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Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Back on the game

way too tame more than the movie and not close to master of the universe

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 12:46 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Alone in dark places with Mr. Grey

merry xmas

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 12:13 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Elliot, 'The Perb'

very good

Reviewer: jeangb Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Oct 2014 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Outtake 1 "There's a helicopter on top of my car"

I really enjoyed this little detour. Please I hope you write some more



Author's Response:

thanx for the review, I really love hearing from the people enjoying this short detour.

Reviewer: Atterbury Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Nov 2012 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Back on the game

Delightful! Hope you write another! Thank you!



Author's Response:

Thanx for reading and for leaving me your kind words!!!     :)

Reviewer: Lynne3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2012 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Outtake 1 "There's a helicopter on top of my car"

I just read all of your story and was surprised how much I enjoyed it. I don't usually like stories that go off the original but you did a great job with it and still kept all the caracters true to their personalities. Really you have made a believer out of me and I will look for other stories you post to read as well. Thanks for sharing your creative ideas.



Author's Response:

Oh my!! what a great review! thank you so much for your kind and encouraging words. It really was my intention to keep everyone on my story as close as possible to the characters from the FSOG book. 

I'm glad to know you'll be keeping an eye for my next story, and I look forward to hearing from you.

:)

Reviewer: gunchsmom Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Nov 2012 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 5 - Back on the game

I thought this was a nice way to bring things back around to the original story.  I would have liked the chapter a bit more "lemony" but look forward to what other stories you come up with!!



Author's Response:

Yeah, I know that lemons should appear in a FSOG story, but I wanted to keep the M rate, and also like I said this was my first fic, so I didn't want to ruin my story by writting a bad lemon. 

Reviewer: gunchsmom Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Oct 2012 4:30 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The detour

Really enjoying this story.  Hope you continue!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the compliment!, and like I said the story is finished already, so I won't let any reader hanging or wondering about how it ends.

Also, thank you for taking the time to leave me your thoughts, I really appreciate it.

Reviewer: bri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Oct 2012 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Elliot, 'The Perb'

I like your story so far can't wait for more chapters .



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you like it. 

Just like the last one, the new chapter will be up soon. I'm guessing today.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: sashai1015 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Oct 2012 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The detour

Good story., i want more please.. but as for review purpose It felt kindda repetitive every other paragraph starts with the pronoun "I".. When i read the story its kindda stiff when u describe thier movement, it felt like its not blending well.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your words, and for taking the time to leave me your thoughts. Like I said the story is complete so I won't take long to update.

This is my first story so that's my excuse for its diffects. I hope to keep improving if I venture on my writting again.

Also I'm glad you think it's a good story, thanks. 

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