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Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2020 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 39

Wait, that's it???? Nooooo!!!! Such a good story!!!!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2020 2:55 AM Title: Chapter 38

How sad...

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2020 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 37

She did It!!!!!

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Date: 24 Mar 2020 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 36

Peters a good daddy so far. I hope he's able to continue his relationship with her and help fix hers and Jasper too.

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2020 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 35

You better mean it Jasper, cause I'm on Peters side

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Date: 23 Mar 2020 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 34

Damn... Jasper fucked up big time.

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Date: 23 Mar 2020 9:54 PM Title: Chapter 33

You tell'em Peter!! 

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Date: 23 Mar 2020 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 32

Hawt dayum Peter!!!

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Date: 23 Mar 2020 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 31

I'm glad they finally talked and are trying to work it out, but Jasper better wise up

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2020 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 30

I'm liking Demetri and Felix lots!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2020 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 29

I kinda hope Peter and Bella will be able to fix their relationship. And Bella was awesome! I just hope Jasper doesn't find out what length Demetri went to.

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2020 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 28

Holy poop 

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Date: 23 Mar 2020 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 27

Welp, I guess here we go, I so hope Jasper and Bella kill them all that deserve it

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2020 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 26

Soooo... Ambushed? And we missed there romantic night out!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2020 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 25

So happy with how he's handling this and her

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2020 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 24

She's so lost and hurt 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2020 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 23

I don't blame Bella at all, and I'm glad Jasper doesn't seem to ether. Garrett is right in what he said to Jasper though, Bella is me the to shine and be the goddess that she was destined for. Peter and Jasper should have told her the truth. 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2020 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 22

I hope she's listening to the fact that she has not only Jasper that's behind her, but Peter and Char too.

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2020 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 21

Maybe she just has to be drunk?

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2020 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 20

Whew these two were all over the place!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2020 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 19

Oh lord, please let all go ok. 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2020 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 18

Naw, you love her jazzy poo!!!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2020 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 17

I bet it would be like eating tofu. Bleh!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2020 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 16

And he just now is admitting that he wanted her even then, and all to himself, even as a human??? Interesting...

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2020 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 15

Feel any love now Major 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2020 4:09 AM Title: Chapter 14

I know what all he's said, but I fell like he's kinda just being an asshole to at this point 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2020 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 13

He was honest with her, but I would have thought that his feelings for her would have been stronger at this point 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2020 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 12

Well they seem on the same page, but I feel they are far more intuned with one another than they even realize 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2020 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 11

I really want to know what Maria's problem was. And did Peter do.

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Date: 17 Mar 2020 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 10

I think Maria was jealous. I also think Bella needs to learn more fighting skills, but The God of War was done playing games 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2020 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 9

Hawt dayum!! Sir Major sir!!

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Date: 16 Mar 2020 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 8

I wonder what she'll teach him 

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Date: 16 Mar 2020 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 7

So Jasper is finally catching on.

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Date: 16 Mar 2020 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 6

Funny how he just has to make sure she's his already.

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Date: 16 Mar 2020 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 5

Wow, so Edward and Alice?! 

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2020 9:37 PM Title: Chapter 4

Oh man, he's gonna be an asshole to her, I just know it.

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2020 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 3

You would think someone as old and sometimes wise, and war savvy, would realize that there's always one person that not only tops you, but will make you bend your will and you'll ask them to with a smile.

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2020 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 2

Bahahaha, I love her already!! I hope she gives them all hell and can handle herself like nobody's business!

Reviewer: Southernpur-rica Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2020 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 1

What a start!!!! I can definitely see a difference in your writing, but your tone and intent is at its core still the same and what I love most.

Reviewer: twilove1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Aug 2018 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 39

Nice 

Reviewer: jackieo38 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2018 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 39

Have you thought of making a sequal of this story? I would love to read it.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2017 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 9

Stealing glances.captain.her prey.another not nether.he wasn't the most dominate for the sixth years Alice had his balls in her purse.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2017 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 7

He is a dickhead.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2017 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 6

Liar, scent,whether,against.feet OFF the floor.you seem to have a problem with the word against,you have spelt it three ways so far.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Oct 2017 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 4

Its I wonder.looks like he has his hands full with his mate.

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 12

Loved it n

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 11

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 1:26 PM Title: Chapter 10

Go Jasper!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 12:57 PM Title: Chapter 9

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 8

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 7

Amazing!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 10:46 AM Title: Chapter 6

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 5

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2017 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 4

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2017 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 4

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2017 9:26 AM Title: Chapter 3

Loved it!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2017 9:16 AM Title: Chapter 2

Uh-oh! Bella is pissed!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2017 9:12 AM Title: Chapter 1

Loved it!

Reviewer: Pegasus Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Nov 2016 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 39

Awesome as always hon. I love this story and will read it again and again...thanks once again for sharing it with us...bigg huggs. Peggy

Reviewer: nekkou Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2016 8:46 AM Title: Chapter 39

thanks for writing! what a ride. hehe

Reviewer: nekkou Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2016 8:23 AM Title: Chapter 37

fantastic chapter!

Reviewer: nekkou Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2016 8:14 AM Title: Chapter 36

so proud of peter-papa. ; u ;

Reviewer: nekkou Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 May 2016 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 21

brilliant! 

Reviewer: desdemona Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Aug 2015 7:01 AM Title: Chapter 1

great story! i don't think that ppl judging jasper so harshly is fair to your major.  he was cheated on by his wife that although not his mate he loved her. and that cheating was done with his brother .... to put it simply, he was scorned.  no one judged bella for tearing edward and alice to shreds because she hasa scorned by edward ... hell, she didn't know alice had anything to do with the wrongs edward did against her until jasper told her.  i think the major had to learn to trust and let his heart give itself to another, the only true way to learn is to screw up alot.  would love to see more from thiese characters and the changes to the vampire/human world.  also, what happened to the other cullens?

Reviewer: missbad92 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jul 2015 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 32

Oh thank God! I'm so glad I got to this point to be able to read this. Go Peter!

Reviewer: missbad92 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jul 2015 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 18

Really struggling to get through this story at this point: keep flicking forward to the end to see if it gets better. I have always had trouble with characters with no redeeming features (who skeeve me out) and your Jasper is an unremitting worthless arse who is wrong in every respect. I'm trying though, it's very well written...

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2015 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 39

nice.

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Date: 26 Apr 2015 9:49 AM Title: Chapter 33

 it is Stake not stalk,it is the basis of your gift not your bases.with minimum effort not minuscule.looks like Jasper is getting a lesson in how to really treat a mate.will it sink in or his he too much of a selfish prick to learn it????

 

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2015 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 32

Good for Peter the ass hat needed a reality check and i believe he just gave it to him.wonder what kind of car she is going to get from daddy.on a side note where are the Cullens why weren't they there to fight with Aro????

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2015 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 31

Will she be kicking his ass once the coup is over and done with?

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2015 8:43 AM Title: Chapter 30

Like i have said before he is an asshole and a selfish one to boot.

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Date: 26 Apr 2015 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 29

Let the fun begin.can't wait to see Aro's face when they make their move.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2015 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 28

Is the fun about ready to start?

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2015 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 27

Will their visitors be some of the Volturi guard? her shield has neverbeen mentioned does she have it in this story????

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 25

How (are) you feeling now not how you feeling now.beta would help.it seems things are getting better for her.just wonder when the shit is going to hit the fan and they are going after Aro and friends? like to hear from daddy C and how he and mommy feel about losing the "children".

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 24

but i'm (too not to) relieved....well it looks like he is going to start to treat her more likean equal instead of a pet to do with what he pleases.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 22

Now that he has found out that she is as smart or smarter then him will he stop treating her like shit????

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 21

It's now not know.so he plans on taking out the kings? i wonder which of the guard are on his side? i can't wait to see who the rest of his coven is.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 20

It's wandering around not wondering,bored not board.... Jasper is one major,no pun intended,dickheaded piece of shit asshole treating her like property.what is Jasper planning? is he gettinghis coven together and thentake out Maria then use her armyalong with the newborns to take down Aro and friends????

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 19

interesting.seems female vamps are screwed in their relationships,so to speak.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 6:11 AM Title: Chapter 17

quiet not quite.can't wait to see what other adventures they get into while on their vacation

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 15

"Bronze haired ass pirate" love it.will Aro be mad he lost two of his toys he wanted for his collection? will Daddy and Mommy C know what happened to their kiddies i wonder?

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 14

scent not sent.this is like an arranged marriage she was forced (into) with an arrogant prick. guess this will be the Cullen's they are meeting. wonder if Eddie will have a hissy fit when he sees his pet with Jasper?

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 13

What just happened? this is probably the first Bella /Jasper story i have ever read where he is a major dickhead and loves it.

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Date: 25 Apr 2015 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 12

shaking not shacking.so they go to Paris and never come back,there is no reason for them to come back.

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Date: 25 Apr 2015 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 11

into not in to,really curious where this story is going.will they be hanging around to take over or will they be leaving to live their own lives away from Maria????

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 10

scars not scares,basis not bases,another not a nether,whether not weather.barely not barley.looks like Maria really does not have control of her army or her Major. i  don't know why he doesn't just leave he doesn't have to be a nomad.i am pretty sure he is rich enough he couldlive any where and now he has a mate he doesn't need to stay with Maria.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 9

I wonder if he is walking into a trap and can't see it for his arrogance????

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Date: 25 Apr 2015 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 8

It's captain not caption and against not ageist.will we learn why she was in Texas sometime soon? what happened after they left her?

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 6

Against,threw. so what will he do when her year is up? does she not have her shield?

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 4

FYI.it is wonder not wander. yup, he will have his hands full with his mate and she will own his ballsmore then Maria or Alice did.should be fun.now we just need to find out what happened to her after they left.

Reviewer: andrew_pine Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2015 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 3

I do believe Jasper doesn't have an idea what his future will be with little miss Swan back in it.i think i a little while she will be in charge.

Reviewer: jazzatazz09876 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Nov 2014 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 8

This is pure abuse



Author's Response:

Yes, it is. And it stays with it for the bulk of the story. It's not resolved until the later chapters. 

Reviewer: volturigirl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2014 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 39

One of the best stories I've ever read. Well done!

Reviewer: Cotharach Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2014 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 34

Go Bella!  So true!  Jasper has been a royal ass punishing Bella for shit the pixie did.  In reality, he is doing to Bella basically what Alice did to him.  Break it! Break it! Break it!  Make the ass grovel! (I normally do love Jasper and only reserve this kind of vitriol for Edward and Bill Compton, but this Jasper has just made me see red!)  I still don't know how she managed to fall in love with him.  

Reviewer: Cotharach Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2014 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 32

Thank you, Peter!  About time!  I have been hanging in there hoping this crap would be rectified and Jasper would get his ass handed to him, verbally or physically.  He has been such a douche!  

Reviewer: Cotharach Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2014 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 33

Do it Peter!  Rip his dick off!  I have been wanting Jasper to get something like that for a LONG time, but especially after how rough he was with Bella's first time.  

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2014 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 39

 

Jasper didn't even need to have his ass beat. He learned without violence or bodily harm.

Too bad my husband is an old dog that can't learn new tricks.

Enjoyed your story!

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2014 4:32 AM Title: Chapter 37

Sounds almost utopian.

Bu there's always going to be bad apples. Who takes care of them?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2014 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 35

A compromise?

Seems like Edward also tried to use that same soert of thing on her.

Wonder if she'll go for it.

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