Reviews by MrShyRockstar
The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight

 

 

TPW Avi 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1625140
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Contest Nomination

Omg.


OH my FUCKING God.

 

I have NO Words, NO FUCKNIG WORDS! This story left me speechless. I cried, I feared, I struggled, I screamed and raged. I felt so much and at times I felt numb. I had a constant batch of tears in my eyes and always felt suspense and fear. This story left me speechless. There were times it felt like way too much and all I wanted to do was skip to the end. I had to keep reminding myself that she would have a happy ending. But it was so hard to remember, Bella went through so much.

 

The all went through so much.

 

when she asked Edward to let her go I was so upset because he had tried so hard to change, but in the end they still got married and I am soo happy. So so happy. Bella was the catalyst for them standing up and ending a generation of evil. She helped Edward and with the three united they were able to stand up and change more.

 

Omg I just loved this. I hate that its over, but I so love it. Thank you for writing this. Its so hard for me to imagine that stuff like this really does happen and I can't imagine the people who are sick and twisted and who do such things like this. Thank you for writing this thank you (:

Much much much much MUCH Love to you (:

~Panda~ <3 <3 <3



Author's Response:

Wow! Thank you for your kind words. This story was very hard to write, but I'm glad I did it. I've received so many emails since this journey began from people who either faced some sort of abuse at the hand of a loved one or knew someone who had. I even received an email from a reader whose grandmother was purchased by her grandfather. Her story was not a HEA.

I hope you'll check out my other stories as well as my original work available through twcs ph.

The Darkness of Perfection is my original novel based loosely on the concept of TPW, but with new characters and a completely new plotline. Don't assume anything. I'm working on the sequel and hope to have it out by the end of next year.

Blind Faith is completely original and tells the story of a girl loved by two men. The choices she makes shape and change her and those around her.

Thanks again for reading!

Mic

Better Than Perfect by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 103]
Summary:

Alice & Jasper's story from The Perfect Wife.Takes place 2 years before TPW covering the first few months of their marriage.


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 12187 Read Count: 19229
[Report This] Published: 25 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Contest Nomination

ah fuck what the fuck please finish this D: I was so excited to see Jasper and Alices story! And Im not even a J/A fan XD Lol but I loved TPW and realy really want to see how this one goes :( Fuck.. I just love your writing and and I feel sooo bad for Alice, and for Jasper because he was raised that way he doesn't know better but ya can kinda see his inner kindness :P Lol.

 

Fuck..

xoxo

Panda



Author's Response:

After TPW I needed a break from their "world". Don't worry though I plan to pick it back up very soon.

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 22 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I totally understand the need for a break :) Ahhh I'm glad to know you will. I happened to just run across it and was like "noo wait noooo I need more" XD Take your time :) Glad to know you don't plan to just scrap it all together!

XOXO



Author's Response:

Thanks for understanding!

A Family Affair by nickeyd26 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 53]
Summary:

This story picks up a year after Edward and Bella were married.  He changed her on their honeymoon and there was no baby or confrontation with the Volturi.  Bella realizes as they return from a trip to celebrate their first anniversary that the Cullens have been keeping a secret from her.  Now, they want her to join in on the fun.

 

This story contains slash, fem-slash, polyamorous groupings…ah hell.  It is a damned sexual buffet.  If you are not into that sort of thing or if you are under 18, then just move along little ones.  This story is NOT for you.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, One-Shot, Slash
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11296 Read Count: 13861
[Report This] Published: 23 Nov 2010 Updated: 23 Nov 2010
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 25 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- A Family Affair

I liked it and I feel like I need a cup of brain bleach! HA ha omg that was wonderful (: It was beautiful yet strange at the same time. I've never seen anything like this :O Its like. .it stole my words!!!!! :)!!!!!!!!!

 

Muuucch love

Panda



Author's Response:

Panda,

Thanks so very much for the rating and review.  It gives me the giggles when I render people wordless. ;)

All my best,

Nickey

Summary: Past Featured Story

What if Edward did not take the dramatic route and wait till noon to step into the sun in Volterra?  What if Alice and Bella were incapable of getting to him in time?  What if he was not the only casualty of bad timing and misread visions?

 

This story takes us down an alternate path than what we followed in New Moon.  The Cullen’s are no longer whole and Bella is so badly damaged that she may be unreachable as she closes herself off to the pain of the outside world.

 

Can a new love save her?  Can his voice pull her from the darkness?

 

This story is rated NC-17 for major angst, suicide and the possibility of far off lemons (who am I kidding?  If you have read any of my stories, you know there will be lemons…but not for a while).

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 140978 Read Count: 74032
[Report This] Published: 24 Dec 2010 Updated: 10 Apr 2012
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 09 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27- Reunited

Ah :D I loved the chapter.

ooh whose idea was it? Nnooo I have to go find it now!!!!!!! LOL! Ah. omg anyways I loved this chapter. I still cant stand Kate : Im glad Irina and Tanya apologized -ugh- and whooo is the mysterious cutie -wiggles eyebrows- I have a few ideas.. but.. -licks lips-

Mmm.. Update whenever you can :) I can't wait to see what happens next. I hope this story doesn't continue to feel like a burden to you!!



Author's Response:

Ahhh, thank you so much for the review.  I don't know if this ever felt like a burden, but it is definately not free flowing as it used to.  My mind wants to move on to other ideas, but I swear I will finish this one!  Thanks for the love.

Till next time

Nickey

Summary: Past Featured Story

You'll Find What You're Looking For At Walmart

What happens when a lonely and betrayed vampire meets his mate at Walmart?  He claims her, of course.  Join Peter and Bella as they band together with their ragtag team of friends to creatively exact revenge on those who did them wrong.  Peter x Bella pairing.

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 46 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 301749 Read Count: 81720
[Report This] Published: 07 Mar 2011 Updated: 12 Mar 2018
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 14 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH -SCREAMS-  FUCK NOOOO! I didn't wanna catch up with you D: Thats what I get for reading continously for days on end... gah.. :(

 

Susie is a good mommy :P I enjoy it. And yes thats the best way for them to learn how to make decisions on their own, they need a strong parental figure(s) staying strict and steady with them. I llike Peter's trip :D So happy he gets to eat human food again :) I know he's missed it. I also like his whole "I should've listened when mama read me Snow white" thought ahahaha. Yes I was shocked :( Poor bella shouldn't have had to live through that, but I can see how that would make her strive to want peace in the world--which could lead to her gift. I like Didyme's story :P And I like that she mated to TAha Aki tooo!!

 

Okay, my own thought real quick is I'm fucking AMAZED you can keep anything straight in this story! Lol like, with all these people here.. and the time lines and generations and all that shit... I'm proud of you for being able to do that because I dont know if I could lol. I enjoy how this story started out as a simple plan of revenge that led them to finding out all this other shit which allowed them to find out ahead of time the Cullen's master plan! which is sooo fucking wrong I hope they fucking die horrible terrible deaths :( Grr!

Every now and then I'll see you make a mistake, like you'll make a person be off somewhere then the next sentence it seems as if he/she is there instead of gone or whatever. You don't do it often but every now and then you'll make a mistake that confuses the story. I don't want to sound rude, because.. I love your story so much and would hate to make you upset but i just wanna give a suggestion and I'm sorry if its unfounded, but maybe you could get someone else to look over the chapters for you before you post so they can catch anything that doesn't match up with something previously said? I mean its an easy mistake to make when trying to keep up with all the people you are trying to keep up with so I totally understand.

 

Alright, can't wait for the next chapter :D! Hope you update soon!!!



Author's Response:

You're right, Sue is a great mom.

With Pete's spirit journey, I wanted to show the contrast between his fabulous childhood and Bella's atrocious one.  

I had to give Didyme an happy ending.

As for your suggestion that I have someone look over the chapter, don't worry--I don't think you're rude, but I truly do work better on my own.  

Next chapter up tomorrow.  XOXO

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 22 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh okay I understand that :) I was just putting it out there. Like I said you rarely do it but when you do I get confused by who you actually mean. I won't push though because I understand some people do work better on their own :) Yay new chapter soon? Awesome! xoxo

Summary:

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People can't eat people alive, and frozen men don't exist. Bella's secret knowledge of vampires is inadvertently brought to surface when she & her friends are all thrown in the path of fate.

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 90817 Read Count: 20308
[Report This] Published: 10 Sep 2011 Updated: 17 Oct 2012
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 11 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Uwah. I love this story its so.. fucking amazing! :D! Its like super duper awesome dude like amazingly fantastically fucktastic ^_^

I like that Jasper did that for Bella and how he changed Bella :) That was just so perfect. Ahaha it makes me giggle to see how Lauren and Jess woke up but its almost fitting for them... they are always so dramatic so why wouldn't them becoming newborns be dramatic as well? And no, that poor poor delievery man :(

-Panda



Author's Response:

Hi Panda,

Aw, thanks for the compliments on my story!  I'm enjoying writing this one.

Jasper is a sensitive guy and he realized that Bella seeing her best friends lose their lives in front of her was a huge stressor.  Yes, Lauren and Jess had dramatic wake-ups because they're drama queens and the delivery man?  Hehe.  XOXO

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 22 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You're very welcome !I can tell, this one is pretty epic :D

Yeah Jasper seems to be a sensitive guy :) I'm glad he is though, because Bella sometimes needs that.

XOXO



Author's Response:

Jasper is definitely sensitive and so is Bella--that's why they're both empaths.  :)  XOXO

Chasing Carlisle by 7 Ace Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

Bella discovers her feelings for Carlisle and decides to act on them. Along the way, she finds out there was some dishonesty and that she holds the heart of the Cullen patriarch and the chldren. Follow her path. Lemons.

 


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: One-Shot, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5385 Read Count: 1383
[Report This] Published: 05 Dec 2011 Updated: 05 Dec 2011
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 15 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: ~Chasing Carlisle~

:P It wasn't the best, but it was really good and pretty decent compared to some stories out there. If you had decided to make this a full fledge story you could have gone far with it :) but for a oneshot its really wonderful. I loved it. Thanks for writing it!

 

xoxo

Panda



Author's Response:

I'm thinking of rewriting it to make it better... do you have any ideas or suggestions?

A Different Direction by 7 Ace Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 2]
Summary:

I never thought I'd end up here with my imprint. I never thought that a leech could be my imprint...let alone him...the bronze haired held back one. But now he's mine. My Edward.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Edward/Jacob (slash)
Genre: Drama, One-Shot, Romance, Slash
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7857 Read Count: 601
[Report This] Published: 05 Dec 2011 Updated: 05 Dec 2011
Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 1: ~A Different Direction~

OKAY Uhm so I didn't actually read this(if I'm.. reviewing a story) I am just trying to get back in contact with you since you asked me a question! But your contact thing is disabled and I can only leave one review per chapter (how lame)

So this is my response to the question you asked about Chasing Carlisle:

Wellll lets see.

I think that all depends on if you were wanting to make it a shortstory or if you were wanting to keep it as an OS.

Regardless you jump around too much, making everything seem as if its happenening so fast. I can understand due to it being an OS but if you could make it seem more slow paced, not jump from one thing to the next it would help the story a lot. If that makes sense?

I suggest you make it a story and space it out into chapters, having the first chapter be them finding out about Esme/Edward. The next about Carlisle running off. Maybe have a few in his POV. Make the next few(or so so) chapters about the chase, him leaving notes and her trying to find him. Have it in both of their POV's this whole time leaving us on the edge of suspense. Then finally have her finding him. Maybe have a few chapters of them exploring their new found 'realtionship', talk about their hurts but how it led to 'them'. Ya'know? Then have a chapter of the family argument, Esme/Edward giving their POV's on what happened, but dont make it so quick or dramatic(Well dramatic just not in such a fast outlashing fashion?) Annnddd. Then you could have a chapter or two of them going about their newfound relationship together now that everything is past?

Just my suggestions :D I really liked this story so I would love to see it expanded on and written out in more detail ya'know?

: If you have Any more questions or want to correspond more about this Pleeasse email me at LawlietLynn@Hotmail.com okay :D I'm not good at working TWCS website so I'm behind on how it all works but I can do emails really well haha.

 

Have a great day!!