Reviews by roosmith
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Bella's life was irrevocably changed by the vampires who left her behind. Alone in the world now, she finds herself drawn to another. Fighting for her life has changed her and now, the new family she has found will change her as well...


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Themslovebug90's read stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 33 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125187 Read Count: 71762
[Report This] Published: 23 Nov 2010 Updated: 04 Jun 2012
Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

this story is NOT abandoned!  I read it religiously.  So keep the chapters coming!!

Labels by samekraemer Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 200]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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BANNER BY READERGOOF!  THANK YOU, LOVE!

“Everyone has labels attached to them that they acquire over a lifetime…mother, daughter, wife, lover, friend, co-worker.  I happen to have all of those labels attached to me, plus one in particular that I’m not happy about…widow.  I have a daughter who never met her father, and parents who try to help me out but drive me crazy, along with a father-in-law who I take care of in the absence of his son.  Along with the label of “widow” came another label that I’m not happy about and it’s one I assigned to myself…crazy.  The reason I’m crazy is because every night in my dreams, I talk to my dead husband as if he was still alive.  I was perfectly content to live with those labels until someone showed up in my life that caused me to add another label to my seemingly never ending list…screwed. –Bella Black

 

AH/OOC.  Canon couples, eventually.  This is a story of a woman trying to deal with a devastating loss, so there will be sadness, but there will be humor and there will be love.  There’s foul language, eventual lemons, and it’s told in Bella’s POV.  It’s rated NC-17 for a reason.  It’s a love story at its heart, but it’s not an easy one.

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Love and Faith
Series: To Read, My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125792 Read Count: 33645
[Report This] Published: 04 Jan 2012 Updated: 16 May 2012
Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 08 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Edward does not seem truly remorseful to ME.  He just shows up at her house with a costume for Jax and expects . . . what?  Halloween is a holiday - a special occassion and he used his daughter to weasel in on Bella and Jax.  They both deserve an opportunity to FEEL what they feel about Edward separate from his daughter.  By showing up without warning and without allowing Bella the chance to say NO, do not come over, he is once again showing that he does not put them anywhere near first.  HE is first!  His feelings, what is best for HIM comes first.  He wants to be back together so he just shows up and let's her know they will be back together.  What Bullshit. 

And what is he going to say to her?  There are no phones in Europe.  I never had a millisecond to call.  Europe does not have the internet . . . seriously, there were thousands of opportunitites to contact them - if not for Bella than for that little girl.  Instead, selfish Edward was too 'wrecked' to do anything but focus on HIS needs and HIS feelings.  Bella does not need that in her life! 

And what a bullshit line from Esme that if Bella was in the same circumstance, she might have acted the same way!  Seriously, I doubt it.  Bella manages to think of people other than herself. 

If Bella is going to get together with Edward again (which we all know will happen since it is an Edward/Bella story), it would be nice if he showed true remorse and had to REALLY demonstrate putting Bella and Jax before himself and his selfish needs/wants.  He has not done that ONCE.  Not once.  She should date Peter for a while - let Edward's parents help out with Chelsea and let Bella focus on healing her heart and Jax's.  Edward should have to see that Bella can live without him and her letting him into her life is a GIFT. 

He treats it like a given - something he deserves in spite of the fact that he has not earned it . . . he needs to go through some tough life lessons first before they get together!!

And do not even get me started on Alice!!  She KNEW Edward was coming over?  Or at the very least, she knew he was at the house before Bella arrived!!  She should have told Bella!  Bella is her friend and has a chance to be happy with someone who is not a self-centered prick.  Instead, she lets Bella and more importantly, Jax get blind-sided by Edward.  Children need stability.  As her mother, Bella deserved the chance to tell Edward that he was not (yet) welcome back into Jax's life . . . some friend Alice turned out to be!!

 

Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 01 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I do not review/comment on stories often . . . but this chapter really pissed me off.  Edward leaves town without a WORD.  Not even an email or a text message.  He does not contact her or her daughter for WEEKS - again, not even an email . . . because he was 'freaked out' by the fact that his daughter might be alive.  Sorry, but all that behavior says to me is that Rose's assesment for Edward was correct.  He was using Bella and Jax as a replacement for his own girlfriend/daughter and once he found out his daughter might be alive, he pushed them aside and forgot about them.

How are Bella and Jax supposed to feel any other way?  How can the rest of this story be written in a way that would justify Bella forgiving his totally unforgiveable behavior?  I do not care how freaked out he was, he had thousands of opportunities to drop them even the simplest of lines - like, I don't know, when he was at the airport, waiting for his flight, or when he was waiting for the DNA results to come in.  If he was too sheepish or embarassed to call - he could have emailed!  If he really loved Jax and Bella, he would have done something.

Now, SHE goes to him (I wouldn't have gone since it meant being another person who abandons Jax, but hey that is just me) and Edward all "I love you," "I need you" . . . if I were Bella, I would tell him to FUCK OFF!!

He really, really hurt Jax (not to mention Bella).  How are either of them supposed to ever feel like anything other than second class citizens around him?  How can he possibly make up for not contacting them for WEEKS?  If he really loved them even CLOSE to what he professes, he would have realized how damaging - emotionally and psychologically - not contacting them and vanishing from their lives would be for them.  So he either does not love them or he is the most selfish piece of shit on the planet . . . either way, I would stay as far away from him as possible if I were Bella

That is what Jacob/her subconscious SHOULD be telling her!!!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Banner by the talented: SoapyMayhem FanFiction

Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263192
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 20 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Break In

Just a few random thoughts . . .

1. I hope when Edward was out and about, shopping for them, he bought Bella a BED for her room!  I know he bought a fold out couch but I can see her refusing to sleep on it because Edward said it was for him.  Plus, she does need a little privacy, even if it is in a closet size room.

 

2.  Hope when he was at the grocery store, he picked her up some vitamins!  If she is truly malnorished, she would need them.  Also, since she is vitamin deficient, instead of getting her pizza and chinese and other take-out, Edward should have gotten a meal plan from Carlise with a course of action as to how to get her healthy.  The grocery store trip would have been the perfect time to broach the subject with Bella (instead of buying all that crap food).  We want our Bella healthy!

 

3.  Edward noticed something was missing from the kitchen but couldn't put his finger on it . . . what?  Did Bella mention it when they made the list of missing things?  It seemed important.

 

4.  When is Edward going to discover Bella's real age?  I thought that when he goes in to straighten up Sue's room, he would find the kids' records, including Bella's birth certificate - just an idea

 

5.  About Alice  . . . if you are looking for opinions, I do not think she is redeemable.  It would be one thing if she was just being a bitch to Bella - she could 'learn' from her misconceptions and grow as a person and become a better human being.  BUT she lied to Edward and USED him to get to Jasper!  She never even LIKED Edward and the nasty things she said about him behind his back . . . well, that is someone who is rotten inside.  Even after she got close to Edward, she couldn't see the value in him or see that using him was wrong.  That type of person does not change.  And why would someone like Jasper want to be married to that?  He is written as good, kind, and patient with no cares about money or social status.  Yet he is married to a shrew?  Other than sex, what do they have in common?  I say good riddance to Alice.



Author's Response:

Wow what else can Nikky or I say...once again the overwhelming response and the amount of story love we are receiving from so many people just makes us both feel so loved.  I know that this story may have a few minor flaws, but we have tried all along to keep them to a minimum.  So essentially thank you as always for reading and reviewing our story it makes us all giggly and excited to see all the reviews we are getting. 
We asked you who you thought it might be that broke into Bella and the twins apartment, and I must say we were a little surprised that a lot of you have it figured out.  With a wide range of evil or rude nasty characters, many of you said it was Uncle Harry...and you are right.  There will not be resolution for a bit when it comes to Uncle Harry, so if you want to figure out what he was looking for all I can suggest is watch for clues.  There are some very important and much asked for things coming soon. 
We have been asked many times for Edward to stop using Aro’s girls for his pleasure.  And where we understand why, we also knew it was very unrealistic for a man with so much anxiety, pressure, cynicism and tainted view to jump into a healthy relationship and give up the release and hidden pleasure he has surrounded himself in to get by for the past five plus years.  He has slowly been weaning himself from the place, and very soon he will open up and tell Bella why he went there.  We have been asked when you all get to know a lot more about Edward...well very soon actually, and by that I mean the next few chapters are chuck full of things from the past. 
We have been asked if Renee will come back...(A LOT ACTUALLY)...Renee was Bella’s biological mother, who died when Bella was only three years old.  At the age of three after her mother died, custody of Bella was given to Charlie Swan who was her biological father.  Charlie was married to Sue Swan, who is the mom she talks about leaving all the time.  Sue Swan is the person who left Bella to care for the twins.  Since this story is not alternate universe, neither, Charlie or Renee will be making any grand entrance, unless via a dream.  But don’t get too happy, because Sue Swan is still out there somewhere, and she has a few things to say.
We have been asked a lot if Alice, Rose, Siobhan, and Esme will make any redemption...Esme already has begun her turn around, and we think she is doing well.  Siobhan, well she wore out her welcome quite completely at the ball, at this point there is not a real plan to drag her back into the storyline.  Alice...well this is a hard one for me.  I actually normally always LOVE Alice, but this Alice is a tough nut to crack.  She is not going to bring in the roses and become a fan favorite anytime soon, but you will notice some changes.  As for Rose, well...I just can’t wait to hear your opinions of her...and I am sure you’ll have plenty next week.
Updating...we had planned all along to only update every other week on Thursdays.  However since posting the first chapter we have been on an every week posting schedule...and we have NO INTENTION of changing that at this time.  Nikky and I have a comfortable cushion, and the next chapter to post is with the beta now.  I got this weeks chapter back from the beta on Tuesday afternoon, so realistically we are posting around when they are ready.  Nikky is working on her part of chapter 26 right now, and I am working on 24 so we are not looking at any lapses in time.  We are both so excited you are choosing to come down this road with us. 
Where the next chapter has some major info and angst, we promise that chapter seventeen will make up for it.  Thanks again for always being so supportive and showing the story love HCV deserves.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 16 Teaser...subjected to changes during the BETA process...

Its Thanksgiving today, and I am on my way to pick up Bella and the kids.  Bella and I decided that, after dinner with my family, they would all stay the night at my house tonight.  I will run them home to get their things for the camping trip in the morning, and see them off to camp.  Bella will make sure that Jake has enough food, and then she is coming to spend the weekend with me.  I’m looking forward to this weekend, but I am worried about my growing feelings for her. I knock on the door before using my key to get in.  Bella gave me a spare key so I could let myself in. The new door has a double lock on it, and is reinforced with steel; no one is breaking this one down.

I walk in, seeing Leah in a black, knee-length dress with a cream ribbon around the waist, and black shoes.  Seth is wearing a pair of black pants and a cream colored button down shirt, with a black tie and shoes.

“Wow, look at you Leah! You’re very beautiful, and Seth, you look so handsome.” They both smile at me and look up as Bella walks in. She is in a cream colored dress, with a black ribbon around the waist. The dress goes to just above her knees; she looks fucking beautiful in it - so fucking beautiful.

“Wow, Bella! You look sensational...really beautiful.  Are we all ready to go?” I look her up and down, I am so glad she allowed me to buy us all new outfits for today. 

I got around her apprehension by telling her that I wanted to go to church with them this Sunday night.  We are attending the evening service after Seth and Leah return from camp.  Since I was buying something for myself, I wanted to get them something, as well.  As usual, getting Bella to let me buy Seth and Leah something, was easy, but her...not so much.  I was so fucking glad Seth and Leah helped me. I have on black pants and black shirt with a cream colored tie.  I push my fucking guilty feelings down and smile at the three of them.

“Yes, we’re all ready.” Bella picks up their bags, and I quickly take them from her.

“Let’s go,” I say as I usher us all out the door together.

Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 20 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Through His Eyes

Maria,

Bella was 13 when she started taking care of her siblings alone and that was over five years ago.  The authors mentioned in an AN once that Bella is supposed to be 19 right now.  So YOUNG.

Hope that helps!



Author's Response:

Thanks for helping give this insight, i answered as well.  We are so lucky and blessed to have such wonderful readers!  Thank you.  Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 04 May 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Weekend Revelations!

Grrr . . . I get it - Edward was surprised by her age but once again, I am disappointed in him.  Once again, instead of thinking of BELLA - how she was abandoned at the extremely, ridiculous age of 13, left to take care of two toddlers with no means to do so - his only thought is about himself.  Again.  And Bella is left thinking he is angry with her for her (very necessary) lie.  Sigh.  I seriously hope he makes it up to her!! 

I guess we got to see Bella's uncle - I assume James is the 'uncle.'  He is going to end up doing some bad sh*t.

Another thought - Rosalie is a total BITCH.  And Alice is right behind her.  Why - I repeat WHY are Emmett and Jasper with them?  This scenario always frustrates me.  Emmett and Jasper are written as these wonderful, sensative, caring men.  Somehow they end up married to total bitches who have no redeeming qualities.  How are we the readers supposed to buy these matches?  Are Rosalie and Alice the best f**ks ever?  What do these wonderful men have in common with these women?  What do they talk about with them?  And do they find the bitchiness cute or are they supposed to be ignorant of the bitchiness?  These women regualarly spit on Jasper and Emmett's best friend, they are shallow and heartless . . . seriously, how are we supposed to buy into these relationships?

I would love to see a POV in which we get to see Esme and Carlise hand Rosalie her ASS for the way she lost it at Thanksgiving!  I would also like to see Sue's POV so we can see what the hell she has been up to.



Author's Response:

Hello our faithful readers and reviewers!  We were expecting a bit of a lashing from some of you, and we have gotten a few but nothing like I expected.  Please let me remind you all now first and foremost that we are both happy ever after kind of gals.  Little refresher is needed about ages, and a few other things, since there were a few questions.  Edward is 28 and will soon be turning 29.  Bella just turned 11 when the twins were born, Sue left when Bella was 13, and Bella has been working for the university for over 5 years.  Bella just turned 19 in chapter 8.  Edward is 9 and 1/2 years older than Bella.  Before Sue left, she obtained a fake ID for Bella that said Bella was 18.  Therefore everyone surrounding the apartment building assumed she was of legal age.  Sue needed everyone to think Bella was 18, and she was sure to scare tactic that into Bella.  All these years, Bella has continued to maintain the age Sue said she had to say she was, in fear of not being able to stay with the twins.  Now for Bree Tanner and James...Bree Tanner was the female student from Edward’s Summer school course he taught.  In the summer for the past several years, Edward has been helping his good friend Marcus by teaching the kids who struggle to pass, or are so far behind they may not graduate high school.  Bree Tanner was the hoodie wearing shy and quiet girl from chapters 1 and 2.  Bree lives in Forks and attends high school at Forks High.  James Hunter is a Math teacher and the truancy officer for the Forks school district.  We don’t want to give too much away, but if you think back to the earlier chapters, when Edward had to take a break from his panic attacks, he was clear to tell Marcus his concerns about Bree being abused.  Bella is naive about many things, but she has grown a lot in the past few chapters.  We want to be clear that Bella feels as if she lied to Edward, she started trusting him a long time ago and when she started trusting him she feels she should have told him then.  Edward doesn’t feel betrayed by the lie, but he is more of in shock by the lie.  When he thought he was almost 5 years older than Bella he was concerned with the age difference, mainly because of how innocent she is.  Now that that almost five is almost ten, he is confused.  The next chapter will have you cheering Edward on, and hating his guts too.  We don’t want to give too much away, but I will say this, we are both excited at the prospect of the reviews after the next chapter posts.  Thanks as always for reading and reviewing this story, you all have no idea how much your words mean to us.  Thank you, Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Teaser for Chapter 18: Confessions  (As always subject to changes in the Beta process.)

Leaving Bella’s place, I get in my car and drive.  I don’t even slow down when the speedometer hits one-hundred-thirty miles per hour; I just keep driving.  I am racing to get away from the fear and the rage that is inside of me. I still feel so angry; how the fuck did I not see that she was only nineteen?!  I mean, she looks so young; I am so fucking pissed at myself.  She is still a baby, and the fact that she is only nineteen, doesn’t keep me from wanting her.  I want her, and I need to be with her.  I want her in every way, which is so fucked up. I shouldn’t want to be with a nineteen year old girl.

 

She was thirteen when Sue left her to look after Seth and Leah.  She was so fucking young, and she ended up in Aro’s club at thirteen!  Fuck, if he would have said yes to her…if she was in the pictures I had to choose from…I would have picked her…I know I would have… fuck! I could have really hurt her.  I am really fucking sick! Thank God he said no! Fuck, the dip shit pimp that said yes...shit! I’m sure she would…fuck I don’t even want to finish that thought.

 

“FUCK!” I scream out and I do an illegal U-turn at eighty miles per hour.  I decide I need to see Aro. If I find out that fucker knew her real age, I am going to add that motherfucker to my shit list.  I am going to hurt him so fucking much, and anyone who tries to stop me, too.

 

 

Reviewer: roosmith Signed
Date: 28 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: A Sketching Surprise

So he recognizes Sue . . . but she cannot still be around or else Bella would have run into her too . . . plus, 'Harry' has been using Edward's name for about nine years or so . . . are Sue and Tanya the same person?  Sue/Tanya gives 'Harry' Edward's name to use and then uses Edward herself.  If so, then Sue is dead and Bella does not need to worry about her anymore. 



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the outstanding and wonderful reviews!  We are so excited and happy to have you all on board with us for this journey and we sure hope that you all continue to love and praise the story the way that you do.  I know that you all learned some rather interesting pieces of information in the puzzle we call His Cimmerian View.  I bet a lot of you have more questions than you are asking.  But to answer a few of the questions that don’t take away from future story line here you go.  Yes it is possible that Tanya and Sue are the one in the same, but do remember that Tanya Denali was positively identified by dental records.  Some are asking if Sue could be Edward’s long lost mother... I guess that is a thought, but the age thing would be difficult to swallow.   Sue could very well be masquerading as Bella and trying to get her hands on the money that has been left to her both from her mother’s Estate and her grandfather’s.  Wow more of you seem to be worried about who might have their hand on Edward’s shoulder than much else, so I will relive you of that stress, it is in fact Carlisle.  Between this chapter and the BPOV on EHCV we have had many question how Harry/James could have gotten into Bella’s apartment after Aro did all the security measures, and I assure you that his ability to get into the apartment will be answered, just have faith in us, and you will see.  Lots of new things will come out in the next chapter as well and unfortunately you are all going to hate us, because it will be ending in a cliffhanger as well.  In the next chapter we will get to see Edward come face to face with Harry though... insert evil laugh... but at least I am showing you the teaser from that meeting!  I am excited about the ending of the story; however we will not update any faster than we currently are.  I am working on chapter 28 and Nikky is on chapter 29.  At this rate we are going to be pushing to keep up with the schedule of posting each week.  No I am not saying we will not post, but I am saying we will at this point be sticking to the every Thursday posting.   If you haven’t yet, go check out Enduring His Cimmerian View... the Bella POV chapter is posted.  We will not be adding any chapters to EHCV, until we have the main story cracked out of HCV.  Thank you for being some of the best readers and reviewers out there and for loving this story we are sharing with you all.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 26 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
All of it; I mean, this mother fucker broke Seth’s arm.  I close my eyes, and when I open them again, I see nothing but him. Without even thinking about what I’m doing; I hit the fucker as hard as I can.  I just keep hitting him until I feel someone pull me back. With the rage still blinding me, I knock whoever it is off of me and hit Harry again. 

Suddenly, I feel a lot more people dragging me back. I feel a sting on my face, and I look around to see Aro shaking his head.  Garrett has his arms wrapped around my waist, Felix is holding my left arm, and Emmett is on my right; I have no clue when he got here. Standing right in front of me is Jane. 

“Jane, I don’t think you needed to slap him,” Aro says as he walks over to us.  That fucking bitch slapped me! 

“He was out of it, and it brought him back didn’t it?  Besides that, I get to do the beating up around here,” she huffs, walking away from me to bend down and look at Harry.  I look down as well, noticing that I knocked the fucker out. I can’t help but grin about it.  “Wipe that look off your face! You broke some of his ribs and his nose; that’s my job, Assward!”  Jane jumps up and walks over to her bag. She brings out some jars and sets them in a line on the desk.

“Eh...what the hell is in those jars?” Emmett asks as he gives me a look to ask if I’m alright.  I nod and the three of them release me.