Great chapter. I liked the interaction with Lamont, and Bella.

Edward is tougher, and Bella seems more submissive. I didn't like that Edward, in his thoughts didn't care if he hurt Bella who was already very sore from too much sex with him, wanted to get off and wanted to get her pregnant more. I wonder how long he will be out this time, a year, two? Nothing has changed. Oh and FYI, you mentioned in this outtake that family visits in prison were two hours long, but in the other outtake it was mentioned that they were one hour long. Just mentioning this in case you would like to make them the same. Great story. Great outtake of course.

Great chapter. Sad that Edward won't even talk to Sonny and Damion on the phone. He can be selfish sometimes even with his family apparently. Maybe that is too harsh? It would do so much for them to just hear a few words from him. I started reading the Epilogue and then realized that most of these outakes happen before the Epilogue so I am reading them first. I gather there will not be any inclusion in any of these final chapters/outtakes the lead up to the arrest of Edward. That's a shame. I really would have liked to read that. I had hoped that would be in the Epilogue but it begins after Edward has returned home from incarceration. Maybe it gets mentioned later in that chapter? I'll find out soon enough. If it is not there, maybe it could be another outtake? Anyway, take care.

Very touching and vivid. It made me tear up in places. I usually hate reading about someone giving birth, but I I got quite emotional reading this one. Beautiful. This was my favorite chapter so far. Thanks.

Can't believe I'm saying this but poor Jacob. Poor Bella too... she has lost another friend.

Watch your six, means to watch your back...I guess that is what you meant by ass? This chapter was really sad...been there and done that. I don't get why Edward punches his brother so much, or Aro for that matter. I guess because he knows they won't hit him back. So unfair. I'm surprised Carlisle and Edward are so close, since Edward is so volatile. Carlisle pushes so hard though; not the best time to push Edward I would say.

What a sweetheart. Who am I talking about? I think its obvious, hmm?

Alice is a real piece of work. She has a twisted sense of what it means to take care of someone you love. Bella had no idea what Alice had planned for her, poor girl. Bella is going to College because she wants to better herself, she wants out of this life... she sure as shit deserves to be loved, not to be treated as whore. Alice and Carlisle are both a couple of white trash low lifes. I hope Edward treats Bella right, and if not I hope Bella kicks him, his brother and her cousin to the curb.

So glad they have honesty between them, and that Bella is standing up for herself. I have to admit I am really liking this Edward and Bella; and really enjoying this story. I get the feeling Edward really has no idea how hard he is falling for our lovely Bella. He's going to fall so hard, a concussion is sure to follow. I for one am going to enjoy watching it unfold.

Made me cry...and smile.

They have these horendous fights, but maybe getting through this last one taught them something, like that they can get through it and end up letting the other in just a little more. It is like they are each other's drug of choice.

I hate when they have those childish fights. I thought there were some beautiful moments of tenderness between them, trust and adoration in this chapter. I sure hope she doesn't lie to him about where she is going. She will ruin the trust he has in her. She has to remember that trust is difficult for him and he met her more than half way with the telling her the truth about where he is and as much as he can about what he is doing. She has to remember that Esme and Carlisle's relationship is theirs and Carlisle lies to her about women. She and Edward can set different rules for themselves, and it would not be right for her to disregard them.

You don't review reply, so I have no idea if you read the reviews that are left for this story anymore. Too bad...it would have been nice. Anyway, the suspense in this chapter, even though I already knew Bella would be o.k., was palpable. Loved it. I also really liked that Edward did not shut Bella out while they were figuring out what to do about the Russian. So Bella and Aro are closer now; he has a hot voice to go with the face. I bet Edward will take him off protecting Bella now.

I really, really hated that Edward was so interested in that girl Gail. He actually imagined what it would be like to f*** her, and felt protective of her and I'm worried that you will have him do something stupid. I mean he was more than just attracted to her. I really like what he said to Aro about cheating not being worth hurting the one you love, etc. I am also so relieved that he spared Aro. I would like to know more about how that decision came about.Incidentally I am suspicious of Gail too, Gail who has red hair like maybe could she be Victoria and James could be the new bartender?

I am glad that Bella told Edward the truth about what Carlisle did, at least part of it anyway. I really hate how Edward treats his brother though; he almost killed him. Carlisle could have brain damage now.

I liked the combination of drama, humor, and love.

The Plot thickens...
I love it!

He should have sent a lower man to Virginia so he could take him out, or no that wouldn't work if the guy they meet usually meets with only guys he knows. So Edward should go to Virginia now so he has a cover story, otherwise Felix will know he was the one behind Marcus' murder and Aro's shooting. I really wasn't sure if Edward killed Aro or not. I really hoped all his talk of making Aro is second wasn't bullshit. He could have at least warned Aro that he would be shooting him to make the shooting look more plausible.

I thought Aro killed Alec and two of his associates? I wonder when he kills them? Or am I remembering wrong? I liked reading these chapters, its just that you would refer to, "all the shit that happened in the city last night", and I have no idea anymore what you are referring to at all. I have no idea what happened last night. I know that the Cullens are on vacation in Florida right now but I have no idea what happened last night. I guess I could go back to read the chapters that happened just before this one again, or I could just get back to the Epilogue and the Sequel and stop worrying about what I can no longer remember. I guess that sounds like a good idea. So...'on with the show'!

Great update; really gave a clear snap-shot of what life was like for Edward after his father sent him to live with his Nanny. It showed his soft side, giving money to his grandmother and being respectful and caring with her, and to a certain extent with his brother. Carlisle was an awesome big brother to him, and it was nice to see the beginnings of his friendship with Aro. Edward's biggest role model was clearly Marcus, which fed his need to feel important and wanted and helped fill his need to show his father - who sent him away - that he is doing great without him. So young Edward was basically a punk with daddy issues, a dispicable role model, a supportive big brother, a loving grandmother who could only do so much to reign her grandson in, and a good heart where his family was concerned, but for everyone else he's out for himself...end of story. Thanks for not including in this chapter Edward sleeping with Jane...thank God it only happened the one time. Yuck! Thanks for this outtake.

I was thinking the same thing as Aro... now Damion and Sandino can become a part of the other family...now that they are fully Italian. I sure hope Edward leaves it alone... the whole Aro and Bella thing.

I could really relate to Edward and Bella really when they were having their domestic argument. I love how coming together took his anxious knot away. I don't like that he is going to have Esme killed, and I especially don't like that he is sending Aro to do it. That is just so cruel to be sending Aro... for both of them. It somehow makes me feel better to know that Edward is going as well, but only if that means he will be the one to do the killing.

Well Bella can't babysit Alex forever. If she is stupid enough to allow Carlisle to have his way with her well she doesn't deserve to have a nice relationship with Mauro... and doesn't love him enough to be faithful. Her flightiness is driving me crazy. I really don't know what Bella sees in her other than that it must make her feel young to have this young girl confiding in her like a new best friend. I am so homesick for the beach from reading the last two chapters. Love how romantic Edward is with Bella. Please have Bella convince Edward not to kill Esme. Please! I know I am talking to myself here since, you have finished the story already and because I don't think you read these reviews. Anyhow....

Great!

Oh boy no holds barred on the drama in this one. Bella and her mother both acted like white trailer trash there, oh and Lauren too, and Bella wasn't even drunk. Highly entertaining. Don't get me wrong, Renee deserves for her daughter to stand up to her, and she certainly deserved to get kicked out, but I don't see why Edward didn't defend his wife and send her home with Lou or someone... just get her out of there before she ruined the dinner party. Emmett really shouldn't have brought her in the first place since she was not invited and she was drunk, but anyway, that wouldn't have been nearly as lively though. I DO have to say though when Edward pulled Bella into the washroom and told her he loved her, "more than stars in the sky", it made me smile. That was a beautiful way to end the chapter. I do so love when they tell each other how much they love each other. That stuff just never gets old.

Lots of sweet moments.

Kylie is so funny. I love that you include her paroting - humor - into the story. It really lightens each chapter, and some chapters really need that. I can't believe that sneaky Carlisle cheated Alex out of her birth-control. I also can't believe no one is reminding Carlisle that Esme's parents insisted on her marrying him and we all know how badly that turned out. Alex is pretty immature (doesn't know what she wants) and must have low self-esteem to stay with an abusive boyfriend before and now to allow herself to be railroaded into a marriage she doesn't know if she wants, and to quit her job just because her over-bearing parents, or is it her father who wants her to. Good story. Really enjoying it.

Poor Sonny, didn't have his Katie with him at the wedding. It would have been so nice for them to have all afternoon and evening together. I feel sad for Carlisle and especially Alex for probably losing their baby. That is just horrible. Alex is trooper keeping it together enough to be there for her new step children and being able to be happy on her wedding day when she is losing her first child in utero. Loved this story so much; I don't know if I loved this one more, or the first one? I think I will read Riders from Fan Fiction site. Thank you very much for sharing your writing and this story with us.

Now that was fun... well maybe not what Edward did to Chazz...now that was not so much. I love Chargers...especialy the new ones. I take it there is lots of room in the backseat?

I loved this sweet and sappy chapter so much. I was expecting it to be killing Esme and Uncle Swan, but that's not until the next chapter... well the uncle at least. It brought back memories for me of when I had bad dreams at night and my mother used to do the same thing with the flashlight under my bed and in my closet. Thanks for the memory. Some pretty great parenting from Edward again.

Boy you sure like to tell a story. Little Miss Alexandra is sure one silly, immature, naive young girl. Low self-esteem too. She is only a few years older than his daughters. Oh boy.

I had to skim this one. It was really too much pain and suffering for me. I really don't get why Edward made Anton fight like that... I mean he got beaten up pretty bad too, and he had no choice in the matter. Anyway.

Another awesome chapter. Thanks

Excellent. I hope Aro and Esme get together for real. They both deserve to be with adults who will be faithful to them. It appears they may have been in love for a long time. I sure hope this doesn't lead to Carlisle killing them?

Very exciting stuff, got to admit there are a few confusing instructions Edward gave to the FBI agent about Carmine though. I just didn't get it...hopefully it will become clear soon.

The stress is building and Edward is going to kill the wrong person soon. I think someone needs to move Aro into some kind of protective custody now.

I really think the jealousy and rape shit didn't need to happen. I thought he was over that a long time ago. This whole chapter could have been avoided really. I would have hated him if he killed Aro.

Sorry to hear about your woes concerning writing this story and some of the reviews you recieved for some of the chapters. I am really enjoying reading it and think your writing is very smart, and has an authenticity to it that I think you were going for and succeeded with. I loved this chapter...I loved the kids and how Damion has welcomed Anthony into the family. The kids especially are going to miss each other, camping out for three weeks and soon to be five, or six weeks when it is all said and done.I hope they stay close, and visit often. Maybe Carlisle will move to the same area after he finds a place of his own. I know that he will be living at Edward's old apartment for a while. I wonder how Aro is doing? I wonder why Esme and the girls were left in the city...why were they not in danger too? I hope they are o.k. I am still surprised that Edward took Bella to his dinner with John and the Jersey boys... putting her in potential danger like that, but still it was interesting and sure did not expect how it all turned out. As for the Viagra... well I think it was smart, because it got him over whatever he was going through - the guilt. He still could have refused her even with his "temporary condition", but he didn't and now "all is well that ends well".

The suspense in this story is building and I love it. I feel sorry for Esme, but she is a bit of a lose canon and her back is up against the wall. I don't know that they have much of a choice what to do with her... unless they can get her some professional help in like another state far away. I don't know. I am thrilled that Edward believed Aro, and that Edward is letting Carlisle decide Esme's fate.

Good chapter. I feel bad for Charlotte...her Aunt hitting on her date/crush, and Aro going for it. I like how you explained it though, that Charlotte fell for Aro the sweet guy before he got his memory back, and had nothing in common with or attraction for the real Aro. Still, the Aunt probably should have cleared it with Charlotte before throwing herself at him. I wonder if that is what it is like when you have amnesia... are you really that different, is your personality innocent and your old mannerisms wiped?

I have to say even though you want to portray Edward as being an arrogant, self-possessed, controlling and ruthless man when he is working, I really think he seemed more like a psychopath tonight. He enjoyed being needlessly cruel to his victims, and it even turned him on. His coworkers as ruthless as they can be too... were even shocked. I really do not believe it would be possible for Edward to be both this insane man and a loving husband and father. This is fan fiction though so I guess anything could be possible, but in reality, if this was real life, I just don't think the two exstremes could be present in the same person. Anyway...maybe that is where you are going with this story, that Edward completely loses touch with his humanity...and his sanity?

Great Chapter. Thanks

I found you again. I guess I will hear of your updates to this story as they become available through you mentioning it in your new story A/N. Take care.