I think if you are going to rewrite then do so. The story is nice and so was the ending. It was not intense only in a few places. Resolved quickly so I would say nice short story.

I was really worried Edward would still cheat with Gail.

You know I get Emmett wants to give Bella his point of view about Edward. What if Bella said "you know Em I really wish you had not married a stripper you could do so much better". 

I am surprised you don't have more reviews. This is such a good story.  Bella is leveling out now.  Poor thing she wanted to know about Lexi, in the end it just hurts her. I get what she is saying.  I am not exciting enough to earn a week of your time. I get the back woods for a honeymoon and then whatever else is left over.

I have hopes for Bella to grow up. She is so immature. I don't care if you are married to the postman, she is hard to stand sometimes.

Edward is in the mob. The less she knows keeps her safe and out of jail. How much more brains does she need to understand that??

sigh,

I am nervous for her going around her mother,Leah and Sam.  She needs a break, before everything breaks her.

Well good story. This is more like RL. People trying to get out of the getto. Or playing the game.

Carlisle could have raped Bella, IF he had not have been so messed up. He has always wanted her. With all the drugs in him he lost his ability to control his actions, thus he went after her.  He was dangerous at that point.

Bella was scared because she did not want Edward to kill his own brother. If it was about her it would be even worse.  She thinks she can control situations with the mobsters, she can not and she put herself in danger.  Being in that club with the mistresses was a bad move. IMO

I know he is in the mob. He loves his wife. I beleive he will not cheat on her. I worried in the beginning, but he sees what it does to a marriage.

I voted for Quiet Storm already!! I loved this chapter. So full of lots of stuff!

"we're having a baby" over and over!  Yep this Edward loves his wife and wants babies. He will be a better dad. Gun in one hand and glove in the other. Baseball or shoot out! LMAO

Oh. Marcus is making a move on Edward. Edward sees it coming and is positioning. Bella has to get in the clear or they will use her to bargain with.  Caius was late? Or Caius is in on it? 

Our girl Bella is growing up. Yes Esme is depressed. She needs a therapist and probably meds.

Edward and Bella will be great at the parental thing.  I think.

Are Edward's concerns ridiculous?  You told us along time ago, you did not have cheating Edward & Bella. So I trust YOU! How about that? He has as much opportunity to cheat with a club full of strippers as anyone. Bella is attached to Jacob because SHE IS LONELY. Well we all get that, too bad Edward doesn't.

No pregnant woman wants to be husbandless.

You always write such good chapters.

You know it has been an amazing story. We all will hate to see it end.  Thank you again for no Bella & Edward cheating. He may be the mob boss but he loves his wife, and now his son.

Thanks,

Yes of course she will say yes. She loves this man and TRUSTS him.

YIPPIE

James & victoria. UGH

now I am worried.

wow... need a shower..

Okay here is another way to look at this sexual innocence. She dated a gay guy and of course no sex. She married and still no sex and she is stressing out because she waited to be married and then not full filled. Now she is dating yet another more experienced handsome guy and because she is not experienced he wants to wait..... SHE HAS WAITED LONG ENOUGH. Now granted she needs to be loved not just f..ked but hey. She has done the waiting thing. That is why she feels so inferior.

yikes

Well I am glad she followed Tanya. At first I thought she was nuts. I think it was a great idea. She saw he did not follow Tanya. She heard that sick woman's story. So all he told her based on what he knew was true.  Great idea.

I am glad she applogoised.

Glad Renee is gone. She is an older version of Tanya.

so sweet..

Jared maybe high but he still could be a threat.

this could be the river. she went without a second thought?  Jacob, Charlie or Edward only those people can move her without a second thought. Jacob is a stretch.

You need to kill Renee off. TO do that to your own child. She is worse than sick. satan in the flesh.

Well you didn't name his wedding night woman but you did describe her. Well I thought it was a good period piece. Short 1 shot I am never sure how to review.

I like different situations, not so much of Edwards' dieing love for Bella. She trips alot bites her lip and can not answer. I am much happier with a stronger version.

I am glad she did not just jump up and declare her love for him. It takes time and after they way he treated her it will take longer.

sad but true. They give too many chances and sometimes the abused don't make it out alive.

In my own family I have experienced this. That woman we helped 3 times and each time she went back. The last time she married another man lived with him less than a year they left him and went back again. This time we will no longer help her. We have spent so much money and so much grief but if you have not made up your mind to get out then you won't.

She quit calling us and it has hurt my husband so much because she is his daughter. There is nothing we can do. She says she is happy now, telling that  to other family she calls.  She hides all those problems. This time we have no idea if they stopped or started again.

If you are in abuse get out and don't go back.

Let Charlie get ahold of Tanya.  That will be priceless.

GREAT STORY

She is taking this better than most people. Young people are more passionate thus when this happens they have a harder time getting through it.

Of course he is sorry, he got caught. He said I was going to bury it.  He wanted Tanya, he was not forced.  He wanted something exciting, he was BORED.

If Bella is too easy on him he will do this again. Perhaps therapy will help, but I think that is unlikely. In life I have noticed that men that cheat ususally come from a family where their fathers or brothers or both have done the same.

I hope you update.

Well, they have started to heal. Problem... Charlie. He can not get involved and Bella should have never gone there with the information. Now she is healing and Charlie is still mad. I have been there. Step daughter her husband abused her.  She has left him multilple times and gone back. Last time her father said if you go back this time don't call me.  That was 4 years ago and she has never called him again.  My step daughters huband was...........much, much,much worse. Cheating was a small part very small.

So, Ms Author ball is in your court.

I agree sex needs sometime. They start talking and working together on small things. Put that together with planning out how they want the future. She just has to stay on board with living each new day with that newness and put the past to bed. When you go to the Dr talk there. At home work on now and the future using the new skills you are gaining.

well I am not sure if I will be long.

The thing is she signed up for this. Her family fu..s her over. You have to give her something redeeming. She has got to smarten up. Stop caring about these people who do NOT care for her. She has got to survive. Take his money and don't give a shit about him. Just do it and leave.  Her family have degraded her to this.

I can not stay long if you don't give her a plan and some outlet of happiness.

COWARD

good chapter.

well close to twilight, more grown up. Of course believable since most teenagers that are as old as she is are thinking about sex.

great chapter.

I am so glad you wrote them doing community service. If they don't need money then they can use their time to help others.  GJ

the fact you don't drag things out gives you and A in my book. I get so tired of a chapter when one sentence will do.

of course if this is not drama enough add in the Cullens

oh puke find me when you are not a virgin. She should tell him, when I find the right man for the job I won't be calling YOU.

Well remember we read at FF too. If I am there and  you update I catch it there. I am here. good chapter we are on a trip so where next?

:-)

Thank you,

I am excited for this journey. Many people to see, much to do. I still love them.

ahh PERFECTO..

I loved it. I am so proud of Bella in this chapter. It would be easy for her to get weak and think about how beautiful Tanya is. Not once did she even comment. YIPPIE. She knows he loves her "forever".

Glad I had read this on FanFiction. You got this thing really jumping right now. Don't break the computer!

good chapter. More babies coming up. I think it is wonderful. How many people love this much?  Intense.

First time I have seen this here in a while. I read it on FF.  THey have come a long way.  Twins on the way Masen and a big family.  a long way!

Oh she HAS to forgive Eddie.  Nope she does not HAVE to forgive you.  You screwed the pooch so to speak so that was your "end of story".