Reviews by MaryMary
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward Masen, Hollywood heartthrob, meets Bella Swan, shy college student, and the romantic sparks fly. Can they both overcome traumatic pasts and trust issues to be together?  All-Human

Thank you to Coleen561 for the beautiful banner!

Virgins & Villains came in first in 3 categories at the Summer 2011 Avant Garde Awards.  See banners below.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, I Whitlock's read , Ageise02 To Read 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 86 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 448890 Read Count: 311998
[Report This] Published: 20 Sep 2010 Updated: 04 Jan 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Champagne & Diamonds

sweet slow and romantic is so very much these two kids. Getting time to do the deed. I am worried she is still gonna have problems. I hope not. I hope LOVE will cancel out all the bad for both of them.

 

I love this story and the fact you do too. Updates keep us going. I dont have to reread the previous chapter each time. I thank you,



Author's Response:

That was very sweet.  I thank you.  Obviously their story is close to my heart...and sometimes my funny bone.  More to come soon.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Bite Marks & Sweet Revenge

Marry those kids off. Get them in a normal life. Sleeping together on SKYPE LOL

 



Author's Response:

LOL.  They have a Virtual Sexual Relationship..although not really...okay they have a Virtual sexually frustrated relationship.  much better.. THanks!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 54: Waterworks & Heartfelt Sentiments

This is such a sweet story. Very happy to read it. All the bad things that happened to Bella  and Edward are in the past now. They are going to be rewarded with a happy future.  VIA our author!

 

 



Author's Response:

yes..not all the drama is over...but good will always outweigh the bad.  thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 03 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Quiet Comfort & Perfect Words

love my story here!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 08 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Skypeward & Karmic Rewards

I love this story.



Author's Response:

thanks!  I'm glad.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 17 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Iron Man & Safely Home

ahh sweet Edward loves that girl. Bella focus on the future. Your mother will always be in your heart.. That is where mine is too.

Author we have been on a long journey your computer has died and been resurected.

please get us to the Edward and Bella loving. I am worrying she will not be able to do this. I am hoping I am wrong.

These two deserve happiness.

 



Author's Response:

we will get there....even if it's on an uncooperative computer !  lol  Thanks very much!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Making Plans & False Allegations

Hollywood is full of these type of people. Looking for an angle. That is not fiction. Now why he took it out on Bella. Who knows?

I can not help but believe this will be fixed but hey Edward is also sexually frustrated and thinking she is never going to want sex.  That is all playing in his head, even though he does not recognize it right now. Right now he is angry.



Author's Response:

you are absolutely correct...all these things are definitely playing around in that gorgeous noggin.  poor eddie.  He's so worried about Bella being mistreated...that he did it first.  stupid stupid man.  Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 23 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 64: Wrap Parties & Shattered Glass

You know, she has been almost murdered is she really THIS DUMB?

 

SIGH?



Author's Response:

but she was very young then.  This is a hard way to learn.  Thanks

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 65: Boot Heels & Body Bags

No it was not too bad. She has had enough hurt for 10 women. It is time for her to have nothing, I mean nothing but HAPPINESS.

 



Author's Response:

we are headed toward a HEA...i think.  Yes, yes we are. Thanks!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 13 May 2011 Title: Chapter 67: Reality Shows & Apparitions

I am not getting this he saw her?  He went out with her as in saw her. Or she was on the road and he SAW her. Or he had a dream and he saw her??  That is confusing.

They are getting close to marriage and all hell is breaking loose.

He is desperate because Bella may get mad and leave him??

 

YOU ARE SO MEAN.

 

 



Author's Response:

he was out with emmett...he saw her when emmett wasn't around...they did speak.  He's just shaken up and freaked out..we'll learn about in in the next LRM and V&V.  Edward adores Bella...he has lived in hatred of Meghan for 7 years.  He would never seek her out.  Hope that clears some of it up. Thanks.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 20 May 2011 Title: Chapter 68: Strange Days & Sucker Punches

Okay we are getting close before we ALL combust.

 



Author's Response:

combustion may be imminent.  Thanks!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 70: Shock Therapy & The Mother Road

lol



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 03 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 72: Teepees & Tribal Law

This is a good story. I am wondering if my hard drive will crash before they get married???

 

You are actually going to make us wait 47 more days.....................grr



Author's Response:

um.  maybe.  So many people are looking forward to the wedding night...I'm getting nervous.  I may come down with a case of 'performance anxiety'  lol.  just kidding.  Once the bachelor parties are over things will move much faster...i think... i hope...  eh i don't know... if it helps I'm already writing the next chap.  Thanks!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 73: Red Garters & Fuzzy Dicks

you rat!



Author's Response:

Go to the Facebook page....here's the link....:   http://www.facebook.com/pages/Virgins-Villains-fanfic/153713394654002#!/note.php?note_id=177344502329689

This will give you the ENTIRE phone conversation btwn Rose and Charlie... Enjoy!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 74: Fireworks & Dream Homes

I am still hoping I will live long enough to reach the wedding and the lemon. LOL

 



Author's Response:

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 77: Wedding Dances & Viral Video

God I hope I live the week through..or perhaps two. LOL

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 80: Tropical Sands & Blue Lagoons

We had rain yesterday in North Texas.................HOOOHAHH..

 



Author's Response: lol Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 08 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 82: Fairytale Cottages & Happy Tears

great chapter.



Author's Response: thanks very much, glad you liked it. The sequel will begin shortly.

The Vineyard by EricaNoelle180 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 512]
Summary: Past Featured Story

France 1830

After the betrayal and death of his wife, Englishman Edward Cullen is bitter by love. But  when he meets a tradesmen's daughter who was everything his late wife wasn't, Edward finds himself giving his heart to a woman who he, in the past, would deem improper. With duties of society and burdens of the past pushing them in all directions, will the two lovers be able to give themselves everything their hearts desire?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories Read by CNYBella, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69979 Read Count: 47177
[Report This] Published: 03 Oct 2010 Updated: 28 Feb 2011
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14

Well, he is sealing his fate here. She will not be happy he was not forthcoming. He should have told her prior to marriage about this. Now he has once again not been truthfull.

 

Bad boys get into big trouble.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

thank you for deadlines.

 

Good start.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

Remember the time of this.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

I think if he ej.. prior to pull out,  they are making Babies.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10

Personally I like the story, although I think I have seen this in a movie. Perhaps something like it.

 

The story is good and I agree people today would not understand the ENGLISH of that day and time and I do not read or speak French.

 

SO FORGE ON.



Author's Response:

Just wondering..What movie have you seen this in? I might rent it and watch it. 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

What would be the question?

 

  Edward should have told her the truth completely when they were engaged.  Now if he does not want this little girl what about Alice and Jasper raising her since they are childless?  She would be someone for them to love and they are closer to her in proximity.  According to the story!

 

 



Author's Response:

Hmm...interesting theory. I really didn't think about that. I guess, yes they would, but I didn't write that into the outline. Hmmmmm.....interesting. 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 10 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17

Well I think Alice is bat shit crazy too.  She thinks if a Cullen heir is born even if it is Edwards it releaves her of any worry. Now I say if Jasper wants his own heir it will only make it worse.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

I wondered if they told her he was her father. Well now how hard was all that on Isabella?  After all he his this from her, his LOVE for Tanya showed today. That had to be hard even though it is not the child's fault.  She maybe dead but today she was brought to life.

 

Please update and take care of our Bella. Edward, I am not so happy with. She needed to know that before saying I do.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21

Interesting I thought of Jasper as well. Well you stinker. Okay great story.. Update soon!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22

Oh my. Well, well sounds like time to hire guards.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23

utoh.. AListar bad as James..

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 15 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 24

You are so bad. Cliffie!  Yes Let Jasper shoot him dead. Only way to get rid of a rat.Boy Ms Tanya just keeps on giving! She and James should have died together. Best solution to everyone's problems.

 

 

have a good visit with your sister.

 

Great story.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26

Hate Tanya? Hmm I think she could have been truthfull to her husband. Deceit always hurts and in this case everyone.

 

Now Edward will have to forgive her. That is if he lives. If he dies because he had to have the last word on James. Philip and Isabella as well as Kate loose. How is that right? They are all 3 innocent.

 

Good story

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 25

ok now we are all gonna have to hurt you. Hanging us out here on these cliffs it is breezy and dangerous.

Honestly I thought maybe Jasper had slept with Tanya. Woo that girl gets around!

 

 

Wild as the West by lfcpam Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 513]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella and James Swan move out west after their parents death. Moving to Wyoming, they both come to work on the ranch of Edward Cullen. See what happens when your life and love are as wild as the west.

Banner by:Ange de l'aube

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 41 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 132021 Read Count: 48540
[Report This] Published: 09 Oct 2010 Updated: 12 May 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

awk...

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

SOON please.



Author's Response:

It will be I promise! Thank you for the review :)

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

cant wait for the doozy!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

hmm. Well not suprising.  I am trying to remember the year this is supposed to be happening.  Back in the old days.. 1800's and earlier women were a scarcity on the plains.  They died in child birth, some didn't come with their husbands.

 

So I guess stealing them was more common amonst the men that had none and no scrupples.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

okay, thank you for the update. Please keep them coming. Often is great. Some people wait a month then write 3,000 words. Well I have to go back and reread the previous chapter. If the story is good, I will do it but if it is slow. I just kill it and find something else to read.

 

Thank you again,

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

OH.. a cliffy. Bad girl.

 

Good story, more here than a love story. Keep that part going.

 

 



Author's Response:

Wow everyone is mad at me for the cliffie! LOL Thank you for your review! See you all on Friday ;)

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 26 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

OH MAN.. another cliffie.. killing us here!

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Evil woman... cliffie again.

At least you update often.  Come on let James live.



Author's Response:

*evil laugh* thank you...I will have the next chapter up this week. I promise no cliffie this time

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

I love this story. Keep it going. RL comes on we all know just don't forget us.

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you! I will have a new chapter up soon, just waiting for my beta!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 08 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

love the story -please keep it going.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

A sweet time for love. Trusting, guarded and waiting for that special moment. Not sex with anyone any where.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 19 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

sweet story.



Author's Response:

Thank you! Thanks for reviewing go to fictionators.com Monday for a teaser

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

So funny, a little hussy.  Sweet girl.

 

Merry Christmas to you and your family, love your story.



Author's Response:

Thanks hun, I hope your family has a Merry Christmas and I will see you all soon after...hopefully with a proposal!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Well we got there. Yes in those times women did not know very much about sex. It was a taboo discussion.

 

Okay now is the time to get "hitched"!

 

 



Author's Response:

Yes let the hitching and lovin commence...LOL Thank you and Happy New Year

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

DANG WE MISSED YOU!

 

Now we expect more! You can do it.

 



Author's Response:

I missed you all too...I feel so bad about the long wait but my brain shut down...i hated it. I am already working on next chapter so hopefully soon :)

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Loved the chapter and missed the story.  I think Edward and Bella will be happy for Alice and Jasper. I think in a family with such love and companionship they will not be sad to share their moment.  Rather it be more memorable for all!

 

See you very soon, we hope.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you...I hope the time will be short between chapters too..

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Well you are worth waiting for. yes double wedding exactly what I thought should happen. Brother & sister wedded on the same day. Back then hard to get everyone together traveling miles to come. So best to do 2 for the price of one. Perhaps the dresses will be less than what they want but the end product will be the same.

 

thank you,



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! Sorry for the wait I really felt bad but just way too much on my plate. I cant wait to write this double wedding!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

glad you are back. Yes we flounced, but came right back when we saw you.



Author's Response:

Thanks for coming back.. I am writing the next one as we speak. Thank you for reviewing

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 19 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I am glad you are finishing this. It would be a shame to let them never marry.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

very sweet and sensual.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Pregnant and wanted to ask Carlisle about that.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

nice chapter, thanks for it.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 13 May 2012 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Lovely story. 

The White Swan Lodge by arkin1 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 143]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Tragedy led her there. Commitment forced him there. Can a place of beauty and solitude hold the fate they were both seeking…

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 53492 Read Count: 16893
[Report This] Published: 11 Oct 2010 Updated: 14 Mar 2011
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

First of all, he needs to say on his review. Establishment is under new management undergoing some revisions.  I will review thoroughly later.

 

Then decide if he wants to keep going around doing this or make a home in this area. and write or do something else.

 

YEPPERS.. that is what I call a plan.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

One and only date. Got him some then he is leaving. perfect!

 

Well Edward, poopie on you!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

I don't hate him but he has not been truthfull and he doesn't plan to return. SO.. if that isn't casual sex I do NOT know what is.

 

I am not his biggest fan.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

The cat is her personel pet. She should have a place he can travel and places he can not. Some people do not welcome that.

 

Rose well she is all about herself.  Nothing is any different.

 



Author's Response:

It's true it's her personal pet, and it is stated on the brochures for people who have an aversion to animals.  It would be hard to limit the spaces a cat can get into.  The suites themselves would be easy enough, but common areas would be hard. 

I stayed at a B&B once that had a cat who practically lived on the porch of our suite and came in and out of the room. :) it was adorable hahah

Hope you enjoyed the chapter and that you continue to read! update coming soon!

xo
jaime

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

I say he should move into the lodge. Perfect job for both of them. He could still write, just not travel as much. Say write something different perhaps books are articles for magazines other than the one he had been doing.

 

Sweet story.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I truly appreciate it!

Update is coming soon promise!  Edward is realizing the ways his life could really change here and it's all for the better!

xo
jaime

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

Okay sweetie.. Leave us out here on the cliff. It is too cold for cliffs. Please update us soon.

 

Good story I am sure Edward will hang himself. He has been naughty and not opening up to her about his job.

 

Let's see how she takes it. HMM

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 18 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14

Okay well I knew she would react like this. I expected her mad, but he did not write the review and that is #1.  He left and came back still had not written the review #2. Think he would have already done that if that was his intentions. He has been working for free and obviously she needs help and love #3.

 

He deserves time out!  He doesn't deserve to be banished. 

 

OKAY NOW SWEETIE FIX IT.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

Well that was short. Okay I said most of this on the last review. My thoughts on Bella. I know she wants to get this going, she really needs help. She has to look at what he actually did from the beginning to the end. No he did not tell her, but the implication would be that was his only reason for being there. We all know that stopped early on.  Now she has pushed him away and taken some time thinking and what he thinks is she will never want me again.

 

Bella is digging her own hole.



Author's Response:

I promise I won't drag it out ... she just needs to get her thoughts in order and stop doubting the choices she made.  Her main priority is the lodge right now and she thinks she might have compromised that and what her mother left her so she has a lot of things going on.  Unfortunately he did lie by omission and if it truly wasn't a big deal, in theory he should have told her.  That's how she's looking at it.  In her mind there is some underlying reason why he didn't say anything because in all honesty it wouldn't have been a big deal, and we as readers know that he decided early on not to do it, but she doesn't.

She'll work it all out and maybe a step back is the perfect thing for them. :)

thanks so much for reading - I hope to update soon - Thanks so much for the support!

xo
Jaime

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21 - Epilogue

Great story.. could have been longer but It was great.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

Well she is PG... ha ha..

 

couple of more chapters huh?

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

I hope when she gets to Chicago, he is not dining with a woman. Well, I hope not anyway.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17

Love this story.  I am glad when the story exists out of Forks and large metropolitan areas. 

 

Thanks,

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

wow.

Prophecy by VampaliciousCullen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 125]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Prophecy

Can Bella overcome the destiny that has been laid out for her and find the Promised One in time?

The Prophecy

The one with balance will seek out the Promised one.
She shall find him in a forest of rock and steel.
This warrior is a child of the Goddess, yet will be raised far away.
He will return and aid his people in sweeping the darkness from the land.
He will place the one with balance upon her throne and will stand by her side for many years.

OOC for some characters

Some Human, Many Mythological creatures, not the world you are used to.

Complete 01/07/2011: Prophecy; Part One

Up Now: Part Two; True North

Character List for Part One & Two

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Fantasy, Romance, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Fics to Read
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 103125 Read Count: 31122
[Report This] Published: 12 Oct 2010 Updated: 22 Jul 2011
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 19 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 2: C2 Fates Collided

good story..



Author's Response:

thanks for reading, hope you continue to do so :)

Things Least Expected by lmw Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 477]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella thought her life was going to be different by the time she was close to thirty.  She thought she'd be living the American dream with a husband the two kids and a dog.  Instead at twenty eight she breaks up with her long term boyfriend and is the only single person among her friends and family.  With a reconnection of an old crush thanks to Facebook and an unexpected meeting with a new man, Bella does the only thing she can, follow her heart.

 

I have a banner!!  I want to give a shout out to Mehek18 for creating it.  I think it's pretty nice.  You should really check out her site at http://mehek18.tumblr.com and take a look around. She is amazing and I want to thank her for taking the time to create my banner!  Thank you!!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella
Chapters: 62 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 296726 Read Count: 118582
[Report This] Published: 19 Oct 2010 Updated: 26 Sep 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I just want her to tell jake.. I have a boyfriend I am in love. (period)



Author's Response:

Welcome to the story...hope you enjoy it!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

She should have asked this before moving in. She needs to move on.



Author's Response:

Glad you are still with the story!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

I am still hung up on the "problem".

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Personally I say..................screw Edward. I dont give a flip about where they stayed.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I understand how she feels. EDWARD...screw him.

 

 



Author's Response:

Edward is a little but of an ass, isn't he?  Glad you are still enjoying it!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

I dont care what he lost. I dont trust him..........PERIOD.

 

You take life as it comes.  What if the airplane killed Bella and this Baby??

 

DUMB EDWARD>>> SHALLOW AND SELF ABSORBED.

 



Author's Response:

Edward is acting kind of dumb....glad you're still with the story!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

I think Bella needs to protect herself after the funeral invite Renee to visit her (alone) and then leave and do NOT say good bye to POOPWARD.

 



Author's Response:

Edward is a poopyhead, isn't he?  Glad yo are still reading.

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I think she should start refusing the flowers. Or repackage the notes and mail them back unopened.

 

I would NEVER talk to him again!

 



Author's Response:

SHe is going to stand up to him soon!  BTW-Thanks for reading and reviewing!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26

Well I must say well written Bella.  Edward is not stable he is self absorbed. She has a baby to protect even if she will not protect herself.  

Personally I would just keep him at arms length.  He went back to Tanya.. running right back to his original problem. SO I say no she should not let him back in.

Jacob is a far better selection for a father. She had the sperm donar and he is to flakey.

 Now lets see how fast you update.

 

 



Author's Response:

Hello and thanks for staying intersted in the story.  The next update will be in the next day or so.  I also might do an out take from Edward's point of view, we'll see.

Thanks again for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 06 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter Twenty Seven

Well I am sure Jacob was there a lot because in the beginning he showed up when you least expected him. I do not think that was coincedence. Edward I still think is self absorbed immature idiot. Bella may let him in but I do not think I would make it easy.

 

Babies need forever people.



Author's Response:

There is so much Jacob hate!  Jacob just wanted to do what he felt was right.  he has no romantic feelings for Bella, however, he still wants to protect her and now the baby.  eh feels justified in what he did.  We'll find out what Edward is thinking in the next chapter as it's an out take and his pov.  thanks for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter Twenty Eight

Jabob has been after Bella from DAY 1. He deleted those messages. She can check if they came in and he was the only one there to delete them.  That was so wrong and right with his program.

 

Edward is flakey. I don't trust him still. She is right if he can put it together his daughter deserves her father. Renee should be there no matter what.

 



Author's Response:

I was hoping that Jacob would come across more as over protective big brother, but everyone wants to kill himstead! LOL.  She'll realize that he deleated them 

Edward is trying.  That's all he can do, right?

The update should be tonight some time.  Thanks for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter Thirty

ugh. cliffie..

 

When Edwards wants to talk, you never know what is coming out of his mouth. He needs to go back to Tanya he focuses his whole life on when Tanya did this and that. AT one point or the other you say...BYE to that person. If you don't that means you still have attachment, feelings etc.

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Sorry about the cliffie, I had to make things intersting! I think you'll understnad what comes out of Edwrd's mouth during the conversation with Emmett.  Next update should be in a day or so.  Thank you for reading an dleaving comments!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter Thirty One

ok well out of the crazy into the trying to be normal.

Edward & Esme have been on my list of not favorite people. Edward is immature (I think).  Esme told us a story that explains why she thinks the way she does. She is correct about the one parent situation, it is hard. If Bella had to do that she would need to hire extra help. After all she has the money.

If Edward & Bella can mend this divide they have a baby that is insentive to do so. She is worth the work and the changes they need to make. Will they ever recover?  It is up to you our dear author. 



Author's Response:

Edward was very immature,  He is trying to grow up.  Funny what taking responsiblity for a baby will do for a person.

Esme thinks very old fashioned.  She thinks Emmett and Rose would be better parents because they are married.  Bella isn't  have a difficult time yet because Edward has stepped up to the plate and is taking responsiblity and is there for Charlotte and Bella.

Well the next chapter will be posted by the weekend. You will find out more about their date then.

Thanks for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter Thirty Five

okay She was right about Seth.  Edward needed to tell him, after work I am going back to the hotel eat with my family. I have a big party in two days.

 

You gotta take charge of your own business.

 

 



Author's Response:

It seems like people in the industry have had Edward on a tight lesh for a long time, so he wasn't ready to stand up Seth.  remember, He also wanted to talk Edward out of staying away from Tanya because "they sell movies." Seth just was not a nice guy.  he realizes now he has to stand up for himself.

Thanks for reading.  Next update will be soon!
-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter Forty Two

Now do your home work. California has laws to prevent them from being harrassed. Also you might use the word "amazing" less. You used it twice in once sentence following another sentence with it.

 

Now.. good story. Of course we all hate Tanya. I find I do in most stories. Edward gets a lawyer and gets out. Tell Bella to follow the police to the station. She is a smart girl. She can bond him out.  When they leave Califoria..the land of fruits & nuts. Pun intended things will get better.

Forgiving him was correct they were broken up. He lied. More over he is good to the baby and that is #1 important.  He is growing up just in time to be a daddy.

 



Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for reading/reviewing.

 

I was unaware of this California law, however that isn't always the case.  Russel Brand almost got his work visa taken away when a paparazzo tried to take a picture up Katey Perry's dress. He had to pay something like $20,000 and was in jail for I think  a day.  There might be laws but it seems it doesn't mean anything (plus at the end of the day, this is a work of fiction and maybe if I use a story line like that agian in the future I'll look up the laws.  thank you for bringing this to my attention).

I've been under the weather the past few days and didn't realize I used the same word in the same sentence twice!  I usually try to use the thersaurous and use a different word.

I also find myself hating Tanya, even if she isn't potrayed as being the bad guy.    i am unsure if we've seen the last of her.  I'm kind of messing around with an idea but I don't know if it would make it into the story.

-Lisa

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter Forty One

Well I am not suprised. Tanya is that kind of snake. Remember what Jane said?  She either has to let is slide or forget him forever. That is all she can do. They still have the baby he still has a wandering penis,obviously.

 

The main thing is you can not keep going back to this.  Charolette needs both parents. He is doing a great job of that. So, she swallows the story and decides to set this out and see if he does it again. Or she finally once and for all says enough.

 

Sigh, I felt this coming. You better write like the dickens. CLIFF PERSON



Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for reading and commenting.

Bella will get things off her chest in the next chapter, I promise.  She and Edward will be hashing some issues out.

I will be posting again hopefully by Saturday (Just so you know, I am writing like the dickens...real life is just busy right now!  the next chapter has been running through my head since last night!).

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter Thirty Seven

Tanya is PREGNANT... desperation!

 

He is not telling the whole truth.. He got mad! BINGO



Author's Response:

Maybe she is....maybe she isn't....who knows (oh wait, I know!).  Edward clammed up. Plus, as we'll read in an upcoming out take Edward remembers that Emmett said not to tell her.  He just wants to forget all about her.  Who knews if he is telling the whole truth....you'll find out sooner or later!

Thanks for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter Forty

Well we know who will be there,TANYA of course.

 

Yes he gets an Oscar, or doesn't the big question is will he ever start living in the now. Will he make a permanent commitment to Bella. He was so ready to with TANYA. Well this is a real woman that deserves to be have the whole package. If he doesn't then he is cheating all of them.

 

 



Author's Response:

Hello and thanks for reading.

Edward will make a small step towards a committment in the next chapter.  It's not an engagement, but it's small and in the right direction.  He was ready to settle down with Tanya because he was young and thougth he was doing the right thing.  She was undeserving of him.

The next update will be soon !

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 May 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter Fifty

I can see both side of the Esme, Bella problem. Esme starts quoting Catholic guidelines on getting married, Bella rebells. Bella wants this her way, her wedding. Esme is having a procedure in the hospital and she wants to be alone, Bella does not agree. Bella wants this her way. 

 

Sigh, mothers and daughters.



Author's Response:

thanks for reading.

The next chapter will be eye opening in their relationship.  it should be posted within a day or so.

Thanks again for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter Thirty Eight

Edward slept with Tanya while he and Bella were seperated or what ever they were. The dick wont admit it. Jane hid it.

 

Tanya is his life partner.............not Bella.  Bella deserves better. He is addicted to the slut.

 



Author's Response:

First thanks for reading!!  Second of all, the next chapter (which I am hoping to post either today or tomorrow) is the last few chapters from Edward's point of view (it's another outake).  I think you'll have a little more faith in dear Edward after reading it.  H eloves Bella and wants to be with her.  He likes their family they created.

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I am still at screw Edward.. Fine line between love and hate.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 42: Out Take Four-Edward's POV Part One

He finally told them off. Tanya is a whore. Seth screwed his life.  Take control Edward for your family.

 



Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for reading.

Edward is trying to take control of his life.  He thought Seth was a buddy, he was mistaken.  Tanya is a whore (or whorish as she put it).  She is gone for a little while.  Don't worry, she'll be back.

the next  update will be tonight.  it's the second part of Edward's POV. 

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter Thirty Nine

Well I am sorry, I still do NOT trust him. He is flaky plain and simple. Tanya is in there inside his bean brain. He keeps going back for that.  So. Personally in this flick I think Bella is rather stupid to stay with him pin her hopes of forever with him. 

 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading.  I'm sorry you feel that way about Edward, but it is understandable after everything he has put Bella through. Bella sees no reasona s of now not to trust Edward. I promise there will be a time where he mans up and there will be a time where everything with Tanya will be revieled. 

I hope you will stick with the story though to the end.

Thank you again for reading!

-Lisa

PS-Update should be in a day or so.  I'm going to work on it for a bit tonight.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter Forty Six

I want to put this nice. Edward has the cow hook line and sinker, milk and all free of charge and a calf... for free. So what is the hurry? His excuses are LAME. Tanya over and over.. BS  He is still that same selfish, self absorbed person. The only redeeming quality is that he loves his daughter. Perhaps he can teach her that marriage is a waste of time.  I am not his fan. Don't give a shit for his POV... He needs to change words are cheap.

 



Author's Response:

Hi, first I want to thank you for reading.  I appreciate the comments.

Edward (or me since I am controling his mind in this story) is working up to something.  He is somewhat of a perfectioniest and wants things perfect.  I know you don't want or like his POV, but when the next one is written he'll get a peak into his mind and see what he is thinking and what the hold up with the proposla is.  It'll make sense when all is revieled.  he isn't selfish.  He lives for Bella and his daughter.  I hope you'll stick around with the story long enough to see where I am going with this.

Again, thanks for the review.  I am hoping that the next update will be in just a few days.

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 May 2011 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter Fifty Two

It is a grand time!  Married who would have thunk that 20 chapters ago? 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading/reviewing.  They are indeed going to get married!  Yah!  Next chapter will be in a day or so.

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Out take five: Edward's POV Part One

Well FINALLY.  I am glad he has given up all his insecurities and TANYA. That was big. She had to go. Staying away from Hollywood for a while is a good idea. If he wants to do a movie at one point, he can pick the product demand more money and negotiate his time with his family.  Not one movie after another. He can also say ...NO Tanya in the cast.



Author's Response:

Hi,

I hope that you understand now where Edward was coming from and what he was thinking about during various parts of the story.  I know through your reviews you had some issues with Edward and I hope I cleared some of them up. Edward does't want the Hollywood life.  he's ready to hang it up and give it all up for his family, Bella and Charlotte.  I hope you like  him a little more now! 

I'm hoping to get the next update soon.  It's part two of Edward's POV.  I'm really looking foward to writing that one because I am hoping it will be more sentimental and all.  We'll see how I do!

Thanks for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter Forty Eight

Depends on the type of cancer. My daughter's sister in law had both breast removed and a full hysterectomy. That is because her type fed off of hormones. I just lost a friend that had her initial occurance 14 years ago. One breast removed then she refused chemo & radiation. The next year same thing on the other breast. She changed her diet to reduce all hormone fed foods and no caffiene. The treatments now vary to just a lumpectomy on the smaller cases.

 



Author's Response:

I'm purposly making the cancer thing vauge.  We'll find out more as things progress.  Even though this topic is a real life one, I am not a doctor and am writing based on people's expreences.  Even though I am writing based on real events, this story is fiction.

thanks for reading!

_Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 10 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter Forty Nine

Well Edward is redeeming himself. Took a while but finally. That was a great chapter..

Thanks,



Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind words.  Edward just thought Bella deserved a proposal that was meaningful and thought out.  I'm going to update before I leave for the weekend (my goal is no later than Thursday but we'll see).

Thanks for reading,

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 May 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter Fifty One

Sometimes it takes life threatening situations to bring people together. I am glad!



Author's Response:

You are so right.  I have been planing this part for a while, but didn't want to do it too soon.  Will B and E ever have a normal mother/daughter relationship?  Most likely not, but at least they have something to build on.  No relationship is perfect.


Thanks for reading!

-Lisa

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 23 May 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter Fifty Three

they have made such a journey.



Author's Response:

They have and their journey is about to end!  ijust posted th elast regular chapter of the story.  There will be an epi and it will be up hopefully soon.

Thank you so much for reading!

-Lisa

The Moment by ButterflyBetty Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 205]
Summary:

One moment, I was a young, carefree girl and the next, I was writhing around on the ground, as the venom surged through my body. NC-17 for language and lemons.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: butterflybetty stories to read , Fics to Read, My Favorite Stories, to read
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 53585 Read Count: 35494
[Report This] Published: 19 Oct 2010 Updated: 10 Nov 2010
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 May 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Finally Rose and Bella! Friends, sisters not in battle even.