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My Sacrifice by Jennmc75 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 76]
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Bella Swan is starting her freshman year in college. How will her new life change when her past comes back to haunt her?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Mystery, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, My Favorite Stories, luv2write finished reads
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 60492 Read Count: 15950
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 22 Jan 2010
Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Wow, Bella is ready to give up her life to this killer to save her loved ones... It makes me wonder why this killer is after her and why she is giving in to him. Reading on!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it.  All will be revealed in due time ;)  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

Well Bella has Edward on her mind! I wonder who called Bella 'Sugar'?



Author's Response:

LOL, can you blame her?!  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

Well I hope that was Jasper calling Bella sugar and not the bad guy.  I live in Oregon and my daughter lives in Portland. I've been to the downtown Saks. I don't think I could survive an Alice shopping trip! LOL! Love how caring Tommy is, calling Bella every morning to check on her dreams. Edward was pretty sweet to rescue Bella. Enjoying! 



Author's Response:

I've never been to Oregon.  I did all my research online.  I would be tired with very sore feet, but I would love a shopping trip with Alice :)  Tommy is such a sweetheart.  I based him off a dear friend who is for all intents and purposes my little brother.  I loved writing this Edward.  It was so easy to write Sweetward as so many people have called him.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

I forgot that Mike had a Southern accent.... So who is the stalker? Mmmm.  Soccer playing Edward is pretty hot! I laughed when Bella teased Edward with Em. Like your sweet Edward. Enjoying.



Author's Response:

I couldn't resist soccer playing Edward.  LOL, of course I wrote that chapter during soccer practice for my son and thought, "Hmm, Edward needs to play soccer :)"  I almost left out Bella and Em teasing Edward.  It seemed very forward of Bella, but decided it showed how comfortable she was with all of the Cullens.  *sigh* Sweetward.

Thanks so much for reviewing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

Well at least Bella had a nice birthday. It was good to meet Tommy, it must be hard for him with his mother dead and the stalker James. Why hasn't she gone to the authorities?? Does she have a restraining order against him? I guess there's still a lot of blanks to be filled.  I am glad that Edward and Bella talked. So Edward feels the same as Bella and he feels the sparks and the pull. Taking it slow is good. I loved it when Bella talked to Rose and Alice about how safe and protected she felt with Edward. Safer than with anyone else. So I wonder what Rose is going to tell Tanya? She sounds like trouble. (claws...)   Enjoying.



Author's Response:

It's hard for Tommy losing his mom, but he wasn't as tormented as Bella by James.  He is more bothered that Bella's life was so disrupted by James and still is.  Bella has been through all of this with the authorities concerning James and feels it won't help.  Plus, she doesn't want to draw any attention to herself.

How can you not love Edward and feel safe with him?  You know Rose has Bella's back ;)

I'm glad you are liking the story.  Thanks so much for your reviews.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

Oh! Now I feel bad thinking that Tanya would be trouble. Good twist, I never thought she would be killed...by James, I bet. Like seeing Bella and Edward getting closer. First kiss for them....really first kiss for Bella. I worry about the gang...I am sure they are all in danger. I keep thinking about the prologue.... Love all the TW references. Renee's death really sucked. So they do have a restraining order, but James is too elusive. I'm surprised Charlie didn't have Bella disapear for awhile.   Enjoying!



Author's Response:

I didn't want huge drama with Tanya.  I needed someone to be killed and it just fit that it would be her.  James is a sneaky little bastard so restraining orders really don't mean anything to him.  Even if Charlie wanted Bella to disappear he felt she would be safer with him and he couldn't just up and leave his job as Chief of police.

You are completely awesome for reviewing :)

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

Oh I think Edward feels the same way as Bella. She picked up on him saying 'Love' to her...he loves her! Well Edward won over Charlie, Tommy's friends and stuck up for Bella against Amy. Looks like the Swan kids are falling in love!



Author's Response:

This was such a fun chapter to write.  Eddie is one smooth operator.  He knows the way to a woman's heart is through the ones she loves.

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Bonus: A Father's Sacrifice - CPOV

Sweet look at Charlie and his love for his daughter.



Author's Response:

This was my first venture into writing Charlie and I loved it.  He is such an interesting character.  There's nothing better than an overprotective daddy who is truly a teddy bear deep down.  I know you're probably tired of hearing it, but your reviews are greatly appreciated.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 8

Edward was so romantic and so sweet when he told Bella he loved her. I love that Bella asked Esme to be her 'mother' so she could confide in her. I can see the wheels turning in Bella's head...she's worried about the safety of her loved ones and she fears she will never be happy....sigh.



Author's Response:

I'm such a sap.  I love all things romantic.  Sweetward just wouldn't be the same if he wasn't romantic.  Poor Bella needs that role of mother in her life desperately.  Isn't it just typical Bella to be worried about everyone else's safety and well-being above her own?  Thanks again for the great review.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 10

How is James watching them? Why haven't they closed the school down? So Bella is preparing for her escape so that James will go after her.



Author's Response:

All will be revealed about James in due time.  Now wouldn't it make too much sense to close the school down?  Of course this is fiction and that doesn't work with my plot ;)  LOL.  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 9

Loved the costumes.  How is James always there and watching? James is way too creepy.  I can feel the tension building.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  The costumes were so much fun to fine.  James is a sneaky, slimy snake, and yes, he is extremely creepy.  Thanks so much for your reviews!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 12

Love how Bella is standing up for herself...but she's playing with fire. I bet Edward is going crazy.  James kind of gave some personal information to Bella.  He is totally losing it.



Author's Response:

Bella just wouldn't be Bella if she didn't play with fire.  Yes, poor Eddie is going crazy.  LOL, I don't think James ever had it to lose.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 13

Yay! Edward to the rescue. Silly Bella thinking she could pull this off and forgetting her phone. Thank goodness James is dead...will they find Victoria?



Author's Response:

Nothing better than Edward riding in on his white horse to save the day :)  Obviously Bella wasn't thinking too clearly, and thank goodness for that.  Yes, James is dead.  He will not rise from the grave.  Now, Victoria...you'll just have to wait and see.  Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 14 - EPOV

Enjoyed your story. Thank you for writing!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked My Sacrifice.  It was my first endeavor into writing and I learned so much from it.  All of your reviews were wonderful and appreciated more than you could ever know.  Again, thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1624470
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 26 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 45

Oh Damn!! Edward has it all wrong...he saw Carlisle's care for Bella as love...we know it as his need to possess her for his own. Sigh. I'm afraid that Edward and Bella are going to have a rude awakening from this sweet bubble they are in right now. I wonder if Bella remembers that birthday? The boy Edward was like 'my' Edward. I hope he stays strong, and believes whatever Bella says to him.  They both need to remember their love for each other and how special it is.  Thank you for writing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 07 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 46

Bella missed an opportunity to tell Edward about her fears regarding Carlisle.  I am glad though that Bella did tell Edward she didn't like being held down. They do need to keep talking. Edward needs to remember to discuss all aspects of their life with Bella. I am sure Edward was just wanting to get married as soon as the house was completed, but he needs to discuss these things with Bella first. The making love without protection...Edward's a doctor and he knows about these things, and he should know if Bella is taking any birth control. I know Edward is trying...but I think he still has some control issues going on. Oh gods...here comes Carlisle and his plan to take Bella away from Edward. I wonder how he will react when he sees the engagement ring and knows Bella is no longer a virgin? Will it ruin his plans and he will give up or will it just make it easier for him to do what he wants. There is the matter of Bella's age and Carlisle's guardianship. Sigh! Thank you for writing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 09 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 49

I am glad that Bella feels she doesn't want to give up. I am hoping that Edward will return again to Bella's 'my Edward' after the guests are gone. I am hoping that Edward has just been putting up a front and he really isn't reverting to 'old Edward'. No one should ever have to go throught what Esme did. Her story is so sad. She is such a strong woman.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 10 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

Oh I am so happy that Carlisle is dead. I would love to know where Esme planted his ashes. Now there is nothing holding Bella there. I hope she goes away to college and has a life...and then if she wants she can come back to Edward. I know that she loves Edward, just as he loves her, but things have been so twisted for her. She's been like A POW.  She needs time. Let's hope Edward loves her enough to let her go.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

I am so happy for Bella. Edward had the courage and love to let Bella go. She left with her Aunt and Uncle and now she's in college. This is the life that Bella dreamed of. It may not be the perfect life...she still has so much past to deal with...but she is working on finding herself.

Edward has been waiting so patiently for this date. (after canceled date) Bella and Edward are having a first date...that is so good!

I like how Bella used the money for the shelter and Esme and Alice are a big part of it. I am glad they are moving on in a Carlisless world.

Thank you for writing.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Epilogue

Bella's Edward. Sweet ending. I loved the gate going down. Esme finding love and Bella and Edward finding happiness together. Thank you for writing.

Dance with Me by AgoodWITCH Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 206]
Summary:

Edward, a well know author, starts working at Bella's bar to help with research for his next project. But as circumstance pushes them together, and feelings grow into something serious, Bella's afraid her past will change the way Edward feels. AU/AH/Canon

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 94430 Read Count: 55041
[Report This] Published: 19 Feb 2010 Updated: 26 Feb 2010
Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Research

Enjoyed this first chapter. I liked the way you set it up. Already like Bells attitude.  Reading on!



Author's Response:

Thanks...I'll be leaving short responses unless answering a specific question, sorry I didn't ge back to you sooner.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: An Officer and a Gentleman

LOL! Bella took Leah's advice and fired Edward so they could date. Oh and it was good that Edward walked Bella home. Enjoying.



Author's Response:

The firing scene was fun to write, and the second chapter was the first lemon I'd ever written, so it was fun to go there.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Cleaning Up and Baring All

I wonder who robbed Bella? Will she find her ring? I enjoyed seeing Bella and Edward getting to know each other better. Bella had it rough...emancipated minor, a father that doesn't seem to care. What else is Bella hiding? Love Alice! Enjoying.



Author's Response:

Bella has had a rough life as you now know.  The ring is lost and the robber is just one of those things that never gets found out.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Drinking Games Sober and Shopping Sprees

Oh they both said their ILY's... I wonder what Bella was keeping from Edward about her feelings about Christmas and children... What was with Charlie? Why did he refuse to see Bella? Oh and Alice is a force of nature isn't she? I'd like to see Bella's NYC.  Enjoying.



Author's Response:

You'll be seeing her NYC in the sequel, which is up now.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Secrets, Questions, Lies, and a Partridge in a Pear Tree

Oh so how does Bella know Rosalie and what happened between them? Why is Bella afraid of driving in the snow...she does have secrets doesn't she? Can't wait to see what happens...though I am a little afraid! Enjoying!



Author's Response:

I love how you're going all detective on me with this one...

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Buried Under the Guilt

Ah poor Bella! Edward didn't take it very well did he? Perhaps they should have had this talk sooner, but like Bella said they haven't known each other very long...when do you bring things up like that in a relationship? I am hoping Edward was just surprised and will get over it. I am sure Bella is really hurt by this, but knowing her she'll just figure it's her lot in life to be alone....sigh!



Author's Response:

wow...I love how you have your own conversation in the reviews...its great, its awesome.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Another Country Heard From

Sounds like a bad time for Edward to not answer his calls. So everyone gave Edward some tough love. I liked Leah. She's direct and a good friend to Bella. Edward needs to figure things out. It is a decision...I mean Bella could still get cancer. Can he deal with that? Enjoying.



Author's Response:

I wanted Leah and Bella to be like sisters because she's the only one who has been there for everything!  You're right, he has to think about that...I'm not sure how he would react to that...

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Limbo, Lunacy and Self-Loathing

Poor Esme! I hope she will be ok. Bella is there for them...she knows exactly how they feel.



Author's Response:

Bella supports them because she knows how bad it can get and wants to be there.  Love how you review practically every chapter, if not every one.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Someone to Watch Over Me

So limbo it is.  I think Edward is back for Bella, it's just too difficult with Esme being hurt so bad. I think this does take precedent...at least for now.



Author's Response:

Edward needs for Esme to be okay so he can't deal with much more, but answers come quickly.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Way Beyond Empty

Loved Edward being a little jealous! Glad he realized that there was nothing to worry about. Let's hope Edward and Bella keep each other happy.



Author's Response:

Jealous Edward is really funny. 

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Finding Inspiration

Yay Esme is home! Oh and Edward's note and the request of a date....so sweet! I think Edward may be a damn good writer! LOL! Enjoying.



Author's Response:

I love that you enjoyed the request for a date and that you think he's a good writer.  ;}

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Indescribable

Good chapter! The date was wonderful and Bella and Edward talked. They were honest with each other. Sweet.



Author's Response:

They needed to have that conversation.  It was important, but they had to be in a good place to have it.  Thanks for the reviews

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Positively Negative

Bella's planned date was sweet too...loved the song. Life is continuing on for them...book writing, new bar plans...I am enjoying watching Bella and Edward fall deeper in love.



Author's Response:

They're finding a way to grow as individuals while working together as a couple, it is  a beautiful thing!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 15: When a Stranger Calls

Oh I'm wondering if the calls are from Charlie...like he's calling from different phones at the police station...but I don't know why he wouldn't talk to Bella. So I'm probably not right. Bella should report this to the authorities and let them get to the bottom of the calls. Enjoying.



Author's Response:

Once again the conspiracy theories crack me up...

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Spooning in Forks

Oh poor Bella. It's a sad day when your parents die. You are the one left to carry on. Will Bella keep Edward near her or push him away?



Author's Response:

Its a hard thing to be the oldest member of your family...or worse the last member, but she's got Edward to lean on.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Some String and a Bag of Oats

Well at least Alice seemed to have a good time...Leah too! Yeah...poor Jasper! LOL! Oh and I'm glad Bella didn't pull away...marriages???? Enjoying.



Author's Response:

The girls had a blast and Edward got something out of it.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Sixpence for the Richer

I love all the pictures that you include with the chapters. The dresses, and now the sixpence and the ring. Oh and Bella and Edward are moving in together equally. I love that Esme is so sweet to to Bella. Bella needs Esme. I'm sure the wedding will be wonderful. Enjoying.



Author's Response:

Edward's family takes her in and she does need it.  The pictures are something I found while writing on the other site and I had to create an album, but now I get to put them at the bottom so more people see them.  I'm a really visual person, so it helps to show you guys what I was thinking about.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Wedding Bells!

I love the idea of Leah being the surrogate. It would be perfect. Oh and Bella finally letting Edward see her and touch her where no man's tongue has gone before. LOL! Wonderful! Love the whole wedding scene with the interchanging POV's. Enjoying.



Author's Response:

This is one of the most talked about chapters.  Between the lemon and the surrogacy thing...which is a major part of the sequel.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 20: The Great Real Estate Search

Loved the floor plans and the pictures! Oh Bella and Edward are getting their own place with room for a baby. I love that this story, isnt't crazily angsty. I think you deal with some realisitic problems...cancer and loss. But you don't drag the angst out for chapters and chapters. Thank you! Enjoying



Author's Response:

I try to make it as true to life as possible, sometimes things are angsty for a while buit other times to drag it out makes it worse, so I try to balance it. Glad you appreciate it.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Without You

Love how Esme and Carlisle have included Bella into their family. I can't believe how crazy busy their lives are. Oh and Cartier...is there a ring in Bella's future?! Enjoying.



Author's Response:

There lives will continue to get even crazier, a ring before the end of the story??? Methinks it is possible...

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Little Things

Enjoyed your story! Thank you for writing.



Author's Response:

Thanks, your reviews were great and I loved the feedback.  The sequel, The Family You Make, is in progress on this site.  Have a great night.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Taking place in 17th century Europe, Princess Isabella, only daughter of King Charles I of Spain, faces her fate as her arranged marriage to Prince Edward, future King of England, approaches.  The Prince is known for his indiscriminate cavorting with the ladies of his land, leading the Princess to fear that she will suffer the same fate as her mother and many other queens before and since, to be trapped in a loveless marriage to an unfaithful husband.  Will Princess Isabella ever find happiness while bound to the fate of her birth? AH/OC/Eventual Lemons

 

 

Warning: This will be an NC17 story for later chapters.



Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Finished, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, mamih's favorites, TBR
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 92977 Read Count: 372980
[Report This] Published: 20 Feb 2010 Updated: 20 Jun 2010
Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 26 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Bliss

I had to come over here to read the uncensored version. I didn't realize it was censored or I would have started this story here first!

Edward was a skilled and tender lover. Bella's first time was not without pain, but it was most definitely a night for both of them to remember! I love the way you wrote Edward's emotions. His love and his need to control the lust he felt for Bella, afraid to scare her.  Enjoyed!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 26 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Altering Plans

"As the meeting wore on, Edward watched in fascination as his wife took in all of the information discussed while the other wives found seats across the room, looking bored and wanting to be elsewhere.  Her eyes studied the maps and marked locations from afar with curious eyes, her sharp mind working nonstop." I loved watching Bella show her intelligence. She kept it from her father, but she couldn't keep it from her Tony...and he is pleased. It is too bad they have to leave so soon...but I am looking forward to England. Oh and Jessica is a jealous fool and Charlie is still an ass! Enjoying. 

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 26 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Bon Voyage

I wonder what te real world is going to do to their married bliss? These two were able to extend their honeymoon throughout the journey to England. Merry old Britain...a new world for Bella to discover. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 26 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: A Foreign Shore

There's always a war looming somewhere isn't there? Sigh.

Did we see a bit of Jealousward when Garrett kissed Bella's hand? If he was bothered by that...wait until he really sees someone flirting with his wife. LOL!  Enjoying!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Fantasy Fulfillment

This interlude at Nottingham is turning into an extended honeymoon. The lovemaking outdoors was perfect, both feeling it as a fulfilled fantasy of Italy and their hill. Very sweet and hot. Their love comes shining through. Enjoyed.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Presentation of Future Queen

Back to the real world. Edward seems pretty anxious about his past conquests and what they may do to hurt Bella. Bella noticed them too. I hope they talk about this, though this is Edward past, it could affect their future. I love the secret code they devised to remind each other of their love.  Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 14: The Demands of Duty

"Edward slowly leaned down to capture the lips he had been teasing lovingly with his own, savoring the subtle sweetness.  It pained Edward to leave his Bella, but he also knew that this would not be the first time that his duty would force them to spend time apart.  His only hope was that these separations would be few and far between." This is so difficult for both of them. They are the futur rulers and also ambassadors. They will always have to put duty first before personal wants or needs. Enjoying the way you are telling this tale.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Confidante

Gossip is an ugly thing that sometimes grows a life of it's own. I hope Bella can stay immune to their words. It's wonderful that Carlisle confided in Bella letting her know his plans for abdication and her insertion into the strategy meetings. Very progressive of King Carlisle. I can understand Edward's frustration. His family and country seem to be so much more enlightened that that of France. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Deceptively Beautiful

Carlisle keeps true to his word and Bella gets to sit in on the audience. She decided well with the man who wanted to start the school. Oh but I can see that Tanya is going to be a thorn in Bella's side. I hope she can get together with Lady Rosalie without Tanya. So is Bella pregnant already?! Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 17: The Dog and The Cobra

Yeah, I would think that Bella would like to have Edward back in more ways than one. She misses him so and this whole situation with Lady Tanya sucks. I do hope that Tanya is sent home and banned from court...that probably would be too easy though. Bella does need to watch her back. Oh I loved mama bear Alice going after Tanya and then her and Rosalie's laughter afterwards. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: The Brewing Storm

So Bella was integrated into the council meeting and she contributed well, pleasing Edward most of all. So I am worried about Bella. I thought she might be pregnant, is it possible she's being poisened by Tanya? I hope it's the former. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Aftermath

What intrigue is in the wind? What is going to threaten them and their families? I am glad that Bella was pregnant and not being poisened. I am glad that Tanya is gone, though I'm sure she will have her spies about. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Banished

Good riddence to Tanya. She was really delusional thinking she could start rumors about Bella and not raise the wrath of Edward. I sort of feel sorry for Kate, she didn't have a choice in what she did. I like Rosalie and Emmett certainly does too! Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Diplomacy and Alternative Forms of War

Even after she's gone Tanya's bitterness still lingers. Sigh. So Bella wowed the Italian ambassadors. This war that is looming needs to be handled with diplomacy. Maybe it will keep it from happening.  The painting of Bella that Jacob painted and sent her was so sweet. He is such a good brother to her.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 22: A Snake Hiding in the Garden

I wonder who the snake in their midst is? I have a feeling that the royal women will find out! I am sure their men would be freaking out if they knew though! LOL! Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Christmas Eve Surprises

I was hoping that Jacob would be able to visit soon! Not only Jacob, but Renee too! This will be  happy Christmas for Bella. I am glad the war seems to be over before it started. There will always be people wanting to stir up trouble for power and money. Bella and Edward saw that clearly in the faces of the advisors of the court. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Clandestine Meetings

So I wonder who Tanya will name that will end up being the person who killed Newton? Will it be someone that will totally surprise them? One of the counselors? Some of those men did not seem happy at Bella and Edward's news of an heir, or that she will be prominent in the political talks. I wonder what Tanya's fate will be? I thought it good and clever of Bella to send for Edward to hear the ladies talk with Tanya. It shows trust. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Manipulation and Punishment

So James...eh! I loved Bella setting him in his place and telling him he would soon be 'worm food'. All of Tanya's family were in on it or coerced. I think it the judgement was just. King Calisle could have killed them all to make an example of them. Hopefully they will be broken enough to not try any retribution. So it looks like Edward and Bella will be taking over England soon. That's good and bad. They will be able to reign as they want, but it will also be a heavy burden. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Embracing the Crown

I had wondered when Renee thought Bella was showing a lot more than she did at the same time in her pregnancies. So twins. I am going for a boy and a girl. The best of both worlds! You've already picked names...so I won't go there! Bella are now King and Queen. Alice is having her baby! Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 27: A Critical Choice

Poor Bella having to go through Alice's difficult birthing as she waited for her own children to be born. But Yay! Alice came through ok and has a lovely little girl. I liked the name too! Yes, it's all about finding balance. I am sure Bella and Edward's love will keep them on the right path.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 28: The Birth of Two Heirs

A Prince and a Princess delivered safely! I love the names. Enjoyed.

I liked the excerpt from The Children of Creation.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Balancing Duties

This was a sweet chapter showing Bella's struggle to leave her children and become the Queen again. Edward is so good to her and I love the emotions you show in both of these characters. I have enjoyed this story.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Epilogue

Very sweet Epi. I enjoyed your story. Thank you for writing.

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995606
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Yay! No one was seriously hurt. However...I think the trauma is going to stay for awhile. I was so proud of Bella...she was so calm and collected after her early stuttering. She was amazing. I am glad you wrote a strong Bella! I also enjoyed all the drama and suspense of these last two chapters.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Edward's senses danger doesn't he? His Domsense...Protectivewardsense is twitching. I thought the 'play' nite was a good thing for them to do.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Damn...hit the panic button Bella! I don't want anyone to be hurt!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I enjoyed the beginning. Both seem to have fiery personalities. I like that Bella talks right back at Edward even though he is famous and devastatingly handsome.  Reading on!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Where Bella is staying sounds lovely...the town and the Villa. I am enjoying reading Bella's thoughts and how she feels about Edward...just Edward...not the famous man.

Bella sounds as though she had an unhappy life...her father and alcoholic and it sounds as if Jacob was about the same. Oh and he hurt Bella. That makes me angry! I hope Jacob got his, and didn't get away with it. Or did Bella just leave? Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Love their banter and the building UST!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

The body shot scene was so hot! The Ust just boiling off both of them!

It was interesting to hear how Edward came into the BDSM scene and that Jazz was part of it too. I laughed when Edward found out about Alice being a sub and punching Jazz in the face! LOL! No more scenes together! It is good that they can talk about their lifestyle together.

So when are Bella and Edward going to give into this lust? Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

The morning after the tequila body shots was a bit awkward for Bella, though she did enjoy it. Jealousward shows up at the market. The meadow sounded lovely with the stream running through it. Thoughts of Jacob...he was terrible and cruel. Bella really freaked out when Edward called her his Pet. I am guessing Jacob called her that. I feel bad for Bella thinking  how she was interested in BDSM caused her problems with Jake and she was a freak. I am glad that Edward told her she wasn't.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

So Bella found out who Esme was. LOL! I liked that as Edward explained his life style to Bella he also was angry at Jacob. Yeah...what Jacob did was abuse and was not done with care for the other person. Bella is interested, but she's afraid too. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Edward is calling Bella, 'Love' already. He has it bad. Bella has a lot to learn and Edward is going to have to be patient. Hopefully Jasper and Alice will help. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

A very emotional day for Bella. She has a lot to learn. This is something Bella wants, but she has no experience and D/s is a very emotional relationship. Enjoying.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I think Bella's feelings about whether what they were doing made them unnatural. I think that Edward gave her a good answer, but I think it's something Bella is also going to have to come to grips with herself. She has some baggage and I think that Edward is going to have to be careful. Their last session did go wonderfully!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I love that Bella has a fan crush on Jasper Whitlock. I loved her blush when she met him. Alice is really a force isn't she? I was happy that Bella stood up for herself...well as much as you can with Alice. They are all getting to know one another.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

It seems to me that Edward is being a Dom all the time. He is jealous and possessive. I do think they need to talk. Are they doing D/s 24/7? He should have informed Bella that she was his sub before they went out. I think Edward has some adjusting to do too.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Rosalie is a bitch! She doesn't realize what she's doing to Bella. Bella has been abused and Rosalie's words are hurtful.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Poor Bella has one disapointment after another. Her parents are non-existant, her ex boyfriend abused her and now her friend has moved in with her enemy and didn't bother to tell her. Just left her high and dry. Bella has a lot of abandonment issues and Edward needs to keep telling her he is there for her. So I wonder when we will get to meet Angela and Lauren...and Jacob.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

No wonder Bella left. Edward left her and he was out of control before. Bella was frightened of Edward. She wasn't wearing his collar and yet he treated her like she was wearing it. He said he didn't want to be 24/7 yet he seems to be that way. They need to talk....if he can find Bella.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

James and Vicki are definitely...EW! Riley seems interesting and I wonder if he is taking Bella as being off the market seriously.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Loved the ceremony. If Bella remembers all her 'words' she should know she needs to tell Edward about Jim. He is definitely a creep and he's up to no good. I wonder how Alice and Jasper are? Alice seemed sad.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

I am glad that they talked. Both had concerns about the whole 'Jim' thing and how Bella feels unworthy of Edward. I think the talk went well. This is so overwhelming for Bella. I think some for Edward too. This love they have and then the D/s complicates it all. Bella is afraid of losing herself and she's used to being independent.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

So I wonder how the paps and dating a famous actor is going to change Bella's life?!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

So Jim = James. That's bad news. Bella has so many insecurities and issues right now. I think she totally interpreted Esme's tears. I think they were happy tears.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

So Bella has decided to become the best sub for Edward. I think Edward is right, Bella has come so far from the beginning. They still have a ways to go...but they keep talking. That is good.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

Little Bean! I thought Rosalie might be pregnant! It seems rather simplified that Edward could spank the trauma out of Bella...but maybe so? I love Emmett!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 45

I liked this chapter. It really showed the depth of Bella's pain. Her loss of both parents when Renee left  and what that did to her. Carlisle is right about the addictive cycle. Bella has to conquer that. Every time she's upset she throws up...or doesn't eat. 

I chuckled about the fact that Esme knows too about their lifestyle...but then since Carlisle knows...so would Esme, they share everything. Now Charlie knows! He was pretty accepting of it too.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

I got teary-eyed over the Christmas exchange between Bella and Charlie. So bittersweet.  These Cullen's are loveable!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

I am glad Bella is angry. Edward is being unreasonable. I know Bella kept something from him, but she was going to tell. I think he's being an asshat. I agree with Carlisle, I think Edward took this too far.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

I am happy that Bella and Edward are finally talking and opening up to each other. They both need to do some growing up! I think Bella is right though, they will get there! I loved that Edward finally put those three witches to rest and stuck up for Bella! It was a good New Years Eve!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

These two can't get a break can they. They keep trying to get it right...both going to therapy, trying to work out their fears and this happens. It seems to me that Billy shouldn't have a leg to stand on. Jacob did break in and did hit Bella. I was glad that Edward went and talked to Jasper and Alice. Poor Alice. Edward did abandon her. I hope that Alice and Jasper work things out.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

Yay for Bella! She finally told Renee off. I hope that Renee stays out of their lives. I think therapy with Paul is going well. Bella and Edward do have a challange...with their issues and relationship. Sometimes I think Edward is too dominent, even when Bella isn't collared. What they did today with Bella getting to pick was a good thing for both of them...a stretch.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Edward writing a score to a movie would be the perfect thing to keep him in the business and trying something new. I see Bella and Edward making great strides in their relationship.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

It must be nice to be so talented, rich and good looking! LOL! I know Bella and Edward have their issues, but they are getting better. It's an exciting time for both of them. That is if Bella will let herself be excited! Oh and did Dr. C. punch Riley?! LOL!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

I know I could never live this lifestyle! LOL! Too damn painful!

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 07 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

I can see Edward's explanation of why he uses the hairbrush...Bella wants and needs that type of control. It's just not for everyone!

Poor Em! Course Rose didn't help with her retort about brain damage! LOL! I am glad that Bella and Carlilse got Em back on track with his wife!

Loved the ring and the proposal.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 07 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

There was an awful lot going on in this chapter. Engagement, missing Edward, art show... No wonder Bella kind of hit a wall. I can't imagine what it would be like to sell part of yourself. I think for Bella that's what selling her paintings were like. She put a lot of herself into them and now they are gone. At least she knew she had to go to Paul and then he sent for Edward. Edward and Bella were just out of tune there for a bit. This time alone will help them reconnect.

Reviewer: marijee Signed
Date: 07 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59

Loved the end! Bikerward and Bikerella! Bella pushing Edward up against the car telling him he was such a tease! LOL! They keep talking...they stutter and then the move on. Life is complicated! Oh and Bella and her parents...sigh. Hopefully she can work through that. But yeah...they really did a number on her.