Reviews by Alecandra
Summary: Past Featured Story

15 yr old Bella has a fairly normal life. That was until her mum's new boyfriend came on the scene. Will Bella survive her new life? Dark Themes, Cannon Pairings. GRAPHIC

Thanks mkystich for the amazing new banner... AGAIN!!! :)


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89516 Read Count: 310958
[Report This] Published: 21 Jan 2010 Updated: 04 May 2011
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Seek the First

Thank you for the update. Are you paying for new finger nails or can we all get a little spoiler? With your twisted ideas, Father Aro probably keeps the new Linkin Park CD hidden in his private room and can´t listen to it while people are close.

And poor Elizabeth is somewhere else and you are fooling us again!

Please!!!!

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 16 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 - The Alpha and the Omega

"I thought he would unselfishly relinquish his rights to her once my plan was made known. ..... Ew.....Aro is evil and we love him!

Why didn´t Edward fight back? Fight for his love??

Merry Christmas and I wish for an update.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 17 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Confession

Hello, I have read the story and will patiently wait for an update! Hope this is your immagination  only and noone you know has been through this?!

Love the story so far and can´t wait for more. I am sure you will surprise us with the story line like you did with TTSS. Cheers

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Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - In the Beggining

Are we up for Carlisle being brainwashed again and put in a box next?

Can they fight Aro within the premises? Guess not, but Edward was able to leave and run an errand for Jane. Maybe someone can escape and inform the authorities? Not that we want this just yet.

 

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Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - To Err Is Human, to Forgive....

Well, I don´t have a lot of sympathy for Felix. He is in too deep. He could have informed the police a while ago! He has destroyed a lot more lives than the one from Bella...... And a lot of the people who work for Aro  and / or are part of the Family are more than happy to continue. Difficult…

As for the note. Giving away the address would be too easy. I think Felix will disappear and safe himself. Haunted by beautiful brown eyes…  

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Trust and Obey

How could Jasper act so disrespectful to the Father after all Aro has done for them?

So it seems Aro is threatening Carlisle and his family to be able to have some fun with Bella in the end….? He is so clever! :)

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Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: The Temple

Holly mother of God! I´ve been reading this chap smirking and laughing and if you could see my husband – group counseling is not on his mind to help me out of this but a hard core exorcism! LOL. YES I´M BACK -  and I still LOVE you know who ……. And yes you still owe me the extended  *Aro talks to Heidi chap from TTSS!*


As to this story: great work and I am honestly at a loss to understand how your brains work.


I am well aware that this might be reality for people but please – I sometimes need a break from the real world. That’s why I enjoy your stories so much even though it is not good for my sanity sometimes……


When I started to read ff´s I found it difficult to read about the characters from the Twilight stories being transferred into an “alternative universe”…….until I found some gripping and exciting stories. Yes, you made me open my eyes and be more ….open minded …..Blessed be.

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Date: 05 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: The Dawning

Well, it was not what we expected but hey -  we accept our fate and suffer. Don´t you worry about us. Just update whenever!

Could you just let us know what -ARO- DID- TO- HER???????

And talk to Edward and tell him that he should trust his parents. Thank you!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 03 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - Transgressions

My husband just left the room wondering why I giggled so much. Sunday morning and an update with our all time favorite Father. Life is good. Do I want Bella to be tortured again….NO. But after you made us wait for quite a while ….should she be discovered already…..blink blink….well..yeahNO. Sorry I am not a perv I just enjoy the Fathers company too much.

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Date: 18 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

The easy way: Aro enters the room and has a little conversation with Edward. Charlie listens to everything, tracks the call and saves them all....the happily ever after show.

Considering your twisted, wicked brain: Aro opens the bedroom door and finds Edward halfway in his closet. He is not man enough to face Edward on his own and calls his guards for help. Edward loses the fight and has to face the consequences. (Unless someone believes him?) No sudden death for him though.. Once Aro is alone with Elizabeth his loving hands will be all over her.....to help her heal from all this confusion. Who the hell is Isabella Swan?  And Charlie? It´s too soon for him to find her. We like to be tortured and we need more of this. Cliffies, weeks of not knowing what is going on behind closed doors.  We managed 31 chapters with just little brain damage.  Please…continue….

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Date: 24 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 - Darkness Surrounds Us

Thank you for the nice pressie! Had a nice Christmas eve and now this! Love it.

 

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Date: 01 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 - Redemption

My god, this is such a tragedy! Please update soon.

Happy New Year. Thanks for all the emails and stories.

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Life

Definately worth the wait. Thanks. More please...

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Date: 04 May 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37: Exodus

You promised weekly updates! No more excuses. There will be no

"Blessed be" from the father.

I know I prob. won´t get my wish but I think Aro should win this one.

I don´t care about Bella/Edward. LOL.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella gets sent to a school by her boyfriend to help her become the wife he wants. It isn't what Bella expects, at all.

BDSM, Dark story.

 

 

 

 


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward, Bella/Alice, Bella/Carlisle, Bella/Emmett, Bella/James, Bella/Jasper, Bella/Jasper/Alice, Bella/Rose, Carlisle/Esme, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC, Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, To Read
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 297603 Read Count: 1514155
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 21 May 2010
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 17 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78

Hello,


I just read this story and even though it is finished I thought I send a review.


When I first started I was introduced to a whole new world. Besides TV I know nothing about this stuff.


The story was recommended so I read it. Praying to find a good story behind all the kinky stuff I “had” to witness.  Training day one, two……..different subs, Doms……. I went through all different kind of emotions - together with Bella. From the very beginning I could really picture her being lost and unhappy and that she pushed herself to do it because she thought she would receive love and a life in return once she was done. 


I am still surprised about the tension throughout the story and all the ideas you came up with. I was holding my breath, closed my eyes, I even had to get coffee and chocolates in between because I was so excited with what happened.  It almost never got cheesy and the few times when it was necessary you always found really nice ways to make it work.  


And last but not least: Thank you for sparing me the “you need more and therefore I am leaving for good  - Edward part”. I appreciate when writers want this in their stories. But when you get the story line over and over again than it is nice when someone comes up with something a little different.


I think the last two chapters are missing quite a few details.  I am into the dark side of life and I love it when Aro gets involved. I think I was running around with an evil wicked grin on my face after I had finished the Aro chapter. But I would have loved to witness the meeting with him and Heidi. Or more details about James and what happened to him. 


Carlisle reopening his school, Victoria and the baby……. Maybe Bella and Jacob/Charlie……


You have spent so much energy with the whole story and put in so many details on the little things to make it work and therefore I think the end came too abrupt.


So if you work on a sequel, please let me know where to find it! I have only registered a few days ago and need to work out what to do :O)



Author's Response:

Awww thank you and yeah we have been critised for ending it so soon... I think we might just add on a bit at the end and keep it going.. not sure.. maybe.. we are throwing some ideas around at the  moment. We were intending on writing the original story with nothing to do with twilight but as we were writing it.. we got 1/3 of the way through the novel and it is turning into something else.. so that is now on the back burner and we are writing something totally new..

So... we probably will do a few add on's to the story..... and you might like Volturi Order that is our new one.. totally different and the way you get alerts is to sign the story or author up for favourites. Just make sure you agree on the second page to confirm it. We are re doing the site at the moment and that is one area we want to make alot better it isn't that clear and we don't like it. but for the short term that is how you get alerts when a story updates. oh, make sure you have ticked it to be sent to you in your options in your account info.

Thanks for the review I am glad you enjoyed it.. xxx

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 17 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77: Chapter 76

Thank you for your reply. As Aro puts it:

“Now, under normal conditions, you would not be alive long enough to express your restitution, but after having met you, I am more willing to look at your rehabilitation.  Yes, I think you should learn from your mistakes, and also be an example to others. Humor us with an update of the missing details!" 

The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight

 

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1624470
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 11 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 37

This is my second story, where Carlisle is the bad guy.

I am really confused about this story. The first 10 chapters where really disturbing and difficult and i am still not sure why Bella is with Edward, knowing where she is going back to.  Carlisle home i guess. Forgetting the Bella/Edward romance from S.M. I don´t think any teenager would do that beeing back home. But I guess it is just a really tough chapter!!!!!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 11 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 46

It´s past midnight in Germany and I can´t stop reading. I feel the tension......and have to remind me this is just a story.......ARGH  is it?



Author's Response:

Thanks.  I'm glad you're liking the story

Summary: Past Featured Story

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A silent war came that changed everything. Humans are chosen at birth to be a vampires mate. What happens when Bella is given to the God of War on her 16th Birthday? Will she survive the darkness and her mate? Or will she beg for her own death.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69505 Read Count: 108562
[Report This] Published: 10 Feb 2010 Updated: 28 Oct 2011
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Uuh, creepy chapter. i guess Carlisles death wish will be granted eventually.....

I´hope Bella is fine. She wil be a strong vampire, and JAsper......do I want to know what he is capable off......doing to Carlisle.......LOL

Human Pet by cullens_pet Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 213]
Summary:

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Edward doesn't make it to the ballet studio on time. James has a fate in store for Bella far worse than death. One that she could have never imagined, even in her worst nighmares.

 

**This story includes graphic violence and sexual assault. If these topics offend you, please don't read any further.**


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49124 Read Count: 27784
[Report This] Published: 11 Apr 2010 Updated: 16 Jul 2010
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice story. I love Aro! You have done well so far! I hope the Volturi will give the Cullens a hard time!  In most of the ff stories the Cullens get Bella back too easy! LOL

Collide by Robicorn Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 129]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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We alone, a little flock,
The few who still remain,
Are exiles wandering through the land
In sorrow and in pain...
We wander in the forests dark,
With dogs upon our track;
And like the captive, silent lamb
Men bring us, prisoners, back.
They point to us, amid the throng,
And with their taunts offend,
And long to let the sharpened ax
On heretics descend

 

 

Two lost souls trying to figure out where they belong, collide. What happens when Isabella wants out of the plain life she leads that Edward wants to be accepted into? Will Edward face what he is running from to leave with Bella? Or will Bella surrender and embrace her culture?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 57683 Read Count: 11066
[Report This] Published: 16 Apr 2010 Updated: 04 Sep 2010
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Well, this is a great story. So many unexpected surprises. Your German is perfect! And my dutch husband had quite a laugh with the poem. So I will recommend this story to the German ff.de side and hope you will update soon.

You have put a lot of thought and details to this story which makes is special.

Can´t wait to find out how you will continue. S/E or B/E or B/M? :O)

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 03 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Life is so complicated! Even for Amish. And wannabes. I feel sorry for Sarah.  But I guess thats life, too. And don´t we all just hate the fact that others always know what´s best for us. I hope Rose/Em will learn. LOL

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 20 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

I still love the story. They have to think about the future, with a little baby girl. Poor Sarah. I guess she is up for a tough awakening.

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Date: 22 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

How horrid. And a true story as well. I´m in tears. Hope they all will find the strength to get on with their lifes.

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Date: 22 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I still love the story. Even though I don´t know how to comment. Hope they work it out. I am not sure if Amish is the right choice for them to go on together. I can see them in Edwards condo! But your story line has made so many turns.....I can´t wait to read more.

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Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Wow, I love the chapter. Even though some of it is heartbreaking. Hope they find a happy ever after......

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Well, I really enjoyed this story. It´s  different and quite emotional without getting too cheesy.  You have found a nice way to let us in both worlds. Amish/English. E/B were great from the beginning. The struggles and feelings - well done!!

Thank you for sharing this with us and goog luck with your new story!

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“We found her Chief Swan, she’s ALIVE! We found Isabella!" Alive? She had really survived the last tens years?

They said I was going home but where was home now?

OOC AU Dark themed you've been warned. No rape! But there is talk about slaves and abuse   Bella x Edward

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77399 Read Count: 32990
[Report This] Published: 25 Apr 2010 Updated: 25 Feb 2011
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

OMG. he is back? followed the to the hospital? Sorry I have to go and read the next chapter

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Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow! What an opening. What did they do to the girls that they are so .....submissive.  thanks for sharing ..

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Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

where do you get all these ideas from?

love the story. poor bree. hope she finds happiness

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Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

....the private vampire stalker made me laugh...but Charlie is odd..... after 10 years without his daughter...".I can't watch my child groveling on her hands and knees on a 24/7 basis.".......GET A GRIP, DADDY!!!!!

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Date: 26 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Seth was changed and now his dad doesn´t want him back - thats soo sad.

I really like this story! The only thing I thought was strange was the Walmart bit. Isabella feels inferior because of her clothes....

I guess Isabella goes thought a lot of emotional changes and she does not unterstand.....but would she really act like that with her Master? It´s almost like blackmailing...... Nevermind - thats just me: I coulnd care less for designer clothes and shopping in general.

I like the dark side of this story. It is not easy but you did a great job so far!

Thank you

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 26 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Well, I like your funny side as well....sex is like naked wrestling! LOL.

I can see Esme furious about Edward. Good one.

And as for Bree and James....the Cullens help and fight them?



Author's Response:

Sorry it took so long to answer your review! I have been writing up a storm over the last week. Next two chapters for this story are already done and being beta'd. Thank you for reading and reviewing! I hope you continue to follow it!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Come on, the Volturi are not that bad! Edward did not follow the rules. Why do they always want "help" from Alec, cutting of senses - but otherwise blame him as witchtwin??? He has feelings, ya know!

Here ist comes, my dark side!!! Still love the story. (I usually read dark Volturi stories; :O)

But you post whatever you like and I will wait for updates and maybe one of your other stories is any good?!



Author's Response:

Thank you again for your review! Next two chapters are being beta'd and i will post as soon as possible.

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Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Alec can´t destroy his twin. He will take Bree to Volterra and Aro will allow them to live ....ever after.... Jane will accept Bree, torture her now and then for fun and games .......and otherwise be a good girl. for her beloved Aro...because this is about Edward and Bella! And as much as I love Alec.

My brother would not kill me because of one bad decission in life. And I am not nearly 600years old. LOL



Author's Response:

I can't give away too much, but i think the twist i have planned will shock everyone! Dont fret it will be worth the wait. Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Carlisle Cullen has been the object of Bella Swans fantasies for years. The problem with that is he’s a very bad boy. Hot tempered and tortured by his past. Can Bella break through his cold, hard mask and warm his icy heart? What secrets are hidden inside the home and hearts of Carlisle and his Brother and sister?

Story starts out light with some humor becomes more intense in later chapters.

 

All human characters….contains underage drinking, drugs, sex, abuse. 

 

 I'd like to thank Moonlit Wishes for making me an awesome banner for this story.

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 55668 Read Count: 23163
[Report This] Published: 15 May 2010 Updated: 04 Nov 2010
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Mr. Birdie is popular, I guess! The sum up went well. Very polite. LOL.

I need the check out the ratings for this story. I want to know where all the piercings and tattoos are.



Author's Response:

Well thank you for taking the time to read and review for me Alecandra. I hope you continiue to do so :)  Diane

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Pressure can be relieved with Phone sex.

You should see the silly grin on my face. I would love to believe that Bella (virgin) has phone sex in that way.  Talks like that. Uh, I am not sure about it, though, nevermind.

The story has really improved. It is getting better and better. thank you for your time and sharing this with us - addicts -. LOL



Author's Response:

It  a better read though, I know virgin's don't usually have great phone sex....lol. It was never like that for me when I was younger. I would just listen and then lie and say "um, yeah I'm doing that" ...lol.

Thank you for thinking this story has improved, it's getting easier for me to write properly. I am from the south, and we word things so differently down here, people used to point out my grammar a lot.... :)

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Surprise, we're here!

this was perfekt. you are so comfy now writing stuff......WOW



Author's Response:

Well thank you, I just love Carlisle, and Jasper is really becoming one of my favorite's as well. I actually feel bad about the things I have to do to them.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Jasper and Alice

They need a plan on how to get rid of James. Drug overdoze. Car accident. Missing and noone reports to the police. Vampire attack. A new patio area.....



Author's Response:

I like your idea's...lol....a new patio area...lol. Those are actually great idea's, you made me chuckle. :)

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Caveman Carlisle

What about the birthcontrol, kids



Author's Response:

There is a reason for everything dear.   :)

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 20 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 1: My Obsession

Nice one. Poor Jazz. I hope you have mercy with him. You mentioned his story a couple of times.....please be nice! 

What else could happen to James? He could shoot himself. Wolf attack, poisoned mushrooms, just feed him all the drugs he´s got. (Need more help? I´ve got some ideas!)  And the kidz need condoms!!!  LOL



Author's Response:

I'm thinking Jazz might want to have mercy on James whenever he flips....nah....lol. Poisoned mushrooms?...lol...mama like! I hate condoms woman...lol...but all the kids are using them except for one couple because thats part of the story, I like you, you are funny and the idea's you come up with are very good ones. :)

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Jasper Remembers How and Why his Mother Died.

Wow, what a bed time story! But we needed the information, now we can sort out James.  I am not sure if Jasper does it though.  After watching Eclipse...... we need more girl power.....

Alice and Rose! BDSM- scene goes wrong.....

Once Alice finds out about James molesting Jasper.......her revenge will be evil.

 



Author's Response:

Have I told you that I love how your mind works? I'm like you though, even knowing how Jasper is going to freak on James. I think Carlisle or Alice should do the deed. :) Thanks for the coffee, I love those cups, Diane

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 27 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 Time to Talk

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Heartbreaking! I hope Carlisle survives, now Bella is with child. I wonder how stupid James is. Playing games with three grown up teenagers. Does he really think he can get away with everything? Is Bella talking to her dad about this? She has to let him know about the baby.

He works for the Police. Maybe they already know there is something going on. ………

We don’t want any of them in prison because they killed James.

Drug overdose should be safe, if he is not only selling……LOL



Author's Response:

James is going to push them anytime he can, it's a power rush for him to win. Charlie will find out about the baby-but maybe not in the way he would have liked to. I think in one of the older chapter's Charlie sent word by the boys to tell their father, he was watching them. I can't remember how I phrased it now though.

The problem I am having is that I had planned on there being an intense scene that involved James actually raping Jasper and Jasper flipping out. NO one wants Jasper to go through that, so I have all of these out-lined chapters that are of very little use to me now. I am 'winging it' at this point until I can re-write everything. I would rather keep the readers of this story 'Jasper happy'.

You must have an evil muse that keeps telling you how to off James to....lol. Take care...Diane

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Bella Loves Sex

I had sleepless nights reading your story!

It is yours, so if you think James has to rape Jazz…..well what can I say.

Something has to happen. No one want`s  Rose to be raped either.

It will be tricky but in the end you have to write it. And only you know how you want it to end. Of course, I can let you know what I would like but then I could just sit down and write my own story. And why should I if I can check my emails, telling me someone updated.

(Don´t let Carlisle leave Bella because he thinks he is not good enough for her…hint hint…..PLEASE)



Author's Response:

Thank You Alecandra,

 I am surprised that you had sleepless nights over my story, and complimented. I have done that myself over other people's stories.

Your advice to me is really good, and I appreciate it very much. I haven't worked on this story since Monday, whenever I put out the last chapter, which was newly outlined and written at the time. They say when you don't know what to do to do nothing at all, so I haven't so far. However, I know I have to get started on it soon.

Carlisle is the man in this story, following closely by Jasper, I guess....lol. Take Care and Thanks again, Diane. Thanks for sharing your coffee. :)

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 02 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 Plan in Action

Well, I am at a loss to say anything. Bad news. I hope Carlisle survives. 

I´m on holiday - what am I going to do now that I don´t know what is going on!!!!!!



Author's Response:

I'm sorry I didn't mean to upset you.I guess you have cut me back on my coffee intake a little, huh. I will update Thursday. I don't know if that helps or not.....Diane

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 15 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 What’s Happening?

At last a lap top and a quiet minute to read your story. I am on holiday and have found grey hair!! So thank you that you updated and posted two new chaps....

They are great. Loved the Carlisle/parents in heaven part..........

Why didn`t the police do anything? Charlie was watching the whole thing. Bella should talk to him about that once Carlisle is better. I wonder if the police will find out about James past and the others don`t have to go to jail......

Can`t wait for your outtakes. They should be fun to read. Alternative ends always are.



Author's Response:

Welcome back Alecandra,

 I hope you're having a nice holiday. A grey hair, hum well that could be just blonde hair from the sunshine or maybe chlorine from a pool, It happens. :) (fingers crossed)

You're welcome and thank you for reading the new chapter. I enjoyed writing Carlisle in heaven with his parents. I just wish I would have thought to send a message from them to the other kids. It would certainly of helped Jasper in forgiving himself. Maybe they could have said something to Rosalie about her future being happy. That they would always be there with them in heart and spirit.

I should have thought out the polices' part in things a little further because I know there are loop-holes. However, I needed things to to work out like they did. I needed James to be alive for the ending.

The outtakes: I am looking forward to posting those myself. You're the first person to mention anything  to me about them, so thanks.

Hope to hear from you next chapter. Take Care and have fun, Diane

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 Bella and Alice

Wow! So Uncle Caius is going to help the boys. You made him sound very powerful and determined. Please spend some time working on how he can help the kids, how he interacts with his lawyer, the court case ec. I am really surprised about his appearance and can´t wait to read more about how this will end. The kids need help. And esp. Bella and Carlisle.   I hope he will manage to help Carlisle so that he does not have to go to jail. Or not for very long. 

Charlie has to be concerned, of course. But a good lawyer can do magic sometimes. And the way Rose talked to Alice and Bella…… saved my day.

I am back at home and I am sorry I forgot to share my coffee the last time I reviewed. It wasn´t intentional. Your story is improving from chapter to chapter!  Thank you again for sharing it.



Author's Response:

Wow that was an awesome review girl. It always impresses me when someone doesn't miss a detail like you just did. :)

I am not planning on going into a lot of detail with the actual court case. I'm getting ready to wrap up this story in about three more chapters. Then I will start posting the outtakes behind those. They contain a funny little version of Bella and Carlisle's first day back at school after he broke-up with her, the other chapters are the ones I had originally written on Jasper. It contains the rape scene and the after-math of Jasper losing it on James. That was the reason I had put the warning up, I had changed it in the story-line because Jasper's fans did not want him being hurt in the now. I can certainly understand that. I love Jasper to.


It was strange writing the scene between Bella and Alice. I could understand how they both were feeling. Nevertheless, Rose was awesome in pointing out the underlying truth. The real truth.

Thank you for commenting on my writing improving from chapter to chapter. I look back on the other chapters now, and I can certainly see what a greenhorn I was. But I know I have a long way to go yet.

I'm glad you got home safe and sound. I hope you had a good holiday. Please don't worry about the coffee from last time. I love it, but the review means more to me. The coffee is just like an extra added shot of encouragement. :) Thanks for it, btw.

-Diane

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Hello! Well thank you again for sharing this awesome story with us. I loved it. And I love the happy ending. So - please post the outtakes - you promissed!!!!!

Good luck with your other stories, which I will read soon. TTFN



Author's Response:

HI Alecandra...Thanks for filling up my coffee cups! I am happy that you have enjoyed those Bad Boys. Their dear to my heart. I will post those outtakes, it will be about a month before I do that though. I have to finish off another story first, which will leave me only the one to work on full time. Plenty of time to clean-up and edit those outtakes. ;) Take Care and I should warn you that every story I write is different.

-Diane

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Outtake: Crazy Ex-Girlfriend

Wow! Love this outtake. Carlisle esp.

Good to have you back! Even if it is just for an outtake. more please...



Author's Response:

Hi Alecandra,

 Gosh I have missed you all as well. I have a couple of more outtakes but I am kinda nervous about posting them. Carlisle is the bomb isn't he? :) He's so hot!!!

 Okay, I hope to hear from you next outtake and take care. Coffee is good, thank you

-Diane.

 

Uprising by allforkedup Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 424]
Summary:

Kidnapped into slavery, Edward tries his best to work diligently in order to avoid punishment and keep his wife safe.  Nothing about his life is his own, not even the intimacy between him and his Bella... and she, too, could be taken away at any time.  What happens when he has no choice but to make a big 'mistake'?  What will the punishment be?  Will it break him?  Inspired by the song 'Uprising' by Muse (which I think has a stupid video).

Contains adult situations and language; please do not read if you are under 18.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 181405 Read Count: 61310
[Report This] Published: 14 Jun 2010 Updated: 10 Oct 2011
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 23 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Well, I really like the idea of the story, but you should take your time and give more details. This is like a diary. The conversations are missing. The emotions from the people after being kidnapped...... I can picture them, but you should work on the details.



Author's Response:

I know... I have a great deal of difficulty with that.  I feel like I'm droning on and on...  But as this is all Edward's POV; I think you have a fairly decent idea of his emotions, at least.  I have some other stories in my head, with more conversations, but not this one.  Very few conversations came to me, I guess because the slaves are allowed so little free time, and there is little opportunity for conversation.  Now that they are free, I hope they speak to me more.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 23 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Still a nice story, and you are getting better.



Author's Response:

Thank you.  This is my first story, and I do hope to improve.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 24 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Ah, lovely Rose! You made me laugh! This chapter was perfect. A lot of details. Very well writen!!!!! Sorry have to go. Back for the last chapter later. KR Sandy



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I am so glad that you feel that I am improving :)

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 24 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Hello! Well I really think you improved a lot and the last chapter was fantastic! What I don´t understand is why you sometimes put excuses or explanations at the end of your story. It is your story and you should be proud of it! If you take two weeks to update so what? We will not run away ignoring you! If you are not happy with what you came up with than don´t publish it until you are happy or your beta had the time to read it. You had so many positive reviews you don´t need excuses. Take your time and enjoy the whole thing. Enjoy the writing process as much as we enjoy reading your chapters! Cheers



Author's Response:

Thank you, thank you, thank you!  Well, I know that I get very anxious waiting for updates when I read, so I assumed it might be the same for my readers.  Everyone has been so nice; I hate to let them down.  Also, they are now accustomed to fast updates.  The story is sort of dying to be told, and I just can't help myself sometimes; it just bursts free.  And, uhhh... I don't have a beta.  Just lil' ol' me.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Another great chapter!!! So full of emotion. Thank you :O). I hope they will find them soon, considering how big the country is.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 29 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Beautiful!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 30 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Where is Carlisle? One of the captives and ready to help???

I´m in tears. You can´t let her die. I take everything back I wrote before.

you need to update. LOL



Author's Response:

Hey, you were nice; there's nothing wrong with expressing your opinion in a respectful manner, and that is exactly what you did.  Now, I just need to decide our dear Bella's fate; I have three options in mind... hmmm...

LOL!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 30 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Please don´t let her die. I will be a good girl. LOL. Thanks for saving me. I hope I can sleep now. ( It´s ten to midnight in Germany ;O)   Good night!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 01 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Thank god she is better.  Hope no other nightmares turn up soon. I need to relax a little bit.  Are they going to find the passports? Maybe the mansion has a hidden panic room. Or the girls find something in the garden? If all of them head for an embassy the questions would be quite funny! But the answers where the masters are.....no good!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

He is not going to leave Bella. Em and Jazz will talk to him. Hide evidence.

All the slaves go back to different countries. Once he will be asked about what has happened to the masters, the authorities will never be able to track them all! He should be o.k.

We need a happy end. Burn the place.

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 10 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Wow. I don´t know what to say. I´m in tears. This was heartbreaking and beautiful.

When I woke up this morning and got my email alert for your update I thougth about Bella being pregnant. Now you mentioned it.

Edward - stay!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 10 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

I knew it!  Pregnant. Hopefully the stuff from Carlisle did not do anything to the baby. Come on. He should get a grip. There is no way they find his DNA anywhere!

He should be safe!!! He will need a therapie once he is at home. But so will I if you don´t make this a happily ever after. LOL.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 11 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Thank you, yes!

Let it go, friend! We send you good Karma! Everthing will be ok.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Sniff....  I will not lose my son again. 

smirk.....it´s just talkie therapy instead of walkie therapy......

Wel, finally they spoke to him about it.  No matter how strong or sensitive you are, killing one or two dozen men must take its toll.

Great chapter. Thank you!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Nice turn. They all move to Seattle as one big family. I hope the others have more luck with their families....

Great chapter. Thanks for sharing.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 19 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Big step for them: Home!

I am so happy for them. I am sure they will find a nice house....

Great chapter. A nice relaxing start in a new day.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 27 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Back to the real world. Loads to do! Nice chaps. Thank you again for sharing. KR

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 28 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

I made up my mind. I would like to join and move in. :-)

Great story!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Seven weeks is early to comment on a pregnancy....Bella needs rest and we`ll see if she manages the first three months , bearing in mind the baby is healthy. So Bella did not notice the cuts on Edwards hands after he has beaten the robber??  So what did Laurent tell the guy ?

In Germany the robber would not get a Cent for being beaten from the “victim”. No matter how rich the target was.

If he has done it because he recognized Edward, he would be left with the costs for the trial and would probably walk away without being arrested.  If he isn´t a professional one. And he does not sound like one if he is threatening Edward from the ambulance…..   giving away his intentions. 



Author's Response:

Edward's hands still didn't look great yet from the last time, and he has been careful not to let Bella see much of them since this incident.  The music room is a bit dark because Edward prefers it that way, so she missed the new cuts when he was playing piano.  Yes, seven weeks is early, but with very high-risk pregnancies, some doctors take every precaution, including early ultrasounds.  According to what I found on some pregnancy information sites, there are things that can be seen on very early ultrasounds.  I don't understand them; I've never been pregnant, and never will be, but apparently, stuff is there to be seen, and it appears that 6 weeks is the first appearance of the heartbeat.  I thought that was cool.  And we'll never know what Laurent said; he can be one scary, secretive dude.  A lot of stupid lawsuits are filed in America, unfortunately.  the robber only recognized Edward after he had already began the robbery; he didn't know who Edward was at first, and didn't think of suing until Edward beat the crap out of him.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

No wonder you were up until 4 a.m.!! LOL

It had to be done. Sleep well.

Nice chap anyways.



Author's Response:

Eh, I couldn't sleep with this in my head, plus I was having some acid reflux trouble and couldn't really lie down.  I don't sleep well sitting up.  Actually, I never did sleep, and am now in my 30th hour without sleep.  At work.  Now, how fun is that?

Summary:

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Thank You moonlit_wishes for making this banner for me...I Love it !!!

 

 

 

An evil scientific Bella sets out to make Carlisle pay for her painful past. She will inflict her pain on him both as a vampire and a human. If things don’t go as planned will Bella return Carlisle to his family before it’s too late?

 

This story is of a very mature nature. Please Do Not read this if your under the legal age.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02 Bella/Jasper stories
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 62819 Read Count: 6884
[Report This] Published: 15 Jun 2010 Updated: 06 Sep 2011
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Learning Lessons

OOops! This is my first BAD Bella story. Usually I read BAD Carlisle stories. :o)

Nice that Bella isn´t crying the whole time! Will wait for update. KR



Author's Response:

Oh I Love it when Carlisle is Bad, in a good way...lol. I know this sounds stupid because they 're not real-but I would love to hear them growl and purr. I think that is so freakin' sexy. Thanks for taking the time to review....Diane

Never Say Never by Wombat Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1025]
Summary:

Issued with a death sentence since birth Bella’s life was never her own; in an attempt to escape her abusive childhood she flees to Forks, Bella is destined to be with Edward for eternity but can he save her from the clutches of Aro and his army before its too late or will she be able to save herself.

This story contains Abuse, Violence, Love, War, Sex, Masturbation, Kidnapping, Rape, Death and a heap of other things.... Please don't read if you are not of age!!!!

Twilight Rocks But I Do Not Own It.... I do however own this story!!!!

This story is for Adults only. So Don't Read if you are not old enough......

I suck at summaries so please give my story a go.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 58299 Read Count: 55216
[Report This] Published: 25 Jun 2010 Updated: 03 Jan 2013
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

ARE you going to tell us why she is afraid and who she is afraid of????????



Author's Response:

lol... eventually.... Im nasty but not that nasty...hehehe it will all come together in later chapt... keep reading.... Hugs for the reviews

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

That was funny. Not the truth about her past and that her mother did not believe her. But that she talked to Jacob like he is a dog. She will be surprised soon, I guess??



Author's Response:

hehehehe... yes she will get a shock when she finds out.... Your ace for reviewing

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Like the story....just have to get more before i can write another review.......TTFN

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

The conversation was great! Carlisle was funny. Nice chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for pushing that button

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Which part of the chapter do you think we should hate? LOL



Author's Response:

LMAO... I take it you didn't hate any of it...hehehehe... thanks a bunch for reviewing

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Two miles away their desires invaded my senses leaving me weak at the knees..... If I get any closer to them I’m gonna have the whole neighborhood dry humping each other…

You can not be serious!!! I am laughing and crying at the same time! 



Author's Response:

hehehehehe!!!! Thanks for this rewiew... I wrote this chap so long ago and to re read that bit made me laugh... I have  a bad case of the flu at the moment and you managed to this first smile to my face in 2 days.... Thanks heaps

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

This story is getting better and better. I love all the emotions and can really see them as a family. But Aro was great as well. Good job.



Author's Response:

YAY!!! again thanks for taking the time to push that little button....

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Beautiful! Really enjoyed this chapter. Thank you for sharing.



Author's Response:

WOW!!! you really have mase my day

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Wow, there is a lot going on. Carlisle is wonderful! I love the story.



Author's Response:

Wait... Carlisle gets better... he is such a good man

Amazing Grace by Cullensgirl90 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 429]
Summary:

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Bella is given to Edward as a birthday present. He promises her that he will love her and never hurt her. Will he be able to keep his promise or will a dark secret tear them apart before their relationship can develop?

 Dark Edward.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/OC
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 185811 Read Count: 80452
[Report This] Published: 03 Sep 2010 Updated: 23 Jun 2011
Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Ah. Matt the police officer. Well, Edward wasn´t paying attention when he found new friends...... Carlisles appearence in hospital was frightening. Is he going to do something to Bellas friends in Miami? Or will they find Matt/Bella and put them through hell? Well, sue me - I like dark stories!  

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 16 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Nice chapter. Missed you and your updates. So thank you !

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow! That was really good!!! Can´t wait to continue.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Love the story. I am just totally confused about the plot and what is right/wrong and what is not. Is Bella walking away from Edward once she is old enough or do the Cullens expect something from her??? Will she be grateful for what they have done for her or is she going to turn them in?

Too many questions. Bed time! Thanks for sharing

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

I am glad I did not give up on this story.  It was an intense chapter but totally worth coming back for. I love the story even though I had a difficult time at the beginning (it was not dark enough for me, hehe)

And don´t blame the parents. They love Edward.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

I wonder why Michael has not given her money and made sure she did not have to go back.

So I guess once Edward/Bella are somewhere in the mountains he will be nice but clingy and overprotective. After Bella remembers the lawyers name she starts to prepare for her escape(saves money....) and she contacts Michael about details.

Bad news stop her. Somehing happened to Michael and now she can´t go back to Miami. Not dark enough.....I´ll wait for the next chaper and tell you what I think then....

   

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I wonder what Edward thinks about Bella. She means business and unless he puts her in chains...., once he rapes her she will try to contact the police.   Can´t she talk to Esme and find out if she can expect some help. Is Daddy Cullen talking to her about his expectations? For one million....... Did they tell Bella to move because she is not old enough to fend for herself or do they have a plan?

Also, I have read quite a few dark stories. This is my first, when it comes to the sexual abuse, that the victim is not "wet". That totally makes sense. Makes the story even ...darker...Do we get an Edward POV and Carlisle/Esme POV?   Please update.

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

OMG: As long as you don´t take a week to update!

This is the worst cliffy I have ever had! The parents gone and E/B on their own. Make this dark and wonderful! She should try to escape but not really make it.....unless you intend to end this story within the next three chapters. .. I have read a few really nice, dark stories...if you need ideas. LOL.

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Oh, God! So the parents left them. I wonder why Bella did not say anything at all. Six more days with Edward!...... Can´t wait.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 10 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Send an email to get help, girl....Anything.....If Edward is a deep sleeper, use the hand cuffs, or get up at night.. You can´tget in any more trouble...

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 10 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

First I thought he is going to take her back to Edward....but your mind works differently .LOL. So, I guess he hates the Cullens, for whatever reason and is going to help Bella.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 11 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

What is wrong with Bella?  They don´t have a police station ? I mean she could have said something and make a second phone call. Not that I want you to end your story, but she is too shy for her own good....

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

The Cullens get her out of hospital and hide her somewhere while Edward is in jail. They leave him there for a couple of days and tell him that Bella has gone. He has to undertake some sort of anger management stuff and Daddy Cullens gives him Bella as a surprise presen for his good behavior.

Who needs a break from Edward. The poor kid!

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Give them a break. A few carefree days before the Cullen power returns.

 

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Nice - but I think we deserve some Carlisle/Esme/Edward time!

Has he spoken to the President of the United States yet? Or Aro? All you need is a goog tracker.... Or someone else who will be able to find Bella. We need more action. I can´´t sleep at night. You are driving me nuts.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed
Date: 18 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Nice chapter. Is she calling Michael or is she able to see him? Do we get some information about the Cullens?? What they are up to? Please...

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 20 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

No evidence of DNA from Jessica Stanley. Well....Edward is not guilty unless proven otherwise.... I don´t know about your American system, but in Germany he would probably not even go to jail for what he did to Bella. She hat plenty of opportunity to run and inform the police but she didn´t.  They would let him out on probation.

I bet the Cullens will show up with the best lawyers they can get.....So I will wait and learn about your American system.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 22 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Good chapter. Still thinking about Edward and the trial. Bella never really said anything. she could make things up just to harm Edward. That would never work for a German court. Sorry..... I know it is "Just" a story. I still think, Edward - with his lawyers will be the lucky one..... unless they find some more witnesses or DNA.......

Love your story anyways - so please update.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 26 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

We´ll practice...don´t worry. LOL. That new identity thing is soo convenient......for both of them. Guess you found the sunny side from the situation they are in.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 26 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Oh, dear. So they share the same bed....and practice. Hope the little bubble they are in right now will last for a while, because it´s nice for them to have a break.

Reviewer: Alecandra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Great chapter. Thanks for updating so soon.