Reviews by jamesofjungle
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella, the Crowned Princess and soon to be Queen of Dwyer is advised to find a husband so that she can secure her line with an heir.  Viscount Edward Masen comes to the capitol among her suitors with less than noble intentions. As he grows to love his wife, he's forced to deal with those who helped plot to get him on the throne.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 46 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 128079 Read Count: 86574
[Report This] Published: 04 Dec 2011 Updated: 03 Nov 2012
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Date: 23 May 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Thank God!  Aro, Marcus, and Caius need to pay and the need to pay soon.  How about a hanging , but not to death, placed on the rack, cut their intrails out, draw and quarter them, burn their destroyed dead bodies in front of all citizens, and finally find a way to preserve their heads for all to see for all time.  A hot poker in the ass would be good, too. 

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Date: 25 May 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

I want the uncles dead, and I actually would like to see Edward do it!!!

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Date: 10 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Fantastic!!!

Popsicle Sticks by Emmamama88 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 31]
Summary:


'That which does not kill us, only makes us stronger', at least that's what they say. Bella and Edward meet as children while on vacation with their families. A lifetime of summers follow, and their relationship is tested beyond its strength. Follow their story through the years as they come to learn that each day spent with someone we love is a gift not to be taken lightly, but to be cherished forever.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: J's Read and Loved Stories
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 94085 Read Count: 9100
[Report This] Published: 06 Dec 2011 Updated: 17 Oct 2013
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Date: 10 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

heck yeah, the present day is very confusing, but i will stick around to find out why.  i could never stop reading anything you have ever written.

i reallly miss v&v.  i know a squeal is coming, but i still miss it.  i am still waiting for the last few chapters of lrm.

 



Author's Response: it is very confusing....i apologize. It will make sense eventually. Thanks!

Master May I by smmiskimen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 456]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Drabble fic. Edward is Bella's Master and is very particular in the playroom. But his sweet pet knows how to make him happy. E&B, AH, OOC. Banner by Soapy Mayhem

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Stories I've Already read
Chapters: 93 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9757 Read Count: 225243
[Report This] Published: 07 Dec 2011 Updated: 06 Jan 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 63: Chapter 63

I can feel the orgasm coming on...

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Date: 23 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

So encouraging.

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Date: 23 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

I wonder, I wonder how Master will work Sweet pet over. ;)

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Date: 23 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

This is getting hot!

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Date: 25 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

Master Edward is so deliciously cruel and tauntingly sexy.

Merry Christmas to you, too!!!

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Date: 22 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

She is a true sub.  She only wants to please her Master!

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Date: 23 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Sounds fun Master Edward!  This is so real life like.  Bravo! ;)

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Date: 15 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

What is Master going to do?  She is already tied up and suspended.  I think that thigh restraints are overkill.  My personal opinion.

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Date: 19 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Bella has to be a 24/7 sub because I remember her saying in chapter seven, "I allow my eyes to rake over Master's body, but never look upon his eyes. I know they are a vivid green from our initial interview process, but Master does not allow me to look him directly in the eye, not even in public."

It is such a shame really.  Master is so very good looking with the most spectacular green eyes.  I really feel for Bella.  I would be in trouble all the time because I could not handle looking him in the eye.  I have no problem when in the playroom or at the club, but to never look into my Master's eyes, would kill me.  I am so very lucky to be with a man that never wants or wanted a 24/7 agreement.



Author's Response:

With your reply, I am discerning that you are in a D/s relationship. If so, am I doing well in relaying this story? I'm not, nor have I ever been, in a D/s relationship but it is always something that has fascinated me. I know in the fandom there seems to be a flood of olderdomward stories where he ends up very lenient on Bella because she's training or because he loves her so much where he's never felt that for a sub before. Those bother me because, from my knowledge and research, a real true dom wouldn't take it easy on their sub just because of love. Training, yes, to a degree, but if they really want to be a dom then they are that way whether or not they love the person.

And as for your theory, I want to tell you whether you are right or wrong, but I can't! You will find out for sure at the end of this story!

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Date: 22 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Ahhh, there is nothing better than a massage after being suspended.

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Date: 22 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Well Master definitely likes to work his sweet pet.  Especially, if he has to carry her to her room for proper aftercare.  I wonder if she falls asleep, too?

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Date: 03 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 81: Chapter 81

Feeling Hot Hot Hot!  I have had scenes that have lasted up to 4 hours.  Granted I am a wonton slut in the playroom.

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Date: 27 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61

I am afraid of air play.  I trust my Master, but with my being a science major, I just know too much about the human body.  Especially, the hyoid bone in the throat.



Author's Response:

I was afraid of breath pla too, once upon a time, but I had one boyfriend who actually got me to enjoy it. I would never let him use anything  too harsh, mainly shirts, towels, or the such, or his hand, and I always had control of the situation and when he needed to let go. Plus, I would only let him near my collar bone area. I know it's not for everyone. I will tell you Master is meticulous when it comes to taking care of his sweet pet and won't let anything befall her.

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Date: 28 Dec 2011 Title: Master May I

Master definitely does take care of his sweet pet when she is a good pet ;)

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Date: 29 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 66: Chapter 66

I wonder what is keeping them out of the playroom?  Children perhaps?

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Date: 29 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 68

That kind of play is freaking fantastic. I hope that Master has  of air her too out. I am sure he needs some release himself.  I know that he already had oral release, but now he needs an in the body release (I did not want to go graphic on the description).

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Date: 30 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 69: Chapter 69

Bella sure bounced back quickly.  It proves that she is a very seasoned sub.  I wonder what Master is going to do next?

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Date: 30 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 70

So caring just as Master should be..

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Date: 02 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 80: Chapter 80

Damn, he sure is demanding.  I am trying to guess how long timewise this scene has progressed?  It feels like a long time since Bella came last.  I can live with being denied an orgasm for punishment, but I can only hold my orgasm off for 15-30 minutes.  It really just depends what kind of scene that we are doing.

Hope Springs by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1133]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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"Where would you go if you are trying to start a new life but you had nowhere to go and no one to care?  Bella Swan has been alone for most of her life, she is young and she is scared, but now she has another life to protect.  She is heading for a new country - a new life and then she ends up in HOPE SPRINGS.  Her life intertwines with all the eccentric characters in this little piece of heaven in Vermont and just like that - she will never be the same.  She meets the Sherriff, the truck driver, the semi-retired doctor, the lawyer, the farmer, and the new best friends, but it is the new young doctor in town that turns her life upside down.  Is he as stuck up as he seems or does he have a wild side?  Is Bella as tough and as jaded as she seems?  Will she run, or will she allow the people in this town to teach her to hope, to dream, and to love?"

NEW BANNER BY YSAR!! (ISN'T IT AWESOME??)

HOPE SPRINGS

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, To Read, To Read (Geddy), Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 432038 Read Count: 218319
[Report This] Published: 17 Dec 2011 Updated: 24 Dec 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Revelations and Goodbyes

That broke my heart, too.  I am so glad that I keep a box of tissues on my bedside table because I needed one or ten to get through the chapter.

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Date: 12 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Lessons and Lessons

I can't wait for the next chapter.  I am sure that you will knock the "vanilla" sex right out of the park!  What is up with the creepy professor?

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Date: 24 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Great chapter.  So it begins with Edward and Bella.....

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Date: 27 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Time waits for no man (or woman)

Thank you so much for not drawing out Edward being gone.  Some authors would have strung it along for five to ten chapters, but not you!  That is why we all love you!

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Date: 01 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - 'On the first day of Christmas...'

Another tissue chapter.

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Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263187
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
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Date: 05 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Balls and Bitches

Wow.  Those women were super bitches.  This is the first story that I have ever read that I have read that has Alice as a stuck up rich bitch.  We all expect it with Rose, but not Alice.  Y'all really got me with that character change. 

As far as Edward is concerned, he is not out of his ass just yet.  I hope that it is coming soon.  Oh, is Edward going to tell Bella why the women at Aro's are called whores?  That would be so much fun to be a fly on the wall for that conversation.  He would have to admit that he pays money for sex to Bella!



Author's Response:

Well we knew that you all would have some sharp feelings about the behavior of Alice, Rose, and Siobhan.  We were excited to see that a few of you mentioned the seemingly difference in Esme and her attitude.   Have faith in Jasper and Emmett, they will be having words with their wives.  As for Siobhan, I think she has worn out her welcome around the table completely.  So what did you all think of Charlotte?  She will be important in the coming story.  A lot of you are guessing that the witch in the next chapter will be Sue Swan, but I assure you that it is not her.  There is a lot of super exciting chapters coming soon.  We want to tell you all just how much you reading and reviewing our story means to us.  This is the first story for either of us, that is getting this kind of attention.  It is completely amazing to us that we are averaging over 100 reviews per chapter.  We want to be very clear in saying that each and every review you have left for us mean so very much to us.  Thank you for taking time to not only read our story, but to also leave us your thoughts.   Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 14: Subject to changes, during Beta Process.

She looks perplexed. “Edward, aren’t you expected to be at the college; I mean, I thought you have classes today?”

I chuckle.  “Yes I do, but I got this morning off.  I am using some of my vacation time.  I would like to take you to see Charlotte today.  She is the one that sells the girl stuff; remember I told you I would take you to see her?  She was sitting on my right at the ball.”  Bella nods her head at my explanation, but I see she is biting her lip again.  I know she is worried, so I do my best to reassure her.  “I will be there with you. I am not going to leave you, I promise.”  Bella nods again as we begin walking to the bus stop.  We take the bus and arrive at Charlotte’s store a little after half past nine.  Charlotte had texted me earlier and asked that we enter through the back entrance.  She was going to leave it open for us, as she had the front locked up so that no unexpected customers arrived.  I hold onto Bella’s hand as we walk thought the door. 

Charlotte sees us as soon as we enter; she smiles and makes her way toward us.  “Edward, Isabella; come on in.  I already have a bunch of stuff laid out for you.  I have done this for a few years, so I am pretty good at guessing sizes.”  I rub Bella’s hand and smile at Charlotte’s obvious excitement.  “Isabella, I am so sorry, sometimes my mouth runs away with me.  It’s very nice to meet you.  My name is Charlotte, but you can call me Chas; all my friends do.”  Charlotte gives Bella a big smile, but keeps her distance from Bella for now.

“It is nice to meet you. I am Isabella, but you can call me Bella.”  I squeeze Bella’s hand, trying hard not to jump for joy.  This is the first time that she has openly asked someone, apart from me, to call her Bella. 

Charlotte smiles at her.  “Well, I was thinking that this stuff would be perfect for you.”  I look at the collection of bras and panties that Charlotte has picked out.  They are mostly plain white ones.  There are some with lace, but none them are overly sexy like the stuff that was in Alice’s bag.  I am both relieved and somewhat disappointed about that.  “Come with me, Bella, so I can take your measurements to ensure that we will have the correct size.” 

Bella looks at me and I nod my head at her.  “Bella…” I clasp her face between my hands.  “Baby, I’ll be right here. I will not leave you.” Bella whispers a low thank you, and strokes my hand before giving it a squeeze at the end.  I watch as she walks away with Charlotte.  

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Date: 10 May 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Confessions

I am so glad that Bella had the balls that Edward does not and told him that she loved him.  She said it first, but I guess Edward needed to hear-it first.  I can't wait to see what happens next.  The law..hmmm....maybe Sue or something to do with Bella and her siblings.



Author's Response:

WOW...the responses are so awesome that Nikky and I are both giddy.  There haven’t been many questions asked in the first 60 reviews, so I am going to answer a few non questions I noticed.  Bella was never kidnapped by Sue and Charlie.  Charlie Swan is Bella’s biological father, and Bella was sent to live with him after her mother died of cancer.  Aro honestly never knew of Bella’s real age, he had suspicions that she was not raised correctly and was acting younger than the 18 he thought her to be, because of the inept social skills.  Zafrina did not know either, but again had those same social skill thoughts that her son had.  We in no way were bashing DCFS or DHS or any other social workers, by saying that the kids would be taken by the state.  If anyone had turned Sue in for abandoning the kids the almost 6 years ago now she has been gone, the kids would have become wards of the state, because at 13 no state official or judge would have deemed Bella capable of fully caring for 2 yr old twins alone.  Just want to say that we both believe that it takes a special kind of person to be a social worker, and we both give those of you who are in the field of social work a round of applause because the things you have to see and or deal with can’t always be fun.  I have to say that the wonderful response to this story is more than either Nikky or myself could have hoped for, and we owe that all to you the readers.  THANK YOU!  If there is any questions or discussions you would like to have or read about past discussions, feel free to join us at TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction on Facebook.  Kasi (& Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things.  Subjected to changes during beta process.

I dropped Bella of at Seth and Leah’s school. Before leaving her, I told her I would pick her up from the college when she got off.  It was so fucking hard to leave her; I just wanted to stay with her forever.  I knew the minute she was away from me, my old doubts would come back.  I knew that I had to talk with Jasper about her upbringing.  It’s that thought that makes me leave, even though I want to wait with her, take them home and stay with them. I am really at a loss for what I should do.  What can I do?  What do I do?  How do I help her?  How can someone so pure and good, come from people so evil?  The questions are killing me, but I know one thing for certain: if that bitch doesn’t stay the fuck away on her own, I will make her.  That sorry excuse of a parent will never get her hands on my Bella, Seth, or Leah again.  I will protect them with my very last breath, and deplete every cent I have, if need be.

I sit at my piano and just start playing.  I let the music guide me, keeping Bella in my thoughts as a play.  I let out all the feelings I have been denying myself. I haven’t been at it long before I find myself playing ‘Angel Eyes’ by The Jeff Healey Band, and I begin to sing along with my playing.

Girl, you're looking, fine tonight,

and every guy has got you in his sights.

What you're doing, with a clown like me,

is surely one of life's little, mysteries

 

So tonight I'll ask the stars above,

"How did I ever win your love?"

What did I do?

What did I say,

to turn your angel eyes my way?

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Date: 22 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Learning Some Background

I am glad that you wrote that he stopped Sally before he finished.  I hate that y'all are going to have him go back, but I hope that the same thing happens and he realizes that the reason is Bella.  Bella is really all he thinks about lately.  I think that is a great thing.  Bella is changing and Edward is changing.



Author's Response:

Thank you once again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As you can see Edward’s view is changing and for the most part it is better.  His time at Aro’s will take a drastic downward spiral soon, once he realizes that without thinking of Bella he is rendered unable to perform.  He will struggle with this mentally, and as you will see from the below teaser he will finally seek some assistance.  A lot of you are worried over his reaction to her age, and how soon that will all unfold.  I don’t want to spoil it for anyone, but I will say that you will all want to be sure to read chapters 17 and 18 rather closely.  Jess2002 who has been on board for discussions since the beginning ideas of this story said to tell you that in her opinion chapter 11, will be over-shadowed by chapters 12, 13, and 14.  There are some really great chapters coming up here and according to what I am hearing from the pre-readers they will make the story even better.  There are also a lot of questions coming in about Charlie and Sue Swan.  First Charlie Swan will most certainly not be making a show in this story, he is dead.  His death is what sent Sue into premature labor.   Second, eventually even if just for court, Sue Swan will make an appearance.  There are a lot of people in this story that will bring drama to the surface, and there is a lot of story yet to come.  Thank you for your continued support in us and our story.  We hope to hear more from you again soon.  We will be right around 30 to 35 chapters when complete.  See you next Thursday. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 12 teaser…subject to changes during Beta Process.

Jasper sets the bag he carried down, and lets out another sigh. “Edward, as your friend I am here if you need to talk. As a psychologist, I strongly recommend that you talk to someone soon. Edward, I do mean soon, because you’re not helping anyone by getting so worked up. What just happened is a form of an anxiety attack. Your fear almost caused you to have another panic attack. They are not just going to go away. You need to talk to someone to help deal with it.”

I look at him, then close my eyes and pinch the bridge of my nose. “You can’t help her if you stay on this path, Edward.  She needs to talk to someone too. Just think of how you would feel if she doesn’t talk to someone. What if it was her who keeps putting it off, and you have to watch her slowly lose it and get closer and closer to the edge.”

I nod my head at him, fuck I would drag her to see someone if I have too. “Make me an appointment, for at night not during the day. Just let me know when it is, I will be there.”

Jasper nods his head at me. “Have a good night, Edward.”  My head rests against the door after Jasper leaves. I feel the restriction in my chest, the sharp pain, shortness of my breaths and my heart is pounding. What is fucking wrong with me, I can’t believe I get myself so worked up about Bella, but fuck I am so fucking glad that was not why he was here. It doesn’t mean that she is okay. She could be lying hurt in the fucking park all beaten and broken. Well, more broken than what she is. Fuck, don’t think like that.  Zafrina would have called me by now. Bella is fine. She is at home in bed. I’ll get to see her tomorrow; when I drop off the bags of clothes. If she is all right, that is. She didn’t go to the police the last time. Maybe they went after her again, knowing she is an easy target. God only knows if it has happened before. Just because she went home, doesn’t mean that she’s okay. Anything could have happened. Fuck, it is after midnight, it’s not like I can go over there and knock on the door. I just want to check on her, but if I go over there she will think I am nuts. 

I pace my floor pulling at my hair. I should call her. I would know by the sound of her voice if she okay or not. Fuck, I can’t call her at this time of night. Why in the fuck can’t she just take the fucking bus, instead of walk? You know what, just fucking call her. Fuck!

I pick up my phone and dial her number. Just after four rings someone picks up.

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Date: 17 May 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things

Lots and lots of things happening in this chapter.  Legal guardianship for Bella.  We hope.  All the kissing and there was a lot of kissing.  Starting a tradition of Edward reading the kids a story before bed.  Who knew Emmett could wax up a great speech.  The end of the chapter was very sad.  I hated to read about him falling to his knees.  I am worried about when Sue is going to show her awful face?



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  Each week I read the reviews for like the first 3-4 hours to see what kind of questions you all want answers to, and this time there are hardly any questions at all. 

So I thought we could touch base on some comments.  We have gotten a lot of Great chapter, sad ending, but it was needed...stuff (and it was needed).  ‘Edward had to allow the pain to flow out instead if keeping it locked inside of him.’

We have had a few diabolical people suggest that Edward would maybe recognize Sue and Charlie Swan, or Harry Clearwater.  ‘This is an interesting theory.’

A lot of you would love to lynch Sue.  ‘But first she has to make an appearance.’ 

Some of you have noted that you for see Gina as being a problem.  ‘Ummm…YEAH!’

A few have wondered if Tanya and little Edward are in fact dead and buried.  ‘In the graves in Port Angeles are in fact the bodies of Tanya Denali, and her son known to all as Edward Anthony Masen Jr.’

The comments people have made on the complexity of our characters though is what I want to touch on the most.  The fact that we have made the characters so out of character in most cases is what I am enjoying so much.  I personally love Alice in the books, I think she is WAY underplayed in the movies.  I love Alice she is one of my favorite characters, but to make her this unlikeable character is hard, yet I think it really gives so much to this storyline.  Alice will learn some very valuable lessons in this story and that old saying a leopard can’t change his spots, does not apply to Ali-cats. 

I like Rose and if I (Kasi) had to compare myself to a character from Twilight that I am most like it would be her.  I am not a royal bi*ch, but I am pretty outspoken and tend to say exactly what is on my mind, and that is how I see Rose in the books and movies.  The Rose in this story though goes above and beyond the snippy, and stuck in her ways bitchy Rose from the books or movies.  Our Rose is a downright spoiled rotten mean girl, who will never grow up because she wants to remain that rich girl who has everyone surrounding themselves in her light to better their standings.  Edward could have married the high class daughter of some billionaire tycoon, and Rose would have issue unless she bowed down to Rose. 

Jasper in this story is one of the most in character, characters we have.  Very smart and laid back, goes with the flow and yet is always there to help calm matters that need attention. 

Emmett, God I love Emmett.  He is so fun loving and wild, but he is so very smart and he can step up and show it when the time is called on him to do so.  You will be seeing a lot more of this intellectual and loving Emmett as the story progresses. 

I hope that you have enjoyed this little insight we have shared with you this week.  Feel free to join us on Facebook, where there are tons of discussions and theories shared daily.  Just search for TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and it will pop up.  Thanks everyone for making us feel so great, we are proud to bring this story to you and so happy you are enjoying it.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, Kasi (& Nikky).

 

Chapter 20: Snow Storms Teaser...Subject to changes during beta process.

Emmett has filed papers with the court, getting Bella temporary custody for Seth and Leah.  Angela, Ben’s wife, who is a social worker, is making case notes on Bella’s behalf.  She is also talking to each of the kids, and doing a home study to make sure that they are having all of their needs met. 

It was not an easy task to get Bella to agree to all of this, but when Emmett explained that if her stepmom came back, she could take Seth and Leah and Bella might never see them again. He also explained that because Bella was now of age, she could keep it from happening by letting us help her.

I didn’t like scaring her, but it worked.  She thinks that if her mother gets them, she would not allow her to see them anymore.  She is afraid that Sue would then leave them with someone else, and they would end up getting hurt.  She said she would rather be there for them to keep them safe, so she finally agreed to sign the proper paperwork.  We all told her there was no way that she would lose the kids. 

Angela sat her down and explained to her that with her support system, it would be in Seth and Leah’s best interest to become their legal guardian.  It took us all a while to convince her that, since she was now a legal adult, and she had been taking such great care of them, that the court would be on her side.  Carlisle, Rev. Weber, Jasper, Peter, Marcus, Samantha - who is another worker at Jasper and Peter’s office, Chas, Esme, Aro, Zafrina, and myself, were finally able to convince her.  So far, quite a few people from the church and Sunday school program have written out statements, all in Bella’s favor.  Aro and Zafrina have documented files that they have kept; all of which have been copied and sent to Emmett.  Aro has documentation of all of the work she has done over the years.  With Aro’s help, and Bella’s social security number, I have paid all of her back Social Security taxes, so she has documented earned income. Bella is also now a real employee of the college. She is no longer paid under the table. 

Because Bella has had no education, we have set up a verbal IQ test for her to take. Since she is so smart in mathematics alone, I know her scores will be quite high.  Once she can fully read, we are going to have her take the GED test and get her a diploma.  Angela said that because the kids are in school, her inability to read will not be held against her.  Angela was also quick to point out, that with the substantial support system that Bella has, DCFS would recommend that the children be placed with her at this point anyway. 

Emmett says that at this point, he is ninety-nine point nine percent certain that Bella will be granted full legal guardianship of Seth and Leah in court. Until the hearing, there is a temporary order of guardianship filed, and unless they take Bella to court, neither Sue nor Harry can come in and take the kids away from her.  The case has been booked for the second week in February, which gives us eight weeks to prepare.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31 May 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Illness and Surprises

Wow.  That was a great fluff chapter compared to the last one.  I think we all needed a break from the drama of last chapter.  Yes, I am so happy that Gina finally got what was coming to her!  Sue, uncles, social services, etc. coming in for the angst right?



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View and being such a wonderful part of our success in writing this story.  We both put a lot of time into this story and we are very grateful to have the following that we have gathered.  Because of the upheaval going on in Fan Fiction we are both concerned that HCV will or could fall victim to the haters and be removed – should this happen be assured that this story can be found on TWCS under the same name and it updates on the same schedule.   We are also going to be posting a blogspot for this story and all of our stories, therefore we will always be able to be found.  So rest assured that HCV will go on, no matter what.  A lot of you are asking about Sue and when her return will come.  We have made no secret that she will make an appearance, but before she does there are a few other things that will happen.  At this point her return will not be for a few chapters yet.  There are a lot of comments about Rose and there isn’t much about her in the next chapter, but after that there will be some things coming up.  As we have said other times there are approximately 30-35 chapters within this story, and there will be around 6-8 Out-Takes posting...The Out-Takes will post under the name ‘Enduring His Cimmerian View’.  There were not a lot of questions, and we have covered most of the comments concerns or worries, but if you have more questions you can always find us on Facebook under TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction.  There are always people leaving comments and their theories there, come join the conversations.  Kasi &(Nikky)

 

Chapter 22 Teaser...subject to changes during BETA process.

We spent most of our day watching Christmas movies, and for supper we had a huge spread of really fattening foods.  I had Eric prepare for me several wonderful dishes.  I had wanted something easy for today - something that wouldn’t take away from our family day.  The dishes he made only needed to be warmed up before serving.  The kids loved it, but then again, we had some great things to choose from.  Bella really loved the extra cheesy enchiladas and the lobster bisque.  There were so many things to choose from that we had enough leftovers to last us for the next few days.  After we ate, we cleaned up the kitchen together. 

We all settled down in the living room after the clean-up was done for our new tradition.  After we were all settled in, I passed out a few gifts to each person in the room.  “Okay, here are a few gifts that you get to open before we go to mass tonight.”  I made sure to pass out the gift bags that held our new matching clothing that Esme had chosen for our first Christmas mass together.  I had asked Esme to help, and she did, but then refused to let me pay her back for the gifts.  Esme said that the new outfits were from her, and that she was happy that I and my new family were going to attend services together.  

“Edward, we can wait and open these gifts tomorrow, can’t we?”  Bella asks.

“No, Baby; these gifts are for tonight for our church service together.  This is our first Christmas mass we get to spend together and these gifts will help make it more special.  They are from Esme, who wanted to help make this special.  There are gift bags for each of us.  Okay everyone, open them up and let’s see what we have.”

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: A Sketching Surprise

Wow. That really was a dosie of a chapter. Wow.  The entire family were con artist. Never saw that coming. Too much information...  I could go on and on.



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the outstanding and wonderful reviews!  We are so excited and happy to have you all on board with us for this journey and we sure hope that you all continue to love and praise the story the way that you do.  I know that you all learned some rather interesting pieces of information in the puzzle we call His Cimmerian View.  I bet a lot of you have more questions than you are asking.  But to answer a few of the questions that don’t take away from future story line here you go.  Yes it is possible that Tanya and Sue are the one in the same, but do remember that Tanya Denali was positively identified by dental records.  Some are asking if Sue could be Edward’s long lost mother... I guess that is a thought, but the age thing would be difficult to swallow.   Sue could very well be masquerading as Bella and trying to get her hands on the money that has been left to her both from her mother’s Estate and her grandfather’s.  Wow more of you seem to be worried about who might have their hand on Edward’s shoulder than much else, so I will relive you of that stress, it is in fact Carlisle.  Between this chapter and the BPOV on EHCV we have had many question how Harry/James could have gotten into Bella’s apartment after Aro did all the security measures, and I assure you that his ability to get into the apartment will be answered, just have faith in us, and you will see.  Lots of new things will come out in the next chapter as well and unfortunately you are all going to hate us, because it will be ending in a cliffhanger as well.  In the next chapter we will get to see Edward come face to face with Harry though... insert evil laugh... but at least I am showing you the teaser from that meeting!  I am excited about the ending of the story; however we will not update any faster than we currently are.  I am working on chapter 28 and Nikky is on chapter 29.  At this rate we are going to be pushing to keep up with the schedule of posting each week.  No I am not saying we will not post, but I am saying we will at this point be sticking to the every Thursday posting.   If you haven’t yet, go check out Enduring His Cimmerian View... the Bella POV chapter is posted.  We will not be adding any chapters to EHCV, until we have the main story cracked out of HCV.  Thank you for being some of the best readers and reviewers out there and for loving this story we are sharing with you all.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 26 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
All of it; I mean, this mother fucker broke Seth’s arm.  I close my eyes, and when I open them again, I see nothing but him. Without even thinking about what I’m doing; I hit the fucker as hard as I can.  I just keep hitting him until I feel someone pull me back. With the rage still blinding me, I knock whoever it is off of me and hit Harry again. 

Suddenly, I feel a lot more people dragging me back. I feel a sting on my face, and I look around to see Aro shaking his head.  Garrett has his arms wrapped around my waist, Felix is holding my left arm, and Emmett is on my right; I have no clue when he got here. Standing right in front of me is Jane. 

“Jane, I don’t think you needed to slap him,” Aro says as he walks over to us.  That fucking bitch slapped me! 

“He was out of it, and it brought him back didn’t it?  Besides that, I get to do the beating up around here,” she huffs, walking away from me to bend down and look at Harry.  I look down as well, noticing that I knocked the fucker out. I can’t help but grin about it.  “Wipe that look off your face! You broke some of his ribs and his nose; that’s my job, Assward!”  Jane jumps up and walks over to her bag. She brings out some jars and sets them in a line on the desk.

“Eh...what the hell is in those jars?” Emmett asks as he gives me a look to ask if I’m alright.  I nod and the three of them release me.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

I love Charlotte.  She is so kind.  Alice did not learn anything about humility from that conversation.  She is just a stuck up bitch!  I am so happy that Aro wants to push Edward toward Bella.  I think that Aro knows that they are perfect for one another.  I really hope that Edward figures out what his feelings are soon because he needs to stop going to Aro's.  I actually would love to be a fly on the wall when he has to explain what Aro's club is, the "activities" that take place there, and what he participated in.....



Author's Response:

Many of you are wondering what he deal is with Edward and the talk of his lost son.  In chapter 5 there was a dream sequence that told a lot of what happened that fateful day when Edward found out Tanya was using him, to get his money.  She was not pregnant like she had told him, the problem is the night before they had unprotected sex, and she actually did give birth to his child.  Esme found out about it, but hid it from Edward trying to protect him.  Tanya and Edward junior later died in a fire.  There will be more to come on that, but it seems to be getting a lot of questions.  Now for Alice...She is clearly a not nice person in this fic, and to some she will partially redeem herself, but for some there is no redemption, her words and actions are far worse than any you have seen from Edward.  Siobhan is for the majority out of the picture, so she is of no major worry.  Uncle Harry is a very mean man, and there will be more to come about him.  We love our Aro he is one of the kindest and most loving men and we are proud to have written an Aro who is not only out of character, but also so very loveable.   Bella has come to trust Edward, and it shows.  A lot of you keep asking if she will sleep in the step-moms room, or if Edward will talk her into it...the answer to that is no.  The next few chapters have so much going on in them, I am sure that you will all have favorite parts.  We love hearing what your thoughts are so keep asking questions and we will answer what we can without ruining the plot. 

Thanks for Reading and Reviewing
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 15 teaser...Subject to changes during BETA process...

It’s Saturday, and we are into the countdown to Thanksgiving.   Alice has called me numerous times, and left well over a hundred text messages and voice mails.  I have dealt with each and every one of them the same way. Without reading or listen to them, I just hit delete.

Esme found out during one of my talks with Carlisle about the stunt Alice pulled.  At first, I thought she would take Alice’s side, but was stunned when I found her on the phone giving Alice a piece of her mind.  Jasper has also said that he and Alice are talking, but not back to normal yet.  Jasper is really pissed at her.

Yesterday, Esme called me, and to my surprise, she asked me if I would still come over for Thanksgiving dinner.  She told me that she would understand if I did not want to come.  She said it was my choice, and she would still make my dinner if I wanted and bring it over to my home or Midnight Sun.  Not once did she try and force my hand.  After much thought, I said that I will be there.  I do enjoy spending time with the guys, even more so in the last few weeks.  I know they all were hoping for me to come, and I know I owe them a lot. I told them that I will join them and stay, as long as Alice and Rose keep their mouths shut. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett, and Jasper, have promised to keep them under control.

Things with Bella are still going really well. Too well, in fact.  She…fuck! Every time I see her, I want to hold her close.  It’s no longer just me having dirty thoughts about her, a lot of dirty thoughts about her, which I still am, but I also want to hug her, lie with her, make love to her, and that is really fucking scary for me, for lots of reasons.  I am worried, because I wonder if she could even cope in that type of a relationship. I have been a pussy about it, because I haven’t had the guts to ask Peter or Jasper what they think.  I know it’s because I am afraid they may say she couldn’t handle it, or I am not good enough for her.  I already know that I am not, but one can always hope for his own redemption.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Nicknames

I know that all the reviewer are harpping on Edward for still visiting Aro's.  I really hope that he stops soon like next chapter, but I doubt that is going to happen.  Eventhough it is sick, if he has to go at least he is fantasizing about being with Bella in order to get the tension released.  I really do hope that he will have his ephipany soon.  The sooner the better!  I still cannot get the image of Edward wearing a bra out of my head.  



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Edward’s view is improving, and he is learning quickly that he is not able to function to his fullest at Aro’s club.  Aro’s club and Aro and some of his girls will remain a vital part of this story.  Having Edward putting on one of Bella’s newly gifted bras was such a fun thing to write about, we hope you all found it just as amusing as we did.  This story has a long way to go.  We have been asked when things will pick up between Bella and Edward.  Well we promise they will be together, but Edward is just learning to change and before he could give himself to her fully, he has to let go of a few things from the past.  There are a few more bricks that need to come down off that wall he has built.  As for Bella, her pure innocence alone is a good reason for things between them to simmer slowly into a boil.  I will tell you this, there first kiss is written already...and Lordy I needed some ice water after that one.  WOOOWHOO!  I know the weekly updates, seem like forever, but if we get things wrapped up and have the story done on our side then we will post faster.  Right now Nikky is working on 25 and I am working on 24 and we know that there will be at least 30-35 chapters.  Thanks again for the story love.  This story is dedicated to those of you who care enough to review!  With our love, and until next week.   Kasi and (Nikky)

Chapter 13 teaser...subject to changes during beta process.

I hear the beep of a horn, and know that the car is here. I grab my overcoat, and I head out for my painful evening.

“Good evening, everyone,” I say as I close the limo door.

“Hello Edward, I see you still haven’t tied your bowtie, Siobhan can tie it for you if you’d like; she’s really good at them.”

I turn to face Alice, trying not to scream at her. “No Alice, I can manage myself, thank you very much. I will tie it right before we arrive at the Autumn Ball.” I feel eyes on me, and my head turn’s to see who else is in the limo. There sits Siobhan, in a…dress? Fuck, it leaves nothing to the imagination, the dress… if that is what you call it. It’s more like a sheer piece in the front, glued to her skin. There doesn’t appear to be any cloth on the sides of her entire body at all. She cannot be possibly wearing anything under the dress. I can see from her armpit to the sole of her foot in the clear stiletto shoes she is wearing, there is nothing but skin. She looks like she should be working for Aro, what a trashy high class whore!  I am sure she thinks it’s attractive, and I am sure everyone will know she is going commando. I mean I like women to go commando, but I also like to be the only one that knows. If I wanted my date to not wear panties, I wouldn’t want every other person in the general vicinity to know too. I don’t want to share! Thank God she isn’t my date! There is another reason on the list of why I won’t date her, or any other women.

“Wow, Edward, you look really good,” Siobhan smirks at me before crossing her legs. She lets her dress fall to the side, I am sure if I was looking I would have seen her pussy. The way she was right now I, or anyone for that matter, could finger fuck her here and now for all to see. I turn my head in disgust at her behavior.

“Edward, are you going to tell us how we all look?” I look back at Alice, with a broad smile on my face. “Sorry, forgive my rudeness. Alice, Rose, Esme, you all look very beautiful.” I give them my best smile that almost says, see I can do nice.

“Siobhan, your dress is very…nice?” I make my statement sound like a question because I real don’t know what she has on. Siobhan laughs and goes to touch my arm, and I shrug away from her.  I see she’s about to speak, so I jumped in first. “And of course Charlotte, you look beautiful as always. Peter is an extremely lucky guy, and if he does not mind me stealing you for a few minutes tonight, I would like to ask you something?”

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: ABC Easy as 123

Now that they are getting closer, I am afraid of how Edward will react.  He really does not like liars, and Bella is lying to him about her age.  I see a huge road bump coming.....



Author's Response:

Don't dwell too much, the hardest thing for Edward will be the age difference, I assure you that his being an outright ass to Bella is over, trust us.  We are Happy ever after h00rs for sure.  Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Well in this chapter you were given the chance to know Edward a little better, in the next chapter you will get to know a tad bit more about the kids and the background story on them, but you will also learn more about Bella.  Alice and Jasper are still together, but Jasper does have issues with Alice and her behavior and he will continue to call her to the carpet on it.  Rose wants the world to revolve around her, and when she rages there will be all kinds of fun things going on.  More to come on their bad behaviors, lots more...  Don’t everyone lynch Carlisle, he is just worried for the welfare of the children, and he will be a saving grace in Bella’s life because he is now the children’s doctor.  Edward and Bella are both going to be learning form the other.  Edward doesn’t realize what Bella is teaching him yet, but he will figure it out.  Thanks again for having some faith in us, I know we can’t redeem him in everyone eyes and there are a few of you who are still very upset about his time at the club.  If you are still upset, I hope by the end of the story, you’re not dwelling on that, because the basis of the story is so much more than that.

Thanks so much.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

 

Chapter 11 teaser… Subject to changes during beta process.

“I am Seth Charles Swan.”

“Do you know your date of birth?”

He nods his head. “December, 31st, 2003.” So that makes Seth seven years and almost nine months.

Carlisle looks to Bella. “Was he born in a hospital, or at home?”

She looks at Seth. “Hospital, mom had a few weeks left before they were supposed to be born. The police had come to tell her dad had died, and her water broke when she was shouting at them. Then the EMT people came, one of them was a lady and they took mom away to the hospital.”

Carlisle looks at Bella and nods. “Do you know how early?” Bella bites her lip and shakes her head. “After he came home, has he seen a doctor?”

Bella nods her head.  “I had to take them to see Aro’s doctor and he gave them all the immunization shots they needed.  Zafrina took them for me if I was at work at the hotel.  Zafrina is Aro’s mom and she promised that they would be okay and said that they needed those shots. She told me that they were very important for them to have so they stayed healthy.”

Carlisle looks at her. “Can you tell me who Aro is, or the doctor’s name?”

Bella frowns at him and then looks at me. It is clear she is confused as to why he doesn’t know who Aro is. “Zafrina lives next door to me, she very kind and looks after Seth and Leah when I am at work because you’re not supposed to leave them by themselves, that is very bad.  Aro is her son; he helped me get my jobs. They help me, but I know that I should have been there, but… I… have I done something bad?” She looks like she is getting upset, and at no point has she told him that I know Aro. I grip her hand and rub the top of it and give her a smile to thank her for keeping my secret.  I turn to look at Carlisle and tell him who she is speaking about.

“I know Aro and the doctor she is talking about. His name is Jason Jenks, I am sure you are familiar with him. I will give him a call to fax all the paperwork he has on them.” Carlisle looks at me nods his head, and gives me a clear look to say that he wants to know more about this. I stand up heading to the door.

“Okay, Leah can you tell me your full name?”  She smiles and nods her head.

“Leah Sue Swan,” she smiles at him.

“Do you know your date of birth?”

“Yes, it is January 1st, 2004.”

“Ah, the twins have different birthdates, so that tells me that you Seth were born very late at night, and you Leah were born very early in the morning.  Am I correct?”

They nod their heads all together, and I smile.  

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I am glad that Bella finally came clean to Edward.  I know that there is no reson to be upset that Edward still visits an upscale brothel, but it still is a whore house.  I just find it disturbing.  Does Maria look like Bella?  Is that the reason he has seen her three times instead of the one every six weeks?  Again, I know that it is just ridiculous for me to be upset that he is getting his needs fullfilled by many others because Bella is now where ready for anything of that nature.  I guess I just figured that he would have realized that he is starting to have feelings for Bella.  I look at as cheating.  As I said, it is ridiculous for me to think this way, and I know that it is not logical.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Doctor, Mall, and Names

I loved this Edward today.  Sweet, caring, understanding, etc.  Bella really is only 18, right?  



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  There have been a few questions regarding Edward and why he is so tainted by women.  More of his back story is coming out, but between having a mother who was mentally ill, who subsequently abandoned him.  The one girl he gave his heart to was only using him for money.  One girl pretends to be his friend to gain access to his friend and for all accounts adoptive brother.  And don’t forget the person he looked to as a mother figure who lied to him and hid the truth of things from him.  When you put all of those things together, it is hard to trust and believe that there is honesty and truth in caring from a female.  I know lots of women who think men are worms because of this or that, which happened, so it should not be so hard to understand how Edward may have this view of women.  Next we have had an overabundance of questions regarding when Edward will find out Bella’s true age.  That will happen, but first we need to build a little more of their friendship together.   I know that many of you are not happy of his time going to Aro’s, but I assure that those times are coming to a close.  It is important we felt in the story and as the story goes to show how he is dealing with his own reactions to Bella.  There will not be any more explicit scenes from the club, however your knowledge of him going will not stop until he stops… AND WE PROMISE he stops going.  This is a rather slow burn, but for this to be realistic, in any way, shape, or form it needs to be.  With that said we will not drag it out either.  You will continue to learn more about Edward and Bella, as well as a few of the other characters, but it is all going with the storyline.  There are some great chapters coming up, and for all of you who still have some hate or anger for Edward, I am sure that you soon will find that hate or anger directed in another place.  Bella just turned 19.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 10 Teaser…  Subject to changes during Beta Process.

Carlisle, Jasper, Emmett, and I, all meet up on Saturday for a workout and lunch. The topic moved to Bella, and Emmett was not happy that he was the only one that had not met her yet.  I, well we, explained that she did not like close contact with people and might say things out of the norm.  Of course, this all fell on deaf ears, because his only response was him promising to be on his best behavior. Now, we all love Emmett - most people do - but he is a large hulk of a man.  Emmett is six foot six and must be tipping the scales at close to three hundred pounds.  His biceps are the size of my thighs. He also has a quick mouth, and often says things without thinking. We tried to tell him this, but he didn’t get it.  We all knew that he would end up trying to hug her, or that she would end up saying something and then he would joke about it, but either way, she would end up hurt.  I just couldn’t allow that to happen, not even by one of my best friends.  He pouted the rest of the time we were together, even after Jasper and Carlisle both said she could not meet him yet.  I was a bit worried at the end of lunch when Emmett looked as if he was hatching an evil plan.

I look at my watch, seeing that it’s almost nine-thirty, and I know that Bella is about to walk in.  I have set up the table with some of the supplies I need to help teach her, including alphabet cards.  Since she can already recognize some letters, I know teaching her the alphabet should be pretty simple.  I know the best thing for me to do, is to start at the beginning.  This means that the alphabet song we all loved as a kid, is first. I look to the door as it opens, and see Bella walking in.  She glances at me, and I can see in her eyes that she looks both excited and apprehensive.  I am sure she is a bit nervous about today, so I smile at her. We already decided that we would do an hour and a half on Tuesday mornings, and an hour and a half on Thursday afternoons.

“Bella, hang up your jacket and come over to the table.”  She nods her head and does what I ask. “We will begin with the alphabet.  There are twenty-six letters in the English alphabet; twenty-one are consonants, and five are vowels. I will show both the capital and lower case letters.  Are you ready?” She nods her head before putting her glasses on. She has them sitting at the edge of her nose, which will make her look over the top of them rather than through them. I push them back to sit on her nose correctly. “No looking over them, Bella,” I say, giving her a smile.  

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 19 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Break In

It had to have been somebody she knows, or someone Renee knew/knows.  It sounds personal to me, but I could read way more into than I should.  Maybe Uncle what the hell his name is broke in.  Hell, maybe it was Sue Swan.  I just cannot pick a character that it could be.  I am sure that there are clues in the chapters, and I missed them.

I cannot wait to see what goes down on Thanksgiving!

I am glad that Edward is not actually having sex with the girls, but I really would like for him to stop going to Aro's.  Y'all said a few more chapters.  Hasn't it been four or five?  I am glad that it makes him feel like he is cheating.  Again, as I always say, "I would love to be a fly on the wall when he tells Bella what really happens at Aro's, what he has done there, and for how long."

Thank you for the update.  



Author's Response:

Wow what else can Nikky or I say...once again the overwhelming response and the amount of story love we are receiving from so many people just makes us both feel so loved.  I know that this story may have a few minor flaws, but we have tried all along to keep them to a minimum.  So essentially thank you as always for reading and reviewing our story it makes us all giggly and excited to see all the reviews we are getting. 
We asked you who you thought it might be that broke into Bella and the twins apartment, and I must say we were a little surprised that a lot of you have it figured out.  With a wide range of evil or rude nasty characters, many of you said it was Uncle Harry...and you are right.  There will not be resolution for a bit when it comes to Uncle Harry, so if you want to figure out what he was looking for all I can suggest is watch for clues.  There are some very important and much asked for things coming soon. 
We have been asked many times for Edward to stop using Aro’s girls for his pleasure.  And where we understand why, we also knew it was very unrealistic for a man with so much anxiety, pressure, cynicism and tainted view to jump into a healthy relationship and give up the release and hidden pleasure he has surrounded himself in to get by for the past five plus years.  He has slowly been weaning himself from the place, and very soon he will open up and tell Bella why he went there.  We have been asked when you all get to know a lot more about Edward...well very soon actually, and by that I mean the next few chapters are chuck full of things from the past. 
We have been asked if Renee will come back...(A LOT ACTUALLY)...Renee was Bella’s biological mother, who died when Bella was only three years old.  At the age of three after her mother died, custody of Bella was given to Charlie Swan who was her biological father.  Charlie was married to Sue Swan, who is the mom she talks about leaving all the time.  Sue Swan is the person who left Bella to care for the twins.  Since this story is not alternate universe, neither, Charlie or Renee will be making any grand entrance, unless via a dream.  But don’t get too happy, because Sue Swan is still out there somewhere, and she has a few things to say.
We have been asked a lot if Alice, Rose, Siobhan, and Esme will make any redemption...Esme already has begun her turn around, and we think she is doing well.  Siobhan, well she wore out her welcome quite completely at the ball, at this point there is not a real plan to drag her back into the storyline.  Alice...well this is a hard one for me.  I actually normally always LOVE Alice, but this Alice is a tough nut to crack.  She is not going to bring in the roses and become a fan favorite anytime soon, but you will notice some changes.  As for Rose, well...I just can’t wait to hear your opinions of her...and I am sure you’ll have plenty next week.
Updating...we had planned all along to only update every other week on Thursdays.  However since posting the first chapter we have been on an every week posting schedule...and we have NO INTENTION of changing that at this time.  Nikky and I have a comfortable cushion, and the next chapter to post is with the beta now.  I got this weeks chapter back from the beta on Tuesday afternoon, so realistically we are posting around when they are ready.  Nikky is working on her part of chapter 26 right now, and I am working on 24 so we are not looking at any lapses in time.  We are both so excited you are choosing to come down this road with us. 
Where the next chapter has some major info and angst, we promise that chapter seventeen will make up for it.  Thanks again for always being so supportive and showing the story love HCV deserves.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 16 Teaser...subjected to changes during the BETA process...

Its Thanksgiving today, and I am on my way to pick up Bella and the kids.  Bella and I decided that, after dinner with my family, they would all stay the night at my house tonight.  I will run them home to get their things for the camping trip in the morning, and see them off to camp.  Bella will make sure that Jake has enough food, and then she is coming to spend the weekend with me.  I’m looking forward to this weekend, but I am worried about my growing feelings for her. I knock on the door before using my key to get in.  Bella gave me a spare key so I could let myself in. The new door has a double lock on it, and is reinforced with steel; no one is breaking this one down.

I walk in, seeing Leah in a black, knee-length dress with a cream ribbon around the waist, and black shoes.  Seth is wearing a pair of black pants and a cream colored button down shirt, with a black tie and shoes.

“Wow, look at you Leah! You’re very beautiful, and Seth, you look so handsome.” They both smile at me and look up as Bella walks in. She is in a cream colored dress, with a black ribbon around the waist. The dress goes to just above her knees; she looks fucking beautiful in it - so fucking beautiful.

“Wow, Bella! You look sensational...really beautiful.  Are we all ready to go?” I look her up and down, I am so glad she allowed me to buy us all new outfits for today. 

I got around her apprehension by telling her that I wanted to go to church with them this Sunday night.  We are attending the evening service after Seth and Leah return from camp.  Since I was buying something for myself, I wanted to get them something, as well.  As usual, getting Bella to let me buy Seth and Leah something, was easy, but her...not so much.  I was so fucking glad Seth and Leah helped me. I have on black pants and black shirt with a cream colored tie.  I push my fucking guilty feelings down and smile at the three of them.

“Yes, we’re all ready.” Bella picks up their bags, and I quickly take them from her.

“Let’s go,” I say as I usher us all out the door together.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Trash Talking Turkey Day

That was on hell of a Thanksgiving!  So much happened, and we learned the truth behind Edward.  What is Alice's deal?  I thought that she was going to try to be nicer to her, but when she was around Rosalie, she did not have a problem talking and acting rude towards Bella.  I can't believe that Rosalie slapped Bella.  I am so proud of Bella for how she handled Rosalie.  She did not resort to violence, and she dissed her without one curse word.  It was like the kindest insult I have ever heard, but I think that it was awesome.  It showed how much class Bella had and proved that Rosalie was the tralier trash.I am so glad that Emment left her after that stunt.  I am shocked but pleased with how Esme handled the situation.  I can't belive she dropped the f bomb, and then told her to get out of her house and not come back ever (or until she grows up).  Edward's story was very sad about Tanya.  All she ever wanted was his money, and she used an innocent child to get money out of Edward.  She was also the trailer trash like Rosalie.  I really hope that the house burning down was an accident and not intentional.  it seems like something twisted Tanya would do.  I am mad at Edward for pushing Bella away when she was only trying to help.  I do understand that he did not want to upset her with his temper because she has seen enough of that in her lifetime.  I could go on and on, but I will leave it here.  GREAT CHAPTER!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Nikky and I are both just so blown away by the response our story is garnering.  Thanks to the many recommends and pimping we have been getting.  Thanks for the response of our fans that make and send us banners and poems and mostly the kind words of love that give us the drive to keep HCV going strong. 
There have been a lot of you all asking for the Bella point of view, and you are going to get it.  The next chapter will have a lot of things going on and we hope you love it.  The age reveal will be in chapter 17, along with a first kiss, the kids going off to camp, Edward and Bella together and meeting up with Sally...those are a few things you have to look forward to.  We started a group on Facebook, you’re all invited to join.  TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction. 
Now to the nitty gritty... 
We both wondered how many of you would ask if Edward’s son was really dead or not, and if Tanya was dead or not.  We want to be clear that Tanya Denali and the child she gave birth to are in fact deceased; they died in the fire.  
We want to point out that Edward is not a Dom.  He role-played and dabbled with the girls at the club, because it was his way of maintaining full control.   He has no desire to tie Bella up and spank her, he is not looking at her as his next submissive or slave.  Just want to be perfectly clear, he is not into the BDSM lifestyle, he is just a man who was seating his needs at a club the only way he saw fit to do so and protect his heart and soul. 

Thank you again for all of the story love and wonderful things you say.  You really have no idea what your words and kindness mean to us.  Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)


Chapter 17 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
Right now, we’re back at Bella’s apartment getting Seth and Leah’s stuff ready for their trip.

“Okay, Seth, you have everything from your list in your bag, right?”  I watch as he nods his head, and chuckle to myself since Bella had just checked over the list and the bag with him herself.  “Leah, do you have everything from your list in your bag, too?”

“Yes, Bella. Edward and I just went through the list twice.”  I turn my head to hide my chuckle. 

“Okay. Well, we have to be at the church in forty minutes, and since Edward is taking us, we have time to double check.”

“Baby, Leah and Seth have everything they need. How about you go pack your bag now, and feed Jake?  I will help Leah and Seth take their backpacks down to the car.”

“Okay, I will hurry,” she says, leaving to go to her box.

I can tell that Bella is trying to put on a strong front for them, but I know this is killing her to let them go on this trip. It will be good for them, though, and good for her, too.  I have planned out this weekend so that she gets a chance to be a twenty-four year old for a change.  After we have everything packed and ready, we head out.

I drive them to the church, seeing a bus and a bunch of children.  I also see Sally there, and I frown as I pull into a parking space.  “Sally works in the Sunday school. She’s the main reason they are going.  She is taking her cell with her, and said that I could call her anytime.  She is also going to have them call me before bed, and when they get up in the morning.  You can stay here if you want. You don’t need to come with me. I won’t tell her who you are.” I turn to look at her, and smirk because she answered my internal question.

I shake my head.  “No, I am fine, Baby. Thank you.” 

The night of the break in, I explained to Bella that I went by a different name at Aro’s, and the girls I was with, had never seen my face because they were blindfolded.  I was very glad that she just nodded her head, and didn’t ask any other questions.  I hate the fact that I’ve been with them.  I don’t want my sins to show in her eyes when I look at her each time I remember that she saw me there.  When the time comes, and she finds out what I did and what happens there with me and the girls, I hope and pray to God that I don’t lose her friendship.

We get out of the car and start walking over. As we do, Sally waves, making her way over to us.  Her eyes hit me for only a few seconds before she looks back at Bella.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03 May 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Weekend Revelations!

I so enjoyed their weekend together.  Everything that they did.  Even this kiss. It was so sweet just like Bella.  I knew that Edward would be upset about her age, but I never thought that he would physically hurt her.  I know that it will probably just be bruises on her arms where he was holding her too tightly, but if Edward sees them, he is going to tear himself a new asshole.  In his eyes, it is probably going to make him look like her supposed "uncle".  He hurt the woment he loved.  No scratch that.  He hurt the GIRL he loved.  The teenager he loves.  I bet Bella does not show at work.  I know that if it was me that I would not show.  I am so proud of Bella for telling Edward the truth.  I know how hard it had to have been for her.  She just found a friend and now she thinks she is going to lose that friend.  Edward has to get over this!  He is not so innocent himself.  He better be in shock right now and think really hard what the age things means about Bella and not think of only himself!!!!  I honestly would like to see a Seth or Leah outtake or an Esme outtake about her feelings toward Rose and Alice after Thanksgiving.  Your Alice is such a freaking follower.  It is nice not to see and Alice who is not super nice and exttra bubbely, but Rose and she take the term "mean girls" to a whole different playing field.



Author's Response:

Hello our faithful readers and reviewers!  We were expecting a bit of a lashing from some of you, and we have gotten a few but nothing like I expected.  Please let me remind you all now first and foremost that we are both happy ever after kind of gals.  Little refresher is needed about ages, and a few other things, since there were a few questions.  Edward is 28 and will soon be turning 29.  Bella just turned 11 when the twins were born, Sue left when Bella was 13, and Bella has been working for the university for over 5 years.  Bella just turned 19 in chapter 8.  Edward is 9 and 1/2 years older than Bella.  Before Sue left, she obtained a fake ID for Bella that said Bella was 18.  Therefore everyone surrounding the apartment building assumed she was of legal age.  Sue needed everyone to think Bella was 18, and she was sure to scare tactic that into Bella.  All these years, Bella has continued to maintain the age Sue said she had to say she was, in fear of not being able to stay with the twins.  Now for Bree Tanner and James...Bree Tanner was the female student from Edward’s Summer school course he taught.  In the summer for the past several years, Edward has been helping his good friend Marcus by teaching the kids who struggle to pass, or are so far behind they may not graduate high school.  Bree Tanner was the hoodie wearing shy and quiet girl from chapters 1 and 2.  Bree lives in Forks and attends high school at Forks High.  James Hunter is a Math teacher and the truancy officer for the Forks school district.  We don’t want to give too much away, but if you think back to the earlier chapters, when Edward had to take a break from his panic attacks, he was clear to tell Marcus his concerns about Bree being abused.  Bella is naive about many things, but she has grown a lot in the past few chapters.  We want to be clear that Bella feels as if she lied to Edward, she started trusting him a long time ago and when she started trusting him she feels she should have told him then.  Edward doesn’t feel betrayed by the lie, but he is more of in shock by the lie.  When he thought he was almost 5 years older than Bella he was concerned with the age difference, mainly because of how innocent she is.  Now that that almost five is almost ten, he is confused.  The next chapter will have you cheering Edward on, and hating his guts too.  We don’t want to give too much away, but I will say this, we are both excited at the prospect of the reviews after the next chapter posts.  Thanks as always for reading and reviewing this story, you all have no idea how much your words mean to us.  Thank you, Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Teaser for Chapter 18: Confessions  (As always subject to changes in the Beta process.)

Leaving Bella’s place, I get in my car and drive.  I don’t even slow down when the speedometer hits one-hundred-thirty miles per hour; I just keep driving.  I am racing to get away from the fear and the rage that is inside of me. I still feel so angry; how the fuck did I not see that she was only nineteen?!  I mean, she looks so young; I am so fucking pissed at myself.  She is still a baby, and the fact that she is only nineteen, doesn’t keep me from wanting her.  I want her, and I need to be with her.  I want her in every way, which is so fucked up. I shouldn’t want to be with a nineteen year old girl.

 

She was thirteen when Sue left her to look after Seth and Leah.  She was so fucking young, and she ended up in Aro’s club at thirteen!  Fuck, if he would have said yes to her…if she was in the pictures I had to choose from…I would have picked her…I know I would have… fuck! I could have really hurt her.  I am really fucking sick! Thank God he said no! Fuck, the dip shit pimp that said yes...shit! I’m sure she would…fuck I don’t even want to finish that thought.

 

“FUCK!” I scream out and I do an illegal U-turn at eighty miles per hour.  I decide I need to see Aro. If I find out that fucker knew her real age, I am going to add that motherfucker to my shit list.  I am going to hurt him so fucking much, and anyone who tries to stop me, too.

 

 

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 May 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Snow Storms

That trampy slut needs to leave Edward alone and then we have Katie at the Midnight Sun.  I hate desperate people.  

I just hope that Bella is going to be ok.  

"Please God do not take her away from me."



Author's Response:

Hello to our faithful bunch, thanks for reading and reviewing chapter 20 of HCV.  Nikky and I really are so grateful to all our wonderful readers and reviewers.  In the author’s note I asked all of you to tell me what your favorite line from the story so far.  Here is Nikky’s from chapter 19 – "Have a good night, and keep Little Edna in your pants. And I do mean your pants. Close the door behind you when you're able to shut your mouth and leave." I stand there for a minute with my mouth hanging open, before shaking my head and leaving.   My favorite quote so far is from Chapter 20 – "I will use the adult terms, and try to stick to the given terms of penis or vagina, but please, for my sanity, can we not call my cock a winkie?"

Many of you are wondering who is behind Bella being hurt.  Bella actually fell, but it was what took place at the college before she left that caused her the issues to be as sick as she is right now.  In the next chapter that person and their actions will be handled, and handled quite well.  Some have worried that we may have Bella been brutalized or raped and we want to be clear that we would not ever do that in this story.  We both agree with you that Bella has been brutalized and hurt enough from her so called loved ones to cause her anymore brutalization.  There was an attack against her at the college before she left, and as I said that will be handled quite well. 

Thanks again for all of the wonderful attention and recognition you all give to His Cimmerian View.  Your responses mean the world to us, thanks.  Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Chapter 21 teaser…subject to changes during beta process…

I make it back to my car quickly.  I open her door sitting her in her seat and strap her in as best I can. “Baby, you’re in my car, I’m going to get you to Carlisle.”  I kiss her head, close her door, and run around to my side.  I get in and start driving without waiting to put on my seat belt. I switch the heat on high. “Baby, I got the heating on for you. We’ll be there soon.”  Please God let us get there soon!  I fiddle with my cell getting the hands free turned on, so I can call Carlisle.

“Hello Edward,” I hear Carlisle’s cheerful voice come across the hands free.

“Can you get to the Hospital, right away?  Its Bella, she is hurt. I found her in the park unconscious. She has a head wound, and she’s been lying in the fucking snow for about an hour.”  I try to calm my voice, the last thing I need to do is break down.

“Edward, I’m on way back to the hospital now.  I just left a few minutes ago. I should get there before you do.  I will let you go. The last thing we need is for you to crash.  I’ll be outside with a team ready for you when you get there.  Drive safely, son.” Carlisle disconnects the call, not waiting for me to reply.

“Baby, we’re almost there. Come on Baby, wake up for me.”  I stroke her face, while driving around the fucking cars that are in front of me.  These people are idiots, they are driving like old people fuck, slow and sloppy.  I commit many driving penalties, yet I am driving better than anyone else out here.  I’m sure I’ve been caught on nearly all the speed cameras that are up.  I sigh out in relief as I come up to the hospital.  I pull up in front of the emergency doors and I see Carlisle already there.  I pull to a stop and he waves to the door and opens Bella’s door with his other hand.  He picks her up turns and places her on a gurney.  I jump out and catch up to him.

“Hey you can’t park there,” I hear. 

Turning around I see the security officer glaring at me, and I throw him my keys.  “Then you move it,” I say.

He catches my keys, and looks at me.  “I am not here to be your valet.”

I turn back and glare at him.  “Then call and have it fucking towed, I don’t give a shit.  My girl is… fuck!”

I feel Carlisle pull on my arm.  “Mitch please can you park the car for my son, she is in critical condition.”  Mitch looks at Carlisle then to me and his face pales, but he nods his head.  I feel the air leave my body, she’s in critical condition!   “Edward I need you to calm down and come with me.”  Carlisle pulls me along with him and I head to the trauma room.  I see them removing her clothes.  “Edward, do you know why her clothes soaking wet? Even under her coat is wet. There is no way this all occurred from her lying in the snow.” I shake my head at him, because I don’t know. I stand back and watch them work on her.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Gifts and Snowball Fights

I am so glad that they had a wonderful holiday together and that it was not ruined because of bitch #1 and #2.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing chapter 22 of His Cimmerian View.  There aren’t a lot of questions about things going on, other than the arrival of Uncle Harry and of course Sue’s return.  The story only has roughly 10 to 12 chapters left and through 26 are written and 27 is more than half way completed.  BPOV out-take is coming along nicely but man alive is it HUGE over 22K word count right now and it is for sure a tissue warning.  As for the few questions we have gotten, we have answers... We want to be clear that Emmett filed a paper that is giving Bella custody until the court hearing so right now no one can take the twins away from her, without first going to court.  We also had someone ask about the title of the story over at TWCS, it is the same as it is at FFN... however at TWCS I have found it is easier to look up the author and then find the story, the story search is not super simple like it is at FFN.  We are the same names both author name and story name at all sites we post at.  On a side and personal note, I am very sorry for the delay of this... after I posted the last chapters on Thursday morning, my mother passed away.  Unless something gets in the way the only thing that will be delayed is this review reply.  The next chapter is ready to go... minus mine and Nikky’s final read through anyway.  I want to thank you all for the kind words shared on Facebook already and thank you for the prayers and well wishes.  If you haven’t joined us on Facebook, please do so there are lots of fun discussions and of course sometimes extra teasers and info too.  Just search for TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and you will find us.  Thanks everyone have a great week.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 23: teaser subject to changes during beta process…

It’s New Year Eve and the twin’s eighth birthday.  Seth and Leah shared a party yesterday at Chuck E. Cheese and they loved it.  Esme, Chas, and Angela all took the day off and came to help out at the party.  Aro brought Sulpicia and their son, Sammy, who is ten.  Sammy seemed to have taken a liking to Leah, as he stayed mainly with her the entire time. Esme and Zafrina both said it was cute and sweet, but all I wanted to do was kill the kid.  Bella even laughed at me and gave me a look when I let out a growl at little Sammy when he pulled Leah away while she was talking to us. I looked back at Bella and shrugged my shoulders, because I wasn’t really sure where the over-protectiveness came from.

Then there were the moms or whores as I call them.  I got hit on a lot.  Almost every mother of a child that had been invited was dressed like they were having a night out on the town, not taking their child to a classmate’s birthday party.  Some even said that I was really nice to help Bella and her kids out like I have been.  I felt like I was going to lose it as they made her sound so beneath them and that she was simply a charity case.  Thankfully, Bella kept me calm and stopped me from screaming at them.  As soon as school is back in session, I’ll be making it very clear to everyone what Bella and I are to each other. The fact that this was a place for children, and that it was Seth and Leah’s first real birthday party, stopped me from performing a very hot, public display of affection with Bella.  I know for a fact I would have enjoyed it, and I’m sure I would have made Bella enjoy it, too.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 22 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: First Times

Wow!  There was so much in that chapter.  How did Harry get into the apartment?  I thought that the new door was top of the line for security.  I thought that Edward was really sweet and caring when Bella and he had sex or in their case making love.

What the fuck is up with Rose.  I know that she is a bitch, but cheating emotionally.  And on someone as great as Emmett.  I really hope that Rose does not get physically hurt by Royce in this story. 



Author's Response:

Well after this chapter how will we ever get better?  I hope that you trust me when I say, it will!  Many of you want Aro to get his hands on Uncle Harry before the police do.  I will not say who gets to Uncle Harry first; because well that would just ruin the surprise, but I will say this... his capture is already written, so feel free to speculate.  There are some seriously some great chapters coming up, but Nikky says I need to warn you all that some of them are rather drama and angst filled.  There also may or may not be a few cliffhangers in the near future, oh heck who am I kidding the next two chapters are rather cliffy in nature.  The next chapter has a big surprise within and MOST of you may be very shocked.  Nikky, Jess, and a few others who have already read the chapter during BETA processing seem to think that the next chapter may generate a lot more reviews.  We may even get some from people who have not reviewed before now, because it is quite a twist.   There is your warning.  Nikky and I have been called diabolical for the plot twist that is coming, so we sure hope you all like it.  I will say this out of all the readers and reviewers we have, only one time has someone guessed a good portion of the plot and got it right.  We of course didn’t tell them, because well then they would know it would ruin the story telling process.   We had a few question about Sienna’s ability to place a phone call since she is deaf.  Deaf people can make phone calls using a Telecommunication Device for the Deaf (TDD).  Special telephone services have been developed to carry the TDD functionality even further. In certain countries there are systems in place so that a deaf person can communicate with a hearing person on an ordinary voice phone using a human relay operator. There are also "carry-over" services, enabling people who can hear but cannot speak ("hearing carry-over," a.k.a. "HCO"), or people who cannot hear but are able to speak ("voice carry-over," a.k.a. "VCO") to use the telephone.  Couple of questions came about Charlotte’s nick-name of Chas, in our story Charlotte was the youngest raised by her father among her several brothers and she was quite the tomboy growing up.  Char is a girlie name and therefore her brothers tagged her with Chas, because it is manlier.  Thanks for reading and reviewing our story, we are proud of it, and are grateful to our loyal readers.  If you have more questions or want to discuss some of the story line, feel free to join the group on Facebook you can find us by searching for: TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT FanFiction.  Kasi (&Nikky)

PS….Enduring His Cimmerian View is now POSTED... Please go read and review.

Chapter 25 Teaser:
“Pajama day is when you stay in your pajamas all day and eat lots of bad stuff, watch movies, and play games all day long.”  Seth and Leah nod their heads at me and Bella gives me a small half nod with her smile.  “Okay then, pajama day it is in our house.  I just need to make a few phone calls. Why don’t you all get your robes and slippers on, and I’ll meet you for breakfast as soon as I am done.”  Seth and Leah hug me before walking out of the bathroom to get their slippers and robes.

After they leave the room, I look to see Bella biting her lip, and I know she’s worrying about something.  “I’m sorry that she wet the bed. She’s never done that before.”

I walk to Bella, wrapping my arms around her. “Baby, its okay. She’s upset, and her body is reacting to that, so don’t worry about it.” I kiss her head and push her hair out of her face.  I hiss as I see the large bruises that go all the way up one side of her face.  “Baby, how are you feeling? Are you in pain?”

She shrugs her shoulders and tries to give me a smile.  “I’m not sure. I...”  She stops and rubs her head.  “I feel like I failed them.  He hurt Seth, and I should’ve been able to protect him better.  I’m upset that it was Uncle Harry that broke into our apartment the other time.  I don’t understand why he did that, or what he was looking for.  How could he do that to Seth and Leah?  I mean, I know that he doesn’t really like me much, but they’re his sister’s children.  I thought he would love them.” 

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: A Shocking Situation

This is just fucked up!  That is all I can say!

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Do We Go From Here?

I loved it.  I hope Sue does not try to steal Bella since she already sold her.



Author's Response:

Thanks again and again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As the story comes closer to an end, it seems we have a lot of questions or comments that are geared toward answers already given in the story.  So we decided to give a little background to clear up the misconceptions and questions. 

Edward Masen: Father is dead, mother is bi-polar and left him in the care of Esme and Carlisle.  Mother is alive, but whereabouts are unknown.  Edward met ‘Tanya’ in college, they had a short affair and she left, after being caught in trying to get money from him.  Edward then shut down and treated all women as if they were not worth his time.  He refused to date or trust any women and he instead only was with a select few at Aro’s club, where he paid for sex.  Edward owns the restaurant where his parents used to take him to eat at, before his father died and his mother went off the deep end.  Edward is also one of the youngest English professors at UW. 

Bella Swan: Bella was born the child of single mother Renee Higbottom.  Renee met Charlie during one of his planned scams to get money.  Renee was very rich, as were her single father.  Charlie ended up impregnating Renee, but he was already married to Sue Clearwater.  Renee paid off Charlie and Sue to leave her and her child alone, but then subsequently died of breast cancer when Bella was three.  Renee’s father fought for custody, but grand-parents rights are not acknowledged in the state of Washington, therefore after Renee’s death the state went in search of Charlie Swan.  Once he was found Bella was placed in his and Sue’s care.  After Bella went to live with Charlie and Sue, she was treated iek a slave and was never allowed even normal things such as schooling, food, new clothes, and every other basic thing as parents we give our children without second thought.  Bella grew up starved for affection, so once she got to take care of the twins she gave all that affection she has been starving for to them.  Her love of the twins is unconditional as is their love for her.

I hope this helps answer a few questions and clears up a few things.  I’m not sure why, but we have several who think Sue is Bella’s real mother, and that is not the case at all. 

Thank you again so much for all the wonderful heartfelt reviews you all leave for us.  It is amazing to us that we have managed to instill such a deep devotion in our readers to our characters, and we are blown away by just how much emotion our readers feel for our characters.  I know that the character names belong to Stephenie Meyer, but these characters and the way they are in this story are in fact ours, she owns the names and appearance descriptions, but the attitude and demeanor and words are all ours.  Thanks, Kasi (& Nikky)

TEASER Chapter 28: Subject to changes during beta process.
I am so proud of Seth and Leah this past month has not been easy on them, but they have held their heads up high and got on with it.  There has been some name calling at school.  Now I know kids can be cruel but the things that they are saying, is coming from older mouths first.  Things no parent should be saying in front of their children.  Bella and I have addressed the school regarding the problems, but we’ve been brushed off like nothing is going on.  Mrs. Crown the principle said that people will talk.  She went on to point out that I was after all, Seth and Leah’s father, and I was shaking up with their big sister.  The way she said it, implied that Bella and I were doing something wrong.  After her rather rude little speech I called Caius and explained the whole thing to him.  To say that he was angry is putting it mildly.  He went as far as taking the principle in front of the school board, and she was put on a written warning.  Not only is her job and tenure in jeopardy, but her career as a whole is.  Since we have proof that she knowing let kids and adults harass the kids, she was warned that a lawsuit would be filed if the behavior continued.  Her biggest mistake was she was aware what the twin have been though these past five months, yet did nothing to help stop the harassment.

Caius informed me of another school that had room for more students.  It was little school that only had a little over one hundred students.  It went from kinder-garden to fifth grade and each class had mix of around fifteen children per classroom.  It was a private school, and ranked in the top ten of all schools in the state of Washington’s education program.  There was a sister school that managed the grades sixth through twelfth, also ranked in the top ten.   Both schools are quite prestigious and expensive, but cost is of no matter.  There are a few nice things the school is located close to where Esme and Carlisle live, but that also causes us transportation issues for to and from school.  Both Bella and I have talked about this and we all talked about it in family therapy.  Seth and Leah asked to just finish out this year of school where they are before deciding.  We agreed that this was the right choice for right now.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: She Devil

Holy shit, batman. I did not see that coming!!  Y'all have managed to shock me in every chapter.  I am always blind sided.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Don’t forget to go read the BPOV chapter posted under the title Enduring His Cimmerian View.  A lot of things have taken place over the past few chapters, and there is much more drama to come.  I know some of you are mad that we let Paul get away with her, but we were sure to not let him get too far.  And as for Sue, she sure is one sneaky problem, isn’t she?  Well we haven’t seen the end of her yet, and wait until the next chapter... insert evil laugh.  I will tell you this much there is lots of involvement from the fire department in the next chapter.  A lot of you want the kids names changed, it is like you can partially read our minds, you will be seeing a conversation about that in the next chapter.  Some are speculating about the Jess2002 induced surprise that is coming, but we have not hinted on it at all in either teaser, it will have to be a surprise.  Speaking of teasers, after Monday when Fictionators posts their teaser, I am guessing that the Facebook group will be on a posting frenzy, because well damn that Sue is making yet another appearance in that teaser, be sure to check it out.  There is so much going on in the story that even I am on the edge of my seat.  I loved reading the ideas people have posted for torturing Sue.  She is a piece of work, but writing her kind of crazy is seriously fun.  I want to say a special thanks to all of those posts we have been getting about hot and juicy the lemons are.  Nikky whole heartedly passes off the lemon writing to me... and I love writing them.   There will be a couple really great lemony scenes coming up yet in the book, I am currently writing a really great one for chapter 31.  Well not many questions for you all, so we will wrap this up.  See ya next week, Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 29 Teaser, subject to changes in full beta process...

Seth and Leah have just gone to sleep for the night.  I’m cleaning up the kitchen when Bella walks in.  “Hey, baby. I’m almost done.”

She gives me a little smile, but it’s strained. “I’m worried about Seth and Leah. They seemed quieter tonight than usual.”

I put down the dish towel and wrap my arms around her.  “We’ll be fine, baby. They’ll be fine.”  I hold her face and make her look me right in the eye.  “I will NEVER let her hurt any of you.  The three of you are my life now, and I love you all so much.” Bella nods her head and steps back, taking my hand in hers.  Her eyes travel down to my watch, and she trails her fingers across the band. 

“Baby, what’s wrong?”

She looks up at me and frowns.  “I was just thinking about my past.  There was this one time that I saw one of mo... her friends when I was at the park.”  Bella stops, and I know what’s coming, but I wait for her to say it.  “I had fallen down when a boy on his bike knocked into me.  Her friend... he gave me a muffin.”  Bella’s eyes meet mine, and I know what she’s trying to say, yet I give her the time I know she needs to gather her thoughts.  “I think that friend was you. I mean... was it you?” 

My hand moves to her face, and I caress her cheek as I nod my head.  “Yes, baby, it was me.  I am so sorry. I should’ve saved you that day.”

Bella shakes her head at me.  “I wanted you to save me. Even though I didn’t know you, I wanted to go home with you.  I wanted you to come back and take me with you.  At night, I used to dream about you, but I could never see your face – just the watch.  If you had saved me then though, Seth and Leah wouldn’t be here.  They are worth everything I went through and so much more.”

I pull her toward me, hugging her tightly.  “I still wish that I had saved you from her... from all of them.  I will not fail you or my children again.”

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29: New Home, New School, New Start

Sue is so good at giving everyone the slip.  She is diabolical.  I will give her mad props for her skills off evasion.  I know that Billy warned them about Sue, but she has to have some kind of help...

I am so happy about the baby.  I just hope tha Bella does not have a miscarriage because of all the stress she will be under while Sus is still free.

I really hope that Leah and Seth are happy about the baby.

Y'all are crazy with your writing.  I am always left open mouthed when I am finshed.  

I do hope that Caius heard everything that the pretentious bitch of a principal said to Bella.  I hate people who think they are better than someone else.  I want her ass fired and black balled in the educational community.



Author's Response:

Hello, thanks again for reading and reviewing this story.  Nikky and I put a lot of work into these chapters; as well do a large group of ladies who have become not only our sounding boards, but trusted members of our team.  I was shocked that the backlash on the pregnancy was not larger than it was.  I was very skeptical about making Bella pregnant and ironically Jess2002 (WHO HATES IT THAT EVERY STORY BELLA GETS KNOCKED UP) said it had to be done now, because (knowing our future plot line) it was the perfect fit.  So if you are one of the (so far) two negative reviews about the pregnancy we’ve gotten, please know that your reaction was shared at first.  After we thought it over it was easy to see that it however enhanced the love story between Edward and Bella.   The gender of the baby is picked, as well as the babies name.  The story is quickly approaching finalization, and with it I feel a sense of loss. 

There haven’t been many questions, but there have been several comments about things that are complete misunderstandings.  So I figured I would list some of the ones I remember off the top of my head.

Edward wants to marry Bella, but he hasn’t yet proposed. 
Edward has been looking for a ring, and trying to his best ability to find out where his mother’s jewelry is. 
Edward is very rich, and doesn’t have to work, but like most people who are rich a great portion of his funds is wrapped up in investments, so not always does he have access to super large amounts of money. 
Edward’s father was quite a pianist and left Edward a rather large inheritance, as well as before his mother left she made sure to leave him money in a trust. 
Elizabeth knew she was ill and left thinking Edward would be better raised by Esme and Carlisle. 
Alice is not a blood relative of the Cullen’s, or Masen’s. 
Jasper and Rosalie’s parents died and in the will they left guardianship of them to Carlisle and Esme. 
Sue and Harry’s parents are dead, harry murdered them.
Bella’s biological parents are dead. 
Rose was always allowed to act out and as if she was better than everyone else. 

The next chapter is one you won’t want to miss for sure.  Before you sit down to read it, you may want to get a cold drink (not promoting booze, but I needed some writing parts of it), a few tissues, and be sure to tell yourself at least four or five times before you start reading – “Kasi and Nikky are happily ever after writers...”
Thanks again for the story love, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 30 Teaser, subject to changes during BETA process.

Seth and Leah have taken to home schooling well; both are extremely bright children. Lucy resigned from her temporary position at the school, and is now helping us teach them at home.  Between the five of us: Lucy, Esme, Zafrina, Bella, and myself, the twins are receiving an excellent education.  They’ve both been a little more edgy lately, and upset about what happened with Sue. It’s been causing both of them to have more nightmares than usual.  Samantha’s advice was simple: just keep helping them feel safe and secure in their home.  We’ve talked about it several times, and I think they now understand that the school did something wrong.  I also know that they believe we will keep them safe.  

Mrs. Crown has been fired over her behavior, as were four other staff members.  This led to the papers getting ahold of the full story of what happened at the school.  When the story first came out, all that had been said was that there had been an attempted abduction. Since then, though, someone had talked – my guess would be Mrs. Crown – and it’s been all over the local news and in the papers.

 Thankfully, Seth and Leah’s names have been kept out, but reporters did manage to get some of the story behind Sue, Charlie, and Harry.  They were also able to gather some information on Bella, like the fact that she raised her siblings from birth, but they did not focus on this.  They focused, instead, on how Bella had to have known that her Uncle and parents were hurting and killing people, and hid it instead of going to the authorities.  

They talked about how when she worked, she left the children unattended and neglected.  That one line hurt Bella the most, and I had a hard time trying to calm her down. Of course, it also upset Seth and Leah.  To say I was ranting and raving over the phone lines to just about anyone who would listen, was an understatement. I had to take several deep breaths and remind myself that I supposed to help reduce the stress, not add to it.  

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: The Faith Within

Wow, that happened so fast.  I cannot believe that Sue is in police custody!  I am flabbergasted at the moment.  Bella has a wonderful support system with Edward, Esme, Carlisle, Zafrina, Aro, and etc.  I am just glad that the nightmare is over.  Hopefully?



Author's Response:

Well it seems that most everyone is happy that Sue is caught, but many of you are unhappy that she wasn’t tortured first by our dear Jane.  No worries our little Jane will eventually be paying Sue a visit.  Many seem to be worried that Sue will escape or get away; well rest assured that we have no intent on letting that fruit-loop free.  She is toast.  It seems that less people are disgruntled by Bella being pregnant, now that chapter 30 posted.  As the next few chapters post, I am thinking most if not all people will understand why Jess told us it was the perfect fit.  Nikky and I have added to but not really changed much of the original story-line.  I love when you all make suggestions and we’ve already written it into the story.  The next chapter has a few suggestions in it, that oddly enough were written before they were suggested.  I know that some of you are sad that this will be coming to a close, but there will be MANY – MANY more out-takes to come.  We actually discussed some future plotting things today and have a whole other out-take to add to the Enduring His Cimmerian View, in Edward’s POV to boot.  A lot of you want a Jane’s POV and well we have decided that it will be the next one released, do I hear the cheering already?  Yep... pretty sure I do... LOL.  We really want to say THANK YOU again and again, for reading, reviewing and loving this story so much... it has become a HUGE part of our lives and we both put a lot of work into it, as well as the wonderful group of gal’s we have keeping us from looking stupid. 

Thank you, and we will see you with the next update.  Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Chapter 31 teaser, subject to changes during beta process.
Tomorrow we are scheduled to be in court.  Since it is the same day as my birthday, I have refused to do anything but celebrate us getting full custody of Seth and Leah.  I am thinking positive.  Bella has refused to let my twenty-ninth birthday go by without doing something.  Seth and Leah soon joined in and I lost the battle.  So tonight we are having a family dinner, and everyone is going to be here.  Bella decided that I should also receive my gifts tonight from everyone.

I watch her making sure everyone has drinks before she sits me in the middle of everyone.  Seth and Leah come up to me first.  Seth hands me small box, and Leah hands me two envelopes.  I open the envelopes first.  The first envelope contains a certificate for being the best dad, signed by both Seth and Leah.  The second envelope holds a homemade birthday card from them.  I whisper out an emotional thank you to them in their ears, before opening the box Seth gave me.

As I open the box, I see it’s a necklace.  It is platinum with dog-tag like disks of metal hanging from it.  The first tag says ‘Dad’.  I look at the next which says ‘Seth Masen’ on it as I turn it over I see the other side has his date of birth.  The next has ‘Leah Masen’ again the back has her date of birth.  The last tag is blank and I look up questioningly.

“It’s for when Bean’s born.”  I look up at Seth and Leah and pull them both in for a hug a kiss the heads.

“Thank you Little Man and Princess.” I watch them go back at sit down, after we share a few more hugs.

Sinful by britchick69 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 78]
Summary:

As the end times approach the battle for souls on earth begins, so many people have yet to choose sides.

 Heaven and Hell have opened the gates and let loose the best they have to offer, the gates closed and

nothing may re-enter until the battle is won, unless, that is, you perish.

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Fantastic beta's js18 and RAH07890- who also Americanises this story

This story will contain lemons...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Fantasy, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 25453 Read Count: 12625
[Report This] Published: 20 Jan 2012 Updated: 19 Feb 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1; Heaven, Hell and in-Between,

Interesting...

Summary: Past Featured Story

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President Edward Cullen decides to pass a bill that will change life as Bella Swan knows it. A misplaced Jimmy Choo and a stupid publicity stunt will change the lives of Edward and Bella. Are either of them ready?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 130734 Read Count: 215884
[Report This] Published: 25 Jan 2012 Updated: 12 Aug 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 How I Got Here

Yes, what will Mr President do?  Will he allow his sliver spooned ass listen to Bella's story and not condem her?

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 19 May 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 The Presidential Bedroom

That was hot!!!

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 19 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Changes in Attitudes

Bella lost her job because of her own action against the President.  Yes, he did keserve it, but if you go after the President or United States, everyone in America will hate you.  Look at the Dixie Chicks..Yeah, if you even remember who they were...said a comment about not being proud of America...bam..careers gone...

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Emotional Confrontation

Brady must be Seth's father.  Rose needs to be fired.  She does not give him good advice, and I think that he is starting to see that.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 Letting Go

Well, I am gald that Bella has finally realized that she has the possiblity with Edward and that Brady would want her to move on.  I know it is ill to talk of the dead, but I hope Bella's connection with Edward ends up stronger than the one she had with Brady.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 Vultures

We will all pray for Cayden.  I know what it is like with master's school.  It is hard to work and then go to class at night.  Dont get me started on all the work that is required.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Fly Jimmy Fly

Hello, idiot President!  The shoe belongs to the real Alice Swan!!  How stupid can people be?

Mr. President does not know his constituants, and he appears to be out of touch with how the real world really is.  Did he not say himself that his family has been in politics for years?  I bet he never had to work a shit job for $5 and hour!



Author's Response:

YAY! You get his idiocy! Big thumbs up and a cheesy ass grin from me!!!!! Others haven't seemed to pick up on it yet.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Explanations

She got his attention.  I think that is what she wanted.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Trouble at Home

Well, arrogant President Cullen learned first hand that there is actually something wrong with Seth.  The proof is on his suit.  I actually had pyloric stenosis when I was a baby.  I stayed in the hospital for over a month after I was born because of it.  Also, I had symptoms well into my toddler years.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Bargaining Chip

It is Rosalie's job to make the President look good, but she still is a coniving bitch!

President Cullen is still a sanctimonius asshole who needs to learn some manners.  I can believe that the stooped to blackmail to enlist because he does not have any social skills what so ever.  His family name and panty dropping smile was what got him elected!!!

I did notice that you threw in the pulse of electricity that surged through my body under his touch.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 13 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Schedules

I still think that President Cullen is an arrogant prick that acts like a petulant child.  Love Bella as the bitch who could care less who he is!

I know about Master work and a real job.  I feel you.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Repercussions

He will probably handle it like the self centered asshole that his is. 

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Diverting Disaster

I think that Bella was very harsh towards Edward when he was saving her son from getting hurt by the flag pole.  I have had to carry one before, and it was heavy as crap even with the holder around your neck.  Bella was the one who was in the wrong this time.

Please do not tell me that this is a story where Rose wants Edward to herself.  It gives me the creeps to think about it let alone read it.  I hope that she is just being protective.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 Handling Things

I think that Ms. Hale has the hots for Presward and is jealous of Bella.  Also, I think that she is behind the tips to the press.  I do not think that she is the man threatening Bella, but she could be in cahoots with him.  I still think that she is just jealous.

I love that Presward is even more attracted to Bella now that he has seen her in what I think is sexy to wear to bed with my man.  Wife beater and his boxers rolled down a couple of times.  It get s me what I want ;)

 

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 PJs and Ringing Phones

if it was me, I would move them into the White House, but the presss would get wind of it and blow it way out of proportion.  I still do not trust Rosalie.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 14 May 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Press Conference

I actually like the shorter chapters 2xs a week.  

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 May 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 Adjusting to Change

I do not trust Rosalie, but Edward and Bella were so.........................

Summary:

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Torn between a woman he loves, and the woman he has, but can never love, Edward comes to a fork in the road; which path will he choose? "The road to hell is paved with good intentions; "I m already going to hell, I might as well do it right!"* Drabblesc Fic* ExB


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed
Chapters: 64 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 85715 Read Count: 62090
[Report This] Published: 27 Jan 2012 Updated: 16 Feb 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 27 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I think that I am also reading this story on fanfiction.  Where the hell is Tanya?



Author's Response:

Hmm... I´ve already posted it there, so that´s possible.  I take it as a good sign if it caught your attention on both sights!  Thanks for reading and taking the time to review!


Krazi

xoxo

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 27 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I am really ready to see where you are going to take this story....



Author's Response:

Glad you´re up for the challenge!  It´s going to be a wild and krazi ride!  Thanks for reading and reviewing!


Krazi

xoxo

Summary:

Edward Masen and Bella Swan, high school sweethearts who married young, have their lives turned upside down when Edward is “discovered”. Celebrity, tragedy, alcohol and excess dissolve what seems to be indestructible… or does it? Can love rise above fame and indulgence? Or does Hollywood truly alter what is good in a man?

 

 

 

Celebrity, Deconstructed Banner, by EvilNat


Categories: All Human, Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 56283 Read Count: 10591
[Report This] Published: 31 Jan 2012 Updated: 17 Nov 2015
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Is this a story where Edward is a cheater?



Author's Response: Hmm, that is the question, isn't it? You will find out, just not for a bit. Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I so do not know what is up or down in this story.  Is he already cheating?  Is James planting false stories?  How angsty is this going to be?  I can handle a lot of angst, but not every chapter.



Author's Response: I'm sorry if its confusing, sweets, everything will all be explained soon. Its not all angsty, I promise. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

how long are we going to stay in this past?  i really want to know what is going on in the present.



Author's Response:

We're almost there, I promise. I think it's important to show their relationship and how it started, before we tackle the huge pink elephant in the room. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

Best Laid Plans by AgoodWITCH Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 20]
Summary:

Bella had the job she’d always wanted, teaching kindergarten in the neighborhood she grew up in, until layoffs left her without a job.  Edward had a job he loved, and a perfect family, until he learned it was a lie.  When both return to their hometown of Forks, Washington to regroup, they learn that the best things in life can happen while you’re busy making plans.

 

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Banner by Rosalynn


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4732 Read Count: 1088
[Report This] Published: 19 Feb 2012 Updated: 19 Feb 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love the start, but no Edward, yet?  That is just a shame.  Can't wait to read more.

Summary:

 

Sequel to ‘Virgins & Villains’ and ‘Love Rescue Me’. Follow Edward, Bella and the rest of the family as they survive pregnancy, childbirth and anything else that life throws at them. Alternates between BPOV and EPOV.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 52678 Read Count: 14113
[Report This] Published: 29 Mar 2012 Updated: 23 Oct 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Christening Gowns & A Careful Man

Glad to see the couple together again.  it has been a while, but it was worth the wait.  



Author's Response: Thank you so much for your patience. I love these characters, and don't know if I'll ever be able to let them go. Thanks !

Summary:

Revised April 2012: Bella Swan is a wallflower. Quiet and shy but with a secret lurking within her soul. Will her new professor and his TA be the ones to discover her secret and what will she think when she discovers theirs? Lemons galore. POLY B/E/J

award


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward/Jasper
Genre: Angst, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, Stories Read by CNYBella, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 46 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 69591 Read Count: 158449
[Report This] Published: 11 Jun 2012 Updated: 14 Jul 2012
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 44: Another Brick in the Wall

I think I know where you are going with this one. I have a pretty strong feeling what is going to happen with each character.  Also, professionally, I know what should happen for each character, but this is not real life. 

 

s far as the no condom situation, it is called the morning after pill (Pan B).

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 45: Life Goes On

I could want to see all three of them in my office @ 2pm!  I have major work to do on these three.



Author's Response:

PMSL!  I choked on my water when I read this one.  Thanks darlin'... if I can't get them sorted by the end, I'll send them your way :)

 

xoxo

tb

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 41: Wake Up Call

"Oh, what a tangle web we weave we first practice to deceive." Jasper may be Bella's savior at this point and time, but he is just as guilty as Edward is in the corruption of Bella. He has a lot to answer for himself.  



Author's Response:

Yes, yes he does... which is why, though I now see through to the end of this craziness, there are still a couple of twists and turns to be handled.  

xoxo

tb

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 19 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 42: Mea Culpa

Could it be Rose and Emmett? or Jake?  I want someone to kick both Jasper and Edward's asses.

I would so love to council these people in real life!!!!



Author's Response:

Jake's a horse in this one, remember?  Hehe.  I'm probably a little twisted to enjoy seeing you get spun up over these guys.  Next chappie is underway... and Iet's just say, Edward is going to finally start making some good decisions, for the most part.  

 

xoxo

tb

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 43: Consequences

Loved how Angela turned on Edward because he did not want their deal anymore.  He wa still giving her A's regardless.  She is just a very smart jealous girl.  She got him good.  I want Edward in my office so I could pick his brain.  Jasper thinks he will lose Bella after his confession, but I think that she will forgive him eventually. Normally, I could tell which character is going to end up doing in the end.  I just do not know what your twisted mind. ;)

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 14 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 46: In Clear Sight

I knew Rose's new employee was Alice.  It should be almost full circle for Edward and his life.  I think that it would help him to talk to Alec about what his sister and friend did to him.  I think I have a handle on Bella's personality, and how she is going to handle the information Jasper is going to tell her.  With you throwing Alice into the mix, I have to change my analysis of each character.  

Summary:

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Welcome to part 3 of the storm series. Sixteen years after Weather the Storm. Follow the Skip, Bella, and their kids - now older, wiser, and enmeshed in the family business. How will Edward cope with trying to teach Damion and Sonny the ropes, keeping Kylie out of trouble, and Bella happy? Does he still have what it takes to juggle all his duties? Mobward. OOC. AU. Romance/Humor/crime.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, All Time Favorites, Storm Series, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 54 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 549405 Read Count: 806550
[Report This] Published: 24 Aug 2012 Updated: 22 May 2013
Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed
Date: 18 Dec 2022 Title: Chapter 19: Shaky and Jack

 

You are such an amazing writer. I am having a very hard time with the Sonny

/Maggie relationship. To some people it will not matter. Unfortunately, it does matter very much to me. When I was 17, I started working. My boss was 29. He played with my head for four years. Yes, we did have sex after my 18 birthday.He took advantage of me. I do not know if I can look past their relationship. It is just so wrong in my eyes.  Heck, I had an issue with Maggie and Dame, too. He was only 6 1/2 years older. I guess I must be jaded after what happened to me. I also believe that Lauren should be arrested for what she did to 14 year old Dame. She called him Skip.  Her only way yo have sex with Edward was to rape his 14 year old. It was so sick.