Reviews by Camilla11
Macabre by LolaRose Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Twilight; when the two worlds of good and evil began to co-mingle in the glowing hues of the ever fading sun. The onyx tendrils of night slowly fill Edward's soul. Black of night, crimson blood, light of day; what will be his decision? Cannon darkward

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8539 Read Count: 640
[Report This] Published: 30 Jan 2010 Updated: 05 Mar 2010
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Metanoia

I must say that I don't like much your A/N, is ungenerous and I could discuss why it is wrong. But, anyway, I am going to favorite, in order to get your neew chapters. I suppose that thoe I have read ar a sort of prologue

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Vampire, Edward Masen, craves someone's body more than her blood.  Can he ever see Bella as more than a pleasure giver?  Can Bella ever see Edward as anything other than a monster?

This story is intended for mature readers only (18 and over).   Subject matter could be disturbing to some readers.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, Fics to Read, My all time favorites, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49527 Read Count: 88020
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Sep 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 07 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Hi, I folllowed you here, albeit I don't  much like this site. Authors don't answer reviews, and reviewers give you just a sentence, if any. The same stories I posted on Twilighted net got very intelligent and challenging reviews, so I am not posting anything more here. Ah, I also believe thta the big censorship scare on fanfiction net is abating. For sure, there you would get many more reviews, as your story is exciting.

Well now, coming to it. A really horrible Edward, a monster and a jerk. It would be interesting to know if something peculiar happened to him when he left the family. Even many conventional vampires are better than him ...

Of course all conventional vampires are rapists, even when sex is not involved, because they make free of the bodies of their victims, taking what  is not given willingly. (BTW, does Edward normally kills women who agree to have sex with him  - as it seems to be the case before Bella - or not?)

The slow changing of his atitude you are doing beautifully ... however he has to pay for what he has done, it can't be, lo I am changed, now I love you and she forgives him.

Well, I can only wait, can I?

 



Author's Response:

I may repost yet on ff.  I'm glad you like the story.  No worries ... it won't be the 'I've changed, you love me now & we live happily ever after story'.  It wouldn't make sense.

I hope to be posting again soon.  I've been having health issues lately.  Right now, I want to cry ... just had ANOTHER root canal and it HURTS!!!  GAH!!!

Summary:

For Vixen1836, happy birthday! A teensy tiny bit of a crack fic. AU, rated M for all the right reasons.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2747 Read Count: 275
[Report This] Published: 18 Feb 2010 Updated: 18 Feb 2010
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 25 May 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Your Edward is jerkier than usual ....

Summary:

The effects of a full moon leave Edward and Bella in a complicated physical relationship. After running from bloodlust, Bella is determined to get them back to normalcy. HAPPY HALLOWEEN!


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6449 Read Count: 144
[Report This] Published: 18 Feb 2010 Updated: 18 Feb 2010
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 25 May 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You do write weird stories. What has happened exactly that made possible what was not possible before, unless with pain and risk? Is the story finished? (The question applies also to the one with Rosalie, where you have not written that it is ended).

Unforeseen Events by jmolly Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 15]
Summary:

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Banner by mimozka

Only 25 days remained until Bella would take my name and belong to me forever. Somehow, she was changing me. Somehow, I didn’t hate myself so much anymore. I was beginning to be able to accept what I was. Dealing with some other individuals was not becoming easier, however. Maybe it was just angst. I was having a hard time controlling my irritation these days.

 

 

A moment of passion becomes a fright night for Edward and Bella. Alice and Jasper are  not helpful.

Post-Eclipse, canon-based,canon pairings, vamps. Comedy/Romance.  First story in my Unforeseen Events Series of 6 books.  Rated NC-17 for some language, mature themes & lemons in some chapters. Mature content will become more explicit as this series progresses.


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: THE UNFORESEEN EVENTS SERIES
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11444 Read Count: 9416
[Report This] Published: 11 Sep 2009 Updated: 11 Sep 2009
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Two Hour Torture

So maybe Alice was right ... annoying Pixie



Author's Response:

It must be awful to have a sister who thinks she knows everything.  Especially if she's right. LOL

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Bad Idea

Unleashing the monster.... He has reason to be alwayi nervous.

While reviewing the other story - which happens after this one . You should mark them clearly n. 1, 2. 3 etc - I missed telling you how much I appreciate that you never forget that Edward IS a vampire. So many authors forget it, so that  lovemaking scen seem to happen between two humans. In that story hot chapter (the one with the duct tape) both their actions during and in the aftermath are so convincing, and moving ...



Author's Response:

Sometime I'll go back and mark the story sequence.  Thanks for the suggestion:)

 

I'm very conscious that E is not human, and is challenged by his instincts all the time.  So I'm glad you like the way I write that.

 

xoox

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Charlie, No, Please! Don't Shoot Me!

This has me puzzled. Vampires should be impervious to bullets. In Canon and in all fanfiction it is so. Edward should be terrified by the fact that a bullet would not pierce his skin and that wouold give the secret away ...



Author's Response:

You are thoroughly right.  But Edward (at least my Edward) is always thinking of others, not himself.  So he is more afraid that the bullet will ricochet off of him and into someone else, which would also lead to discovery.  My Edward is just too selfless to have fear of discovery as his first thought.

Cookies by jmolly Rated: T starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

*Please Note:  I have re-posted this story as it did not post properly the first time.  Enjoy:)

Just then, the door opened, surprisingly fast. The most dangerous, most beautiful boy that the girls had ever seen was standing there. The little scouts' knobby knees started to shake. They stood on the stoop, speechless, with eyes round as dinner plates.

One shot story in the same canon as my 'Unforeseen Events' series.  Rated T, but the series will eventually be NC-17 as it progresses.

Pre-Twilight.

 

 

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Jasper/Alice
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: THE UNFORESEEN EVENTS SERIES
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1421 Read Count: 373
[Report This] Published: 05 Mar 2010 Updated: 05 Mar 2010
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

But ... the story is not here, only the notes. what happened?



Author's Response:

Thank you for alerting me.  For some reason, the story did not post properly.  I had this problem once before when the site was doing upgrades.  I will re-post it now.

Summary:

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Banner by mimozka

Bella and I were now being babysat at every moment. Alice had peeked, five days earlier, and had Seen... distressing things. I couldn't even kiss Bella these days without having Alice and company show up to remind us that we couldn't get carried away.

 

The fallout was threefold. One, we were dangerously horny. Two, we were nervous wrecks. Three, we were Bridezilla and Groomzilla We were no longer behaving in our accustomed fashion. We were nuts.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, THE UNFORESEEN EVENTS SERIES
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11110 Read Count: 5575
[Report This] Published: 18 Sep 2009 Updated: 18 Sep 2009
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Worse Than Charlie

Hi dear, there is too little new to read these days (Could be because so many authors are either students or teachers?) so I am rereading your stories, and I will review everything, just a sentence maybe, because here you have too few reviews . I too am posting here and I did get some reviews, but not many. Certainly it is not a website so well populated like FF or Twilighted ... And I have also to say that the no validation rule (here as well as on ff) does not guarantee quality. But on ff there is so much to chose  that it is easier to strike gold ... like in your case.



Author's Response:

Hello my friend:)

 

You're right, updates are so slow right now.  I think it's the nice weather available to so many of the readers.  Everybody's outside.  And yes, I know a lot of readers are busy with exams.

 

Yes, it's a small site so far, but I like it.  I like the freedom of the 'no validation'.  I've applied to Twilighted, but it takes weeks to get validated, and you can only have one chapter in line to be validated at a time.  So it may take me months to post there.

 

Thanks for the compliment, and thanks for reviewing.  Chat soon:)

 

 

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: A Family Meeting

So fun, rereading is a pleasure



Author's Response:

Glad it makes you happy.  I've been rereading quite a bit as prep for my next chapter.

 

xo

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Getting Out of Limbo

How very interesting. looking forth to the next chapter



Author's Response:

To be interesting is the goal:)  Thanks!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Human Sacrifice

Gasp!



Author's Response:

LOL

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Revelations

Avery risky but wonderful step forward



Author's Response:

Yes, Bella can be rather reckless at times.  But necessary, in order to establish understanding and trust.  They need to become interdependent before they marry.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Some Explaining to Do

Bliss



Author's Response:

Thanks:)

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Entertaining Alaskans

Oh my God, vampires are reckless ...



Author's Response:

That is more true than you know.  They often do things without thinking of far-reaching consequences.  You'll see this a lot later in my works.

Summary:

This is an outtake from Prelude, about the last whole night Bella and Edward spend together before the wedding.  It can be read on its own, but otherwise, it fits between chapters 22 and 23 of Prelude.  They've been testing Edward's limits, now how far will they go before they get married?

tln

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read, Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10354 Read Count: 1676
[Report This] Published: 09 Mar 2010 Updated: 11 Mar 2010
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I might have read this chapter somewhere  elsebut nevere reviewed it, I think. The dialogue between Edward and Bella starting with masturbation but going much over it is astounding, mature, frank and incredibly full of love. Congrats



Author's Response:

Thanks Camilla!  I wrote that little outtake on vacation while I was listening to a lot of Regina Spektor, and I think she's somehow infused into the story line.  At this point in the story I think E&B are at a new place of understanding, and it's fun and beautiful to write about.

Sin City by All you need is Moz Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 22]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward is a vampire who preys on the filth who pollute his city. She is his one weakness, her innocence calls to him like nothing else on this earth. Can he stay away from her to save her or will she be his downfall?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 19693 Read Count: 2748
[Report This] Published: 11 Apr 2010 Updated: 07 Jun 2010
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, I am reading it just because it is AU, otherwise I wouldn't. It is not very clear what happens after he has saved her and she has seen him killing the rapist vampire-style. Maybe you will go back to it, you should.  Edward leaving the Cullens is largely unexplained. His transformation is Canon, but evidently he is not the oldest, you say thate there was the rest of the family already. However the Spanish flu epidemic was after WWI, so the timing is confusing.

I'll comment more after reading more.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing, things are a little unclear but i hope reading a little more things will come to light. Edward is the oldest of the ones Carlilse changed, he stayed with his family at first which is why Edward mentions the others.

Anyway i hope you enjoy the rest of the story and things become less confusing.

Chrissie x

Summary:

 

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“We found her Chief Swan, she’s ALIVE! We found Isabella!" Alive? She had really survived the last tens years?

They said I was going home but where was home now?

OOC AU Dark themed you've been warned. No rape! But there is talk about slaves and abuse   Bella x Edward

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77399 Read Count: 32991
[Report This] Published: 25 Apr 2010 Updated: 25 Feb 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 06 May 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I am totally confused now. Bella refers to a bronze haired Master drinking from her, but it cannot be Edward. I there something wrong? What did I miss? Are there two Edwards, has he a split personality?

Secondly, I object a litttle to the fact that "normal" Edward aknowledges to be in love in such a hurried, flat way. If it is a life changing event like it is when vampires find their mates, there should have been more drama, more pathos, more description.

This said, I  will continue reading this story.

I hope you will clarify things for me. 



Author's Response:

HI! okay to clarify up to now, she thought the bronzed hair master was going to but he informed herr that the cullens and denaslis not drink from humans. so far in the story the only one who drank from her was her first master after he took her back from the hospital. as for the explanation to what happen when he first saw her its in chapter 7, he discusses it in a heart to heart with someone. so you get a lot of emotion explaination there. i dont want to say too much but i hope you like and please feel free to ask me anything if i can tell you i will. i know i've been keeping his feelings a little unknown but in chapter 7 its all about feeling. thanks michel

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I think that this kind of blackmail is offensive. I have favorited your story, which meant I was interested in reading it. But please yourself, if you don't want to continue, stop. I'll survive. For sure I'll not read anything else from you, because you don't respect readers.



Author's Response:

I am sorry you feel that way. I dont see where asking for the opinion of the readers is concidered blackmail or disrespecting. Where I come from it's called giving the readers what they want. All I asked was for your opinion if the story should continue. I am sorry you feel the need to stop reading my story because I asked for your opinion.

Prenuptual Posturing by jmolly Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 24]
Summary:

There are 3 days remaining until the wedding, and houseguests are driving Edward and Bella mad. Fourth book in the Unforeseen Events Series.  Rated NC-17 for mature themes and lemons.  All our favourite canon characters, taken in a slightly AU direction.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: THE UNFORESEEN EVENTS SERIES
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 62357 Read Count: 12033
[Report This] Published: 05 Oct 2019 Updated: 10 Nov 2009
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Calm Before the Storm

Awesome Bella, this was great.



Author's Response:

Isn't tantruming Bella fun?  Much better than passive Bella, in my opinion.

 

xoox

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 01 May 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: To the Rescue

You know, this chapter inspired me to write something similar in the story I am currently writing ....I never went there before. I mean, while writing ....



Author's Response:

I'll look forward to reading that.  You're next on my list of authors to read.  So you'll hear from me soon, on your reviews pages:)

 

xoox

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 01 May 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Warm Feet

I think I reviewed this chapter already on ff. But I do it again here, because it is marvelous. Edward asking God to condone masturbation because it is for a greater good. So right, so ... religious. Great. And then the sign, the deer from heaven. It makes me almost cry ...



Author's Response:

Thanks, L.

 

I actually love this chapter because Edward is so eloquent, and so loves his Bella.  He is a religious person, which is sad because he considers himself lost to God.  As you know, things progress through this series to the point when even Edward, who is quite stubborn in his belief, has to acknowledge that God still loves him, no matter what he is or what he has done.

xoox

Summary: Past Featured Story

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The Cullens thought Edward would never grow up, but marriage to a determined human girl, and a trip to Brazil, alter him forever.  On his honeymoon, Edward finds more than love, friendship, self-acceptance, and an ability to lead.  He embraces a future.  Summer 2011 Shimmer Awards Best Storyteller nominee.

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I Hunger Rainforest Banner, Kitchen Banner and Corkboard Banner by mimozka.  I Hunger Dolphin Banner by lilianas.

Kitchen

 

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No slash.  Increasingly AU settings and storyline.

This is the 6th book in my 'Unforeseen Events' series.  You can easily begin reading here, with the understanding that my Edward and Bella are not quite as shy as the originals.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: THE UNFORESEEN EVENTS SERIES
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 571771 Read Count: 30833
[Report This] Published: 03 Jan 2010 Updated: 24 May 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 09 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Sated Thirst

Hi, I just came here to see the posted banner. Nice. You know, if you want you can post photos (of places and of characters) in all chapters. It is fun. I am doing it for Eros and Psyche here (not that it gets me reviews), and will do it also for The Parachutist. I have an impressive collection now, war photos, photos of period objects, I even found my perfect Egon (the one that triggers Edward's repentance) complete of ring...

I reread this chapter, by the way. The pee scene is really nice, endearing and very understandable. No gross at all.



Author's Response:

Thanks:)  I'm so happy to have the banner.  Read counts are up already.

 

I like to draw, and I haven't had time or energy.  I'm hoping to actually add illustrations.  I'm so excited  to hear you have photos for the Parachutist.  I'd love to see the one of Egon and his ring, if you'd send it to me.  Send it to my home mail as usual, if you do, not to the one on this profile.

 

I actually find that scene very cute.  He's like a young boy sometimes.  lol

 

xo

Summary:

afitr

 

Bella wakes up the day after her fateful birthday party only to find Alice perched on her bed. Ever wonder if things might have turned out differently for Bella and Edward if Alice and Rosalie had interfered? "Seduce him, Bella!" Guided by Bella’s inner strength and determination, Edward must face both his human past and his vampiric future.  Where will his decisions take their relationship? New Moon with a twist.

 

Thanks to coleen561 for the Awesome banner and editing advice!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 165429 Read Count: 41852
[Report This] Published: 27 Dec 2010 Updated: 18 Jun 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: EPOV In which I find my voice

well, it was a long time now tht I did not find something worth reading on this site (Unless it had been already published somewhere else). So, congratulations.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Broken Hearts and Broken Thongs

This was a very good chapter, the psycology was so right. I hope you'll update soon, so that the mood you have created is not lost.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review! I admit, I do like to play the role of psychologist from time to time! (And honestly...if anyone could use a good round of therapy it would be Edward Anthony Masen Cullen. Kids got issues...but he came by them honestly!).

I try to update weekly, generally every Friday. ENJOY!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

PostSecret Used: My downstairs neighbor and I have screaming matches to see who’s the loudest during sex, I usually win.

Summary: Edward is a player and rising pornstar who abuses his peen on a daily basis, demanding performance and the utmost behavior from it. Well, now it’s time for the tale to be told.

 

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Humor
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 74658 Read Count: 41532
[Report This] Published: 17 Jan 2011 Updated: 26 Nov 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh my .. .was she faking it, using avibrator, what?

Summary:

PostSecret Prompt Used: Everyone who knew me before 9/11 thinks I'm dead. 3rd Place Winner PostSecret Prompt Contest! SENSITIVE MATERIAL INCLUDED! PLEASE BE WARNED!


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4371 Read Count: 1564
[Report This] Published: 17 Jan 2011 Updated: 17 Jan 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Some stories have to be sad. But, the only thing that does not work is Carlisle working with an insurance company. What would be the point? He works to help humanity as a doctor. He could do other things, but not that. Why don't you change something, like he was there visiting as a consultant or something?



Author's Response:

I didn't want Carlisle being a doctor. I wanted him working for the same company as Edward, being his boss, so that Edward could form a bond with him and trust him before the attacks. It wouldn't have been so good, in my opinion, for him to have been a total stranger. Thanks for your review.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Banner by JavaMasta

Alice has had a vision that the new girl at Forks High will change the Cullens' lives.  But Rosalie's sharp eyes catch evidence of abuse on Bella Swan, and she vows to find out just what's going on with the quiet girl.  Eventually she and Edward hatch a plan to keep Bella safe, which might endanger the close-knit ties of the Cullen family.  Possessive Edward and Big Sister Rosalie. Banner by the amazing JavaMasta!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: I Whitlock's read , Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 319577 Read Count: 124856
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2011 Updated: 02 Apr 2014
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

I had lost this story, updates didn't cam, but now I have found it again on TWCS and I am so glad! It is a great story, with such a care in the psycological development of the characters. Please, update soon.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I was out of commission for almost a year due to RL problems, but I'm back now.  So glad you picked my story up again, and thanks so much for your comments!

Worthy of You by mimozka Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 72]
Summary:


After Bella's 18th birthday accident the entire Cullen family leaves Forks leaving behind a devastated Bella.

Four months later, when Bella seems to start healing from her heartbreak she is faced with one Edward Cullen, only he is not the same Edward she has known before.

As he reveals the reasons of his lies and actions Bella has to make a decision that will change her life forever...


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New Moon Alternate Universe - canon couples (perhaps a little OOC later on). Rated 'T' but if everything goes according to plan the rating will change in the future *hint hint*

I know the NM AU is a very popular theme, but give it a try it's not your usual NM AU story! And yes, I did just shamelessly promote myself... An author's got to do what an author's got to do.


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 31557 Read Count: 4532
[Report This] Published: 05 Mar 2011 Updated: 07 May 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 27 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Of unexpected visits and heart to hearts

Hey, great  idea and great start! I just added you to my faves.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 27 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Of belated reunions and blissful unions

About lemons: It is a moot point now, I see you have changed the rating. I dislike stories where it is just a lemon after another and no plot. However, if the story goes there, I also dislike fading to black. Because the way two persons make love gives another insight in their story and personalities. So I learned to write them (And in another language, since I am Italian!). In 1900 I even tried a Victorian Lemon (Poeople did not make love in the same way along the centuries. For instance a Victorian would be horrified by BJs (only whores were supposed to do that at the time), while Mr. Clinton maintained he was not even "having sex" with Monica ...

 



Author's Response:

Hi, I saw you reviewed several chapters but I'm going to reply to all of them at once. Hope you don't mind, lol. First things first: welcome to the story and thank you for reading it in the first place. I am glad you like my idea. I honestly don't know where it came from. Just popped into my mind one day. As for the lemons, no, this is not going to be a story full of smut with no storyline. It's going to have  a plot with a few juicy parts here and there. The lemon I wrote for this story is my first ever and I am not yet comfortable enough with lemons. So you don't need to worry about that part. :) As for the hiatus... I am sorry in advance. It's just that I have so many ideas for this story that my options are incredibly tangled and I need some time to sort them out and decide where I'm going to go with this. Also, I am currently near the finish line of my other multichapter story and most of the inspiration I get is involved with it. And last but most definitely not least, I am in my senior year of high-school and I have finals in 2 weeks - bloody difficult finals, then I have my country's version of an SAT test in about 2 months so I'm pretty busy studying. 

By the way, I love your country :) I always wanted to go there... I hope to visit one day.

Oh and thanks for adding me to your faves, it means a lot.

 

Hope I answered all your questions if I left anything out, let me know.

 

have a great day/evening,

 

Anna

 

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 27 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 06 - Of Hopeless Cooks and High School Drama

Now don't tell me you are going on hyatus when I just discovered the story ....

Summary: Past Featured Story

hc

A few broken rules, a few too many times left alone with everyone's favorite Hogwarts Champion, a few choices that change everything. What could have happened behind the scenes during Harry's 4th year at Hogwarts.

AU storyline that is meant to overlay the existing canon storyline of Goblet of Fire and not replace it. Starts between the first and second Triwizard tasks in the prefect's bathroom, and ends during the third task in the graveyard, with an epilogue set 14 years later. Rumors about Dumbledore's sexual proclivity are active around Hogwarts, but it isn't safe to be openly homosexual.  Harry and Cedric (assisted by Neville) invent the Trevor Project to protect fellow Hogwart students, naming it after Neville's toad familiar. Lots of dialogue and character development, with mild to medium sexual content. Told exclusively in third person limited omniscient point of view, i.e. Harry's point of view. Personalities are generally canonical, except for some artistic license with Cedric and his backstory.

General Warnings:  Angst, hurt/comfort, slash and yaoi. Under-age sex, under-age drinking. Both peer and partner violence.  And Cedric dies protecting Harry, who lives to be happy again. Just so you know, up front.  

Please do not read if homosexuality offends you. I am not gay, nor male, nor even British, but I dearly love both of these characters. So this story is about more than just sex. It's about figuring out who you are and what you are willing to do for those you love. And I firmly believe those themes are universal, no matter who you are.

Many Thanks: To my beta Talipatra, to my bannermaker Ima Twi Tard, and to TWCS for the following honor. SQUEE(x3)! 

 

The Wordsmith Awards


Categories: Harry Potter
Characters: Harry Potter/Other Male Character
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 37120 Read Count: 1689
[Report This] Published: 07 Mar 2011 Updated: 26 Mar 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 5: That He May Wear My Silence

No poor Harry is in love, but possibly he is not a stightforward gay boy. He feels guilty, oppressed by having a secret relationship, and would possibly be happier with a traditional boy and girl one. In a sense he is not only jealus, he is envious, I think. And Cedric...why did he mess up? out of  guilt, thinking he owed to Choo?

Mm, what a disaster.



Author's Response:

I think Cedric is easily seduced because he cares about people.  And I have always thought Cho Chang was a little manipulative. She only joins the DA with a friend, to be near Harry who was close to Cedric, and then when that friend betrays the group she whines to Hermione about the punishment. She is my least favorite character in the books. Doesn't excuse what Cedric does, but perhaps it explains it: Cho is manipulative and he is too nice sometimes (and besides, he is still a teenaged boy being offered sex, hard to refuse, that).

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 14 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 7: See How Deep the Bullet Lies

Tender and, so masculine in their own way. But I am not completely sure of what got at Cedric in this last part.



Author's Response:

he had to protect another, younger student and I think he identified with him very strongly... thx for the review!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 12 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Again We Wander

Ha, I loved what Harry says to Draco. I wish he was that insulting in the books also. So, what happens now? Does the relationship resumes, an a more mature way or not?



Author's Response:

ummm, yes... next chapter just went up and in the immortal words of Marvin Gaye "Let's Get it On"

my own problem with that passage is that I wished it sounded more British... being an American, I know how to insult in American... oh, well nobody's perfect

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Mortal, Guilty, Beautiful

So I got here. This is the first Harry Potter fanfiction I am reading, ever. Now, it makes sense. In British Publich Schools there is a lot of boy/boy action I am told, and Hogwart is such kind of school, after all, if a little bit peculiar.

Now, I hate Edward/Jasper stories. Mainly beacuse I want them to be with Bella and Alice respectively. Canon pairings all the way is what I want. Edward and Carlisle ... maybe, in the early years, but mainly as something imagined rather than truly happening (Like in my Heartbroken).

But Harry and Cedric .. it is a totally different kettle of fish. (Mmm...fishes?). Also because the romance that Ms Rowlings put together for Harry in the last books is totally unbelievable. In any case Harry is the less sexually charged character one could imagine. That is not the point. I loved HP immensely, but certainly there is nothing there to give you wet dreams.

(While Twilight, chaste as it is, can trigger a LOT of them, as we authors all know).

Well, anyway, I'll read on, albeit it will be difficult to prepare myself for Cedric demise. Even in the book (and worse in the film) it was difficult.

 

 

 

 



Author's Response:

honestly, I read all the books and then saw the movie of HP4 and said "whoa, that was very slashy" and went back and reread HP4 and decided that there were at least three places in the text that supported a gay revisionising of the story... and then J.K. Rowling said that Dumbledore was gay, and Dan Radcliffe donated money to the Trevor Project and ... well, the result is this story (after watching lots of YouTube videos)

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 2: My Dear Soul

It is so interesting the way you put yourself in the two boys' heads. Sex or not ,they are still young boys, with the kind of pranks and akwardness that belongs to boys.



Author's Response:

thx, hon... and they are 14/15 and 17/18 in these stories, so still very much figuring things out

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 3: David and Jonathan

Yeah, to learn how to give a good BJ takes some time. I love your teenagers enormously: their flares of temper, their jealousy, everything. BTW, do you think that Cedric was using poor Cho just like a cover, as he says, or that he can please (and be pleased by) a girl too? Of course bi-sexuality is more exciting than plain homo...



Author's Response:

I remember being a teenager very well. Wouldn't be one again for all the tea in China.

I wanted to keep the story as canonical as possible, which means I had to deal with the Cho-Harry-Cedric triangle.  I think Cedric is a very sensual and sexual creature who is at his core gay, but not beyond the charms of women... knows how to work that system.  But I think Cho is definitely a beard for Cedric. I don't think he cares about her much beyond nice-guy "uhoh I have made a girl fall in love with me and now I need to do the right thing"... and then again, she is kind of pushy for sex in this story. She is the one who asks for sex in the first place and Cedric just kind of goes along with it.

Not that any of this excuses Cedric entirely. All in all, he is a good guy but his actions are despicable in regards to Cho and Harry, especially as the story progresses. And these two are meant to be kind of Brokeback.  They both want each other, but they are hiding their affection/lust/love, so they both have women on the side, to keep up the appearance of being straight.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Distant Whistle

The room you  have imagined is wonderful. I suppose it's yours, not Rowlings'.



Author's Response:

The Room of Requirement (also known as the Come-and-Go Room by the house elves) is JK's creation and factors heavily into the storyline of HP5-HP7.  It's how the DeathEaters make it into Hogwarts, for example, in HP6 with the help of Draco and the two Vanishing Cabinets.

The RoR factors into a lot of HP fanfic because it is romance/porno deux et machina of epic proportions. I have read about nearly every possible sex scenario happening there in HP-FF... including one very clever story about Harry and Dumbledore and a stolen Time-Turner.

However, everyone experiences the room differently. And so, for two teenage boys in love who need some privacy, the room reads their minds and give them what they need. Which includes books to show them they aren't alone, supplies for later on. And a sofa and a bed and a shower. Probably an X-Box in there somewhere too.

 

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Epilogue: Fourteen Years Later

I do indeeed. I jumped the previous chapter, I have not the courage to read it.



Author's Response:

I cry, everytime... but there are some tender scenes at the beginning, just don't read the last two scenes

Summary: Past Featured Story

ltl

Bella suffers after the sudden death of her mother, which changes her life completely. Charlie hope she can adjust to life in Forks. It's just going to take some time... and maybe some supernatural friends.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 72219 Read Count: 15403
[Report This] Published: 21 Apr 2011 Updated: 19 May 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 25 May 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I just discovered your story. There are not many that I like on this website, so it was a pleasant surprise. A rereading of Twilight but with enough differences to make it interesting. I go on reading, now.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 17 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I was reading a chapter after another but I had to stop to leave a review. The story is lovely, I like the differences you manage to insert in a plto that is basically in canon

Summary: Past Featured Story

reborn

Let me preface this by saying, I have cherished my writing fan fiction. I've loved every chapter, every story, every review, and every fan. It's been a thrilling and fulfilling seventeen months.

All things have to end though. I'll be graduating college in the spring, and by then this final project will be complete. I won't be writing fan fiction anymore, but will be moving on to continue my freelance work that I'm doing, and also writing my own novels. Before I start that though, I want to leave the fan fiction world with a bang.

This final project will be a series of four stories. "Reborn in Twilight," "Broken During The New Moon," "Fighting an Eclipse," and "We Are Breaking Dawn." That's right, I'm rewriting the saga.

Some may consider it a ballsy move, some may see it as stupid. But since my writing fan fiction has been me molding the characters to be my own, what other proper way is there to leave fan fiction, other than rewriting it.

I mean no disrespect by doing so. I enjoyed the saga very much. Still, I think I can do a decent job at making it something different. Not necessarily better, just my own.

There will still be similarities to the saga of course. No character names or couple pairings will change. Only the characters personalities may be different. Something else that I'll do, as I do in all my stories, is make multiple character POV's. I think it helps character development, and makes it a more rounded and complete story.

There will be obvious differences also. The vampires will not be the same type. No sparkling or dazzling here. Parts will be darker, and parts will be funnier. No differences are meant to upset anyone, or offend, it's just the way I write and tell the story.

I hope this will be enjoyed, and I hope I receive the much needed feedback in reviews.

Let's get started.

fs


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Rewrite of the Saga
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 46952 Read Count: 21127
[Report This] Published: 25 Jul 2011 Updated: 01 Nov 2011
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15- Time

Hi, I have started your story today and I got here. Here in Italy it is time for bed, as it is quite late. You are managing to keep this Twilight deviation very interesting and insightful and i like it. Now the big issues are coming up, how could their relationship endure, if her change is not in the perspective. I am very curious.



Author's Response:

Someone in Italy is reading my story. That's never going to get old. I'm glad you like it so far! I just finished the rewrite of new moon and I'm moving onto eclipse. I hope the saga rewrite keeps your interest enough to read them all! Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20- Triple C

I am so glad not to have a repeat of the nomads episode. But hell, this is scarier. Who are the associates?

Reading on ....

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Authors Note

Ha, you anticipated Edward stupid decision ... This Bella is stronger, though.

Reading the new one now.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- The Visions

Ha ha, you can imagine my surprise when I found that somebody in India was reading my stories...

I'll be back when I'll have read more....

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Don't you think Bella was too fast in accepting Edward back in her life? After all he made the decision to leave her. He has to now face the consequences of that decision.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Love and Faith
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 73782 Read Count: 19840
[Report This] Published: 17 Oct 2011 Updated: 08 Sep 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 20 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 The talk

Good idea of starting a sequel. I'll see you there.



Author's Response:

Hi the sequel is now up. I think you've already read the first chapter of it. The second one is already uploaded. Hope you like it:) Thanks for the review:). 

Summary:

new moon

 

Did you like Reborn In Twilight? Check this out. Book two of my final project/rewrite of the saga. Most of the same characters, with a new spin. Come with me on one final adventure. Read, Review and Enjoy. I don't own SM characters.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Rewrite of the Saga
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 51447 Read Count: 10035
[Report This] Published: 06 Nov 2011 Updated: 28 Mar 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- Easier Tomorrows

Well, I am finishing this, then I'll see. I'll get the alert for the third part, anyway.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14- Dead or Alive

Oh God, What a jerk Jacob is.

I really don't like all this part with the Pack and the wolf girls. I understand they are charachters dear to your heart but they don't speak to me.



Author's Response:

you'll probably not like the rest of the stories from here on in as they will be a big part of it. they come from three other storys of mine, so this tying them all together.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4- Downside to Immortality

This chapter was very good. The details of vampire life (unlife) and what they can and cannot do are so interesting to develop.

On the contrary I am not so taken by Bella and her interactions with the people in La Push. Not a subject that interests me.

Victim Zero by Kiva Johns-Adkins Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 2]
Summary:

 

MA/NC-17 For Extreme Violence

Contribution for Fandon4Texas

Summary: In 1927, Edward leaves the home he shares with Carlisle and Esme in Wisconsin to discover who he really is as a vampire. His first stop? Columbus, Ohio to Dublin, Ohio to exact justice for Esme for the violence her former husband, Charles Evenson heaped on her in her human life.

Warnings: There is extreme violence and gore in this story. It deals with domestic abuse. This is extremely violent and angsty but is my version of what Stephenie Meyer says Edward did when he left Carlisle and Esme.

 

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Made by the fantastic Christag Banners for Fandom4Texas


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Carlisle/Esme, Edward/None
Genre: Drama, Historical, Horror, One-Shot, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3878 Read Count: 168
[Report This] Published: 06 Jan 2012 Updated: 06 Jan 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 06 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Victim Zero

Since seeing BD 1 and the bit of Edward as a vigilante I have been fantasizing about his rebel year, so I read this with great interest, despite the gore.

On something I disagree, though. I can't believe that Carlisle and Esme let him go to be a full human blood drinking vampire with no qualms, happily almost. For them - and for Carlisle particualrly - it must have been excruciating, he must have felt a sense of failure and a responsibility for the lives Edward would take, even if they were the lives of criminals.



Author's Response:

I wrote it before BD came out so I was very anxious when I knew part of Edward's back story would be told. I wondered if they saw what I saw. Thank you for reading, despite the warnings. My beta made sure I put out the warnings like neon lights.

You make a very good point about Carlisle and Esme, especially Carlisle. I don't think it was happily but I do think you are right and it was probably more excruciating than I portrayed. Perhaps if I had written from Carlisle's POV and really spent time in his head it would have been more clear to me. When I get in Edward's head I tend to have blinders. 

Thank you for the review.

Hear Me by smmiskimen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1926]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Twilight AU. After a horrific car accident leaves Bella in a catatonic state, she's transferred to Forks Hospital under the care of Carlisle. What happens when Edward is faced with the lifeless girl in the bed and an undeniable pull begins? Can he bring her back from the hold her mind has on her, or will she be forever lost to the abyss? E&B, AU, Canon pairings.

 

 

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Banner by FallingSnow


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiSup, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 131 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 65741 Read Count: 411877
[Report This] Published: 14 May 2012 Updated: 03 Nov 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 18 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

thanks

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 18 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Uh, I am not and will never be on facebook. Too invasive, so if you will be posting only there I won't find you



Author's Response:

I can also do an update with the info once I get the book done and published if you'd like. 

I remain, Yours by momatu Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 469]
Summary: Past Featured Story

i remain

After unexpectedly being given an antique desk and finding a letter written by Edward to his cousin over nine decades earlier in a hidden compartment, Bella, on a whim, decides to respond and starts them on a journey neither could have ever imagined. 

Perhaps there are some things we aren't meant to understand, just accept....

This story will eventually contain character death.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Humor, Romance, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, Can't wait for an update, J's Read and Loved Stories
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 419567 Read Count: 77530
[Report This] Published: 26 May 2012 Updated: 09 Mar 2013
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 02 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Go, Bella, Go! Great, but if it was so easy ...whay didn't everybody think of it?. I loved this development.

Oh please, since you are deviating from Canon, don't let poor Bree die.



Author's Response:

Happy dances for Bella!  I really loved having Bella be the one to end Victoria, so I'm really glad everyone seems to have liked it to.  That was really one of the first scenes I pictured in my head.

Oh, Bree.  Just wait.

Thanks for reviewing so faithfully!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Smiling.



Author's Response:

Smiling right back at you!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 10 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Ha, what a chapter. Food for thought, really. I am so glad that I am following you here, because ff net has a bug and, despite receiving the alerts, the new chapters remain invisible. ff net support claims that the fail will be solved in a few hours, but that remains to be seen.Otherwise you might need to repost there, in case

BTW, in the completely different context of the fic I am drafting, I had to come out with an explanation for the Volturi not going immediately against the Quileutes, when they discover the shapeshifters existence, and I came out with a similar explanation. Doubts about the vampires' talents working on them (however, in Canon they work, which is a contradiction of sort - but Aro doesn't know it) but also the fact that you cannot swipe out an entire tribe and hope that that doesn't raise questions. So an expedition against the shapeshifters needs to be prepared carefully, in any case.



Author's Response:

I don't know what the problem was on FFn with the chapter not showing up right away.  I think it was about 20 minutes before I could pull it up. 

I wondered about that with the wolves when I read canon.  If Alice's visions were blind against the wolves, why would anyone assume all the Volturi's powers would work against them?  Edward and Jasper's powers worked, so most powers would work against them, put it's very possible some wouldn't.  That was also something I questioned--so many people go missing from the same area at the same time--not very condusive to not drawing attention to yourself. 

Thanks so much for reading and for all your reviews!  I'll get the epilogue up as soon as possible!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 18 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I am not on facebook, but I'll tell somebody who is.

So the fact that Edward loved a girl from the future was part of his family memories ... Extraordinary. Will they come into play later in the plot? I can't wait to met vampire Edward.

As you see I am reviewing here, but I much prefer to go on reading on ff net (And Twilighted is not an option, since the validation process slows updates). But I did not understand your note. Apart from the formatting, are you going to post a different text there? Why should you be removed from there? I mean, I do hope that E&B will make love in this story eventually, and I hope you will not fade to black, but fics removed are normally AHs and go on having sex scenes all the time, with or without a plot. There is no point really to post a different text on ff net, since you are posting here too, but consider it a back up (I do the same).

TWCS is a cold site, the readers review very little, so it is not my favorite. At least on twilighted you are sure that the fics you find have quality standards.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for spreading the word about David.  I'll post an update after the surgery.  They're over 600 likes!

The 21st century Masen's will be back sporadically, and vampire Edward will make his first apperance soon!

I don't particularly like FFn, I prefer Twilighted or this site.  FFn keeps messing up my formating, and I have to use periods to hold blank lines.  Also, I much prefer being able to see my responses to reviews like this so I can make sure I didn't miss anyone.  This chapter is identical to the one on FFn.  I only put that note up because I think the formating really makes a difference to show how Bella's mind was running wild, random bits of different things she'd read running through her mind mixed with what Edward had written.  The only things I had entended to edit on FFn are the eventual sex scenes.  I don't think they're over the line, but I'm so afraid of just one person complaining and having it pulled without warning.  Pulling the story wouldn't be such a terrible thing since it's posted other places, it all my reviews I don't want to lose.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 19 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I don't want to read an edited story, so I should stick to TWCS, then (Albeit I maintain that you should not edit your story to please the morality brigades haunting ff net and reportin authors). I too much prefer Twilighted net, but I am only human, therefore I want to read more advanced chapters. For this reason I post on Twilighted net first (which, as reviews go is the most appreciative of the things I write) and I post somewhere else only when I have finished there.



Author's Response:

This chapter wasn't edited at all.  It was only the issue with the formating where Bella's thoughts are running wild.  On ffn, they showed all aligned with the margin instead of strewn all over like they are here and on Twiligted.  I really think having them scattered all over shows the state her mind was in rather than all straight and neat.  As for the sex scenes to come, I don't think they're too much, but I've heard so many stories about one person out of thousands of readers complaining and having the story pulled I'm afraid.  I believe the ratings are there for a reason, if you don't want to read a story with sex, then stick to lower ratings, but I'm afraid of just one person complaining.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 21 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Yes I though he might have forgotten her. But ... to the point of not recognizing her when seeing how she looked in the mind of others? This part is heartbreaking, I hope it will not be too prolonged ...



Author's Response:

I'm afraid Edward lost more than just his human life, he lost everything connected to it.  His family, his friends, everyone and everything, including Bella.  That's why I went into detail on his daily life and the people he loved, because I wanted the reader to see and feel everything Edward lost.  All he knows of his human life is what he's seen in Carlisle's mind, and a good portion of that is bad.  The only two memories he has of his father are the 4th of July picnic and his death.  And remember at the 4th of July picnic?  His father's and friend's reactions to Carlisle?  He understands now that their reaction was because Carlisle was a vampire, just like he now is, too.  He knows how his mother suffered after his father's death, and he has seen himself wasting away with first grief over his father and worry for his mother and then through exhaustion with the epidemic.  He understands now Carilisle's desire to keep both him and his mother safe from the epidemic, urging them to stay away from the hospital.  And he has seen Carlisle's memories of that last night in the hospital with little Charlie on his lap and knows that was likely when he was infected himself.  It could also have been when he fell asleep with Charlie and Kitty while they were staying at his house, but he has no knowledge that that ever happened because Carlisle didn't witness it.  But one way or the other, he caught the flu from Charlie.  He knows he loved the little boy enough to risk such close and prolonged contact with him rather than leave him alone, but he has not one other memory of him because that was the only time Carlisle ever saw him.  He has the memory of Carlisle's that Edward told him he taught the little boy to throw a ball at a picnic, but aside from knowing it happened, he has no actual memory of it.  Edward is always described as sullen and broody, but can you blame him?

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 28 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I want to get out from this part ASAP. This comedy of misunferstandings is killing me-



Author's Response:

Soon, I promise.  Soon.  The next two chapters are two of my favorites.  They're set in Forks, if that gives you anything to look forward to.  One or two characters start connecting dots.  Two and two are added together, but whether they come up with four or not you'll just have to wait and see!  Chapter 22 ends in a bit of a cliffie. 

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

And then .. .and then ...

(PS, I did my voting)



Author's Response:

Just wait and see! 

Thanks for the vote!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 04 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

It is difficult to comment. Until they see each other properly I'll hold my breath.



Author's Response:

Breathe.  Breathing is very important.  I wouldn't want you to pass out on me!  You might miss the next chapter!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I loved it, I am tearing my hair, I want something to happen so Edward won't disappear one her ...



Author's Response:

It'll all work out, I promise.  Bella needs this time to mourn the Edward she fell in love with.  After everything he's been through, he's not the same man he was then.  They're not ready to meet yet, but they will be soon.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 18 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

WOW, the letter is a huge step forward. But, what would be the sense of it if he doesn't reveal himself?



Author's Response:

Revealing himself would be holding her back, in his opinion.  He wants the "white picket fence with 2.5 children" life for her, and he can't give her that.  But she is his mate, and just like in canon, he can't stay away.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 25 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

How could it not go well? I am really upset.(And Alice should have seen in in advance, in case) Therefore I am not convinced.

Of course I am thrilled if indeed Charlie knows the truth about Tanya & family



Author's Response:

It didn't go "badly," as in Edward pounced on Bella, but it didn't go "well," in that Bella pounced on Edward.  Check out the teaser Monday, you'll see what I mean. 

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 22 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Yes I liked it. As you know I was upset with the plot for a while. But now I am fine.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked it!  Hopefully, there is a lot more to like coming up!

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

I still battle with the misunderstandings between E&B. As I told you before, I find it difficult to accept them, they seem a little contrived. (did Bella hear sentences like "I did not die?" and what did she do with them?) It is, however, your story, not mine and it still keeps me hooked.

Of course to be able to conceive what happened to Edward would not be easy for a normal person, but the fact that she was able to communicate with a man of the past through an anciente desk means that she is more prepared than most to accept the "impossible".

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Ha, he knows everything about viruses,right. But if I get wet by the rain and cannot dry immediately, the they after I have a fever and I stay sick for a few days too.



Author's Response:

I can't say I've ever gotten sick from the weather.  But I'm lucky, when I do get sick, it's usually pretty minor stuff.  I don't think I've ever truly had the flu.  A bad cold is about as bad as it gets for me.  My seasonal allergies completely suck, though.  Some days there is just no pill that helps.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 06 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

All the time I was cursing "damn you, tell her, tell her!"

(I have also a question, because one tends t oforget details: Edward has read her letters to him, right?)



Author's Response:

I think you will like the next chapter especially.

Yes, Edward has red her letters to him.  That was how he knew about the poem she sent him after his father died.  But he's never been in her room, other than when he helped carry their desk in, so he's never seen his letters to her.

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

(Clapping hands) The slow progression of Bella's reasoning is so believable that one feels it like one were living it. I really loved this chapter and Bella's reactions.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked it!  This chapter was really long, but I didn't think it shoud be broken up.  I really wanted her to go from just learning, to dealing with, and accepting all in one chapter.  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Lovely Victorian Edward. But not to the point of utter frustration like to original, hopefully.

 

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Hi, glad that all went welll with the storm.

I have to confess that I am puzzled with this chapter. It is not clear if Edward - due to his enhanced senses - is the first one to perceive the fire. If he is, while he stays there sounding Hamletic, people dies. I mean why he did not something to alert, call the firemen, whatever. He seems totally unconcerned by that - not very in character and not very endearing.



Author's Response:

Edward is the first to detect the fire, but the alarm is sounded only one minute later.  As for those who died, they died because they didn't leave when they could have.  I've been in a hotel when a fire alarm went off, and no one was in any hurry to get out.  The assumption was that it was a prank, which fortunately it was.  It's the same at work when the alarm goes off.  People don't leave right away, they wait to finish what they were doing, or save what they'd been typing, then they gather their things....  People are still leaving the building several minutes after the alarm first sounded.  As I've said to other reviewers, I really think it's human nature not to take the threat of danger seriously until it's too late.  Not to make light of a tragedy, but just look at Sandy.  How many manditory evauation orders were there, and how many people chose not to leave?  Even go back to Titanic, since I've referenced it so much.  "Yeah, we've hit an iceberg in the middle of the Atlantic, but this ship can't possibly sink."

As for saving anyone after they'd been trapped, he couldn't have.  What was he to do?  Burst into their room and run at his natural speed with them slung over his shoulder?  Jumped with them from windows like he did with Bella?  Guided them down smoke-filled hallways to the emergency exits?  And don't forget, as a vampire he is rather flammable himself.  That's why I chose a fire to be what forced his hand.  I wanted something that was as much a threat to him as it was to Bella.

I think Edward acted very in character.  Even in canon, if I remember correctly, Bella asked Edward why he saved her from being killed by Tyler's van, and he admitted he didn't know.  He was the only one of them to act to save a classmate--someone they actually knew--from certain death, and he only did it because it was Bella.  Had it been Angela, he'd have let her die.  And he caught hell doing it.  Remember the fallout he faced from his family?  (It was explained more in Midnight Sun than in Twilight.)  Jasper was ready to go after Bella that very night and kill her to protect the family, and he had supporters in the family.  Those are the ends they would go to if necessary to protect their secret, and that was just one girl whose story, had she talked, wouldn't have been believed.  It would have been written off as confusion as a result of her hitting her head.  But if Edward had saved any of the other victims, their stories would have been much more likely to be believed because they'd have matched to some degree, and their description of him would have been recognized by the emergency responders and witnesses who would have had to have seen at least something had he tried to save more people.  Then, his description might have gotten around and gotten back to whoever was working the reception desk when he'd checked in.  If it had been a woman, she might have remembered his name--they had checked in just the night before.  And as you'll see in the next chapter, the press will be all over the story.  His description and possibly even his name could have made it to the papers with his superhuman heroics.  It would have been catastrophic. 

And even Edward couldn't have saved *all* of those who were trapped.  How do you possibly chose who to save and who to let die? 

It was an unbelievably horrific situation for Edward, and on top of that he learns that Bella has known the truth for a while, and he'd had no idea.  Is it any wonder he took off?  But don't worry, I don't keep him away too long, something is about to happen that will....  Oops, got a bit ahead of myself!  You'll just have to wait and see what happens next, but like I said, no New Mooning!  I promise!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 10 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Well, the stupid virgin vampire is in danger. I hope they manage to alert him. But I am also dreading something else. From the dialogue with Alice I gathered that Edward here is Canon enough to have had his "rebel years". And this Bella is not going to take it in her stride as Canon Bella. Am I right?



Author's Response:

I don't know how much real danger Edward is in, but Bella can't see it that way, especially after already being helpless to help him and lost him once before.  Victoria could have no idea he's alone. Even if she did find him, he'd have a three mile head start when he heard their thoughts, and he's very fast.  In this scenario, Laurent never looked back after meeting Irina, so Victoria has had no heads up on the Cullens special abilities. Of course, since Bella and Edward haven't talked yet, she doesn't know about his mindreading either.

Yes, Edward had his rebel years.  Just one more piece of baggage weighing him down and one more reason why Bella learning the truth is so devastating to him.  Bella doesn't know about that yet, of course.  It will be part of their big discussion, which is coming up very soon.

As always, thanks for reading and thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 18 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Ye,s this chapter was very, very liberating. And not only the second part, but particularly, the first: no more lies, no more omissions, only the truth.

(I have some difficulty to accept that Edward's body is not as beautiful as his face. Not the body of a wrestler, of course, but the venom should have repaired most of the damages caused by his illness. At least it is so both in Canon and in most fanfictions)



Author's Response:

I'm so very sorry for not responding to your review sooner.  I'm behind on responding to reviews on all the sites I'm posting on.  I have no real excuse other than life is just really busy right now--of course, there's also the 15 pounds of pure cute sitting next to me in his little bouncer seat and trying to stick his entire fist in his mouth.

My reasoning for the way I wrote Edward in this chapter is that, in canon, Edward was described as being "lanky, less bulky" than his brothers.  The thoughts on Edward's body are his POV, his opinion of himself; I think that's important to remember.  The vampires are always described as being so devastatingly beautiful, that we never consider they could be insecure.   Bella sees his forearm when she's sitting next to him in class and thinks to herself that he isn't "nearly as slight as he'd looked next to his burly brother."  I think it'd be natural for his last few months as a human--at least as I wrote them--to have affected him physically, and he'd have lost a good bit of weight and muscle tone, especially that last month before and during his illness, which took six days.  Alice was described as "thin in the extreme," so I don't think the change would've improved his physique all that much.  The venom heals and perfects what's already there, but I don't think it would've added to what was already there, or all male vampires would be as bulky as Emmett and all females as voluptuous as Rosalie.

There's still an awful lot for them to talk about, that Bella doesn't know.  It's not that Edward is keeping it from her, more that it's one thing at a time.  There will be more heart-to-heart talks.

Thanks for reviewing, and again, I'm sorry for taking so long to respond.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

(Haha you did fade to black, didn't you? Well, I can take it, but I am always curious about vamp-human intimacy, so difficult, so dangerous but wonderful all the same).

Now about this chapter I have to say that the dialogue with the wolves was very good and believable. It is interesting how the fact that Carlie also is mated with a vamp makes the dynamics with the Quileutes rather different. And, btw, have Charlie and Tanya thought about his change, eventually?



Author's Response:

I knew people would be disappointed that this chapter didn’t pick up where the last one left off, but writing love scenes is really, really weird.  I kind of eased my way into it, so they will go further the farther into the story we get. 

Yes, Charlie and Tanya would have thought about it, I'm sure.  I don't work it into the fic at all, though.  At least other than in the very begining when Tanya is thinking about the barriers preventing her from being able to change him and very, very briefly when Charlie thinks about what his relationship with Tanya might cost him just before he admits to her and Billy that he knows what she is.  I don't go at all into their relationship.  I wanted to keep the focus really on Bella and Edward. 

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

I voted



Author's Response:

Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 20 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

One of the best lessons I got from Twilight (not a literary masterpiece, but a story with strong ethical connotations) is that love and friendship are possible between different species - let alone races - provided that prejudices are shed. This is what eventually happens between the Cullens and the Quileutes. I am wondering if you are going there. For the moment the Quileutes' prejudices are firmly in place.



Author's Response:

I think the mutual feelings between the pack and the Cullens goes way beyond what we would, or at least I would, think of as prejudice.  They are natural, mortal enemies whose instinct is to kill the other.  Yes, the pack's hatred of the Cullens is firmly in place, but as Edward explained to Bella in the last chapter, the pack's feelings toward vampires are based on their tribe nearly being wiped out by vampires.  That's an awfully big hurdle to overcome, even if the pack knows the Cullens are different from those, especially when neither side has any particular reason to set their hatred of the other aside.  What they need is a commonality to give them that reason.  In canon, first Bella, then to a much larger extent Reneesme filled that role.  But while in my fic Bella and Jake were friends, and yes he wanted more, they were never as close as in canon, and there will be no Reneesme.  So, who can fill that role here....

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

I wonder what route you will choose. In Canon, albeit having consented to Bella's change, Edward is reluctant to do it - one can wonder if he will actually do it - until fate forces his hand. However, I like the idea of a conscious decision.



Author's Response:

Oh, that would be letting too much out of the bag, so I'm afraid you'll just have to wait and see.  But I will say I tried to give consideration to both of their feelings on the matter.  I've always wondered how Edward would feel about changing Bella if he didn't have Alice's visions of her as a vampire.  Basically, he already knows it's going to happen.  It's kind of like taking the high road when you already know where it leads, do you know what I mean?  It's easier.  You can be all self-sacrificing and noble and "I want more than this for you." because you know you're going to get it anyway.  If he had no idea what would happen, how would that change his feelings, if at all?  Or, say like in canon, if it wasn't rendered necessary, would he have in time come around to the idea on his own?  Maybe that's part of the core of Edward's hangup on the issue, he knows it's going to happen.  They never really get to make their own decision on the matter, because judging by the fact that Alice has been having visions for a while, he knows it's the inevitable outcome of decisions they've already made.  The power to decide the issue for themselves was lost.  Just an idea.

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 12 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

I think the way you made Bella reflect on the meaning of marriage looking at the rings was very subtle and effective.But I have another point to raise: I found the way she schemed to convince Edward  to stay out of the battle makes Bella a little umpleasant. In the original it just happens - with no scheming (If I remember correctly). It is a pivotal moment in Eclipse, because I think that there Bella recognizes true love. Edward is prepared to desert his family to assuage Bella's fears, Jacob would never do that.



Author's Response:

You're very right, it doesn't make her look good at all, does it?  But we're not always at our best, especially when we're scared.  I think it's important to recognize that Bella herself realizes it was a terrible thing to do.  But she's honest enough to admit that even though she's ashamed of what she did, she'd do it again if she needed to.  I can't stress enough how much of an impact believing she'd lost Edward to the flu had on her.  She's got him back, and there is absolutely nothing she wouldn't do to protect him.

It'll all work out, I promise.  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 21 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

I so want to see how you move the unmovable Edward toward changing Bella (Of course it can be the result of an accident - but I so much prefer when it is a conscious decision)

Sooo ... you are thinking to start a story with human Edward and vampire Bella? a big challenge: not everybody who tried it managed it well.



Author's Response:

He's begining to at least think about it, I think.  She'd be happy--they'd both be happy, but also pratical points, her shield as protection for their family, and the, ah, advantages to their personal relationship.

Actually, vampire Bella/human Edward is my preference, but you don't come across it often.  Or at least I don't.  I don't really know why, just something about it flipped around appeals to me.  That was actually how I had originally intended for IrY to be, but the characters thought otherwise, and as I'm sure you know, it's useless to argue with the characters.  It's your story, but it's their lives, after all.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 30 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

I like the sense of impending doom of the chapter. Am I wrong? Something is going to happen. In any case Forks is getting so full of people in the secret that it should wave a red flag to Volterra. I hope not.



Author's Response:

Oooh, Impending Doom.  That sounds so dramatic!  The Volturi, hmmmm....

You'll just have to wait and see. 

The teaser for chapter 48 should be up on Twificcentral (which appears to just be ficcentral now) this evening.  Thanks for reviewing! 

Summary:

Who said the dark side wasn't fun? To Bella it's all she thinks about, but being caught in the act, can she convince The Major to return and join her?

Banner moved to chapter 1 to meet google policy standards :-(


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Horror, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3746 Read Count: 1341
[Report This] Published: 31 May 2012 Updated: 31 May 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 01 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Can I have real summary? Otherwise I won't even try.



Author's Response:

Sorry didnt realise the summary wasnt there, its there now.

Summary:

I am a vampire. He is a human. I am designed to kill. He is my ultimate prey. But can I make him mine?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Fantasy, Romance, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Can't wait for an update, Stories Read by CNYBella, Bella 84's To Be Read List, Stories I've read, Tufano79 Stories
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 163034 Read Count: 48916
[Report This] Published: 31 May 2012 Updated: 31 Jan 2015
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi dear, I read you note on ff net. Dreadful what is happening there. I'll read your (supernatural) fics here then, because AOO refused to let me in. I remember reading Angels and monsters and I can't say if it was complete or not on ff net. But I'll set it aside to re-read.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 04 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

So, here I am. I remember I commented on this chapter on ff net (and got no answer). I found the sentence I staged her body like it was suicide a real mistake. A drained body and no blood anywhere will not look like suicide to even the dumbest policemen. Please, change this part. On TWCS is easy to make changes.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 23 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

That a human and a vampire can't have sex I suppose is something Bella thinks, but not true. The Denali sisters seem to be very good at it, LOL

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

A very interesting and thrilling chapter, Pity I forgot most of what happened before. a recap would have helped. I'll have to reread.

Summary: Past Featured Story

(E & B Version) A free-spirited archaeologist and a shy, absent-minded genius find a 500 year old vampire who thinks she's a goddess. They trying to sneak back to the US, teach her about the modern world, and trying very, very hard not to fall in love with the Dark Goddess. OOC/AU

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 33 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 149771 Read Count: 33296
[Report This] Published: 07 Jun 2012 Updated: 25 Nov 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Hi here. Are you going to post here before a new chapter is on ff net or will go back to the usual after the boycott?

It is a long  time I wanted to ask something. Bella drinks from Edward (no venom evidently-how does on become a  vamp here?9. but, she is also drinking quite a lot, appartently and frequently. Shouldn't he be affected by the blood loss?



Author's Response:

Hello,

Yes, I'll post the new chapter over at FFN after all of the fuss dies down. The people causing thie turmoil admitted that they watch the updates for new targets, so I'm just lying low for a while until things go back to normal.

In my version of vampires, one can only become a vampire by drinking the blood of a vampire. T have a Q & A set up on my blog that gives more details.

As for Edward's blood loss, he should be perfectly fine. Bella doesn't need very much at her age and as long as Edward remained hydrated and well-fed, his body should replace the loss very quickly. An iron deficiency is possible, so he should probably take supplments to be on the safe side. During WWII, some troops donated weekly. In the modern days, many states have laws about how often a person can donate. (And Bella takes less than the Red Cross does!)

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 27 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Well, one thing is for sure, your vampires are much less dangerous than the ones in the Canon mythology ...

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 17 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

OMG the political situation makes the Italian one seem simpler in comparison!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

I got this chapter yesterday and already sent a comment. Now I got another notice for the same chapter. Strange!



Author's Response:

Perhaps one of them was from Fanfiction and the other one was from this site. I update in both places.

Summary:

Bella, a girl with sardonic wit and a freshly printed Masters degree, finds work with the Cullen Group, being, what she deems, an overpaid secretary who finds inventors and designers worthy of some funding.

Work should be dull, and would be had she not made one of her trademark, clearly well thought out decisions: she started sleeping with her employeer's son, who is one of her bosses himself, days after meeting him.

Classy Bella, really classy.

She deems him an odd and spoiled rich kid [he is on an insane liquid diet, he has two penthouse apartments for the reason of "just because," as far as she can tell, his sweat tastes like magic (okay she concedes that here, she might be the weird one,)and he comes in to work in suits worth more than her car that are ruined from his runs in Central Park.]

Weirder than all of this, he seems to want a actual relationship with her.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 10160 Read Count: 3968
[Report This] Published: 09 Jun 2012 Updated: 04 Jul 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 09 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Bondage and Boardrooms

I would be interested in reading, but only if the story is supernatural. You marked it AU.If it was All Human you should have marked it AH. Please let me know



Author's Response:

It is not All Human, hence the not marking. I will be adding some chapters today and tomorrow that make it clear all is not completely right (or human,) with the Cullen family. Though they are slightly different from Twi-vamps, they are some amalgam of many of my favorite vampire lore[including those in the work of She Who Shall Not Be Fanfictioned (hint: New Orleans.)] I just wanted to tell you in case you are expecting any diamond faceted skin. They could get away with that in Forks but in New York City- not so much.

Thanks for the interest!
-Allie

p.s. I am also writing an Edward point of view, which begins before they meet and goes into the details of how they live as vampires/the rules of vampires in my world, as it might be awhile before Bella finds out in my story. That is still being worked on and I probably won't be posting any EPOV until next week

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 29 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Tell Me What You Want Me To Say

Excuse me, I am confused. Is Edward huiman or not? The summary had me puzzled, but in general I don't read All Human.



Author's Response:

He is a vampire, sorry it isn't clear. I didn't want for it to be obvious until it start becoming clear to her/he tells her. I am going to post his POV story in about a week. It starts before this story starts, basically right before she comes to work for the Cullens. You might be interested in that story too if you like non-human twific.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 11 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Whatever You Like

The only thing that confuses me is  the title. It seems not to have anything to do with the story.



Author's Response:

The title is just kind of how Bella viewed them at the start of things, a pun on their sex in the office, but you are right as it progresses it doesn't fit as well. I am never very set on my titles because I often just come up with something so I can get the story out there, otherwise I would contemplate it all day.

If you have a suggestion I would love it. I might not change the main name since it already has followers but I would love a more fitting subtitle.

 

Thanks for reading,

Allie

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 08 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Update

When you start posting, or reposting, I'll read, because of course I forgot most of the plot.

Summary: Past Featured Story

What does Jason Taylor think when he meets 23 year old Christian Grey? After four years of working for him, what does Taylor think when he meets little Miss Steele?

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Categories: Fifty Shades Trilogy
Characters: Anastasia Steele/Christian Grey
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: 50 Shades - Read
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 166683 Read Count: 57740
[Report This] Published: 21 Jun 2012 Updated: 30 Dec 2012
Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Hi there. Ecen if Taylor is not my favorite character (I want Doct. Flynn !!) this chapter wasvery lively.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 05 May 2013 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

I liked this chapter, because it gives an insight on how things were really going on at that point of the story. 



Author's Response:

Thanks, Camilla. Writing from Taylor's pov gives me a chance to cover all the stuff Christian keeps from Ana. Well, it gives me more freedom, too. jx

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

This is interesting too. In fact when reading the book I did realize at a certain point that both Taylor and Gail were privy to Christian sexual habits, something that seemed at odds with their personalities. But you are making it believable



Author's Response:

Yes, they'd have to more than tolerate him to put up with all his shenanigans for four years!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2012 Title: Fifty Shades of Taylor

Attention you have this chapter posted twice and there is a chapter missing!



Author's Response:

Thanks 11, I'll go and see how I've stuffed up. Again!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 31 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25, Masquerade

Very good chapter, very entertaining. I wonder if you are going to tell us in another story about Christian and Leila's relationship and how they separated. You made me curious.



Author's Response:

Hi Camilla,

Yes, I'll include that in the 'Fifty After Harvard' at some point. Although I'm also considering a one-shot that covers aspects of their relationship.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 11 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - Saturday Night, Sunday Morning

What confuses me is that on the blog you just posted chapter 6, not 26



Author's Response:

Ah, sorry about that. Some people asked me to separate how 'Fifty Shades Darker' from 'Fifty Shades of Grey'. Didn't mean to be confusing... I'll go back to normal next time.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed
Date: 22 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30, Near Dark

Huh, one of the most dramating moments in the story



Author's Response:

Yeah, and so much of it is untold... gave me quite a bit of freedom. jx