Reviews by marmite2010
Summary: Past Featured Story

Summary - Bella is kidnapped by a beautiful stranger that cannot kill her, but hates that a human can have power over him. Which road will he choose? When Jacob wants her, will that make his decision? Both men want to own Bella, however her heart only belongs to one. Which will have her in the end? Can Edward protect her from Jacob and his past, or will she eventually be consumed? 

 

 

 

Banner Created by the wonderful MsAmbrosia 

 

Vampires and Werewolves. OOC. Darkward. And every so often there shall be a sprinkle of the fluffy stuff. But mostly dark.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 122877 Read Count: 76213
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 29 May 2011
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 27: The Punishment of Isabella Marie Swan - Part One

HOW THE F IS BELLA GONNA GET OUT OF THIS?.

Can't  wait to  find out how the rest of the story goes. It's not near the end is it? I am really enjoying this, please update soon.

 



Author's Response:

Hehe i adore that i have provoked such a reaction, Bella will get out of it, i promise you that :)

and there shall be 45 chapters in total, and because i love this story so frickin much, there is gonna be a sequel :) xx

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Vampire, Edward Masen, craves someone's body more than her blood.  Can he ever see Bella as more than a pleasure giver?  Can Bella ever see Edward as anything other than a monster?

This story is intended for mature readers only (18 and over).   Subject matter could be disturbing to some readers.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, Fics to Read, My all time favorites, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49527 Read Count: 88020
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Sep 2011
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2010 Title: Invaded Existence

How much more can Bella take? She's gonna jump out of the bathroom window at this rate!, will the apple dumpling gang try to rescue her? or will Edward give in to his guilty conscious?.

 I am very intruged as to how this will go.

Summary:

Example entry for the Age of Edward Contest: Edward Cullen is the infamous mobster who happens to take it up with the chief of police, what would his motives for blackmailing the chief be? ExB Lemon, AH, OOC


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4874 Read Count: 926
[Report This] Published: 18 Feb 2010 Updated: 18 Feb 2010
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Loved it.

The Pool Boy by Lady Blue Knight Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 8]
Summary:

Bella lusts after the hunky man who takes care of her pool. Perhaps if she's lucky, she can persuade him to perform a bit more than just pool maintenance; AH JazzyBells.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4288 Read Count: 523
[Report This] Published: 02 Apr 2010 Updated: 02 Apr 2010
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 04 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

What a lovely short Lemon story  and very sexy!.  A clever and simple twist, I did not see that coming. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Banner by Salix Caprea

Thank you Salix Caprea for the lovely banner:

It has been four years since Edward left Bella in New Moon.  There were no werewolves and Jacob was never more than Bella's friend.  Bella has just graduated from college when Edward accidently crosses her path and finds himself being drawn back into Bella's life.  But Bella is not the same teenager he knew. She is a grown woman with a very grown up lifestyle.  This tells the story of how Edward, realizing he can't live without the love of his existence, and with the help of all of the Cullens, endeavors to win her back.  There are some laughs along the way.  The story is EPOV and rated NC-17 for sexual language and content. 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 47 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 117349 Read Count: 64699
[Report This] Published: 31 May 2010 Updated: 06 Aug 2010
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4-Incapacitate...Don't Decapitate

Fucking hell, how embarrassing.

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5-WTF?

 This is gonna be funnier than I thought.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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He met the girl of his dreams. She met the man of her nightmares. How far would you go for your obsession? AH/AU/OOC

For the BEYOND THE PALE contest-Third Place Voter's Choice Winner

Banner by Mehek18

 


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Emmett
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 44991 Read Count: 48122
[Report This] Published: 26 Aug 2010 Updated: 22 Sep 2013
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 26 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

This is the first FanFic where Rose and Emmett are not in love or a proper couple.  Thats novel.

 

 



Author's Response:

I'm hoping this inspires more Emmett/Bella stories.  :)

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

For some reason my review of chapter 1 did not go through last night so I am re-posting it.

OMG!  you know how to get your readers undivided attention don't you?   I read the Perfect Wife and the Jasper and Alice chapters so I know I'm in for a treat. 

Edward is dead  from the start, I'm not used to this and am mildly shocked.  I had the same feeling regarding the character change with Charlie in the PF he was an absolute horror and I admit to jumping over the some of the first 12 chapters. 

So our Emmett is in the Mob,  no wonder he dipatched  Edward so cleanly with his bare hands.   I like his sarcastic humour, calling Forks Spoons and all.  

You dove right in at the deep end, a powerful way to begin this latest and I hope long story.  I wish you and Khaizzmatik never stop writing FanFic.



Author's Response:

I love EP as well. She opened the door for all the mob stories. I just had to try my hand at it. I hope this story is a hit with readers.  I wanted to leave everyone guessing from the very beginning how Bella could have a happy ending.  The love of her life is dead at the hands of her husband.  That eliminates either as a possiblity for her HEA.  ;)

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Trapped, is all there is to say regarding Bella's future.   I am intrigued as hell to read where this story leads.  My conventional mind can only think of no career, more babies and depression that will come after the passive acceptance when she realizes she is married to the Mob.

Emmett must have used that  date rape drug to get Bella into bed what a bastard, and it's pretty obvious he had charlie killed. 

 



Author's Response:

I can tell you're someone who analyzes the evidence.  Wonderful!  Yes, Emmett drugged her to have sex with her the first time, knowing once they started he could manipulate her to continue. Yes, he had Charlie killed for three reasons - 1) he had influence in Bella's life since she's close to her father and could talk her into moving home  2) Charlie saw thru him when they visited and wasn't impressed by Emmett  3) you'll have to wait to find out this one.  :)

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 18 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Will Rose, I wonder, get Karma in this story?

 



Author's Response:

I'm a firm believer in what goes around, comes around

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Yes, I get there will be no HEA with Emmett and Bella.  I'm sad, cos I'm used to HEA's in FanFic land. [well, the ones I've read anyway].

I'm intrigued as hell to find out where this leads now.  I don't want to be spoiled, so don't be obliged to leave an answer but I have a hunch Emmitt's behaviour is going go down hill  now he has gotten his way.  Bella was leaving him that was for sure. She was onto him.

I wonder also if Edward's family and her friends will try to help her later on.



Author's Response:

I will only tell you that Bella will get a happy ending.  :)

Pets: Bebe by Maren Smith Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 172]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Welcome to Bebe’s world, where for centuries human beings have been the focal point of the exotic pets trade.  But now, the government has declared humans an endangered species, shutting off the supply from the wilds of Earth and leaving only those who are born into captivity available as pets.

Meet Bebe, taken from her captive mother at a tender age, she is now the companion of monsters.  She has been pampered, loved and cared for all her life.  She has never seen Earth, never known the hardships of life in the wild like the humans living in the nature preserves.  And yet, life is change, and for Bebe, there is no escaping this one irrefutable, universal fact: An overprotective parent is a good pet’s worst nightmare.

 


Categories: Original Fiction, Fantasy, Erotica, NaNoWriMo, Romance
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 106 Read Count: 10838
[Report This] Published: 11 Nov 2010 Updated: 05 Feb 2011
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2010 Title: Pets: Bebe

Good, but far too short. 

It was a lovely surprise when Sir and Ma'am appeared, apologise and offered to foster Bebe.  Although we don't know if they where doing so out of guilt or love.  There  was so much more to this story that could have been explored.

What exactly happened with Pani and Bach? I assume they stayed together.  I was shocked when Bach told Pani to get the hair brush in an earlier chapter and she was unhappy about it.  As we found out in a subsequent chapter they had been married for some years and he kept to the same master/pet relationship with her! I hope to God that crap stopped. 

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 26 Nov 2010 Title: Pets: Bebe

I feel really sorry for these guy's.  Please, somehow, give them a happy ending.

Tral is going to treat Bebe like a moron again isn't he? 

Bebe has spent the last 12 hours or so in the company of humans who have spoken to her like a human. That's the last time that is gonna happen.  Although that situation would most likely have come to grief, I can't help but feel depressed for the girl.

I have not read anything quite like this before.



Author's Response:

Yes, yes he is.  But if you can get through one more chapter, I think you'll like where the story heads.

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Pets: Bebe

8 chapters in 19 days! I love you!  I have a handful of stories that are my absolute favourites and I'm lucky if I get an update every 3 weeks out of all of them.

Well that's a lot covered in one chapter.  Tral has not had much help from his uncle, considering he has not learned much about human behaviour after all those years studying the men.  I'm worried he is going to hurt Bebe through his ignorance.

Will Bebe and Pani become confidants?

That Lemon was hot.  More please.



Author's Response:

Will do!

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Pets: Bebe

Wow, what the hell happens now?  that moved so fast.  Tral has dropped his uncle right in it.  who will look after Pani and Bebe? 



Author's Response:

Hopefully, I'll be able to write my way out of the problem.  This last chapter was written a different way, but it just didn't work right.  So I changed it this morning.  So here is the revised version and I hope to have the rest finished by the end of the week.

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Pets: Bebe

Wow! what a turn around.  I was so concerned about the men.  now it's going to get better for them in a way I never imagined or hoped.

Will Pani and Bach stay together? after all, they are husband and wife.  I cannot believe that does not mean anything, even in that place!

Can't wait to find out what happens next.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're enjoying the story.  The ending's been posted, so hopefully it'll live up to everyone's expectations.

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 18 Dec 2010 Title: Pets: Bebe

Looking forward to the new story VERY MUCH!.



Author's Response:

I think you'll be happier with it.  It's currently at 26 chapters, so it'll last longer. :)

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

 

In a world dominated by vampires, humans are forced to abide by the strict rules of the vampire government. Bella has never experienced life in an all-human world and one day the only life she knows shatters to pieces when she is kidnapped and sold to a vampire. She is unfortunately the object of the most ruthless, out of control, vampire‘s affection. Her life turns upside down as she moves to an all-vampire town. Will she have the strength to go on after all that she has endured her personal hell? Will the one special vampire heal her wounds as she struggles to live a life amongst vampires or will she become the victim of their most sinister instincts? Edward and Bella pairing, AU, OOC

Warning: This story contains explicit adult content, language, violence, vampire marking and blood play, Extreme Dark-ward, and murder.

Alternate version of the original story, Living Amongst Vampires. By IBELONGTOAVAMPIRE.

L.A.H, is co-written by Thaigher Lillie

Tkegl...Thank you!

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Horror, Sci-Fi
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89094 Read Count: 129729
[Report This] Published: 22 Nov 2010 Updated: 10 Oct 2014
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Taken

This has really taken off!  Cannot wait for chapter 6.



Author's Response:

Thank you!

And thanks for reading and commenting. We appreciate it =)

~Jells

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 8: The Forbidden Fruit

What a chapter, and what a story.  Much more compelling than your others, this is definitely my favourite.

I hope Edward and his horrible family stay that way for a good while, It's a bore when Edward turns all gooey as soon as the story takes off and I hope it has some interesting twists and turns.  Bella is quite strong and mouthy, I have a feeling that is going to get her into trouble!

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you =)

We're planning to keep Edward dark.  I agree, it's a bore when he turns sweet and gooey.

Thank you for reading and commenting. =)

~Jells

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Prepare to be Pissed

You hard working pair.  Best of luck with your tests and exams!  I'm sure you will do well. Put your careers first and make us beg and wait!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for understanding. The wait won't be too long. I'm itching to finish this chapter. lol

Thanks again

~Jells

Hunting party by Milk40 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 110]
Summary:

Bella, Rosalie, Alice and Esme are BFFs. While they're out camping together, they become the prey of unscrupulous hunters. A tale for adults with highly explicit sexual content. Rated M for all the things you can imagine, and maybe some you can't. Canon pairings.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 30882 Read Count: 17464
[Report This] Published: 24 Jan 2011 Updated: 26 Jun 2011
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Second chapter

Where IS this story going?

I'll have to read on to find out...........



Author's Response:

You shouldn't ask that kind of question about this story. It's just a little fantasy of mine that I wanted to share with my readers. But it will actually go somewhere. Just wait for the next chapters...

Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 09 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Fourth chapter

Edward has a lot of making up to do down the line.  He has humiliated Bella, threatened her and is not treating her respectfully.  Is it because he does not think much of her?



Author's Response:

Actually, he's madly in love with her. But we'll learn that only in the next chapter.

Planet Twilight by melanieintn Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 777]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

On a far distant planet, Bella and Edward find love. A true love in a modern society that steps back into the recesses of time,

where dominant males seek out submissive females to complete their households.

No vampires, but plenty of aliens. This story includes:

Edward/Bella, Carlisle/Esme, Jasper/Alice, Emmett/Rosalie, Marcus/Didyme and the majority of characters that are involved in the original series.

AU, in-cannon, lemons, E/B, A/J, R/E, C/E

Story Blog: http://planet-twilight.blogspot.com/

 

image made by GSRgirlforever

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance, Sci-Fi, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 65 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 174480 Read Count: 187879
[Report This] Published: 22 Mar 2011 Updated: 20 May 2011
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Rosalie Acts Up and Intros are Made

Edward is a humourless prig so far.  Bella and Alice are behaving like stepford girlfriends.  They are basically slaves.  Aren't they heartbroken at being taken away from their families?  or in shock?



Author's Response:

They have had four and 6 years to adjust, as you get further in the story you will see that their home lives weren't perfect.  Thanks for the review!

Fold Your Wings by Jadalulu Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1036]
Summary:

'The liberties he assumes with my body should enrage me, anger me beyond my own sanity. But it's just not that simple.' Encounters born of need. Consequences neither saw coming. Guard your hearts. Not the ExB you're used to. 

 


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites, Fics to Read, I Whitlock's read , Ageise02 WIP Reads, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 104224 Read Count: 143206
[Report This] Published: 18 Apr 2011 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: marmite2010 Signed
Date: 05 May 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

Wooo Hooo!  whats been going on with Edward, has he had therapy, has he changed?  His body language says he is not the same.  His arrogance and anger is gone and his tone is differential and polite.  Please! fill us in on the lost five years, I'm bursting with curiosity!

Bella is depressed and empty in spite of her career achievements. I mentioned on the Twilighted thread that she has probably bolted from the party and lost touch with the Cullens.

Going by Edward's different attitude, he is not expecting anymore abuse sex, I can't wait to read on!