Your story held me all the way through. I really enjoyed it. 

One thing that I found myself questioning was Jasper's character. You don't really flesh him out, but since he played his senior year as Edward's wide receiver, he had to have known the things that went on. They might not have been close friends, but then Jasper should have hated Edward with Bella and Alice, believing the lie they did. Or if they were close as teammates and friends, I would think he would have tried to get Edward's side of the story. I kept wondering when he was going to defend or indict Edward. Sorry if I missed it, but where did he go the school, and for what? I think by keeping Alice and Jasper together, it left a hole for me when he was such a bit character.

Despite my questions on that, I couldn't stop reading. Keep up the good work.

Many thanks, 

mtglasses