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Torn by Hanks Lady Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 97]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Banner by Mina Rivera

Family man Jacob has struggled to suppress his longing for guys, not always successfully, from a young age due to a strict upbringing. Outwardly he has everything, but what happens when he meets Paul on a business trip? Angst ensues and threatens the life has has made for himself.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Jacob/OC
Genre: Angst, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 115214 Read Count: 6092
[Report This] Published: 01 Aug 2013 Updated: 16 Oct 2013
Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstar
Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Cant wait to keep reading.

Poor leah. Does she seriosuly have no clue?

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

So glad Jake didnt leave. Round two in the morning? ;)

Jake is so awkward, but its still appealing to the story.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Paul definitely has confidence. Can't mistake that.

So we know Jake is bi, is Paul or is he just gay?

Jake at the end there already assumes Paul will be visiting him when he goes to NY. Why is that lol

Will there be any Paul POV's throughout the story?



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and for your reviews.  A couple of quick answers - Paul is gay and it's all from Jake's POV.

There are plenty of ups and downs ahead for Jake, so hope you will enjoy the ride :)

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I kept expecting something to go wrong with the machine order, the machines themselves, so Paul would have an excuse to talk to Paul lol

I'm eager to know if Paul is into women here!

So happy there will be a second visit ;)

Wouldn't that be awesome if Leah knew this whole time and didn't care as long as Jake kept it on the downlow. Or if Paul was bi also, made it a trio lol.

Yeah, Edward seems gay. Wonder if hes crushing on Jake. Hmmm..

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Well that answers my questions about Paul. Its always the good looking guys who are gay, damn it. Lol

I'm liking how easily Paul and Jacob get along. And this time was a lot better, hotter, and intense! Woowee!

:( I don't want Jake to leave. Such a huge let down.

Will Jake have bite marks or any bruises? 

I bet Paul did feel bitter about Leah.

When will Jake get to fuck Paul? :)

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I guess Jake won't be telling Leah anytime soon then. Was kind of hoping he would.

Ah, i knew Paul would drop in! I was hoping :)

I can't wait to find out if Edward knew or knows about Jake. Also if he is gay or not.

That was UNBELIEVABLY close. That image Jake put in my head, that Sarah could of walked in on Jake going down on Paul, is horrifying!

Poor Paul. So far he can't have what he wants. That must of really hurt to see Jake with his family.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Well Edward is gay. His gaydar must of been going off with Paul lol. Holy crap! Will Jacob tell Edward that he fucked with Emmett?! Lmao Small coincidence :) Good thing Jake is choosing to come out before some odd situation occurs and Emmett outs him or something.

I wanted Jake to tell Leah now, but guess its good she'll be taking Sarah away for a week. Paul and Jacob time ;)

I hope when the time comes, Leah won't bash Jake.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Oh yeah. Leah must know things aren't gonna end happy for her. If shes already snippy, man shes gonna blow up when Jake says hes gay. :/

Would Jake seriouslg let Leah take Sarah awa from him? Leah doesn't have that right.

I was wondering if they would show PDA. Lol at least Jake didn't take it negatively. Paul was funny though lol

How cute are they! :) In the car talking, eating. Can't wait til they get back to Paul's.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

H. O. T. Hot!

Now i know that Paul never gets fucked. Maybe Jake can change that. *grins evilly* :)

Is Paul having inner termoil? Fighting how he feels or just because Jake is not single yet?

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Oh man! This is gonna be good. Yeehee!

I was really concerned when Jake left Paul's because things didn't seem right with them two. And after that love making I was sadden that he decided to leave and Paul thought it be a good idea. But maybe it was a good idea. Lol

Did Leah already have it planned that she would be just dropping Sarah off at her parents? :0 lol Sounds extremely plausible.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Okay, something I'm not grasping is that Leah can't keep Sarah away from Jake. Even if this went to court, Leah would have to prove Jake an unfit parent and he isn't. So why does he keep wondering where Sarah fits in. He hurt Leah yes, and partly Sarah for his indesrection, but this has nothing to do with him as a father. He will continue to be her father and she will love him no matter what. Unless by some off chance this little girl is anti-gay. Doubt it. And Jake will make amends for cheating on Leah or at least try. Jake still has every right to see his daughter and call her.

Relieved Embry isn't disgusted by Jake now. Mad is understandable.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Okay, now Leah has gotten her 'revenge' or whatever you call it with Jake by not discussing about Sarah first. That better be it.

I like the idea that Emmett will be working there and Jake got to see him. Not that i hope to see conflict, just a nice addition to the story. :)

Embry is a good friend :)

I was kind of thinking and hoping that Paul could move to NYC and he could take the managers position. Lol To weird? :)

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

I remember my dad coming to pick me up and being spoiled by him. Not overly spoiled so it was okay. Lol It will be tough for a while, but things will turn to normal after a while.

I don't see why Sarah can't be told that Jake is with someone else. Well, okay, not now, but does Leah mean forever? :/

Thats such an awesome choice Jake has to move into his business up above it. Ideal.

I kind of keep thinking that Paul is not as happy with Jake as Jake is with Paul. Like maybe he is hiding something. Hope not.

Will Collin be just an added character or... a new love interest to someone, or a conflict among people? Cant wait to find out!

What happen to Sarah? :(

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Things will get better :) Things will get better :/ Things will get better :( Crap. I hope things will get better :'(

That was just sad. I thought Jake would knock on the door after hearing Paul. Things are just so fucked up.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Fuck. Heartbreaking. I'm kind of not surprised though Paul is with another guy. Still hurts though.

I'm happy that Leah gave Jake that speech.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Yeah fuck off, twink! Lol

So happy! Paul didnt mess with anyone, he talked with Jake and is giving him a second chance.

 

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Poor Embry lol Those awkwards moments of hearing your friend talk about being gay. Can't wait for him to meet Paul lol.

So its final. Leah and Jacob are divorced.

Wonder how long Leah will want Sarah away from Paul.

Oh gawd! I was so laughing at Edward at the club! Unrecognizeable.

I wish Jake and Paul hadn't left the apartment, waited all day for some lovin. ;) Jake should take charge for once though!

Oh yeah that carriage ride was funny. Who knew Paul would be the one to suggest it. Thats gotta be kind of funny but cute to see two big muscle built men in a carriage ride lol.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Happily ever after. The end! Lol Paul finally said it to Jake, everything seems right in the world now, so what could possibly happen with nine more chapters to go? :/

Lol Edward is so easy to embarrass :) 

I really was disappointed when Paul didn't say i love you back right away. But it was so adorable when he did.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I've been meaning to ask, just out of curosity. Why did you make Jake the 'bitch' in the relationship?

I dread them being apart too. So when will they be having that conversation about someone moving and such?? :)

I wonder how many times Emmett gets asked out on a date each day. Lol



Author's Response:

Thank you for all the reviews :)

In answer to your question, I have ideas in my head about which character is dominant in any given pairing and with Paul I always see him as the top unless he's with Emmett. Jacob I see as the dominant with Embry or Edward or Jasper but bottom to Paul or Sam. Just my quirky way of looking at it :)

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Collin was a trooper :) he did seem shocked though lol

So thats why Jasper was awkward when he talked about his job lol Nothing wrong with that.

It finally took Jake mentioning bareback in the heat of the moment. Lol  Did I understand it right as you wrote it. First Jake is saying how he wants to feel Paul properly, then Paul says, "I have too." Did Paul mean that he is itching to come in Jake? Or is a grammar mistake?

 



Author's Response:

When Paul said "I have too" he was responding to Jake saying "I've been thinking about it lately."

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Way to ruin that night. Damn. I hope Jake is okay. Will he end up in the hospital and Sarah shows up and Paul is there and an explaination is needed?

I love that Paul still took a test. 

I wonder how Paul was making Edward turn red lol

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

*sighs* I was so worried, I really thought you were gonna kill Jacob there in the beginning. THEN, I actually thought Paul walked out on Jake or something.

Sarah took the news very well. Shes not curious and have any questions?

Billy had a falling out with Leah? Man you sure have made this Billy hard to like. Wonder how Billy will feel when he finds out he travelled all that way to find out why Jake is in the hospital. And wait aminute! Billy's originally from Forks?! Could Billy know who Paul's family is?! Wow.

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

I dont like to see Paul or Jake cry :( Its so sad. I'm beyond thrilled that Paul will be moving to Jakes place. Bummer he had to be fired because of all the drama, but its working all out great for them.

Billy. Such a shame. How hes being with Jake and his choices and keeping his cancer a secret. Would he really want to waste his last year alive not talking to his son and his family.

Leah is a saint. When Jake gets out of the hospital, he should thank her with something big. Shes been amazing through all this.

Don't let the cops know that Jake is offering Mike free membership, it can be seen as bribery. :/

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Thats gotta be a pretty amazing feeling to know someone was in a coma but they actually heard you. And the death thing too, seeing your own body. *shudders* 

I'm gonna miss the heart monitor though lol I was liking how you added that to the story and his rapid heart beat and everyone could hear it.

Wonder how Paul and Sarah will get along. Hope they get along well.

Can't wait for Jake to join Paul back at THEIR home :)

Pauls right about the work thing with Jake. Wish Paul the best in his endeavour though.

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I almost forgot about Embry, lol. Where has he been. Will Marie let Jake slide after the ordeal he has been in? Lol

So Billy doesn't know Paul at all? Huge coincidence they are both from Washington. At least Billy won't be a complete douche.

Finally home! :)

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Awwww! haha Paul is just adorable with Jake and Jake is adorable with Paul as well :) love these two.

Lol I already agreed with the lady. The fine ones are gay ;)

Nice to see that Jakes members support him and are cool with Jake and the rest.

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Date: 31 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Such a great story. I love all the angst, love, drama, issues there were. So much lemony goodness tuat fit great with the plot :)

So happy Jake got a great happily ever after.

This is actually my first twilight story where Bella was never a character. And Edward was so non-canon it was enjoyable.

I enjoyed reading this story very much.

It would be cool if you did a fast forward, maybe a decade to see how everyone ended up. Just as a fan hoping lol

Oh also this is my first story here on TWCS, :), I came on to find another story and got swept up perusing the site first and found yours and just started reading. Lol Gotta go find that story now lol

Thanks!



Author's Response:

Thanks again for reading - amusing that you came upon this by accident. I'm glad you enjoyed it. My main account is on Fanfiction but the majority of the stories on there are on here too :)