Reviews by london spam
Summary: Past Featured Story

15 yr old Bella has a fairly normal life. That was until her mum's new boyfriend came on the scene. Will Bella survive her new life? Dark Themes, Cannon Pairings. GRAPHIC

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89516 Read Count: 311304
[Report This] Published: 21 Jan 2010 Updated: 04 May 2011
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Sins of a Mother

Woah, what the hell are they going to do to Renee? Whatever it is, I hope she wonders about her daughter's treatment as well. Stupid, naive woman!!

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Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Breaking Down the Self

That was bad, but the next part is likely to be worse. She's really strong but too young to know how to be strategic about it. Felix is right...

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Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - I Will Follow

Renee broke much faster than Bella, but we already knew of her weakness. I was glad that once she realized what was happening to her, she immediately thought of Bella. Unfortunately, that's all over.


That was some sick shit with the balloon gag and porn. I was really sweating to battery cables, but I was relieved when they were attached to her toes instead. (Ugh, did I use the word relieved? I think all this brain washing is affecting me!)


At least Renee/Marie is out of the dungeon. What Bella?

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Date: 12 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Deny Thy Name

This was so painful to read, damn! I guess the brainwashing has succeeded, but what will the training entail? Servitude and submission, certainly. Sex acts as well or maybe that's later. What about Edward? Ugh, too many hopes and horrors to contemplate...

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Date: 17 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Salvation

Felix POV was insightful. Perhaps some Bella remains in Elizabeth; a small light waiting in a corner. Also, Felix knows Bella's strength doesn't come from Renee. It must come from Charlie, who may eventually rescue Bella or aid her saving herself, but that would be a very long time coming.


Aro obviously abuses these people, as we've already seen it. The question becomes what exactly does he want to turn Bella into? What does he need Elizabeth to be? And, of course, what role does Edward play in all this?


More questions...

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 : Rebirth

Wow, this is some sick shit! You ladies sure do know a lot about brainwashing techniques and have done a good job of writing so the reader understands the purpose behind the methods, even when Bella doesn't.

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 06 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - In My Hands

I got my post.


Just when I think I'm understanding the effed up depravity in this story, you take a crazy twist and have me guessing all over again. I am comforted somewhat by the fact these girls aren't meant for sexual slavery/service, though Aro being the first man in is gross. Now I see this is a cult, religious and not sexual. I figured that before, but you are really committing to that aspect which gives me some measure of comfort, but I'm sure you'll take that away somehow...


What makes Edward so special? I'm wondering if his connection with Elizabeth will be so intense he takes her before the wedding or disobeys his father and prevents Aro from taking her. I'm getting ahead of myself, we don't even know anything about Edward yet...

Author's Response:

We love to keep you guessing... BAAHAHAHAH...  and why is Edward so special......well...he is hot...end of story... HAHAHA.. no just kidding... you will find out very soon.


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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Not Your Own

OMG! I thought the bath was going to be like last time, but yikes! This getting bad and weird and disgusting. Aro is clearly a zealot, but to what end? If Edward and Bella get together and have children, what is that supposed to accomplish in the larger sense of their religion?


Well, I'm still hooked because I have to know!!

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Date: 07 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Do Unto Others

So creepy and suspenseful throughout. You never really know who falls where and what exactly Carlisle was going to do. I knew all along it would be purely a medical procedure (pelvic exam, whatever) but with Aro and his commets (plus knowing this story is so out there) I'm always afraid and sort of preparing myself for it to get really bad. Don't get me wrong, it's bad, but you always have me in suspense of how bad it's going to get, in what way, what roles in the "bad" each character plays, etc.


I'm glad there was nothing sexual and Carlisle and Esme were so careful and comforting to her. Their relationship holds the promise of whatever happiness she can find in those walls. But, again, with Aro's entrance for the bath, the icky/WTF factor skyrockets. You keep me wondering if this is the time Bella will be sexually abused (her wedding night with Aro aside, which is presumably coming). I imagine that it won't be until then, but (hopefully) something intervenes and she's saved from that.


However, with you girls running this show, anything can happen - the depravity knows no bounds. What I love the most is that you already have me so scared for what might happen to Bella that you don't have to actually do it to her for me to still find it very interesting. Thank you so much for that!!

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Date: 01 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Embrace

So what's Edward's story? It's good to know that at least he knows about Aro getting the first crack at Bella, but I wonder how much of that will be communicated to her.


Also, I know they are a long way from getting out of this place, but how is that going to happen? Clearly, there are some cracks in Bella's brainwashing, but will she speak when the time comes? Will the spark between Her and Edward open his mind to hear her out?

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Date: 25 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Atonement

This glimpse into Edward's head was crazy! So, I'm guessing Aro is going to whip Edward in front of Bella, er, Elizabeth. I wonder how she will react. I like that Edward doesn't want to share Bella, but I wonder what can be done about it. Ugh, I just hate the idea that Aro will actually get her first. I really hope that doesn't happen...

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Date: 29 May 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Admonishment

So, I guessing Carlisle is going to make sure Bella is fertile and all that. Just the thought of Aro getting inside her is making my skin crawl! Ewwww!!


I'm glad you ladies are committed to this story because it simply can't stop here or in the ickiness that I'm sure must follow.

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Date: 12 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Confession

That what happens when your brainwashing isn't fully completed (thank you, Felix). So, I'm guessing Alice and maybe Rose and Angela will be among her sisters. Aro is still creepy, but I still just don't know about his sexual intentions with Bella. He punished himself for impure thoughts of her before. Is he still thinking of her like that, but figures it's OK until he takes her on her wedding nioght? Or is he still the same hardliner and treating her according to the normal plan?


Also, I was wondering how many generations this has been going. We know it been at least as long as Edward has been alive, but how long before that? Was Aro born into this effed up society or did he create it? How did Carlisle come to be involved? Esme? Were they taken when they were young too? I guess I most wonder how much of all this Aro really believes is truth/religion vs. his private oppressive regim.

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Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - Discloser

OK, so Aro is a perv, but maybe just for young innocent girls. That's why he is the only man to touch and the girls until they are married and he takes their virginity. After that, he doesn't care. He's a peadophile, but for girls who just started puberty. Well, there's the answer to whether Aro really does want to do sexual things to Bella for his pleasure. Worse yet, this sexual abuse doesn't start on her wedding night, that's when it ends, which means she's been groomed this whole time.


I really hope Esme and Carlisle are able to thwart these plans somehow. What's up with the drugs? Probably some kind of fertility treatment. How has Carlisle failed Aro before? Tanya or some other girl's lack of pregnancy? And now Alice is going to fall to Aro! Ewww.


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Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - The Family

Um, what did he mean about casting aside the hamd? Is it going to be branded or maimed? Maybe it's a psychological thing?


Anyway, I liked Alice and the description of the Great Room was creepy! It reminded me of that compound in TX, which I'm sure was part of your research. I get what Aro gets out of this society (ultimate authority an obediance and first hit at the virgins) but what about the other men? Clearly they have power over the women as well, but is there some kind of wife sharing? That doesn't seem to be the case because of the wickedness of impure thoughts thing.

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Date: 02 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Desperation

I just knew it was Felix, but I'm glad he didn't give it all up right away. I'm so glad Charlie has exactly the lead he needs to know where he's going and what he's up against, eve though he doesn't really have it yet.


This gives he faith that Bella will have a HEA.

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Date: 11 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Fear Not, For I Am With You

I like having more insight to the hive mentality. Alice and the secret spot are great and Elizabeth is definitely in need of a strong family to protect her. I like the update on Edward.


Maybe it's Felix?

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Date: 18 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 ĖEyes Upon Us

Happy Anniversary!


OK, so what physical preparation does Alice require that Bella might fear? Waxing? It doesn't seem to be that kind of society. Also, does Jasper need to be strong for Alice by remaining calm as Aro takes her? Is this done as part of the wedding ceremony in front of everyone? Ewww!!

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Date: 24 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: The Temple

Um, wow, OK, so... I'm really glad Aro doesn't actually have sex with these young brides. At the same time, I'm horrified at how easily these girls can be killed and, even when they buy in, the willingly and knowingly are completely subservient to everyone around them.


Again, you've made something I thought would be gross and creepy and you've made it even more gross and creepy!


Also, I liked how Carlisle and Esme keep "saiving" Bella and, especially, Bella figuring out that she shouldn't be there.

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Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Trust and Obey

OMG, Aro just gets more vile and perplexing! Edward (and Carlisle and Esme, for that matter) is going to lose his shit if/when Aro tries to switch up Bella's ceremony. Will Aro want Edward to watch? Did Carlisle watch as Aro took Esme?

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Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - To Err Is Human, to Forgive....

Is Felix telling Charlie Bella is dea? That's what I'm thinking...

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Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Free Will

This must not be the first time Edward has ventured into town. Is it the same twon Charlie and Felix are in? Does Felix know who Edward is? More questions...

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Date: 17 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Free Falling

Woah! They kill girls who try to leave, but Aro probably has something specific in mind. It would be so disgusting if Aro used this to somehow justify inseminating Bella the old-fashioned way. Ewww!

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Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - In the Beggining

Oh, dear Carlisle, what a mess you're in! And what in God's name are they doing to Bella - I'm so afraid to find out. (It would be crazy if they broke her hymen and sent her back to the Family just so she would die at Edward's hand in the ceremony.)

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Date: 06 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: The Dawning

When I first saw Edward's new job, I thought he was going to see Bella in seclusion. Now I'm just racking my mind to figure out what they've done with her.


If Aro is corruptm why doesn't he just keep Bella locked away as a sex slave. Obviously, I'm not voting for that, but is he really planning on killing her given his infatuation with her? Ugh, he is so disgusting!!

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Date: 25 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 - Darkness Surrounds Us

I'm sooo glad they are together! I'm thinking these two are going to endure some public religious persecution before Charlie comes in to save the day. It would be nice for Aro to be exposed to his people so they can see him for waht he is...

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Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Seek the First

Poor Edward has been handed a huge reality chech and he is so right to question everything and everyone! I'm dreading to know what is happening to Bella in Aro's room. He can't be raping her, but he must be hurting her...

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Date: 04 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - Transgressions

Thank you for not sexually molesting her, though it was close enough. I'm very much hoping this is her only beating and it's either Edward or Carlisle walking into the room.

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Date: 20 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Oh, Edward! This is a rough juorney for him too and it shakes him to the core physcologically almost as much as Bella.


I'm really looking forward to Charlie tracing the call. I don't want Edward leaving Bella and her cuts while require medical attention soon.


Totally intense!

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Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 - These three remain: faith, hope, and love

Oh damn! I'm so happy that Aro didn't find Edward and Charlie knows where Bella is, sort of.


So, Felix is going to help Charlie, but how will they get to Bella and what state will they find her in? Here we go...


Congrats on getting the publishing house up and running!!

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Date: 16 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 - The Alpha and the Omega

Oh holy fuck! Well, Aro was clearly rejected by a woman in a fomer life and has a serious little-man complex, in addition to his sadistic and masochistic issues. I hope they put Edward and Bella together. Also, I like that Aro lied about Edward taking Bella's virginity because Carlisle can confirm her hymen isn't broken. (I'm assuming Aro didn't break it just then, it didn't seem like it.)


This story is so distubingly, disgustingly wretched, and yet I'm hooked!

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Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 - Redemption

Well, I lie that Felix is both knowledgeable and skilled, but they need to hurry up! I'm horrorified at the glimpse of the possible tortuous death awaiting Bella and Edward.

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Date: 17 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36 - Revelations

Oh damn! Thank you so much for not leaving this on an evil cliffie! I'm so glad Bella and Edward are getting out - if they actually do make it out, which I suspect they will. Aro is clearly going to announce the power change at the meeting, but that will also come with a show of power. Surely his plan was to make an example of Edward and/or Bella.


The news about Alice and Jasper is rough too. I hope Alice miscarries just so there is less of Aro's evil out there. I can't really think about how Aro can go down without pulling a Jonestown on the rest of the people.


Also looking forward to more DLS, but I would rather wait for an update there until you can post in some regular schedule. It's easier to get back in the story once everything else settles down. You ladies have certainly been busy!

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 06 May 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37: Exodus

I'm glad Edward didn't lose his leg. He did everything he could and it's not his fault his was raised in such a fucked up society. I wonder what's happening with Carlisle...

Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward over hears a very juicy secret regarding his younger sister, Alice.  The plot to blackmail Alice in order to get closer to her best friend, Bella, forms in his mind, but doesn't exactly pan out the way he wants it to.  Rated for Edward's foul mouth and the sprinkles of lemonade with the eventual lemon.


Big fat thanks to Selita for making me this AWESOME banner!!

The Virgin Swan and the Cullen Intuition Banner fs

michelleab09 from made me this fantastic banner!!! 


michelleab09 is at it again with another lovely banner for the waterfall!!


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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 119049 Read Count: 57010
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 22 Jan 2010
Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 02 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Ch1 - And I plan on giving Bella plenty...

I like how Bella acknowledge that she wants him (both to his face and to herself), but stands up for herself when she understands his intentions are just a fling. She's going to be a little spitfire, even though she totally wants him. I have a feeling he's going to be feeling very differently about wanting someone else to take her virginity. I'm looking forward to that realization.

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 02 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Ch2 - This. Is. The. Best. Feeling. Ever.

Bella hearing Edward's conversation with Carlisle is genious. I'm glad she knows and can deal accordingly. I actually hope she doesn't have the conversation with him and he is convinced through actions and feelings that he can't let her go at all. Judging by how things are progressing, it shouldn't be too hard.


Side note, there are a lot of words that are used incorrectly: then/than, emmissions/admission, anyways/anyway (you never use 'anyways' always the singular).

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 02 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Ch3 - How could you ask me to do something like that?

I'm glad Edward came around and I like his conditions. There is definitely room for more in the story, so I'm glad you extended it.

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Ch4 - He's got a knife in his hand!

The lemonny bits are getting better. I was disappointed with the pond bit in the earlier chapter as it felt very rushed, but the way you've covered the later one/references were better.


I'm looking forward to Charlie going apeshit on Edward and then Bella turning it on Charlie.

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Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Ch5 - Remember your window, Juliet.

OK, that lemon was so effing good! Fuckhot!!

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Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Ch6 - Lalalalalala

I can't wait to see how Jake deals in this situation. What has Charlie told him? Does he think he has a chance or does he see what's going on? Hmmm...

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Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Ch7 - Oh no... no, no, no... not good.

Charlie is totally stupid for handling the situation in this matter. He is singlehandedly ruining his relationship with his daughter. If he hopes to have any contact with her after she turns 18 and graduates high school, he needs to stop throwing Jacob in Bella's face and stop punishing her for her feelings. It's completely unfair to punish Bella because Edward was a bad kid 4 years ago!

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Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Ch8 - For the better or for worse?

The lemon was delicious! Edward getting out at the right time was great, especially because Charlie had a little freak out all on his own. Bella telling her father how she feels was good, but she needs to do more. She needs to calmly and despondently tell him that he's actively pushing her away with his actions.


Her rebellion has been coming. It's too bad they didn't get their date before getting caught, but let's see what how Charlie deals...

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 03 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Ch9 - Blood on the Highway: The Bella Swan Story

I'm glad Bella set aside her anger long enough to put a plan together. I think she would actually have to wait a few months until she's 18 to pull this off in reality, but that's irrelevant in fanfic, so it's all good.


Will Charlie see the error of his ways now or exacerbate the situation?

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Ch10 - Its the best invention yet.

I'm really dissappointed in Charlie's weak-assed attempts at changing Bella's mind. Edward was so caring and loving with her, plus he had quite a bit of stamina the morning after. I enjoyed the vows E&B have made to one another about having sex and the exploration they want to take after. The Cullen family in general is great. I like that the extended family was there too, showing their support of Bella through and emotional time.


I hope in the chapters to come Charlie comes around a bit, though Bella clearly isn't moving back. After Cinderella gets Prince Charming, she doesn't go back to scrubbing floors!

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Ch14 - That's why I need you.

I hate how Charlie is spreading lies and being manipulative. I love that Jacob trusts the source and readily believes Bella and makes peace with Edward.


I sex was great. I'm glad you didn't have her orgasm in the act her first time and it was more realistic.


The cliffie was good, though I could kick Bella for being so impetuous. Edward is going to lose his mind!!

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Ch15 - Look at what sleep got me last time.

Bella's injuries help a lot of crap with Charlie to get snapped into perspective and I'm glad for that. I wonder how much Renee knows of that situation. Also, I'm wondering what exactly Renee meant when she asked Edward if he knew why Bella left. Did she mean from the house that night or from Florida?

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Ch16 - Wakey, wakey, Belly.

This was a nice story and I'm very happy with how things worked out in the end. It's too bad about Renee, but I'm really happy about how things went with Charlie.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella gets sent to a school by her boyfriend to help her become the wife he wants. It isn't what Bella expects, at all.

BDSM, Dark story.





Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward, Bella/Alice, Bella/Carlisle, Bella/Emmett, Bella/James, Bella/Jasper, Bella/Jasper/Alice, Bella/Rose, Carlisle/Esme, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC, Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, To Read
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 297603 Read Count: 1516899
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 21 May 2010
Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23

I can totally see James finding them with the tracker he put in Victoria's shoulder. It's too bad no one will think of looking for it. Victoria's trauma is really obvious in every interaction. Even though she was James for about 3 weeks, he was evil to her a lot faster than with Bella who was groomed over a much monger period of time.


About this site. I really like it but it needs some work. If you send me an email, I would be happy to spend some time testing different areas of the site and listing what bits aren't working properly or to the best usability. For example, adding this story to my favorites hasn't worked from the drop down list or the link just above this review box. Just drop me a line and I'll be happy to test it more thoroughly and put together a document with screen shots and everything. I don't write creatively, so this would be my only contribution to this site (plus my reviews, of course). I'm in IT by trade and would love to help!

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 06 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 69: Chapter 68: Carlisle DAY 23

I like seeing Carlisle taking care of business, even as craptastic a situation as this is. Esme is the very pillar of strength and support. They are doing perhaps what they should have done once they knew about Bella's situation. Carlisle never even checked to see if Laurent had gotten any other people into the school they way Bella was forced.


And for the twist, Aro finally calls back and appears to have also been manipulated. How does the biggest mater of them all get tricked and for so long? Looking froward to the answer to that one.


Meanwhile, James is somewhere gathering his strength and preparing to locate Victoria with the tracker no one knows about. This is going to get even crazier...

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 69: Edward DAY 23

So it was Laurent all along! No wonder he was so pissed with James constantly going off track! Jacob should have enough for a search warrant on James' house. If they executed that, perhaps they would find evidence that Victoria was tagged with a tracker and that the trap is set at the wrong house.



Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 19 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 71: Chapter 70: Bella DAY 23 and 24

Enter James! Even though I knew he was coming, it didn't make it any less chilling, especially with him entering through Victoria's room and finding Bella first. Plus, Edward is just going to wait for Bella and not disturb them. Maybe Alice will get a bad feeling. Even so, James could cause a shitload of damage in a very short amount of time.


I'm thinking the next chapter might be in James POV. That's good so we can get an idea of what his plans are, but his head is a wretched place to be. Here we go...

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 21 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24

Wow, um, OK, so that takes care of Laurent. His death was faster than he deserved, but it did include some pain and just enough time to realize he was stupid to trust James. I was surprised James made it out with both girls, but I shouldn't have been. I am very much hoping he doesn't get out of that cock cage! I know he can perpetrate plenty of horrors to the girls with it still on, but I can't watch them get raped by him, especially since he won't hold anything back now. Maybe Heidi will flip sides and aid the girls in escape somehow?


I'm hoping Edward and the cavalry arrive to Laurent's place faster than expected by using a helicopter, which surely Edward should have at his disposal. Ugh, this situation is so bad! Please let flip to EPOV; I can't handle being in Bella's head right now...

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Date: 10 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 72: Carlisle Day 23 & 24

I missed this chapter due to the alret failure, so I'm catching up now. I received 3 emails alerts for the next chapter, so that might be an issue.


I love seeing Esme stand by her man, Carlisle take blames and responsibility, and the troops rally around and process things in their own way. Aro's involvement will be interesting and Heidi's dayplanner is going to be very helpful in Jacob's investigation. Of course, given James' activities, there may not be anyone but CArlisle left to prosecute...

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Date: 10 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 74: Chapter 73: Edward Day 23 and 24

James dropped his phone!! OK, this is perfect because Laurent was the mastermind and James is a devious, smart psychopath. James' undoing will be his arrogance and temper. He is so sure he won't get caught and doesn't need anyone. He's already killed his greatest asset, Laurent, could be killing the money and transportation, Heidi, and, even better, doesn't even plan to leave WA state. He hasn't even realized he doesn't have his phone and probably won't until he tries to call Demetri to get an abortion for Victoria.


I'm sooo looking forward to that motherfucker's end!!

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 74: James

Thank God someone is there to help these girls out and James hasn't hurt them!! I can't wait to see him suffer sumpremely before he goes to jail forever.

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78

Great, loved it! Though I am sorry we didn't get to see them play, but I see how it needed to end right there. Maybe you might consider selling the scene for a charity auction...

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 17 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 75 - Bella

I hope we get to see what happens with James in Aro's care, what happened with the other women Laurent did this to, some punishment for Heidi (she was just as much an accomplice as Laurent and being terrorised by James wasn't enough) and some healing and future care for Victoria and her baby. Perhaps James' death could be faked and all his money goes to Victoria with the aid of some forged documents or maybe a trust for the baby.


Any sequesl would have to deal with Bella's trauma and how she eventually works submission back into her life. Edward is certainly a kind master, so it could be interesting to see how that could aid her psychological recovery.

Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 01 May 2010 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77: Chapter 76

Well, you did and even better (and by that I mean horrifying) job at torturing James than I could have imagined. Excellent work, especially the slave tag!


I look forward to the final chapter and everything getting worked out with our main couple and the vicimized girls. Lots of therapy, love and maybe a house for abused women. I'm sure you'll put together something perfect, just as you always do!

Summary: Past Featured Story




The not-so-virgin Bella Swan is moving out of Forks and into Seattle with her beautiful tattooed fiance, Edward. When their perfect bubble pops, how will the maiden Swan fair in the Cullen's domain? Rated for Language and Lemons.

Isn't Selita grand?  Another big fat thanks to her for making this wonderful banner.


This is my first fan-made banner!  SamasaurusRex did a great job!!  Thank you!!!


This is my SECOND fan made banner! I feel so special!!  michelleab09 from made this for me!  Thank you, lovely! Motorcycleward and Bikerella anyone?


michelleab09 did it again!!  Edward and Bella wedding photo!! :D


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Stories Read by CNYBella, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 168493 Read Count: 44039
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 19 Aug 2010
Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 13 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Ch2 - The Day After

I like that you've thrown in a bit of Edward's past and Jane is an interesting touch. I especially like that Bella was so level headed about it and Edward was so forthcoming. It boades very well for their future.

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Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Ch3 - The Big News

It's all good, but I just have to see that innocent Bella/experienced Edward fantasy play out. I loved where it was going...

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Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Ch4 - Party Time

Edward's protectiveness is sweet on both counts, with Alice and with his friends. I like how Bella stood up for herself and Edward's pep talk to get her in the right frame of mind.

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Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Ch5 - The Birthday Boy

Oh well yes! Happy fucking birthday, indeed! But what will Edward do with such a gift? I hope he's already planned for something like this in his fantasies...

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Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Ch6 - The Birthday Gift

There is so much more they could have done in the D/s scene, but seeing as how neither of them have done anything like that before, I thought it worked. Edward even fumbled a bit with the ropes and Bella's positioning. All the more reason to play it out again, maybe after putting more thought into it.

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Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Ch7 - A Change of Plans

Oh dear, could Alice be preggers? That ought to snap Jasper out of his funk and clear things up for him right quick!

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Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Ch8 - The Memoirs of a Fairy

I really like what you did with Alice, from the scare to her reaction to hear lash out to her lack of immediately forgiveness of Jasper. It really speaks to his issues that he would assume deception from her than give her the benefit of the doubt. Also, I love how Edward, Bella and the family are dealing with it.


The beans thing was classic!!

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Date: 17 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Ch9 - Step Daddy Dearest

Drama, for sure! I'm sure the Cullen men can provide enough distraction for Phil to keep him out the way.

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Date: 18 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Ch10 - The Screaming Epiphany

Phil and Renee are a pain. Thankfully, the have the whole Cullen clan and others to run interference. Will it be enough?

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Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Ch11 - Provoking the Groom

The fact that Phil openly admitted to Edward that he likes scaring Bella, plus his blatant efforts to interupt them (in Port Angeles and leaving Renee's wallet) really shows that he is stepping this game up a lot. It's like he knows he'll never get this close again and he's trying to wreak maximum havok. I can't see how this can continue without something happening with Edward, especially given the escalation. I only hope that other family members are there, especially Charlie. That could help a lot in Edward not going to jail...

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Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Ch12 - The Proposition

I like the proposition and look forward to its results.

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Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Ch13 - The Truth

I love how Edward brought her back to herself immediately and everyone supoorted her. I wonder what's going on at the police station...

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Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Ch14 - Forgiveness

I'm happy about how things worked out with Renee. The idea that Phil would have to be charged in Florida for the attempted rape in Forks is completely absurd, but I'm sure you've already received that feedback. It makes sense that Phil would press charges against Edward, but none of that will stick, of course.


I like how they are trying to stick to traditions. It's fun and I'm sure we'll get all the details on the wedding night into the next day(s).



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Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Ch15 - The Big Day

The wedding was great. I especially liked Edward's breakfast and note to Bella, her note back and Edward's conversation with Emmett.

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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Ch16 - Fighting with the In-laws

Oh come on, they didn't miss that much of the reception! They danced with everyone, ate and did the speeches. The other stuff should have been done earlier, that's all. The sex was great, obviously, as was the various teasing moments.

I like what happened with Alice and Jasper.  Esme is going to flip out!!


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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Ch17 - Back to Reality

It's gotta be Jane, right?


Love the sex and looking forward to anal talk over dinner. I'm also looking forward to how Alice and Jasper hide their marriage from Esme.

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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Ch18 - First Time for Everything

So much going on in this chapter! I like how you brought in Angela and the idea that Edward was in love once before Bella. Angela seems she has something to explain to Edward about how they left things and that's got me thinking all kinds of possibilities.


Bella getting over the alcohol ban is good, especially because it was so excessive. Of course, there will still be issues, possibly where she mishandles her consumption or a third party adds something to the mix. College parties can be dangerous places and if Bella takes a drink from the wrong person, well, that could be very bad.


The anal sex conversation was awesome. I loved how Bella explained why she would like to do Edward and that he's actually considering it. Of course they both could start slowly as this sort of thing takes some practice. Maybe Bella could add a finger during a blow job. That could be explosive head and just the kind of convincing Edward needs.


Rose and Em are having a baby. Totally saw this coming but it was still sweet. I really liked Esme's protectiveness over Bella after Mrs. Hale left.

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Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Ch 19 - Boxer Cullen

I can't believe Angela would just show up at the party like that and then would assert herself so much. Take the hint, woman! I'm looking forward to the fallout.


Bella passing out during sex was classic! Edward did want her drunk and that's what happens sometimes...

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Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Ch20 - Repercussions

I'm glad Angela is leaving town! I think Phil can't really get that much time unless daughters of women he was in previous relationships with step forward and a pattern of abuse or attempted abuse is established.

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Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Ch21 - Closure

I really love how Edward kept Bella laughing all day after all the drama, just as she said. He is definitely wanting to get her preggers, but I'd like to hear them have a serious conversation about whether Bella wants to work right out of college, what kind of job/intership, where Edward will be with his career and what kind of situation they want to be in when they start having children. He clearly feels ready now, but they haven't talked about the fact they are both in school and living in an apartment. Edward might have to move somewhere across country for his matching after med school. Even if we don't witness the talk, I'd like to know they thought about it at least as much as having anal sex, which is another topic that requires revisiting...

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Date: 19 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Ch 22 - All Hallows Eve

This was good, but I would have liked for them to have practiced a bit on other occasions and built up to the event. I think Edward needs a little penetration as well, maybe during a BJ?...

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Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Ch 23 - Surprises

This was great! I especially love happy Daddy Edward!

The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight



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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1626824
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 45

Oh dear Edward, what a rude awakening you are in for!

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Date: 07 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 46

Bella is clearly naive to think that she can't be pregnant from her fisrt two times. Edward should have known what he was doing, perhaps he liked the chance she could get pregnant so quickly?


I wonder what Bella's lost virginity might mean to Carlisle and his games with Demitri. I'm anxiously awaiting this meeting, though I'm also fearful at how bad it will be. I know it will have to be wretched as the story and Carlisle's intentions demand nothing less. My hope is that Edward will protect Bella from being punished or sexually exploited in any way by C&D. If Edward fails or isn't around to protect her, I wonder if J or Em will step in.


OK, I'm bracing mayself for what's next...

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Date: 23 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 47

Noooo! Edward, just talk to Bella and get her to pretend. Both of you can put on a show. Ugh, this is going to be sooo bad!

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Date: 25 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 48

I was convinced Edward was going to do it all alone and not et Bella in on it at all. I'm so glad I was wrong! He really has come around and there may just be salvation form them all. Well, not Carlisle, Marcus or Demitri who all need to die painfully. I'm especially glad Bella finally told Edward about Carlisle. Through this horrible mess, they really are coming together better than I thought possible.


I'm looking forward to the answsers behind Esme's garden.

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Date: 06 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 49

I'm so glad you skipped over the rest of Murcus' and Demitri's visit. Esme's story is so sad and horrible, but about what you would expect given the outcome. I can't even imagine Bella wanting to have any children as long as Carlisle is alive. I can only hope Carlisle leave the family fortune to his sons and not his brother. This story cannot end without Carlisle's death, seriously...

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Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 50

That better be Edward and his brothers coming to her rescue, or maybe Carlisle having found out that Demetri took Bella without permission...


Please don't let anymore trauma happen to Bella, seriously, hasn't she been through enough?

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Date: 02 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

I love how Carlisle and Demitri met their end, that Esme did whatever she did with Carlisle's ashes, that Edward brought in Bella's other family and how he's suffered over trying to help her, especially delaying the wedding.


I can't wait for his reaction to her request and what happens next. Also, I'm really looking forward to CAM getting up and running again!

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

I'm glad there is such a lapse in time for recovery. I wonder what Edward did in the moment of Bella asking to be let go and in the days afterward. Did he want to keep tabs on her? How did he end up in therapy?


Bella's a good girl, goes to a private girls school doesn't put a foot wrong. Goes out for one night with the girls and meets bad boy Edward who is from a public school and leads Bella off onto a different path..

Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 33439 Read Count: 36915
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 17 Mar 2010
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Date: 02 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Well, well, Jake sure does go all out when he feels the iron is hot, doesn't he? I really feel for Bella with respect to Charlie. She has gotten a whole lot of heat, shame, embarassment, and isolation because she trusted the wrong people one night. I wish she would have a heart to heart with Charlie, tell him the truth, and how he's making her feel, not with the grounding, but the way he treats her.

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Date: 14 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

There could have been all sorts of things to interupt the date, but nothing did. It was a sweet first date and a perfect contrast to Bella's night with Edward. I wonder how far things will get with Jacob before Edward comes back into the picture. Speaking of which, what's going on with Edward? Em, Rose, Jas, and Alice all seem to be moving right along. Where has this left Edward?

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Date: 17 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Poor Edward is being harassed by the pissed off Chief. I remember when Edward was laughing his ass off at the Chief's face when he dropped off Bella. I don't see Edward laughing any more. That's totallly what he gets for being such a shit!


Love Esme! I'm wonder how E&B are going to get together after all this. Even if Esme is able to get Charlie to back off, how is Edward going to approach Bella? What about all the warm, tingley feelings Jacob is giving her? Edward has his work cut out for him.

Breathe Again by ysar Rated: M starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 149]
Summary: Past Featured Story

You know those fics where Edward doesn't come back and Bella forgets about him and five seconds later she's in bed with Jacob and none of it makes any damn sense?
Yeah, this isn't one of them.


This story picks up from the moment in New Moon when Jacob has driven Bella home after the cliff diving incident, right before he catches the scent of Alice. Only in this telling, Alice wasn't looking, so there's no sudden appearance at Bella's house, no Rosalie calling Edward and sending him on a suicidal mission to Volterra, and no reason for Bella to do anything but believe that Edward didn't love her anymore. This is simply a story of what might have happened if everyone stayed mostly in character and Edward's return was delayed. Yes, delayed. Because we all know that he was "this close" to coming back on his own anyhow.
So what would have happened if Bella had tried to move on with her life?  Would she have found happiness with Jacob?  And would Edward be too late?

* First in a series of stories that tell of Bella and Jacob during Edward's absence, Bella's start at college, and the Cullens' eventual return.

~I thought of Jacob’s warm arms wrapped around me, his infectious laughter, and his ability to keep me from falling to pieces again… The pain choking my heart relaxed and I could breathe.~


~“More than anything,” I whispered, not caring what I'd just agreed to. When it came to Bella, it didn't matter what the question was. I just wanted.~

Winner of:

Best Author, Most Romantic, Favorite Jacob, Most Suspenseful, & Best WIP in the Wolfpack Awards | Best Non-Canon Pairing (Incomplete) and Best WIP in the Moonlight Awards | Best During the Series in the Razzle Dazzle Awards | The Storyteller Award in the Shimmer Awards | Best JacobxBella in the Silent Tear Awards | Best Jacob Point of View in the Twilight Twins Awards

Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Romance, Young Adult
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: A Blazing Sun, 108.9, Jacob Black Wins the Girl
Chapters: 76 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 163880 Read Count: 36032
[Report This] Published: 28 Jan 2010 Updated: 12 Sep 2010
Reviewer: london spam Signed
Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Dilemma: Bella's POV

Bella seems to be dealing with her feelings and the reality of the situation much more directly than in the book, even though she still acknowledges that she's confused.


I'm very interested in the story line and the deliberate approach taken to explore the possibility of Edward returning without the Volterra drama. Was it Edward in the woods?...

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Dilemma: Jacob's POV

I like how realistic Jacob is about the situation and how well he reads Bella. Even without knowing that she lights up before a crash because she sees Edward, Jacob very clearly sees that she's still in love with Edward and he respects that she isn't ready.


This is such a solid foundation for both characters. I look forward to seeing how they develop and how much headway Jacob makes with Bella before Edward returns.

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Moments: Bella's POV

This was so incredibly accurate that I'm actually feeling Bella's outrage and sympathy for Jacob at the same time! I'm glad it went this way because the beginning of this chapter was sounding like Bella was really making the case for Jacob away from Edward. I'm sure Bella now sees there are different kinds of danger and Edward was always upfront about it and aware of his restraint on various levels. It is so cannon for Bella to know realize sexual restraint is included among them.


Let's see Jacob's version of events.

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Moments: Jacob's POV

Obviously Jacob know nothing about Bella's sexual history, or lack thereof, and is left to piece it together himself. Poor, misguided Jacob is doomed to fumble through as any 16 year old boy. This is going to be a good lesson for Bella to realize just how good she had it with Edward, in some respects anyway.

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Perceptions: Bella's POV

Well, Edward wanted Bella to have all the human experiences. I hope he's happy! Though perhaps her outburst has shaken something loose in Jacob. Let's see his take. (Eww, I wonder how far he got with Lauren.)

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Persistence: Jacob's POV

Bella really is at a disadvantage since the boys she gets physical with can all smell her arousal. I can't imagine how bad it would have been for me if that had been true, regardless of all the other factors! Maybe she needs to explain that just because the body desires something doesn't mean the mind or heart is ready for it. It's clear Jacob is going to push his luck everytime. Whenever Edward gets back, the fact that is respects Bella very much is going to make him stand out that much more. Jacob just doesn't see it and it'll cost him, but the question is, how far will he get before Edward gets back and starts begging?

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Revelation: Bella's POV

Love Emily!! I especially like the bond she's forging with Bella outside of the pack and how she's prepared to be the woman in her life to provide guidance.

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Revelation: Jacob's POV

Well, at least Jacob knows what's what, but will he put that good advice to use? How will he react to what Bella thinks she wants?

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Date: 31 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Surrender: Bella's POV

Wow, Bella caved super-fast! It doesn't boade well for them if future agruments/misunderstanding between them have to be mediated by outside parties.