has so much love around her. She needs to enjoy it and feel blessed.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 12 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

They need to talk it out and probably go to therapy. They have been through a lot. Edward is right . Everyone was worried about Bella. They forgot about what he went through as well. Bella has been throwing herself a pity party for way too long.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

I am so glad that Bella finally realized she is not the only one who is grieving. I hope the pity party is over.



Author's Response:

Thanks:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I actually think it is time they get their own place. They have been living the dorm life for too long. They need to learn to depend on each other first. Now they have their sisters or brothers to back them up. It is time to grow up.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

This will be so good for all of their relationships. They never get a break from each other. Tension is bound to happen. Now they will look forward to seeing their siblings,



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Ok these are adult people. Most adult married couples do not live together. I think Carlisle needs to sit down with his children and explain this to them. They will still see each other at work. They might even look forward to seeing each other. Once this pow wow is finished. Carlisle needs to sit his wife down and ask her what kind of doctor blames the patient for having a blighted ovum. This is not a typical miscarriage. It is when a fertilized egg attaches to the wall of the uterus, but an embryo fails to form. There was never really a baby passed a few cell stages. No one can control this but God. Esme should know this. I perform ultrsound and I know this. Esme needs to do some big groveling to her children.



Author's Response:

Thank you. I agree with you, Esme didn't mean  it the way it came out. She let her anger speak for her.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

I hope they listen for once. Bella can't take much more.



Author's Response:

No, she really can't.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Bella needs some serious therapy, but I think they could use some some family counciling to talk about all of these feelings. They are all carring around s lot of baggage from years past. Rosalie and Alice have their own issues. Esme needs to just grovel because she was just wrong.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 06 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Bella just needs to realize that Charlie will take care of Aaron from now on. They will be fine together. She has to have faith that God has a plan. We just don't know what it is.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

I am glad that they finally sat down and talked. This lasted fight was lasting too long. Bella was getting too depressed. She still needs help. She lets everything effect her health too much. I don't know how she is maintaining her work schedule with her not eating or sleeping. I hope this will impove after todays talks.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

This family needs a better year. Let's hope they get it.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 21 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

I love this chapte. It brought back a great memory. I had 2 miscarriages and was pregnant again. I was nervous and scared. Then  I had a dream where my Gramma Leona came to me and said to relax and enjoy this pregnancy. She said I was going to have a girl and her name is going to be Makayla Leona. I was only 6 weeks pregnant at the time. I woke up my husband and told him. He just hugged me and said well I am glad that is settled. That child is know almost 16 years old and is of course named Makayla Leona. She has my Gramma's crooked smile and sense of humor. Everyone in the family knows her story.

Summary:

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Bella has obsessively crushed on Riley for six years - since she was fourteen. Will all her fantasies and dreams of being his come true? Episode flashback chapter/ Outtake.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/OC
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6581 Read Count: 226
[Report This] Published: 02 Aug 2010 Updated: 02 Aug 2010
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 13 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Ellipsis

Thank God we know this was not true. Bella found her one true love later. Riley was a lier and a weak man. Bella finally found herself a real man in America.

Diamond Extra's by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 265]
Summary:

These are extra's from my story. It just provides more information and will also provide a place for other POV's


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 99277 Read Count: 40318
[Report This] Published: 05 Aug 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2012
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 30 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Bella's Journal Tuesday June 10, 2010

Some people will never understand the Dom/sub relationship. You will never be able to explain the deep seated dedication and love they share. Most people are to independent to love their spouse this way. A D/s relationship, especially one that is also a couple situation as well, takes a lot of energy and work.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 17 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Aro's Recollections

I loved this back story. Thanks. Aro is actually good in this story.



Author's Response:

He is good, strong, powerful but good...Thanks for reading and leaving a comment ...lml

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 18 Aug 2010 Title: Diamond Extra's

I think I am going to have to get a book to know what some of this stuff is or at least what they do and how people react to the act. Some I can't understand why someone would want it done to them. I think your limits made sense. I think mine would be similiar.



Author's Response:

I had a request for an out take, to esplain some of the terms, I just might do that. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment...lml

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 07 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Bella's Journal - 1st writing assignment

Yes, I think Edward liked what he read. He knows Bella is very intellegent, proud woman. It is what he liked about her. She can stand on her own, but she chooses to submit to him and only him.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 11 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Bella's journal - 2nd entry (punishment)

I think Bella is harder on herself than Edward would ever be.



Author's Response:

She is harder on herself, part of that has to do with her past...thanks for the comment ...lml

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Esme's OT

I can see how Esme was hurt by Edward living with Aro and Jane. She saw it as he was rejecting her and choosing them. He wanted them to be his parents. We know this is not true, but she felt this way. We don't know how Edward explained it to her, but we know she felt rejected and hurt. She knew Edward was in a dark place having just quit medical school also. She was worried. Moms do that no matter what age their kids are. I think Edward needs to talk to his mom and esplain the lifestyle. She has crazy notions. Aro and Jane's relationship is the extreme.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Janes OT

It would be very tiring holding in all your own feelings, wants and desires. Jane is a very strong woman to be able to do that most of the time.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Jasper's OT

It was very interesting to learn about their relationship. I loved this peek.



Author's Response:

glad you liked it, the next few chapters of DitR will make references to their begining relationship so I thought it best to let everyone know what they were talking about....thansk for reading...louise

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 12: An interview with Aro & Jane

That was interesting. Jane is so devoted to Aro. I can't imagine being so selfless. I worry how she will survive if Aro dies  before her. She lives for him.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 05 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Beach Ball

Bella should have been thrown in the water. Emmett could use a dip as well. They are teaching Vinny to cheat.



Author's Response:

Was that cheating??? lol....i thought it was a good use of all the eqipment at Emmets disposal...lol...

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Charlie's Surprise Visit

I loved this chapter. I hope Bella is smart enough to listen. Charlie is smart and knows part of what Bella went through. He will be able to handle it. Bella needs to stop this monster or is she going to let him hurt some one else.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Bella's Journal Entry - Sun June 14, 2010

I will never look at a cock the same again. I see many in my job. I perform ultrasound and do many testicular exams. As I said, I see and touch many and they are not mine to worship, but I will think of this when I see them.



Author's Response:

I'm sure your male patients will just ...love that...lol... you know how men feel about their penis...holy hell, the sun rises and sets on the thing ...lol...

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 06 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Daddy's boy

I loved this installment. I was having trouble seeing how a Marine turned into daddy's little boy. How he functioned in the real world and then in their world. Was he an adult to the rest of the world? Does he drive? Is he a "child" 24/7? My husband is a retired Marine, so I understand their training and what it takes to make it through combat. I understand Douglas's need to have a purpose in life. He wanted to have a Daddy because he never had one, but he still couldn't just be taken care of like a pet. He needed to be needed and he has a work ethic. Marines are proud people. They want to feel like they are contributing. I understand his need to still work even if he is suppose to be a child for his Daddy. He can be an adult when it is called for and can adjust roles as needed.



Author's Response:

Yes...and that was a problem for Douglas...for one he was young and had never had a real childhood or even really security (be it physical or emotional) while growing up so perpetual childhood was intriguing besides that he loved Riley...so he wanted to be with him and the age play was just part of the deal....and as much as it sounded fun and carefree, Douglas needed -for his own self respect  and pride to not just be arm candy. Yet Riley couldn't stand the thought of him being away from him (after all Riley has a profession that requires travel, extended stays in other cities and spare of the moment change of plans...if something goes wrong with a his garment production in NY ...he has to drop what he is doing and go there ...right away. If Douglas had a conventional job he wouldn't have the convenience of dropping everything to accompany daddy...so having Douglas be his PA was perfect...and it truly is the most important posistion in their daily life....it gave Douglas the respect he needed for himself along with knowing he was doing his very best to make Riley's life better and it kept him lose to daddy...win-win....and your absolutely right about "Once a Marine always a Marine" ....that mentality that is e stilled in them to be the "the best" "the toughest" "the first in a battle" is always there ...and I think or T least I hope I did it justice to show that Douglas has that instilled in him ...anyway, thanks for reading...and until next time..be well

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Ladies Luncheon

I think Esme is like most moms. We want the best for our kids. Sometimes it is hard to find out that the kids know better what the best is than we do, so we have to check it out further. Esme realized that Edward did pick the best for him. She loves Bella and is more than happy with his choice. She just wanted more information because we all know that Bella has lots of secrets. She has at times double talked or back tracked during a conversation that was getting to close to her danger zone.  She has never told her story to Esme as much as she did today and Esme needed this to feel bonded. They needed the one on one time.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 20 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Alice in her own Wonderland

I think Jasper can tell he is not getting the whole story. Alice  sure painted him a one sided portrait. Alice still sounds so petty and I think Jasper sees it. He knows Bella and she is not driven by money and status. Alice is and that is why she can see the evil possiblities.

Relative Humidity by kimmrz Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 109]
Summary:

Bella Swan runs a public relations firm. She reconnects with her college room mate Alice who has also through the years tried, without success, to push her two favorite people into a dating relationship. Little does Bella know that soon fate will intervene. Bella is soon to find out that "relative humidity" has a whole new meaning.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 165318 Read Count: 19378
[Report This] Published: 08 Aug 2010 Updated: 02 Jan 2011
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 10 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14- Meet the Parents

I just knew he was sending for the family. Edward would do anything to make Bella happy. I wish real men were like Edward.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15- Elation and the Aftermath

Jacob has some nerve to say anything. He screw anything with a vagina and he is mad that Bella got married. Bella just needs to fire him if he does not remember that he is just an employee. Bella is his boss  and a grown woman who can do what she wants. Jacob is lucky to have the job. He has only been really working for a few weeks.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 29 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16-Explanations and Expos

I loved how Edward and Bella put Jacob in his place. Bella was so coy and cute about the whole baby issue.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 20 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17- Closure

I can't wait to find out what Edward wants to tell Bella. I am so glad that Bella and Edward stood up to Tanya and Aro. I hope it continues.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I loved this story and crazy dynamics of the family. You could definately do a sequel with 2 newly married couples and many babies to be had. You also have grandparents moving in closer to be with said grandchildren. It could be a very fun journey.

Summary:

Just when Bella is ready to give up on her dream, she gets accepted to the Cullen Ballet Academy. Will Edward be able to help her deal with her loss? Can she save him from his? E/B, Em/R, A/J, C/E

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Fics to Read, I Whitlock's read , Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, luv2write finished reads, to read
Chapters: 48 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 78309 Read Count: 129699
[Report This] Published: 12 Aug 2010 Updated: 01 Jan 2013
Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 13 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Can they have anymore tragedy in their short lives? All I can say is that I am so glad that Bella has Edward and her other dance family. She will have a hard time making it as it is, but she will with their love.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Does Esme and Carlisle know what happened to her father since she sent in her application? Edward better start being able to control his physical responce to Bella or he is going to be embaressed in class. Tights don't hide much at all.



Author's Response:

No, they don't:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 17 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Bella is going to have to interact with her classmates more if she wants to fit in and get over her blues.



Author's Response:

Yes, she is! Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 18 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Bella has got to open up or she is not going to make it. Edward has got to realize that Bella needs him to be her friend as well as parner.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 19 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Bella will do better now that she realizes that she is not alone. Esme and Carlisle will take her under their wing.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

That was so hot!



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I assume the last sentence is from Carlisle. This was a good chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

I hope Edward kills him. He should have not have touched her.



Author's Response:

Thank you:)