Well I'm an old softy so I think Bella should give him a chance.  How on earth did Emily hope to get away with trying to pass the baby off as Edward's?  Fifteen weeks pregnant!  Imagine if he'd fell for it and then the baby came early, say be two weeks (my daughter was nine days early), which would actually make the baby around six weeks early in Edwardland, it would be the biggest premature baby ever.  Emily's story fell down when she said that Edward told her if she could prove the baby was his then he'd stand by her and if she couldn't she should have an abortion.  If Edward had truly been the father then she would have been sitting crying to Carmen still pregnant.  It was awful what happened to Carmen, being a victim of domestic abuse and then Emily being taken away by James whilst she was in hospital.  I don't understand why she never told Eleazar, I'm sure he would have been understanding and would have probably helped her trace Emily. Carmen has either been played by her daughter or they cooked Emily's story up together.  After a comment Jacob made at the party, I think they cooked it up together.

Jane x

I'm so glad that Bella's labour was able to be stopped, all she needs now is to be waited on hand and foot until she's ready to pop.  I get the feeling that Edward may not have heard the last from Victoria.  Is this someone new popping up now to annoy Edward and Bella or is Tanya still rearing her ugly head?

I get that Esme is more than concerned about Bella and the babies but she's going too far.  Her comments about Edward will only stress Bella further, she's going to need to hold her tongue.

Jane x

Oh. My. God!!  What are Jacob and Tanya up to?  It's bad enough that Tanya was going to be there but to have Jacob as her date, well, nothing good can come out of it.  Edward and Bella will need to keep their distance, stay close to their family and friends.  

Alice and Rose are always getting in the way of Edward and Bella, they'd only just got in that bath when Alice started banging the door down. *huffs and folds arms*  Those two need to give Edward and Bella more space and time to themselves. *nods head*  Lol.

I'm looking forward to seeing how this party turns out.  I hope it isn't completely ruined by the jealous losers.

Jane x

It's no wonder that this is happening to Bella and the twins with all the stress she's been under.  I hope, once they get to the hospital, that they can stop the contractions.  If they do she's probably going to find herself being told to take more rest and no stress.  I'm glad that Edward's making more of a stand against those that disrespect Bella, their babies and their relationship.

Jane x

Oh my God, Edwards striptease.....happy days......lol.  I remember watching Hawaii Five-0 and that theme tune, as kids we all used to run around da daa-ing it, ah those were the days, hahaha!!  Another t-shirt for Alice, so appropriate for her, I can't imagine why she didn't appreciate the dick one, bwahahaha!!

I've loved their honeymoon, it was good to be back with the boys again, I've missed them so much.  I can't wait for the next part in the saga, just please promise me that you'll keep all of them safe, you know me and my need for a happy ever after, lol.

Jane x

Oh my, a game of pool has never looked so good, phew.

I loved the e-mails, trust Emmett, lol, and what about Alice the dirty perv, bwahahahaha, I have a vision of her nose pressed up against the screen trying to look down at the floor to see Edward and Jasper, hahahahaha!!

Jane x

Aaaannndd just as I thought Edward was missing the biggest point of his argument he brought it up, the Immaculate Conception.  God was sooooo gay.  Jesus is the son of God but God couldn't bring himself to, as Edward might say, put his snake in the grass to create his son he had to do some freaky mind control IVF with a virgin no less.  Now if you were in to women why would you do that, you'd want to have your fun, get your rocks off and strut around pointing and saying 'I did that', lol, quite literally.  Lol, I love Edward's mind, I bet he has so much fun roaming around in there.

Jane x

A boy, little Aaron. He loves his mummy and doesn't like to share her, hmmm I wonder who he takes after more, Bella or Edward, lol. Things have come together nicely for them, their families and friends.

Jane x

Lol, Bella's going to regret all those sandwiches and desserts when she's trying to get her figure back. I'm so glad that Bella and Alice were able to talk more and be on friendlier terms even if it will never be the same at least they can talk and be in the same room.  Awww, they're parents now, life will never be the same again, I hope they're strapped in for the ride, lol.

Jane x

So Alice thought Jasper would change and she'd get her happy ever after. She's done the best thing by giving him up, she would only resent him if she didn't and he's suffered enough already. Now she needs to do the decent thing and support him financially out of that $5 million she got from Jasper to bring him up and keep her mouth shut, she should definitely put at least half of it in trust for him.  Edward needs to work on his work life balance and fast, he's really neglecting Bella. I think part of the problem is that Edward has been a single man for too long, he's not used to sharing his life. He needs to do something and quick.

Jane x

I never expected Alice to be with Ben, married as well. She really believes that she's not done anything bad. How on earth has she blown $3 million? I'm glad her bank accounts have been frozen.

Jane x

That really was an epic fit. I was cringing in parts with how childish she was being. I do agree that Edward should have spoke to Bella first but he got caught up in the excitement of the moment, he was aware of what he should have done. Bella needs to learn to stop flying off the handle before she has all the facts. Maybe after her spanking it will serve as a reminder before she lets her temper get the better of her and starts to ignore Edward. Fingers crossed, lol.

Jane x

Elizabeth might as well just suck it up because Bella and Edward are together for good and she's just making everyone miserable and tense with her little games. Poor Alice, it sounds as though her dad is as controlling as Jasper which could explain a lot really. I think she should stick with her mum and Carlisle. Daddy and Little Girl eh? Lol.

Jane x

Ben certainly put the moves on Bella, I think if Edward was certain Bella had slept with Ben he would have been more upset, although he could be covering that up with his charm offensive and his declarations of love, like planting a seed and watching it grow. What did Ben say to make them all break in to Edward and Bella's room?  I'm glad that Bella is seeing Ben in a different light.

Jane x

Thank goodness the blinkers have been removed from Edward's eyes. It's sad that it's come to this but Alice really needs the help. I hope she accepts it and works with it so she can have a better life with her family and friends. Where is Ben? What is he up to? All Bella wants is to be with Edward, she loves him with everything she has and you don't throw that away easily. It might be a bit rocky for a while but they'll get through.

Jane x

Dare I say it?....I think Bella might be maturing a little bit. All relationships demand communication but one with a fetish involved has an extra side to it and needs more. I have no clue what Alice is up to, I know I would have been asking Edward what happened as soon as he walked through the door.

Jane x

That was so sweet of Edward to arrange for Bella's family to come to the games and stay. Elizabeth seems to have finally seen the light. Edward certainly likes to dominate Bella, not that she's complaining and neither am I, lol.

Jane x

I'm cheering Bella on for getting her two punches in. I can't believe that Jess is pregnant, it looks as though her eyes have been opened even if it's a bit late in the day. So baseball bunny wants to sue Bella, well you can't get blood out of a stone. I loved Jim's comment about her good left hook and those commentators were hilarious.

Jane x

Oooh, is Elizabeth pregnant? I bet she is. I can't believe it's come to Bella moving out, Elizabeth really needs to get over herself. I loved Carlisle telling her to grow up and go to her room, lol. Has Jasper changed? Is Alice just putting up with things or has she been forced into something she doesn't want? Things don't sound good for her.

Jane x

Oh dear, Elizabeth didn't remember.  I can understand her concerns but she really is going too far. She raised Bella to be sensible but now she's insinuating that by being with Edward she's not being sensible and it's the worst thing ever. I get that a big age gap is not what you want for your child in a relationship but let's face it Edward is so much better than Ben. He knows what he wants and isn't going to mess Bella around like Ben. There's something to be said for an older man. Elizabeth is taking this too far, she could damage her relationship with Bella or lose her over this if she's not careful.

Jane x

Oh my God! Hahaha, I can't believe how drunk they all got. Esme's advice to Elizabeth was just classic. I think Bella and Alice may be scarred for life, they certainly have blackmail material, lol. Alice needs to dump Jasper once and for all, he's manipulative and a user, if Alice wasn't so in love with him she would see it so clearly.

Jane x

Lol, poor Bella's going to be a complete mess during this convention.  I think she should forget her panties for the duration, I mean there's no point creating more washing for yourself, hehe!

Jane x

Lol, oh my God, the pair of them are just a massive ball of lust and sexual tension, damn it's hot!  Bella's such a mess and soooooo naive, "Is that a bracelet? It's so small."  Bwahahahaha!!  Why would they have a very small bracelet at a sex toy convention?  Oh, Bella.  Lol.  I love all the slogans on the t-shirts that you have them wearing.

Jane x

That was effin hot!  I want to join Mase's Kinky Academy, lol.  So Mase doesn't have a permanent sexual relationship with Rose and Em but they've had threesomes.  I think it takes great confidence and sexual security to invite a third person into your bed and relationship.  I'm glad Bella didn't run away screaming and that she realises that she won't ever know what she likes and what she doesn't if she doesn't try and that was one hell of a start, lol.

Whereabouts on her body will Bella have her tattoo?

Jane x

Awww, I hope Edward gets the full story, he needs to know that Felix won't ever be a threat to them.

Jane x

Lol, don't mess with Bella.

Jane x

Why didn't Rosalie warn Jasper that Felix was there, he could have explained then who he was then to Edward.  Don't you just hate it when ex's won't get the message?

Jane x

Uh-oh, sounds like Edward's bubble has just been popped.

Jane x

A works night out, woohoo!!  Always good for Monday morning gossip about all the embarrassing and eyebrow raising things our colleagues get up to.

Jane x

No messing from Rosalie then, lol.  As brash as she was at least she made Jasper realise that he wasn't really in love with Felix.  Lol, I'd have chopped holes in clothes as well.

Jane x

I know Jasper's his boss, but jeez that was very formal, are people not on first name terms in this company?  Lol, it probably suits Edward's 1900's persona.

Jane x

Ahhh, you can trust the girls to do their devilish work and get these two together, mwahahahaha!!

Jane x

See, they really are as bad as each other, but then that makes them perfect for one another.

Jane x

Ah, don't we all love a good meddle in someone else's business?........All in a good cause of course.  Hahaha!!

Jane x

Ohhh, things are getting exciting. *rubs hands together, grinning*

Jane x

And it's not only all of Edward's dreams that are coming true.  Are their mirrors in this elevator, cause they're about to get a little steamed up, lol.

Jane x

Wow, Jasper's going to have a permanent reminder of what went on in that elevator, he's always going to know exactly where Edward's cum was running down the wall.  It's not wrong of him to want more......I want more, lol.

Now, I know you've been flamed and I'm not here to do that.  I'm the last person to even pretend I know everything especially when I'm not brave enough to post anything I write.  You have a really good story and if you haven't got a beta you need one or maybe just check more carefully before you post.  You change your tenses within your sentences from past to present and vice versa.  Uncomfort is not a word it would either be uncomfortable or discomfort and seethed would be used more like 'I seethed with anger,' you meant sheathed, all of these things a beta would pick up for you.

I hope you take this in the spirit it's intended, you have a good story and with a little bit of attention it will be even better.  I can't wait to read more.

Jane x

Bella certainly landed in a bad place at the poly house. I know she wanted to be independent but when the abuse started she should have gone to the police or home, I'm sure her dad would have helped her. I'm glad she finally got out of there even though she ended up in hospital. James needs his balls chopping off so he can't hurt anyone else.

Jane x

Interesting, I'm looking forward to delving further. ;)

Jane x

A little cyber sex is a wonderful thing, lol. Was she actually allowed to orgasm without permission? That tattoo sounds pretty horrendous, ropes and shackles. If it is something James made her do maybe she can get it removed. I love that Edward's whole family are in the lifestyle, there'll be a lot of support there for Bella.

Jane x

Well lucky you, I don't have a fan, lol. That was definitely intense and I get the feeling that they all enjoyed themselves, hahaha!!

Jane x

You should take pity on a poor girl who doesn't own a fan, talk about hot. I know it's Jasper's decision to end Bella's contract but I do think it's a little sad as well. It sound like Rose has some knowledge of James. Is this from actual contact with him or from girls she has seen in a professional capacity?

Jane x

I've said it before and I'll say it again, James needs his balls cutting off. Bella should be the one to do it, tie him down then whilst wide awake she should cut them off with a blunt and rusty pair of nail scissors don't forget to keep the smelling salts handy. Then if she likes she could carve the word arsehole into his forehead just so there's no mistake and everyone can see what he is. Too much? Nah, I don't think it's enough for what he's put Bella and the rest of those girls through.

Jane x

I love the fun loving sassy side of Bella, I hope Edward let's her bring that side of herself out more, I think it will help her adjust to being with Edward and living with him.

Jane x

Hmmm, I'm not sure about Jake and his feelings towards Bella.  I can't work out whether he's realised he has feelings but doesn't feel like he stands a chance because of the way Bella looks at Edward, he has feelings but is unsure whether they would want a threesome or whether he realised after going down on Bella the morning after that his heart wasn't really in it and he'd prefer them just to be friends.  Jake's clearly embarrassed, but for which reason, that's what we need to know.  Of course he and Edward may have talked about this already and it's obvious that Edward fancies Bella, I mean, he even reads fan fiction with her, lol.  I really like this story and I'd love for you to continue it.  I'm off to read Edward's POV, maybe that will give me some more clues, hehe!

Jane x

Oh my God, I was about ready to slap Bella silly.  I can't believe that she took so long to confront Edward.  I know he was being childish by ignoring her but he was probably hurt and confused, he laid his cards and heart on the table and got nothing back.  Thank God she couldn't keep it in any longer and she admitted she had feelings for him too.

I really enjoyed this even though it did take me a while to get back to it, lol. Thanks for sharing, I'm off to read EPOV now.

Jane x

Well that was even more revealing.  I'm glad that Jake has said his feelings for Bella are more as a friend and sister, I don't think it would have ended well for Edward if Jake had romantic feelings for Bella.  I loved how Jasper rang Alice asking for advice for Edward, lol, it was too fucked up for him to deal with once he learned it was two guys and one girl and not the other way round, hehe!! They all would have saved themselves a lot of awkwardness if they'd talked the morning after even though it would have been uncomfortable.  Oh, oh, what about Edward and the BDSM fan fiction?  That boy so wants to tie Bella up and down. *phew, fans self*  I'm looking forward to the next chapter of this and TNIWNF.

Jane x

Okay, I don't know what happened to Edward's POV but I got Bella's POV twice. *shrugs*

I still enjoyed the story and thanks for sharing.  I've favourited The Perfect Submissive so I'll be catching up with that one some time in the future.

Jane x

Oh my God!  Charlie is way out of line and should lose his job over this. Regardless of what type of lifestyle Bella wants to live those arseholes still raped and beat her up and he let them go.  It's obvious her parents have no clue about BDSM otherwise they'd know that it's not about that at all.  Renee should not have read Bella's diary, everyone knows that you never read anything good about yourself in those things just like listening at doorways.

What happened to Mike in all of this?  Surely he had something to say about his "girlfriend" being gang raped and beaten?  I know he's a minor part of this but I would have expected something from him, maybe he'll turn up later in the story for some reason.

I'm thinking that staying away from Aro Volturi could be a good idea, lol. I'm glad she didn't call him.  Will he be at the ball?  I think this ball might be a bit of an eye opener for Bella, I'm glad that she'll have Kate with her to guide and protect her.

Jane x

Lol, I think I'd have passed out when I saw his face, regardless of whether I was breathing or not.  Bella's really struck gold with Edward as long as he's the good Master Aro says he is.

I take it that Mike was the one to spank Bella and that's how she found she liked it?  Well, more than liked it, lol.

Jane x