Reviews by Jolinar
The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight

 

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1625180
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 45

thanks for updating!!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 1: A Mother's Love

First I was a little peeved when you anounced that you wouldn't update on your blog anymore and that we had to sign up here to continue reading.

I usually hate signing up to different sites all the time (there have been lots of ffnet people switching to different sites), but I have to admit that I'm actually happy that you switched to this site.

It's much better and easier to read (background color, etc. makes the reading more enjoyable).

Anyway: I'm glad that you keep continuing this story and I can't wait to see the "showdown" between Edward and Carlisle.



Author's Response:

I know it's a pain in the ass to bounce around sites to read. I'm sorry about this but this site is so much easier to post and read it just felt like the right move.  I promise not to move the story again.  We're nearing the end.  I hope the next hapter will be ready by this weekend.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 46

And the drama starts....well rather continues ;-)

 

Thanks so much for updating! I really enjoyed this relaxing chapter.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

I really loved Bella's last sentence "Let me go"...I always believed that this would be the only right way to give her peace and freedom. I'm not saying that she will never be with Edward again, but she has to be set free, go to college, controll her own life before continuing her relationship if she even wants to continue it in the future. Edwards vision of their life together is still too restricting: it's not what Bella needs.

Thanks for updating!!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Thanks to Jadiona for the awesome banner!

 

Charolette died 60 years ago and left Peter.  Edward left Bella in the forest nearly two hundred years ago.  Peter has been alone and Bella has been through hell; how will they find common ground?  What will happen when these two cross paths?

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 78843 Read Count: 18426
[Report This] Published: 17 Apr 2010 Updated: 15 Jul 2012
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: INTERLUDE

Thanks for updating!

Summary:

 

Edroar the Angry Lion frightens all the girls and boys at Cullen Publishing with his loud roar. Will his new massage therapist Bella Swan run away like all the rest, or can she tame this savage beast?  AH/AU   OOC


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 134649 Read Count: 25372
[Report This] Published: 09 Jun 2010 Updated: 06 May 2016
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 21 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Amazing?

"What was his definition of a deep sleep…death?" :-) LOL

Thanks for updating!

Parachute by KitsuShel Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1971]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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After finding a child abandoned on the streets of Seattle, Bella Swan raises him as her own. What happens to their lives when his biological family is finally found?

 

 

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 145849 Read Count: 211499
[Report This] Published: 21 Jun 2010 Updated: 04 Feb 2011
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 25 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 32

Thank you for the great update! Merry Christmas.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)

I'm sorry that I didn't get around to finishing up the EPOV, but between the holidays and an annoying family, it got pushed to the side. Never fear, it'll still go up!

♥ Shel ♥

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Jack rolled his eyes and shook his head. "I know you, Mom. There's something that you're not telling me."

She bit her lip slightly. "Victoria was there as well. James shot her and she died."

The boy's jaw dropped in shock. "She- She's dead? Like, she can never hurt me again or take me away?"

Bella blinked in surprise. She wasn't sure of what his reaction would be, but that certainly wasn't it.

"Yes, baby. She can't ever hurt you again," she responded quietly.

Jack bit his bottom lip and nodded resolutely. "I mean, I guess it sucks that she's dead, but does it make me a bad person being kinda happy about it?"

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 25

Great chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog now. (kitsushel.blogspot.com) One word for you: Charlie!

I know a lot of you get excited for updates and I want you to know that I get just as excited to post it for you, seriously! Your reviews make me smile, laugh and occasionally shed a tear. You guys mean so much to me and I thank you from the bottom of my heart for giving this story a chance in the first place!

Also of note, the Fandom for Preemies total has jumped to over $3,ooo raised for the March of Dimes! Freaking phenomenal! To those of who you won't be able to contribute, but still want to read the Jack Outtake, I'll be posting it on FFnet after Christmas sometime.

♥ Shel ♥

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Tanya sighed. "What happened after we left last night?" 

Emmett's lips quirked, trying to fight a smile. "Mom sucker punched Victoria when she started running her mouth again."

"Esme!" Bella gasped and glanced at Esme, who looked proud of herself. 

"What? She deserved it. I only regret not doing it sooner."

Bella shook her head and tried to hide her giddy smile at the thought of Victoria spread out on the ballroom floor.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28

loved it!!! thanks for updating!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are already up on the Blog now. It's pretty, umm, hot? (kitsushel.blogspot.com)  

Just a couple of things before I leave you with your teaser! Parachute is up for two Avant Garde Awards, Best Bella and Best Kid. Voting ends on the 4th so please vote if you can! We have some tough competition! 

Also, we've been nom'med for three Original Character Awards! Mostst Original Plot as well as Jack for Best Offspring and Best Male! It's going to be super tough against A Rough Start's Anthony, who is one of my fave kiddos! But, alas, I do love Jack more! Voting for those open up on 12/1! 

♥ Shel ♥

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"Jack?" Bella called anxiously. Her head whipped from side to side frantically. "Jack!" 

Edward's hand squeezed her tightly as he pulled her towards the customer service department. The crowd was heavy with people and her heart pounded in her chest painfully.  She pulled her hand away and started to push through the crowd, heading back towards where she last saw her son.

"Bella, wait!" Edward called, but she was too far gone in panic to listen. 

She stopped for a minute and tried to think clearly. What would Jack most want to see in this store? 

Immediately thinking of the answer, Bella tore off towards the escalators.    

 

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30

LOL; poor Esme just blurting out with the moving plan.

Thanks for updating!

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com) It ties in with this one nicely.

Voting for the Original Character Awards ends today! We're up for Most Original Plot as well as Jack for Best Offspring and Best Male! It's going to be super tough!

Make sure you leave your pitchforks at the door before reading the teaser! This chapter's drama skyrockets, but I think it's necessary to complete our journey and it's the way that I've always pictured it heading.

♥ Shel ♥

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"Call Tanya and give her this info. She'll know what to do."

"Yes, ma'am. I'll keep my ear to the ground. If I find anything else out, I'll let you know."

Bella pocketed her iPhone and her hands curled into fists. The anger that she had experienced minutes earlier paled in comparison to the rage that coursed through her. The proof that James was a part of Jack's abandonment was black and white in front of her face. She fully planned on marching back into that office and tearing a new asshole into anyone who dared to get in her way. When the elevator reached the final floor, she was alone.

The doors opened and before she could step out, she found herself once again face to face with James Brooks. His eye widened in shock and her fist flew without thought. He swiftly caught her hand and pushed her back into the elevator with his body weight. "

What the hell are you doing?" he hissed angrily.

"You- you-" she stuttered. "You piece of shit! I'm not leaving here until I talk to Edward. I know who you are and what you did to Jack. You're a miserable excuse for a human being!" she shouted in her fury.

Quicker than she could blink, one of his forearms was pressed against her throat menacingly while the other hand gripped her by the hair.

"You couldn't just leave, could you?" he ground out. "No, you had to be Miss High-And-Mighty. From the first moment I laid eyes on you, I knew you'd be a challenge."

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 33

Great chapter!

Thanks fir updating and Happy New Year!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)

In other news, Bella and Jack both won the Avant Garde Awards that they were up for! I simply can not thank everyone enough! You guys are the single biggest reason that this story has been as successful as it has! I adore each and every one of you! And not just for voting or reviewing, but for continuing on this journey with me and loving Jack as much as I do!

I'm shooting to have the EPOV up soon, but he's been difficult. I'm also in the process of writing a Victoria POV for the Fandom Against Domestic Violence compilation. It should be interesting to see how well I can channel bat-shit crazy!

♥ Shel ♥

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"Edward, can I ask you something?" she asked in a quiet voice.

He shifted slightly and brushed a piece of hair from her face. "Anything, baby."

She swallowed nervously, worried about what his response would be to her question. "The documents that James showed me, were they real?"

He took a deep breath and nodded hesitantly. Betrayal pierced her heart and she felt tears spring to her eyes.

"Ssh, don't cry," he whispered, brushing thumbed across her cheeks. "It's not like it sounds."

"Then how is it? Why were you petitioning for custody if you're moving across the country? Or was that a lie?" she replied with a small sob, her body beginning to shake.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Epilogue

Ah the end! How sad, but I'm so grateful that you shared this story with us. I abolutely loved it and it always brigthened my day.

Thank you so much! And of course I'm looking foward to your new story!



Author's Response:

Once again, I want to say thank you so much for all of the love and adoration that you guys have given to me and Parachute! People are going to get tired of hearing me say how much in awe I am of my readers and their giant hearts, but it's so very true! This story wouldn't have been nowhere near as good as it was nor had the kind of response that it had without my loyal and fuckawesome Verucas! (Heh, haven't heard that in awhile, have we?) I am prostrate at your feet. (Not to be confused with prostate, lol) I owe you all so very much!

The blogs have undergone some work over the past two weeks. KitsuShel.blogspot.com will now be used as a hub for everything that I write, with links to actual story blogs. Parachute's will remain up, just under a different name. Parachuteff.blogspot.com My next fic, Rabbit Heart's blog is up as well. There are a few pictures and teasers up there as well. =) RabbitHeartff.blogspot.com

Rabbit Heart will start posting this Friday, February 18th and will follow the same update/posting schedule as Parachute. I hope that you guys decide to continue on that journey with me as well. =)

♥ Shel ♥

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Teaser from Rabbit Heart Chapter 1:

The streets were eerily empty as the girl stealthily slipped out of the Beverly Hills house, although one could quite easily exchange the term mansion in its stead. Her shoulders were hunched as she made sure her hood was firmly covering her blond hair, her back laden with only an over-stuffed backpack and a guitar case. She needed to escape quickly, unseen, and today was the best time to make that happen. It was just after eleven pm, on Christmas Eve and there was practically no movement on Santa Monica Boulevard. She traveled on foot for almost three miles before coming across a cab running on the desolate streets.

She quickly stowed her meager possessions in the backseat before climbing inside.

"The nearest Greyhound station, please," she requested as softly as she could, but still within the driver's hearing range.

The older man glanced at her in the rear view mirror. If he thought anything was off about the way she kept her face hidden, he made no mention of it.

"Heading home for the holiday, sweetie?"

"Something like that," she murmured, staring out of the window and watching the lights pass by. They reached their destination in just under fifteen minutes and she handed him a $50 bill.

Amazing Grace by Cullensgirl90 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 429]
Summary:

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Bella is given to Edward as a birthday present. He promises her that he will love her and never hurt her. Will he be able to keep his promise or will a dark secret tear them apart before their relationship can develop?

 Dark Edward.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/OC
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 185811 Read Count: 80457
[Report This] Published: 03 Sep 2010 Updated: 23 Jun 2011
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 15 Oct 2010 Title: Amazing Grace

hm, is it only me or does it feel like there was a chapter missing between the 5th and 6th chapter???

....when did Edward almost get arrested? When did Esme and Carlisle decide/promise to take some time off?....When did Bella go to a party with Edward before this chapter? ......it just feels like there was a whole bunch of information missing.

 

 

Prophecy by VampaliciousCullen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 125]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Prophecy

Can Bella overcome the destiny that has been laid out for her and find the Promised One in time?

The Prophecy

The one with balance will seek out the Promised one.
She shall find him in a forest of rock and steel.
This warrior is a child of the Goddess, yet will be raised far away.
He will return and aid his people in sweeping the darkness from the land.
He will place the one with balance upon her throne and will stand by her side for many years.

OOC for some characters

Some Human, Many Mythological creatures, not the world you are used to.

Complete 01/07/2011: Prophecy; Part One

Up Now: Part Two; True North

Character List for Part One & Two

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Fantasy, Romance, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Fics to Read
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 103125 Read Count: 31122
[Report This] Published: 12 Oct 2010 Updated: 22 Jul 2011
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 4: C4 Victoria's Rath

thanks for updating!



Author's Response:

welcome, i hope you like my story and keep reading :)

Speak by babylou23 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 207]
Summary:

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Bella moves back to Forks after an unexpected event with her daughter Leah, Leah has not spoken  word since the event. When Leah befriends a green eyed little boy next door, Bella so realises that his father may be the key to Leah's illness.

This story is about how the strength that family  love can create and how two families joining can overcome anything life throughs at them.

 check out my blog for pictures and stuff;http://babylou23-speak.blogspot.com

Disclaimer; All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plots are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creaters, or producers media franchise. No copyright infringement intended.

I do not own twilight but I do own Speak  copyrightbabylou23@2010.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 79551 Read Count: 27175
[Report This] Published: 18 Oct 2010 Updated: 10 Oct 2016
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 18 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 -

Great first chapter!!!



Author's Response:

thank you :)

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 19 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: prologue

Bloody heck, what an prologue!!...and to begin your story with such an cliffhanger, gee you're evil ;-)

 

So anyways thanks for putting up the prologue and I already added you to my alert list.

Looking foward to chapter 2 :-)



Author's Response:

lol thank you :) chapter 2 will be up soon.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

nooooo....evil cliffie...who is it? WHO? ;-)

Thanks for updating!



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

Thanks for updating!!



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 05 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

It's good to have you back!

Thanks for updating!



Author's Response:

thank you

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 11 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

Cute!!



Author's Response:

:-)

Summary:

A Bella/Edward Story

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(Banner by AngelGoddess1981) 

Bella loves Edward, much more than she should. Edward is an addict. Bella deals with it. Years of this cycle begin to take its toll, and Bella is fed up. A near fatal accident forces Edward into a coma, and Bella reexamines her previous decision. Will Bella stay, or is it all too much? OOC/AH

The story is based on events that happened to me in real life. I've just changed the situation some and adapted it to fit Stephanie Meyer's Characters.

(New Banner by DivineInspiration)

Warning:

This story is not intended for anyone under the age of 18. Some themes include underage drug abuse, adult drug abuse, violence while under the influence, poor judgment while intoxicated, graphic medical scenarios, graphic sexual situations that are consensual, explicit language, and extreme angst. Be advised, this work of fiction is not suitable for everyone. If you are under 18 or find these situations upsetting or uncomfortable, please move on. Otherwise, I urge you to read with caution.   

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My all time favorites
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 148282 Read Count: 31054
[Report This] Published: 29 Oct 2010 Updated: 15 Nov 2011
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Love-Hate-Sex-Pain

thanks for updating. I hope that Bella stays strong, being with an addict can ruin you too.



Author's Response:

No problem.

Bella may be facing some tough choices ahead, but she's got a good support system. It's something that will help her throught the story.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Talk Box

thanks for updating



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 23 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Paranoid Android

Can't wait to see how that conversation is going to go.
Thanks for updating!



Author's Response:

I promise, it's probably not what you'd expect.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

 

In a world dominated by vampires, humans are forced to abide by the strict rules of the vampire government. Bella has never experienced life in an all-human world and one day the only life she knows shatters to pieces when she is kidnapped and sold to a vampire. She is unfortunately the object of the most ruthless, out of control, vampire‘s affection. Her life turns upside down as she moves to an all-vampire town. Will she have the strength to go on after all that she has endured her personal hell? Will the one special vampire heal her wounds as she struggles to live a life amongst vampires or will she become the victim of their most sinister instincts? Edward and Bella pairing, AU, OOC

Warning: This story contains explicit adult content, language, violence, vampire marking and blood play, Extreme Dark-ward, and murder.

Alternate version of the original story, Living Amongst Vampires. By IBELONGTOAVAMPIRE.

L.A.H, is co-written by Thaigher Lillie

Tkegl...Thank you!

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Horror, Sci-Fi
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89094 Read Count: 129740
[Report This] Published: 22 Nov 2010 Updated: 10 Oct 2014
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Taken

Interesting twist at the end: can't make it too easy for Eward, hm?

One really hast to make sure not to forget that the vampires are real and brutal monsters in this story, including Edward!!

Thanks for  updating!



Author's Response:

Thank you =) Yeah, definitely didn't want to make it easy for Edward. LOL  We have a different meeting in mind, and there's a few more things that need to be set for their meeting.

Thank you for reading and commenting! =)

~Jells

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Bella's life was irrevocably changed by the vampires who left her behind. Alone in the world now, she finds herself drawn to another. Fighting for her life has changed her and now, the new family she has found will change her as well...


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Themslovebug90's read stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 33 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125187 Read Count: 71713
[Report This] Published: 23 Nov 2010 Updated: 04 Jun 2012
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 25 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Thank you for the great update! Merry Christmas.



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 19 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

awesome chapter!! thanks for updating!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

interesting first chapter, and since I'm a Peter-Fan I will definitely continue reading!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 10 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

“Well hot damn!”...;-)

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

loved it



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

loved it

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

loved it

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 18 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Loved it. I am really looking forward to the next chapter. 

Thank you!

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Great chapter!

Thanks fir updating and Happy New Year!



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

He was the lead singer of The Volturi. One of People's Sexiest Men. I was a new recording artist with an entire album riding on my shoulders. We were Hollywood's newest "it couple." Until he ruined everything - our relationship...my career...his life. Can our love be saved if he can't even save himself?  AH/AU

 

A story about love, lemons, lies...and learning to forgive.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 257507 Read Count: 47585
[Report This] Published: 28 Nov 2010 Updated: 11 Feb 2016
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

bloody heck, what an ending!

I just read all 12 chapters, and now I'm gonna go back and review each and every one of them, because your story definitely deserves more than just 10 reviews.

Yes, some of the plot is from time to time a little predictable, but I still really enjoyed it. So thanks for sharing this story with us, and I'm looking foward to the drama (well bigger drama than before) to begin.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to review all my chapters - it really means a lot!  I really want people to tell me what's working and isn't.  This is my first story I've written.  I'm trying to balance between correctly foreshadowing the drama, without making it too predictable.

I have to say, all of your comments for each chapter were spot-on with everything I was trying to convey.  Edward is definitely an asshole...but he has a lot of layers and issues that are causing him to be that way.  I'm walking a fine line of also trying to make him not be so deplorable that you don't want him to find redemption.  That's gonna be hard since it's all about to get worse.

My goal isn't necessarily for the reader to sympathize with him (even though I feel bad for him haha)...but I hope as the story goes they'll see the self-destructive path that he's on and how it's a much bigger issue than his relationship with Bella.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Great first chapter! I liked "your" Jacob

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Well written chapter. Edwards surprise visit was really sweet

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Lol, there are hardly any stories out there where Renee is a good mom.

I remember that "mouth of truth" moment from the movie, but I didn't know that it was an actual prank ;-)

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Interesting first look at Edwards hidden problems/insecurities

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Gosh, I don't envy Bella having Renee as a  mom

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Lol, and like Renee, Tanya is perfect as the bad guy...well girl, ahm woman...you know what I mean ;-)

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I like that your Alice isn't as anoying as some other Alices are.

Nice and fun ending.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

So this chapter starts the drama...well the real drama

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I'm glad that we are meeting Jacob again...

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Oh Edward, communication is the key, but I can understand his frustration

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 14 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Being sick sucks...being sick when you were planning a sexy weekend with your boyfriend? Yeah that sucks even more.

I can still understand Edwards frustration, but he was still kind of an ass in this chapter....both of them are stressed and it's starting to show

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 19 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Oh dear...this was a hard chapter to read. He is just getting himself into more trouble...

Thanks for updating!

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Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Awesome chapter..and I really mean it!

Edward is starting to ruin everything, like Emmet said: he's getting tangled in his web of lies. I just know that Bella will be devastated when everything comes out. Not just about him manipulating things to get her on the show but also about him lying and cheating with Tanya.

I actually think that she might have forgiven him for sexually cheating if he had explained all his insecurities, but now I just see the rollercoaster going straight down.

 

Thanks for updating and Happy New Year!



Author's Response:

Thank you - Happy New Year to you too!  I'm adding Jacob into the mix in the next chapter; which is only going to ignite her suspicions more.  Edward's not through with making mistakes and it's going to start to cause a rift between them even before she is completely torn apart.  I hope to have the next chapter up in a few days :)

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Great chapter!

Edward is just digging his "grave" deeper and deeper...and now even making false promises to her....I don't see how Bella will be able to forgive him for everything when (and not IF) she will find out about his lies.

Thanks for updating and Happy New Year!



Author's Response:

Happy New Year to you too!  I'm not sure how long it's going to take me to write the next chapter.  I've come to my first writer's dilemna.  Bella's character has taken a life of her own - she's one strong, independent, smart cookie (which I love!).  But it's affecting how she'd, naturally, react to some upcoming parts in the plot that I originally had in mind.  I think I have to rework some ideas.

Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 11 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Oh Edward....and now Bella is starting to suffer the consequences.

Thanks for updating!



Author's Response:

I'm praying for a snow day tomorrow so I have a chance to write the next chapter - I feel I have to get it up quick before people keep writing how much they hate Edward on FF haha.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

She waited with bated breath for each post card she would receive.  Each month it would come from a different locale.  Each time she would hope that it would bring her news that he was headed back to her and to all of the dreams that he sold her.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 19313 Read Count: 2552
[Report This] Published: 02 Aug 2011 Updated: 04 Jan 2012
Reviewer: Jolinar Signed
Date: 31 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Part 3 - Conclusion

Thanks for sharing this little story with us! I really enjoyed it!



Author's Response:

Thanks for taking a moment to leave me a review.  I'm glad you enjoyed it.  I loved writing this one.  It was really different than my usual story.  Thanks again!