Reviews by Zorantha
Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4248]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1254394
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: Zorantha Signed
Date: 29 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 84: Chapter 84

Why anyone with any sense would compare your story to Master of the Universe is beyond my understanding.  The story lines are completely different.  Your characters are completely different.  Your Edward is not a bacly damaged man trying to cope with that damage.  Your Edward is not a mega-millionaire.  Though you've never really discussed it, your Edward is comfortable rich, but not extravagantly so.  Your Edward is a Dom because that is his personality.  Your Bella is submissive, not co-dependant.  

I love Master of the Universe and have read it many times.  But your story is just as good, and I am enjoying it so much that I get notices on it from both Fan Fiction and TWCS.  Your story I read as soon after getting notification as I can.  Other stories wait until I have time.  

I am a bit surprised that you don't get compared to People Like Us, where Bella is an emotionally damaged, insecure girl who becomes a live-in submissive and is making her journey of discovery of strength through submission.  But again, completely different story lines, completely different characters.

As frustrating as it is to be slammed by critisism, re-read the good reviews.  I am sure they overwhelm the bad.  And if the bad ones made invalid comparisons, then they deserve no recognition.

By the way, anyone who didn't understand that Edward did not rape Bella missed something while reading your story and should read it again from the beginning.

 

Shhh... by Robshandmonkey Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 61]
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Alyssa Jordan is about to enter a world she has only read about in books, but longs to experience. Her naive curiosity lands her in the wrong BDSM club, snaring the attention of the clubs owner.

Nicholas Anthony is a notorious bad boy and the owner of Taboo. 

One night, he spots a new face in the middle of his members only club. He is forced to confront her and find out how she managed to get in. He is blindsided by the attraction he has for the girl with a razor sharp tongue and defiant streak. 

His Dominant persona is about to be tested, and for once, he may be the one that ends up on his knees.

 


Categories: Original Fiction, Erotica, Romance, Supernatural
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 16023 Read Count: 5814
[Report This] Published: 13 Feb 2016 Updated: 13 Feb 2016
Reviewer: Zorantha Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 18 Feb 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 How did I get here?

I loved the original story and I look forward to seeing what you do here in the conversion.  I do hope you change the word geyser to geezer, since that is what you actually meant.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

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Dr. Edward Masen is in for a surprise when his best friend and fellow colleague Dr. Carlisle Cullen invites him out to spend an evening with him at an exclusive member's only club. What Edward does not know, is that the club caters to a select few who share in a unique fetish within a certain lifestyle choice. He meets a brave little girl named Bella Swan who is more than happy to pull him into her world and introduce him to the wonderful lifestyle of Bondage, Discipline, Sadism, and Masochism.

 

It is a story about two consenting adults who venture into the relationship of a Dominant Daddy/little girl.  

 

If you do not fully understand the dynamics of this type of lifestyle I can only inform you that this story has nothing to do with incest, nor are the characters role playing / age playing in any way. It is a relationship where they practice total power exchange in and out of the bedroom on a 24/7 basis.  

 

If any of what you have read so far freaks you out in any way, then I must warn you now...this story may not be for you.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 35176 Read Count: 171926
[Report This] Published: 02 Mar 2016 Updated: 28 May 2016
Reviewer: Zorantha Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07 Mar 2016 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Let me say that I love your writing.  You have some of the most inventive and creative stories I have read.  Your writing has steadily improved as you have had more practice.  When you first started you had a problem with homyns but you have vastly improved on that front.  Having said that, please don't be offended by my correction; "my interest was peaked" should be "my interest was piqued".  

As I said, please don't be offended.  It was meant in the kindest way that constructive critisism can be meant.  I'm a big fan of your writing.  Please continue.  My hope is to see you move into being a published author, because I think you're that good.