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Reviewer: smileya987 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2014 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 28

Please, Please update this story sooooooooooooon!!!!

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2013 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 28

I am glad that Edward like being call Daddy!!!!!!!

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2013 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 27

Oh, how cute. She want her daddy!!!!!! Love it!!!!!

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 25

I hope that they work things out. They are adults and not teenagers, hope they act like it. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 24

Hope we get to see more of Edward/Bella and Nessie!!!!!!!

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 23

Why is Bella trying to run him off????? I hope they work things out. 

Reviewer: AMCLARK Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

Love this story!! BUt So mad at Alice for going off with them! BUt think Nessie is helping her recover.. Love E/B and glad her found out he has a daughter.. Looking froward to them working on being a family I hope! thanks and please update soon! ;-)

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 2

Edward has a daughtere??????

Reviewer: Roon1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 11:59 AM Title: Chapter 1

Loving the start of your story.

Reviewer: Lud Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 23

OMG!! Alice should not have left them alone, I feel it is way more babies!
I hope they are able to solve their problems, and Edward need to stop being an idiot.

Author's Response:

Dont worry :) Babies dont come until the sequel! He'll stop...eventually :) 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 22

I can not believe that Bella just let Alice take Nessie and keep her for the night. That is strange. Alice had NO right telling Nessie that Edward was her father and that he may not want her as much as her mommy does. Poor Nessie. She will definitely be scared of Edward now. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 21

Really, how did Alice think she was going to get away with that????? She knew that Edward would see them. Duh!!!!!

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 20

I am glad that Alice wants to know Bella and Nessie. Maybe she can get Bella and Edward talking again. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 19

Why does Edward not just go back and talk to Bella this time instead of freaking out??? 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 18

Who is Bella's sister?????? Bella knows her sister but not her brother????Why is that??????????



Author's Response:

Leah, which is Sue's daughter so basically she's her step-sister. Bella never knew James because he was never there, he had always been somewhere else, hence their age difference :) 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 17

Thanks for giving us the background information on how Edward and Bella met. Can't wait to find out more. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 16

Edward and Bella's emotions are all over the place. I wished we knew what they talked about when they first meet after not seeing each other for 4 years. I can understand Edward being upset about not knowing. But what in the world made Bella say that Nessie did not need him. I thought she wanted all of them to be a family. Strange!!!!!!!

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 15

Love the little talk that Bella had with Nessie. How did Edward know what room Bella was in???/

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 14

Ok, I thought in an earlier chapter that Bella did not have a lot of money. I am confused. Poor Alice. How did Edward know what floor to go to???? 



Author's Response:

Bella never said she didnt have a lot of money, when she first had Renesmee she didnt have a lot of money buts its different now :) 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 13

Why is she leaving??? Where in the world is she going???? This is so messed up. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 12

Ok, I can not believe that Jasper and Alice are married but have not have sex. That is just a little far out there. There are other forms of brith control. With Edward being a  big actor and Alice being his assistant they are educated people. I am sorry. 

I hate what happened to Alice. That is just wrong. What is the deal with Charlie??

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 11

Ok, have I missed something here??????? What happened to the meeting with Edward and Bella????? I really wanted to read what happened the first time that they saw each other ine 4 years.

Plus, What in the worlds happened with Alice???????? I am VERY lost!!!!!!!!1

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 10

WHat in the world has happened to Alice? I can not believe that she got into a van with some strangers. I thought she was smarter than that. Cant' wait for Edward and Bella to meet. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 9

What does James do for a living?????

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 8

I am really lost with what happened to Alice??? I can not believe that James just threw the phone at Bella like that. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 7

Ok, so James called Edward. Has James told Bella that Edward and Nessie have seen each other???? 



Author's Response:

When Edward "meet" Nessie, James was to focused he didnt see him :) 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2013 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 6

Ok, I am a little lost in this chapter. Edward ran into Nessie at the grocery store and at the park. But when did he give her his card????? 



Author's Response:

He didnt give her his card, it fell out of his pocket and she grabbed it :)

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh no, I hate that Edward's mom had a heart attack. I am glad that she is ok. I hope that Edward and Bella or Edward and Nessie meet soon. Where is Bella any way???

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 4

Why would she not be safe with James? What did she mean by that? Now I am worried again. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 3

Can't wait till Edward and Bella meet again.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 2

Ok, you had me worried there for a minuter with James. Glad he is her brother. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

Love a bossy Alice. Sounds interesting. 

Reviewer: Lud Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2013 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 22

Alice had no right to tell Ness, it was for Bella contar.Eu am a mother and would never let my daughter sleep with a near stranger, Bella accepted Edward very easy to talk to, I would beg Edward. It makes no sense for him to go after Bella to hit and now wants nothing to do with it, is incoherent.

Reviewer: Lud Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2013 3:53 AM Title: Chapter 12

I'm curious about this story, but there are things that do not make sense, like Alice and Jasper are married and she is still a virgin, there are other birth control, people do not have sex just to have children, it makes no sense, Alice seems to be older than Bella, because Edward's assistant, she will only have sex to procreate? Bella and Edward meet? jumped days and did not show the meeting. What problems with James. This story has potential but things need to make sense.

Reviewer: Marlena68 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2013 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

This story looked very promising to me, however, because of misspellings and poor grammer I find it very difficult to read.  This is meant to be constructive criticism not an insult.  You should have a beta reader look over your work before posting.  

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2013 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 22

poor poor nessie

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Jun 2013 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 1

intrigued and looking forward to more

what did edward leave behind and why

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Jun 2013 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 1

GOOD START!! PLEASE UPDATE REALLY SOON!

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