Reviews by MaryMary
Summary: Past Featured Story

"The worst lies are the lies we tell ourselves. We live in denial of what we do, even what we think. We do this because we're afraid."
The lie he told to protect her has had nine years to destroy her, and it's time to pick up the pieces.

 


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 52 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 19550 Read Count: 23621
[Report This] Published: 21 Nov 2011 Updated: 04 Jan 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

What a small town crappy ass thing to say. Bella would be better to leave there and find another place to live start over and never speak to a Cullen again.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

she would be so much better to leave there... so much

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Hit him Esme.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 27 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

someone alone and trying to cope. Feeling less than desirable because the love of her life dumped her.  So she went off the deepend.  Loss of hope in the love area. Sad.

Duplicity by loopylou992 Rated: M starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 43]
Summary:

duplicity

 

A pair of golden handcuffs keep him married to a woman he despises. Then a chance meeting changes his world, he discovers the true love he always wanted.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 54352 Read Count: 8222
[Report This] Published: 01 Dec 2011 Updated: 03 Dec 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

You see he thinks she has another man and is with him. He is married and about to cheat on his wife. Ahh guilty dog went to that thought first.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing and yup, his first thought went to that.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Maria.. the wonderful sex partner. Not the good wife.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

All this is fine and good...but he is still married to Maria!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

The thing is he seems wishy washy about Maria.  he is married and he should try, if he does not love her then get out of it. Check and see if she is cheating. Get a real PI not your buddy.

 

I hope Bella does not fall for a line.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Prince Charming?  More like a flandering King. He is still married. Wait until she learns that little piece of information. Or has she already?  I would have to reread this to remember.

 

Hoep to see you soon.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing, there is more to come ont he whole 'he's married thing' although it might not be in the next chatpter, things will start to happen around that. He is married, and no Bella does not know this yet.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Yep still married wait for that bomb to drop. No going back there. He can say sorry until hell freezes over.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Sep 2012 Title: Duplicity

That was too easy she has something up..

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella, the Crowned Princess and soon to be Queen of Dwyer is advised to find a husband so that she can secure her line with an heir.  Viscount Edward Masen comes to the capitol among her suitors with less than noble intentions. As he grows to love his wife, he's forced to deal with those who helped plot to get him on the throne.

PttTbanner

 

PretendersToTheThrone2

Banner by Rosalynn


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 46 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 128079 Read Count: 86652
[Report This] Published: 04 Dec 2011 Updated: 03 Nov 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

good chapter

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

finally. and the uncles and their plan did not succeed.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

good chapter.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

oh no

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I am still nervous about Edward's "plan" and his uncles.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 May 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Sad good byes.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 May 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

how awful.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Edward is busy Bedding the help.

 

 

Edward was right there to lead her out. Hm.. I am not sure I trust him at all.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I still don't trust Edward.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

COWARD, come on out and enjoy this.  Edward did not do this we all know. James, Victoria and his......uncles.. All very bad people.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I wonder if Jacob is part of this and not just the uncles and Victoria and James.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

yes that was the way of it when babies were born in that time. So many mistakes in not surrounding a woman with her husband and perhaps anothe relative that she wishes.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Tangled web and all of that!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nobel? He sounds like a rake.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Many things about Edward seem good. I am still concerned with his "PLAN" and his uncles.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

victoria?  How can that be good?

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

so if he can not talk he can not reveal Aro, Caius and Marcus's part in this.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Until we meet again... great story

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 15 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

"the plan" nearly did him in.  Edward is not stupid this is last hoorah if he messes up again.  Isabella loves him and I think he loves her. His family had too much hate that they passed down. Remember in the beginning how he acted with his maid?  He was not just a good old boy waiting on his one and only.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 May 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Leah was right to give her the blade.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 May 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

well I was worried we would not get here all three of them!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 31 May 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Good chapter.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 10 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Yea for Bella and Venessa.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

finally.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 15 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44

so much less drama.. thankfully

Marriage by Treaty by Zorantha Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 167]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Prince Edward of Forks and Princess Isabella of Voltura are forced to marry as the terms of a treaty signed by their fathers to end a war between the two neighboring countries.  Edward is a spoiled, arrogant womanizer who is determined to have a marriage of convenience.  Bella is a feisty young woman from a country where the women fight beside their men making her a warrior princess.  Can Bella tame the wild Edward and make him into the man he should be or will the whole world lose out.

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Fantasy, Historical
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 59923 Read Count: 51688
[Report This] Published: 08 Dec 2011 Updated: 12 Jul 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 - The Beginning of an Understanding

Better send Tanya to the barnyard if you want this marriage to happen.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9 - Wedding

consequences for actions..

 

Taken by loopylou992 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 70]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward makes one mistake, and soon learns he must pay for it. Forced to lie to his family and Bella, will be manage to survive being Taken?

Rated M for lang & Lemons.

Banner by Ysar

taken

 

taken

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 153918 Read Count: 28170
[Report This] Published: 13 Dec 2011 Updated: 08 Jun 2014
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 May 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Texts & Voicemails

They can use him anyway they see fit. He is a prisoner. So!  He screwed Bella over and she did not make him pay this hard. Aro well he is taking his anger out on Edward, wonder what he did to Heidi? Other than aborting the pregnancy.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Fight Night Part One

oh .........ugh..

We know he does not die since the prologue he is clearly living.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 8: A Night To Remember

this is when they took him.. Yes you did.



Author's Response:

I know, I know, I was looking at this tonight and trying to work out what had happened! Sorry my bad!!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Tonight's The Night

well, he has to fight and if this was Emmett I would think he had a chance but Edward nope not so much.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Meetings & Lies

I don't know that I believe all that Aro said. He is trying to make Edward defeated and mad. He wants him to fight for something and to what this end is I wonder, if Edward will never get out?

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Training Day

Well we know he doesn't die thus the prologue?!  So why pack a bag?  Funny.

Honestly this hole story is hard in every way.  What she said to him is exactly what he did. She knows where he is. Will SHE help him?

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 17 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 28: Truth Is Out

I read this in Fan Fiction. This story has been so good. You deserve  awards for it. Yes I want to strangle Edward and now he attacks her with words. Did she sleep with Riley or Aro? She thought he was gone for good but why keep looking if she was replacing him?



Author's Response:

Thanks again x x  x

Summary: Past Featured Story

Stepping out of the Shadows

 

What if Edward's motivation for dating Bella wasn't becasue he loved her but because he was frustrated by the fact that he couldn't hear her? What if he lied about a lot of other things as well? WARNING: Abuse and a later chapter non-sexual SPANKING.  Carlisle/Bella

fs

 


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 128104 Read Count: 26796
[Report This] Published: 14 Dec 2011 Updated: 07 Aug 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Void

Every one of her parents killed. How awfull. And  to have Edward, better know as Chester the Molester to comfort her.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 23 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Presents

I did like this chapter.... I really did. You did well.  Now I am glad you are moving Carlisle and Bella toward each other. Lets get this show on the road!

 

Edward is 17 in his emotional state and was raised with the silver spoon up his ass.

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for your continued support of my story.  Bella and Carlisle have some more obstacles to overcome, but be patient.  I do plan on getting them there.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Truth

He probably just dazzled her before he raped her.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Revelations

my 2 CENTS... I think that while the ass hole is gone. Bella needs to be changed. Why I don't care what you come up with an accident, illness etc. She and Carlisle fall in love and that alone willl burn Ed up!  Bella will be beautiful and no available and that will cork him. HA

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 22 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Watching

Okay moving right along her. Carlisle and Bella.  Edward wants to control Bella. He is attracted to her. He is so full of himself, he can not admit to anything truthfully.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Water

sigh

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 16 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Edward wants what he ruined. He also wants what Carlisle has.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 29 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Restraint

Edward struggles in two ways. One he wants to control things. Two he wants Bella. He will use the means at hand to get the job done.  That is the hole school discussion, his ideas about her life.  He has to understand that in a family you have to abide by each person's own wishes for their lives as adults.

Hope Springs by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1133]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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"Where would you go if you are trying to start a new life but you had nowhere to go and no one to care?  Bella Swan has been alone for most of her life, she is young and she is scared, but now she has another life to protect.  She is heading for a new country - a new life and then she ends up in HOPE SPRINGS.  Her life intertwines with all the eccentric characters in this little piece of heaven in Vermont and just like that - she will never be the same.  She meets the Sherriff, the truck driver, the semi-retired doctor, the lawyer, the farmer, and the new best friends, but it is the new young doctor in town that turns her life upside down.  Is he as stuck up as he seems or does he have a wild side?  Is Bella as tough and as jaded as she seems?  Will she run, or will she allow the people in this town to teach her to hope, to dream, and to love?"

NEW BANNER BY YSAR!! (ISN'T IT AWESOME??)

HOPE SPRINGS

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, To Read, To Read (Geddy), Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 432038 Read Count: 218368
[Report This] Published: 17 Dec 2011 Updated: 24 Dec 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

You know you have a nice story. I so wish that Bella was not always the down trodden broken little waife. She could be so much more. She is now going to pick fruit and live in a shed, why because she is an orphan and penniless. How fitting to be with those rich Cullen's who are judging her for her misfortune. The fact she keeps her life to herself adds to this. 

I hope these things improve for her. She gets a good job in town maybe if it is just as a waitress or something.  Independent and growing up. Then of course there is the baby. She may want this baby, but in reality she needs to concider addoption. Why because she is a few years shy of being able to handle this on her own.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

It is a good story so far. I hope for Bella for a better life.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 01 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

You know a miscarriage is natures way to stop a pregnancy that may result in a malformed baby or death of a mother.  It is always sad, but in this case a blessing.  Now he will know and so will all the others, her last secret. Bless her heart.  She will withdraw again.



Author's Response:

hey MM, Thanks so much for your review and your comments.  Update over the weekend.

xoxo

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 10 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - New Beginnings and First Dates

Let me see, I am back to crying by the end of the chapter. I am glad Bree told Esme about Riley and what Bella said to her.

 

Good story Michele



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review and the comments!

xoxo

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

IT is a hard thing for a woman to go through. Especially when they want the baby.  Honestly this was a blessing for her.  She needs time to heal from her young life and a chance to get her feet under her and her head in the right place without the responsibility of a child.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 08 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - One step forward...

she needs this. She needs to date other guys and go out alot She needs to be young.  Edward pushed her away left her distanced hisself from her. He knows he is too old for her. So  Michele don't you think it is time to give her some "dates".

Summary:

pd

 

Summary: Edward Cullen follows his brother, Emmett, to Forks, Washington. He’s made it his life’s mission to follow Emmett wherever he goes, cause havoc, death and mayhem until Emmett has to move on somewhere else. But something happens when he arrives in Forks, something he never even dreamt was possible. Edward meets a woman, a beautiful, smart, charming and fearless woman who has the potential to be his Princess of darkness. The problem is… She’s Emmett’s girlfriend.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, One-Shot, Romance, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10928 Read Count: 1093
[Report This] Published: 30 Dec 2011 Updated: 30 Dec 2011
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 31 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

well true Vampire Eddie.. yuk

Summary:

dinner

EPOV of Come Closer Chapter 7, Sugar and Spice.

Edward is late to Isabella's dinner because he fed his secretary an appetizer at the office. When he finally arrives, will he be an invited guest or an entree?

OOC, Characters: Edward, Isabella, Jasper, Emmett, Rosalie


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3432 Read Count: 1092
[Report This] Published: 02 Jan 2012 Updated: 02 Jan 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Dinner at the Hales

I still say that Bella needs to move away from Jasper & Edward, Rose & Em. she needs a new life with new people. Her brother can visit her. She needs to grow up away from..............SLUTWARD. he does not love her or respect her.  PERIOD



Author's Response:

Well, I see your point about respect, but he very much loves her. Honest he does.

As for the rest of them, she'd be lost without them. Jasper, at least.

Labels by samekraemer Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 200]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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BANNER BY READERGOOF!  THANK YOU, LOVE!

“Everyone has labels attached to them that they acquire over a lifetime…mother, daughter, wife, lover, friend, co-worker.  I happen to have all of those labels attached to me, plus one in particular that I’m not happy about…widow.  I have a daughter who never met her father, and parents who try to help me out but drive me crazy, along with a father-in-law who I take care of in the absence of his son.  Along with the label of “widow” came another label that I’m not happy about and it’s one I assigned to myself…crazy.  The reason I’m crazy is because every night in my dreams, I talk to my dead husband as if he was still alive.  I was perfectly content to live with those labels until someone showed up in my life that caused me to add another label to my seemingly never ending list…screwed. –Bella Black

 

AH/OOC.  Canon couples, eventually.  This is a story of a woman trying to deal with a devastating loss, so there will be sadness, but there will be humor and there will be love.  There’s foul language, eventual lemons, and it’s told in Bella’s POV.  It’s rated NC-17 for a reason.  It’s a love story at its heart, but it’s not an easy one.

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Love and Faith
Series: To Read, My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125792 Read Count: 33645
[Report This] Published: 04 Jan 2012 Updated: 16 May 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

hmm

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Well, I am still not totally on board with "the Cullens". 

 

good chapter.

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

If you say so.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Banner by the talented: SoapyMayhem FanFiction

Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263192
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Do We Go From Here?

You will probably hate me. I think Bella should move out. She needs some space. Edward dated and impregnated her MOTHER. She needs to think about that for a while.  she can still see the children and come and pick them up for visits. I just think Bella for once needs some time to be alone and working on her own life. One that has been neglected since birth. She could live at the Y not permanently but for a while until she can get her mind around this. This is beyond wierd.



Author's Response:

Thanks again and again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As the story comes closer to an end, it seems we have a lot of questions or comments that are geared toward answers already given in the story.  So we decided to give a little background to clear up the misconceptions and questions. 

Edward Masen: Father is dead, mother is bi-polar and left him in the care of Esme and Carlisle.  Mother is alive, but whereabouts are unknown.  Edward met ‘Tanya’ in college, they had a short affair and she left, after being caught in trying to get money from him.  Edward then shut down and treated all women as if they were not worth his time.  He refused to date or trust any women and he instead only was with a select few at Aro’s club, where he paid for sex.  Edward owns the restaurant where his parents used to take him to eat at, before his father died and his mother went off the deep end.  Edward is also one of the youngest English professors at UW. 

Bella Swan: Bella was born the child of single mother Renee Higbottom.  Renee met Charlie during one of his planned scams to get money.  Renee was very rich, as were her single father.  Charlie ended up impregnating Renee, but he was already married to Sue Clearwater.  Renee paid off Charlie and Sue to leave her and her child alone, but then subsequently died of breast cancer when Bella was three.  Renee’s father fought for custody, but grand-parents rights are not acknowledged in the state of Washington, therefore after Renee’s death the state went in search of Charlie Swan.  Once he was found Bella was placed in his and Sue’s care.  After Bella went to live with Charlie and Sue, she was treated iek a slave and was never allowed even normal things such as schooling, food, new clothes, and every other basic thing as parents we give our children without second thought.  Bella grew up starved for affection, so once she got to take care of the twins she gave all that affection she has been starving for to them.  Her love of the twins is unconditional as is their love for her.

I hope this helps answer a few questions and clears up a few things.  I’m not sure why, but we have several who think Sue is Bella’s real mother, and that is not the case at all. 

Thank you again so much for all the wonderful heartfelt reviews you all leave for us.  It is amazing to us that we have managed to instill such a deep devotion in our readers to our characters, and we are blown away by just how much emotion our readers feel for our characters.  I know that the character names belong to Stephenie Meyer, but these characters and the way they are in this story are in fact ours, she owns the names and appearance descriptions, but the attitude and demeanor and words are all ours.  Thanks, Kasi (& Nikky)

TEASER Chapter 28: Subject to changes during beta process.
I am so proud of Seth and Leah this past month has not been easy on them, but they have held their heads up high and got on with it.  There has been some name calling at school.  Now I know kids can be cruel but the things that they are saying, is coming from older mouths first.  Things no parent should be saying in front of their children.  Bella and I have addressed the school regarding the problems, but we’ve been brushed off like nothing is going on.  Mrs. Crown the principle said that people will talk.  She went on to point out that I was after all, Seth and Leah’s father, and I was shaking up with their big sister.  The way she said it, implied that Bella and I were doing something wrong.  After her rather rude little speech I called Caius and explained the whole thing to him.  To say that he was angry is putting it mildly.  He went as far as taking the principle in front of the school board, and she was put on a written warning.  Not only is her job and tenure in jeopardy, but her career as a whole is.  Since we have proof that she knowing let kids and adults harass the kids, she was warned that a lawsuit would be filed if the behavior continued.  Her biggest mistake was she was aware what the twin have been though these past five months, yet did nothing to help stop the harassment.

Caius informed me of another school that had room for more students.  It was little school that only had a little over one hundred students.  It went from kinder-garden to fifth grade and each class had mix of around fifteen children per classroom.  It was a private school, and ranked in the top ten of all schools in the state of Washington’s education program.  There was a sister school that managed the grades sixth through twelfth, also ranked in the top ten.   Both schools are quite prestigious and expensive, but cost is of no matter.  There are a few nice things the school is located close to where Esme and Carlisle live, but that also causes us transportation issues for to and from school.  Both Bella and I have talked about this and we all talked about it in family therapy.  Seth and Leah asked to just finish out this year of school where they are before deciding.  We agreed that this was the right choice for right now.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 11 May 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Confessions

Here is my deal with Edward. He is. SICKO! want to be with a 13 year old? YUK

 

His problems are in HIS HEAD. She is disadvantaged, unloved and misused.  She needs a woman that is a friend that can guide her.  I think Edward needs to be a distant friend for a while.  Sorry to bust your bubble there. He does nice things for her then pullls this shit.



Author's Response:

MaryMary~ Bella was 13 almost 14 5 years ago.  In chapter 8 she turned 19 but Edward assumed that she was turning 24.  When Sue left she told Bella she MUST maintain that she was 18 when she dissapeared.  I woudl never be a part of a story that has a full grown Edward going after a 13 year old child.  I have a 14 year old daughter myself and honest to GOD if any MAN looked at my child as if she was a yummy treat, he would never have sex again, because I woudl cut off his manhood.  WOW...the responses are so awesome that Nikky and I are both giddy.  There haven’t been many questions asked in the first 60 reviews, so I am going to answer a few non questions I noticed.  Bella was never kidnapped by Sue and Charlie.  Charlie Swan is Bella’s biological father, and Bella was sent to live with him after her mother died of cancer.  Aro honestly never knew of Bella’s real age, he had suspicions that she was not raised correctly and was acting younger than the 18 he thought her to be, because of the inept social skills.  Zafrina did not know either, but again had those same social skill thoughts that her son had.  We in no way were bashing DCFS or DHS or any other social workers, by saying that the kids would be taken by the state.  If anyone had turned Sue in for abandoning the kids the almost 6 years ago now she has been gone, the kids would have become wards of the state, because at 13 no state official or judge would have deemed Bella capable of fully caring for 2 yr old twins alone.  Just want to say that we both believe that it takes a special kind of person to be a social worker, and we both give those of you who are in the field of social work a round of applause because the things you have to see and or deal with can’t always be fun.  I have to say that the wonderful response to this story is more than either Nikky or myself could have hoped for, and we owe that all to you the readers.  THANK YOU!  If there is any questions or discussions you would like to have or read about past discussions, feel free to join us at TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction on Facebook.  Kasi (& Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things.  Subjected to changes during beta process.

I dropped Bella of at Seth and Leah’s school. Before leaving her, I told her I would pick her up from the college when she got off.  It was so fucking hard to leave her; I just wanted to stay with her forever.  I knew the minute she was away from me, my old doubts would come back.  I knew that I had to talk with Jasper about her upbringing.  It’s that thought that makes me leave, even though I want to wait with her, take them home and stay with them. I am really at a loss for what I should do.  What can I do?  What do I do?  How do I help her?  How can someone so pure and good, come from people so evil?  The questions are killing me, but I know one thing for certain: if that bitch doesn’t stay the fuck away on her own, I will make her.  That sorry excuse of a parent will never get her hands on my Bella, Seth, or Leah again.  I will protect them with my very last breath, and deplete every cent I have, if need be.

I sit at my piano and just start playing.  I let the music guide me, keeping Bella in my thoughts as a play.  I let out all the feelings I have been denying myself. I haven’t been at it long before I find myself playing ‘Angel Eyes’ by The Jeff Healey Band, and I begin to sing along with my playing.

Girl, you're looking, fine tonight,

and every guy has got you in his sights.

What you're doing, with a clown like me,

is surely one of life's little, mysteries

 

So tonight I'll ask the stars above,

"How did I ever win your love?"

What did I do?

What did I say,

to turn your angel eyes my way?

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

I have only read the first part. I want to say that Yes Edward has the right to go to Aro's and screw anything with a vajajay. I wonder how he would feel if he thought some guy was screwing  Bella?  I wonder. They are just friends but yet I wonder what his reaction would be?  Poor little non educated Bella. Don't get me wrong here that does not diminsh her value at all it is however how there relationship is.

Okay so he does not go to the club and goes with Bella and the kids. Well well, who would have thunk?  Oh Hell Alice. Way to spoil the night. Glad Jasper is not giving into her and neither is Edward.



Author's Response:

Many of you are wondering what he deal is with Edward and the talk of his lost son.  In chapter 5 there was a dream sequence that told a lot of what happened that fateful day when Edward found out Tanya was using him, to get his money.  She was not pregnant like she had told him, the problem is the night before they had unprotected sex, and she actually did give birth to his child.  Esme found out about it, but hid it from Edward trying to protect him.  Tanya and Edward junior later died in a fire.  There will be more to come on that, but it seems to be getting a lot of questions.  Now for Alice...She is clearly a not nice person in this fic, and to some she will partially redeem herself, but for some there is no redemption, her words and actions are far worse than any you have seen from Edward.  Siobhan is for the majority out of the picture, so she is of no major worry.  Uncle Harry is a very mean man, and there will be more to come about him.  We love our Aro he is one of the kindest and most loving men and we are proud to have written an Aro who is not only out of character, but also so very loveable.   Bella has come to trust Edward, and it shows.  A lot of you keep asking if she will sleep in the step-moms room, or if Edward will talk her into it...the answer to that is no.  The next few chapters have so much going on in them, I am sure that you will all have favorite parts.  We love hearing what your thoughts are so keep asking questions and we will answer what we can without ruining the plot. 

Thanks for Reading and Reviewing
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 15 teaser...Subject to changes during BETA process...

It’s Saturday, and we are into the countdown to Thanksgiving.   Alice has called me numerous times, and left well over a hundred text messages and voice mails.  I have dealt with each and every one of them the same way. Without reading or listen to them, I just hit delete.

Esme found out during one of my talks with Carlisle about the stunt Alice pulled.  At first, I thought she would take Alice’s side, but was stunned when I found her on the phone giving Alice a piece of her mind.  Jasper has also said that he and Alice are talking, but not back to normal yet.  Jasper is really pissed at her.

Yesterday, Esme called me, and to my surprise, she asked me if I would still come over for Thanksgiving dinner.  She told me that she would understand if I did not want to come.  She said it was my choice, and she would still make my dinner if I wanted and bring it over to my home or Midnight Sun.  Not once did she try and force my hand.  After much thought, I said that I will be there.  I do enjoy spending time with the guys, even more so in the last few weeks.  I know they all were hoping for me to come, and I know I owe them a lot. I told them that I will join them and stay, as long as Alice and Rose keep their mouths shut. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett, and Jasper, have promised to keep them under control.

Things with Bella are still going really well. Too well, in fact.  She…fuck! Every time I see her, I want to hold her close.  It’s no longer just me having dirty thoughts about her, a lot of dirty thoughts about her, which I still am, but I also want to hug her, lie with her, make love to her, and that is really fucking scary for me, for lots of reasons.  I am worried, because I wonder if she could even cope in that type of a relationship. I have been a pussy about it, because I haven’t had the guts to ask Peter or Jasper what they think.  I know it’s because I am afraid they may say she couldn’t handle it, or I am not good enough for her.  I already know that I am not, but one can always hope for his own redemption.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Through His Eyes

why oh why can anyone write Bella as anything other than deficient. She is poor, stupid, slow, clumbsy, pregnant, whore, prostitue, cheated on by her husband. The listen goes on and on.  He can be a mental patient but could Bella be something of stature?

 

 



Author's Response:

Not in this story she can't, because I would not choose anyone else to be Edward's true partner.  In the end she needed to be uneducated, timid, and clearly used and abused.  Where she may be those things now, she has one thing that a lot of people seem to lack at times, compassion.  Bella will be much stronger than she appears now.  Thank you for reading and reviewing.  Kasi (&Nikky) 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Well,  Edward needs a heart transplant.  His is dead.  I hate people like this. Actually hate them.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 20 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Break In

The break in has something to do with sue. She can not keep money at home anymore too dangerous. This is what happens to illegals. Easy targets for crime.



Author's Response:

Wow what else can Nikky or I say...once again the overwhelming response and the amount of story love we are receiving from so many people just makes us both feel so loved.  I know that this story may have a few minor flaws, but we have tried all along to keep them to a minimum.  So essentially thank you as always for reading and reviewing our story it makes us all giggly and excited to see all the reviews we are getting. 
We asked you who you thought it might be that broke into Bella and the twins apartment, and I must say we were a little surprised that a lot of you have it figured out.  With a wide range of evil or rude nasty characters, many of you said it was Uncle Harry...and you are right.  There will not be resolution for a bit when it comes to Uncle Harry, so if you want to figure out what he was looking for all I can suggest is watch for clues.  There are some very important and much asked for things coming soon. 
We have been asked many times for Edward to stop using Aro’s girls for his pleasure.  And where we understand why, we also knew it was very unrealistic for a man with so much anxiety, pressure, cynicism and tainted view to jump into a healthy relationship and give up the release and hidden pleasure he has surrounded himself in to get by for the past five plus years.  He has slowly been weaning himself from the place, and very soon he will open up and tell Bella why he went there.  We have been asked when you all get to know a lot more about Edward...well very soon actually, and by that I mean the next few chapters are chuck full of things from the past. 
We have been asked if Renee will come back...(A LOT ACTUALLY)...Renee was Bella’s biological mother, who died when Bella was only three years old.  At the age of three after her mother died, custody of Bella was given to Charlie Swan who was her biological father.  Charlie was married to Sue Swan, who is the mom she talks about leaving all the time.  Sue Swan is the person who left Bella to care for the twins.  Since this story is not alternate universe, neither, Charlie or Renee will be making any grand entrance, unless via a dream.  But don’t get too happy, because Sue Swan is still out there somewhere, and she has a few things to say.
We have been asked a lot if Alice, Rose, Siobhan, and Esme will make any redemption...Esme already has begun her turn around, and we think she is doing well.  Siobhan, well she wore out her welcome quite completely at the ball, at this point there is not a real plan to drag her back into the storyline.  Alice...well this is a hard one for me.  I actually normally always LOVE Alice, but this Alice is a tough nut to crack.  She is not going to bring in the roses and become a fan favorite anytime soon, but you will notice some changes.  As for Rose, well...I just can’t wait to hear your opinions of her...and I am sure you’ll have plenty next week.
Updating...we had planned all along to only update every other week on Thursdays.  However since posting the first chapter we have been on an every week posting schedule...and we have NO INTENTION of changing that at this time.  Nikky and I have a comfortable cushion, and the next chapter to post is with the beta now.  I got this weeks chapter back from the beta on Tuesday afternoon, so realistically we are posting around when they are ready.  Nikky is working on her part of chapter 26 right now, and I am working on 24 so we are not looking at any lapses in time.  We are both so excited you are choosing to come down this road with us. 
Where the next chapter has some major info and angst, we promise that chapter seventeen will make up for it.  Thanks again for always being so supportive and showing the story love HCV deserves.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 16 Teaser...subjected to changes during the BETA process...

Its Thanksgiving today, and I am on my way to pick up Bella and the kids.  Bella and I decided that, after dinner with my family, they would all stay the night at my house tonight.  I will run them home to get their things for the camping trip in the morning, and see them off to camp.  Bella will make sure that Jake has enough food, and then she is coming to spend the weekend with me.  I’m looking forward to this weekend, but I am worried about my growing feelings for her. I knock on the door before using my key to get in.  Bella gave me a spare key so I could let myself in. The new door has a double lock on it, and is reinforced with steel; no one is breaking this one down.

I walk in, seeing Leah in a black, knee-length dress with a cream ribbon around the waist, and black shoes.  Seth is wearing a pair of black pants and a cream colored button down shirt, with a black tie and shoes.

“Wow, look at you Leah! You’re very beautiful, and Seth, you look so handsome.” They both smile at me and look up as Bella walks in. She is in a cream colored dress, with a black ribbon around the waist. The dress goes to just above her knees; she looks fucking beautiful in it - so fucking beautiful.

“Wow, Bella! You look sensational...really beautiful.  Are we all ready to go?” I look her up and down, I am so glad she allowed me to buy us all new outfits for today. 

I got around her apprehension by telling her that I wanted to go to church with them this Sunday night.  We are attending the evening service after Seth and Leah return from camp.  Since I was buying something for myself, I wanted to get them something, as well.  As usual, getting Bella to let me buy Seth and Leah something, was easy, but her...not so much.  I was so fucking glad Seth and Leah helped me. I have on black pants and black shirt with a cream colored tie.  I push my fucking guilty feelings down and smile at the three of them.

“Yes, we’re all ready.” Bella picks up their bags, and I quickly take them from her.

“Let’s go,” I say as I usher us all out the door together.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 03 May 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Weekend Revelations!

She needs a woman to be close to that will educate her on her body and life. Next she needs help.  Edward is such a nice guy to help her, but then again he is unbalanced. His Tanya problems and his family.  The guys are great as is Esme. The rest of them Alice and Rose nope and they won't get better.  The elitest ideas they have.   The BDSM club Edward went to is okay I guess then again how does that really differ from a whore house? Yep. Whore house.

I can see why Bella lied about her age, because of the care of those kids.

 



Author's Response:

Hello our faithful readers and reviewers!  We were expecting a bit of a lashing from some of you, and we have gotten a few but nothing like I expected.  Please let me remind you all now first and foremost that we are both happy ever after kind of gals.  Little refresher is needed about ages, and a few other things, since there were a few questions.  Edward is 28 and will soon be turning 29.  Bella just turned 11 when the twins were born, Sue left when Bella was 13, and Bella has been working for the university for over 5 years.  Bella just turned 19 in chapter 8.  Edward is 9 and 1/2 years older than Bella.  Before Sue left, she obtained a fake ID for Bella that said Bella was 18.  Therefore everyone surrounding the apartment building assumed she was of legal age.  Sue needed everyone to think Bella was 18, and she was sure to scare tactic that into Bella.  All these years, Bella has continued to maintain the age Sue said she had to say she was, in fear of not being able to stay with the twins.  Now for Bree Tanner and James...Bree Tanner was the female student from Edward’s Summer school course he taught.  In the summer for the past several years, Edward has been helping his good friend Marcus by teaching the kids who struggle to pass, or are so far behind they may not graduate high school.  Bree Tanner was the hoodie wearing shy and quiet girl from chapters 1 and 2.  Bree lives in Forks and attends high school at Forks High.  James Hunter is a Math teacher and the truancy officer for the Forks school district.  We don’t want to give too much away, but if you think back to the earlier chapters, when Edward had to take a break from his panic attacks, he was clear to tell Marcus his concerns about Bree being abused.  Bella is naive about many things, but she has grown a lot in the past few chapters.  We want to be clear that Bella feels as if she lied to Edward, she started trusting him a long time ago and when she started trusting him she feels she should have told him then.  Edward doesn’t feel betrayed by the lie, but he is more of in shock by the lie.  When he thought he was almost 5 years older than Bella he was concerned with the age difference, mainly because of how innocent she is.  Now that that almost five is almost ten, he is confused.  The next chapter will have you cheering Edward on, and hating his guts too.  We don’t want to give too much away, but I will say this, we are both excited at the prospect of the reviews after the next chapter posts.  Thanks as always for reading and reviewing this story, you all have no idea how much your words mean to us.  Thank you, Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Teaser for Chapter 18: Confessions  (As always subject to changes in the Beta process.)

Leaving Bella’s place, I get in my car and drive.  I don’t even slow down when the speedometer hits one-hundred-thirty miles per hour; I just keep driving.  I am racing to get away from the fear and the rage that is inside of me. I still feel so angry; how the fuck did I not see that she was only nineteen?!  I mean, she looks so young; I am so fucking pissed at myself.  She is still a baby, and the fact that she is only nineteen, doesn’t keep me from wanting her.  I want her, and I need to be with her.  I want her in every way, which is so fucked up. I shouldn’t want to be with a nineteen year old girl.

 

She was thirteen when Sue left her to look after Seth and Leah.  She was so fucking young, and she ended up in Aro’s club at thirteen!  Fuck, if he would have said yes to her…if she was in the pictures I had to choose from…I would have picked her…I know I would have… fuck! I could have really hurt her.  I am really fucking sick! Thank God he said no! Fuck, the dip shit pimp that said yes...shit! I’m sure she would…fuck I don’t even want to finish that thought.

 

“FUCK!” I scream out and I do an illegal U-turn at eighty miles per hour.  I decide I need to see Aro. If I find out that fucker knew her real age, I am going to add that motherfucker to my shit list.  I am going to hurt him so fucking much, and anyone who tries to stop me, too.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 24 May 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Snow Storms

Large gash. I would look into Gina and Paul. That woman is NASTY.



Author's Response:

Hello to our faithful bunch, thanks for reading and reviewing chapter 20 of HCV.  Nikky and I really are so grateful to all our wonderful readers and reviewers.  In the author’s note I asked all of you to tell me what your favorite line from the story so far.  Here is Nikky’s from chapter 19 – "Have a good night, and keep Little Edna in your pants. And I do mean your pants. Close the door behind you when you're able to shut your mouth and leave." I stand there for a minute with my mouth hanging open, before shaking my head and leaving.   My favorite quote so far is from Chapter 20 – "I will use the adult terms, and try to stick to the given terms of penis or vagina, but please, for my sanity, can we not call my cock a winkie?"

Many of you are wondering who is behind Bella being hurt.  Bella actually fell, but it was what took place at the college before she left that caused her the issues to be as sick as she is right now.  In the next chapter that person and their actions will be handled, and handled quite well.  Some have worried that we may have Bella been brutalized or raped and we want to be clear that we would not ever do that in this story.  We both agree with you that Bella has been brutalized and hurt enough from her so called loved ones to cause her anymore brutalization.  There was an attack against her at the college before she left, and as I said that will be handled quite well. 

Thanks again for all of the wonderful attention and recognition you all give to His Cimmerian View.  Your responses mean the world to us, thanks.  Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Chapter 21 teaser…subject to changes during beta process…

I make it back to my car quickly.  I open her door sitting her in her seat and strap her in as best I can. “Baby, you’re in my car, I’m going to get you to Carlisle.”  I kiss her head, close her door, and run around to my side.  I get in and start driving without waiting to put on my seat belt. I switch the heat on high. “Baby, I got the heating on for you. We’ll be there soon.”  Please God let us get there soon!  I fiddle with my cell getting the hands free turned on, so I can call Carlisle.

“Hello Edward,” I hear Carlisle’s cheerful voice come across the hands free.

“Can you get to the Hospital, right away?  Its Bella, she is hurt. I found her in the park unconscious. She has a head wound, and she’s been lying in the fucking snow for about an hour.”  I try to calm my voice, the last thing I need to do is break down.

“Edward, I’m on way back to the hospital now.  I just left a few minutes ago. I should get there before you do.  I will let you go. The last thing we need is for you to crash.  I’ll be outside with a team ready for you when you get there.  Drive safely, son.” Carlisle disconnects the call, not waiting for me to reply.

“Baby, we’re almost there. Come on Baby, wake up for me.”  I stroke her face, while driving around the fucking cars that are in front of me.  These people are idiots, they are driving like old people fuck, slow and sloppy.  I commit many driving penalties, yet I am driving better than anyone else out here.  I’m sure I’ve been caught on nearly all the speed cameras that are up.  I sigh out in relief as I come up to the hospital.  I pull up in front of the emergency doors and I see Carlisle already there.  I pull to a stop and he waves to the door and opens Bella’s door with his other hand.  He picks her up turns and places her on a gurney.  I jump out and catch up to him.

“Hey you can’t park there,” I hear. 

Turning around I see the security officer glaring at me, and I throw him my keys.  “Then you move it,” I say.

He catches my keys, and looks at me.  “I am not here to be your valet.”

I turn back and glare at him.  “Then call and have it fucking towed, I don’t give a shit.  My girl is… fuck!”

I feel Carlisle pull on my arm.  “Mitch please can you park the car for my son, she is in critical condition.”  Mitch looks at Carlisle then to me and his face pales, but he nods his head.  I feel the air leave my body, she’s in critical condition!   “Edward I need you to calm down and come with me.”  Carlisle pulls me along with him and I head to the trauma room.  I see them removing her clothes.  “Edward, do you know why her clothes soaking wet? Even under her coat is wet. There is no way this all occurred from her lying in the snow.” I shake my head at him, because I don’t know. I stand back and watch them work on her.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Gifts and Snowball Fights

hmm Well first off sad for Emmett. Rose is all about herself. She will have to loose something sooner or later that will hurt her and teach her she is not above everyone else.

Everyone seems happy, looks like Edward may have more for Christmas than he thought.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing chapter 22 of His Cimmerian View.  There aren’t a lot of questions about things going on, other than the arrival of Uncle Harry and of course Sue’s return.  The story only has roughly 10 to 12 chapters left and through 26 are written and 27 is more than half way completed.  BPOV out-take is coming along nicely but man alive is it HUGE over 22K word count right now and it is for sure a tissue warning.  As for the few questions we have gotten, we have answers... We want to be clear that Emmett filed a paper that is giving Bella custody until the court hearing so right now no one can take the twins away from her, without first going to court.  We also had someone ask about the title of the story over at TWCS, it is the same as it is at FFN... however at TWCS I have found it is easier to look up the author and then find the story, the story search is not super simple like it is at FFN.  We are the same names both author name and story name at all sites we post at.  On a side and personal note, I am very sorry for the delay of this... after I posted the last chapters on Thursday morning, my mother passed away.  Unless something gets in the way the only thing that will be delayed is this review reply.  The next chapter is ready to go... minus mine and Nikky’s final read through anyway.  I want to thank you all for the kind words shared on Facebook already and thank you for the prayers and well wishes.  If you haven’t joined us on Facebook, please do so there are lots of fun discussions and of course sometimes extra teasers and info too.  Just search for TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and you will find us.  Thanks everyone have a great week.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 23: teaser subject to changes during beta process…

It’s New Year Eve and the twin’s eighth birthday.  Seth and Leah shared a party yesterday at Chuck E. Cheese and they loved it.  Esme, Chas, and Angela all took the day off and came to help out at the party.  Aro brought Sulpicia and their son, Sammy, who is ten.  Sammy seemed to have taken a liking to Leah, as he stayed mainly with her the entire time. Esme and Zafrina both said it was cute and sweet, but all I wanted to do was kill the kid.  Bella even laughed at me and gave me a look when I let out a growl at little Sammy when he pulled Leah away while she was talking to us. I looked back at Bella and shrugged my shoulders, because I wasn’t really sure where the over-protectiveness came from.

Then there were the moms or whores as I call them.  I got hit on a lot.  Almost every mother of a child that had been invited was dressed like they were having a night out on the town, not taking their child to a classmate’s birthday party.  Some even said that I was really nice to help Bella and her kids out like I have been.  I felt like I was going to lose it as they made her sound so beneath them and that she was simply a charity case.  Thankfully, Bella kept me calm and stopped me from screaming at them.  As soon as school is back in session, I’ll be making it very clear to everyone what Bella and I are to each other. The fact that this was a place for children, and that it was Seth and Leah’s first real birthday party, stopped me from performing a very hot, public display of affection with Bella.  I know for a fact I would have enjoyed it, and I’m sure I would have made Bella enjoy it, too.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 14 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Birthdays and Unexpected Visitors

I don' think Iknow what you are hoping Bree to do to the story. I see she had problems with Hunter and Edward helped her.

Rose is almost the same in every story, she varies little. I don't care how beautiful you are the inside tells the story and makes the outward beauty or lack of it change.  Emmett can not bring her around his family, she saw to that.  What can you do with a grown woman?  He may request she take couseling but she may refuse.  With that nasty disposion she will raise children. That is scarey!

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  The next chapter will be a great one for sure, but as a loyal reader and reviewer pointed out so far most of the chapters have been just that... a great one.  I know many of you are sick of Rose, and we assure you that there will be closure there soon.  There is not much redemption for a character like Rose, however there are things happening that will at least show that Emmett is not in fact an idiot who allows Rose to be poisonous to all.  Many of you are worried that the introduction of Mr. James Hunter will be a dangerous situation for Bella.  James Hunter has been in the story all along, and he is a very volatile person, and there will be more to come that involves him in the near future.  Alice is showing a bit of a change, but I think she knows she has made her final stand alongside of Rosalie.  Keep in mind within days of chapter 24 posting that Enduring His Cimmerian View will post and the first out-take to post will be Bella’s POV up to and through chapter 24.  We waited to give you Bella’s POV until Chapter 24 posted for a very good reason... sex.  Yep get out your big girl panties and prepare yourselves for that, because it is going to be posting on Thursday, the BPOV will post hopefully next Saturday.  There weren’t a lot of questions, but there is still some confusion.  Rose and Jasper are Esme’s niece and nephew, whom Esme and Carlisle were given guardianship of when they were around 10/12 respectfully.  Rose is older.  Edward’s mother is MIA, but for all accounts and purposes he believes she is still alive.  Bella’s birth mother was Renee who died of Cancer when Bella was 3.  Charlie is Bella’s birth father and he is dead.  Sue Swan was Charlie’s wife and Bella’s Step mother.  Harry Clearwater is Sue Swans brother, and tormentor of Bella.   We are excited to see your reviews from the next chapter as well as the BPOV that will post.  Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 24 teaser... subject to changes in the beta process.

I’m in the middle of teaching when my phone rings.  “Excuse me. Tia, please carry on for me.”  Tia gives me a smile and takes over from where I left off.  “Hello, Caius. I was just going to step into my office.  How can I help you?”

I hear some chatter in the background.  “Edward, I’m sorry for bothering you.  Everything here is a big clusterfuck right now.  I was just calling to give you an update on the Bree Tanner situation.  We’ve had three more ex-students come forward with allegations claiming that Mr. Hunter did similar things to them, so the state police have taken over the case.  I was one of the people they called in to assist, as they’re planning to speak to all of his ex-students. The officers got here yesterday and worked through last night and this morning.  They need to speak to you, as well.” I sigh, rubbing my face, even though I had already expected this information. “This looks really fucking big, Edward.  From what I’ve gathered, he targets a student in their junior year, mostly just degrading them at first. Then, when they enter their senior year, he starts to get physical with them at the same time he begins the process with another student.  The three girls that came forward were manipulated into sleeping with him.  Due to the fact they were all over eighteen at the time, they can’t get him for statutory rape, but are charging him with aggravated rape and extortion.” 

I pull at my hair, hoping that James gets a shitty lawyer. A good one could use this to their advantage. “What’s the bond amount he’s being held on?”

There is a loud sigh and a chill travels down my spine.  “Nothing. He was released pending charges after questioning.  The charges were just filed, so now the officers are on their way to pick him up again.”  We talk a little more about some other things before saying our goodbyes. 

The rest of the day passes in a blur. The State Police being here is making life more stressful than it already is.  Marcus sent in extra counselors and staff to help out with the backlash of shit that’s going on in Forks. 

By the end of the week another three ex-students have come forward claiming that Mr. Hunter forced them into physical relationships with him. A current student has also come forward to say he had just recently started verbally abusing her.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: First Times

you know each time she goes back I am surprised. There is so many memories but then again she can be hurt by Harry and Sue.  Jail those two!



Author's Response:

Well after this chapter how will we ever get better?  I hope that you trust me when I say, it will!  Many of you want Aro to get his hands on Uncle Harry before the police do.  I will not say who gets to Uncle Harry first; because well that would just ruin the surprise, but I will say this... his capture is already written, so feel free to speculate.  There are some seriously some great chapters coming up, but Nikky says I need to warn you all that some of them are rather drama and angst filled.  There also may or may not be a few cliffhangers in the near future, oh heck who am I kidding the next two chapters are rather cliffy in nature.  The next chapter has a big surprise within and MOST of you may be very shocked.  Nikky, Jess, and a few others who have already read the chapter during BETA processing seem to think that the next chapter may generate a lot more reviews.  We may even get some from people who have not reviewed before now, because it is quite a twist.   There is your warning.  Nikky and I have been called diabolical for the plot twist that is coming, so we sure hope you all like it.  I will say this out of all the readers and reviewers we have, only one time has someone guessed a good portion of the plot and got it right.  We of course didn’t tell them, because well then they would know it would ruin the story telling process.   We had a few question about Sienna’s ability to place a phone call since she is deaf.  Deaf people can make phone calls using a Telecommunication Device for the Deaf (TDD).  Special telephone services have been developed to carry the TDD functionality even further. In certain countries there are systems in place so that a deaf person can communicate with a hearing person on an ordinary voice phone using a human relay operator. There are also "carry-over" services, enabling people who can hear but cannot speak ("hearing carry-over," a.k.a. "HCO"), or people who cannot hear but are able to speak ("voice carry-over," a.k.a. "VCO") to use the telephone.  Couple of questions came about Charlotte’s nick-name of Chas, in our story Charlotte was the youngest raised by her father among her several brothers and she was quite the tomboy growing up.  Char is a girlie name and therefore her brothers tagged her with Chas, because it is manlier.  Thanks for reading and reviewing our story, we are proud of it, and are grateful to our loyal readers.  If you have more questions or want to discuss some of the story line, feel free to join the group on Facebook you can find us by searching for: TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT FanFiction.  Kasi (&Nikky)

PS….Enduring His Cimmerian View is now POSTED... Please go read and review.

Chapter 25 Teaser:
“Pajama day is when you stay in your pajamas all day and eat lots of bad stuff, watch movies, and play games all day long.”  Seth and Leah nod their heads at me and Bella gives me a small half nod with her smile.  “Okay then, pajama day it is in our house.  I just need to make a few phone calls. Why don’t you all get your robes and slippers on, and I’ll meet you for breakfast as soon as I am done.”  Seth and Leah hug me before walking out of the bathroom to get their slippers and robes.

After they leave the room, I look to see Bella biting her lip, and I know she’s worrying about something.  “I’m sorry that she wet the bed. She’s never done that before.”

I walk to Bella, wrapping my arms around her. “Baby, its okay. She’s upset, and her body is reacting to that, so don’t worry about it.” I kiss her head and push her hair out of her face.  I hiss as I see the large bruises that go all the way up one side of her face.  “Baby, how are you feeling? Are you in pain?”

She shrugs her shoulders and tries to give me a smile.  “I’m not sure. I...”  She stops and rubs her head.  “I feel like I failed them.  He hurt Seth, and I should’ve been able to protect him better.  I’m upset that it was Uncle Harry that broke into our apartment the other time.  I don’t understand why he did that, or what he was looking for.  How could he do that to Seth and Leah?  I mean, I know that he doesn’t really like me much, but they’re his sister’s children.  I thought he would love them.” 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 19 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: She Devil

I still say this is strange Bella with Edward father of her half siblings.. Very strange.



Author's Response:

MaryMary~  Seth and Leah are Sue and Edward's biological children, and neither Sue nor Edward are related to Bella, therefore Seth and Leah are in no way at all related to Bella, in any way shape or form.  Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View. Don’t forget to go read the BPOV chapter posted under the title Enduring His Cimmerian View.  A lot of things have taken place over the past few chapters, and there is much more drama to come.  I know some of you are mad that we let Paul get away with her, but we were sure to not let him get too far.  And as for Sue, she sure is one sneaky problem, isn’t she?  Well we haven’t seen the end of her yet, and wait until the next chapter... insert evil laugh.  I will tell you this much there is lots of involvement from the fire department in the next chapter.  A lot of you want the kids names changed, it is like you can partially read our minds, you will be seeing a conversation about that in the next chapter.  Some are speculating about the Jess2002 induced surprise that is coming, but we have not hinted on it at all in either teaser, it will have to be a surprise.  Speaking of teasers, after Monday when Fictionators posts their teaser, I am guessing that the Facebook group will be on a posting frenzy, because well damn that Sue is making yet another appearance in that teaser, be sure to check it out.  There is so much going on in the story that even I am on the edge of my seat.  I loved reading the ideas people have posted for torturing Sue.  She is a piece of work, but writing her kind of crazy is seriously fun.  I want to say a special thanks to all of those posts we have been getting about hot and juicy the lemons are.  Nikky whole heartedly passes off the lemon writing to me... and I love writing them.   There will be a couple really great lemony scenes coming up yet in the book, I am currently writing a really great one for chapter 31.  Well not many questions for you all, so we will wrap this up.  See ya next week, Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 29 Teaser, subject to changes in full beta process...

Seth and Leah have just gone to sleep for the night.  I’m cleaning up the kitchen when Bella walks in.  “Hey, baby. I’m almost done.”

She gives me a little smile, but it’s strained. “I’m worried about Seth and Leah. They seemed quieter tonight than usual.”

I put down the dish towel and wrap my arms around her.  “We’ll be fine, baby. They’ll be fine.”  I hold her face and make her look me right in the eye.  “I will NEVER let her hurt any of you.  The three of you are my life now, and I love you all so much.” Bella nods her head and steps back, taking my hand in hers.  Her eyes travel down to my watch, and she trails her fingers across the band. 

“Baby, what’s wrong?”

She looks up at me and frowns.  “I was just thinking about my past.  There was this one time that I saw one of mo... her friends when I was at the park.”  Bella stops, and I know what’s coming, but I wait for her to say it.  “I had fallen down when a boy on his bike knocked into me.  Her friend... he gave me a muffin.”  Bella’s eyes meet mine, and I know what she’s trying to say, yet I give her the time I know she needs to gather her thoughts.  “I think that friend was you. I mean... was it you?” 

My hand moves to her face, and I caress her cheek as I nod my head.  “Yes, baby, it was me.  I am so sorry. I should’ve saved you that day.”

Bella shakes her head at me.  “I wanted you to save me. Even though I didn’t know you, I wanted to go home with you.  I wanted you to come back and take me with you.  At night, I used to dream about you, but I could never see your face – just the watch.  If you had saved me then though, Seth and Leah wouldn’t be here.  They are worth everything I went through and so much more.”

I pull her toward me, hugging her tightly.  “I still wish that I had saved you from her... from all of them.  I will not fail you or my children again.”

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29: New Home, New School, New Start

Sue needs to be stopped. Even if you just shoot her!



Author's Response:

Hello, thanks again for reading and reviewing this story.  Nikky and I put a lot of work into these chapters; as well do a large group of ladies who have become not only our sounding boards, but trusted members of our team.  I was shocked that the backlash on the pregnancy was not larger than it was.  I was very skeptical about making Bella pregnant and ironically Jess2002 (WHO HATES IT THAT EVERY STORY BELLA GETS KNOCKED UP) said it had to be done now, because (knowing our future plot line) it was the perfect fit.  So if you are one of the (so far) two negative reviews about the pregnancy we’ve gotten, please know that your reaction was shared at first.  After we thought it over it was easy to see that it however enhanced the love story between Edward and Bella.   The gender of the baby is picked, as well as the babies name.  The story is quickly approaching finalization, and with it I feel a sense of loss. 

There haven’t been many questions, but there have been several comments about things that are complete misunderstandings.  So I figured I would list some of the ones I remember off the top of my head.

Edward wants to marry Bella, but he hasn’t yet proposed. 
Edward has been looking for a ring, and trying to his best ability to find out where his mother’s jewelry is. 
Edward is very rich, and doesn’t have to work, but like most people who are rich a great portion of his funds is wrapped up in investments, so not always does he have access to super large amounts of money. 
Edward’s father was quite a pianist and left Edward a rather large inheritance, as well as before his mother left she made sure to leave him money in a trust. 
Elizabeth knew she was ill and left thinking Edward would be better raised by Esme and Carlisle. 
Alice is not a blood relative of the Cullen’s, or Masen’s. 
Jasper and Rosalie’s parents died and in the will they left guardianship of them to Carlisle and Esme. 
Sue and Harry’s parents are dead, harry murdered them.
Bella’s biological parents are dead. 
Rose was always allowed to act out and as if she was better than everyone else. 

The next chapter is one you won’t want to miss for sure.  Before you sit down to read it, you may want to get a cold drink (not promoting booze, but I needed some writing parts of it), a few tissues, and be sure to tell yourself at least four or five times before you start reading – “Kasi and Nikky are happily ever after writers...”
Thanks again for the story love, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 30 Teaser, subject to changes during BETA process.

Seth and Leah have taken to home schooling well; both are extremely bright children. Lucy resigned from her temporary position at the school, and is now helping us teach them at home.  Between the five of us: Lucy, Esme, Zafrina, Bella, and myself, the twins are receiving an excellent education.  They’ve both been a little more edgy lately, and upset about what happened with Sue. It’s been causing both of them to have more nightmares than usual.  Samantha’s advice was simple: just keep helping them feel safe and secure in their home.  We’ve talked about it several times, and I think they now understand that the school did something wrong.  I also know that they believe we will keep them safe.  

Mrs. Crown has been fired over her behavior, as were four other staff members.  This led to the papers getting ahold of the full story of what happened at the school.  When the story first came out, all that had been said was that there had been an attempted abduction. Since then, though, someone had talked – my guess would be Mrs. Crown – and it’s been all over the local news and in the papers.

 Thankfully, Seth and Leah’s names have been kept out, but reporters did manage to get some of the story behind Sue, Charlie, and Harry.  They were also able to gather some information on Bella, like the fact that she raised her siblings from birth, but they did not focus on this.  They focused, instead, on how Bella had to have known that her Uncle and parents were hurting and killing people, and hid it instead of going to the authorities.  

They talked about how when she worked, she left the children unattended and neglected.  That one line hurt Bella the most, and I had a hard time trying to calm her down. Of course, it also upset Seth and Leah.  To say I was ranting and raving over the phone lines to just about anyone who would listen, was an understatement. I had to take several deep breaths and remind myself that I supposed to help reduce the stress, not add to it.  

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Good Luck Masen Family

Too bad burning at the stake is outlawed Sue would be a great candidate.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  I am very sorry for the lateness of getting this review reply to you.  I always write them out and Nikky sends them to everyone on FFN and I send them out to everyone on TWCS and Twilighted.  With the move, I am without internet, so needless to say we got a bit of a delay.  We are hoping that the delay will not cause an issue in the normal posting, however we may run late getting chapters 33, 34 and 35 posted.  This has put me behind by more than a week, so I hope you all are understanding in regards to the situation.  The reviews have been wonderful, and Nikky tells me that there haven’t been a lot of questions.  The next chapter will be loved and hated, but trust in the fact that Jane has a plan for Sue.  Thanks for being such loyal readers, we love and appreciate every wonderful review and comment you all leave us.  HUGS!  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Teaser for 32 subject to changes during beta process

“What do you want Pet?” Sue sneers out.

Bella look at her, and I nod my head in encouragement.  “I want to know why?  Why you didn’t love them?”

Sue shakes her head.  “That’s easy, because they were meant to be mine and Charlie’s, but instead they had to come out being HIS.  Every time I looked at them, all I saw was that stupid fucker.”

Bella looks at her shaking her head.  “Well I was Charlie’s child and you didn’t love me.”

Sue laughs sarcastically, and she shows her teeth as she makes a face.  “NO, you are right about that.  I don’t love you, I never have and I never will.  I wanted something that was mine and Charlie’s, I deserved that.  What I didn’t deserve was for your whore of a mother to intentionally get pregnant to try and steal my man from me.”

I chuckle out loud at Sue’s delusional attitude, and Sue growls at me.

“There are only two people I love in this world that is Charlie and Harry and you took both away from me,” Sue says caustically as she turns her glare at Bella.

“I want to know what you were planning to do with Seth, and the baby that belonged to Tanya, what was your plans?”

Sue laughs at Bella’s question in her evil sarcastic way.  “You really want to know?  Well I’ll tell you,” she says with a now huge happy smile.

 

 

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President Edward Cullen decides to pass a bill that will change life as Bella Swan knows it. A misplaced Jimmy Choo and a stupid publicity stunt will change the lives of Edward and Bella. Are either of them ready?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 130734 Read Count: 215885
[Report This] Published: 25 Jan 2012 Updated: 12 Aug 2012
Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 02 May 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 Alternate Arrangements

Hey ..Children first always. That virus could have been deadly. We can wait. Some make us all wait months.. by then I don't care!  weeks are no big deal.. get him well.

I have no idea who it is..

 

 

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43 The Fate of Seth

No I knew that Seth would not be in that car. No one would do that to a child. Now I think Charlie would be there with Edward and his band of CIA people. Main thing in they protect the president at all costs. No one can put him in danger even himself. Laws and all that.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 19 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Changes in Attitudes

She got her mouth going and go herself into this. Yes she is frustrated, you have to use your brain first.  Now they have fired her. Obviously

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 28 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38 Spa Day

oh no.. you are so bad she won't be able to go to the Ball.  sigh.. Now she is going to be kidnapped? Of course her family including Seth, The President and her friends will be affected.. duh.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Explanations

so far so good. All high and mighty Cullen as usual.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 06 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Trouble at Home

Now that  projectile vomit was PERFECT.. ha ha.

Does she have a sick baby??

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 08 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Emergency

I totally understand. In my family we have auto immune disorders. Both my daughter and son projectile vomited as babies. They however were easily controlled by not drinking formula that was not soy based.  My son's was the worst and I went nuts trying to get the right formula for him.  He went on in life to be lactose intollerent as all the other boys.

 

good story, so far!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Bargaining Chip

I don't hate the Pres right now. He did talk to her about that.  Are they using her and her son? Probably. The thing is if she is helpful to them, then other people like herself will benifit.  Her son will benifit. So you bite the damn bullet and proceed with something you would rather not do.  She threw a shoe and for that she pays a price, this is small.

 

Political people are all users.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 20 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 Career Move

all the additives in our food are not good for us. I have asthma. My doctor said better description is reactive airway disease.  I have been tested for allergies to penicillin and it comes up negative, but once injested  I go into antiphlatic shock. I get all this on a personal level. Extremely allergic to sulfa drugs.  My biggest problem is chemicals whether in the environment or in medicine.

 

I think Bella is abrasive. I think a mother in her shoes would do almost anything to have good health care for her child. I think a good job where she can come home not worn out to take care of said sick child. My mother used to say "you get more with honey than vinegar". Bella needs to hear that daily.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 13 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Schedules

I am not angry with him. He is actually so removed from these issues he acts just like that. He is priviledged and what President is not? I think when she is so rude to him it makes him worse.  He gets defensive then he gets aggressive.

 

I think Bella could act a little more mature. Her burden is her raising a child with special needs alone. If there was a daddy present she would have her load lessened.  All parents with special needs children need additional help getting them raised.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 15 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Repercussions

Throwing a shoe was childish. This is America people protest. She did not threaten the president. She was against the bill. She made a point that would cause people including him to stop and not just do the status quo. People in the military can not protest!  We are not in a third world country where you can not speak out. She acts childish and self centered because her life is pretty much a big stress party.

 

Those people are not patriots.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Arrangements

Mama seems snooty. Papa tetters on that very thing.

Rose wants to make him an appointment with a prostitute...

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Emotional Confrontation

yep... I figured this. Seth must be his son.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 05 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Diverting Disaster

Well I am not fond of the Prez, but he is trying. Where so many would just push her off to some underling to take care of or have her do community service with no job. I mean really he is helping her.

Bella is raising a sick child alone so every thing is an uphill battle for her.

 

Toddlers are heavy into exploration. Rose is always some what of a controlling B itch.So

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 15 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 Handling Things

when it comes to this story, I am usually pissed at her or him. Right now I am laughing.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 23 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 PJs and Ringing Phones

I have no idea about where she should live.  Who is threatening them?  that is an FBI job.  Alice comes out in nothing and Jasper is obviously interested in her. Perhaps they have met before.

 

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 09 May 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 A New Home

Blossom!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 13 May 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Press Conference

Well I am so glad Edward did not have another woman in that room.. awkard

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 23 May 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 Adjusting to Change

Bella is still a little upsetting in her actions. Being independent is fine, being stupid is quite another. All she had to do was call her father to find out about the house. Right she is the only one that can really judge what is missing. Her safety is important for Seth. 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 Outed

Well Carlisle dug hisself a hole, good thing Esme and Edward stopped before he jumped in too deep to get out.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 Dinner Times Two

Well glad that Bella stood up for herself with Carlisle.  Good for her. Good for Edward and Esme.   Dada... well well. Seth needs that.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36 Daddy and State Dinners

ugh on so many different problems.