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Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 27

Such a great story. I love all the angst, love, drama, issues there were. So much lemony goodness tuat fit great with the plot :)

So happy Jake got a great happily ever after.

This is actually my first twilight story where Bella was never a character. And Edward was so non-canon it was enjoyable.

I enjoyed reading this story very much.

It would be cool if you did a fast forward, maybe a decade to see how everyone ended up. Just as a fan hoping lol

Oh also this is my first story here on TWCS, :), I came on to find another story and got swept up perusing the site first and found yours and just started reading. Lol Gotta go find that story now lol

Thanks!



Author's Response:

Thanks again for reading - amusing that you came upon this by accident. I'm glad you enjoyed it. My main account is on Fanfiction but the majority of the stories on there are on here too :)

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 26

Awwww! haha Paul is just adorable with Jake and Jake is adorable with Paul as well :) love these two.

Lol I already agreed with the lady. The fine ones are gay ;)

Nice to see that Jakes members support him and are cool with Jake and the rest.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 2:43 PM Title: Chapter 25

I almost forgot about Embry, lol. Where has he been. Will Marie let Jake slide after the ordeal he has been in? Lol

So Billy doesn't know Paul at all? Huge coincidence they are both from Washington. At least Billy won't be a complete douche.

Finally home! :)

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 24

Thats gotta be a pretty amazing feeling to know someone was in a coma but they actually heard you. And the death thing too, seeing your own body. *shudders* 

I'm gonna miss the heart monitor though lol I was liking how you added that to the story and his rapid heart beat and everyone could hear it.

Wonder how Paul and Sarah will get along. Hope they get along well.

Can't wait for Jake to join Paul back at THEIR home :)

Pauls right about the work thing with Jake. Wish Paul the best in his endeavour though.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 12:05 PM Title: Chapter 23

I dont like to see Paul or Jake cry :( Its so sad. I'm beyond thrilled that Paul will be moving to Jakes place. Bummer he had to be fired because of all the drama, but its working all out great for them.

Billy. Such a shame. How hes being with Jake and his choices and keeping his cancer a secret. Would he really want to waste his last year alive not talking to his son and his family.

Leah is a saint. When Jake gets out of the hospital, he should thank her with something big. Shes been amazing through all this.

Don't let the cops know that Jake is offering Mike free membership, it can be seen as bribery. :/

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 22

*sighs* I was so worried, I really thought you were gonna kill Jacob there in the beginning. THEN, I actually thought Paul walked out on Jake or something.

Sarah took the news very well. Shes not curious and have any questions?

Billy had a falling out with Leah? Man you sure have made this Billy hard to like. Wonder how Billy will feel when he finds out he travelled all that way to find out why Jake is in the hospital. And wait aminute! Billy's originally from Forks?! Could Billy know who Paul's family is?! Wow.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2013 9:48 AM Title: Chapter 21

Way to ruin that night. Damn. I hope Jake is okay. Will he end up in the hospital and Sarah shows up and Paul is there and an explaination is needed?

I love that Paul still took a test. 

I wonder how Paul was making Edward turn red lol

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 20

Collin was a trooper :) he did seem shocked though lol

So thats why Jasper was awkward when he talked about his job lol Nothing wrong with that.

It finally took Jake mentioning bareback in the heat of the moment. Lol  Did I understand it right as you wrote it. First Jake is saying how he wants to feel Paul properly, then Paul says, "I have too." Did Paul mean that he is itching to come in Jake? Or is a grammar mistake?

 



Author's Response:

When Paul said "I have too" he was responding to Jake saying "I've been thinking about it lately."

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 19

I've been meaning to ask, just out of curosity. Why did you make Jake the 'bitch' in the relationship?

I dread them being apart too. So when will they be having that conversation about someone moving and such?? :)

I wonder how many times Emmett gets asked out on a date each day. Lol



Author's Response:

Thank you for all the reviews :)

In answer to your question, I have ideas in my head about which character is dominant in any given pairing and with Paul I always see him as the top unless he's with Emmett. Jacob I see as the dominant with Embry or Edward or Jasper but bottom to Paul or Sam. Just my quirky way of looking at it :)

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 18

Happily ever after. The end! Lol Paul finally said it to Jake, everything seems right in the world now, so what could possibly happen with nine more chapters to go? :/

Lol Edward is so easy to embarrass :) 

I really was disappointed when Paul didn't say i love you back right away. But it was so adorable when he did.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 17

Poor Embry lol Those awkwards moments of hearing your friend talk about being gay. Can't wait for him to meet Paul lol.

So its final. Leah and Jacob are divorced.

Wonder how long Leah will want Sarah away from Paul.

Oh gawd! I was so laughing at Edward at the club! Unrecognizeable.

I wish Jake and Paul hadn't left the apartment, waited all day for some lovin. ;) Jake should take charge for once though!

Oh yeah that carriage ride was funny. Who knew Paul would be the one to suggest it. Thats gotta be kind of funny but cute to see two big muscle built men in a carriage ride lol.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 16

Yeah fuck off, twink! Lol

So happy! Paul didnt mess with anyone, he talked with Jake and is giving him a second chance.

 

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 15

Fuck. Heartbreaking. I'm kind of not surprised though Paul is with another guy. Still hurts though.

I'm happy that Leah gave Jake that speech.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 14

Things will get better :) Things will get better :/ Things will get better :( Crap. I hope things will get better :'(

That was just sad. I thought Jake would knock on the door after hearing Paul. Things are just so fucked up.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 3:56 PM Title: Chapter 13

I remember my dad coming to pick me up and being spoiled by him. Not overly spoiled so it was okay. Lol It will be tough for a while, but things will turn to normal after a while.

I don't see why Sarah can't be told that Jake is with someone else. Well, okay, not now, but does Leah mean forever? :/

Thats such an awesome choice Jake has to move into his business up above it. Ideal.

I kind of keep thinking that Paul is not as happy with Jake as Jake is with Paul. Like maybe he is hiding something. Hope not.

Will Collin be just an added character or... a new love interest to someone, or a conflict among people? Cant wait to find out!

What happen to Sarah? :(

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 3:17 PM Title: Chapter 12

Okay, now Leah has gotten her 'revenge' or whatever you call it with Jake by not discussing about Sarah first. That better be it.

I like the idea that Emmett will be working there and Jake got to see him. Not that i hope to see conflict, just a nice addition to the story. :)

Embry is a good friend :)

I was kind of thinking and hoping that Paul could move to NYC and he could take the managers position. Lol To weird? :)

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 11

Okay, something I'm not grasping is that Leah can't keep Sarah away from Jake. Even if this went to court, Leah would have to prove Jake an unfit parent and he isn't. So why does he keep wondering where Sarah fits in. He hurt Leah yes, and partly Sarah for his indesrection, but this has nothing to do with him as a father. He will continue to be her father and she will love him no matter what. Unless by some off chance this little girl is anti-gay. Doubt it. And Jake will make amends for cheating on Leah or at least try. Jake still has every right to see his daughter and call her.

Relieved Embry isn't disgusted by Jake now. Mad is understandable.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 10

Oh man! This is gonna be good. Yeehee!

I was really concerned when Jake left Paul's because things didn't seem right with them two. And after that love making I was sadden that he decided to leave and Paul thought it be a good idea. But maybe it was a good idea. Lol

Did Leah already have it planned that she would be just dropping Sarah off at her parents? :0 lol Sounds extremely plausible.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 10:27 AM Title: Chapter 9

H. O. T. Hot!

Now i know that Paul never gets fucked. Maybe Jake can change that. *grins evilly* :)

Is Paul having inner termoil? Fighting how he feels or just because Jake is not single yet?

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 8

Oh yeah. Leah must know things aren't gonna end happy for her. If shes already snippy, man shes gonna blow up when Jake says hes gay. :/

Would Jake seriouslg let Leah take Sarah awa from him? Leah doesn't have that right.

I was wondering if they would show PDA. Lol at least Jake didn't take it negatively. Paul was funny though lol

How cute are they! :) In the car talking, eating. Can't wait til they get back to Paul's.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 7

Well Edward is gay. His gaydar must of been going off with Paul lol. Holy crap! Will Jacob tell Edward that he fucked with Emmett?! Lmao Small coincidence :) Good thing Jake is choosing to come out before some odd situation occurs and Emmett outs him or something.

I wanted Jake to tell Leah now, but guess its good she'll be taking Sarah away for a week. Paul and Jacob time ;)

I hope when the time comes, Leah won't bash Jake.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:50 AM Title: Chapter 6

I guess Jake won't be telling Leah anytime soon then. Was kind of hoping he would.

Ah, i knew Paul would drop in! I was hoping :)

I can't wait to find out if Edward knew or knows about Jake. Also if he is gay or not.

That was UNBELIEVABLY close. That image Jake put in my head, that Sarah could of walked in on Jake going down on Paul, is horrifying!

Poor Paul. So far he can't have what he wants. That must of really hurt to see Jake with his family.

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 7:07 AM Title: Chapter 5

Well that answers my questions about Paul. Its always the good looking guys who are gay, damn it. Lol

I'm liking how easily Paul and Jacob get along. And this time was a lot better, hotter, and intense! Woowee!

:( I don't want Jake to leave. Such a huge let down.

Will Jake have bite marks or any bruises? 

I bet Paul did feel bitter about Leah.

When will Jake get to fuck Paul? :)

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 6:16 AM Title: Chapter 4

I kept expecting something to go wrong with the machine order, the machines themselves, so Paul would have an excuse to talk to Paul lol

I'm eager to know if Paul is into women here!

So happy there will be a second visit ;)

Wouldn't that be awesome if Leah knew this whole time and didn't care as long as Jake kept it on the downlow. Or if Paul was bi also, made it a trio lol.

Yeah, Edward seems gay. Wonder if hes crushing on Jake. Hmmm..

Reviewer: pece87 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 3

Paul definitely has confidence. Can't mistake that.

So we know Jake is bi, is Paul or is he just gay?

Jake at the end there already assumes Paul will be visiting him when he goes to NY. Why is that lol

Will there be any Paul POV's throughout the story?



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and for your reviews.  A couple of quick answers - Paul is gay and it's all from Jake's POV.

There are plenty of ups and downs ahead for Jake, so hope you will enjoy the ride :)

Reviewer: pece87 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 2

So glad Jake didnt leave. Round two in the morning? ;)

Jake is so awkward, but its still appealing to the story.

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Date: 30 Dec 2013 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 1

Cant wait to keep reading.

Poor leah. Does she seriosuly have no clue?

Reviewer: Luv4RobPattz Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Oct 2013 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 27

Loved it,loved it,loved it!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed the story :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Oct 2013 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 27

awww will miss they boys (I am a softie for Paul) thanks for another good story!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you've enjoyed this one :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2013 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 27

Ending withh a bang, literally. Just ask Jacob! LOL

I'm so sad this is over, but look forward to reading more stories from you!

Thank you for writing and sharing this tale with us!

xox

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I will be concentrating on Wish Upon A Star for a little while and then starting another new one in a few weeks :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2013 12:18 PM Title: Chapter 27

A great ending.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; glad you enjoyed it :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Oct 2013 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 26

"All the hot ones are always gay." that was totally me saying that! LMAO

Thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one!

xoxox

Mina



Author's Response:

Haha, I say that too!  Thank you for reading, I think there is only one chapter left now :(

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Oct 2013 12:48 PM Title: Chapter 26

loved the lemon-not too mushy-but very real! Paul is being such a good boyfriend, glad all is working out. I imagine it means things are coming to an end soon.... : (  So glad you already have another story in the works!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing, glad you enjoyed the lemon. Yes, this is sadly coming to an end now, but as well as 'Wish Upon a Star', I have another new story planned to start in a few weeks :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Oct 2013 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 25

Yay! He is home! And it looks like Billy is really gonna try. Baby steps! He will get there.

Thanks for the update, can't wait to read more.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. Now they have lots of catching up to do so I can promise steaminess to come ;)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Oct 2013 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 25

Paul such a good boyfriend!!!!! So glad all is going well : )



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; at last they will be able to have some happy times together  again :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Oct 2013 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 25

I'm glad Jake is out of the hospital.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. Now they can finally enjoy being together :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Oct 2013 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 24

Thanks for the update ♥



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2013 12:57 PM Title: Chapter 24

so glad everyone is happy! You cover every aspect of the story so well, I have read some stories lately on FF that skip around, do not have enough depth.....I have become spoiled reading yours with such great writing!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - and flattering me again :)  Things are on the up for everybody now, I don't think I have any more cruel ideas to drop on anybody :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Oct 2013 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 23

wow!! so much going on! Life is sure never easy..........



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. They have got through the worst part now and things will start to get better again :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Oct 2013 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 23

YAY! FOR ONCE MIKE WAS THE GOOD GUY!

Thanks for the update. I'm so dissapointed in Billy.

And it sucks Paul was fired, but at least he got to keep Jake!

Thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one.

xoxox

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing - I don't normally like Mike, but I was trying to think of someone to use for the witness and I thought I'd just make him likeable for once :)

Now Paul has to find himself a new occupation!

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Oct 2013 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 22

OH MY GOD! YOU'RE KILLING ME! *sobs*

On a brighter note, Sarah is so sweet!

I knew she would be okay with everything ♥

Can't wait for the next chapter!

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for your reviews :)  Poor Jake will be ok but there is still some drama ahead for them - I just couldn't resist spoiling their happiness, haha :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Oct 2013 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 21

NOOOOOOOOOOOOO! 

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Oct 2013 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 22

ooooh Paul.........Hope all wil be okay.........so glad Sarah was so understanding-kids are so like that!!!! So much better than adults.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - Sarah was the one Jake worried about the most, and she's certainly had a more mature reaction than his dad will :(

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Sep 2013 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 21

oh man.............I hate this part of our world........but unfortunately, it is real. Please let them be okay......



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - it's awful that there are such vile, bigoted people out there and this is going to affect everyone quite badly :(  

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Sep 2013 12:05 PM Title: Chapter 21

I can't wait to see what happens to Jake and Paul. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. Things will sadly be tough for them again :(

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Sep 2013 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 20

loved how you pulled Jasper into the story!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, glad you enjoyed the update.

 

Thank you also for your review on Lost, that was one of my very earliest stories so happy you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Sep 2013 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 20

OH MY GOD! I would have died in embarrasment... LOL

I hope the test comes back okay, for him Leah and Emmett!

Thanks for the update, hon.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. Haha, poor Jake must have been mortified. Glad you enjoyed the update :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2013 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 19

YES!!!!!!!! Glad we are in a happy place now-some pretty hottt lemons too!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - glad you enjoyed the lemons :)  Now I just need to throw a little spanner in the works for them ;)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2013 9:49 AM Title: Chapter 19

*sighs* why do I feel like something bad is gonna happen?

thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. It does seem too good to be true at the moment, doesn't it?

Mwahahahah! ;)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2013 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 18

Um, yeah... I need more batteries... LOL

Thanks for the update, how many more chapters are left?

xoxox

Mina



Author's Response:

Hehe, there is more hotness to come ;)

I'm not sure how many chapters are left, but probably about 6 or 7. Thank you for reading.

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2013 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 18

awwwww he loves him too......do not hurt him Jacob!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - they final get some happy times and Jacob will behave himself and not mess with Paul's feelings from now on :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2013 12:40 PM Title: Chapter 18

I'm glad they are back together.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. They will have some much happier times now :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2013 11:03 PM Title: Chapter 17

You better have a lemon for the next chapter, woman! *douses herself in cold water*



Author's Response:

Hehe, there is a lemon on the way, I promise :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2013 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 16

OH THANK GOD! I actually thought Paul was gonna take longer...

I'm glad they got to talk, Paul's hesitance is understandable. It can't be easy to open up after being tossed aside like Jake did to him.

Thanks for the update!

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading :)  I didn't want Paul to drag it out too much, I thought the poor boys had been tortured long enough ;)  They still need to talk some more though, when they see each other again.

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Sep 2013 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 17

yes! back together!!!!! oh crazy Edward-purple shirt and leather pants- I love it!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; glad you enjoyed the latest.

Thank you for your reviews for Out Of Reach, I'm pleased you liked it too :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2013 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 16

what a beautiful chapter! Your storytelling is fantastic. Your descriptions of every detail, from their feelings, to how they look, to where they are, paint a picture in the readers mind. It is like you are there, watching the actions unfold. I love it!  well done........



Author's Response:

Wow, thank you very much, I really appreciate your comments. I imagine the scene in front of me as if I'm watching a movie when I'm writing, so it helps me to try to describe things so the reader can see what's in my head :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2013 12:20 PM Title: Chapter 16

Yay a glimmer of happiness.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. The next chapter gets even better :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Sep 2013 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 15

You are breaking my heart! *sobs*



Author's Response:

It gets better soon, although the next chapter will be emotional. Thank you for reading :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Sep 2013 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 15

wow-poor Jacob, but he did the right thing by going there, so Paul would know how serious he is.......maybe there is still hope!!!!!!! I am really enjoying your story, I almost teared up when I saw that a new chapter was up-I knew it would be a tear jerker!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing; I'm glad you're enjoying despite all the angst :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2013 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 14

poor Paul...........and Jacob, but he did make the right decision. This is heavy duty heartbreak!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. There will be a few more tears before it gets better :(

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Sep 2013 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 14

This chapter broke my heart, but I think Jacob did the right thing, it was bad timing like Paul said, and it will be better if things settle a bit before Jake can even consider having a relationship.

Thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing; for once Jake has actually done the right thing. He does need time, although it'll be a sad time for him :(  

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Sep 2013 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 13

oh what a tangled web you weave...lol....I hope Sarah is okay, but also hope leah is not just doing this because she might know Paul is there....so much to ponder-great chapter. jake is a good DAD!



Author's Response:

Haha, thank you for reading. Glad you enjoyed the chapter and I have a bit more tangling to do yet before things get any better for anybody ;)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Sep 2013 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 13

OH NO! What happened to Sarah? Oh my God, you evil woman! 



Author's Response:

Haha, thank you for reading and sorry for the horrible cliffie. Next chapter won't be too long :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Sep 2013 12:33 PM Title: Chapter 13

A great chapter. I hope he gets his life worked out with Sarah and Paul. I hope Sarah is ok.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; glad you enjoyed the chapter. It'll be a while before things get better for any of them :(

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Sep 2013 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 12

*lets out huge sigh of relief* Thank God she is not keeping him from his daughter.

Thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for readng; as much as Leah might want to tell Jake to go to hell, she'll always do what's best for Sarah :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2013 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 12

such a sad but necessary chapter......well done, really enjoying your writing!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2013 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 11

Life is never easy, so glad you are not making this easy either. Makes for a great story!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; I'm glad you're enjoying the way I'm doing this :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2013 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 11

Poor Jake. It was a great chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2013 9:07 AM Title: Chapter 11

Oh hell, can't imagine how poor Leah must be feeling... I think that for the circumstances, she handled it well. Just don't make her the enemy and bitchy by trying to keep Sarah from Jake... please?

Thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thanks for your review! Don't worry, I don't plan on making Leah the bitter, bitchy girl she was in Twilight. She will eventually get a HEA, believe it or not :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Aug 2013 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 10

great chapter.........now comes the hard part.......



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - the next chapter will definitely be tough for all concerned!

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Aug 2013 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 10

Oh oh... shit is about to hit the fan! I CAN'T WAIT! 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. There is definitely going to be drama in the next chapter - and sadness for all concerned. Just about to start working on it now ;)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:00 AM Title: Chapter 10

I can't wait for next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - the next one won't be too long :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2013 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 9

OMG,...........You have reached a new level in fantastic lemons. This chapter was so vivid.......absolutely loved it!!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Haha, thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed the lemon-fest. There is a bit more to come in the next chapter before Jake has to go home ;)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2013 4:53 PM Title: Chapter 9

Good God, that was HOT!!!!

THANKS FOR THE UPDATE!



Author's Response:

Thank you for readin - there is more hotness to come in the next chapter :D

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2013 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 9

Super hot. I have a feeling though Leah has him being followed.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; glad you liked the steaminess ;)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2013 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 8

ahhhhhh-I love Paul.....Please do not let Jacob hurt him, I know none of this is going to be easy.



Author's Response:

Sadly everybody is in for a hard time for a while :(  Thank you for reading.

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2013 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 7

Your stories are the best-I cannot believe how they just pull me in and I am totally oblivious to the world going on around me!! Great chapter-so excited to have two to read when I checked in to the TWCS.....



Author's Response:

Thank you very much, I'm glad you're enjoying this one :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2013 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 8

I bet Leah found the picture on Jake's phone... damn.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. She did but what stuck in her mind most was Jake's text to Paul! The proverbial will hit the fan when he gets home ;)

Reviewer: errant diva Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2013 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 8

I try not to judge, I really do. My brother-in-law is gay, my nephew, dh has two cousins that are gay so I really do try. I just hate that an innocent woman and child are going to suffer. And I do mean suffer. Geez.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. Jake has definitely gone about things in completely the wrong way and it'll be a long time before any of them can get over what's coming :( 

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Aug 2013 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 7

Poor Jake, he needs to continue to be honest with himself and with Leah. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; he does plan to tell Leah but it doesn't go quite as he imagines ;)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Aug 2013 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 7

Yeah, Jake is dumb is he thought Leah wouldn't notice. You don't spend 10 years with somoene and not able to tell when there is something going on.

I hope Jacob comes out to Leah, he already took a big step by admitting to himself he is gay, now he needs to tell his wife.

Can't wait for the next update, I'm sort of hopping Paul calls after Leah returns.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing. Jake fully intends to tell Leah everything but it won't go quite according to plan :(

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Aug 2013 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 6

Damn, so he's is choosing to stay with Leah. I think that's unfair to her, he should let her go, not because there is another guy, but beause you can tell he isn't in love with her anymore.

I can't wait toread what happens next.

Thank for the update!

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; it won't take him much longer to realise he needs to tell Leah the truth, although he does try to make a go of things first ;)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2013 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 6

Close call. I think Jake needs to just be honest. No matter how hard in the end being honest is better than lying.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; Jake is about to confide in a friend in the next chapter and get some advice :)

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2013 1:07 PM Title: Chapter 6

Love your frequent updates........oh Jake....you are playing with fire here....I keep wondering what part Edward will play in all of this, you always have me thinking...well done author!



Author's Response:

Thank you for your review! I had some extra time this week to update a bit for often. Edward will feature quite a bit in the next chapter :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2013 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh, oh... I could feel the shift from being just a fuck the minute Paul spotted him outside the Thai restaurant, and now Jacob is faced with the fact that he had feelings for Paul.

This can't end up good... someone is bound to get hurt.

Thanks for the update, hon. Can't wait for the next one!

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing; next update won't be too long. There is going to be a lot of hurt before too much longer, for several someones :(

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2013 3:15 PM Title: Chapter 5

:  (  feel sorry for Paul-you have me so hooked-well done!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it. Poor Paul will end up being hurt as well before too much longer :(

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2013 2:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

aww jacob---Paul is hottttt!



Author's Response:

Really he has no chance of resisting, does he? Haha!

Reviewer: frekles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2013 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 3

I had kept by passing this story (kind of like Jacob...lol, figured I should not be so interested in this type of story) and finally found I could not resist-I love your M/M smut! Plus the writing/storyline is always interesting too! So yes, you have me hooked again........love that you update so much and you always have us thinking and guessing. (and you do such a good job with the lemon parts!!!)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing, I'm happy you gave this one a chance - and glad you like the lemons! Curiously I find them the most enjoyable part to write, haha :)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Aug 2013 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 5

I can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Aug 2013 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 4

Ugh, I hate that Jake is doing this to Leah, but I hate Paul even more for encouraging him, when he knows he is married!

Yet, I still can't wait for the lemon... I'm such a contradiction! LOL

Can't wait for the next chapter.

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. At least on this occasion Paul made Jake decide on whether to see him rather than coerce him into it. Jake is being awful, but he's going to suffer for it - but not before the lemon, haha!

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Aug 2013 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 4

The affair has started. I can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - the next chapter will be rather steamy again :D

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2013 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 3

Things are going to get crazy with Jake and Paul.



Author's Response:

They are indeed - thank you for reading :)

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2013 11:12 AM Title: Chapter 3

He is so screwed... literally. It must be hard to fight so much with yourself, but he is still a cheating bastard. I wouldn't blame Leah is she takes everything.

Oh, and I squeal like a fangirl at the mention of Edward. LOL

Can't wait for the next chapter!

xoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing - Jake needs a good kick up the butt, it's only going to get worse for both him and everyone around him :(

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2013 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 2

Hot damn, that was one heck of a one night stand, too bad it's not gonna be enough, is it?

Thanks for the update, can't wait for the next one.

xoxoxo

Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading - that was a bit steamy, wasn't it? I posted the next one this morning - Jake really torments himself, haha!

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Aug 2013 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 2

I can't wait to see how Jake deals with this.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. He's going to be torturing himself quite a bit when he gets home ;)

Reviewer: Lizzyliz Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2013 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is a really great story. I can't wait for more chapters.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading; I'm glad you like it so far!

Reviewer: MinaWritesFanfiction Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2013 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 1

Damn, what a start! I can't wait to read what happens next! xoxo Mina



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you like it so far! I'll be working on the next chapter at the weekend.

Thank you again for the amazing banner! Love it! xx

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