Reviews by Lelly
Summary: Past Featured Story

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When everything goes wrong at the baseball field what happens to Edward and Bella? Can they survive what happens? What happens when you give your life for the one you love? Is there a heaven? What will Bella do when all her dreams come true and she really gets her Second Chance at her first love?  Cowritten with preciousfairymom80, go check out her stories too!

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Love to drive's Stories to read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 102807 Read Count: 55115
[Report This] Published: 14 Feb 2010 Updated: 15 Sep 2010
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2018 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Hmmm, take it from me, there is only one water when you give birth to twins. I even had boy/girl twins and the girl was born first! Emmet is in the absolute clear. Your water breaks, and you are in labor, the first twin arrives and you continue in labor until the second twin arrives. Now, my second twin arrived 8 minutes after the first. My mother's second twin arrived 12 minutes after the first. My grandmother's second twin arrived 23 minutes after the first. Honestly? I suspect the decreased time is down to the fact that the mother has gotten a bit bigger with each generation. My grandmother was 5', my mother is 5' 2", and I am 5' 4". My daughter is only 5', the same size as my grandmother, so it will be interesting to see how long it takes for her second twin to arrive. She is only 18 right now, no where near to getting pregnant. Odds are she will give birth to fraternal twins though. When I was 18, a doctor told me I was 40,000 times more likely to have twins than another person. Sure enough, I was in maternity clothes at 6 weeks but I had some complications, my twins were delivered at only 28 weeks. I hope my baby's babies stay put longer than 28 weeks! They were only 2 lbs 7oz and 2 lbs 14oz, so they were a bit on the tiny side. I hope she has a much calmer time than I did.  Just FYI.

Summary:

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Dr. Edward Anthony Masen Cullen is a world renowned pediatric neurologist, he´s also a very sought after Dominant living in the Seattle area. What happens when the thrill of the playroom is no longer enough? What happens when he wants more than just a Friday through Sunday arrangement... Bella Swan a very young and very successful Corporate Attorney, who happens to be secretly crushing on her best friends older brother. It all starts with a dream, but after a very short, but failed marriage, Bella decides it´s time to give in to her submissive nature. With the help of her best friend and a blind date, can Bella finally find all the things her live is missing. ExB Rated for BDSM themes and lemony goodness. 

 

A very big thank you to the wonderful Kris Mkystich for my new banner!  Isn´t it sexy!!! Check her out in the December Drabble Wars!!  http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8769101/3/School-Of-Mischief

 

 

Winner of a Tomato Soup Award!

 

 

Nomimated for two Wordsmith Awards!

 

 

 

Voted Must Read Monday by Twi Girls Next Door

 

 

Winner of two Wordsmith Awards!

 

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Bdsm stories only, Twilight - Read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 312058 Read Count: 389576
[Report This] Published: 07 Nov 2010 Updated: 19 Aug 2016
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2017 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter: 9 And So It Begins...

It is Ketel One  vodka, not Kettle. I can't figure this one out for the life of me, you have TWO betas for pity's sake. 

Summary:

 

Bella is brought into a poly relationship because Edward knows what is best for her. e/b/c/es  Banner made by : Stephenie Masen ... Thanks for the great banner.


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Alice, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 26093 Read Count: 34481
[Report This] Published: 14 Jul 2012 Updated: 14 Jul 2012
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Maybe Bella is going to some crappy state school where even an average amount of effort will get you an A because your work is miles ahead of the other slackers that are enrolled. However, if she is going to a real school, top 20 in the US, her school work should come before going out to dinner, especially and many of the other chores mentioned. There is plenty of time for that AFTER her paper is completed. Unless Edward works at the school Bella attends, it would be impossible for him to know whether Bella is being given enough time to do her paper. Even for the same class, if the sections are taught by different professors, the work may be vastly different and the grades given to the same paper can also vary widely. The fact that she is not procrastinating is something that should be encouraged, not chastized. That is the difference between going to Penn State and the University of PA. If Bella is going to a school that is the caliber of Penn State, I can understand why she shouldn't stress, but it is also doubtful is 4 summer school classes would have burned her out. Right now, Edward is coming off like a huge jerk who just wants what he wants and makes no allowances for the responsibilities of other people. Very OOC.

Summary:

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“The best love is the kind that awakens the soul and makes us reach for more, that plants a fire in our hearts and brings peace to our minds" - Nicholas Sparks. A reclusive artist and a musician embark on a journey in NYC, but with their own twist. ExB Mature Daddykink.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Dominance and submission
Series: Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 162463 Read Count: 135539
[Report This] Published: 22 Sep 2012 Updated: 15 Jun 2013
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 30 Dec 2017 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Sorry, freezing jeans does not adequately kill the germs on them, at least according to the Smithsonian Institute. https://www.smithsonianmag.com/science-nature/the-myth-of-the-frozen-jeans-129092730/

Other than that, I am enjoying the story, although I am not certain how far you get before the chapters stop. We are still reading it, years later. Maybe you would consider finishing it? Thanks. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella and Edward have been friends for as long as they could remember. They grew up together and now, live in the same apartment, ‘saving’ money on rent. Bella was just dumped by her boyfriend, Paul and Edward had been single for a long time. 

One night, Edward drunkenly tells Bella that he’s horny and lonely. They ended up having sex. 

Awkward morning after follows…

Out of everyone they’d been with, Edward and Bella admit that they are really compatible with each other, but a relationship between the two just can’t work. They are almost like family. So, they decide to become friends with benefits…

What happens when one realizes that they want more??

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Banner by Chandrakanta! Thank you girlie!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Friendship, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, Stories I've Already read, Dumbeline's WIP to read list, Bella's Must Reads!, Bella 84's To Be Read List, Stories I've read, Read & Enjoyed, TBR, Tufano79 Stories
Chapters: 151 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 177969 Read Count: 983316
[Report This] Published: 27 Dec 2013 Updated: 28 Jun 2014
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 10 Feb 2018 Title: Chapter 135: Chapter 135

I make sauce. I get that you make gravy,  my friend Denise and I could do a comedy act with our rendition of the argument over sauce/gravy. However, when you sway that you had sausage (I am hoping you mean sweet not hot), meatballs and ”pork”, what do you mean by “pork”? What part of the pig are we talking about? 

The recipe for my sauce isn’t technically a secret, it has been passed down in my family and it is incredibly delicious, but most people who have seen me make the spice blend that is one of the ingredients and then make the sauce usually decides that it looks like too much trouble and just hope that they will be able to continue eating mine.  Mine is better than my sister’s, BTW, and I don’t know why. I think she must be cutting corners. So if you could just let me know what you mean by pork in the sauce, that would be great. 

Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 10 Feb 2018 Title: Chapter 135: Chapter 135

I make sauce. I get that you make gravy,  my friend Denise and I could do a comedy act with our rendition of the argument over sauce/gravy. However, when you sway that you had sausage (I am hoping you mean sweet not hot), meatballs and ”pork”, what do you mean by “pork”? What part of the pig are we talking about? 

The recipe for my sauce isn’t technically a secret, it has been passed down in my family and it is incredibly delicious, but most people who have seen me make the spice blend that is one of the ingredients and then make the sauce usually decides that it looks like too much trouble and just hope that they will be able to continue eating mine.  Mine is better than my sister’s, BTW, and I don’t know why. I think she must be cutting corners. So if you could just let me know what you mean by pork in the sauce, that would be great. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

A Dominant & A Gentleman

Growing up with a father in the military was hard on Bella. She made a promise to herself that she would never date or fall for a Marine like her father. That is until she runs into a pair of identical twins that have her reconsidering her rule.

Anthony is shy, extremely polite, and a true gentleman.

Edward appears to be in control and exudes confidence, and has a very dark side.

Will she take the risk or walk away?



A special thank you to Chandrakanta for creating the awesome banner for this story.

And a heartfelt thank you with undying gratitude to my awesome beta LostInPa who has helped with this story from the very first chapter.

I ♥ you hard!

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward/OC
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 134473 Read Count: 94273
[Report This] Published: 05 Mar 2015 Updated: 01 May 2016
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Shit Hot

A Lt. Colonel would be referred to as Colonel, NOT Lieutenant.  Just as a Major General would be called General, NOT Major. Coming from a military family, it strikes me as incredibly disrespectful. I actually hope that you will correct it, the error is bothersome. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Summary: After hearing her son’s birthday wish, Bella decides to contact her ex-boss whom she had a short affair with before quitting, to let him know that he has a son. Edward loved Bella since the first moment he saw her, despite her young age and position he sought her out on many occasions, to merely be rejected in turn. Now that she has returned he hopes they can make things work and finally be together.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 151416 Read Count: 127183
[Report This] Published: 21 Feb 2017 Updated: 07 Jun 2017
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 23 Dec 2017 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 59: Downtown Disney

The Grand Californian Hotel is a few steps away from Downtown Disney, taxis are not required. That is the great thing about it. If the kids get tired or spill something all over themselves, just walk back to the hotel in a few minutes and take a break, nap get changed, whatever. It is the best!

Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 07 Jan 2020 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 59: Downtown Disney

The best thing about the Grand Californian is that it is right there at Disneyland, right off Main Street.  Cabs are not required. The hotel is very beautiful too.  Just FYI. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

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After his brother dies in a car accident, Edward returns to his hometown to raise the little boy that was left behind. But raising a baby alone isn't easy, especially for a man who has spent the last few years partying and avoiding responsibilities. Can his beautiful bookworm neighbor be his saving grace? Daddyward. Lemons. Paige Edwards Sherry Neal

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 71 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 171760 Read Count: 102779
[Report This] Published: 14 May 2017 Updated: 28 Aug 2017
Reviewer: Lelly Signed
Date: 18 Dec 2017 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 68: Waking Up

Actually, when you have been under general anesthesia, they will usually put in a catheter so you don’t need to worry about getting up to use the toilet or having an accident. With either Fentanyl or Morphine on board, surgery patients have a tendency to sleep very heavily. A catheter is a good idea. I have had surgery almost 30 times now, and I don’t mean elective surgery with a plastic surgeon, and I haven’t used a bed pan yet. 



Author's Response:

Um...as amazing as it is, I've had multiple surgeries on my leg and I didn't use a catheter and used a bed pan after I woke up from one of my surgeries. You really don't need to talk to me like I'm stupid. Just because something hasn't happened to you personally, doesn't mean it hasn't happened to anyone else in the entire universe. I'm sorry if this comes off as harsh, it's just that usually reviews that start with "actually" aren't usually well recieved. Have a great night! :)