I found this story on Fanfiction net and followed you here.  I thank you for introducing me to a new Twilight Library! Also, I hope that you plan to continue to write this story. I'm a fan of historical fiction and you have a wonderful knack of pulling together the fine details of a scene to help the reader visualize the environment your story takes place in - making it feel all the more real.  I am off to read some of your other stories now that I've found you as your writing style is so pleasing.  Please continue to write this!  It is truly one of my more unique stories I've ever read - in any fandom!  

53 chapters in 3 days...Love this story.  Now I can get back to my life.  BUT - I sure hope you're updating this because I want to know what happens next!!!  It struck me yesterday that after reading your first story and now this one - I'm reading it because you are that good of a story teller - your plots are good, believable even and your characters are too.  Most impressive, I actually care about your orginial characters Aro and now Alex. Your childern characters are so amazing too. While I want to continue to read your awesome fanfiction - I also hope you're considering writing for a living and getting published because truly, it's been a very long time that a story has gripped me this hard and made me want to keep reading through 100+ chapters! Thank you for sharing - and please update soon! ;-)

Wondered how you were going to get these 2 together finally!  I kept wondering if the press would find out about Bella and was curious to see just how Windsor Castle was going to handle that whole situation.  You convincingly sidestepped that whole mine field.  Looking forward to the sequel now that 'normal' life is to become the norm.  Hope you bring back some of the royalty though - as that's a fun, complicated world for Bella to be dropped into.  You had just enough in this story to keep in fresh - I hope you don't loose that in the next one.  Looking forward to it!  

I enjoyed your story. The relationship you showed with Bella and Charlie were particularly well written-you have a knack for writing true to life tragic scenes. There were some other sections, such as when Bella almost drowns -that came across extremely strong.  Also, some the creative development you put into her character, really sold her as believable - fore instance, her wanting to hide and finding unique places to hide away.  The hiding place she found in the office, where she accidentially listened in on the 'Fathers' was brillant and the whole small hiding places was a well used plot device.  Also, your Edward was very sweet - as was their relationship.  I liked how he handled Bella in their first few days together as well as his reaction to seeing her in the end. 

The last chapter made me more curious as to what happened during the 5 years of training and the free lance rescue work.  Your Bella at the end was bad ass -it would be an evolution of the character that I would interested in seeing! 

I know you created Edward, Carlisle, Emmet and Jaspher to be good guys - and they were good. I just had a hard time believing that if they were raised by men like Caius and Aro in the environment you described - that they ended up such good, moral guys.  While you did provide a few reasons for Carlisle and Edward to be 'nice'- it was still a hard sell. For me the story would have been more believable, stronger - if they weren't so moral - fore instance, that Emmet and Jaspher hadn't yet slept with Rose and Alice was difficult to believe.  That they might have waited, developed a relationship with the girls first, would have been believable - simply because they had been together for a longer time. Your bad guys, particularly James and Caius came across extremely believable.  Bella's fear of them and how you littered this throughout the story really worked particularly by the end when they get a hold of her again.  

Again, enjoyable read!  Looking forward to your next story! 

Absolutely love where you've taken the story.  The kids have evolved into being such full, real characters.  Your Dame is amazing.  That you are delving into how he's similar to Edward, how he is dealing with his emotions, or his lack there of.  Hands down the times talks to Dame, particularly in this last chapter when he nails down how Dame is feeling and decides to bring him into the 'family'.  

That your Edward and Aro have mellowed so much, but still holds an edge is very believably done.  Also, I really like what you've done with the female relationships - Bella, Alex, Ellena and Amelia.  That the 2 'families' are getting along and keeping things quiet is believable - but I had to think about how Edward took out the last  guy in charge - sort of because that guy preached peace and getting along and Edward wanted more action and stronger decsions.  Makes me wonder if things are getting setup for tragedy of some sort.  I hope not!  Can't you have Edward simply retire?  Though who you'd have take over Sonny or Dame will have me coming back to read more!