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Reviewer: ChristianMom54 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2018 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 42

Great storyline! Loved reading it. Thanks foe sharing your talents with us.



Author's Response:

Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it 

Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Mar 2016 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 42

WOW!!! deffinately different ;) i loved bellas powers and so strange to have a bad carlise and a good caius ;) thanks for sharing ;D

Reviewer: kimee0479 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Sep 2014 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 1

Great first Chapter!!



Author's Response:

Thank You   I hope you feel that way about the rest of them ...LOL

Reviewer: ambertje Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Aug 2014 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 42

Hey

Loved the story!!

One of the most funny ones I have ever read!!!

 

Amber



Author's Response:

Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it ...

Reviewer: Bella Scissom Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 42

Excellent story the twists & turns kept me reading from start to finish.  I loved it enough said!



Author's Response:

Thank You ... I'm so glad you enjoyed the story  

Reviewer: captaincurly Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jul 2014 12:09 AM Title: Chapter 42

Thanks for sharing your story!!!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you enjoyed it

Reviewer: captaincurly Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jul 2014 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 32

=D

 



Author's Response:

Thanks

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 42

Just like winning the Super Bowl... Disney! Fun ending... All the little pieces tied up nicely. Enjoyed! . Hope to see another story. Still pissed FanFic is blocking fLAG.

Have a great Holiday season. Meg

Author's Response:

yep ... can you just see Emmett at Disneyland ... I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I am working on another story ...  Storymaster still works on FF and flag works on TWCS and FictionPad  ... so not everything is lost yet ..

I hope your holidays are the best ever

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 41

Clearly the Doc is stupid... Great trial... Sad this is wrapping up, it has bee enjoyable on my day of play from work..

Author's Response:

glad I could play hookey with you ....

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 40

Interesting pass down of abilities. What would Bella pass down?

Author's Response:

I was thinking it was kind of like passing down hair and eye color .... I never thought about what she could pass down ...  hmmmm ...

seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 39

Seems like Aro thinks he is like congress. Above the Law.
Yes the pups? I say let them be. Now that the dog was dealt with.

Author's Response:

yes Aro thinks he is above the law, doing whatever he pleases with no consequences ... well he is about to get a much needed eye opening ...  the dogs are still to be dealt with ...

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 38

Great bas ass Bella. Enjoying Aro's demise.

Author's Response:

if you like Bella then you will love when Jasper gets to play ... :)

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 37

Ugh... I am ready for Aro to go up in smoke.

Author's Response:

have patience ... just a few more chapters now ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 36

Betting Jake may save the majority of the wolves lives with out blood shed.

Good to hear the patch is off....

Author's Response:

maybe a little bloodshed ....  yes that patch was a bear to wear .... the right eye was a little trickier than the left and they had to cut a little deeper ....   but all is well now .  :)

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 34

Very sad to be separated form your Mate. Hope the next eye surgery went well

Author's Response:

yes I can't even imagine being kept from your mate for thousands of years ...  both eye surgeries went well thank you for asking ....

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 32

He just keeps digging his hole deeper. Can't wait till they reach Didyme.

Author's Response:

be prepared to hate Aro even more once they get to Didyme ...

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 31

Awe. Marcus will be happy. And Aro will be a plume of smoke. Well done!

Author's Response:

oh Aro doesn't burn just yet ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 30

Oh Aro you will be going down.... Peter, your knower should have told you this could go badly.

Author's Response:

it will be fine

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 29

Wow.. Bad ass Eddie! I like where you took his character.

Author's Response:

thanks ... I always wanted to see Edward kick some ass ..

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 28

Stupid Vamp.... Should have known the Major would be where his captain was. Meg

Author's Response:

yes ...confrontation = Major and Captain

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 27

Twists a plenty.

Author's Response:

yep ... chubby checker fan ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 26

Yea Peter is coming.

Author's Response:

can't have Jasper in a confrontation without Peter ... It just doesn't work

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 25

I hope the surgeries went well. A little cocktail time. Wonder what a little coffee in Alice's blood would do. Ha! Meg

Author's Response:

the surgeries did go well... thank you for asking ... I don't even want to imagine what Alice plus coffee would equal ... consider me afraid ... very afraid .. LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 24

Drunk Jazz... Now if he could just add the feelings of being High. Not happy with Doc C. He has been a bad bad bad boy.

Author's Response:

I just couldn't resist giving the southern boy a good drink of whiskey

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 23

Mixing of blood... Very nice. I like the eyes. Nice. Better to blend. And a few creepers off the streets.

Author's Response:

yep .. helps control thirst ... they don't stick out like sore thumbs with the eye color ... and saves a few would be victims ... win/win

seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 22

The Doc having a gift... Persuasion.

Author's Response:

yep ... makes sense to me ...

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 21

Go Caius. The little pups are not as sweet in your story. :-)

Author's Response:

I don't think the wolves have ever been anything but arrogant and controlling ... I'm not a wolf fan at all

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:13 PM Title: Chapter 20

Wow lots of action in that chapter.. Look out Aro!

Author's Response:

Look Out indeed ... he has quite the surprise coming

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 19

You've done a great job writing... The story flows very smoothly! Meg

Author's Response:

thank you ..  I tired to keep on track with everything .. I had to go back and read parts to make sure I hadn't skipped anything ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 18

Beaver! LOL.

Go Esme!
"what have you done you stupid selfish bitch"

Oh Aro, you will pay for being an Ass!

Author's Response:

It takes me a little while but everybody gets what they have coming to them  ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 17

Go mama Esme. Trap that little witch.

Pusher. Cool. Poor Alice she won't know what to do.

Author's Response:

Esme is not as meek and mild as they all think

Poor Alice my foot .... she is waaaaay too pushing herself ..

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 16

Too fun. Alarm clocks. Hating rose.

Author's Response:

just some simple fun ... even for Edward

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 15

Em in Walmart. Love it!

Author's Response:

Be afraid ... be very afraid .. LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 14

Very cool use for the greater good. . Little loving for Bella I hope.

Author's Response:

yeah ... she has a gift that can be used for humans as well as vampires ..

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 13

Hope someone warns the wolves.

Author's Response:

why should they be warned .... they certainly don't warn anybody ...

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 12

Best buy... Hummm. Guessing 3 plug in travel mugs to heat their beverages?

Enjoying the story... Tons. Meg

Author's Response:

uh .. nope ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 11

Awe... Happy Em will be back.

Author's Response:

yep .... Emmett has the best idea for the trip 

seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 10

Sweet road trip.... Hope Edward has Em join them.

Author's Response:

oh yeah ... not much point in taking a road trip without Emmett

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 9

A bit of bling. Nice. F'n Rose. She is just so fantastic to hate. Meg

Author's Response:

I have never liked Rose and always thought the Emmett deserved better ...

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 8

Very powerful indeed. Now as to her stomach. Got to see "what" is up.

Author's Response:

just a little bling .... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 7

It was a good year for Bobcat. Always wondered why they did not have a supply on hand. Meg

Author's Response:

see... me too ...I thought it just made sense to have some on hand.

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 6

Well that went well... Good to know she was able to reach Edward. Meg

Author's Response:

and you know he will break all speed records to get there

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh I like what you did with Rose... A little honesty for the ice queen. Meg

Author's Response:

well she wanted the truth to be told .... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 4

Awe your own twist on her power. Very nice. Meg

Author's Response:

thanks ... I wanted her to have something that could be useful for more than just blocking powers ..

Seph

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 2

Silver... Nice.

Author's Response:

yep .... I wanted to do a different story without a lot of angst ...  

Seph

 

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Nov 2013 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very good start... Nice twist habit it be Demetri change her.

Author's Response:

thank you ... strap in for the road trip, there are some bumps ahead ... LOL

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 42

No need to thank me for what has been a very enjoyable experience! This is one of the best stories I have ever read and will highly recommend it to my daughter and others! Take care of yourself and write more!



Author's Response:

Yes I do need to thank you.... you have allowed me into your life for a brief time and I appreciate the time you gave me ......  I am thrilled that you enjoyed the story ...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 41

Carlisle thinks he can have Bella whenever he wants? He must have some sneaky, evil plan in mind to be thinking that at Edward and running off! I hope Bella finds him so her mate and Jasper can bring him to justice also! He's probably thinking to kidnap Charlie or something similar to force Bella's cooperation!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 40

Caius and now Edward are correct, Bella is brilliant! She has figured all this stuff out, practically on her own! There's an old Chinese curse, " may you live in interesting times", and I think Aro and company are about to realize what that means!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 39

Arrogant bastard that he is, Aro was positive he could bluff his way out of all this! Surprise! Caius and Marcus and Didyme won't let that happen! Rosalie is in deep trouble and I'm betting Carlisle isn't far behind! Now, to the fate of the pack!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 38

I think Aro is about to get the picture right about now! I hope it dawns on him how very screwed he is at this moment! He should have to sweat it out a bit before Marcus and his mate repay his evil!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 37

What an ornery son-of-a-bitch Aro is to have done that to his supposed 'brother' and friend! I hope Bella thinks up some appropriate punishment for his evil doings! She seems to be rather good at this sort of thing!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 36

Congratulations on your successful surgeries! That must have been some reunion moment, no wonder the girls all cried, I would have too! Now that the imprints are safely back home, I wonder if Jake can work out a deal to save the rest of his pack?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 35

Very clever and also sneaky, to tell one mate the other is imprisoned and the other is dead. That Aro is smart, if totally evil! Trust Esme, the mother figure to rescue the child and the other imprints. Like Jacob said, that's one less problem for him to deal with.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 34

I'm so very curious as to how Didyme was kept from Marcus all these centuries! The poor thing has so much to become accustomed to in a very short time! All the advances that happened while she was in a sort of limbo, it will amaze her!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 33

That is pretty cool that the Navajos would send help to their brother Quileutes! I guess the Native Americans have to stick together, especially when it comes to the supernatural danger! I'm real glad Esme has enlisted the aid of Marcus, she needs the help and he needs to  have something to care about!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 32

What good is one wolf alone going to do? I still hold out hope that there may be some good in Jacob Black, but who knows? Edward and Bella have quite the mission to accomplish, with rescuing Didyme from her castle dungeon prison!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 31

So the long lost mate of Marcus has been imprisoned all these centuries in a castle called Carlisle! I wonder if by him, or by Aro? I feel a noose tightening around Aro Volturi, and he damn well deserves it!



Author's Response:

okey .. I just realized what had happened  I didn't recognize your name... I waited to answer .. well color me embarrassed .. LOL

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 30

The plot really is thickening, what with finding out Peter and Caius are old friends! What part he will play in all this is still a mystery to me, guess I'm stupid, since I can't figure why Aro is keeping all the wolves alive, plus their imprints!



Author's Response:

Okey dokey .... I have been enjoying your reviews and planned on waiting until you finished the story to respond to them but this one demands my attention .... you are NOT stupid, you just aren't in my warped brain. I didn't have anyone figure out what Aro plans to do with the wolves and their imprints.  so be patient and all will be revealed and remember not everything is as it seems.  

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 29

Wow! Justice, swift and lethal! All the gifts in this little family sure are coming in handy!



Author's Response:

no point in having that many gifted vampires if they can't use them 

seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 28

Nice little mystery, who the traitor is and which member of Aro's guard is the great-niece of said traitor! This woman in a white room is interesting, too, as is the theory that Aro may be Carlisle's sire!



Author's Response:

I'm trying to keep you on your toes ... thank goodness for my note pad ..LOL

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 27

Hopefully Bella remembers Jacob was the only wolf that didn't actively want to kill her for being a vampire. Peter seems to have some information about what Aro is up to, that could help defeat the Volturi leader. The plot thickens, as they say!



Author's Response:

he didn't want to take part in the killing but he was willing to stand guard for the others while they did .. so he is just as guilty as them as far as I'm concerned ... Peter does have some knowledge that will be coming to light very soon ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 11:11 AM Title: Chapter 26

Slimeball is the nicest thing I can think of to call Carlisle! Good old Major Whitlock has the correct slant on this whole mess! Most of these vampires and wolves are not what we are all used to, that's for sure!



Author's Response:

I was getting bored with all the same same stories .... so something new ... :)

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:56 AM Title: Chapter 25

My goodness, I hope that all went well! Having anything done to your eyes has got to be particularly scary, especially for a writer! Sure, now that he's captured, Sam starts thinking about keeping the tribe safe! Big dummy! The blended drinks sound like a dandy idea, if you're a vampire!



Author's Response:

the surgeries did go well thank you for asking ... it was at the point that I was legally blind ... I could make out my computer screen because I kept it close but I could see across the room ...  and the vamps have to have some kind of fun ... otherwise what would be the point ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:43 AM Title: Chapter 24

Great idea! There will be some partying vampires tonight! Jasper is just beside himself, he's so happy about having a drink, after nearly two centuries! Bella has got to be the coolest vampire in the entire world, with all the neat ideas she has come up with! Her entry into this new existence is nothing short of amazing! It seems to be easier for her than anyone expected!



Author's Response:

I think that the philosophy of she knew what to expect and wanted to be a vampire has a lot to do with control ... being thrown into something and thirsting for blood without knowledge beforehand would mess with anyone ...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:34 AM Title: Chapter 23

What a thought to come up with! Mixing the blood of criminal types with animal blood seems to be the ticket, so to speak! Now everyone's gifts will be as strong as possible, probably a necessity with Aro on their case!



Author's Response:

yes .. they stay strong ... and with the eye color they blend in better ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:27 AM Title: Chapter 22

Like Edward, I think Carlisle has a gift, for manipulation of others, the jerk! Amazing Aro kept Caius  from killing Sam! He must be planning to make use of the wolf somehow!



Author's Response:

yep he has plans .... and it just makes sense to me for Carlisle to have a gift ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 21

Well, so long Sam Uley, it's been real! Sounds like Caius is going to tear him to pieces! That tidbit about Sam screwing Tanya and Rosalie was somewhat of a shock! How nice he couldn't be faithful to Emily, the swine!



Author's Response:

Not so fast .. Aro has plans for the wolves .... and the imprint is for making stronger wolves it doesn't guarantee love and loyalty ... I think the imprints get shafted ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 20

How wonderful that Emmett has found his true mate, and it's Maggie! It was so nice of the Irish coven to come warn them of Aro's bounty on Bella's head. Guess you find out who your friends are at a time like this! Hope Jasper knows what he's talking about and it's the right thing to confront Aro!



Author's Response:

yes .. Emmett deserves happiness and I thought Maggie would be a great match for him

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:57 AM Title: Chapter 19

Your story sure puts to rest the idea Emmett is some big idiot, he's full of good plans! Esme has certainly had a huge wakeup call, that she's not Carlisle's mate blows my mind!



Author's Response:

I always thought Emmett was being given the short end of the stick ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:51 AM Title: Chapter 18

Boy, do I get tired of Aro thinking he can run the lives of all vampires, and not a few humans! I really hope Bella and Edward can find a way to neutralize him, permanently! It would be the only way for any of them to have some peace and quiet.



Author's Response:

oh trust me he gets neutralized ...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:42 AM Title: Chapter 17

Esme is smart to watch Miss Rosalie like a hawk! I wouldn't put much past her, myself, you can't count on her to look out for anyone but herself! Can't wait for the reunion between Alice, Jasper, Emmett, Edward and Bella!



Author's Response:

Esme isn't one to cross and Carlisle will find out that she isn't always so meek and mild

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 16

Rose=manipulative bitch!  Emmett is so much better off without that selfish, conceited witch! Too bad Carlisle hasn't got her number, or Esme either!



Author's Response:

oh Rose gets hers ....

I just noticed that you were sending these about a week ago .... they are coming in with another persons reviews ... I thought you two were reading together since the review are about a minute apart .. so my apologies for not answering sooner

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:12 AM Title: Chapter 15

I can just picture Emmett in Yellowstone, taking care of the grizzly problem , just helping out, mind you! Shopping with Alice at Mall of the Americas will be a blast, too! I must reiterate, the RV is a brilliant way for them to travel!



Author's Response:

Emmett is always ready to lend a helping hand ... to me the RV just makes sense

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:01 AM Title: Chapter 14

Emmett thinks Bella is the best, using her gift to save the little boy and she in turn thinks he is smart about the prisms and the phones. Makes me smile when you sneak in the mention of fanfiction on Bella's IPad!



Author's Response:

You know I was really surprised at how many requests I got for putting the fan fiction stories on the iPad ...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 13

It may not be as easy to destroy the Quileute wolves as Aro supposes. Iam glad too that Alice and Jasper are getting out of town, and away from the Volturi. Of course, they won't have near as much fun as Emmett, Bella and Edward will in their motorhome, towing a Volvo!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 12

My money is on some sort of electronic toy that Em will get a kick out of. Alice and Jasper can't give away any location for Bella and Edward if they don't know. Smart move! Another was Bella heating their"soup" in the new travel mugs!



Author's Response:

some toys for everyone ... and it just makes sense to heat the 'soup' while on the road ...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 11

I realize the danger from the Volturi, but I have faith they can fend for themselves. This road trip  will be a lot more fun with Emmett along! I hope it cheers him up a lot!



Author's Response:

Emmett has a really good idea for the road trip 

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 10

Rose is usually portrayed as a bitch, in fanfic stories, but this goes above and beyond! For her to tattle to Aro is really just wrong! I hope for Karma to cook up a payback for little Miss Hale! Now Edward and Bella are on the road with lots of money and the Vanquish! How cool is that?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 7:58 AM Title: Chapter 9

That bellybutton ring sure got Edward's attention! This hunting for extra blood to store  for future use is smart, especially in case Volturi guards show up , or the wolves come calling! It tickles me that Emmett is going to take Rose off his accounts and that Jasper told him he doesn't need to divorce her, since they were never legally married!



Author's Response:

technically none of them exist ... so no legal marriage ... I was always amazed that they didn't keep blood on hand ....you never know when you'll have an emergency and need some ...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 8

Better and better, Bella has all kinds of defensive weapons at her disposal now. I wonder what her gifts have to do with what has Edward's rapt attention just now?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 7

I'm loving this reunion! How great that Bella and Edward are together again, and on an equal footing this time, both vampires! I guess Bella doesn't yet know how much Aro will covet her and her gifts! She and Edward may have to hide somewhere!



Author's Response:

oh yes .... he will covet and they will have to run ..

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 7:27 AM Title: Chapter 6

I'm happy to see Edward tell it like it is. Bless Alice and her gift, for knowing Bella would need her help, and for that letter. I'll just bet Bella was pleased to read Alice would always be her sister! Can hardly wait for Edward to get back to Forks!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 5

I think Edward just forced Tanya and Rosalie to tell the absolute truth! Boy, talk about stirring up a hornet's nest! Poor lovesick Emmett!

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Date: 12 Nov 2013 7:07 AM Title: Chapter 4

Great reference book in Carlisle's study! Now Bella knows what she is and what she can do. It's a very useful gift, because she can keep herself from danger much easier. She can actually keep an eye on anything and anyone. Very handy!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 3

I'm thinking Miss Swan has been endwed with a totally cool talent/gift, whatever! When she focused on Edward, she could actually 'see' him, in real time! I'm so impressed!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 2

So, Bella is an animal drinker and has a silver streak in her hair, and silver eyes! That's really cool, and really different! Now all we need is for Edward to show up again and she would be thrilled!



Author's Response:

Edward will be there shortly .... her power and Alice will help her find him...

Seph

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 1

Demetri did a good job of ridding Seattle of the newborn problem, but somehow botched Bella's transformation. As Arte Johnson used to say on Laugh In, "very interesting!" You're probably too young to know about that, but trust me, it was the only time you wanted to laugh at a German soldier! Now I'm hoping to find out why it takes Bella ten days to change!

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Nov 2013 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 42

I loved this story!  I have since chapter one.  I'm so sorry to see it end.  I hope ypu continue to write.  I will read your stories greatfully..  Thank you!



Author's Response:

I am so glad you liked the story ... thanks so much for all the reviews you sent me ... I am continuing to write  I am on the 4th chapter of a new story.  I want to get a few  more chapters done before I start posting ...

Seph

Reviewer: jw89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Nov 2013 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 42

Thank you for sharing your story.  I have enjoyed reading it. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for letting me know that you enjoyed the story. I appreciate being allowed some time in your life ....

Seph

Reviewer: theladykt Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Nov 2013 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 42

Good ending.  Glad the death didnt come easily to Aro.  Carlisle got off quick but I love Esme did it.  Em is too funny

TY for writing and sharing.

ty



Author's Response:

oh how pretty ... thank you ... yeah some of this chapter was hard to write but I thought Esme should get some revenge and let her 'mama bear' out to defend her kids ....

Seph

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Nov 2013 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 42

This story was an amazing journey. You have an incredible imagination.

Author's Response:

thank you for taking the time to read and review my little story.  As for me having an incredible imagination ... is incredible the new word for scary?  LOL

Seph

Reviewer: pianogirl05 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Nov 2013 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 42

Great story!

Author's Response:

I am so glad you liked it.  thanks for taking the time to read and review ....

Seph

Reviewer: Marya1918 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Nov 2013 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 42

I enjoyed your story very much and I hope to hear fron you again. For future stories, you should try to avoid jumping between present and past tense and between first and third person. Thank you.



Author's Response:

thank you for sticking with me and I will certainly watch for that in the future

seph

Reviewer: Marya1918 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Oct 2013 10:20 AM Title: Chapter 41

I'm glad Caius changed Rose's punichment. I'm curious to know what the actual punichment for Aro, Sulpicia and Jane will be. And Carlisle... I'me really looking forward to learn what he is up to and how does he think he will be able to control Bella... I think he's up for a BIG surprise.  Edward, Bella, Alice and Jaspr will surely come up with someting. I'm so looking forward for next chapter...



Author's Response:

yeah .... I never planned on letting that stand ... what surprised me is nobody said a thing about it ...

thanks for reviewing

Seph

Reviewer: Arroyo4ver Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Oct 2013 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 41

love this story can't wait to read more

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Oct 2013 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 41

Glad Caius changed his mind about part of Rose's sentence.    Carlisle need to die soon I think.    Like the idea of Esme helping Didyme



Author's Response:

I never planned for that to stand and it surprised me that not one person said anything about it ....

thanks for all the reviews

Seph

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Oct 2013 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 40

Very smart and adult of Jake



Author's Response:

I wanted to get rid of the wolves and I really want Jake to grow up, I thought this would accomplish both. thanks for the review

Seph

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Oct 2013 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 40

Interesting chapter.  Love this story.



Author's Response:

thanks ....

Seph

Reviewer: rodeinti Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Oct 2013 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 40

thank you for the update...well done



Author's Response:

Thanks .... I'm glad you liked it

Seph

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