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Hi,
My name is Jane and I'm a 44 year old single mum from Manchester in the UK. I'm a stay at home mum at the moment but I'm looking for a job, need to pay the bills. I discovered Twilight when the film came out and everyone was raving about the books. The books weren't well known in the UK at all, in fact, you may have found it difficult to find them at all, the film fuelled their popularity. Anyway, I bought the books for my daughter who wanted to know what all the fuss was about. That was 4 years ago and she's never read the books, not one word...I can hear you all gasping in disbelief...I however, devoured them. I couldn't get enough, completely absorbed was an understatement it was the best diet I've been on. I was so consumed by these characters the bare minimum of housework was done, my daughter reminded me every day that she was hungry and I needed to feed her, laundry was done at the last possible moment and the ironing got done on a need to wear basis...my obsession was born.
I'm Team Edward, always have been and always will be but Jasper owns a place in my heart too. After reading the books countless times I found both FanFiction and Twilighted through Twitter, some ladies on there were rec'ing some fics and my curiosity got the better of me. One of the first fics I read was Master of the Universe and I'm sure you've all read that one too, another one was Clipped Wings and Inked Armour, another amazing story and thus began my second obsession. I can't get enough, I'm on both sites every day unless the 'puter breaks then I go into withdrawal. Twilighted feeds my need for RP Fics mainly Rob and Jackson, some Kellan works it's way in there too but I read all types. I love slash and polyamorous stories and I've found that you find more of those on here. I've started to write a story myself, the characters popped into my head one day and now they won't leave me alone. I'm not sure that I'm a good enough writer that I'd ever put it out there for others to read, at the moment I'm just enjoying writing it for me.
So that's me, feel free to ask my anything you want to know, you can follow me on Twitter @Janeybo send a request and I'll follow you back, I usually drop in there every day at some point, sometimes I just lurk other times I'll spout complete nonsense, I don't think my followers realise that Janeybo and Robsblueeyes are one and the same person. All the Robporn on there keeps me busy and of course there's 100 Monkeys, Kellan and Peter Facinelli. I'm beginning to think this all might be taking over my life slightly...what life I hear you all cry...ah well, you have to have some pleasures don't you? I may even say it's a guilty one, my daughter would die of shame if she knew all this. BWAHAHAHAHA!!!!!
Jane x
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My life drastically changed after I saw an ad online; I still cannot believe that I answered it! I never expected it to turn out like this, but anything was better than before. When the pain became too much to bear; I realized that love heals.
This is a BDSM story A/H E/B HEA
Beta'd by: RAH070890
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 21554 Read Count: 112977
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Hmmm, Edward's going to need to tread carefully. He needs to arrange counselling for Bella to help her deal with what happened and her parents disowning her. Bella's journal will help. I know she doesn't want to think about it or write about it but it will help her get her thoughts and feelings in order, maybe put things more into perspective for her. Once she becomes Edward's slave some of the things he does or asks her to do could cause a reaction in her that she wasn't expecting, her journal will help her work things out and she'll probably find that what happened in Forks is the reason for her reaction. Bella could be in for a bumpier ride than she's anticipated.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Edward was right he should have thought first before taking Bella to bed. It seems as though he's blinded by Bella and his judgement is clouded, he's doing things he wouldn't normally do. I hope this doesn't set Bella back and stop her from becoming the submissive she wants to be.
Shouldn't Edward have had a report on Bella already? I mean two million dollars is a lot of money to part with without any sort of report on that person and her background in your hand. She's had to have both a physical exam and a psych evaluation done. Which makes me ask the question why it wasn't picked up at the psych evaluation the Bella's been raped? Now I'm not a psychiatrist but I would imagine if they couldn't say that Bella had been raped they would be able to say that she been deeply emotionally traumatised.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Okay, so now I'm confused. Bella's already supposed to have had a physical and psych evaluation done. As for the physical I'm not sure that they would still be able to tell that she'd been raped as it's mentioned earlier that Bella's been in Seattle for six months and I'm not a doctor, so the physical trauma would have healed unless some form or scarring was left behind. As for the psych evaluation, well as I've said previously I think something should have been picked up on that. Why has a background check not been done? Edward parted with two million dollars for Bella and he has no proof that she's sane or fit enough to deal with this lifestyle she desperately wants to be part of, or for what's to come.
I'm glad that Edward is determined to look after Bella and get to the bottom of what happened. I'm also glad that he was quick witted enough to put the phone down before speaking to Charlie. I only hope he doesn't get it into is head to try and find out who made that call. Hopefully, it won't be possible but the I'm not in law enforcement either, lol.
I hope your surgery went well and that you're fully recovered now and in case you're wondering, I do like this story.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
Bella will definitely lose it and it's the worst way for her to start her new life. I can't help but think that after this she'll wish she just told Edward herself. I know she'll have the help of everyone around her but sometimes you just don't want everyone to know what happened to you. I know that I would find that as difficult to deal with as the actual rape itself.
Lol, I can't believe the two of them and their shenanigans in Alice's shop, lol, it's a wonder she's not blind. Bella's face will probably be as red as her new dress, hahaha!
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Gah! Master Edward can undress me anytime, lol. Those outfits are amazing and that harness, well I think Edward's going to very pleased when he sees his pet in that. *cough*
Trust Alice to let the cat out of the bag that Edward already loves Bella.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Hmmm, what is the worst that could happen indeed. Their relationship is very confusing at the moment. Edward wants it all and so does Bella and I know Edward is taking things slow to build Bella's trust especially after everything that's happened but it feels, to me, as though everything is just up in the air and whichever bit of their relationship hits the ground first is what they will do, throw that back into the air and then move on to the next bit, am I making sense? I think they need more structure and Edward needs to get that in place and set some boundaries.
I think if Bella put's the harness on, Edward's going to be really turned on. He's a man and that harness is hot, even as a woman I think that harness is hot, lol. Will he think she's ready for a scene? I hope he'll say no, but then that would hurt Bella's feelings because regardless of the impact on her emotional health she wants to please her Master. This is why Edward should have already set boundaries and made it clear what he expects from Bella, what she should expect from him and why. If nothing had have happened to Bella, Edward would have already have gone through his rules, they still should have talked about this and Edward has neglected to do so.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
Some best friend Jacob was, he's so sick having all this planned out for Bella. Bella really needs Jasper's help, her nightmares are only going to get worse and Edward's going to feel more and more helpless.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Poor Bella, she'd feel much more secure knowing that Edward knew the worst things about her and still loves her. Will Jasper think it a good idea that Edward be there? If it was me having to tell what happened to me then I'd want him there, with Jasper as a security net and not worrying about having to tell him at a later time.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 My Demons
This is so much emotional trauma for Bella and as much as her mind protects her by shutting down it's better out than in. I'm so glad that she's finally talking about it.
So it was Charlie and Renee's spankings that helped Bella discover that they turned her on and not Mike. She's not sick at all for doing what she did. I think Charlie and Renee should have thought more about the way they were disciplining Bella, I mean, not to put too fine a point on it, but who spanks their fifteen year old daughter with all those hormones racing around her body? Idiotic Charlie and Renee that's who.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
It sounds like Bella has hit rock bottom. I'm so glad that she is surrounded by people who love her and will help her pick up the pieces and rebuild herself and her life. I have no doubt that she will be a stronger person once she's better. I can't believe Renee said that to Edward, but then they did disown her so I should't be so surprised. I think you just expect the maternal side to always take over no matter what's happened in the past. I really hope Edward can control himself, like he said he needs to stay out of jail. What does he hope to achieve by going to Forks? He said fiancee!!
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
Edward thought knew the worst about what happened to Bella, after seeing those photographs he really knows the worst now. I can't imagine what it would feel like to see photos like that of someone you love but I think I'd probably be having the same reaction as him.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Well, it just goes from bad to worse for the pair of them doesn't it. I wonder how Bella will react to that news, it doesn't sound as if she knows already. It's going to be difficult news to break but at least they don't have to cross that bridge yet, she needs to get well first.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Wow! That was quite the turnaround for Bella. I hope the new medication helps Bella keep on an even keel otherwise her mood swings might give Edward whiplash, hahahahah! *cough* I take it Edward didn't like the sparkly vampire film......shame that, it's one of my favourites, lol.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
Lol, is Jasper pregnant; craving maple bars?
I really thought Bella didn't know that she might not be able to have children. When she was in hospital it sounded like Charlie took over and brushed everything under the carpet.
So Bella has external scars. I should imagine some are hard to see like the anal tear. I'm wondering what else happened to Bella or should I say what those sickos used on Bella besides their hands and dicks to cause her further damage?
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
It's so sad that Bella could only tell Edward the basics of what happened to her by referring to herself in the third person. It's a start though and things should eventually become easier for her.
Bella's so lucky to have been chosen by Edward, to have his love and support and also that of his family.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Are the scars that bad or is Bella imagining them to be worse than they are? I think we all blow things out of proportion when it involves our own bodies and Bella may see her scars as more ugly than they actually are and also because of they way she got them.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
Oh my God! So her mum did find her things but didn't get a chance to talk to her. She's such a hypocrite to call her daughter a deviant when she has so many of the same desires.
I suppose it is better late than never that she's trying to find out why Charlie let all of this go. Does Jake have some sort of hold over Charlie? It's always been odd that he just let them go because he said she asked for it. No one ever asks to the beaten and gang raped, even just as a simple man Charlie should understand that never mind as the Chief of Police.
Jane x
Date: 20 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
I would have thought they'd have talked before going into the playroom. As long as Bella isn't feeling rushed or just going ahead with things to please her Master.
Jane x
Author's Response:
I am really glad you are enjoying this story Thanks for the reviews
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Date: 27 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
So Bella has her wish and she's been collared by her Master and their contract is in place. I don't like that Edward referred to Bella as being needy and high maintenance, even if that's what he wants he didn't need to mention it. If I was Bella I would be very upset and offended by that remark. It's a good job I'm not her, lol, I'd be in so much trouble I probably wouldn't sit down for a year.
Jane x
Date: 14 Sep 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26
Who has Bella? Who's Sir?
Jane x
Date: 28 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27
What the hell!? What on earth is going on?
Jane x
Date: 02 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28
I seem to be lurching from one 'Oh my God!' to another 'Oh my God!' So here goes, oh my God!!
Jane x
Date: 02 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29
Poor Bella, it's going to take her some time to get through this, well both of them really.
Jane x
Date: 02 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30
Bella's definitely better off in familiar surroundings and hopefully with Dr Banner being around 24/7 she'll feel more able to talk and start to get better, build her self esteem.
Jane x
Date: 02 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31
I'm glad that Bella's been able to tell Dr Banner what happened to her and how her parents turned against her. She's taken her first baby steps to recovering and becoming a stronger person.
Jane x
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Edward Cullen is a movie-star, born into the life of fame and fortune, but always wishing for something else. When his girlfriend Bella publicly humiliates and hurts him, he eventually finds the opportunity to look for something better; something that deep down he always wanted. Rated M for adult scenes (slash).
Disclaimer: I do not own any of the Twilight characters, but am merely borrowing them for this story.
Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Edward/Jacob (slash)
Genre: Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 119640 Read Count: 11557
Date: 29 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
So Collin's sick, that does explain a lot of things especially with bi-polar. So many people with that take their meds and then stop because they feel better and don't think they need them which is probably with Collin did. Things could have turned out a lot worse, especially for Jake, thank God Paul was there and stopped them all pussy footing around.
I'm feeling a bit sorry for Edward, it seems he's not destined to get a moments peace to just enjoy what's developing between him and Jake, there always seems to be some drama to deal with. I hope they can escape for a while soon.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Thank you for your reviews on the last three chapters. Poor Edward really has had far too much to deal with, but things wil begin to calm down now. There is still evil Esme, but not too much longer before the movie is done and then he gets a break until he has to do the tour and go to the premiers etc. In the meantime the next chapter will be rather more enjoyable for him :)
Date: 29 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
I thought Collin's dropping off the radar was a bit too simple. I was thinking the same as Jacob, that he'd done it for the money. Now he's turned up a the hotel I'm wondering if he's trying to set Jacob up with the press so it looks as though he's cheating on Edward. He may think that if he does that then Jacob will just fall into his lap as he consoles him after Edward dumps him. Jacob needs to be really careful and not be alone with Collin.
I never thought that Esme would stoop so low, she's going to miss out on some fabulous holidays to Barbados, lol. At least Edward has his dad and Carlisle apologised to him again.
Jane x
Date: 29 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Oh, I hope the green eyed monster in Edward isn't going to go shouting the odds before finding out exactyl who Collin is and possibly why he's giving a kiss and tell story to the papers. Edward knows what the press is like. They dig around, take a coment made by someone that means absolutely nothing and then turns into something major. I really hope he doesn't blow his top at Jacob and I hope that Jacob doesn't turn things around on Edward and make this into a trust issue.
I knew the baby wouldn't be Edwards, like I said I had a whole theory on that, I worked it and everything and, woohoo, I was right! Lol.
Jane x
Date: 11 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
Sooooo, I need that lie down even more now, lol. Wow! Bella seemed almost contrite at how she'd behaved and contributed towards collapse, she's not completely heartless after all and she agreed to the test so at least they don't all have to wonder for however many months are left. Hahahaha, trust Paul to think of getting condoms and lube, Edward can thank him later. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.......not sure why........but I am, bwahahaha!
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Thanks for your reviews - I'm sure you will enjoy the next chapter, hehe. Now Edward just has to deal with the parents and the public, plus the DNA test. Still plenty of stress on the way for him, but at least he's got more support now ;)
Take care
Sarah
Date: 11 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
I need a lie down in Edward and Jacob's bed......well if they stay out of it long enough, lol. I can't stand the way Carlisle and Esme treat Edward. They should love him unconditionally not because he does as he's told. The fact that he's now with Jacob seems to put the final nail in his coffin where Carlisle and Esme are concerned. I'm not sure which angers them most; the film he's making, that he won't do as he's told, that he's retiring or that he's in love with Jake. It's really sad that it looks as though publicly they're going to support Edward when privately they're going to turn their backs on him.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
OH MY GOD! I can't believe it! I have limited internet access at the moment and loaded up all the chapters of this story whilst I had the access, I reviewed as I went along so that I could post them when I got connection again. After catching up and reviewing this last chapter, some two hours later my stupid effin laptop does a crash dump, aaarrgghhhhhh!!!!! Effin stupid blue screen of doom. Needless to say I lost all the reviews I did. *sigh*
Anyway, here I am to say I effin love this story. Bella's a cow of epic proportions and an ultimate user, she deserves to live the rest of her life as a single person. I've said all this before but you wouldn't know that, lol. She needs to leave Edward alone, not only is she hurting him but she's hurting herself as well. She needs to be planning for a life as a single parent and then anything else she gets is a bonus. I know it's hard but then keep giving yourself hope is hard too when nothing comes of it, it just serves to torment you and keep you in a high state of anxiety.
I dont think Edward is the dad, I had a whole theory on that one, but hey ho never mind and of course I could be wrong but still I really don't think he is the dad.
I'm glad that Paul is turning out to be a decent friend to Edward and seems to have left his dickhead like behaviours behind him. I do think that now more people know about Edward and Jake and Edward's decision to quit that he should tell Carlisle and Esme before they find out from the media. Will he tell Bella or just leave her to find out as and when? I don't think he really owes her anything after the way she's lied and treated him. I do really feel sorry for Sam to he's as much as a victim as Edward and it's just a shame that only one of them is going to get a clean break from Bella.
I'm so glad that Jake has come to take care of Edward. They need each other so much. Edward needs taking care of at the moment and Jake can help with that and I really do think that Jake needs Edward's reassurance that he hasn't changed his mind with all the drama and stress that's surrounding him. Im sure, between them, they can find a few ways of relieving that stress for each other, bwahahahahaha!!
So again, I love this story, I'm all caught up and can't wait for the next chapter. I'm just hoping that the blue screen of doom doesn't appear again before this gets to you. All I need now is for the internet to connect. Stupid bloody patchy connection.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane, thanks so much for the amazing review. So sorry that your internet was such a pain though, after you spent so much time reviewing. Really glad that you're enjoying the story so much.
Edward will be having a conversation with his parents very soon, once he's been comforted a few times by Jake ;) The baby's father will be revealed sooner rather than later as well, given Paul's advice about the earlier test.
Next chapter should be up in a couple of days and I hope the blue screen of doom allows you to enjoy it!
HL. x
Date: 12 Jun 2013 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Well, at least one parent has seen the light. I'm so proud of Carlisle for finally listening to Edward and paying attention. I can undestand how it would be a shock for him when he thought Edward would be marrying Bella and having a whole load of kids, it would be a shock for any parent, but as I say I'm proud of him for the way he's chosen to deal with Edward's revelations. Now all we have to hope is that he can convince Esme that this is the right thing for Edward and he's not doing it to spite them in any way.
Edward's first time was worth waiting for, lol. Jacob was a little surprised and more than a bit turned on at the thought of Edward experimenting, lol.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I thought it was high time one parent offered Edward more support and Carlisle has had to spend 3 weeks on tour with him, seeing how miserable he was and it made him think properly and start to feel guilty.
Glad you enjoyed their first time! :D
Date: 29 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27
Well I'm glad he finally came out of the woodwork but, oh my God, Emmett, he's been shot again. You have to make him alright, he has more flirting to do with Rosalie and then he has to fall head over heels in love and settle down, lol, I have his life mapped out for him, never mind what you have planned. *snort* Sorry. *grins*
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Thank you for your reviews. I like your plan for Emmett :D You'll soon see what happens to him after the attack though in the last chapter :)
Date: 29 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26
It seems like they've only just got to be with each other and now they're parting again. I really felt for Edward clinging to Jake at the airport not want to leave and trying to draw Jake's strength into himself. You've got to love Emmett though, he's so blunt and straight forward, no frills attached, lol. I'm sure he'll do everything in his power to keep Edward safe.
I hope this nutter does come out of the woodwork so he/she will be caught and then Edward and Jake can relax.
Jane x
Date: 29 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25
Reunion sex is hot. The start of the rest of their live together certainly began with a bang, lol. Is this the end of all of Edward's problems? Hmmm, I'm not so sure.
Jane x
Date: 16 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Damn!! I need a shower and a lie down, I'm exhausted, lol.
Jane x
Date: 16 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
I'm glad Jake managed to catch up with his friends. I love Emmett, his banter and his no nonsense approach to life, I should imagine he was very good for Jake when he was his bodyguard. It's good that Edward and Carlisle are beginning to rebuild their relationship and that Carlisle feels comfortable enough to begin to get to know Jake again. It's a shame that Esme is still taking such a blinkered view of everything. Maybe time and distance will put things into perspective for her.
Jane x
Date: 16 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
Oh my God! I can't believe this is happening to Edward. He really should have reported this even if it does turn out to be some nutter that just wants to tell him how disgusting he is, it's better to be safe than sorry. If something scares you like this you should report it. Why isn't Dave actually going with Edward? I know they all think the threat is just in New York and that's where it'll stay but they can't guarantee that, changing his flight doesn't guarantee his safety either. I hope nothiing happens to him and they find out who the nutty nutter is.
Jane x
Date: 16 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
Oh, I'm still worrying about nutty nutter and I won't be happy until he or she is caught. Thank God Jake thought to get Emmett to look after Edward in LA. I think Jake and Edward should open a hotel because the amount of visitors they're going to be getting it will feel like they're living in one, hahaha!!
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Thank you for your reviews! I loved writing Emmett's character and he will get another part in it before the end. You're right to worry about the nutter; he hasn't just disappeared! Not many chapters left to go on this one though, I'm sad to say.
Date: 19 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28
*Sigh* I do love a happy ending, makes me feel all warm and fuzzy, lol.
Thank God Emmett had a vest on and the worst thing he suffered was bad bruising. Finally he's getting it together with Rosalie 'growing very fond of her' *snort* and the rest, lol.
I'm glad Esme came to her senses as well, I'm not sure that I would have been so forgiving, maybe I just hold grudges too long.
Anyway, I loved this story and always love a happy ending. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to read the last chapter but I just had so much going on, personally, and I lost my mojo for everything really. Thank you for sharing.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane, thank you for your last review. I'm glad you enjoyed the ending - I wanted to give everyone at least the promise of a HEA :)
Edward keeps messing up a scene in his new movie, DiverCity. Carlisle, as Assistant Director, suggests a different way to get the performance of a lifetime. However, when 'Cut' is finally announced, the scene continues. WARNING THREESOME
Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended. All characters have been borrowed and played with. Sadly at the end of the day, I must return them to their original packaging. I do not own any of them
Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2863 Read Count: 3079
Date: 14 May 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Damn, that was hot!! Lol, I'd love to know how the audience reacted to that scene when they finally got to see it. I know how we reacted to the original but I suspect the fictional reaction would be a million times better, hahaha!!
Loved it! Edward and Jasper are always hot but add Carlisle in there and.....wow!
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
heheehehh - glad you liked it. MMM, I have the original scene bookmarked, and hell yes, I'd much prefer to watch my version.
Gotta admit I have a soft spot for Carlisle, even though I luuuurrvee Edward and Jasper.
Huge thanks for reading and reviewing.
Take care
maryhell
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Some so called friends invite Bella out for her birthday, and send her to a BDSM club as a prank. What happens when the owner of the club sees her? Will he be able to set aside his Dom nature? Will she ever believe she deserves to have her needs met? Will he be able to set aside his wants and desires to meet those needs, or will she find her true desire is to submit to him? AH/M
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, Read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 204571 Read Count: 334478
Date: 29 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Woohoo!! They're having a baby. I love that Esme got to see the proposal and Carlisle got to see the baby, now they both have bragging rights, lol. I'm glad that Edward has come around on the whole going to see Charlie thing, Bella needs to do this, she needs her answers and she deserves them. She's come so far and become so much stronger she needs to show Charlie that he can't destroy her and she's in charge of her own life. Now, what are those other two dickheads up to?
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25
I loved the look into their future, 5 kids! They sure kept themselves busy, lol. I can't believe that Charlie got in touch again. I don't know how it happened that Bella and Seth turned out so well without any of their parents crazy genes, but I'm glad they did. Lauren was a surprise, I'm glad she apologised to Bella and is now a different person from who she used to be unlike others that just never learn.
Thanks for sharing your story, it's been a bit of a rollercoaster but then so is life, I've loved every minute. I always enjoy your stories and I'm looking forward to sinking my teeth into more of them.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Wow! I'm thinking that this is Bella's way of telling Edward that she'd like to be his submissive properly. It's a bold move but when sometimes you struggle with saying what you want actions are the only thing left and we all know what they say about actions, lol. I loved the dance, very creative and perfect for the song. Is Charlie hoping to find something on Edward to blackmail him with or ruin his reputation? I love how the rest of Edward's family have taken Bella under their wings especially Rose.
Jane x
Date: 25 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter: One
Oh my God! It sounds as though Charlie is only a marginally better parent than Renee, although the pair of them are useless. It sounds as though Bella's always been treated as being older than her years because she's smart and the fact that she was still a child when she started college seems to have been lost on them. I say sod becoming a lawyer and go and dance, lol. I love how open and frank she is with Edward and I hope there comes a point where she can royally rub Jessica's nose in it and really piss her off. Who needs enemies when you have friends like her?
I'm really looking forward to finding out how this develops.
Jane x
Date: 25 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter: Two
I shouldn't be shocked that there was a party going on when Bella got back but I was. They're supposed to be more mature being older and at college, young adults, but instead they're all acting like spoiled and mean five year olds. I take back what I said about Charlie being a marginally better parent, he's an arsehole and none of them deserve Bella. I just want Edward to put on his shining armour and ride in there on his white horse and sweep Bella away.
From what Bella told Edward I think Paul tried to rape her and he got away with it because his family have money and standing. I can't think why Charlie and Renee are this way with Bella, they should be proud of her and boasting about her to anyone who will listen.
Jane x
Date: 25 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
I hate Lauren and Jessica. Who do they think they are? God's gift to men? I don't think so. Calling Bella that hateful nickname. I know Edward would never hit a woman but seriously I don't know how he kept his hands to himself. Sadly I think his little scene with Bella will only make things worse for her. As for Charlie, he's just such a dick to do that to his daughter. Of course Bella seeks parental approval, we all do, it's natural but there has to come a point when you say no more. I hope Bella reaches that point soon and does what she wants to do.
Jane x
Date: 25 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four
Oh my God! The way Bella gets treated by virtually everyone goes from bad to worse. I hope Edward can give her the confidence to stand up for herself. Lauren and Jessica are complete skanks who couldn't even recognise a man they've come on to before. It's like Bella has this neon flashing sign over her head saying I'm weak, do whatever you like to me. It's heart breaking that Bella is completely aware of how her family are cutting her out of their lives. I don't know how much more she can take before she breaks. For me this would have been the final straw and I'd cut them off completely, they would never hear from me or see me again.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Edward said he was concerned about Bella and himself slipping into a Dom and sub relationship without them making that decision, I think they're getting pretty close to that, especially with Bella's natural submissive nature. I loved the descriptions of Edward's ink.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
After that scene I think all the Doms need to go back in training. None of them thought it wasn't okay to treat and speak to their submissive that way. I'm glad that Bella will have the protection from the other Doms at the club now she has Edward's in-training collar. I still think they're in danger of just slipping into this relationship, I feel that Edward has blurred the lines quite a bit.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Was it just the drugs making Bella think Jacob was there or was he really there? It wouldn't surprise me if he was. I just don't understand why everyone is so eager to think the worst of Bella, I mean don't they have minds of their own to decide if she was the victim or not? Not one of them have the brains they were born with. I hope something bad happens to Jessica and Lauren, they deserve everything they get.
Thank God Bella has Edward and she's accepting more help from him.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I don't know how Edward controlled himself but then I suppose he'd be no good to Bella if he's facing a double or triple murder charge. I really hope, as painful as it will be, that Bella finally cuts all ties to her family and allows Edward to help her fight the injustices that were allowed to happen at both Harvard and UW. I couldn't bear it if Bella tries to defend any of her parents again.
Edward really needs to talk to Bella about being a submissive properly, it will give her more stability in her life to make it official, it's what she needs.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I think Charlie wants Bella away from him altogether and has recruited Jacob to help him. We need to know what lengths Charlie is willing to go to and from what's gone down so far it wouldn't surprise me if he wants his daughter dead. Bella is certainly a reminder of a time in his life he's desperately trying to forget, the question is why? He's making Bella's life near intolerable, maybe he was hoping she'd kill herself but with Edward in her life that's unlikely to happen now. Does Bella stand to inherit anything from a grandparent when she turns 21? It would be one explanation for what's happening to her.
I'm so glad that Edward and Bella have their contracts in place and now Edward's asking Bella if she'd like to be his real girlfriend, awww.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Oh my God! That was funny, I can imagine the look on Edward's face when it dawned on him about Renee, lol. I can't wait for the rest of his family to meet her. She's obviously only concerned about herself and then Phil, it seems like Bella's there to be seen and not heard and also to fetch and carry for her. That's not going to go down well.
Bella did amazingly for their first weekend, her photographic memory as well as her natural submissive nature really helped her.
Jane x
Date: 26 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
Phil seems like a nice guy, he has genuine concern for Bella but is easily rail roaded by Renee. If he's so bad at baseball how come he still has a place on the team never mind all that money? Well actually, that's a point, where did he get all his dosh from? Renee's selfishness knows no bounds. I can't believe she went out and spent all that money. I know Edward's rich but you just don't do things like that, she has no shame. I love how Edward and Bella are getting closer.
Jane x
Date: 27 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Oh my God! Renee nearly killed Bella. She truly is the most selfish person on the planet, I think Phil has had his eyes well and truly opened, now will he step up and become the parent Bella's been craving? Will he stay with Renee now he's seen her true colours? I can't believe how cruel she is. I know Bella just wants a proper mum to love her but she really needs to think about allowing Renee into her life. Personally I'd cut her out of my life but then I'd cut my nose off to spite my face.
Jane x
Date: 27 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Thank God Renee's gone! I don't think I could have stood much more of her. It is beyond sad for Bella but she is better off without either of her parents. I really hope Phil stays in touch and builds some kind of relationship with her. I got the feeling he was a good guy and Bella needs to know that not everyone in her life is like her mum and dad.
Jane x
Date: 27 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
I loved their date, Bella really had a good time, some fun and dancing is just what she needed. I'm so glad that Phil has kept in touch despite Renee, that woman has a screw loose. Thank God someone at Bella's college has finally seen her for the beautiful girl she is and also doesn't trust Jacob. Tanya's going to want revenge on Bella now she's lost her job. Not only is she popular with all the Doms she has what Tanya wants, Edward. Bella will be a fantastic teacher especially in dance, she should definitely go down that route and sod the law degree, life's too short to be miserable at work.
Jane x
Date: 28 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
Well that totally explained why Phil gets to play on the team. I can't wait for Renee to get the divorce papers and be left without a penny. Bella will survive with the love and support of Edward and everyone else. I'm wondering if Jacob is Charlie's son, it really wouldn't surprise me at all. I also think Jacob was planning to get rid of Bella completely or harm her to such an extent she would either kill herself or be institutionalized. Jacob still being registered at Harvard gives him a perfect alibi, he can't be in two places at once. I'm sure that money is at the bottom of all this.
Jane x
Date: 28 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
I'm so glad that Bella is getting stronger and is more able to assert herself, she's finally becoming the girl she should be. Lol, I can't believe that Edward was naive about that party, as if a group of women would be excited about that, and he thinks he knows them, haha!! I knew Tanya wouldn't quietly disappear, she's determined to ruin Bella's reputation, but to what end? Does she think Edward will dump Bella and come running to her? She's so stupid. Now I'm wondering how the he'll Paul and Jacob got into the club unless Tanya helped them.
Jane x
Date: 29 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
I loved the showdown, good for Bella, she was so strong. I'm glad that Sue piped up and told Charlie that Leah's not his daughter but I'm disappointed that she's not more supportive of Seth. She's letting Bella and Edward look after him so she can help Charlie and Leah, I don't see what's to help they're both abusive. Somehow they've controlled her and she's let them, she needs to take a leaf out of Bella's book and stand up for herself and come for her son. Charlie's an arsehole, if it was up to me he would fall 'victim' to an embarrassing end. I hate that worm.
Jane x
Date: 30 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
Loved all the revenge. Tanya being taken away in a rubbish truck was brilliant, definitely what she deserved. Jessica's and Lauren 's unfortunate encounters were fantastic, the STD posters were genius, lol. Finally Paul, Jacob and Charlie are getting their comeuppance, although I bet they're still saying they didn't do anything wrong. I can't wait for the wedding and then the baby to just bring all the family together especially Seth, he seems to be struggling at the moment, but he will get better. Now, who is Phil bringing with him?
Date: 30 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Oh my God! I can't believe Renee turned up at Bella's wedding. I loved the fact Bella stood up to her and then what Esme said and did, 'shit floats' lol, it most certainly does. The trial's going to be difficult but it does signify the end of the abuse for Bella, some closure maybe.
Jane x
Date: 30 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
I'm exhausted, their lives are just full on, it never stops. Pity that police officer only got Leah in the shoulder and didn't shoot to kill. Please say it was Leah who shot Harry, I so want her skanky self to go to prison, she'll have so much more in common with Charlie then and she'll meet so many girls just like herself as well, she'll feel right at home, lol. I love that Seth was able to talk to Edward.
Jane x
Date: 30 Jun 2014 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
Woohoo!! A boy, Edward was right, lol. Finally things seem to be settling down and their lives are becoming less fraught. I'm so happy that Leah's gone to prison, I hope she makes many 'close friends' if you know what I mean. Thank goodness Seth got off so lightly. He's a good kid, he just made a bad decision in a highly emotionally situation, I don't think he'll do that again.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
The Roses Ceremony was lovely and touching. I can't believe Renee is still trying to worm her way out of things, that woman needs a lot of help. As for Charlie he's just confirming what a complete arsehole he is and given time Seth will come to realise this and that he would never have got any sort of explanation or closure from him. He's so lucky to have Bella and everyone else. I'm so happy that Bella's finally getting the life she deserves with the man she loves.
Jane x
Third in the Hostage series. Marcus offers Charlie the opportunity to take down the Chicago Mafia. However, the deal includes Edward being his handler. Is Marcus telling the truth or does he have an alternative agenda?
Ideally, you need to read the other two stories first, but this will stand on its own, at a push.
Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: Action, Drama, Slash
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Hostage
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 44626 Read Count: 3008
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Edward's going to put himself in danger again. I don't like it but I know why he has to do it, just doesn't mean I have to like it. I can see you're going to make me a nervous wreck all over again, lol.
I've been away from all fanfic for so long, updates of stories seemed to come to a standstill, so I've made a conscious decision to read only completed stories and who better to start with than the boys. *sigh*
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Thank you for reading my stories. To date they're all complete.
For a while I'll only be posting one shots as my author career is just taking off. Please feel free to visit my website www dot taylinclavelli dot com I'd love to know what you think.
Yep, ur right, Edward is going to be in danger again, and jasper ain't gonna like it. There's some scene setting and a touch of fun before it get's into the nuts and bolts of it.
Happy reading
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Clever covers for The Pack. I'm getting nervous for them all especially Edward after all he's been through already. I'm glad Carlisle's there although he can't really do anything his presence has to be a comfort.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Glad you like the covers. Ohhh couldn't do a story without Carlisle - he's gonna be needed.
Hugs
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Even though you've already named it I like the Elf Hut, lol.
Hahahaha!! Caesar and Cleo, I could hazard a good guess at that one. That was hilarious I'm still giggling when I think about it. Carlisle is so worried about his boys and this op, I could feel the protective parent coming off the page.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
hehehehe - I just couldn't get the image of Carlisle walking out of the shower, hair messy in a world of his own, out of my head - still can't.
Glad ur enjoying.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Oh my God! After all that it's a good job he passed the test, I don't think he could have stood much more. Did Felix really have to knock him out or is he really that big of a dick?
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
You are quite right, Edward was almost at the end of what he was able to take. Re Felix, it's all about what it looks like in the bosses eyes, and who has the final say. Felix had to solidify his position.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
It's so hard for Edward to watch what happened to that poor girl and to see what they go through just to use the bathroom, but he needs to listen to Felix if he's going to stay alive. I'm really glad that he and Jasper got to spend some time together, they obviously woke Emmett up, lol.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi jane
Yeah, that was truly hard for Edward. Like you say at least he had his Jasper for comfort, and as you know he gets his revenge.
Hehehehe, Emmett doesn't miss much.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Gah!! I can't believe you did that, lol. Demitri's stupid, well sort of, but definitely dangerous, he needs to be watched. Did Carlisle bank on having this much involvement? Maybe Caesar and Cleo will be making way for 007 and Moneypenny, bwahahaha!!
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Yep, I did that. Hell yes, Demitri is dangerous. No I don't think Carlisle banked on having that much involvement, but he will do whatever he has to for his boys.
MMMMMM Carlisle as 007, now there's a thought. **Wiggles eyebrows**
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Oh my God, I don't think I've laughed so much in ages, lol. I would've loved to have seen Jaspers transformation into Jasmine. I feel that after all those shenanigans Edward, Jasper and Rose have an extra special connection, hahaha! The things you have to do for your job.....and your life.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Damn, I envy Rose. I would have loved to be in that position. The ultimate Deli Sandwich with the perfect garnish. Yum. I think some light relief was needed before the build up to the big finish.
Got the idea for Jasper's lady when I saw him play Adam in Criminal Minds.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I'm liking their inventiveness, the families never know what's coming next. I don't like it that Edward's now in the lions den. He's safe in one respect and so not safe in another. Nail biting times ahead.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
True true, nail biting times indeed. Didn't want to just blow everything up - that seemed too easy and predictable. Glad you liked the inventiveness.
Yup in many ways Edward was safer outside the Lions Den.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Well I'm not surprised you were hiding behind the sofa after that ending, I'm just glad I don't have to wait for the update. I'm erring on the side that says Aro wasn't as bad as Marcus, not as much of a psycho. Now, I'm hoping that you haven't damaged Jasper too badly or even at all.
I hope you had a lovely birthday.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Yeah - had to duck out of the way for a few days there. Yes I had a lovely Birthday thank you.
Aro came from the days of old and honor among thieves where his word was a man's bond. He definitely wasn't as bad as Marcus. He was the brother that wanted it all and was jealous of everyone.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 15 May 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
Well thank God they're all okay. So Felix is CIA and not the big dick I thought he was, lol. I hope he gets out of this alive, after five years undercover he deserves to get back to a normal life. Looks like Pippin has a new home, awww.
I have to mention Pippin from that kids programme here who used to fly around in that spotty plane with Linda Baron (Nurse Gladys Emmanuel), lol I used to watch it with my daughter when she was little, did you ever see it? Your stories send my mind all over the place.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
Yup Felix had a role to play and he did it well until the right time and enough was enough.
I was thinking of Pippin from LOTR when I wrote this, and I thought the huskies were so damned cute, despite them being one of the more dangerous dogs.
I remember Linda Baron, and Nurse Gladys from Open all hours but sadly I don't remember Come Outside.
HEHEHEHE glad my stories send your mind all over the place - it makes it a fun adventure.
Take care
maryhell
x
Date: 16 May 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
The Pack done good! I never guessed about Charlie's involvement, who would have thought it. It just goes to show that you never truly know a person. I loved how they got Marcus to rat everyone out, imagine if it really happened one day. So all's well that ends well, the boys are together as is The Pack and now they're going to start a new venture together. Woohoo!!
I loved this whole series, thanks for sharing.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Hi Jane
OMG thank you so much for reviewing every chapter. You are amazing.
Overjoyed that there were some surprises for you at the end. The Pack took chicago their way and it worked. I couldn't leave Marcus living - he played everyone and got what he deserved.
Thank you for sticking with the boys to the end. I loved reading your reviews, your enthusiasm brought a smile to my face every day.
Huge huge thanks
Take care
maryhell
x
Banner by: DeebelleOnefic
This is a story of a tough as nails, Bella, who can bring a mob boss, Edward, to his knees, but in all the right ways. What happens when these two strong personalities collide in more than one way?
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Erotica, Family, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Stories I've read, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125775 Read Count: 478599
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Lol, apart from being Queen of the pool table is Bella some sort of computer whizz kid? I love that she fleeced those blokes. Poor Edward, he's so lonely.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Hmmm, intriguing. I'm looking forward to the rest.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Okay, so I'm more than intrigued now. I can't wait to find out what's going on with Bella. One sided conversations with a photo of her parents, changing hair and eye colour, computer hacking. I think she'll fit right in with Edward. How cute was Cassie wanting her pink gun. Now there's a sentence I never thought I'd write, lol.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Hmm, did Edward kill her dad? Maybe it was someone who works for him. Stark, is that a comic book reference? It sounds familiar. Bella's raising more questions than answers at the moment.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
I think Edward should pay attention to his gut instincts and feelings. Who and what is Bella? My mind is running from one thing to the next with her. She's running from someone or something but who's providing her with info on Edward? Who the hell are Miss Honey and Guido?
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Where on earth did Jessica disappear to? She should have been hunting high and low for those kids. I don't recognise the nickname Topspin and I'm resisting the urge to Google, lol.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Is the cottage and meadow the same place Charlie took Bella? I think it is. Was Charlie investigating Edward's family? I'm wondering if when Edward crashed into Bella whether one of his tyres was shot out. Stark - Iron Man, I knew I recognised the name, lol.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I love Alice's nickname, I guessed that one right, didn't have a clue about Jasper's. Edward seems to thawing a little, well he was until he saw Bella at the club. Does he think she's stripping or is it that he thinks she's too young to work there?
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
They're getting closer and actually laughing. Edward copped a feel and Bella had an ogle and got to wear his t-shirt, at least they both got something out of that. Bella's very quick witted, she'll keep them all on their toes especially Edward, lol.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
Definitely major flirting, it's a good job those kids are so young, lol. I love the banter that's developing between them. I think Edward is a few pages ahead of Bella at this point, he's already questioning the possibility of Bella being in a relationship with him.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
So is Bella an under cover cop, FBI a private investigator or something else? This is driving me crazy trying to work out what's going on? Ursula is one bitter woman, why she has to take it out on everyone else I have no clue.
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
I'm beginning to think that maybe Bella's running from Jacob Black, but it seems silly to run towards the lions den, but then there's also something to be said for hiding in plain sight. At least we know now that however unsure she is about telling Edward her secret she knows she can trust him. Cullen and Cassie are sure getting some big ideas, lol, I don't think Edward will be far behind them. Jessica certainly has her own agenda but does it go beyond getting Edward and his money? Is she working for the Blacks?
Jane x
Date: 01 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Well we've learned that Bella's a really good fighter and able to defend herself. When did she see such violence that it's stuck with her? I think my head is going to explode, lol.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Thank God Jessica is gone. That girl was so stupid. Cullen and Cassie are really running with the idea that Bella's going to be their new mommy, I don't know how Edward thinks he's going to get them to drop that idea, I mean just look what the did at the zoo, lol.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Hmmm, what's Martha done to deserve a beating, or is it more of a case of what she's not done? Is there someone who Bella's running from catching up with her? The plot just thickens and she's not even checked Donkey out yet, I'm dying to find out what she finds.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
I loved the nickname Dora, that had me chuckling and also wondering when Aro referred to Dora as them whether that was a typo or is Dora truly two people and if they are could they also be known as Guido and Miss Honey? Bella's whole name thing confused me as well. It seemed like she was saying she made the name up but then it was her real name. Lol, I feel like I'm in an episode of Soap.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Well they're starting to get to know each other a little better, Bella's opening up more. Does her being a computer genius have anything to do with the reason she's running and hiding? I know you won't tell me but I thought I'd throw it out there. Bloody Mike Newton, he's really up himself he seems like a psycho to me and with any luck not long for this world.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Oh my God! I think a conversation with Aro is due just to see if he knows anything to shed some light on it all, maybe he remembers something from that time. My head is still spinning trying to work all this out. Lol, I think I should just sit back and enjoy the ride although, Mike and Jessica/Jane being married, now there's a shocker who the hell would want to marry him, lol. Has Jane killed Jessica? Did Mike kill Jessica? Hmmm.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
Girlfriend! Edward really is running away with himself and his desire for Bella, if he doesn't slow down a bit he may lose her. Jasper will go mad if he finds out that Bella's been in the security system so no one will see her true eye colour.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
Oh! My! God! Shut the front door! Renee and Esme best friends from way back when. At least now I understand about Bella not really being called that but it is her name. From what Esme said I'm taking it that the government are after Bella because of her super intelligence. I think they wanted her to 'work' for them in some way and Renee and Charlie didn't want that to happen.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Possibly Bella will be teaching Emmett and Jasper how to fight, lol. I think Sasha will be in for a surprise with Bella around and I think Bella might be surprised at her own reaction towards Sasha and the feelings provoked by her being around or all over Edward, lol. There could be fireworks.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
I thought Chaos was Bella's security program that's voice activated, although I did find it weird what she said about her demise and not doing anything unless that was imminent, how would a computer program know that? See you're just adding to my confusion now, lol. I really wasn't expecting Sasha to be there and to be honest I was surprised that Bella drove off, I would have thought she'd stand her ground any knock Sasha out. Ah well, maybe another time, lol.
Jane x