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A collection of all my assignments for the Summer Semester at Project Team BETA's Smut University 2012.
Stories will not be pre-BETA'd. This is a learning project, people. :P
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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Project Team Beta's Smut University 2012
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4680 Read Count: 1952
Date: 27 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 2: The Submarine
Aw, he asked her out ... after giving her a wild ride. :) I love how you don't have the jackass Paul. It's been done so many times.
You did great with the position, without being too mechanical. I didn't need the link. Really enjoyed how you used the submerged ears and her not able to hear the typical — definitely an exotic sensation.
I do wonder about the water messing with her natural ... lube. I imagine it could ... dry her out. :/ And without a lot of foreplay, it might not be as easy. But maybe Bella was just that hot and ready for him, right?
Either way, I enjoyed it. Thanks for writing and sharing. Don't be nervous! You did a good job. :)
Author's Response:
Haha, I had to have him ask her out. It just wouldn't be nice if he didn't. Though thats typical Paul fashion, this Paul is as sweet as Jake so it would've been mean if he didn't. LOL.
I was very interested in this position when I was looking it up and was like, "Hey Jimmy...we should try this sometime" to my husband. He looked at me like I had 4 heads. Perhaps I'll just live bi-curiously through my characters! LOL.
Date: 17 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Pre-Assignment
Aw, I wish more people could see the potential of Jacob and Bella fics. Being a non-canon shipper, I'm so glad there are some non-canon lovers in the class. The small nod to canon, the premise, and the smut was good.
My favorite lines:
— "And then I looked at his manhood. My mouth salivated."
— "Tingles shot through my body in pleasure of bringing him pleasure."
— "When I come, it'll be inside you." (I don't care how common this is said. It's still hot.)
A few things to watch out for:
— Dialogue tags. Don't use more than one for one line (Ex. "I know and I don't care," I told him. "I want you," I confirmed.) If you can avoid using them, opting for an action instead, even better.
— Your semi-colon usage (here's a helpful yet funny article on them, if you're interested)
— Similes. ("we found our releases both screaming like hyenas" kind of threw me off. Sorry. :/)
Other than that, I enjoyed it! Looking forward to seeing more from you with upcoming assignments. :)
Author's Response:
LOL!!! Thank you for the review. I am horrid at punctuation - always was in English class, haha.
I appreciate your thoughts and I'll get to yours in just a few. RL has me WAYYY backed up!
My first attempts at citric writing with the help of my professors at Smut University 2012.
The following are my assignments for the PTB SmutU 2012. I'll use canon pairings and try my very best to meet each professor's challenge.
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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Project Team Beta's Smut University 2012, To Read
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 14481 Read Count: 10540
Date: 18 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Pre-Assignment
*squeals* OMG! I love this. I wasn't sure what to expect, and when I realized what kind of smut you were writing, I was a little apprehensive (I know, I know—I wrote on the same topic, but my nervousness is exactly why I wrote it). But you did such an amazing job!
The whole piece was well written, well paced, and so very real and canon. The ice was a nice touch, her voice could be heard as I read, and the ending ... *grins* I love it. Wasn't expecting it at all, which rarely happens for me.
Great start to the class, hun. Can't wait to read more from you. *hugs*
Author's Response:
i LOVE your assignment. you're like, a pro. and then i see this review and i just can't believe it. i know our topics are the same but i've got nothing on you. your story was so right in every aspect, like i said, written by a pro. i'm just a newbie here, i'm just enjoying learning so much from all you fantastic writers. thank you so much for the kind words! xoxoxo
Date: 26 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Ficology: The Human/Vampire Reproductive System
*squee* I FLOVE this pairing. I laughed at Jessica's commentary, but then quit laughing because of Mike! Wonderful, nice-guys-finish-last, and not-so-big Mike! You did a great job describing the position and their movements, while keeping them in character. I adored how you have him care and want to make it good for her, that he could listen. I do think Mike's really sweet in canon.
My fav lines:
"She was spread so wide before him that she felt an uncharacteristic sense of vulnerability."
"He ran his tongue along the slope and closed his lips around the soft skin. Without warning, he clamped his teeth on it firmly."
And then when he grinned! *sigh* Thank you for writing this pairing and sharing. Well done! Excited to see what pairing you use the next round. :)
Author's Response:
Thank you. Your sweet words mean a lot to me. :)
Various pairings, each one-shot written is an assignment for Smut University 2012.
Categories: Erotica
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica, Slash, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Risqué
Series: Project Team Beta's Smut University 2012
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1312 Read Count: 897
Date: 05 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1-Lesson 2
Wow! You sure captured her emotions well, and in a short piece, that's pretty amazing. I am wondering who they are. For some reason, I think of Bella and Mike. LOL. (I'm probably so wrong, and it's beside the point — or is the point; it could be anyone.)
My favorite lines:
"His kisses leave a feeling of emptiness" — That is soo sad.
"She used to hang on his words, hoping to hear something that told her she was special to him; someone to cherish and hold."
"But he cannot articulate his wants any more than she can make him hear her needs."
Good job on your first assignment piece!
Author's Response:
I was originally going to assign names, but it worked better to leave their identities open. Thanks so much for your kind words. Writing is fairly new to me so you gave me a big boost.