Glad for the update! So the pepper spray might get a little work out?  I like that she isn't all swept up into him but is (rightly so) freaked out!

I found your story yesterday when you updated and have been tearing through it. I just wanted to leave you a review and tell you that there are some really specific things that I love about it - 1. I like that you didn't go with the "usual suspects". I don't miss Alice shopping or Rosalie humping Emmett in the background. I like that they made little cameos as supporting characters to Bella (she had to have friends somewhere in the background), likewise with Jasper. Nicely, sparingly used. In that same vein, the way your villains have their own identities and personalities. It wasn't clear if Carlisle was going to be on the Charles train or not, but by ommitting, say James, it didn't matter because we had to wait and see where you were going.

2. Bella. This Bella is lovesick, but I like her backbone. The way she stood up to Edward and spoke up but didn't punish him endlessly. She was an adult who knew what she was getting into and was willing to take the consequences. She didn't readily forgive him, she stood up for herself and I also just love that when Edward recognizes her traits, he doesn't spend hours on her endless beauty and sexiness - but spends equal time on her talents, intelligence and heart. I especially love how he recognizes her talents in the business world. I think all of those things are 1000 times sexier than any lemon quite frankly.

3. I have loved Esme in this - again, not overbearing or a characature, but supportive and strong.

4. Jacob - maybe this is really a summary of points 1 and 2 - but she wasn't shattered and turned off from men forever, he wasn't a villain or abusive or anything but an ex boyfriend that was willing to inquire and see if she needed help. He made a grand jesture but she wasn't torn or otherwise troubled about it. It was a nice way to get Edward to see her point clearly and wasn't over used.

I'm sad to see this one come to an end. I know I have the one short chapter to read that sorts out the final mystery. Thanks for the great read!

I've just started your stories and now I'm SO far behind on everything else I'm reading. I just can't stop reading yours. I love your Bella especially - how she is tough but so vulnerable. I like that. She lets people love her but she sticks up for herself.

This was a great outtake! I loved this bit...A gift card for Outback?

Then to have them literally bump into each other, very fun little meet cute!

I'm glad she's called Charlie in and isn't brushing off the flowers. I'm sure you have something creepie planned.

I love Emmett and Rosalie in your story - the idea of a bus size version of him in his undies going by Bella was a riot.

I'm glad the honesty about the wedding is going to be dealt with. I think this is a pretty common problem. I know that there was a LOT of input on my wedding that I had to shoot down (and still hear about YEARS later) to get what I truly wanted. Its gotta be even harder with a celebrity groom.

The prom was darling, I especially liked her conversation with Suzanne. I love thinking about the teachers that inspire and the chance to say thank you.

Seriously beautiful chapter - all of it, Renee's kindness to her daughter (and Charlie's for indulging her), Bella's hero worship and Renee taking the time to reach out and touch the life of someone that no one else seemed to care about.

*sigh*...I just want these two to get their happy ending. When they pulled out the piano ornament, I was reminded by how hurt they all were by those rash decisions and giving Carlisle and Bella this chance at happiness is such a comfort I would think.

I think that makes sense about Rosalie - her feelings did eventually change drastically, especially in Eclipse when they were all sharing the pros and cons of changing. In this case, Rosalie's decision caused an extreme outcome that took Bella and Carlisle's mates as well as her family. I can see why she'd feel this way. Also, losing so much family at once tends to make you hang on as tight as you can to what you have left.

The fact that you make Edward have his own POV, that (I think) he's actually able to communicate with her - that's amazing and emotional and just, no wonder she wont wake up. They could stay there forever.

The singing is really great, I love how you connect the specific songs.

I cried again, or maybe I was still crying. Reuniting with Emmett and Rosalie and also finding out how Charlie dealt with things. And then that last bit, that gift she gave Carlisle that confirmed for them all that her visions were real. Quite beautiful. I'm seriously loving this story!

Oh I want them to be burned! What vicious things to say, both in front of everyone and in private. I'm so gald it was Rosalie there to defend her in the end. Of course, Bella doesn't see the truth, what would make her think Carlisle is being anything more than her caretaker - its all she's known him as. This one got my pulse racing for sure and that feeling of dread, its churning!

I kind of like this stage - they know where they stand but they haven't shared even a kiss. Seems like Kate is gonna cause more drama but Jasper and Rosalie seem to be on it.

Oh I hope Alice sees something. I'm so sad that she didn't go to her dad or trust him to protect her. I get it, but I'm sad about it. She's a cops kid after all.

Oh I'm so sad...I'm saddest that she's listening to him and hope that she will at least go to her father. She's so traumatized.

Okay - so I'll have  you  know that I had to wake myself up in the middle of the night to see if you had updated and you had! I'm totally invested in this storyline right now.

I thought he might overhear the phone call, but you had him all the way to La Push practically by that time. I'm sickened that Jacob is holding this over her head and the dread she has that he's coming and now he's there! I hope that Edward realizes that leaving her alone wasn't a smart move and is on his way or honestly, better yet, I keep hoping that Charlie will find out. Somehow I want dad to come rescue her.

I also wonder if the Pack knows - I mean they share all of their thoughts but they may have the romantic version I guess without all of the beating and raping. Anxiously waiting the next chapter!!

Again, I appreciate how you subtly take care of the details. I wondered why one of the others didn't bring food up when Edward started talking about it and then in the next paragraph you just slipped in how they weren't home, how they had left to give them privacy. You don't spell it out but somehow you take care of the little threads that would normally bother me.

She has a long road ahead of her. At least she knows that the pack isn't going to attack, but now that's more people that know what happened to her (and probably in great detail if Jacob's mind was sharing..)

Sorry if this ends up a duplicate review - I was away and couldn't review from my phone so I'm catching up!

The image of her in the shower and him rescuing her - that was so touching and sad. I like that Edward tries to stay ahead of things that will help her, offering to go in to the exam, or not to, getting another dr., etc. His life experience is really helpful here.

Clever (gross, yes) way that you explained why Alice couldn't see Bella. That makes such sense in the grand scheme and a good way to clear up the whole possible pregnancy thing since that isn't part of your big plot. I like the back and forth that Bella is going through - the fear, the sadness and the anger now. At the same time, its nice that for now at least, she believes that Edward and everyone love her.

She never realized in the books that the heart was a diamond, so I can see her being upset, but not devastated like she might be if she thought it was a priceless heirloom. Nice tough again btw.

Rosalie was a good intro - I can see how she and Esme are helping. I would think that in the long term, Emmett will as well. Being the big brother and having an understanding of her situation. I feel really bad for Charlie right now, seperated and devastated at his bad judgement of Jacob. 

Alice baking was a cute comic relief - throwing the eggs into the bowl. I really want to know what's up with Jacob!!

I wonder if Renee will figure it out and give Bella some level of support (given she's so much more open minded). Maybe this lays the ground for Bella being able to continue to have her parents in her life after she is changed. Edward is obviously forming an attachment beyond acceptance to Edward - he's so happy to have the help with Bella and knows how much Edward loves her.

Great one shot - I really enjoyed it!

Fuck...you jus took the wind from my lungs. Did not see this coming and I'm so damn sad.