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Nauseous vs. Nauseated Do you know the difference? Most authors don’t.
The difference in meaning between nauseated and nauseous is similar to the difference between the words poisoned and poisonous. A person who feels sick to their stomach is nauseated. Whatever it is that is making them feel that way is nauseous. For example, sour milk is nauseous and makes you feel nauseated when you smell it. A person would never say, "I feel poisonous" (unless they have a mouthful of venom, ha ha), so I person would never say, "I feel nauseous." I hope this helps!
Edward Masen, Hollywood heartthrob, meets Bella Swan, shy college student, and the romantic sparks fly. Can they both overcome traumatic pasts and trust issues to be together? All-Human
Thank you to Coleen561 for the beautiful banner!
Virgins & Villains came in first in 3 categories at the Summer 2011 Avant Garde Awards. See banners below.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, I Whitlock's read , Ageise02 To Read 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 86 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 448890 Read Count: 312010
Date: 23 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Enchiladas & Store Bought Ta Ta's
Two great chapter in one day! Thanks so much!
Date: 23 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Mercer Island & Minibars
Edward's back story was very well done. It was original and interesting and "fit" the level of angst needed for the rest of the story. The declarations of love seem a little fast, but it sounds like they're both a little overwhelmed with the intensity of their emotions after all the trauma they've survived.
Date: 23 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 8: The Dude & Dirty Harry
Fun ending to the chapter! Who doesn't love Chief Swan doing the protective dad bit?
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Cosmic Boogers & Black Eyed Peas
I'm looking forward to hearing more about Bella's back story. Thanks for the chapter!
Author's Response:
next one should be up later today. probably posting the next 2 actually. Thanks!
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Red Roses & Burst Bubbles
uh-oh! Another exciting chapter, well done!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Pedophiles & Daddy's Little Girl
Evil cliffy! Thanks for all your hard work!
Author's Response:
don't worry...chap 15 prob upload today. thanks!
Date: 26 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Bourbon & Epitaphs
At the risk of repeating myself, you've done an excellent job creating the back stories and plot for this story. I had already guessed that the plural in the title would mean that Edward had this in common with Bella. Great job!
Author's Response:
smarty! I will confess now that i leave hints about everything all through the story...because life is like that. There are usually clues staring us in the face constantly, but if we're like B, we're too busy talking to ourselves to pay attention! lol thanks!
Date: 01 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chipmunks & Oscars
Great chapter. Love the cliffy!
Author's Response:
i think you're the first to say you loved a cliffy. lol. i usually get a rash of crap for them. Thanks!
Date: 03 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Vandalism & The Apocalypse
Excellent, but tough chapter. I think it was a necessary and important development in the story. I'm glad to hear the separation won't be too long.
Author's Response:
yep..next chappy resolves a bunch. Thanks for the review!
Date: 03 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Makeup Kisses & Confessions
Great chapter! I loved the way you resolved Edward's decision to leave and I also like seeing Bella's attempt to create some space. Considering that many of the developments in the story seemed to happen very fast, this "step back" (even though it's just a small step) is good for the story.
Author's Response:
but as you'll see in the next couple...Bella doesn't know what she wants...her wishy washy will be addressed too. She's a mess. Thanks for the review!
Date: 04 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Waxward & Sexward
Fun Chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks. Hoping to have the next one done tonight..post tomorrow?
Date: 10 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Tidal Pools & Capistrano
Great chapter. The marriage talk seems "in character" for these two (IMHO), so it doesn't bother me.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Next chapter look for funny. Emmett and Rose arrive in L.A.
Date: 18 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Wild Turkey & Jedi Training
The EPOV idea sounds great!
Author's Response:
I think a lot of people will want that. Thanks!
Date: 20 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Swing Dancing & The Dearly Departed
Is the blog the only place to see EPOV? I typically don't take the time to look at author blogs, but I can try to find it from your profile. Thanks for the chapter!
Author's Response:
that's the only place it is right now. i need encourgement to post it on fanfic and TWCS. If enough people like it, I'll post over here. i'm basically an insecure whiny little beyotch okay? lol Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 12 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Wookies & Good Friday
What a great way for Bella to learn about the stalking incident! Ruh Roh, indeed!
Author's Response:
poor edward. Thanks again for reading and reviewing and bannering...lol .
Date: 27 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 65: Boot Heels & Body Bags
Great job! Very exciting! Thanks for the quick update!
Author's Response:
Thanks much!
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Outtake: Ode to The Arse
Fun outtake! Thanks for posting.
Author's Response:
you are welcome. it was absolutely ridiculous...but...so am I. Thanks!
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chip Shops & Fairy Lights
Great chapter! Love the Tolkien bits, they're a nice touch. Looking forward to finding out if this is the proposal!
Author's Response:
i could tell you....lol. Hopefully everyone will like the next chap..it will be silly and sappy too. Thanks!
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Making Plans & False Allegations
Great chapter! Lots of fun at the beginning and then it turns serious! I wonder why Edward pushed Bella away at the end... I'll be looking forward to the next chapter to see what happens next. At least it won't be long until the baby is born and the allegations can be refuted.
Thanks for the update! (P.S. - I'm glad you still like the banners!)
Author's Response:
I absolutely love the banners! Every time I click on my name at TWCS and see them, it makes me happy. lol. Glad you liked the chapter. Needless to say, Bella will have an intense week, hopefully E will get his head out of his butt and apologize. Thanks!
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 61: Family Photos & Mama's Squeezebox
This was a great chapter. It is interesting how Bella is starting to relax and Edward seems to be getting more nervous and on edge!
I'm excited that VV and LRM are caught up. It will be fun to alternate between the POVs in a more "real time" fashion. I really appreciate all the hard work and effort you put into your stories.
Author's Response:
me too...i'm very glad...although sometime's Edward's chaps will be quite short. Thanks!
Date: 26 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 64: Wrap Parties & Shattered Glass
Wow! It's exciting to see the return of the "Villains!" I guess there's something wrong with me because I love cliffies! LOL
Also, did you know that the TWCS server was down the day you posted this important chapter? For most of the chapters posted on Friday, April 22, there were no e-mail alerts sent out. Just FYI, you might want to put something in the next chapter's author's note to make sure that your readers saw this chapter. KWIM?
Author's Response:
I'm glad somebody does! lol. Even with all those probs...TWCS is still doing better than fanfic....it was down for days..... Thanks!
Date: 19 May 2011 Title: Chapter 68: Strange Days & Sucker Punches
Great chapter! The possibility of James doing a show with Renee's killer sets the stage from some future drama and the scenes relating to the birthday celebration were a lot of fun.
Author's Response:
Thanks! glad you liked it.
France 1830
After the betrayal and death of his wife, Englishman Edward Cullen is bitter by love. But when he meets a tradesmen's daughter who was everything his late wife wasn't, Edward finds himself giving his heart to a woman who he, in the past, would deem improper. With duties of society and burdens of the past pushing them in all directions, will the two lovers be able to give themselves everything their hearts desire?
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories Read by CNYBella, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69979 Read Count: 47190
Date: 03 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Great start! A few minor typos, but one stood out more than the others. I thought you might want to fix it: while Edward with drawled from everyone . . . shoud be while Edward withdrew from everyone . . . At least I think that's what you were trying to say. Hope this helps! I'll put this on alert.
Outtake for Creating A Mate.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 5062 Read Count: 1344
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1-Gifts
This was really helpful. Thanks for posting it.
Carlisle speaks to a panicked Bella and Edward on their honeymoon at Isle Esme. He believes Bella is pregnant, but it's definately not a normal pregnancy. Follow Bella's pregnancy through Carlisle's eyes and mind. Contains medical terminology and graphic descriptions. Banner by Fuzzylittlewingedthing.
Part of the Carlisle and Esme: Through Their Eyes Series
Stephenie Meyer owns all of Twilight.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Carlisle/Esme, Edward/None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Carlisle and Esme: Through Their Eyes
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7549 Read Count: 428
Date: 17 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I thought this was really well written and I enjoyed reading it. I'm sure it was quite a challenge, but you did a fantastic job, especially in keeping everyone "in character" and canon. Thanks for writing this and sharing it with us.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the complimentary review! The more I thought about it, the more I realized how conflicted Carlilse prob. really was -- a man of faith, and a man of science -- and a father to Bella and Edward. Sheez! I almost wonder if he was glad Esme took the decision from him!
Shake is Edward's story, a high school student who has to deal with the daily embarrassment and pain brought about a disorder. All-Human.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8115 Read Count: 492
Date: 20 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
I thought this was really well-done and I enjoyed reading it. I don't know anything about this disorder, but I thought you wrote about it in a caring, sensitive way.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words! Glad you enjoyed the story.
EPOV of Virgins & Villains. **Important- Read the first 15 chapters of V&V before reading this**. Edward Masen, Hollywood heartthrob, meets Bella Swan, shy college student, and the romantic sparks fly.
Thanks very much once again to Coleen561 for the awesome banner!
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Ageise02 To Read 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 57 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 312799 Read Count: 77199
Date: 23 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Egg Drop Soup for The Cynical Soul
I really liked getting a chance to hear Edward's side of the second day lunch meeting. The texts with Alice were great. Thanks for writing this!
Author's Response:
You are welcome. Banner looks really good. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 24 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 39: Some Peace of Mind for the Jet-Lagged
Great chapter. I thought the confrontation with James was well done, but I bet that's not the last we'll see of him.
Author's Response:
hey you! have I told you how much i adore these banners? well i do. i thank you again for them and for reading and reviewing! and you are right...we will see james again. Thanks!
Date: 22 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: CPR for The Dead Heart
This is great! At first I was surprised at Edward's jaded and darker thoughts, but then I realized that what you're doing with his character makes perfect sense in the bigger picture of the V&V story. I think it will be wonderful to see his character grow and evolve from this jaded/cynical/unhappy place as his relationship with Bella develops.
I think you're right that repeating all the shared dialogue would be overkill. But I look forward to seeing his interactions with others when Bella is not there and his thoughts on some of the more important moments that they share.
Author's Response:
My thoughts exactly! kind of scary..we may be sharing a brain today! HAHA. The banner looks fantastic! I can't thank you enough. How can I repay you? Want to be in the story? lol Again, thank you , thank you, thank you!
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Mixed Signals for The Fortunate Son
Thanks for writing EPOV!
Author's Response:
You are very welcome. Hope you like it!
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 4: A Stalker's Guide to The Olympic Peninsula
The stalking was unexpected but a lot of fun to read about. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Edward is my favorite stalker. :) Thanks!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 5: A Narrow Escape for The Born Skeptic
I loved the "trapped in the diner" scene. The whole stalking episode is a riot.
Author's Response:
there's a couple photos of the diner on v&v's facebook. gotta love the elk head! Thanks!
Date: 10 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 6: A Glimpse of The Past For The Hopeful
It was fun to read about the make-up woman from EPOV! Thanks!
Author's Response:
I'm looking forward to a few things for his POV. Especially when he and Bella are apart. Thanks so much !
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Making Plans For A New Start
I still enjoyed the chapter, even if I wasn't "on the edge of my seat." It's just nice to hear both sides of the story.
Author's Response:
the next chapt of LRM may be a combination of chaps 11 and 12 of V&V...I don't want to repeat Bella's entire story...so that's how it's coming together at the moment. THanks for everything! glad you like this story too.
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Destiny Interrupted
It was great to be able to read about the meeting with Tanya. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading. Just posted the next chap.
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Humiliation For A Worthy Cause
I enjoyed the chapter. I don't think it's a problem to have two separate stories. Are you getting complaints? It will be fun wihen you're caught up and the chapters are more in sync (time-wise)
Author's Response:
no complaints..i think one person said they wished it was all in one. I do want them caught up with each other though...makes Edward's a little more exciting! That's why i'm doing two chaps LRM then 1 V&V. Thanks!
Date: 10 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Copious Amounts of Alcohol For The Bilingual
This may be a just a "companion" story, but it really rounds out the other story and completes it in some respects. Thanks for taking the time to right both POVs!
Author's Response:
As usual, thank you for reading and reviewing and making banners! You are the best!
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 29: The Ugly Truths
I enjoyed the EPOV for these chapters. I'm really looking forward to Edward's upcoming chat with Charlie about his situation.
Author's Response:
that will be the next chap...i'm looking forward to it also. Thanks!
Date: 02 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Heart To Heart For The World Traveler
Just think about how your chapters help all of us readers with OUR winter blahs! Great chapter!
Author's Response:
gosh, i hope the stories help...thank you for that! just updated LRM again...more V&V up next.
Date: 01 May 2011 Title: Chapter 45: A Journey in the Dark for the Defeated
So exciting to see this from Edward's POV. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing this never ending story....lol. Next chap is up.
Date: 26 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 44: The Stuff of Nightmares...
So exciting! This is the reason I love that you are taking the time to give us EPOV! I really wanted to see how he found out and his reaction. Thanks!
Author's Response:
wish granted...next chapter is posted now. Thanks!
Date: 16 May 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Tying Up Loose Ends
Excellent chapter! Edward did the right thing. Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much! Sorry I'm so late responding to reviews.
When a patient goes missing, what's a vampiric doctor to do? Consult the celebrated detective Sherlock Holmes of course. Story is set in the 1890s, pre-Edward.
Categories: Sherlock Holmes (Movie), Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Crossover
Characters: Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Sherlock Holmes/Other Character
Genre: Mystery
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 16060 Read Count: 310
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
What a wonderful and original idea for a story! I can hardly wait for the meeting between Carlisle and Holmes. I love the way you've captured the "tone" and language of a Conan-Doyle story. I know this must have taken a lot of work and study on your part. Excellent!
Author's Response:
Thanks, and you're too kind. The research isn't too bad, not when it pays off in reviews like yours. I just wish I had artistic talent like you do!
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
I loved the much anticipated meeting between Holmes and Carlisle. Carlisle is right to be a bit nervous about the famed detective's powers of observation.
I look forward to reading the next chapter! Not only for more Holmes/Carlisle interatction, but also to learn about the mysterious disappearance.
Great job!
Author's Response:
Yes, Holmes' powers of observation are awesome indeed, so Carlisle is right to be wary. Good thing Holmes is one of the good guys!
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Great chapter! I enjoyed the search of the apartment by Holmes and Watson and look forward to knowing what caught Holmes' attention at the window. So, while Holmes and Watson are at the woman's apartment, some unknown bad guy makes an appearance at Carlisle's flat! Intriguing!
Author's Response:
You'll find out what Holmes saw soon, I promise.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 11 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
I loved this story! The dialog between Carlisle and Holmes on the bridge was very well done. You did a wonderful job in both resolving the mystery of the missing widow and explaining how Holmes figured out that Carlisle was not human.
Edward's brief appearance at the end was fun to read too!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! Edward's inclusion at the end was a lot of fun to write.
In a world dominated by vampires, humans are forced to abide by the strict rules of the vampire government. Bella has never experienced life in an all-human world and one day the only life she knows shatters to pieces when she is kidnapped and sold to a vampire. She is unfortunately the object of the most ruthless, out of control, vampire‘s affection. Her life turns upside down as she moves to an all-vampire town. Will she have the strength to go on after all that she has endured her personal hell? Will the one special vampire heal her wounds as she struggles to live a life amongst vampires or will she become the victim of their most sinister instincts? Edward and Bella pairing, AU, OOC
Warning: This story contains explicit adult content, language, violence, vampire marking and blood play, Extreme Dark-ward, and murder.
Alternate version of the original story, Living Amongst Vampires. By IBELONGTOAVAMPIRE.
L.A.H, is co-written by Thaigher Lillie
Tkegl...Thank you!
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Horror, Sci-Fi
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89094 Read Count: 129742
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue (In Peace we do not come)
I've been following and really enjoying Living Amongst Vampires. I'm interested in seeing where you plan to take this and how it will differ from LAV.
Author's Response:
Thank you =) I'm glad you are enjoying LAV, I hope that you will like LAH too.
Everything will stay the same about the vamps...red marking venom,red eyes, fangs, etc. The Cullens will def. be dark. How dark? I'm not sure yet. Edward will be dark but he will NOT hit or rape Bella, because this will be a HEA.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Date: 12 May 2011 Title: Chapter 9: The Gauntlet part 1
So glad to see an update! Thanks for the chapter, and congrats on your finals.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Thank you so much! =)
Hopefully, you'll like part 2!
~Jells
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 8: The Forbidden Fruit
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, Coleen. =)
~Jells
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Prepare to be Pissed
Definitely not pissed off here! RL should always take precedence over FF! (I know, a radical idea to some.) Best of luck with your studies. I'll still be here when the next update is posted.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Thank you so much for understanding. The wait won't be too long.
Thaks again,
~Jells
After her brother’s death Andria DeAngelo is leaving Lake Tahoe, California in search of a new start. The tragic death of Bella Cullen had torn the Cullens apart and left Edward in a constant state of depression. He only lives because of Renesmee. When Edward and Andria meet Edward must control his desire to kill her. Can Andria get away from the memory of her brother’s tragic accident? Will the Cullens be torn apart forever? Or can Andria save Edward and the Cullens and show them happiness and love again?
Lemons in later chapters!
Thanks to Frozen Soldier for the AWESOME banner!
Thanks again to FrozenSoldier for the amazing banner!
made by Mehek18 for thetwilightawards.com! Thanks!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 218274 Read Count: 7840
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Final Fitting
I'm glad to see things moving along to the wedding and that Andria and Edward are growing closer with their new intimacy. I'm looking forward to seeing how you plan to write the pregnancy!
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Celebration
Very nice birthday party and transition to Nevada.
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Family
You always do a nice job of the interactions between the Cullens. I like that they have fun together and the way Andria has already become part of the Cullen family. I like her special, brotherly connections with Jasper too.
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Promise Kept
Great! I don't know how I missed this chapter when you first posted it! Of all the chapters to miss, this is NOT the one to miss! I loved their intimate moments and it was a wonderful idea to have their first time in Chicago.
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Favorite Place
It's great that they're finally engaged in this chapter. Sorry, I'm behind in reviewing!
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Close
It was interesting to have her learn about the wolves before she learns anything about the Cullens.
I also enjoyed the return of Stalkerward. Thanks for posting this!
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: A New Start
I think this chapter does a great job of providing just enough background on Andria to make her intriguing and sympathetic. Although I'm not sure about some of her financial decisions (spending nearly all her money on a house), but she is just eighteen! LOL.
One typo that jumped out at me: Maybe in a few years I could bare the idea that I was alone. I believe you meant to type: I could bear the idea . . . (since bare means to uncover and bear means to support, in this context).
I look forward to the next chapter and I'll put this on alert! Thanks!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your awesome review! What you got out of the first chapter is what I hope everyone gets from Andria. Okay, so I totally missed that typo, and I recheck my story every time I post it somewhere new. Wow, total fail on my part. Thanks for pointing that out!
Date: 18 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Death By Chocolate
Your "sick obsession" with making the vampires eat human food makes for amusing scenes!
The "baby" discussion was good, too.
I'm wondering when Charlotte will make a move. Love the suspense! Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
I'm glad Edward's torture was at least amusing! :) Thanks for the review, I'm so sorry for my terrible lack of response, school has been very crazy and it's been hard enough to find time to post the chapters, but I'm glad to hear from you and I look forward to each and every one of your reviews!
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Gone Forever
So sad! You did a very good job coming up with a plausible story for how Edward could have ended up alone. Since they had been with Em and Rose, they didn't have the benefit of Alice's foresight or Jasper's fighting expertise, so it makes sense that the other vampires could have gotten the upper hand.
I think you did a great job with Edward's level of sadness and hopelessness, yet he is hanging on for Nessie's sake. Nessie's talk with Edward near the end of the chapter was my favorite part; it was very poignant ("This isn’t happy, Dad, this is scary.")
typo: Rosalie grimaced; she knew Esme was right. Rosalie didn’t know the gir;, --> should be girl;
Date: 18 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Friends Forever
Very nice scene with Charlie! Thanks for the update!
Author's Response:
Everyone loves Charlie, and there will be more of him to come!
Date: 18 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Reminiscence
Very nice and lemony good!
I think there may be some formatting problems, as much of the chapter is missing paragraph breaks. Otherwise, great chapter!
Author's Response:
I totally didn't catch the formatting issue, thanks for brining it to my attention! All fixed!
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Suprise Visit
Another well done chapter! I think it's interesting to have Andria's thoughts somewhat accessible and I look forward to learning more about why sometimes Edward can't hear her thoughts.
I think you did an especially good job of portraying Edward as resolved to stay alone, only to have Carlisle's words of wisdom at the end begin to create just the hint in his mind of new possibilities.
Thanks for writing this!
Date: 18 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Argument
Well, that was a surprisingly insensitive remark from Edward (about outrunning a vampire)! Looks like everyone straightened him out though! Thanks for the chapter.
Author's Response:
Edward has his flaws, sadly his brain to mouth filter wasn't working very well that day.... Of course, Jasper, Rose, Emmett, Alice, and Esme weren't going to let him get away with it! Thanks for the review!
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Mysteries
You did a very good job of providing Andria with the Cullen back story without dragging it out unnecessarily (since most readers already know the back story).
It was interesting to have her react so differently to the mind-reading abilities of Edward. I really liked the part where he was answering her questions before she asked them.
I'm intrigued with why her thoughts are sometimes blocked. It will be interesting to see you explain this (when the time is right, of course).
Great job!
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Dreams and Changes
Wow! There was a lot happening in this chapter! But Edward and Andria had some important discussions, esp. about facing loss and life. I like that Andria is something of a daredevil and so fearless. I'm becoming intrigued about the circumstances of her brother's death and wondering if we'll be learning more about that later.
Author's Response:
I wanted Edward to be attracted to Andria for some of the same reasons he was to Bella, BUT I wanted Andria to also be very different from Bella - graceful, daredevilish, fearless (well they kind of had that in common). Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 09 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Acceptance
I really like the way you've written Andria. She is quite different from Bella, which I think is important, but yet, the reader can still see how she could be attractive to Edward and how a relationship with her would NOT be "Bella: the sequel" but a completely new experience for him.
I also like the way you write Edward coming to terms with the idea that he could have a relationship with someone without betraying what he had with Bella. "I was only making room in my heart for Alexandria."
Well Done!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your review! I love hearing from you! This chapter was a big step for Edward, so I'm glad you liked how it was written.
Date: 23 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Listen to Your Heart
A very sweet chapter. I liked it a lot! Bring on the love story! Thanks for writing this.
Author's Response:
Bring on the love story indeed! I cannot wait to post the next few chapters! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 9: The Past
It was good to learn more about Andria's back story and Travis's suspicious death. Thanks for the new chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing, a new chapter will be posted sometime this coming week. I'm going to post another Just a Sip. For the next chapter!
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Surprises
Short, but sweet. Christmas with the Cullens - very nice! I'm looking forward to their upcoming road trip!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! The road trip is lots of fun!
Date: 13 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Discussion
I hope Edward won't be stubborn for too long! I look forward to seeing how you resolve some of their issues regarding the future.
I can hardly wait to see what kind of trouble they get into in NYC! Thanks for writing this story.
Date: 24 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Sushi and Dreams
I really enjoyed this chapter, esp. the dinner and discussion with Nessie. Having Edward remember previous conversations with Andria was a great way to fill in some missing moments without slowing up the story. Thanks for writing this!
Date: 04 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 17: The Hunting Game
Very exciting! Quite the close call. Thanks for the update!
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Dancing
Great chapter! You did a great job with the citrus. I think you are setting a good pace for their relationship: not too fast, yet moving things along.
Date: 27 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 16: New Acquaintances
I like Andria's relationship with Jasper. It will be interesting to see where you take this. Her mistrust and discomfort around Peter was intriguing. I'm guessing there might be more to this as the story progresses.
Thanks for the update!
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Talented
Her potential talent is really interesting!
Are you planning to elaborate on what caused Edward to change his mind about changing Andria?
Thanks for the chapter and good luck with your nominations!
Date: 21 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Limitations
Very nice! I hope poor Edward gets some relief soon. Thanks for the update!
Date: 08 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 18: A Night Out
Fun chapter! Thanks for updating.
Date: 20 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Flashback
I like the way you resolved the questions about "true mates." I think you handled that issue very well and in a plausible manner.
I like the relationship between Jasper and Andria. Thanks for the update!
Date: 13 May 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Father-In-Law
Great chapter! The scene with the wolves chasing Charlotte was very exciting, the shower scene was sexy, and the visit from Charlie was sweet. Thanks for the update!
Date: 24 May 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Visions
I loved the cliffy at the end! It's an interesting twist that Charlotte is out to get revenge by targeting Jasper. I didn't expect it, but it makes perfect sense.
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked the twist!
Date: 29 May 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Decisions
As I've said before, I love cliffies! The confrontation with the Volturi was really well-done and very exciting to read. Great job!
Date: 08 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Never Hate
This was a very powerful chapter with the confrontation between Andria and her mother. I think you did a very good job of making it sound realistic and keeping the characters sympathetic.
The "lime" at the end was great and I'm looking forward to more Edward and Andria lemony goodness!
P.S. Great job resolving some of the questions and comments I had about the draft of the chapter.
Date: 08 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Goodbyes Are Forever
I just realized that I didn't review this chapter. I really liked the beginning where you finished the confrontation with the Volturi. You did a great job with this action sequence.
The dream/unconscious sequence with Travis and Bella was interesting and I liked the way you resolved some of the issues such as the identity of Edward's "true" mate.
Date: 10 May 2012 Title: Chapter 36: The Big Day
I'm sorry to be late in sending a review for this chapter.
I loved the wedding, it was lovely and very sweet. Poor Andria! Having to wear a wedding dress during a flight, even on a private plane, sounds uncomfortable to me.
Date: 10 May 2012 Title: Chapter 37: Honeymoon Part One: Paris
Great start to the honeymoon. Romantic and sexy.
Date: 13 May 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Honeymoon Part Two: Bordeaux
I really liked this chapter. The attempted attack and Edward's reaction made for a very exciting scene. I'm really excited that she's pregnant and can hardly wait to see what happens next. Thanks for the chapter!
Three intense and perplexing sexual encounters over four frustrating years. Is he the enemy, or is there a message in his seemingly hateful words? Will their mutual desires ever align? Have they evolved enough to be ready this time? ***SECOND PLACE WINNER*** 'I'm With the Band' Anonymous OneShot Contest.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8609 Read Count: 556
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Evolve
I hadn't heard about this contest, but I'm sure I would have voted for this great one-shot! Thanks for sharing it with us on this site! You mention three banners, but I only see two. Is there another one posted somewhere?
Author's Response:
Thank you! I loved writing it. Yes, I did get three banners, I thought it may be overload to post all three? You can see the other one on my blog http://boydblog.tumblr.com/ There were some great stories in the contest...I feel honoured to have been voted for second!
Luv BBxx
ENTRY FOR THE CHERRY EXCHANGE 2010 CONTEST!
How far would you go to prove your love? How pure would you stay, just to have that one night? 3 years & a country may have separated them, but both kept the one thing that the other wanted most. E/B.
When virtue is the only thing of value.
Rated M for language and lemons.
Kick-ass banner by miss FrozenSoldier :)
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 14798 Read Count: 735
Date: 29 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Don't Believe The Hype...
Good job with this one-shot. I enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much :)
I don't intend to make this my next project until FMN is finished, but that shouldn't be too far in the future anyways, so it shouldn't be too long before this is posting :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing :):)
Sarah xx
He was the lead singer of The Volturi. One of People's Sexiest Men. I was a new recording artist with an entire album riding on my shoulders. We were Hollywood's newest "it couple." Until he ruined everything - our relationship...my career...his life. Can our love be saved if he can't even save himself? AH/AU
A story about love, lemons, lies...and learning to forgive.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 257507 Read Count: 47585
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
I always enjoy a well-written Charlie!
An excellent use of flashback in order to set the stage (no pun intended) for your story without spending too much time describing previous events.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
I like that you're starting your story with them already in a relationship. This is different from so many stories, which focus on them meeting and falling in love. I think your use of flashbacks to tell their back story works well, but in this chapter I was initially confused by the flashback because it was them discussing something that happened even earlier (almost a flashback in a flashback). However, my confusion didn't last so I still think this is a "five-cup" chapter!
I think Bella is very realistic to be hesitant to come out about her relationship with Edward.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This is a great start! I look forward to seeing where you take this.
One small typo: You mention "alluding" the paparazi, I believe you mean 'eluding' (to elude is to avoid or escape from)
Author's Response:
Damn you're good ;) My beta on Twilighted didn't even catch that - going back and changing it right now. Thanks!
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
As I said before, I love to hate Renee!
The conversation between Bella and Jacob was very good and whatever you're setting up between these two, you're doing a great job building some type of relationship between them.
The ending conversation between Edward and Bella was also excellent. I liked his admission to "not being as good a person" as Bella and her gracious forgiveness ("it will take more than that to break us up"). Edward is really digging a deep hole for himself!
Your story is really well written with excellent pacing and consistent, interesting characterizations. I'm looking forward to future chapters.
One last typo/spelling comment: In several chapters (including this one) you use the word, "woah" It is actually spelled "Whoa" I don't know why I see this mistake so often, but I do.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for all of the constructive feedback! I swear opening up all those emails was like opening up another present leftover from Christmas morning. It's like you completely knew my thought process for writing each chapter. You picked up on all the little subtle innuendos between the main and supporting characters and the relationships built between them. It was so great to read your comments and think, "Yes! That's exactly what I intended!"
Thanks for making me aware of some of the errors I need to fix too. I'll go back and edit that stuff. I know you're super busy being a beta for other stories; but damn I wish you could be my beta. I can already tell you'd make me a better writer. At least, continue to give me such thoughtful critiques as the story progresses (and don't hold back!) I definitely respect your opinion.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Edward's plan looks like a temporary fix that will surely blow up in his face eventually. I hope he didn't leave fingerprints on that bag!
I'm glad she'll be on tour with him; this should make for some exciting chapters ahead.
Again, good use of flashbacks to flesh out details in the story.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
The emotions and remorse and guilt are really well-written in this chapter. Emmett's attempt at helping was well intentioned, but looks like poor advice to me! I can see it back firing already.
I like that Edward is beginning to worry that he may actually BE the asshole he only thought he was pretending to be.
Good cliffy at the end.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Great job with Edward's POV! You also did a great job introducing the other characters (Em, Rose, Jasper, Alice).
Another informative and well-done flashback. Edward's worries and insecurities are written in a way that makes him interesting but not annoying.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
You did a fantastic job building up to this moment in the story. It's a direction that the story had to take and even if readers hate to see it play out like this, it fits perfectly with the way you've written the characters.
The Edward you've written is spoiled and selfish and would definitely react to Bella missing his party with an adult version of a temper tantrum!
Great job!
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
This was such a pivotal chapter in some respects. I mean, Edward is really being selfish and poor Bella is wanting to please him so much. She still seems a bit insecure in the relationship.
Again, it takes the others, Rose and Alice in particular, to get things under control and back on track. I liked that in this chapter.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I love your Edward with all his imperfections and insecurities. I'm glad that you're not afraid to write him as someone that is not always lovable or even likable. But, just as important, he isn't too unlikable; I still care about the character.
I think Edward DID have a good point when he told Bella they were now a team and had to consider each other in their actions. He probably didn't tell her in the best way, but he was right.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
The interviews and article were all really well-done. I like your Jacob and although I never mind when he's written as the bad guy, I'm interested to see where he will fit into this story.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I imagine it must be difficult to write a business meeting and keep it interesting, but you did a great job. The pacing for the meeting was well-done.
I loved the girlfriend time with Bella, Alice, and Rose. Tanya's intrusion and the subsequent dialog was also great.