Reviews by Raybilly
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Edward was 19.  Bella was 13.  They were next door neighbors.  Charlie was the chief of police.  Carlisle was a doctor at the local hospital. 

Edward’s little sister Alice was also 13 and Bella’s best friend. 

While home from college for the summer, Edward spent time with his little sister and her best friend so their parents could all go out for dinner.

Over the next several years, Edward and Bella became good friends, until the summer she turned 16 when she transformed before his eyes.

 

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AH, ExB, Mostly EPOV, sort of coming-of-age, hopefully a little poignant, with a splash of angst until Bella's at least seventeen.  Mature for language, eventual lemons and a very spunky Bella.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance, Young Adult
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77808 Read Count: 67190
[Report This] Published: 31 Jul 2012 Updated: 08 Jan 2014
Reviewer: Raybilly Signed
Date: 19 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 26: The Dream

Nothing is happening, 24 wasted chapters, so I am leaving you to it. Hopefully you get to the point eventually but I'm out of here.

Summary: Past Featured Story

This is a "What if" story-What if Ana said "No" to Christian immediately after seeing the Playroom for the first time. Would they find their way together or live their lives in different worlds?


Categories: Fifty Shades Trilogy
Characters: Anastasia Steele/Christian Grey
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Happily Ever After, Love and Faith, Pure Romance, Spicy
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 72556 Read Count: 30609
[Report This] Published: 17 Dec 2013 Updated: 14 Nov 2014
Reviewer: Raybilly Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Third Time's the Charm? - Chapter 15

Nice twists to get there, but after all the effort to get there it was not very sexxy, sorry but the love scene was to short and perfunctual. He just slammed it in and did it. Endings make and break stories because it takes so long to get there I want them to be in context with the story and then memorable and when it's a root at least it should excite me and the description of this one left me flaccid. But that's just me hopefully other engaged with it more. All the rest of the story was good and kept me interested. Overall wel done.