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Reviewer: sabrina michaels Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2019 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 5

very enjoyable

Reviewer: sabrina michaels Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2019 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 2

Good riddance to Eddy..and the Volturi..Alice is a malicious little bitch who deserves to go visit Eddy permanently..I expect an irate Carlsle and Esme at any moment..

Reviewer: Acampbell77 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Sep 2018 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 1

Can't remember if I read this already...

Reviewer: sabrina michaels Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 May 2014 1:43 PM Title: Chapter 1

very good chapter...I love the speed you move your chapters forward, never any boring parts.



Author's Response:

thanks for reading and reviewing. glad you like the story, i love writing

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 5

Loved the story!  I hope all are well in your household soon!  I'll be watching for your new story whenever it shows.  By the sound of things, you may have your hands full for a while.  Take care and stay well.



Author's Response:

will be putting the first chapter of another old one soon today

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 4

Wonderful!  Their relationship is growing deeper all the time and the emotional sharing with the Major only deepens it.  I loved it!



Author's Response:

yeah, he is good like that

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 3

I think you did a fine job with your sex scene.  One minor note though, you wanted the word ' sheathed ' not 'sheaves'.  One denotes being encased in, the other denotes the object being sliced off.  Trust me, I have seen far bigger mistakes in fictions.  You remembered the important parts here.  One that Jasper loves her and never wants to hurt her, and second that when she says she doesn't want to try it that way again he bends other wishes out of loving respect.  I am thoroughly enjoying this fiction and look forward to following wherever you take us!  Thank you for all your hard work.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for that. I do my best at editing, but honestly, i was onlyat a grade 5 literacy skill ise when i was in my mid20's. It is so hard at times to make sure things are correct, but i am glad you have shown me the mistake without sounding negative. I am thankful for that.

See you soon on another story.

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 5

thank you i love reading this even if i had the flu  so thank you and can't wait to see what you put up next



Author's Response:

you welcom i hope you like the next story i put up :p

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2014 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 2

Now this should be fascinating!  An irate, testy, newborn Bella against a seasoned! calm, practiced seer like Alice.  Hmmmm.....   Loved it!



Author's Response:

she is different and exceptional. Alice is cocky

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2014 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 1

Continue?!  For.  The love of heaven - YES!!  I love the direction and promise in this story.  Seeing a different Jasper and Bella should be more than fascinating!  I can hardly wait!  Thank you so very much!



Author's Response:

OK

Reviewer: 01katie Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2014 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 1

Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

THANK YOU

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2014 3:05 AM Title: Chapter 4

go jasper go great ch



Author's Response:

thanks darl

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2014 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 3

well it's 12:22 pm on thursday the 9thand i think your wright jasper and bella are better then eddie and bella keep up the great job



Author's Response:

it is good you like my stories. I appreciate that ever so much, actually.

next chappy getting uploaded now.

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2014 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 2

well i know bella can kick alice ass but this should be fun to read



Author's Response:

Are you still awake? what time is it and day. over here it is 03:41 am on a Friday morning 10th Jan 2014.

 

Just for you, as usual for me, i will put the next one up.

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jan 2014 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

yes continue please i what to read all of it  it sound like fun i rember a little of it



Author's Response:

No worries. Will edit next chapter in a few hours.

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